You’ve earned a new subscriber. Well done on this video; you may not be a master and writing but you are truly a master at being a Jurassic fan, and for that we are grateful.
Thank you so much for your comment and your sub! Truly I just love to share this passion with other folks like me, it’s great to hear it’s coming through in these videos!
interesting take but personally these are my critiques: 1. Having Hammond be killed off or die between films after all the work that was done to keep the character alive in the first film just to have him arbitrarily killed off between movies while the actor is alive and well feels unessecery 2. Malcolm's reasoning for simply wanting to rescue a loved one from a place where he has trauma honestly fits Malcolm's character far more than doing it for academia. considering that Malcolm was Crichton's favorite character, but realizing that Spielberg (in his mind) would've centered the sequel around Grant and Ellie, made Malcolm's motives more in line with something that Grant would do for a more natural character progression for Grant rather than Malcolm 3. personally I think Sarah's motivation is more Malcolm's original motivation in TLW where she is trying to prove the existence of living dinosaurs and through Hammond's Lost world she attempts ratify her theories 4. Making Levine a woman is interesting however, the first film went just fine with Ellie and lex being the only human female characters (personally I would just cut the character entirely as he's just Hooper from Jaws with an interest in dinosaurs rather than sharks) 5. the hunter team being led by Baselton doesn't really seem to work. as the main human antagonist he feels rather out of place. it be like having Tabaki the Jackal rather than Shere Khan as the main antagonist in the jungle book. I understand wanting to keep Dodgson around for later sequels, but frankly there are other ways to incorporate the character. I'd also like to incorporate a bit of an ongoing banter between Roland and the leader of the hunters and their methods. such as the fiasco at the rex nest.
Those are all valid points, and I appreciate the way you presented them. You’re not wrong on any of your observations. Some of my choices story-wise are preferential, like Levine being gender-swapped to add a little diversity to the cast. Some of the ideas, like choosing to focus on Malcolm’s fatherhood arc over his romantic relationship, are more akin to finishing the promises the movie didn’t keep. And some of them-like making Baselton the primary antagonist to keep Dodgson alive for future sequels-are absolutely fan service bait. I will say that offing John Hammond was probably my most difficult decision, because it came so late in my outlining. To me, the novel is so much better than the film, and I always wanted to see that novel adapted more faithfully. But as I began writing the script with Hammond, I realized that I didn’t buy the motivations of any of the characters. Hammond's existence was like a cheat code, paving the way for the gatherer characters to stroll right on to Sorna without a struggle, and I just couldn't work the basic plot of the novel into a story where Hammond was still alive, well and part of the story. But you're absolutely right to point out that removing him from the story seems to negate the storytelling choices of the first film, though I would argue that's precisely what happened with JP3 where Hammond is technically alive but has no part in the proceedings. Good ideas all!
I like Lost World as an okay movie (other than the plot holes) as a casual movie watcher. As a fan of the novel, I can’t understand why they changed so much after Spielberg asked Crichton for a sequel to adapt.
Neither can I. All the novel really needed was a more climactic ending, but as a whole Lost World had a really intense story that would have been such a better film than what we got. That’s why my story sticks closer to the novel’s plot, because Crichton got it right the first time lol
Honestly if we use the script with the san deigo sequence, and using the original third act and the deleted scenes with ludlow and Roland it would be better but the film is still good
And maybe have more elements from the book? For Example: 1.The Bowman family are renamed Mike, Ellen, and Tina. Here, Tina is working on a school project, and gets attacked by the compys. 2. Doc Thorne is in the story and remains the same as he was in the novel. With Eddie being his assistant. 3. Dieter seeks refuge in an old shed to escape the compys just like Dodgson does in the novel but was killed by a velociraptor who was in the shed. 4. The Raptor attack on the high hide, where Eddie suffers the same death experience from the novel. 5. Ian ordering Carr to kill the Baby T. Rex, but Carr sneaks it back into the trailer where Ian and Sarah reluctantly fix the baby's leg. 6. Making Sarah a badass woman like she is in the novel. 7. Ludlow? IDK. Maybe give him Book Hammond's personality or something? 8. Having Levine in the story where Ian and Sarah go out to rescue him on Isla Sorna, which he unappreciated.
Honestly i still would like to keep Hammond. I think he could still fit into this if you're going into the idea of Wu keeping something secret from him. This could be a revelation that Malcom could relay back to Hammond and Hammond could work on the mainland to fix theissue. That's just what i want though.
Honestly me too! I really wish I’d been clever enough to combine the story I wanted to tell with Hammond being present but I couldn’t. In fact, there is a whole first act of the script which I wrote with Hammond in the story. Malcolm visits him and confronts him with evidence that the animals were still alive and making it to the mainland, and Hammond has to deflect and lie so that I had a good reason to send Malcolm to the island. It just felt so unlike where we left Hammond and how he was in the Lost World movie (which felt so right for his character) that I ended up deciding the only way I could get all the other pieces in place was to remove this one thing I wanted. It broke my heart but I had to do it to make everything else work.
Interesting. Here's my take on TLW JP: The plot remains the same as it was in the film, except some of the deleted scenes are kept: The InGen boardroom meeting, Roland and Ajay talkin' at the bar, Kelly asking Ian if he would marry Sarah, and the scene which explained how the Buck escaped from his hold on S.S. Venture. Here are some interesting facts: 1. One of the rexes were originally gonna stomp on Roland's tent and push his rifle into the mud, thus taking the bullets out. 2. There was an original ending where the Buck is attacking Sarah's house in San Diego, because she took the baby. 3. There was another original ending where the Raptors are supposed to chase Sarah on a motorcycle. Not only that, but there were also gonna be Pteranodons involved, where they attack the helicopter. I would add Levine too, except he would be the one to release the dinosaurs from the camp, and keeping the bloody jacket, except he somehow didn't notice the blood. I would also keep the extended raptor attack scene in the worker village (except the gymnastics and the Pteranodons are removed), and the original San Diego sequence (Except Levine will take the baby instead of Sarah).
Oh my gosh, thank you so much!! Yes, I’m returning myself to that now that How To Fix JP3 is out. I wanna have it done before I do JW, so I’m cracking my knuckles and setting some goals for myself!
