6 *more* Common App Essay Mistakes To Avoid | i've edited 100+ essays
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hope you guys enjoy this video of me sharing what NOT to do on your common app essay! the first video did so well that i thought i would give you some more tips :)
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time stamps ~~
2:55 - rhetorical questions
4:04 - quotes
8:50 - thanksgiving topics
10:26 - pandemic topics
13:14 - talking about things you haven’t done
15:14 -false misconceptions
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thanks
love how im watching this as i avoid writing my college app essays :))
loll me last year
Omg me right now.
me right now, im so stressed out about it that I just keep ignoring it. its the make or break of my acceptance
Hey I was just wondering how things are going for you. Did you get into the college(s) you wanted to? How’s college so far?
Summary (timestamps are included in the description):
1. Don't ask rhetorical questions- waste of words, deflects focus of essay away from you.
2. Don't use dialogue- disrupts flow, sounds cheap. Just don't use quotes in general.
3. No Thanksgiving topics like religion, politics, etc. App readers might not share same sentiments. BUT talking about religion-related topics like a church community isn't necessarily a bad thing.
4. DONT WRITE ABT THE PANDEMIC, especially if it's for self-reflection. Will be sooooo overused, and there are many people who probably have it worse. It's also such a short period of time, there are better things you can talk about.
5. Don't talk only about stuff you're gonna do in the future. Don't elaborate so much on your negative traits especially if there's no proof you change. They're looking for how you will contribute to the school, and it will likely reflect poorly on you.
6. Don't use false misconceptions, i.e. 'contrary to popular belief' and then talk about something no one actually believes. It just sounds dumb.
(Also, don't refer to the reader as 'you')
I love how brutally blunt she is. I needed this
i just dont like to deal with bs lol
For essays about pandemic, i think common app has a seperate section for how pandemic impacted you. Maybe it's a good idea to write about the experience in that section instead of in the common app so u don't repeat urself. :))
i didnt know that! thats a great idea
yeah! also at the majority of college info sessions about applications they're mentioning that they already know people will be writing about the pandemic, and don't wanna hear about it (unless its in the designated section - which is optional, but a good place to share any details about how its impacted your life, so the normal essay can be left for non pandemic info)
Happy to be that 1% that used quotes in a good way lmao
haha youre welcome :))
I love your straightfowardness! it makes the tips so much clearer. also editing, intro, content, jokes, everything is just AMAZING ily
ahhh thank you so much!!!
LOST IT at 4.0 ...... like my GPA!
haha thanks for enjoying my bad jokes
Me too😂😂😂
the jacket hanging in the back really said: 🗿
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Thank you for such straightforward advices!! I love your editing style LOL I will definitely be waiting for all the future college vlogs or anything that makes you happy :))) ❤️❤️
here before it goes viral haha. thank you haley for these videos!
Thank you Haley!! This is such an honest break down of the topics to avoid when writing essays that many people would normally sugar coat. I've been looking for something like this and it's given me ideas on how to improve my essays. Thanks again =)
I was literally looking for a video to watch, and now I get to watch something that will help me in the long run
ahh yayyy
Yesss thank you for this! I'm gonna edit my essay a bit before you get to mine. Also you're going to hit 10k soon!
Wow 100+ and always the intro is bomb my professor dear!
ahhh thank youuu :)))
The last part abt mistakes can be put in the additional information zone. That space is meant to clear up stuff for the readers. Like explaining bad grades.
your intros only get better and better
all for you guys ;)
I love your videos and you’re so interesting. I actually never leave comments but you deserve it girl, keep it up. I’m not even following the tips I’m just watching for entertainment at this point, I’m just submitting what I got HAHA.
