The power of daily haiku | Zezan Tam | TEDxUniMelb

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  • Zezan Tam writes haiku - one every day. Taking a step outside his comfort zone, he enters the TEDxUniMelb stage to discuss his forays into daily poetry and how it has allowed him to reflect on his life. He explains three main themes that seem to underlie much of his writing, and how they translate into life lessons around gratitude, courage and humility.
    Zezan Tam is an entrepreneur and technologist. He works as a product manager at Redbubble, an online creative marketplace with headquarters in Melbourne.
    This talk was given at a TEDx event using the TED conference format but independently organized by a local community. Learn more at ted.com/tedx

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  • @JechtNH
    @JechtNH 4 ปีที่แล้ว +76

    Screen of my smartphone
    Reflects an exhausted face
    Longing for some sleep

  • @PettyBlue1
    @PettyBlue1 6 ปีที่แล้ว +115

    Writing haikus really does give pleasure. You feel like you have created something out of things that were already there for everyone.

    • @martinjimenez7392
      @martinjimenez7392 ปีที่แล้ว

      Like making a coffee

    • @atticushelvig2030
      @atticushelvig2030 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Making something good,
      from the things already there.
      It brings me pleasure.

    • @1213141516171897
      @1213141516171897 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Love it!@@atticushelvig2030

  • @aaronbarry3017
    @aaronbarry3017 ปีที่แล้ว +11

    I used haiku to keep myself sane while recovering from an illness years ago. Ended up sticking with it 'cause I liked the feeling so much. Just released my first haiku collection the other day, eggplants & teardrops: a haiku collection. Stick with it, guys!

    • @user-lj6ww5pj9j
      @user-lj6ww5pj9j ปีที่แล้ว +2

      This might be late but, congrats on releasing a haiku collection!

  • @ryanhall7033
    @ryanhall7033 4 ปีที่แล้ว +41

    He writes one a day
    Zezan Tam the haiku man
    He's doing God's work

  • @slayaforever6009
    @slayaforever6009 4 ปีที่แล้ว +15

    I wrote my first haiku today..... I think I'm obsessed with them now? They are just SO FUN to write!!!! I can't believe it took me this long in my life to find out what a haiku is!!!!

    • @smellydonut5088
      @smellydonut5088 4 ปีที่แล้ว +4

      same here! I had no idea how fun haiku's were to write :)

    • @dadapotok
      @dadapotok 10 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

      guess it's time to share if you're up to it ) i'm curious, had to write them on the third minute of video lol

  • @KindleReads
    @KindleReads 5 ปีที่แล้ว +111

    I love leaving a
    piece of me behind, something
    to reflect back on

    • @Emericask8b
      @Emericask8b 5 ปีที่แล้ว +6

      KindleReads this is beautiful

    • @KindleReads
      @KindleReads 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      @@Emericask8b thank you

    • @KindleReads
      @KindleReads 5 ปีที่แล้ว

      @@Emericask8b thank you

    • @latayshiashaw4198
      @latayshiashaw4198 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Ne bnbehffuri iiiieeie oooooihiiow ooooo iooooooopo owas oooiooooooqña amue

    • @slayaforever6009
      @slayaforever6009 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      KindleReads, I'm not great at recognizing syllables but I'm pretty sure there is 8 in this sentence? Am I right? Please tell me if I am, I'm trying to get better at it... Also, this is beautiful!

  • @morgisugly
    @morgisugly 3 ปีที่แล้ว +8

    started writing daily haikus as a coping mechanism while i recover from an OD. it’s really been an amazing thing for me.

  • @johnvaldez1444
    @johnvaldez1444 2 ปีที่แล้ว +7

    He's speaking with such an honest and self-aware mind. You can perceive that he went through a long process of self-reflection, which happened just by choosing the words that were really meaningful to him.

  • @carsonbarrett1380
    @carsonbarrett1380 3 ปีที่แล้ว +16

    A lethargic night
    Introspectiveness is key
    What’s serenity?

  • @shutupcharli483
    @shutupcharli483 6 ปีที่แล้ว +66

    I really love how honest this guy is, it really drives his message. I had to write some haiku for my creative writing class and I hated the restriction at first, but when I was done I saw how rich the words and message were. I might start writing daily ones too cause things like gratitude are so important.