@@BryanIra305 Okay that's good! Just one complaint I have is that I don't like how you made Howard King into Peter Ludlow because in the book Howard seemed to be more sympathetic than Lew and Baselton, granted Baselton didn't have much to say but King was more fleshed out and had a backstory to him. I probably shouldn't care this much because he's a minor character in the books- But that's just one thing I don't really like, also the Rex nest was a thrilling scene! I like how Baselton didn't die and I ENJOY that scene with him and Tembo, it really added to his character (your version) I look forward to see what's next!
Thank you so much! The process is really fun because as I think of new little things to include to flesh things out, I have to go back and add or change things that happen earlier in the story. So definitely I would recommend that when I finally finish, my readers go back and start from the beginning, because I’m bound to adjust, edit and update the whole thing as I work. That being said, I really don’t want to spoil aspects of the trio of baddies I’ve established because there are still a surprise or two left there. I also have really important reason that I removed Dodgson from the adventure, which I will eventually make clear in the future. I really hope you end up enjoying the paths I’ve set for these characters though! And thank you thank you thank you for reading! It really means so much to me!
This was taken from the box art of a Lost World puzzle that must have been illustrated before the artist knew the plot of the film and based it on what they’d read in the novel.
Oh i’ve already thought about it: The story of plane crash survivors on Isla Nublar as their pursued by a baryonyx with the film ending with the bombing of Isla Nublar and the 3rd Jurassic Park seeing the return of Biosyn and a retcon to the first movie where Nedry successfully got to the dock
I think the great thing about the world of Jurassic Park is the amount of stories that could be told in that universe, and what we got from the sequels aren’t necessarily the best versions of those stories. I’ve read some great fan fiction set in the JP continuity that could have made a wonderful film.
All valid points. As a kid I felt it was disjointed because of the absence of Dr. Grant and Ellie Sattler. I was glad to see Malcom, Hammond, and the kids back. In terms of the characters, we see how the events of the first film have affected Ian and how hardened he is. Natural. Hammond still being his classic self, wants to make Jurassic Park work. Naturally. Roland I was actually hoping would be killed by a dino. A different dino. Like a utahraptor or even a carnotaurus. Nick disappears for some reason. We never heard from him again. These are my problems with this film.
9:24 After watching this rewrite of The Lost World… It was okay. Much closer to the Novel counterpart, had this plot been in the third movie, I would have give it a 3/5. But, hey, good rewrite.
So much better scenes could have been included with the time saved by cutting the whole dino rampage on the mainland part. Plus you get a perfectly natural ending of the helicopter rescue. I also refuse to belie that everything at the hunter's camp was so badly destroyed that they were only left with their backpacks.
I've found myself thinking back on this video over the last few days. I purchased Jurassic World: Evolution 2, so I've got dinosaurs on the brain currently. Anyway, I wanted to ask you if you've got plans for further videos like this? I'd be interested to hear what you would change about the third film and the new trilogy. I've had some of my own ideas, of course but the stuff you've come up with for the Lost World is a lot better than anything I'd thought of to fix that movie.
I actually filmed my How to Fix Jurassic Park III video two weeks ago but unfortunately the laptop I’ve been using to make my videos is currently not working. So until I can get it fixed, I can’t begin my editing process. I actually have a total of three videos “in the can” so to speak that require my computer to edit. With that said, I have turned my attention to finishing the Redux script discussed in this video. As of now I’m approximately 80 or 90 pages into that.
I think one thing Jurassic Park 3 onward lacks are instances where herbivorous animals could be dangerous, which is why it was so jarring when, in Camp Cretaceous, Ouranosaurs had a really intense scene as the antagonists.
Ed Regis would have been a good inclusion for sure. Would it have made the movie better? Not in my eyes, because JP1 is perfect 😂 the ONLY thing that can make JP MORE perfect is if we GOT SOME FREAKING DELETED SCENES UNI!
Well, this was a surprising find. I really liked your adjusted Lost World and broadly agree that while that movie is flawed it's still far superior to all efforts that came after it. I was personally, bitterly disappointed with Jurassic World and that's saying something since I went into that movie with low expectations.
I wonder if the stealing an egg from the Alpha female Velociraptor nest in JP III was a call back sequence to the LWJP book chapter with someone stealing a T-Rex egg? This is sort of like how the first sequence of LWJP Movie happened toward the prologue of the Jurassic Park Novel.
I ask because birds are the closest living animals to dinosaurs so for your Lost World rewrite I propose you change your script to Birds getting DX instead of humans
I don’t think it’s a bad idea and I think it’s absolutely a thread that can be explored, but as it is the basis for a both Ian and Sarah’s primary motivations in my story, I intend to explore it as affecting humans.
That’s fine. I did use the source material as a jumping off point, as DX was implied to have given Costa Ricans intense headaches and was of concern to the government.
You just outlined a movie that is worthy of being a sequel to Jurassic Park. I think this is the Lost World we all wanted. You took a movie that is a 3/5 to a 5/5. You actually care about characters and arcs. I wish Spielberg had.
I susepect if Spilberge had gone with your idea and done a heavy character focused story it would of been massivly paned by fans a critics in 1997 however over time people would come around to it and evetually call it the best in the franchise. I know it will never happen but I so wish we could get a remake of the Lost World which ignores all the sequles par JP1 and follows the book closely.
2:51 I have to disagree here my friend. I believe if Lost World didn't end with dinosaurs being ousted to the public, the illegal business Dino-Soar wouldn't exist, thus JP3's story would've been severely different.
I chose not to consider how any storyline changes would disrupt the timeline of the franchise so I could focus on simply trying to improve the story. It is a very good point but you’ll see in subsequent videos in this series that I’ll be holding canon what came before each movie but in some cases vastly change the trajectory of that movie’s story, which would impact the sequels we got. For example, when I get to Fallen Kingdom, I’m going to hold Jurassic Park to Jurassic World as canon, but not Dominion. :)
Klayton Fioriti definitely prefers the film over the book. I personally really like this film but it does have story and character flaws that should have been fixed.
I love Klayton but I’m afraid I disagree with him on that score. I am fully a novel-Stan where Lost World is concerned (though I definitely prefer JP the movie to the novel). Crichton infamously does not focus on any real character development, which means the movie and novel certainly have that in common, and neither wins the day there. So if it comes down to storyline, atmosphere and themes, I think the novel clinches it.