We love you professor❤!
i appreciate your content so much, thank you !
i love your voice !
hiii. i have been watching all your vids and learning from them for months before applying for colleges. today, i got my first admission decision from one of my dream schools. though it’s not an ivy league or anything, i got in with a really good financial aid package n scholarship🥺 i wanna thank you for providing invaluable advice regarding college apps, and i sure hope that everyone will get into their dream schools this year 🤍
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oh, i loved these tips!! i'm an international student applying to us and college counselor from educationusa office is so harsh. she judges my application in the most trashy way, not saying anything about how to fix it and make it look better.
by the way, your channel is very helpful at this point! i found so many useful and interesting videos about the application essays, so yeah, gonna get my shit together with all this stuff. thank you very much!
ah yay so glad it helped :)))
Extremely helpful 💕💕I love your videos 😍
aw thank youuu
you never miss.. thank u for this vid!! have you made a video on why you chose upenn to apply to? like perks of upenn over other ivies, etc.
honestly, im not entirely sure why i felt drawn to penn 100% either lol. also imma try to shift away from advice stuff rip
Oh wow I'm very early because you're always in my recommended now thanks for making these videos they help a lot and I feel less stressed about applying next year I'm a junior now.
youre welcome :D
I'm betting more than 20% of college essays will be about the pandemic.
facts
why would i ever miss your lectures? - i need your videos to go to college omg
lolll
i just came from your first video and you seriously saved my life. I've been struggling with how to edit my first draft because as of now, I don't have someone to read it and provide feedback. your tips gave me a really good idea of what to include and what to take out, so thank you so much!!
you got more college vids?!?!?!! subscribing right now!
aw yayyy!! so glad it helped :))
I submitted my essay before watching any of your CommonApp essay videos, and I’m so glad I haven’t done anything you’ve said in these LOL.
tips start at: 2:55
love ur vids!
These are so helpful and amazing !!
best BELIEVE I watch every single video you upload
haha thanks!!
haleyyy tbh i haven’t written anything yet but this is like so honest and helpful compared to most videos i’ve seen on college essays before
aw yay that was the goal :))
lol same I haven’t started :(
this was superrrrr helpful and clear !! do you have any tips for personal statements?
hey haley learned a lot from the video, thanks sm!
yay!!
your videos are SAVING ME
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what??? almost 6k already????!!! love professor kang
ahhh!!!! so excited
I will follow you in your shift. I know you will stay honest and true to yourself. You have shown me that you value working hard for an education. Love the.
Wow this is absolutely amazing advice - again not relevant to me anymore but I watched every minute! So interesting
thanks!
This was really insightful! Thank youuu
youre welcome!!!
Thank you for these tips!! :)
thanks for the video!! ur advice is so good
glad you found it helpful :))
So proud of myself, I did almost all of them😂 But, I guess, it's better to fix it now before actually sending the essay to colleges:) Thank you so much!
lolllll. all my opinion though :)
Huh, I thought I recognized you while I was watching your videos but turns out you went to ck. Thanks for helping with my procrastination of my essays!
I’m excited for you to read my essay and get your honest opinion. I’ll probably have to rewrite the whole thing but I’m still looking forward to it
yes we stan college and non college videos
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i havent even started my essay yet but yES QUEEN PLS CALL ME OUT i love your humor sm & your videos are soooo helpful!! thank you so much :D youre my new fav youtuber now no joke (ngl writing this comment already makes me feel like im gonna be criticized LMAOO)
hiii i was wondering if you could make a video about college resumes (formatting, what to include, etc.). i currently have no clue on how to even begin my resume so it would be very helpful if u went through it!! thank youu
Thank you so so much for this video!!!! Really, really helpful. Quick question though, I was thinking about discussing my OCD (saying how despite the daily struggle I'm able to use it in a good way/it's like a superpower) and I was going to open up with an intro paragraph with just my thoughts in a daily basis. This would be basically all quotes which is my concern, but it would really reflect on how much it impact me day to day. Would this be a bad idea? Fyi, this is just an alternative topic I was thinking about writing.
Thx for pointing out these mistakes. I'm 100% with u! And w/what u said at 10:26, I want to add that under the additional info, you have 250 words to explain how the pandemic and natural disasters impacted you...
Uhh I’m about to use the common app in a few weeks for colleges and like I have no idea what to do. So this will and is very helpful.
thanks!!
subscribed! I watched many of your videos today, and I really loved your energy and straightforwardness. help me know what to avoid~
4 days before deadline and I'm watching this... oops. (I'm international student though)
ahhh these are great!
thank youuu
Thanks for the tips!
youre welcome!
Can you explain how to reduce the use of "I" in an essay?