  • @tajs476
    @tajs476 3 ปีที่แล้ว +24

    Swallowed by my thoughts
    My voice missing when I talk
    It's all for nothing

    • @cheemes4536
      @cheemes4536 3 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      It'll get better my distant friend :)

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +17

    Darkness now for weeks.
    We stand outside and tremble
    Shapes obscure the stars

  • @mistersydster
    @mistersydster 5 ปีที่แล้ว +36

    A beautiful speech.
    I just started these myself.
    Less pacing next time.

    • @zenish
      @zenish 5 ปีที่แล้ว +10

      Thanks for the feedback :) I'm not a very experienced speaker, so it helps me keep my speaking tempo, apologies if it is distracting!

  • @maximel7568
    @maximel7568 4 ปีที่แล้ว +65

    His daily training,
    clearly has paid off, great talk
    Thank you very much
    his daily training,
    cementing his thought pattern,
    changes his whole life.

  • @brandoncreighton775
    @brandoncreighton775 3 ปีที่แล้ว +4

    Candle Cascading,
    Shades solicited into sight,
    Phantasms of plight.

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    the midsummer rain
    for my flowers perhaps joy
    but i am chilled

  • @lupin2382
    @lupin2382 3 ปีที่แล้ว +5

    Dreams under false skies
    Spiral passage through the clouds
    Behold! True purpose.

  • @astralityyy
    @astralityyy 4 ปีที่แล้ว +59

    a random comment
    in the vast sea of people
    lost in the madness

    • @user-gq6dg7ee6d
      @user-gq6dg7ee6d 3 ปีที่แล้ว +4

      I see a weeb
      Begging for attention
      But I watch JoJo

    • @b.b.holmes8255
      @b.b.holmes8255 3 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      @@user-gq6dg7ee6d the last line is qrite, but you messed up the rest

    • @1.4142
      @1.4142 3 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      Used to see faces
      But this year I only see
      profile pictures

    • @kenroddis1571
      @kenroddis1571 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      @@1.4142 Troubling and succinct
      Is Kevin's eloquent verse.
      Poetry? For sure.

  • @robinfinney1808
    @robinfinney1808 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Hello Z, I really loved you speech. It was so inspirational. Here's a hiaku just for you:
    You are much a jem!
    a diamond in the deep rough;
    a valuable soul.

  • @noelshafi1314
    @noelshafi1314 11 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    I write haiku because I love writing poetry in general, but haiku in particular is special because it focuses your mind on a singular, complex moment, to the point where the process of writing becomes almost a deep, meditative experience.

  • @murray2343
    @murray2343 4 ปีที่แล้ว +13

    English language haiku doesn’t have to have 5,7,5. Japanese haiku counts “mora” which is different to English syllables. “Nippon” for example, has 4 mora but two syllables. “Scarf” has 4 mora but 1 syllable. It’s similar for many other words.
    So in English language haiku it’s good to aim for less than 12 ( absolutely no more than 17) syllables with a 2 line phrase and a one line fragment. The juxtaposition between the phrase and the fragment creates the poetic scene/feeling/imagery.
    Single line and two line are also possible if you are skilled enough.

    • @bubba101010
      @bubba101010 2 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      Exactly. And his haiku are too cerebral and in his own head. Haiku are supposed to be observational using mainly the 5 senses. The reader would supply the emotion. Also seasonal words and a cut are needed. The Haiku Handbook (Higginson) would have been a good book for him to have read first or at least somewhere along the way of his journey.

    • @dadapotok
      @dadapotok 10 หลายเดือนก่อน +3

      ​@@bubba101010 i think the whole beauty of it is not that Zezan Tam gave us a technical classic poetry lesson but that he shared an experience of how he jokingly adopted an unfamiliar thing, made it his own and set on a journey that otherwise wouldn't happen, a journey of learning things and appreciating being alive deeply - which is one of the definitions of poetry to me - so in the end he did give us a poetry lesson, but of it's essence instead of the technique. yes, it's a poetry of slightly self-centered, individualistic modern person, slightly obsessed with bettering oneself, but this only makes it better reflect the modern world and culture. See, writing like Matsuo Bashō would only be a grave-digging and meaningless stylisation. While this guy, Zezan Tam, to whom i'm instantly grateful (yeah, grateful lol) even used a goddamn plastic coffee cup mobile photograph instead of the etching or the ink wash painting to illustrate his setting. This is truly a profound experience

    • @bubba101010
      @bubba101010 10 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

      @@dadapotok thank you, very well made points! Have a great day! ☀️

  • @manishbarik2267
    @manishbarik2267 2 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    She wish she could fly
    far away from the chaos
    and sleep in the sky