@@BryanIra305nope nope nopeity nope, I'm on Klaytons side with this, the novel lost my attention after the high hide attack but that didn't happen with the first novel, nor the first film and the lost world film, so I think the film is better
The thing that confuses me about the ending of the original book and the beginning of the sequel is; How is it that Ian Malcolm lives in the second book when in the ending of the first book he dies?
Michael Crichton doesn’t really get into it. He just acknowledges that Malcolm was declared dead but that some talented physicians were able to revive him.
IMO the Carnotaurus wouldn’t have really been necessary for The Lost World had they done something way better instead. In the first Crichton novel there are hints about the raptors being capable of changing their skin color. Imagine how chilling the Velociraptors had been if some of them had the camouflaging ability instead of the Carnotaurs and could that way stalk the human characters in a whole new way aside their high intelligence? Spielberg really missed his chance to further elevate these dinosaurs as an antagonistic force from the first Jurassic Park. As of now all we have is the Indominus using it ONCE. Kinda underwhelming.
The raptors were so underused in Lost World, it’s depressing when you sit down and think about it. From the very beginning of JP they are set up to be the ultimate villains of the film. Then they’re basically after thoughts in TLW. Really sad.
Will you have the Raptors vs Triceratops’ scene from the lost world book in your version of the lost world or will it be in your version of jurassic park 3?
1997 Brad Douriff would be an inspired choice for King. I’ve really enjoyed writing his character in the script because he’s obnoxious, callous and cruel.
I think the beginning being a slow burn is a problem for tbis movie being boring. I think if they focused more on thrills it would of been fine like Alien 2. I think Sarah getting lost in the beginning to a Spinosauras and is attacked then immediately having Malcom go to the island would of atleast made it a thrilling movie
For as intense as Aliens is, I think it’s important to remember that the heroes don’t arrive on the planet until about half an hour into the movie, and the first xenomorphs don’t appear on screen for another fifteen to twenty minutes after that, nearly an hour into a film named after them. And we don’t consider it boring because the writing and direction is so strong that catching up with Ripley and getting to know the new characters never feels like a slog. A well-done setup pays off because Aliens is so absolutely heart-pounding because we care what happens to the characters before they ever set foot into danger. Contrast with Lost World, where compies appear without any real suspense minutes into the film and the next sighting of dinosaurs, the stegosaurs, appear about 22 minutes in.
Can't wait to learn how you would fix Fallen Kingdom and Dominion - so far the worst Jurassic Movies in my opinion. Well, I guess step one is to get rid of Maizy, step two get rid of the locusts, step three: do not turn Owen's hand trick into Jedi Super Power?
There doesn't appear to be a video about how to fix Jurassic Park (1993) itself. I can think of *MANY* ways to fix the original film, no matter what people think of me or my opinions. Since there's no video of how to fix the first film, I'll write it here in a comment. Note: I would have made a video on how to fix JP, but all I have is a webcam (and it doesn't always work well). I don't know how to narrate while showing video clips and how things could be made better (at least, in my opinion). So, I'll just use text here instead. *TRIGGER WARNING!!* *THIS WILL TRIGGER MANY PEOPLE!!* 1. The dinosaurs should be more like animals (with notable exceptions - read below) instead of "movie monsters". Instead of attacking, chasing, and killing every living thing that moves, they should be indifferent to other animals and people. 2. There should be several species of Dromaeosaurs on the island instead of only "Velociraptors" (which weren't even real Velociraptors in the first place). Of course, I would still keep them feather-less. #TeamScalyDinosaurs 3. All of the "carnivores" should be *OMNIVORES* and, when they do eat meat, should refuse any undercooked or raw meat. Thus, the scene where the Raptors eat the black, sickly-looking steer would be heavily altered. In fact, all of the death scenes would be entirely absent. The herbivores can remain herbivores, of course. This means that the omnivores would eat almost anything except undercooked meat, seafood, and other gross delicacies that some people eat in the world. In my version, I would have them eat salad (with dressing), PB&J, hamburgers, hot dogs, chicken, turkey (all meats cooked well done), corn, pasta (with sauce and meatballs), mac and cheese (sometimes, with chopped hamburger meat), fruit, sweets, and salty snacks (popcorn, potato chips, crackers, et cetera). 4. The dinosaurs, especially the Dromaeosaurs, should be quite lethargic and only move when they have to. 5. Since the Dromaeosaurs are my favorite dinosaurs - #TeamDromaeosaurs - they should be allowed to roam about wherever they like and *NOT* be kept behind electric fences. Besides, if they're lethargic, they wouldn't harm anyone unless they get provoked, abused, or harassed. 6. The Dromaeosaurs should have names and be both male and female. The original trio of Raptors were named Randy, Kim, and Sandy (the "Big One"). I made up the name Sandy since she was never officially named. In my version, all *NINE* Raptors would be alive and well, though quite lethargic along with the other dinosaurs. The names I made up for the other six Raptors are Stacy, Lisa, Maren, Ariana, Alexis, and Victoria. Note the names "Ariana" and "Alexis". Ariana Richards is the actress who played Alexis "Lex" Murphy in Jurassic Park. As such, the two Raptors are named after the actress and her character. 7. Another thing is that the dinosaurs should all be friendly with people as long as nobody tries to provoke, abuse, harass, or threaten them. The Dromaeosaurs should be able to communicate with people and other animals via thought transference and have full conversations with them. Thus, they could tell people how friendly they really are. These things would change Jurassic Park so much that no one would recognize the film anymore. But, that's my way to make it better, even if no one else agrees. I have a very strong imagination, and I have no intention of giving it up, no matter what people say. It's a shame that I didn't think of these things before they even made Jurassic Park. I wonder how audiences would have reacted to my version if it had been made back in 1993?
There’s nothing to keep that imagination in check, I would say. It’s hard to say how audiences would react to any of it because no one sets out to make a bad film, per se, but sometimes Hollywood is so full of hubris it allows itself to get lazy because it thinks it knows what it’s doing. Or sometimes the filmmakers think they know what audiences are going to respond well to when the fact of the matter is that what they made is too specifically targeted. You can make a good movie for fans but alienate the mainstream, and conversely make a good mainstream movie that alienates fans. The point is to try and make something that is appealing to as many people as possible.