YES, THIS.
just dont do it? jk lollll. honestly im not entirely sure either but i think a lot of the times, the massive use of "i" comes from writing the essay in a way where you soley focus on what happened in a bullet-point-timeline-y way if that makes sense lol. i think when you dive deeper into the context of the situations you talk about and the emotions and thoughts involved, the "i"'s diminished for me. sorry if that makes no sense at all loll
@@haleykang8156 I used sooo many "I"s and "me"s in my essay. It was a parade of I learnt..., This taught me..., I was selected as...
Even while trying to express my takeaway or insights from the situation, I ended up using so many I's
Yh, I is something I frequently use
8:24 I thought my dog pushed my violin case over, scared me 😂
I'm working on my essays and got stuck, guess what in my brain now is Haley Kang videos, and I end up early finally
haha hope it helps you write :)
Omg I got a reply?! YES, I'm gonna be produce 5+ essays after this 🔥 anyway I'm waiting for the Instagram q+a, have a nice day Haley
im here to see that shift 😎 I hope you’ll soon be able to make content that you enjoy doing
aww yayy thanks so much :))
Thanks Haley
youre welcome!
I luv ur opening
Professor
haha thanks i tried
thank you for this!
youre welcome ;))
Can u make video for how to conclude a college essay
I don’t think my essay is too cliche, but I think it’s boring and comes across as a little forced, if that makes sense. :( I mean it’s not that I think my life is boring, but most “interesting” things about my life won’t really tell an AO anything of substance about me (or at least I’m not sure how to write in a way that they will). I’m writing an essay about a hobby of mine+some things I do that convey a few character traits that I feel like I’ve spent time working on and am proud of. But I don’t want to bore my reader or have them roll their eyes haha. I’ve been doing drafts for nearly two months now and while my last draft is better that the first, it’s still frustrating when my essay sounds either too stale or like it’s trying too hard :/
To end on a positive note though, we all still have time to edit our essays or even come up with new ideas! I’m hopeful I can have a decent essay by November. Good luck to everyone else working on their essays right now!!
This is how I feel EXACTLY!!! Good luck to u too ;)
study vlog?? :00 pls
or a study with me!! those would be so nice 🥺🥺🥺
i want to make those so bad!!! i love yoora jung's vlogs but i feel like mine would be boring lol
@@haleykang8156 noooo I mean they arent really supposed to be that interesting in the first place bc then we cant study along or we will get distracted LOL but a "how I study" video would also b rly nice 🥺👉👈
Thank you so much!!
My common app essay was about pandemic breaking out 1 month after I made a move from Korea - I have already submitted my applications to some schools. Do you think I should rewrite my common app essay using a different topic?
when professor kangs lessons are more helpful than remote learning
Hi! I just have a quick question about my personal statement (UK)
If i’ve been able to link the pandemic to one of my subjects, do you think it’s okay to mention the pandemic in this case? (only very briefly) =
I’m applying for a design university course and in my current design course have created a promotion pamphlet for an independent business. I have mentioned in my essay that i have the ability to create designs relevant to current situations, this one specifically being how the pandemic has affected local and independent businesses economically, and that promotion for the less well known businesses may be useful.
Your tips are so so helpful! :)
4:25 "and thats not what a common app essay should be, it shouldnt be like a script" the vibe when you wrote your common app essay as a one act/script lmaoooo
oops :o
I know you said no pandemic essays but what are you’re thoughts on an essay that isn’t very self-reflective but talks about an experience that was a result of the pandemic
hi haley! take my greetings,just a quick question after seeing the two videos about college essays. OK, i wrote an essay about a realization and its pretty much good (in my opinion). However, should I mention more about what were the results after the realization or should I just stop at the "GREAT" realization? Thank YOU-your'e doing a great work(its fun too)
you should definitely talk about the results of that change! thats one of the most important parts!
ugh it boils my bones when rich upper-class kids talk about the pandemic in their essay like "oh online classes are tiring" "being stuck with my family is so annoying" "i had to cancel all these events" and framing that like a life-changing time to reflect and grow and make sacrifices when people have had a hell of a lot worse. you gotta frame and explain that real good to avoid sounding super spoiled and like you were apparently just a terrible person before two months of minor inconveniences made that change.