  • @wtf_taiyo
    @wtf_taiyo 2 ปีที่แล้ว +20

    A spoon of happiness
    Covered with my deep fears
    Still makes my day

    • @sby60118
      @sby60118 2 ปีที่แล้ว

      Isn’t that 6-6-4?
      Edit: a spoon of ha ppi ness
      Co vered with my deep fears
      Still makes my day

    • @wtf_taiyo
      @wtf_taiyo 2 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      @@sby60118 it was my first try

    • @wtf_taiyo
      @wtf_taiyo 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      @@sby60118 😅😅

    • @BIBLE-a-s-m-r
      @BIBLE-a-s-m-r ปีที่แล้ว

    • @BIBLE-a-s-m-r
      @BIBLE-a-s-m-r ปีที่แล้ว

      You did good anyway. Is it about anorexia?

  • @Rimjhim_phrogwizard
    @Rimjhim_phrogwizard 2 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    Gratitude , Bravery , choose Humility
    I loved the talk ! ♥️

  • @kaesnow2380
    @kaesnow2380 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Reading this after covid-19 lockdowns....haven't been inside a cafe for 10 months.... would be full of gratitude for that simple pleadure of drinking a latte in my favorite cafe again ❤.

    • @SoftArtCloud
      @SoftArtCloud 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Could not agree with you more. How nice it would be to sit in a cafe, surrounded by other human beings, and write a haiku.

  • @OscarWrightZenTANGO
    @OscarWrightZenTANGO 6 ปีที่แล้ว +5

    FANTASTIC talk !

  • @wilmavoss9654
    @wilmavoss9654 2 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    I wanna try this. It’s like a diary except you have to think more about it since you only have 17 syllables :))

  • @loishenderson4344
    @loishenderson4344 2 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Thank you SO much - now I know far more how to face my audience at the McGregor Festival, which is coming up from 19 to 21 of November. My very first Poetry Festival and I have two spots to share my haiku with professional poets - me, a little backwoods girl (actually a battered world-weary and world-torn academic editor living in a small fishing village on the West Coast of South Africa). Still really intimidated about it all, but I feel MUCH better now. So, once again, I wish to say: thank you SO much.

  • @vipinkanoujiya9582
    @vipinkanoujiya9582 6 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Thank u big brother...blessing

  • @NicholasKlacsanzkyICM
    @NicholasKlacsanzkyICM 4 ปีที่แล้ว +7

    It's an admirable project and it is done with good intentions, but haiku is more to do with seasons and how they interact or connect with humanity aesthetically, spiritually, and emotionally than a syllable count (which made for Japanese and does not translate well to other languages). What Mr. Tam is writing is more western micropoetry rather than haiku. Sorry to sound like a snob, but as a widely published haiku poet, I like to inform people about the craft I love.
    As award-winning haiku poet Michael Dylan Welch says:
    "Haiku in English is typically a three-line poem that uses concrete sensory images to convey or imply natural and human seasonal phenomena, using a two-part juxtapositional structure as well as simple and primarily objective language. Originally a Japanese genre of poetry, now written and adapted in many languages worldwide, traditional haiku in Japanese consists of seventeen sounds (not to be confused with syllables) in a pattern of 5-7-5. Because of differences in language, this rhythm is generally not followed for literary haiku in most languages other than Japanese. As intuitive and emotional poems, haiku often capture a sense of wonder and wholeness in presenting existence such as it is. Rather than presenting one’s emotions, haiku present the cause of one’s emotions, thus empowering the reader to have the same intuitive reaction to an experience that the poet had.
    "

  • @Niliank
    @Niliank ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Thanks for showing this to us in the most nicest and simplest way, I really enjoyed it

  • @alfredcaulin
    @alfredcaulin 5 ปีที่แล้ว +15

    These aren't really haiku, they're senryu.
    But that's pedantic of me, he admits he's not an expert.
    His greater goal of encouraging people to examine their life is a good one.

    • @zenish
      @zenish 5 ปีที่แล้ว +5

      I hadn't heard of senryu - thanks for bringing that to my attention!

    • @faridjunaidistrategi
      @faridjunaidistrategi 5 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      Is very hard to write real haiku not in japanese

    • @gardenlover9663
      @gardenlover9663 4 ปีที่แล้ว +5

      Doesn't matter what it's called. I am writing this for myself. When I spend my time, criticizing, I don't allow the good stuff to make it's way to me. I get to write a haiku about it! Oops. Senryu.

