common app essay that got me accepted to the ivy league + tips | upenn
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- common app essay that got me accepted to an ivy league school!
i applied to the university of pennsylvania back in november for early decision and i was lucky enough to get in in december!
hopefully, this video helps you guys in some shape or form. if its good, here's some inspiration. if it's bad, you got yourself a great example of what not to do and maybe it'll show you that you don't need a great essay to get into a great school!
feel free to comment if you want me to read your essay and give you some advice! id be happy to give my 2 cents :)
best of luck!
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hey guys! im so glad so many of you guys are finding my essay helpful! unfortunately, i decided to stop editing essays sent to me because it's been taking up a lot of my time. i never expected to get so many requests and especially with the school year coming up, i want to focus on enjoying the time i have left up until the fall and getting ready to do my best! hope you guys understand :)
Hi please can I mail you about my essay ?
I have to write for a schorlaship
@@sharonkelvin1673 no
@@edsradio5817 did u read the fuckin comment..
@Kenn Klein bruh this is plagiarism...feel free to do it if u want to get expelled and have a permanent academic dishonesty record :)
Hi friends,
If you are struggling with writing your essays or handling your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.
I’m a senior rn and I haven’t even started my college applications...
girlllll me too, I started a few weeks ago
to be fair i barely started this time last year haha
It’s ok, i just started sooooo
same
Same here , hella stressed
This is by far the best common app essay I have heard and trust me I’ve watched quite a lot of videos lol!
oh my god thanks sm! lol not sure about that but it means alot to hear :'))
Your essay was incredible!! It was so refreshing to see your metaphor weaved into the essay throughout. But I'm so nervous I haven't even started yet😭
aw thank youuu. also, it's totally fine, i was in the same boat as you last year
I feel that I'm never going to have that "spark" in my essay. I have no cool achievements and especially with quarantine I have no opportunities. I had so much planned for this year. Re-join track, join the robotics club, get involved in leadership programs, try to create a club with my friends etc. Now, something just as simple as keeping up my grades is difficult. I hate being trapped in this 10 by 11 room
Hey! I hope you're doing better now! My advice is find the one thing that makes you happy and write about it. I don't think colleges are looking for anything spectacular. They're just looking for something authentic. If something has helped you grow into the person you are today- write about it!
oof
Write your essay about this!
@Easton I LOVE YOUR PFP (i hope you're doing better now)
@@pitad2766 Omg hi fellow sk8 fan- tysm!! I actually am doing a lot better now!
oof it's july before senior year and i'm trying to start now lol
i just wrote 5 paragraphs of trash that don't really say anything about me so i guess imma move on to topic 2 lol
haha that’s the spirit?
@@haleykang8156 i... guess...? it's so hard to sit down and start writing tho
yeah same lmao. I wrote 2 essays off the top of my head and both were self-pitying trash. but my 3rd essay that I just completed i think is really good.
@@closet7041 omg yay! thanks for the inspiration lol
Don’t fret you’ve got a great start
“July before senior year” Me: *stresses bc its December 22nd OF SENIOR YEAR and the deadlines are February 1st*😳
I think you mean Jan 1st 😳
I am in the same situation. I was writing one but it wasn't good. I had to start all over again.
Ps: my deadline is New Years Eve.
@@raquelbueno3697 i just started writing and the deadline is jan 1st 😬
,@@mariakara5167 we are all together
@@Fsanskritisukkal I started two days ago but i deleted everything. The deadline is in a few hours and i have no common app essay
this was so helpful!! I've been so lost over where to start with my essay and seeing someone who is more "normal" and doesn't have any crazy life experiences was so refreshing, thank you for this video!!
ah that means so much :')
Girl I don’t even know where to put my commas 😔
rippp
Hi Cinco,
If you are struggling with writing your essays or handling your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.
I’m a senior right now and now I’m regretting waiting till now to start writing my essay 😖
lolll it’s okay
Same
Lmao wut. I started today with my deadline in a week 😅
Unless your talkin bout ED
Hi Zoe and friends,
Just read your comment and if in the future you strugge with writing your essays or handling your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.
EARLY DECISIONS ARE ON NOV 1 AND I HAVENT EVEN FINISHED MY PERSONAL ESSAY.
