Aliens: "Commander, our SOS was received, but there's an odd sound in response." Alien Commander: "Put it on speaker." Human transmission: (Free bird playing)
I unlike others enjoy these stories for their entertainment and enjoy them. They are getting better all the time. I do hope that these stories will get longer. Some of them should have part 2 and even more. Great story. Keep it up ❤.
Okay look. What you do in narrating the stories are such a great help for people that you don't even know about I have low vision and I read a lot and study a lot and with people like you I can enjoy the world of reading without AI❤❤❤
F-22 Raptor! F-22: Finally Would you intercept me? *smack *Smack* I'll Intercept me! Void: Who in the galaxy would send such a inhumane beast after us?
@@StarboundHFY As a proud veteran from long ago of the United States Air Force, a Security Police Ground Combat Specialist who secured nukes. I heard you speak of the F-22 Raptor with both surprise and pride in the Service I choose.. THANK You for that inclusion and the recognition of it's proud legacy.. All our military Services worked together to secure our Nation, our Alliances.. and made it past the Cold War without burning our world to ash.. That we would fight so hard to share that battle back to peace with another world, helping them survive extinction is the BEST of Science fiction stories.. Not of war just for the adrenaline of battle.. But to rescue other peoples, that brings a hope, a compassion that reminds us of what we are when we function at our best..' Stories are the myths that teach, that share emotions we all hope to gain.. So the Stories that teach us how we should be, even if we aren't there .. yet. are the most valuable.
@@markedwards6455 Thank you so much for your kind words! It’s truly inspiring to hear from someone who’s served. I’m really glad you liked the mention of the F-22! I completely agree-science fiction is at its best when it's about more than just battles; it’s about hope, help, and humanity. We’ll keep aiming to tell stories that reflect these values. Thanks again for your service and support!
The narrator may be human but the story is still AI. I mean holy crap. Just spend some time with that microsoft copilot or whatever AI you choose to go with. Ask it to tell you a story similar to this, and you'll get all the same buzzwords.
@@RobvanGeloven not only that... they destroyed the leading ship but after that they have to battle the flagship??? the flagship is the leading ship and I won't even call all the loop writing out.... AI is just trash
Feels ai created. Repitition of phrases can be a turn off, and anyone who knows war ain't t gunna be surprised by brutality. Good passion in your reading though
Well capital ships are battleships and carriers, pretty much any ship above frigates and corvettes. A flag ship is the main command ship housing the fleets command staff, the admiral.take a us military fleet, the flag ship would be the carrier and the destroyers the capital ships. So the first capital ship they destroyed may have been a void equivalent to a battleship or carrier
Also they way they said that the fleet recoil after the first capital ships destruction make me think that the capital ships for the void help relay the flagship’s command to the rest of the fleet
First there was one human ship then all of a sudden a whole fleet. At first the one human ship was kicking a$$ then all of a sudden they need a turning point. To many unnecessary words as usual. And the repeats. Don't you proof read these first.
Definitely some loss of continuity with this story. The Void are reeling from the loss of their leader but then, the Human ship identifies the controller ship of the Void, even though the pervious Dreadnought had already been selected due to differences identified by the Admiral and then suddenly its a fleet, as you've said. Also quite a bit of duplication of text being used, like the Marine's advanced Tech etc.
Excellent story - except don't introduce players after the fact. The Indomitable was purportedly, a *single* ship... which then became a *Fleet.* Visualise the battle - from start to end - and go from there. Additionally - how could the Lorpa be emaciated (starving)? The 'War' has only lasted days...
Not necessarily easily dodged, actually. Firstly, the target would have to be able to track the projectile(s) to calculate the best dodge vector. Secondly, the target could also simply deem mechanical weaponry so inferior that they'd simply not care about getting hit by it. Thirdly, the inertia inherent in the mass that would be present in capital space ships would take an insane amount of energy to move out of the way fast enough. Fourthly, Hypersonic simply means faster than the speed of sound. No way for us to know the order of magnitude here. Could technically be anywhere from (Speed of sound*1.00000000000000000000000001) to (Speed of Sound*(infinite-0.00000000000000000000000001)).
@@Fnoffenmy issue is with the fact that they called a space weapon hypersonic, sound doesn’t travel in space, so either it is it doesn’t move in space therefore everything is hypersonic in space or nothing is, but rail guns are excellent space weapons, get something heavy going fast enough and it will tear through anything
@@davidhenderson3400 I was pointing out how dumb it is to call it hyper sonic, I agree in space battles with space weapons, especially railguns it makes far more sense to use % the speed of light
@Speedy500 technical that is a real speed not just going Mach 3 it's the speed needed to break that spound barrier so about 2,220 mph is concided hypersonic
It's a funny thing Australian and English forces said the same thing that whenever they were in a tight fix, this was in Afghanistan and in Iraq, that they had always hoped that it was an American who heard their call. And the Marines without fail would respond with the following line: sit tight we're on our way.
Try to avoid using the same words over and over thrumming for example.. Also you don't have to overboard with adjectives on every single little detail it gets a bit wearing to listen too.