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    it gave me a shiver
    that dark shadow in the tree
    whispering my name.

  • @lobten2376
    @lobten2376 3 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    Your sincerity
    What i appreciate the most
    Thanks for the great talk

    • @sby60118
      @sby60118 2 ปีที่แล้ว

      I the second not 8? Maybe: What i appreciate most
      What1 I2 A3-ppre4-ci5-ate6 most7

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +22

    Deep woods. Now the rain.
    Warm in my tent boots off lights out
    Tomorrow the mountain

  • @lisabelle808
    @lisabelle808 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I really liked this!! Goosebumps.

  • @redtruck3020
    @redtruck3020 ปีที่แล้ว

    I’m really glad that you referred from Kenny’s talk because of her so much and even better mood right now

  • @gloriamitchell3518
    @gloriamitchell3518 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    This has helped me tremendously. Adding this to my morning ritual.

  • @dwirjo
    @dwirjo 7 ปีที่แล้ว +8

    Inspirational!

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +38

    Lonesome coyote
    In his den safe from the storm.
    Mother come home soon.

    • @deborahrenee
      @deborahrenee 3 ปีที่แล้ว

      This is true haiku. Outstanding!

  • @BUKCOLLECTOR
    @BUKCOLLECTOR 2 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Very much enjoyed your your poems and reading. I, too, am a
    Poet but specialize in Japanese forms: i. e. haiku, tanka, haibun, kyoka, senryu.
    I hope you don’t mind me sharing a tanka and my haiku tribute poem to Matsuo Bashō’s frog with commentary by the late AHA founder and poet Jane Reichhold who considered my poem among her top 10 haiku of all time. What an honor.
    Here’s the Bashō poem and commentary:
    Bashō,s frog
    four hundred years
    of ripples
    - -Al Fogel
    “At first the idea of picking only 10 of my favorite haiku seemed a rather daunting task. How could I review all the haiku I have read in my life and decide that there were only 10 that were outstanding? Then realized I was already getting a steady stream of excellent haiku day by day through the AHA
    forum.
    The puns and write-offs based on Basho's most famous haiku are so
    numerous I would have said that nothing new could be said with this
    method, but here Al Fogel proved me wrong. Perhaps part of my delight in this haiku lies in the fact that I agree with him. Here he is saying one thing
    about realism-ripples are on a pond after a frog jumps in, but because it refers back to Basho and his famous haiku, he is also saying something about the haiku and authors who have followed him. We, and our work, are just ripples while Basho holds the honor of inventing the idea of "the
    sound of a frog leaping is the sound of water".
    As haiku spreads around the world, making ripples in more and larger ponds, its ripples are wider-including us all. But his last word reminds us all that we are only ripples and our lives are that ephemeral. It will be the frogs that will remain”.
    And my tanka:
    returning home
    from a Jackson Pollock
    exhibition
    I smear my face with paint
    and turn into art
    -All love in isolation
    from Miami Beach,
    Florida.
    Al

  • @emmanuelhakiza596
    @emmanuelhakiza596 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I know ill be great,
    God got me no matter what,
    Success is my path.

  • @blackvitruvianman
    @blackvitruvianman 4 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    This summer evening//brown bird flies from the treetop//to my balcony!!

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +11

    Two shadows I cast.
    Behind me the Autumn Moon
    and the ghost of my father again.

  • @debbiedean3165
    @debbiedean3165 2 หลายเดือนก่อน

    You are such a lovely human being 😊, very inspirational, I also love writing Haiku for fun 💕

  • @D.W56
    @D.W56 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Watched this in 2020
    This vid is really superb
    Hope you are happy

  • @meanmansmum
    @meanmansmum ปีที่แล้ว

    Really helpful, a challenge that's so do-able, thanks for sharing your growth journey. Blessings 🙏

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +4

    The Starship lies derelict
    half buried by the sands of Mars
    A Dread Thing waits there.

  • @Madewholebynature
    @Madewholebynature 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Honesty and you
    Merge together as you speak
    Nice meeting you here

  • @amitanshuv
    @amitanshuv ปีที่แล้ว

    great talk. I have been writing one haiku everyday too, it's definitely worth it.

  • @loveannbea
    @loveannbea ปีที่แล้ว

    Looking forward to your next Haiku TEdtalk 🙂

  • @jerimegarcia960
    @jerimegarcia960 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Cold schoolyard mornings
    Lonely, I await the one
    The one I adore

  • @falandoatoa
    @falandoatoa ปีที่แล้ว

    That's awesome man! I'm gonna try!!