ITS OKAY I DIDNT HAVE MINE FINISHED BY THEN EITHER
ME TOO AAAAA
Girl same
Same lmaoo
ME NEITHER
starting in july is late?? screams oops i better get on it
that was literally me last year
Yikes I'm starting in August 😬
ahah you got this:) alsooo if you're interested, my friends and i started a company called collegae (collegae.weebly.com) that provides affordable college counseling where you can speak to a collegian from schools (we have stanford, uc berkeley, harvard, upenn, princeton, and so much more) for just $20/ half hour! hope this helps:)
@@bethanytong2338 This is an awesome organization and seems very reputable, but I think there should be a bit more information on who is actually reviewing the essay - maybe an about page with the team and their accomplishments.
i started in fucking december lets gooooooooooooooooo
It's August and apps opened on the first, but its already the fifth and I'm still brainstorming. I want to apply before November for early decision, so I am sweating 👁👄👁
haha don't worry i felt the same way
I also ED'ed to Penn and started brainstorming once I started school lol. You should be okay if you are very motivated~
ME TOO
Bruh, Im literally starting now
Jasmin Tagijeva you’re fine don’t worry most people are starting right now
omg your essay is making me sooo nervous! how can someone write sooo good? loads of love! happy to find your channel
ahh thank you so much!!!
what university did you get into?
That was such a mindboggling transition from making cookies to debating in another country.
girl
my jaws have been dropped
haha thankssss
loved your essay! i thought that starting off with the puzzles was so cool because it was a literal passion of yours and can be used metaphorically when learning about your own life! :)
thanks! im glad my direction ended up working pretty well. i was really nervous abt it when i was writing it haha
I loved the way your essay started! I’m literally writing mine on how watching parks and rec changed me because I have no exciting moments in my life.
oh my god i love it
haley kang thank you :D
I'm currently a high school senior working on my application. Out of all the common app essays, I liked yours the most. I really liked how you stayed relatable while keeping your essay structure fresh and unique!
July is late? I am senior year student and now gonna write personal statement
lol its okayy
Same !!! Omfg 😭
Bro im screwed idk what I even want to study 😭
sameeeee, July gave me a flash of anxiety
@Kenn Klein nah im tryna get into college without cheating my way through it 💅
thank you so much for offering your advice-as someone who has also watched a lot of these college videos, i found it rlly refreshing to hear the perspective of someone more 'normal'. i really like the way your essay conveyed your personality and i got a lot of insight on how i should approach my own essay from this! congrats on upenn and looking forward to your college vlogs :)
thank you so much :') it means a lot to hear. always here to help!
hey! if you're interested, my friends and i started a company called collegae (collegae.weebly.com) that provides affordable college counseling where you can speak to a collegian from schools (we have stanford, uc berkeley, harvard, upenn, princeton, and so much more) for just $20/ half hour! hope this helps:)
I feel so extremely stupid. I am so late to the entire college application process! It is nearly the end of August and I haven’t even started writing my essay. I had no idea I had to start so early.
So basically I’m not getting into college 😪
Girl you still have time!! Deadline for early action is in November and for regular it’s in January. You got this, good luck💕💕💕💕
Amina In Wonderland thank you! 🥺
ur fine! she said it only actually took her 2 weeks it was just spread out
dude im just starting it today 😭😭
Hunny I just started my common app now in October
What a masterpiece of essay tbh.
thank you thank you lol
JULY IS LATE???HELLO it’s October and I’m just starting I want to die.
Your essay is so amazing, I love everything about it, the word choice creativity and humor can really make me know who you are!! I am writing my common app right now your essay really did give me inspiration to processed with mine:)
aw this made my day :')
I love your essay! Congratulations on UPenn!
thank you!!!
Just finished junior year and been brainstorming ideas for a week now. This essay is gonna take forever 😱 (btw ur essay was amazing)
aw thank youuu! good luck and always here to help :)
This is the best essay video I have ever seen and I have been binging these kinds of videos for, well, a long time. Thank you
:') thanks this comment is so nice
Y'all early deadline is in 3 days and I haven't started any of my essays... AND IM DOING THEM ALL EARLY ACTION. God help me, I have 7 college apps due
shittt.. hope it went well!!!