I can't wait for your college lifestyle videos🤓
:'))) thank youuu
hi haley! this is an amazing video. i do have a question tho, regarding the surprise you gave in your last video where you were making tiramisu. i sent my essay but I don't know if you got it or maybe I submitted after the time, nevertheless, this video is v helpful!!! thanks for this :))
i have 40 left! im going to be done in less than a week!
deleting my whole essay while watching this video🙂
:o
My queen
:)))
Haley do you think it’s a good idea to get a college tutor or is it doable alone?
thank you! I'm class 22' and I was thinking of talking about inequality and education in my personal statement ;-; I'm an international student, do you think this is still being a bad idea? (I plan to major polisci)
I like your videos bc of your ~professor kang~ vibes
yay i try haha
hey, I was wondering about the thing you said about "thanksgiving topics". I'm gonna be a political science major so a few of my sentences in my essay pertain to how I found my passion for politics. I don't think what I said was really controversial or anything, but should I still delete these sentences??
i think its totally okay to talk about your interest in politics. i just dont like it when it sounds like people are trying to push a certain view point to the reader
16:29 haha , and thanks for the help i really appreciate it
I have a question for you Haley. I made my essay three paragraphs long, was that a mistake? Anyway great video thanks!
If I want to add sth that someone said to me, can I use indirect speech instead of quotes?
I am planning to use a single line of dialogue as the first sentence of my essay. It serves as sort of hook/attention grabber.
It goes something like this:
"Do you know how gay you are?" I looked up to see the student who had uttered these words....
Do you think the quotation fits in this scenario?
I also happen to be an aspiring screenwriter which I think is funny because in the video you say something like "don't use dialogue because you're probably not a screenwriter."
lolll honestly if anyone can make dialogue work, it’ll be you. good luck!!!
Im doing the same for my nursing application. I started with my favorite chips. Cheetos
So far I have written my essay partly on the pandemic, however I focus on designing and prototyping a ventilator in my engineering class rather than sitting at home and self reflecting (I said partly because I also focus on playing guitar, a hobby of mine, and connect the two topics). I was wondering if you’d still consider this to be risky since it is pandemic related, or if it is unique enough to be an exception. Thanks!
i think thats a great thing to talk about but i wouldnt make that the sole topic of the essay. i would also talk about more previous moments too since it would show you had a passion for engineering before the pandemic.
haley kang thanks!!
2.05 Hi! I'm an international student who wants to study in the States. I wrote my essay but I don't have anyone around me to read my essay and lead me (of course I have an English teacher but she doesn't know about these college stuff so) How can I find someone to read my essay and lead me about it?
who else kinda develping a crush for this girl
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do you still editing essays?
or can u recommend editors? :(
why does it actually feel like i’m being lectured by a college professor. i’m scared
hahaa. what do you mean it feels like... you are being taught by a professor
I have finished three drafts of my essay and I am still unhappy 😔 hopefully this fourth attempt
But what I am confused about is if the essay can be about for example, how I came to like and create art over the years, rather than one specific moment of me creating an artwork?
you definitely can talk about your journey as a whole! i just think that adding in a few key moments in this "journey" is crucial to really show your self growth and make the essay personal rather than a really general statement that can apply to thousands of other people
@@haleykang8156 thank you so much!
In my first draft I quoted Hannah Montana🤣🤣 I'm glad I removed it, it sounded really weird
Hi Professor Kang!
You’re videos are so helpful! Thank you for investing your time into them! I was wondering if you’d give me some advice on the common app actives section. I was on the Student Council for my entire high school “life“. Should I group it into 1 activity? I had a different position each year and achieved a lot in each position so it’s a lot to cram into 150 characters😬 Please advise! Thanks!
Aw yuck. Reading that over it sounds super prideful/stuck up. Sorry! When I say "achieved a lot" I mean like 1-2 things every year (which after writing descriptions comes out to be more than 150 characters)
i would fit it into one!
How much does it cost for your essay editing?
I wrote an essay based on the statement “women have the chance to achieve anything they want” , its more academic should it be more personal?
I included the ‘you’, but only once, in my essay because I wanted to make a connection with the reader, was that not the move?
i'm personally not a fan of using it but everything i say is my opinion!!
Aye, uppercase that G in the thumbnail
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