In terms of why there’s no How to Fix Jurassic Park, it’s because I personally don’t see enough problems within the film to make an entire video out of it. Even my first gag of How to Fix Lost World is how I have no notes and Jurassic Park is perfect. I’m definitely wearing rose-tinted glasses about it but the critical and commercial reaction to the film-overwhelmingly positive-is justification enough to skip analyzing it in such a way. I do have future plans of doing a video specifically about Jurassic Park, where I and another fan react to the movie in real time, but that’s likely a long way off. My focus is on How to Fix the sequels and my Deep Digs.
Most of your comments have not liked the direction I chose, which is completely fine. I’m not for everyone and perhaps you’d be happier finding a different channel that doesn’t grind your gears so much. But I do want to address this one because I came to the very same conclusion while I was writing the actual script that I mention in the video. Despite the truncated nature of his appearance, Roland is the most developed character in the movie and one of the narrative’s highlights. So I actually restore that aspect of his character and ignored my original intentions of him wanting to kill the buck by the third act, giving that desire instead to Thorne.
@@BryanIra305 and also I don't think you should swap Thorne with Roland, it just takes away from Roland and doesn't add the Thorne, and yes I've read the novels
That boils down to a difference in taste, I think. While I think some aspects of the movie are superior, like making Kelly the daughter of Ian Malcolm and introducing Roland Tembo, I prefer the storyline and atmosphere of the novel. I can’t really help that.
@@BryanIra305 I would use the novel stuff for jp 3 rather than tlw, mainly because I like the fact that the script is more unique, it feels like it's own story rather than a retelling
I disliked the video solely because you killed John Hammond offscreen. An iconic character just dead before the movie even begins. Other than that, the story seems okay, just wished you went a bit more in-depth on how each scene plays out but that's a personal gripe~
I struggled with that part mightily before I ever even considered doing a video about this topic. Then I realized that every question I wanted Malcolm’s team to answer could be answered by Hammond himself as head of InGen and the entire Jurassic operation. I couldn’t figure out how to balance Hammond’s character growth in the first film with the story I wanted to tell. Either Hammond tells them everything, which would be true to the character, or he withholds important information just so the characters have a good reason to go to the island, undoing the person he became in the first film. In the end, once I decided to follow Michael Crichton’s example and remove Hammond from the proceedings, everything made more sense.
I considered it but I feel that Steven Spielberg made a wise choice in allowing him a small arc and letting him live. I wanted to honor what I think was one of his best character ideas in the finished film.
Considering the filmmakers essentially already did this by giving certain aspects of Levine’s character to Sarah Harding (her profession, her obsession with the island, etc.) I didn’t think it was particularly sacrilegious to add one more female character to the fake movie I created in my head. The character of Ripley in Alien was written more or less for a male actor but they cast Sigourney Weaver and an icon was born. No aspect of Levine’s character was innately male. So yeah, Richard becomes Ricki in this unsanctioned reimagining of a movie that’s over 25 years old, with no hope of becoming canon or being made. So rest easy.
I think he should add in the deleted scenes about the ingen meeting and the bar fight and use the original third act with a few changes to fit the San Diego sequence, that would be the best version
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For those interested in reading the script, a completed first draft is available at the link in the description!
Glad I'm not the only one who's made a Lost World rewrite with Roland Tembo still included.
You’ve earned a new subscriber. Well done on this video; you may not be a master and writing but you are truly a master at being a Jurassic fan, and for that we are grateful.
Thank you so much for your comment and your sub! Truly I just love to share this passion with other folks like me, it’s great to hear it’s coming through in these videos!
I'd personally split the movie into 4 acts. The 1st and 2nd acts would focus on Site B, while the 3rd and 4th acts focus on San Diego.
Even though I personally like the Lost World as it is, this is a very interesting take on what the story could've been. I like it.
I’m glad I was able to entertain you!! 😁
interesting take but personally these are my critiques:
1. Having Hammond be killed off or die between films after all the work that was done to keep the character alive in the first film just to have him arbitrarily killed off between movies while the actor is alive and well feels unessecery
2. Malcolm's reasoning for simply wanting to rescue a loved one from a place where he has trauma honestly fits Malcolm's character far more than doing it for academia. considering that Malcolm was Crichton's favorite character, but realizing that Spielberg (in his mind) would've centered the sequel around Grant and Ellie, made Malcolm's motives more in line with something that Grant would do for a more natural character progression for Grant rather than Malcolm
3. personally I think Sarah's motivation is more Malcolm's original motivation in TLW where she is trying to prove the existence of living dinosaurs and through Hammond's Lost world she attempts ratify her theories
4. Making Levine a woman is interesting however, the first film went just fine with Ellie and lex being the only human female characters (personally I would just cut the character entirely as he's just Hooper from Jaws with an interest in dinosaurs rather than sharks)
5. the hunter team being led by Baselton doesn't really seem to work. as the main human antagonist he feels rather out of place. it be like having Tabaki the Jackal rather than Shere Khan as the main antagonist in the jungle book. I understand wanting to keep Dodgson around for later sequels, but frankly there are other ways to incorporate the character. I'd also like to incorporate a bit of an ongoing banter between Roland and the leader of the hunters and their methods. such as the fiasco at the rex nest.
Those are all valid points, and I appreciate the way you presented them. You’re not wrong on any of your observations. Some of my choices story-wise are preferential, like Levine being gender-swapped to add a little diversity to the cast. Some of the ideas, like choosing to focus on Malcolm’s fatherhood arc over his romantic relationship, are more akin to finishing the promises the movie didn’t keep. And some of them-like making Baselton the primary antagonist to keep Dodgson alive for future sequels-are absolutely fan service bait.
I will say that offing John Hammond was probably my most difficult decision, because it came so late in my outlining. To me, the novel is so much better than the film, and I always wanted to see that novel adapted more faithfully. But as I began writing the script with Hammond, I realized that I didn’t buy the motivations of any of the characters. Hammond's existence was like a cheat code, paving the way for the gatherer characters to stroll right on to Sorna without a struggle, and I just couldn't work the basic plot of the novel into a story where Hammond was still alive, well and part of the story. But you're absolutely right to point out that removing him from the story seems to negate the storytelling choices of the first film, though I would argue that's precisely what happened with JP3 where Hammond is technically alive but has no part in the proceedings.