@@haleykang8156 it was better than I was expecting lmao, and stayed true to my writing essays the day of. I didn’t start my common app until November 1st 🥲
me starting my essay the day before early decision is due
same brooo
same i don’t know why i always do this to myself😫
Bruh same lawd help me
lolll i hope it went well guys
Hi friends,
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omg this helped me so much! is there a google doc or anything i can read of it, i’d like to show it to my friend that’s also struggling with her common app and how to smoothly lead into the metaphor, you did a great job girl!
Your essay is “*chef’s kiss*” incredible, it’s so out there. I love it! Is there any way you could help me edit with mine, it’s really cringe and I’m so stuck right now.
I would love to share my essay with my friends and teachers but I'm low-key scared that my friends might take my essay qwq
lol that doesn't seem like a very friend-like thing to do
@@rosejoyce67 exactly!! don't show it to your friends especially if you're applying to the same college, desperation can make people jealous and crazy
Not me writing this five days before the regular decision deadline.
Honestly, I think it's because there was nothing pushing me to do it and everything has just been so... off.
Hi Ashley,
If you are struggling with writing your essays or handling your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.
This inspired me to write my first (technically 2nd?) draft of my ps haha. Before, I kind of had a hard time formatting and structuring all my thoughts to write my essay. After hearing yours, it helped me make sense of everything a lot better and now I think I finally have a pretty solid draft. Honestly tysm!!
aw yay im glad you found it helpful :')
is there anyway we can read your essay on a google doc or blog or something (btw I totally understand if you don't want do that! I just find it easier to follow along when there are words in front of)
heyy! if you're interested, my friends and i started a company called collegae (collegae.weebly.com) that provides affordable college counseling where you can speak to a collegian from schools (we have stanford, uc berkeley, harvard, upenn, princeton, and so much more) for just $20/ half hour! they can answer questions like what their essay was on, how they got in, their stats, extracurriculars, campus life/culture, and so much more! hope this helps:)
Im so stressed I haven't got my essay together and its already the end of October :( I am in such a funk I just can't seem to express myself
Sameee 🤦🏻♂️
:( hope it went okay
This was a truly helpful video. At first, I was worried that I needed a special topic to talk about in my essay. Now I am confident that I can find/choose a topic in my life to explore/expand/explain. Thank you for everything.
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Tysm for sharing this ! I’ve been having a few ideas for my essay but can’t really develop them. This helped me
yayyy :)))) all i could ask for
10 days until ED deadline... I still don’t have my personal essay finished:( I hate everything:(
Girl I haven't even finished my common app essay, and I'm applying to an Ivy ED. We got this!!! Good luck to both of us!
YESS YSLL GOT THIS
i hope it ended up okay :(
ahh your essay was so good thank you for sharing it with us! (also i guessed u were a debater from the way u talked in your common app mistakes vid and im so shook i was actually right HAHA sincerely a fellow debater :')
thank you so much :’))) and yeah haha i was a debater but not a very good one
bro, this is a literature,;;
After watching some college videos, I’m definitely starting to understand that EC’s and the personal statement seem to be more enticing then simply numbers (SAT/ACT, GPA), even if all these factors remain important. Thanks for sharing this
yay :)
You are so articulate, Haley. Like someone else commented, the way your puzzle metaphor was worked into the essay is impressive. Also, you give off a really friendly and humble vibe. Thank you for this video.
aw thank you so muchb
4:35 What a unique, strong ending 😍 that’s both surprising and insightful!!! Huge cheers for this essay
this was an amazing essay! i have a commonapp essay that i want to look over to apply to schools for 2025, if there is any chance you can help me out that would be great!
I feel like my life is so normal that I don’t have any hard life experiences to talk about besides some friends moving away but I got over that pretty fast. If I could dig through my memories I’d probably find something but if I was changed by it I didn’t notice what changed me.
i mean i don’t think i’ve hs that much of an interesting life either lol. i don’t think you need a unique life to have a chance. like i literally wrote my essay on liking puzzles
Loved how you stayed raw and real. One of those few essays that never really feels boring even after reading it a couple of times
this is probably the best college essay i've ever heard! also, do you still read essays and give advice? i've written a rough draft but i'm not sure if the topic is good!
@@haleykang8156 thank you so much! i just shared mine!
me a senior, laying in bed, watching this video, not starting my essay yet 😭😭😭
Do you have any of your original drafts? I think it would be interesting to see the progression from the beginning to the final draft!
ooh thats a cool idea!
you're literally so cute
:DDD
What a beautiful essay I wish mine was as great as your. Well done!!!