  • @rickeishaperreira7628
    @rickeishaperreira7628 ปีที่แล้ว

    Oh my this is well taught through...

  • @redtruck3020
    @redtruck3020 ปีที่แล้ว

    I feel energized tripod to put myself out a bad mood when I’m stressed out

  • @sby60118
    @sby60118 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Zezan Tam’s Ted Talk:
    Power of daily Haiku.
    Quite good video.

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +19

    Once in a forest
    A flash of red now the wolf.
    Grandmas house is near.

  • @Mote.
    @Mote. 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    You should write whatever you want. Don't limit yourself to syllables and rules someone made up.
    But you can still write haikus too. Just remember to be yourself when writing

    • @Mote.
      @Mote. 2 ปีที่แล้ว

      Maybe haikus sound good in Japanese. I wouldn't know, i cant read it.
      But in english, Haikus don't tickle my fancy. Thats just my opinion though

  • @midoann
    @midoann 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Marvelous! I'm grateful to have seen this video. I've never related my daily grateful morning routine (and during the day ) to HAIKU. It will help a lot, making your grateful time artistic! I think we all have an artistic tic side and this idea will as thrive artistically and in a spiritual way. Thank you! Did you think on that day making the audience practice Haiku? Like composing in 5 min or less their Haiku?

  • @abdalmuakhir8205
    @abdalmuakhir8205 4 ปีที่แล้ว +9

    Beneficial rain
    Slept through the western sunrise
    Stream full of catfish

  • @andrebernardo4501
    @andrebernardo4501 2 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    No one here can write
    A proper haiku poem
    It's easy to see

  • @starscorn
    @starscorn 4 ปีที่แล้ว +11

    bye, I say to her
    I would rather work it out,
    She turns, walks away

  • @vraft2359
    @vraft2359 4 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Beautiful speech ಥ‿ಥ

  • @jessemathat3863
    @jessemathat3863 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    A chatter a day
    May Leave a smile to the brave
    Both sides are happy

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    She is beautiful.
    This whisperer to magpies.
    She wore blue today

  • @martinjimenez7392
    @martinjimenez7392 ปีที่แล้ว

    Young man
    “Boy without father
    Young Flower with out sunlight
    Fish out of water”
    -Martin, 2023.

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Flight of dragonflies
    Is most pleasing to the eye.
    Sun on azure wing.

  • @redtruck3020
    @redtruck3020 ปีที่แล้ว

    Thank you for the self-help. Talk for a smart guy.

  • @jasonc.6861
    @jasonc.6861 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Kunai in cold wind
    Leaves drop next to fallen friends
    shinobi season

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    A Samurai tale
    Fear me not little rabbit
    Lets share this quiet spring

  • @mondoflambe8522
    @mondoflambe8522 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    Algorithms
    numbers shaping thoughts and words
    are tidal forces .

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 ปีที่แล้ว

    deep woods man and wolf
    just the trail and no other way
    softly now the rain

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    walking in the park.
    I saw a dog; lost forlorn.
    One wag of tail love

  • @dustash1578
    @dustash1578 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    What is to improve?
    All things are as they should be,
    Just let it all go.

  • @howardleekilby7390
    @howardleekilby7390 ปีที่แล้ว

    Haiku conference in Arkansas
    November 10-11, 2023
    Open to everyone - free

  • @BIBLE-a-s-m-r
    @BIBLE-a-s-m-r ปีที่แล้ว

    Now, I feel anxious
    Currently wait for my friends
    I don’t know them yet

  • @CameronKarimi-Zand
    @CameronKarimi-Zand 9 หลายเดือนก่อน

    haikus are great if you have a short attention span (or lazy lol) but want to be creative. i love it

  • @konradzimmermann2263
    @konradzimmermann2263 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    notice how he paced in the entire video

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    down from the mountain
    through the darkest woods we run
    still the tiger follows

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    once in the forest
    So cold the eyes following
    I turned back home

  • @redtruck3020
    @redtruck3020 ปีที่แล้ว

    I like that poem about coffee

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Lost in a desert
    I tumble down a dune.
    Great stone lion greets me

  • @dintainta
    @dintainta 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Nice speech... Congratulations.
    just walking
    beside the ownerless dog
    among the vines
    Thank you so much. Regards.