I think they were in the planet's atmosphere when the Raptors were flying. But it definitely needs an exo-atmosphere capable variant. Just cause. Lockheed probably (and better) already have a prototype for that lol
Send a note to the original author: intelligence is rarely used in military speech, it's nearly always shortened to intel; but it's more often refered to by the geoup it's a parr of: in the case of navy, you'd call for ops (operations); I think everyone else would call for S2 (staff 2, 2 is just where intel & sec are). For more on staff positions, look up the wiki for: staff military. Call signs are rarely 'cool,' for every awesome callsign there are 20 not-so-cool to just awful . Many are wordplays on the pilots name, some current cultural meme, or something that the individual was involved in (often embarrassing)
And even less believable is Human Marines dropping on a Genocide-In-Progress and offering *ANY QUARTER WHATSOEVER* to the offending party. That "surviving Void" would have been Double-Tapped. It's right there at the top of the Geneva Checklist under the "Wrath of Man" Heading - Subsection "Do Unto Others."
I had one problem. How long was this battle? It doesn't sound like it took more than a few days at most and more like hours. Unless the Lorpa have extremely high metabolisms, there's no way they would be emaciated.
Ding ding ding, ai written, AND ai voiced. Just deep trained on the voice. You can hear the inflections of the inhumane tone every once in awhile. It's his own voice, sure. But it is still ai
Small point the Marines do not have medics -The United States Marines actually use Navy corpsmen as their medical support professionals, and this overlap in designations can be somewhat confusing. Corpsman train as soldiers as well as medical technicians, and serve alongside both Navy and Marine forces. They work in medical settings in the field, in military hospitals and in medical clinics and ships. In many instances, particularly in active combat zones, corpsmen are the first responders for injured soldiers.
Plus, I dont think they'd tend to the wounds of enemy combatants upon seeing them slaughter the feeble, women, or children. They usually put two in their chest at that point. Also, the fact that this team decided to take a wounded enemy combatant, give them to a group of civilians, and tell them to decide its fate doesn't make ANY sense.
Narrating is good. But the AI story is lacking, forget what it already declared. Flagship number. Human ship or fleet, etc.... I am not sure why the narrator not seen this or fixed it on the way. Better than many AI full garbarage out there
Same reason why French troops in Afghanistan said if your ever really in trouble pray you have American with you. We have a reputation for moving Heaven and Earth to help our friends
Outside of providing some context as to why an Earth Fleet would be in that part of space and sticking to kind of solid combat reporting that this should have been. They could still have formed more formal alliances after the battle. Yet, somehow, this was really not a combat warriors tale of combat against a foe threatening the galaxy.
These things are getting better: good work! The match between the script and the narration was near-perfect. The tactics were a little more believable than usual, too. Maybe next time use fewer identical phrases such as "engines thrumming with power"?
The sci fi shorts are the reason that this story has too many holes in it. The overuse of adjectives is being used to cover up the deficiencies. All in all, the story as written is not enough to keep my attention. It is just noise. I knew from the title that the humans would win.
@@davidhenderson3400 No, I just think this is just interesting story-telling. It turns the traditional narrative on its head. For once we aren't the backwards galactic hillbillies. That said, yeah, there's HEAPS of stupidity in this script b/c of the AI thing--this channels needs to do better.
A good story well read but beware an excess of hyperbole and feverish excitement, it defeats itself and numbs the listener. Thank you for your work. UKUK
Precision, "indomitable", determination. The leitmotifs and a typical presence in AI generated text. It's okay if you hear it once or twice, but these are in almost all AI stories.
A capital ship is pretty much any ship larger then an corvette or frigate, so cruisers are called capital ships. So the flagship is usually the main vessel( usually a carrier or battleship) is the flagship, so I think the void flagship is probably is larger then the capital ships.
Yeah. I listen to most HFY stories, but this one feels like the writer is trying to shove a thesaurus down my throat. Assuming this one wasn't AI generated. Perhaps I'm being too harsh though. It could be some high school/college freshmen's first creative writing story that was good enough to be read on TH-cam.
Seriously? 'Bio-organic'? In this context, 'bio' prefix means 'life' and 'organic' means made of living plants and/or animals. So 'bio-organic' would be 'life-life'. If the author meant a combination of technology and a living organism, he could have chosen 'techno-organic', 'metalo-organic', or even the ever trusty 'cyborg'. Trying to listen to this long enough to get the scene with the warship entering combat, but every time I hear 'bio-organic' it just makes me cringe. Seriously. BTW this note is for the AUTHOR. The narration is very good.
@@guardiantko3220 I knew the voice was AI, but assumed it was written by a person. Guess that explains why it screwed up so badly on something so simple. Thanks for letting me know!
I have to assume that if of is meant to carry any meaning (it is likely just technobabble and should be bio-ship), it is using organic to mean "carbon-containing" like "organic chemistry" so you could have say bio-metallic and bio-silicate (there is probably a better adjective) too for your living metal and your silicon-based life. They use chitin and have insectoid pilots, so maybe they are just pesticide-free. That is rather obvious though. It would be like using herbicides on a plant-based ship.