Good ideas all!
I have never read the sequel to Jurassic Park but I did hear about the beginning of it though.
You absolutely should, it’s a great read IMO!
I like Lost World as an okay movie (other than the plot holes) as a casual movie watcher. As a fan of the novel, I can’t understand why they changed so much after Spielberg asked Crichton for a sequel to adapt.
Neither can I. All the novel really needed was a more climactic ending, but as a whole Lost World had a really intense story that would have been such a better film than what we got. That’s why my story sticks closer to the novel’s plot, because Crichton got it right the first time lol
Honestly if we use the script with the san deigo sequence, and using the original third act and the deleted scenes with ludlow and Roland it would be better but the film is still good
And maybe have more elements from the book? For Example:
1.The Bowman family are renamed Mike, Ellen, and Tina. Here, Tina is working on a school project, and gets attacked by the compys.
2. Doc Thorne is in the story and remains the same as he was in the novel. With Eddie being his assistant.
3. Dieter seeks refuge in an old shed to escape the compys just like Dodgson does in the novel but was killed by a velociraptor who was in the shed.
4. The Raptor attack on the high hide, where Eddie suffers the same death experience from the novel.
5. Ian ordering Carr to kill the Baby T. Rex, but Carr sneaks it back into the trailer where Ian and Sarah reluctantly fix the baby's leg.
6. Making Sarah a badass woman like she is in the novel.
7. Ludlow? IDK. Maybe give him Book Hammond's personality or something?
8. Having Levine in the story where Ian and Sarah go out to rescue him on Isla Sorna, which he unappreciated.
@@narawilliams2429 adding levine just so he brutally dies later (I hated him later in the novel
I love ALL the Jurassic movies. Every. Single. One.
You and me both
Honestly i still would like to keep Hammond. I think he could still fit into this if you're going into the idea of Wu keeping something secret from him. This could be a revelation that Malcom could relay back to Hammond and Hammond could work on the mainland to fix theissue.
That's just what i want though.
Honestly me too! I really wish I’d been clever enough to combine the story I wanted to tell with Hammond being present but I couldn’t. In fact, there is a whole first act of the script which I wrote with Hammond in the story. Malcolm visits him and confronts him with evidence that the animals were still alive and making it to the mainland, and Hammond has to deflect and lie so that I had a good reason to send Malcolm to the island. It just felt so unlike where we left Hammond and how he was in the Lost World movie (which felt so right for his character) that I ended up deciding the only way I could get all the other pieces in place was to remove this one thing I wanted. It broke my heart but I had to do it to make everything else work.
Very interesting take on LW.
This channel is underrated ngl
Thank you!
Have you read Micheal Crichton’s revised Jurassic Park script?
Which one?
Yes the third Jurassic Park should have been a mystery film about unknown deaths in South America
Interesting. Here's my take on TLW JP:
The plot remains the same as it was in the film, except some of the deleted scenes are kept: The InGen boardroom meeting, Roland and Ajay talkin' at the bar, Kelly asking Ian if he would marry Sarah, and the scene which explained how the Buck escaped from his hold on S.S. Venture. Here are some interesting facts:
1. One of the rexes were originally gonna stomp on Roland's tent and push his rifle into the mud, thus taking the bullets out.
2. There was an original ending where the Buck is attacking Sarah's house in San Diego, because she took the baby.
3. There was another original ending where the Raptors are supposed to chase Sarah on a motorcycle. Not only that, but there were also gonna be Pteranodons involved, where they attack the helicopter.
I would add Levine too, except he would be the one to release the dinosaurs from the camp, and keeping the bloody jacket, except he somehow didn't notice the blood. I would also keep the extended raptor attack scene in the worker village (except the gymnastics and the Pteranodons are removed), and the original San Diego sequence (Except Levine will take the baby instead of Sarah).
Also keep the scene where Roland and ludlow hunt the rex but swap ludlow with Ajay leading to his death and Roland was too slow to save him
Also this would alow the San deigo sequence to stay
@@Casual_guy1234 I was also thinking of adding a prologue that is based on the nest scene from the book.
@@narawilliams2429 and ludlow breaking juniors leg
@@Casual_guy1234 How would you include Tembo in the San Diego sequence?
Ya know what a Metriacanthosaur is?
Oh yes. I haven’t had need to use them for the stories I’m telling but I think that’ll change when we get in the Jurassic World era.
Are you going to update the script? It's so good so far!
Oh my gosh, thank you so much!! Yes, I’m returning myself to that now that How To Fix JP3 is out. I wanna have it done before I do JW, so I’m cracking my knuckles and setting some goals for myself!
@@BryanIra305 Okay that's good! Just one complaint I have is that I don't like how you made Howard King into Peter Ludlow because in the book Howard seemed to be more sympathetic than Lew and Baselton, granted Baselton didn't have much to say but King was more fleshed out and had a backstory to him. I probably shouldn't care this much because he's a minor character in the books- But that's just one thing I don't really like, also the Rex nest was a thrilling scene! I like how Baselton didn't die and I ENJOY that scene with him and Tembo, it really added to his character (your version)
I look forward to see what's next!
Thank you so much! The process is really fun because as I think of new little things to include to flesh things out, I have to go back and add or change things that happen earlier in the story. So definitely I would recommend that when I finally finish, my readers go back and start from the beginning, because I’m bound to adjust, edit and update the whole thing as I work.
That being said, I really don’t want to spoil aspects of the trio of baddies I’ve established because there are still a surprise or two left there. I also have really important reason that I removed Dodgson from the adventure, which I will eventually make clear in the future. I really hope you end up enjoying the paths I’ve set for these characters though! And thank you thank you thank you for reading! It really means so much to me!
Where is the thumbnail image from? I swear I've seen it before but can't place it.
This was taken from the box art of a Lost World puzzle that must have been illustrated before the artist knew the plot of the film and based it on what they’d read in the novel.