Btw will you consider reading my essay?
Wow this is by far the best essay I have heard. Thanks. I didn’t even think of writing about my middle school days that meant so much to me and that I still reminisce on 🥰
yay hopefully it helps you figure out your essay!
Is that really 650 words?
Hi Haley, this is an amazing essay and I’m inspired to start writing mine already. I’m a rising senior and was wondering if you could take a look at my essay :))
i just wrote my rough draft for my common app essay
it’s about rocks😂
I loved this :)
Question: How do you get motivated to start?
aw thanks :) honestly, i had the same problem and my parents pushed me to start in august last year haha. the way i somewhat motivated myself last summer was by telling myself i was going to put in the same amount of time into it regardless of when i start. if i didn't spend 2 hours at the moment working on my essays, i would end up spending two hours on it at a later time when i would probably be a lot busier with ec's and hw which would have been a lot more stressful. hopefully, you'll be able to do what i WISH i did and avoid my mistakes because i ended up having many restless days and nights the weeks leading up to the deadlines because i had to start and finish a lot of my essays in a short period of time.
haley kang thanks for this reply :) i just finished junior year about 2 days ago and i’m really trying to motivate myself to start. i have so many ideas but it’s just a matter right now of putting my thoughts and ideas onto paper
honestly, you have so much time haha. i didn't even start thinking about it until probably late june or early july after junior year. don't stress too much about it right now! also on the jumble of thoughts, i felt the same way and i somewhat organized them by writing everything, whether or not it makes sense, down and to go from there!
@@haleykang8156 okay, thank you so much for your help! :)
i’m applying now and i regret putting the essay off till now
Hi Paige,
If you find yourself struggling with writing your essays or handling your assignments, I would love to help. I'm a professional freelance writer with a vast knowledge in tackling essays and assignments in general. Feel free to email me at lohanwilliams25@gmail.com if you interested with such a service.
I LOVE YOU OMG AN IDEA SPARKED IN MY HEAD BECAUSE OF THISSS
YES YOU GO!!
this really helped a lot, thank you! the end of my junior year is this Friday, so I'm kind of thinking of some topics to write about so I won't be cramming my senior year hehe
hey youre already ahead of me then haha!
I've watched a bunch of videos on tips for the ca essay but yours just resonates with me so much!!
aw thank youuu
Uh oh... I'm a senior and I don't have an essay draft that I want to use yet :, 0
lolll it’s okay i wasn’t done with my drafts last year either
@@haleykang8156 Wow you respond to comments faster than I do. You're a legendary TH-camr
I thought the beginning of ur essay was instructions on how to set up your essay 😭
Your essay tips really resonate with me! I start multiple drafts and only get a few sentences in because I feel they are so cringey lol. I have always been a huge procrastinator but maybe this is the one thing I should have started wayyy earlier :((
I’m barely going into my junior year but I already started to brainstorm, I can see why u got into penn congrats ❣️
thanks!! and haha you're already doing wayyy better than i was doing lol
god bless u i hope u get everything good out of life. u deserve the very best.
lol thanks
yeah there's no way i'm getting into college-
now thats not the attitude!!!
Why are there no white people when I searched “personal essay “ 😂
wdym i am totally white
I absolutely love the essay and the way you wrote it as it just felt so modest and personal yet flawless and well-crafted.
:')))) thanks sm. this brightened my day so much. dont boost my ego too much though ;)
Me starting my common app essay 4 days before my college apps are due 🤠
How are you now
@@maventry Full ride to FSU! (also got my IB diploma)
Me starting my common app essay 4 hours before my college apps are due 🤠
such a good essay!! would you be able to look over my college essay and give me feedback?
@@haleykang8156 thank you so much!!
I have just started the essay process and was wondering if I could share my essay with you. Your essay and tips were amazing and I was wondering if you could give me some advice?