    • @TimGreig
      @TimGreig ปีที่แล้ว +1

      among the vines
      an ownerless dog
      just walking

    • @dintainta
      @dintainta ปีที่แล้ว

      @@TimGreig thank you!

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    The Elf Lord stands alone.
    Strangers of wing and claw bow.
    This fair green world taken.

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Quiet prayers sent there
    snows of the high Himalaya
    shelter ancient gods

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    from edge of the world.
    what do the butterflies see
    out there in the void

  • @yuli1_266
    @yuli1_266 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    It's the haunting.
    Comfort has now let us go.
    Us..on our own.

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    No Earth no Sky yet still it snows.
    The Hibiscus by the road. My horse ate it.
    The Mother I never knew- Every time i see the ocean. Every time.
    The pass at Izuzu - Best to use horses.
    Having no talent I long for sleep.Noisy birds.
    The English translation of these classic Haiku show that we are mostly ignornat of the cultural and historic context. What we are missing as well is the wonderful sounds of the original language.
    In the West we are scolded for trying to follow the rules of 5 7 5 and they are correct. We are failing to use the wonderful sounds we can make with English words.
    An extra word 5 7 6 or 5 8 5 perhaps would make our Haiku sing. I propose we create Haiku20 poems using no more than 20 still with 3 lines so that our language can be put to the form. Examples below with 5 7 5
    then Haiku20.
    5 7 5 forced this...
    Starship lies derelict
    Half buried in Martian sands
    A Dread thing waits there.
    Haiku20
    The Starship lies derelict
    Half buried in the sands of Mars.
    A Dread thing waits there.
    5 7 5 forced this...
    Deep Woods. Now the rain.
    Warm my tent boots off lights off.
    Day break the mountain.
    Haiku20...
    Deep Woods. Now the rain.
    Warm in my tent boots off lights off.
    Tomorow the mountain.
    Just a suggestion to make our own Language sing.

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    my father sent ravens
    but the bell in not ready
    the village must wait

  • @charlitoafrikana5978
    @charlitoafrikana5978 3 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    As I scroll down here,
    I read all those good haiku,
    Sad I’ve not wrote them.

  • @HeWhoShams
    @HeWhoShams 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I've started writing haikus everyday.. im already ahead of the game before the video 😅

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    I left the spy store.
    Packed my Ninja suit flew west
    Scarlet Johanson

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 ปีที่แล้ว

    she came to stay here
    it was the longest winter
    lion we call Shishi

  • @taekfute
    @taekfute 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Waves are light hearted
    Unlike their driving currents
    Where do waves return?

  • @fm00078
    @fm00078 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    I thought I'd read some comments to get an idea how well or poor this speaker made a difference, if any, to folks.
    Surprised so many threw a few words out there and did a few haiku's.
    OH? .. .. WAIT-WHAT? .. .. 🤔 DID I JUST???
    Surprised so many
    threw a few words out there and
    did a few haiku's.
    😉👍

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    All the birds of Eden
    Being left unnamed, desolate
    Mourn Adam sing no more

  • @happyhaikuslessonsinwritin2320
    @happyhaikuslessonsinwritin2320 3 ปีที่แล้ว +5

    Haikus are truly a form of poetry unlike any other; not only are the rules simple, but there is only one rule! 5. 7. 5. It is just restricting enough to get creative with it, but free enough to give original material every time.

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    there are kittens here
    sleeping soundly in their beds
    calculating the speed of light

    • @asahi1427
      @asahi1427 2 ปีที่แล้ว

      Hi! Can you make me a haiku, I need one but unable to create

    • @meervi77
      @meervi77 2 ปีที่แล้ว

      @@asahi1427 if you have a subject i will try ..
      along the postroad
      pistol in hand dark eyes bright
      the highwayman waits
      you make a visual in your mind then write lines..
      High above these walls
      faded flags wave in the wind
      ghosts of kings reign here
      see the castle describe the place.
      corn aged in charred oak
      pride of Kentucky pure gold
      bourbon you are king
      subject is whisky
      try to write about something that you see a dog a shoe a butterfly.
      try to write one you will love it.
      I see a bird..
      the red wing blackbird
      at my window watches me
      with grandfather's eyes

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    Once in a forest
    A flash of red now the wolf.
    Grandmas house is near.

  • @meervi77
    @meervi77 9 หลายเดือนก่อน

    yellow crane tower
    sorcerer and his dragons
    then came there a hero