@@BryanIra305 Thank you!
Oh i’ve already thought about it: The story of plane crash survivors on Isla Nublar as their pursued by a baryonyx with the film ending with the bombing of Isla Nublar and the 3rd Jurassic Park seeing the return of Biosyn and a retcon to the first movie where Nedry successfully got to the dock
I think the great thing about the world of Jurassic Park is the amount of stories that could be told in that universe, and what we got from the sequels aren’t necessarily the best versions of those stories. I’ve read some great fan fiction set in the JP continuity that could have made a wonderful film.
All valid points. As a kid I felt it was disjointed because of the absence of Dr. Grant and Ellie Sattler. I was glad to see Malcom, Hammond, and the kids back. In terms of the characters, we see how the events of the first film have affected Ian and how hardened he is. Natural. Hammond still being his classic self, wants to make Jurassic Park work. Naturally. Roland I was actually hoping would be killed by a dino. A different dino. Like a utahraptor or even a carnotaurus. Nick disappears for some reason. We never heard from him again. These are my problems with this film.
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After watching this rewrite of The Lost World… It was okay. Much closer to the Novel counterpart, had this plot been in the third movie, I would have give it a 3/5. But, hey, good rewrite.
I appreciate it!
0/5 for gender swapping levine
So much better scenes could have been included with the time saved by cutting the whole dino rampage on the mainland part. Plus you get a perfectly natural ending of the helicopter rescue.
I also refuse to belie that everything at the hunter's camp was so badly destroyed that they were only left with their backpacks.
This guy is cool. I think I'll subscribe
Thank you!! 😅
I've found myself thinking back on this video over the last few days. I purchased Jurassic World: Evolution 2, so I've got dinosaurs on the brain currently.
Anyway, I wanted to ask you if you've got plans for further videos like this?
I'd be interested to hear what you would change about the third film and the new trilogy. I've had some of my own ideas, of course but the stuff you've come up with for the Lost World is a lot better than anything I'd thought of to fix that movie.
I actually filmed my How to Fix Jurassic Park III video two weeks ago but unfortunately the laptop I’ve been using to make my videos is currently not working. So until I can get it fixed, I can’t begin my editing process. I actually have a total of three videos “in the can” so to speak that require my computer to edit. With that said, I have turned my attention to finishing the Redux script discussed in this video. As of now I’m approximately 80 or 90 pages into that.
@@BryanIra305 Ah, Neat. Well, I'm looking forward to that for sure. Hope your laptop can be fixed soon.
@@righteousham i really appreciate it and thank you for your kind words!
My idea for how Jurassic Park 3 should have opened would be with a Dracopelta massacring a beach party
I think one thing Jurassic Park 3 onward lacks are instances where herbivorous animals could be dangerous, which is why it was so jarring when, in Camp Cretaceous, Ouranosaurs had a really intense scene as the antagonists.
@@BryanIra305 Absolutely.
Interesting concept
Thank you!
@BryanIra305 Do you know what Segisaurus Halli is?
Quick fix for Jurassic Park: Make Genaro the good lawyer and help out with Muldoon, make him live. Then include Ed Regis and make him his role
Ed Regis would have been a good inclusion for sure. Would it have made the movie better? Not in my eyes, because JP1 is perfect 😂 the ONLY thing that can make JP MORE perfect is if we GOT SOME FREAKING DELETED SCENES UNI!
Well, this was a surprising find. I really liked your adjusted Lost World and broadly agree that while that movie is flawed it's still far superior to all efforts that came after it.
I was personally, bitterly disappointed with Jurassic World and that's saying something since I went into that movie with low expectations.
I wonder if the stealing an egg from the Alpha female Velociraptor nest in JP III was a call back sequence to the LWJP book chapter with someone stealing a T-Rex egg? This is sort of like how the first sequence of LWJP Movie happened toward the prologue of the Jurassic Park Novel.
It is probably the one thing in JP3 that was inspired by the novels!
I have a question why can’t DX infect birds?
I’m not sure I have a good answer for that, since it’s not a question I have pondered at all.
I ask because birds are the closest living animals to dinosaurs so for your Lost World rewrite I propose you change your script to Birds getting DX instead of humans
I don’t think it’s a bad idea and I think it’s absolutely a thread that can be explored, but as it is the basis for a both Ian and Sarah’s primary motivations in my story, I intend to explore it as affecting humans.
@@BryanIra305 I don't think that makes sense
That’s fine. I did use the source material as a jumping off point, as DX was implied to have given Costa Ricans intense headaches and was of concern to the government.
You just outlined a movie that is worthy of being a sequel to Jurassic Park. I think this is the Lost World we all wanted. You took a movie that is a 3/5 to a 5/5. You actually care about characters and arcs. I wish Spielberg had.
Wow! Thank you! Comments like this make my day!
Interesting project
Thank you!
I really enjoy The Lost World
Would you have liked to see Metriacanthosaurus in Jurassic Park 3?
You sound like a better writer then most of Hollywood 🙄
That is high praise indeed! Thank you!
I susepect if Spilberge had gone with your idea and done a heavy character focused story it would of been massivly paned by fans a critics in 1997 however over time people would come around to it and evetually call it the best in the franchise.
I know it will never happen but I so wish we could get a remake of the Lost World which ignores all the sequles par JP1 and follows the book closely.
2:51 I have to disagree here my friend. I believe if Lost World didn't end with dinosaurs being ousted to the public, the illegal business Dino-Soar wouldn't exist, thus JP3's story would've been severely different.
I chose not to consider how any storyline changes would disrupt the timeline of the franchise so I could focus on simply trying to improve the story. It is a very good point but you’ll see in subsequent videos in this series that I’ll be holding canon what came before each movie but in some cases vastly change the trajectory of that movie’s story, which would impact the sequels we got. For example, when I get to Fallen Kingdom, I’m going to hold Jurassic Park to Jurassic World as canon, but not Dominion. :)
Will your Jurassic Park 3 rewrite be a sequel to your lost world rewrite?
I actually will be addressing that issue head on in the JP3 video but the short answer is no, this will be a critique/fix of the finished film.
Klayton Fioriti definitely prefers the film over the book. I personally really like this film but it does have story and character flaws that should have been fixed.