Well.. It's certainly not the worst story I have ever heard. The reading it self was good, however, the story itself needs a little work. The one thing that REALLY broke the immersion for me was calling their fighters "F22 Raptors". The writer could have called it ANYTHING, and it would have been better than that. Beyond that, while I understand this genre is EXTREMELY pro human, There was at no point ANY tension. The humans show up to stick up for some poor alien with a single ship, mop the floor with an alien armada, and scour an entire planet for enemies. Unfortunately, they do this like its a humdrum Tuesday at the office. There is no sense that they have even the slightest chance to have a mildly inconvenient time with this. In short, there was no sense of conflict.
Everyone knows that F-22 was peak Human fighter design. Nothing else compares. We will continue to upgrade it for generations to come, ensuring it is space worthy. Ignoring the fact that it is an expensive hangar queen that the Air Force wants gone, not because it isn't effective, but it's cost to performance ratio is bad.
One thing AI cannot seem to do yet is flesh out characters very well. It doesn't feel so it can't make characters with depth that ilicit feelings in the listener. You just don't care about what happens to anyone in these stories.
A suggested mod for a reposting. The VOID WARRIOR that was captured and medically attended to became agitated and confused at the people of LORPA PRIME saving his Life. Since the warriors of the VOID are telepathically linked, the LORPA implanted a device in the Warrior during his recovery. The device caused the linked minds of ALL VOID WARRIORS to CHANGE and become much less hateful and less violent. The faith of the LORPA in the rehabilitation caused the VOID military to collapse completely. The VOID leaders find themselves without military forces to command, sue for Peace. The VOID leaders fearfully realize that carnage they caused on LORPA PRIME could consume THE VOID'S GNP ten time over for a hundred cycles in war reoarations. When the LORPA PRIME government and civilians decide not to ask for war reparations, the VOID is stunned. Who ? How ? Why ? Their plans for a retaliatory guerilla strike dissolve totally. The rifts are healed, both societies change/grow/share as they become partners in a rebuild. Peace and Prosperity for ALL triumphs !
Yeah that had me puzzled. Alive and made primarily of carbon? Living without added pesticides or fertilizer (don't use pesticides on insectoid species and their ships I guess)? Constructed of a living pipe organ? Ok that was reaching. The only real way bio-organic makes sense is if bio-metallic and bio-silicate (there has to be a better adjective for that) and the like are also options. Then bio-organic can mean carbon-based life. Like just call it a bio-ship, it's a living ship.
I'm just laughing every time the story claims the Void's "bio-organic" (redundant terminology BTW) is "more dureable" than mineral based armors. The whole reason we use metal is because our penetration power has far exceeded tue capabilities of any organic-based defense. Those bio-organic ships would be incredibly squishy, like breaking open oysters.
The callsigns are way too “cool”, real callsigns are derogatory, nasty or just plain funny…also way too much emphasis on individuals being overemphasized
For the same reason NATO forces that were under attack in Afghanistan always thanked God when and American QRF force was coming to their aid. Steadfast resolve.
"The fighters are fast, but lack discipline" "the capital ships work as a hive mind, in great efficiency".... pick one. Hive mind half organic half tech species, high is stratagy and efficiency, or independent fighters that lack proper skills and just rely on numbers. Ai writing at its best.
I really like the whole HFY thing, but it's all so USA-core 😅 Even when they add other nationalities, it's still so all-American, in a way not even Star Trek managed to be. Humanity is awesome, all of it. Not just the USA lol
Sorry but, narration here or there... was the actual story composed by or with the help of AI? Because at around half time it stops making sense, sentences repeat... like at the first volley they destroyed the flagship, it was depicted as such, biggest. Aliens paused at the destruction of their leader. And suddenly 5 minutes later the Admiral asks for a strike at the Flagship? Same description as before, but shields are different? And the fighters, so... weren't there enough names to depict a squadron? Or is the weapons officer the pilot of the fighter too.... not to mention why an existing Fighter name like the F22 Raptor... I enjoy stories that are actually written by humans better...
So why does my comments keep getting deleted within minutes because i give you a link for inspiration from the templin institue with a positive comment? Of great story telling, stellaris invicta season 1 prologue... I really wanna know what my comment is harming.
@@StarboundHFY That explains it, but super strange when it is youtube's own link. Thanks for letting me know. What i tried to do was share you a link for Stellaris Invicta season 1, prologue from Templin institute (youtube channel name). It is a story / world building series that is just great in my opinion, if you don't know it you might find inspiration / new ideas you could use and just to share something that is in line with what you do.
Has anyone else noticed the overuse of the words: determination, fraught and determination, resolve and determination, grim determination it gets old. There are many other words or series of words that can be used to express the same meaning without being so repetitive. It becomes too predictable. In my opinion. Ease up on the use of the word.
