“home was an old painting nestled deep into the cracks of the canvas, and she had arrived as wet and unsettled as fresh ink” is a lovely line!!! I’m deep into edits so this was really interesting hearing your process!
Yes! My vote is for more editing videos. You are so purposeful about everything you write. I love seeing you find a way to make each moment work twice as hard. Loved it! Keep these up!
if this is what y'all mean when you say your first drafts are garbage I should simply stop writing because girl this was so good!! I truly enjoyed it so much that I paused and read the whole thing (I did it with both versions) because I was instantly captivated. Now I want to read the whole book lmao. Thank you so much for sharing your writing and the thought process behind it, it's so helpful and interesting. I hope you do more videos like this in the future!
I loved this! I've recently finished the first draft of a fantasy novel too, and it's always so interesting to see people's processes moving into the edits. Loving your prose! You definitely have a distinct and lyrical voice. Thank you for sharing!
you are so awesome! not to be a stereotypical filipino, but it's nice seeing another pinoy writer 😚 i started writing years ago when authortube was only 5 channels with super vague advice, so it's amazing seeing more honest channels with authentic content like yours coming out. once i finish my current first draft, i hope you still have slots open for betareading ❤️
Hello, and congrats on getting to 900 subs! I liked seeing a little peek into your current writing, your style flows really well. I'm looking forward to reading a finished book someday from you c; ❤️
okay i loved this. it's so helpful to see another person editing, because when it comes to my own, i usually just play by ear. "i dont like how this sounds, this is inconsistent, i could have used a stronger word here", that kind of thing. seeing you edit so thoughtfully is honestly so helpful when it comes to deciding what to remove, keep, add, and _why_ .
your writing/storytelling is so much better & stronger than a loooot of (most?) published YA books. I can't wait to read this someday! also love the format of this video. keep up the good work
yea this is the most wonderful writing video ever. no one shows the self editing version of themself, where they have to talk to their story and listen back for answers. thanks!!
This was really interesting, the changes you made and your thoughts behind them. The second version was clearly better, and it was fun to compare the two versions. I keep my first drafts for this as well, love to see how the writing improves with each draft.
I loved this so much!! Kaira is such a pretty name and so is your writing. Wahhh I need to catch up on your videos, congrats to 1k subscribers!! You're killing it 🔥 🔥 🔥
i never minded prologues as a reader and as a writer i still dont. im glad to see you chose not to use it though. they are like maps for what scenes should have been written. still though i never mind getting set up and being told what my mind can expect to be shown. very cool of you to dig it up and show some of your process with it
My writings is nowhere even near to the unrevised draft. English isn't my first language nor it is the second, we actually don't use english around here. I like to use that as an excuse for my uninteresting writing style, it feels like I won't be able to write a good novel until pigs learn to dance.
in simple terms, it is “cliché writing” - common sayings, metaphors, smilies, etc. just descriptions that are used a lot-either in every day speech or stories-to the point where it can be seen as predictable or overused. but as with all writing, whether or not something is “cliché” comes with degrees of subjectivity.
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“home was an old painting nestled deep into the cracks of the canvas, and she had arrived as wet and unsettled as fresh ink” is a lovely line!!!
I’m deep into edits so this was really interesting hearing your process!
thank you!! I’m so glad you found it interesting! ☺️
Your self-editing and diagnostic skills are great. I love seeing your line editing process because mine feels so shallow in comparison.
i think it’s totally normal to edit on gut feeling, not shallow at all! ☺️ thank you for watching!!