Great essay! 4:02 Childhood bickering led you to debate? :O
haha thats what i tell myself
you are so humble, i appreciate it ❤️
thanks so much haha :))
Deadline is in 4 days. Oh gosh...
hope it went okay!
awesome. So many are...not awesome. Your essay was awesome. Even the mix of diff sized sentences "...I took a nap" held on to me. The figures of speech, the sounds you used and the central idea...the moment. The moment. Good job! The goal: write something, do many (8?) drafts, yes, follow some rules, yes, show it to someone you trust for help, BUT take the risk. ?Then, you'll be soooo attached to and protective of it, it'll be undeniable. Like, "If they don't like it, I don't like THEM!" :) People: if you go somewhere, to a place you really were, you can take us there too. And we will be moved. About puzzle pieces. Which you thought nothing of until this.
I'm applying in ten days and I'm about to start my essay
earlier than a lot of people im seeing in the comments section loll
It's popular that South Korea student rigorously study
No wonder
South Korea students get into Ivy League
Well written essay, I’m a rising senior in high school and was wondering if you could look over my college essay and make any suggestions
I got sucked into your channel and I don’t have one regret
hahaaaa thank youuuu
I'm confused I thought the essay was only 650 words max????
it was ?
the intro was lit
lol thanks
this is pretty good. surprised it doesn't have more views. welp, I'm commenting on the algorithm.
lolll thanks. this comment gives me big graham stephan vibes
Bruh wtf I can’t even write that good. I just can’t. If these are the kinds of essays I’m going against I’m done bro.
It's incredible essay! But what is your major? And in what essay did u express ur interest or what u gonna learn at the school(Upenn)?
im undecided in engineering and i focused on the school in the supplemental essays!
Any tips on how to title an essay that covers many different topics?
how many hours did you spend?
I literally just started now... September 20... And how late am I?
it’s okayyy
Sameee
I have been struggling with my personal essay for the whole week, writing at least 3 topics but couldn't find anything that resonates with me. I found your video really helpful. I love your essay so much. I don't find it cliche. Thank you for your video and keep up the great work. ✨
currently going into senior year and have been working on my essay for when i apply to nyu early decision this fall. this video has given me so much inspiration! thank you so much, and amazing work. congrats on upenn!
:'))) aw thanks so much. means a lot
lmao july before senior year is late. bro its November and i just started lol
Bruh I just started.
:o
hi, i just shared my first draft of my common app essay with you. i hope you can look over it and provide feedback! thank you for this helpful video :)
yup i got it! it might take a few days to a week for me to get to it though because i’ve gotten a lot of essays. sorry!
haley kang it’s all good. Thank you so much!
not me being here a few days before my common app essay is due and i still feel lost..haha 😳
Same, I have until Nov 1 and I haven’t even started my personal essay😭
hope it went okay!!
Do you think the following idea works for prompt 5? You cannot control the actions of others, but you can control your reaction to their actions, and that is what should count the most for you.
I want to focus on the relationship I have had with my mother, which has been full of conflicts since she has committed several acts that go against morality (infidelities, abandonment of her children, etc). Focusing on the moment which made me adopt the thought described above (Her boyfriend pointed a gun at me and threatened me, and she defended him in court at all times instead of defending me)
It should be noted that everything described above affected me a lot in the psychological field (Probably that’s why I want to major in Psychology)
@@tuliozea9013 i think your topic may be a little too personal, so be careful when you write it
one week til deadlines and here we are😭
i hope it went welll
Congratz on getting into Upenn btw could you tell me like whereto start this college app essay journey like in inception you have many things to write but like how to choose the perfect thing to write ehich really represents yourself ? Like wht factors will determine the topic/thing you should write on
well in terms of coming up with ideas, I made a list of things that I personally feel passionate about and tried to focus on themes that I thought would be unique and personal to me. Also, I tried to stray away from anything too academic or related to school because I wanted to focus on showing another side of myself that is totally seperate from stats and ecs. In terms of choosing my final topic to go all in on, there werent that many factors that I had in mind other than what was the easiest for me to write about. I found that the topics I found easier to write on came across more personal and genuine since I had a better personal understanding and experience with it. Dont be afraid to write on things you might think or mundane or insignificant if you find it personally meaningful. thats what i kind of did and i really like essays that have those kinds of topics because i think it has a lot of potential to be more personal and interesting than broad topics. hope this helps and feel free to ask anything i didn't answer fully! gl
cooking with lydia is amazing and i'm so glad she's getting the respect she deserves
facts!!
i have less than 2 weeks to start + finish my essay
omg i love puzzles but i could never find myself writing about it lol
hahaaa