Way WAY to many adjectives. Who wrote this? Charles Dickens. I've read a ridiculous number of books across so many genres in my decades... overuse of adjectives is just trying to pad a story out. Like spices, use them sparingly to enhance a story, not bury the flavor. You don't need to tell us a soldier is "clad in" every single time. After the 1st time the reader gets it. Insects don't need to be described as having chiten every single time they are mentioned. Or mandibles. We were equipped at birth with parallel liquid cooled organic self configurable super computers. We are capable of remembering and inferring. Good base for a story. Start over, though, and cut through the fluff to the actual story. Flesh that out without filler words.
So many of these stories are just derivative. They start out about how not to piss off humans and then go to a point where the humans show mercy. It's just fugging ridiculous ..
Continuity is questionable. Marines dropped to the ground when the void was herding civilians into enclosures, then the marines get bogged down with two enemy soldiers and so what happened to the civilians being held? Stories you have done in the past were better. You are slipping. Proofread before you post.
What strategy would you use against the Void's relentless swarms?
Radiation of H bombs!
A bunch of Hydrogen bombs. And if we're technologically advanced enough, a Mechagodzilla equipped with space travel.
virus bombs.
Gau8 avenger cannon
Calling in a Doom Slayer!
Aliens: "Commander, our SOS was received, but there's an odd sound in response."
Alien Commander: "Put it on speaker."
Human transmission: (Free bird playing)
Or over pa seemingly on all channels open and closed: get bent get bent get bent get bent get bent
Rise of the Valkyrie blasting over every com Channel 😂
"Highway To The Danger Zone" gets my vote
THUNDERSTRUCK!!!!
Nah, it'd be Fortunate Son
I unlike others enjoy these stories for their entertainment and enjoy them. They are getting better all the time. I do hope that these stories will get longer. Some of them should have part 2 and even more. Great story. Keep it up ❤.
Okay look. What you do in narrating the stories are such a great help for people that you don't even know about I have low vision and I read a lot and study a lot and with people like you I can enjoy the world of reading without AI❤❤❤
Glad you like them!
Oh yes, absolutely! This is so much better than that AI crap!
It feels like the pictures and stories are made with AI half the time to me, even if it's a human reading it
F-22 Raptor!
F-22: Finally Would you intercept me? *smack *Smack* I'll Intercept me!
Void: Who in the galaxy would send such a inhumane beast after us?
😂😂😂😂
Buff: Go Get 'em Kid!
Franklin just chilling in a space dumpster
Who f22 off his lease 😂😂
Time to send grandpa buff as well
My man! I promise you're honing your skill each and every read. Your mixed narrations are getting great! Keep it up!
thank you!
@@StarboundHFY As a proud veteran from long ago of the United States Air Force, a Security Police Ground Combat Specialist who secured nukes. I heard you speak of the F-22 Raptor with both surprise and pride in the Service I choose..
THANK You for that inclusion and the recognition of it's proud legacy.. All our military Services worked together to secure our Nation, our Alliances.. and made it past the Cold War without burning our world to ash.. That we would fight so hard to share that battle back to peace with another world, helping them survive extinction is the BEST of Science fiction stories.. Not of war just for the adrenaline of battle..
But to rescue other peoples, that brings a hope, a compassion that reminds us of what we are when we function at our best..'
Stories are the myths that teach, that share emotions we all hope to gain.. So the Stories that teach us how we should be, even if we aren't there .. yet. are the most valuable.
@@markedwards6455 Thank you so much for your kind words! It’s truly inspiring to hear from someone who’s served. I’m really glad you liked the mention of the F-22! I completely agree-science fiction is at its best when it's about more than just battles; it’s about hope, help, and humanity. We’ll keep aiming to tell stories that reflect these values. Thanks again for your service and support!
13:19 Would you intercept me? 'smack' *I'D INTERCEPT ME.*
lol
Ahh, the Raptor got upgraded so he can fly in space. He finally got to be an Ace. Grandpa Buff would be so proud.
Is Franklin the origin story of Rocket we didn't deserve?
Oh boy....never thought I'd find fellow HLC followers here😂
@@davidminzes9886 *COME DOWN HERE, YOU GREEN BASTARDS AND LET'S SEE WHO'S PROBING WHO.*
The narrator may be human but the story is still AI. I mean holy crap. Just spend some time with that microsoft copilot or whatever AI you choose to go with. Ask it to tell you a story similar to this, and you'll get all the same buzzwords.
The AI did a good job with this story, who really cares where it comes from?
@@unitedstatianme, this story was drawn out and pretty shit. F22 in space, really?
@@RobvanGeloven not only that... they destroyed the leading ship but after that they have to battle the flagship??? the flagship is the leading ship and I won't even call all the loop writing out.... AI is just trash
I was going to add that the AI really likes the word "grim."
Good narrative. But sad quality of story. Many plot holes and redundancy of certain phrases are ruining it for me. The AI story maker fails again.
Let's hope we find similar friends when someone comes for us.
Theyre already here...have you not yet noticed....Welcome to
PRISON PLANET
Theyre already here...
I do not believe the F-22 Raptor is designed for space combat.