Yes! My vote is for more editing videos. You are so purposeful about everything you write. I love seeing you find a way to make each moment work twice as hard. Loved it! Keep these up!
thank you!! :) I’m so glad it was enjoyable!
if this is what y'all mean when you say your first drafts are garbage I should simply stop writing because girl this was so good!! I truly enjoyed it so much that I paused and read the whole thing (I did it with both versions) because I was instantly captivated. Now I want to read the whole book lmao. Thank you so much for sharing your writing and the thought process behind it, it's so helpful and interesting. I hope you do more videos like this in the future!
that is so kind! im happy it was interesting :')
I ADORE how you edited this vid! So helpful!
ahhh thank you, rachel!! ☺️✨
I love Kris's edit with me's. 😊😊😊 They entertain me and help me so much with editing my own writing!
haha thank you so much !! 💛
I loved this! I've recently finished the first draft of a fantasy novel too, and it's always so interesting to see people's processes moving into the edits. Loving your prose! You definitely have a distinct and lyrical voice. Thank you for sharing!
that means so much, thank you!! 😭💛
I love how willing you are to share your process and your thoughts behind editing. So informative and insightful.
thank you!! I’m so glad it’s helpful! ✨
you are so awesome! not to be a stereotypical filipino, but it's nice seeing another pinoy writer 😚 i started writing years ago when authortube was only 5 channels with super vague advice, so it's amazing seeing more honest channels with authentic content like yours coming out. once i finish my current first draft, i hope you still have slots open for betareading ❤️
Hello, and congrats on getting to 900 subs! I liked seeing a little peek into your current writing, your style flows really well. I'm looking forward to reading a finished book someday from you c; ❤️
thank you so much!! :’) 💛
okay i loved this. it's so helpful to see another person editing, because when it comes to my own, i usually just play by ear. "i dont like how this sounds, this is inconsistent, i could have used a stronger word here", that kind of thing. seeing you edit so thoughtfully is honestly so helpful when it comes to deciding what to remove, keep, add, and _why_ .
Great video! Super interesting to see a side-by-side comparison of both versions and the insights you shared. ☺
I’m glad it was helpful!! :’) 💛
your writing/storytelling is so much better & stronger than a loooot of (most?) published YA books. I can't wait to read this someday! also love the format of this video. keep up the good work
thank you for watching!! 💛
yea this is the most wonderful writing video ever. no one shows the self editing version of themself, where they have to talk to their story and listen back for answers. thanks!!
This was really interesting! I learn so much watching others explaining their editing =)
Great! I love your writer discussions and when you talk all about your opinions, how to edit, reading your past stories and current WIPs
Such a mood! I like going back to read my old short stories then making edits
I’m only 8 minutes in and already this is the most useful video I’ve found on writing. 👏🙌
This was really interesting, the changes you made and your thoughts behind them. The second version was clearly better, and it was fun to compare the two versions. I keep my first drafts for this as well, love to see how the writing improves with each draft.
I loved this so much!! Kaira is such a pretty name and so is your writing. Wahhh I need to catch up on your videos, congrats to 1k subscribers!! You're killing it 🔥 🔥 🔥
AW KELLEY 😭 that means so much, thank you!! 💛
Very good video. Maybe I will do something like this on my channel. Talking about our fantasy worlds is the best.
i never minded prologues as a reader and as a writer i still dont. im glad to see you chose not to use it though. they are like maps for what scenes should have been written. still though i never mind getting set up and being told what my mind can expect to be shown. very cool of you to dig it up and show some of your process with it
Ahh I’m so happy actually though cause I love your channel and my names Althea so that’s funny heh
My writings is nowhere even near to the unrevised draft. English isn't my first language nor it is the second, we actually don't use english around here. I like to use that as an excuse for my uninteresting writing style, it feels like I won't be able to write a good novel until pigs learn to dance.
I keep hearing about familiar phrasing. What is it? I haven't been able to find anything on it.
in simple terms, it is “cliché writing” - common sayings, metaphors, smilies, etc. just descriptions that are used a lot-either in every day speech or stories-to the point where it can be seen as predictable or overused. but as with all writing, whether or not something is “cliché” comes with degrees of subjectivity.
Are you Filipina? Do you speak Tagalog? And another thing: do you write in your own language?