I love Klayton but I’m afraid I disagree with him on that score. I am fully a novel-Stan where Lost World is concerned (though I definitely prefer JP the movie to the novel). Crichton infamously does not focus on any real character development, which means the movie and novel certainly have that in common, and neither wins the day there. So if it comes down to storyline, atmosphere and themes, I think the novel clinches it.
@@BryanIra305nope nope nopeity nope, I'm on Klaytons side with this, the novel lost my attention after the high hide attack but that didn't happen with the first novel, nor the first film and the lost world film, so I think the film is better
The thing that confuses me about the ending of the original book and the beginning of the sequel is; How is it that Ian Malcolm lives in the second book when in the ending of the first book he dies?
Michael Crichton doesn’t really get into it. He just acknowledges that Malcolm was declared dead but that some talented physicians were able to revive him.
7:38 Roland f*cking Tembo thats who
I would have replaced Carnotaurus with Metriacanthosaurus
Or Dilophosaurus that are the same size as their real life counterpart.
@@narawilliams2429 Would you have Dilophosaurus’ reproduce parthenogenetically and shed their skin or regenerate missing limbs then?
@@Levinewak I think I would have Dilophosaurus reproduce parthenogenetically and shed their skin.
@@LevinewakY'know, Albertosaurus and/or Gorgosaurus would also be a good choice, I think.
IMO the Carnotaurus wouldn’t have really been necessary for The Lost World had they done something way better instead. In the first Crichton novel there are hints about the raptors being capable of changing their skin color. Imagine how chilling the Velociraptors had been if some of them had the camouflaging ability instead of the Carnotaurs and could that way stalk the human characters in a whole new way aside their high intelligence? Spielberg really missed his chance to further elevate these dinosaurs as an antagonistic force from the first Jurassic Park. As of now all we have is the Indominus using it ONCE. Kinda underwhelming.
The raptors were so underused in Lost World, it’s depressing when you sit down and think about it. From the very beginning of JP they are set up to be the ultimate villains of the film. Then they’re basically after thoughts in TLW. Really sad.
Will you have the Raptors vs Triceratops’ scene from the lost world book in your version of the lost world or will it be in your version of jurassic park 3?
The first part of the jurassic park book sets procompsognathus up as the center focus
Would you want Brad Douriff to play Howard King?
1997 Brad Douriff would be an inspired choice for King. I’ve really enjoyed writing his character in the script because he’s obnoxious, callous and cruel.
I’m thinking King’s death would be the exact same as the book as well as the sequence prior where he encounters Pachycephalosaurs
I think the beginning being a slow burn is a problem for tbis movie being boring. I think if they focused more on thrills it would of been fine like Alien 2. I think Sarah getting lost in the beginning to a Spinosauras and is attacked then immediately having Malcom go to the island would of atleast made it a thrilling movie
For as intense as Aliens is, I think it’s important to remember that the heroes don’t arrive on the planet until about half an hour into the movie, and the first xenomorphs don’t appear on screen for another fifteen to twenty minutes after that, nearly an hour into a film named after them. And we don’t consider it boring because the writing and direction is so strong that catching up with Ripley and getting to know the new characters never feels like a slog. A well-done setup pays off because Aliens is so absolutely heart-pounding because we care what happens to the characters before they ever set foot into danger. Contrast with Lost World, where compies appear without any real suspense minutes into the film and the next sighting of dinosaurs, the stegosaurs, appear about 22 minutes in.
I want that shirt!
I think I got it from Hot Topic :)
Can't wait to learn how you would fix Fallen Kingdom and Dominion - so far the worst Jurassic Movies in my opinion. Well, I guess step one is to get rid of Maizy, step two get rid of the locusts, step three: do not turn Owen's hand trick into Jedi Super Power?
Oh boy, you are not wrong. There’s a lot of fixing I’m gonna be doing for the whole JW series 😂😂
The only way to fix the Jurassic World movies is to not make them.
I think the lost world is the best sequel ever
It is good but shrek 2 and terminator 2 exists
There doesn't appear to be a video about how to fix Jurassic Park (1993) itself. I can think of *MANY* ways to fix the original film, no matter what people think of me or my opinions. Since there's no video of how to fix the first film, I'll write it here in a comment.
Note: I would have made a video on how to fix JP, but all I have is a webcam (and it doesn't always work well). I don't know how to narrate while showing video clips and how things could be made better (at least, in my opinion). So, I'll just use text here instead.
*TRIGGER WARNING!!*
*THIS WILL TRIGGER MANY PEOPLE!!*
1. The dinosaurs should be more like animals (with notable exceptions - read below) instead of "movie monsters". Instead of attacking, chasing, and killing every living thing that moves, they should be indifferent to other animals and people.
2. There should be several species of Dromaeosaurs on the island instead of only "Velociraptors" (which weren't even real Velociraptors in the first place). Of course, I would still keep them feather-less. #TeamScalyDinosaurs
3. All of the "carnivores" should be *OMNIVORES* and, when they do eat meat, should refuse any undercooked or raw meat. Thus, the scene where the Raptors eat the black, sickly-looking steer would be heavily altered. In fact, all of the death scenes would be entirely absent. The herbivores can remain herbivores, of course.
This means that the omnivores would eat almost anything except undercooked meat, seafood, and other gross delicacies that some people eat in the world. In my version, I would have them eat salad (with dressing), PB&J, hamburgers, hot dogs, chicken, turkey (all meats cooked well done), corn, pasta (with sauce and meatballs), mac and cheese (sometimes, with chopped hamburger meat), fruit, sweets, and salty snacks (popcorn, potato chips, crackers, et cetera).
4. The dinosaurs, especially the Dromaeosaurs, should be quite lethargic and only move when they have to.
5. Since the Dromaeosaurs are my favorite dinosaurs - #TeamDromaeosaurs - they should be allowed to roam about wherever they like and *NOT* be kept behind electric fences. Besides, if they're lethargic, they wouldn't harm anyone unless they get provoked, abused, or harassed.
6. The Dromaeosaurs should have names and be both male and female. The original trio of Raptors were named Randy, Kim, and Sandy (the "Big One"). I made up the name Sandy since she was never officially named. In my version, all *NINE* Raptors would be alive and well, though quite lethargic along with the other dinosaurs. The names I made up for the other six Raptors are Stacy, Lisa, Maren, Ariana, Alexis, and Victoria.