I was looking for this comment
Its the new upgrade in 2040😅
And we didn't design the f-15e to go to the Edge of the atmosphere and destroy satellites but it does and it did in the 80's😂😂😂
I think they were in the atmosphere at that point
Apparently similar service life to the B52
"cold calculating gaze of a creditor"
Yeah.... ive seen that sort of thing from CitiBank a lot
That is a perfect sci fi example of:
"Private, do you see that hill?"
"Yes Sir!"
"I don't want to."
"Yes Sir!"
In this future i will open up a business ...making armchairs . seems like it`s good business
Feels ai created. Repitition of phrases can be a turn off, and anyone who knows war ain't t gunna be surprised by brutality. Good passion in your reading though
the use of "determination" was what gives it away
Well capital ships are battleships and carriers, pretty much any ship above frigates and corvettes. A flag ship is the main command ship housing the fleets command staff, the admiral.take a us military fleet, the flag ship would be the carrier and the destroyers the capital ships. So the first capital ship they destroyed may have been a void equivalent to a battleship or carrier
Also they way they said that the fleet recoil after the first capital ships destruction make me think that the capital ships for the void help relay the flagship’s command to the rest of the fleet
"Kif! Prepare for battle! Iron my formal shorts!" 😆
First there was one human ship then all of a sudden a whole fleet. At first the one human ship was kicking a$$ then all of a sudden they need a turning point. To many unnecessary words as usual. And the repeats. Don't you proof read these first.
Definitely some loss of continuity with this story. The Void are reeling from the loss of their leader but then, the Human ship identifies the controller ship of the Void, even though the pervious Dreadnought had already been selected due to differences identified by the Admiral and then suddenly its a fleet, as you've said. Also quite a bit of duplication of text being used, like the Marine's advanced Tech etc.
Idk sneak attacks normally going to go well doesn't mean your going to win a war of attrition. Along with the ground battle still being overwhelming
They should have had boots on the ground long before the admiral's decision was actually made.
Ok, when you're portraying the Admiral, you're reminding me of the actor who plays Buzz Lightyear.
Excellent story - except don't introduce players after the fact. The Indomitable was purportedly, a *single* ship... which then became a *Fleet.* Visualise the battle - from start to end - and go from there. Additionally - how could the Lorpa be emaciated (starving)? The 'War' has only lasted days...
While it should have been mentioned, its reasonable that the Indomitable would have a host of support craft that could be described as a small fleet.
@@themandalorian400 The admiral tells them "Human warship incoming." Warship singular.
He's narrating AI produced garbage.
That;s why none of it makes any sense.
@@Rubbermatt The AI creation was ... less that admirable, but the narration was great!
I like the idea of a species evolving specifically to become a space war fleet
Dude...youre warped 😊
"Railgun projectiles, traveling at hypersonic speeds," ... IN A SPACE BATTLE?!?!?!
Easiy dodged, no? How far away are the respective ships?
Not necessarily easily dodged, actually.
Firstly, the target would have to be able to track the projectile(s) to calculate the best dodge vector.
Secondly, the target could also simply deem mechanical weaponry so inferior that they'd simply not care about getting hit by it.
Thirdly, the inertia inherent in the mass that would be present in capital space ships would take an insane amount of energy to move out of the way fast enough.
Fourthly, Hypersonic simply means faster than the speed of sound. No way for us to know the order of magnitude here. Could technically be anywhere from (Speed of sound*1.00000000000000000000000001) to (Speed of Sound*(infinite-0.00000000000000000000000001)).
@@Fnoffenmy issue is with the fact that they called a space weapon hypersonic, sound doesn’t travel in space, so either it is it doesn’t move in space therefore everything is hypersonic in space or nothing is, but rail guns are excellent space weapons, get something heavy going fast enough and it will tear through anything
@@Speedy500
In space their speed would be measured and stated in % of C, the speed of light. Call them hypersonic just dumb.
@@davidhenderson3400 I was pointing out how dumb it is to call it hyper sonic, I agree in space battles with space weapons, especially railguns it makes far more sense to use % the speed of light
@Speedy500 technical that is a real speed not just going Mach 3 it's the speed needed to break that spound barrier so about 2,220 mph is concided hypersonic
This one contained some of the usual space story chliches that have been hitherto grateful not to expect from you. I still give it a like.
Never Give Up, Never Surrender! - Galaxy Quest
It's a funny thing Australian and English forces said the same thing that whenever they were in a tight fix, this was in Afghanistan and in Iraq, that they had always hoped that it was an American who heard their call. And the Marines without fail would respond with the following line: sit tight we're on our way.
👍 love it my go to when I get tired of scrolling through bs 😑 a great break from the internet
I know what you mean...my 94 year old ass gets tired of porn too.
Try to avoid using the same words over and over thrumming for example.. Also you don't have to overboard with adjectives on every single little detail it gets a bit wearing to listen too.
F22 is an atmospheric fighter. It can't be used in space. Unless you actually meant SF22. (Space Fighter 22)
I think they were in the planet's atmosphere when the Raptors were flying.