Note the names "Ariana" and "Alexis". Ariana Richards is the actress who played Alexis "Lex" Murphy in Jurassic Park. As such, the two Raptors are named after the actress and her character.
7. Another thing is that the dinosaurs should all be friendly with people as long as nobody tries to provoke, abuse, harass, or threaten them. The Dromaeosaurs should be able to communicate with people and other animals via thought transference and have full conversations with them. Thus, they could tell people how friendly they really are.
These things would change Jurassic Park so much that no one would recognize the film anymore. But, that's my way to make it better, even if no one else agrees. I have a very strong imagination, and I have no intention of giving it up, no matter what people say. It's a shame that I didn't think of these things before they even made Jurassic Park. I wonder how audiences would have reacted to my version if it had been made back in 1993?
There’s nothing to keep that imagination in check, I would say. It’s hard to say how audiences would react to any of it because no one sets out to make a bad film, per se, but sometimes Hollywood is so full of hubris it allows itself to get lazy because it thinks it knows what it’s doing. Or sometimes the filmmakers think they know what audiences are going to respond well to when the fact of the matter is that what they made is too specifically targeted. You can make a good movie for fans but alienate the mainstream, and conversely make a good mainstream movie that alienates fans. The point is to try and make something that is appealing to as many people as possible.
In terms of why there’s no How to Fix Jurassic Park, it’s because I personally don’t see enough problems within the film to make an entire video out of it. Even my first gag of How to Fix Lost World is how I have no notes and Jurassic Park is perfect. I’m definitely wearing rose-tinted glasses about it but the critical and commercial reaction to the film-overwhelmingly positive-is justification enough to skip analyzing it in such a way. I do have future plans of doing a video specifically about Jurassic Park, where I and another fan react to the movie in real time, but that’s likely a long way off. My focus is on How to Fix the sequels and my Deep Digs.
It's perfect the way it is.
I was gonna point out how Roland has an arc but you kinda debunked that lol
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15:04 again NO NO NO NO NO, THATS MISSING THE ENTIRE CHARACTER OF ROLAND
Most of your comments have not liked the direction I chose, which is completely fine. I’m not for everyone and perhaps you’d be happier finding a different channel that doesn’t grind your gears so much. But I do want to address this one because I came to the very same conclusion while I was writing the actual script that I mention in the video. Despite the truncated nature of his appearance, Roland is the most developed character in the movie and one of the narrative’s highlights. So I actually restore that aspect of his character and ignored my original intentions of him wanting to kill the buck by the third act, giving that desire instead to Thorne.
@@BryanIra305 it's not the channel itself, it's just this video in particular, I just don't think tlw needs to be more like the novel
@@BryanIra305 and also I don't think you should swap Thorne with Roland, it just takes away from Roland and doesn't add the Thorne, and yes I've read the novels
That boils down to a difference in taste, I think. While I think some aspects of the movie are superior, like making Kelly the daughter of Ian Malcolm and introducing Roland Tembo, I prefer the storyline and atmosphere of the novel. I can’t really help that.
@@BryanIra305 I would use the novel stuff for jp 3 rather than tlw, mainly because I like the fact that the script is more unique, it feels like it's own story rather than a retelling
Jurassic Park has some filmmaking flaws with more noticeable film mistakes but the film is still the best despite those film mistakes.
Uh, the first Jurassic Park movie was released in June 11, 1993. So the franchise will turn 30 in 4 months.
That’s the date on the poster hanging in my house but considering Universal and Mattel are celebrating the 30th anniversary all year, I will too.
the lost world is my fav icl, i think its very overhated
Buck the T. rex was lost in our modern world.
Wait a minute, what the hell is wrong with the lost world?
I mean, I do go into it in the video…but that’s just, like, my opinion, man.
@@BryanIra305 fair enough I suppose, can we agree that Dominion is worse though?
Absolutely. One of the first things I say is that Lost World is the best sequel to Jurassic Park, and that is a firm hands down from me.
@@BryanIra305 ye sorry I haven’t actually watched the video yet, I do plan to tho!
No worries! I completely understand!
13:28 NO NO NO NO NO, JUST NO
I disliked the video solely because you killed John Hammond offscreen. An iconic character just dead before the movie even begins.
Other than that, the story seems okay, just wished you went a bit more in-depth on how each scene plays out but that's a personal gripe~
I struggled with that part mightily before I ever even considered doing a video about this topic. Then I realized that every question I wanted Malcolm’s team to answer could be answered by Hammond himself as head of InGen and the entire Jurassic operation. I couldn’t figure out how to balance Hammond’s character growth in the first film with the story I wanted to tell. Either Hammond tells them everything, which would be true to the character, or he withholds important information just so the characters have a good reason to go to the island, undoing the person he became in the first film. In the end, once I decided to follow Michael Crichton’s example and remove Hammond from the proceedings, everything made more sense.
I personally prefer Roland Tembo dies
I considered it but I feel that Steven Spielberg made a wise choice in allowing him a small arc and letting him live. I wanted to honor what I think was one of his best character ideas in the finished film.
Sorry about my tounge but im kinda mad, this isnt a fix, its a bastardisation
Roland Tembo grows.
A largely unexplored arc but a point I nevertheless make in the video.
@@BryanIra305just watch the deleted bar fight scene and it grows on it
No gender swapping
Considering the filmmakers essentially already did this by giving certain aspects of Levine’s character to Sarah Harding (her profession, her obsession with the island, etc.) I didn’t think it was particularly sacrilegious to add one more female character to the fake movie I created in my head. The character of Ripley in Alien was written more or less for a male actor but they cast Sigourney Weaver and an icon was born. No aspect of Levine’s character was innately male. So yeah, Richard becomes Ricki in this unsanctioned reimagining of a movie that’s over 25 years old, with no hope of becoming canon or being made. So rest easy.
@@BryanIra305HELL F*CKING NO, NO GENDER SWAPING
Do absolutely nothing
I think he should add in the deleted scenes about the ingen meeting and the bar fight and use the original third act with a few changes to fit the San Diego sequence, that would be the best version