But it definitely needs an exo-atmosphere capable variant. Just cause. Lockheed probably (and better) already have a prototype for that lol
glad to hear a person narrating instead of an ai
thanks for the story
Doesn't change the fact the story itself was written by ai
Send a note to the original author: intelligence is rarely used in military speech, it's nearly always shortened to intel; but it's more often refered to by the geoup it's a parr of: in the case of navy, you'd call for ops (operations); I think everyone else would call for S2 (staff 2, 2 is just where intel & sec are).
For more on staff positions, look up the wiki for: staff military.
Call signs are rarely 'cool,' for every awesome callsign there are 20 not-so-cool to just awful . Many are wordplays on the pilots name, some current cultural meme, or something that the individual was involved in (often embarrassing)
And even less believable is Human Marines dropping on a Genocide-In-Progress and offering *ANY QUARTER WHATSOEVER* to the offending party. That "surviving Void" would have been Double-Tapped.
It's right there at the top of the Geneva Checklist under the "Wrath of Man" Heading - Subsection "Do Unto Others."
Military intelligence is an oxymoron
Alien in the thumbnail looks really cool
I had one problem. How long was this battle? It doesn't sound like it took more than a few days at most and more like hours. Unless the Lorpa have extremely high metabolisms, there's no way they would be emaciated.
AI made? Submarines? Where the hell from? damn....
Ding ding ding, ai written, AND ai voiced. Just deep trained on the voice. You can hear the inflections of the inhumane tone every once in awhile. It's his own voice, sure. But it is still ai
What, you don't put nuclear subs on your star cruisers?
Didn't you ever play Star Fox, come on man. Gotta have fighters, tanks, subs, and crew 😂
The Kid finally intercepts😂
Taking a huge ship into the atmosphere , not wise.
Nice job on the narration.
Small point the Marines do not have medics -The United States Marines actually use Navy corpsmen as their medical support professionals, and this overlap in designations can be somewhat confusing. Corpsman train as soldiers as well as medical technicians, and serve alongside both Navy and Marine forces. They work in medical settings in the field, in military hospitals and in medical clinics and ships. In many instances, particularly in active combat zones, corpsmen are the first responders for injured soldiers.
Plus, I dont think they'd tend to the wounds of enemy combatants upon seeing them slaughter the feeble, women, or children. They usually put two in their chest at that point.
Also, the fact that this team decided to take a wounded enemy combatant, give them to a group of civilians, and tell them to decide its fate doesn't make ANY sense.
I have heard this narraratier before he the same one that did the Hell Bound story's some years back there some of my favorites this guy is awesome.
Narrating is good. But the AI story is lacking, forget what it already declared. Flagship number. Human ship or fleet, etc.... I am not sure why the narrator not seen this or fixed it on the way.
Better than many AI full garbarage out there
Same reason why French troops in Afghanistan said if your ever really in trouble pray you have American with you. We have a reputation for moving Heaven and Earth to help our friends
Outside of providing some context as to why an Earth Fleet would be in that part of space and sticking to kind of solid combat reporting that this should have been. They could still have formed more formal alliances after the battle. Yet, somehow, this was really not a combat warriors tale of combat against a foe threatening the galaxy.
narration excellent- story great-- thx
Narration: Wonderful
AI story: okay
AI writing: usual slop
This channel has much better work than this.
I stay for the narration. The stories need more editing. The lead ship broke apart three times. But it is getting better.
These things are getting better: good work! The match between the script and the narration was near-perfect. The tactics were a little more believable than usual, too. Maybe next time use fewer identical phrases such as "engines thrumming with power"?
The sci fi shorts are the reason that this story has too many holes in it.
The overuse of adjectives is being used to cover up the deficiencies.
All in all, the story as written is not enough to keep my attention. It is just noise.
I knew from the title that the humans would win.
13:37 well I'll be the kid got him self a true air to air kill no more balloon vegan diet for him lol.
So ... at 12:30 they destroyed the Capital ship . . . and then at 16:00 he asked for the status of the enemy Flagship ...
Ok...back to the matrix now...cant stay awake any longer
In every reality their is a Swarm..40k..
Ah yes. F22 in space
Weren't they in atmosphere at that point?
The humans having SUPERIOR tech?? Well, that certainly turns the usual sci-fi story on its head.
That is what you get with AI generated content.
@@davidhenderson3400 No, I just think this is just interesting story-telling. It turns the traditional narrative on its head. For once we aren't the backwards galactic hillbillies.
That said, yeah, there's HEAPS of stupidity in this script b/c of the AI thing--this channels needs to do better.
... You're new to this whole "HFY" thing, aren't you. Hint: HFY stands for "Humanity Frick Yeah!"
@@ashtongiertz8728 Yes, quite new...thanks for explaining it! Everything makes a lot more sense now lol.
@@Crimethoughtfull my first intro to this was "humans don't give a f**k," I highly recommend it.
Wow this is where the Llorpa And Voit came from?! Now i wanna hear how Ms Rimiki met her human husband
A good story well read but beware an excess of hyperbole and feverish excitement, it defeats itself and numbs the listener. Thank you for your work. UKUK
Precision, "indomitable", determination. The leitmotifs and a typical presence in AI generated text. It's okay if you hear it once or twice, but these are in almost all AI stories.
Subbed.
Apparently Admiral Bailey is played by Patrick Warburton.
How many flag ships do they have ?
Yes.
A capital ship is pretty much any ship larger then an corvette or frigate, so cruisers are called capital ships. So the flagship is usually the main vessel( usually a carrier or battleship) is the flagship, so I think the void flagship is probably is larger then the capital ships.
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Right. That is a flag ship.
They have more than one designated total fleet command ship that orders all other ships about.
sounds very attractive
I'm sorry but the reader had me laughing out loud as I envisioned Fawlty towers reading the script....
One Problem, One Human Warship.
If you think this is a human reading, then you are among the reasons that AI will be the end of us as we know it.
Thank God someone else hears it too lol
Why do I keep thinking of Capt. Zap Branigan?
Too many adjectives. Gets too "flowery" and a bit draggy.
Yeah. I listen to most HFY stories, but this one feels like the writer is trying to shove a thesaurus down my throat. Assuming this one wasn't AI generated.
Perhaps I'm being too harsh though. It could be some high school/college freshmen's first creative writing story that was good enough to be read on TH-cam.
Intelligence officer Singh would not be a member of the same family that "Khan Noonien Singh" belongs too?
It's head cannon for me now. This just became Star trek for me
.......too....flowery...too...embellished....too sickly sweet.....
Shouldn't the F-22 Raptor engines stall, in space. The F-22 is an in atmosphere jet fighter, it shouldn't be able to operate in outer space.
And why can't it be a space fighter too?
Absolutely true except you forget that to Human engineers the laws of physics are at best merely suggestions.
@@TrikeRoadPoet Their Engines require Oxygen for Combustion. That is why it cant operate in Space. Unless they changed the Engine.
The Raptor engine is what Elon musk uses on Star Ship.
Apparently they must have been retrofitted with Ion Engines ...lol😊
Seriously?
'Bio-organic'?
In this context, 'bio' prefix means 'life' and 'organic' means made of living plants and/or animals.
So 'bio-organic' would be 'life-life'.
If the author meant a combination of technology and a living organism, he could have chosen 'techno-organic', 'metalo-organic', or even the ever trusty 'cyborg'.
Trying to listen to this long enough to get the scene with the warship entering combat, but every time I hear 'bio-organic' it just makes me cringe.
Seriously.
BTW this note is for the AUTHOR. The narration is very good.
The AUTHOR doesn't read comments. It's AI written. Hell even the narration is just a trained AI on his voice. You can't tell?
@@guardiantko3220 I knew the voice was AI, but assumed it was written by a person.
Guess that explains why it screwed up so badly on something so simple.
Thanks for letting me know!
I have to assume that if of is meant to carry any meaning (it is likely just technobabble and should be bio-ship), it is using organic to mean "carbon-containing" like "organic chemistry" so you could have say bio-metallic and bio-silicate (there is probably a better adjective) too for your living metal and your silicon-based life.
They use chitin and have insectoid pilots, so maybe they are just pesticide-free. That is rather obvious though. It would be like using herbicides on a plant-based ship.
Well.. It's certainly not the worst story I have ever heard. The reading it self was good, however, the story itself needs a little work. The one thing that REALLY broke the immersion for me was calling their fighters "F22 Raptors". The writer could have called it ANYTHING, and it would have been better than that. Beyond that, while I understand this genre is EXTREMELY pro human, There was at no point ANY tension. The humans show up to stick up for some poor alien with a single ship, mop the floor with an alien armada, and scour an entire planet for enemies. Unfortunately, they do this like its a humdrum Tuesday at the office. There is no sense that they have even the slightest chance to have a mildly inconvenient time with this. In short, there was no sense of conflict.
The F22 just got to many upgrades ^^
Everyone knows that F-22 was peak Human fighter design. Nothing else compares. We will continue to upgrade it for generations to come, ensuring it is space worthy.
Ignoring the fact that it is an expensive hangar queen that the Air Force wants gone, not because it isn't effective, but it's cost to performance ratio is bad.
Don't forget that Human ship suddenly became a fleet half way through the story.
why are the "Magog" the first species that comes to my mind hear of the void
And their world-ships. Gene Roddenberry's Starship Andromeda sure was a great series, wasn't it?
@@jacobshort6528 It kinda feels like a more grown up variation of Trek at times ...
couple hundred year, but the 22 finally got to ace lol
One thing AI cannot seem to do yet is flesh out characters very well. It doesn't feel so it can't make characters with depth that ilicit feelings in the listener. You just don't care about what happens to anyone in these stories.
The f22 is the baddest thing in the sky that we currently know about. But it's not space capable... Haha
A suggested mod for a reposting. The VOID WARRIOR that was captured and medically attended to became agitated and confused at the people of LORPA PRIME saving his Life. Since the warriors of the VOID are telepathically linked, the LORPA implanted a device in the Warrior during his recovery. The device caused the linked minds of ALL VOID WARRIORS to CHANGE and become much less hateful and less violent. The faith of the LORPA in the rehabilitation caused the VOID military to collapse completely. The VOID leaders find themselves without military forces to command, sue for Peace. The VOID leaders fearfully realize that carnage they caused on LORPA PRIME could consume THE VOID'S GNP ten time over for a hundred cycles in war reoarations. When the LORPA PRIME government and civilians decide not to ask for war reparations, the VOID is stunned. Who ? How ? Why ? Their plans for a retaliatory guerilla strike dissolve totally. The rifts are healed, both societies change/grow/share as they become partners in a rebuild. Peace and Prosperity for ALL triumphs !
Less than 2 minutes in and there's an ad. Not gonna even finish this.
That term bio-organic, You keep using that word. I do not think it means what you think it means.
Yeah that had me puzzled. Alive and made primarily of carbon? Living without added pesticides or fertilizer (don't use pesticides on insectoid species and their ships I guess)? Constructed of a living pipe organ? Ok that was reaching.
The only real way bio-organic makes sense is if bio-metallic and bio-silicate (there has to be a better adjective for that) and the like are also options. Then bio-organic can mean carbon-based life.
Like just call it a bio-ship, it's a living ship.
I'm just laughing every time the story claims the Void's "bio-organic" (redundant terminology BTW) is "more dureable" than mineral based armors. The whole reason we use metal is because our penetration power has far exceeded tue capabilities of any organic-based defense. Those bio-organic ships would be incredibly squishy, like breaking open oysters.
The callsigns are way too “cool”, real callsigns are derogatory, nasty or just plain funny…also way too much emphasis on individuals being overemphasized
For the same reason NATO forces that were under attack in Afghanistan always thanked God when and American QRF force was coming to their aid. Steadfast resolve.
Nice.
Habitual Linecrosser
F-22 fighter? could you not use a make up name and not a modern USAF fighter?
I am sorry but I lost interest. I stopped at 18:00. Any one finish it?
"The fighters are fast, but lack discipline" "the capital ships work as a hive mind, in great efficiency".... pick one. Hive mind half organic half tech species, high is stratagy and efficiency, or independent fighters that lack proper skills and just rely on numbers. Ai writing at its best.
SOS----- they know MORSE terms? hahaha!!!!!! C'mon!!
Way too much fat and not enough meat on the bone in this one…
Amusing story. Some the A.I. art was hilariously broken though. (Not hard spot the Star Trek or Warhammer one's.)
It's funny af how much AI takes from Star Trek when coming up with images.
All this and we are still using F-22 Raptors?
If it works, it works though, right? 🤷
Awful lot of grim determination and steely eyes. Reminds me of the pulps of the 1950's.
I really like the whole HFY thing, but it's all so USA-core 😅 Even when they add other nationalities, it's still so all-American, in a way not even Star Trek managed to be.
Humanity is awesome, all of it. Not just the USA lol
Sorry but, narration here or there... was the actual story composed by or with the help of AI? Because at around half time it stops making sense, sentences repeat... like at the first volley they destroyed the flagship, it was depicted as such, biggest. Aliens paused at the destruction of their leader. And suddenly 5 minutes later the Admiral asks for a strike at the Flagship? Same description as before, but shields are different? And the fighters, so... weren't there enough names to depict a squadron? Or is the weapons officer the pilot of the fighter too.... not to mention why an existing Fighter name like the F22 Raptor... I enjoy stories that are actually written by humans better...
So why does my comments keep getting deleted within minutes because i give you a link for inspiration from the templin institue with a positive comment? Of great story telling, stellaris invicta season 1 prologue... I really wanna know what my comment is harming.
sorry, youtube auto-deletes comments with links sometimes :(
@@StarboundHFY That explains it, but super strange when it is youtube's own link.
Thanks for letting me know.
What i tried to do was share you a link for Stellaris Invicta season 1, prologue from Templin institute (youtube channel name).
It is a story / world building series that is just great in my opinion, if you don't know it you might find inspiration / new ideas you could use and just to share something that is in line with what you do.
Has anyone else noticed the overuse of the words: determination, fraught and determination, resolve and determination, grim determination it gets old. There are many other words or series of words that can be used to express the same meaning without being so repetitive. It becomes too predictable. In my opinion. Ease up on the use of the word.
Way WAY to many adjectives. Who wrote this? Charles Dickens. I've read a ridiculous number of books across so many genres in my decades... overuse of adjectives is just trying to pad a story out. Like spices, use them sparingly to enhance a story, not bury the flavor.
You don't need to tell us a soldier is "clad in" every single time. After the 1st time the reader gets it. Insects don't need to be described as having chiten every single time they are mentioned. Or mandibles. We were equipped at birth with parallel liquid cooled organic self configurable super computers. We are capable of remembering and inferring.
Good base for a story. Start over, though, and cut through the fluff to the actual story. Flesh that out without filler words.
So many of these stories are just derivative. They start out about how not to piss off humans and then go to a point where the humans show mercy. It's just fugging ridiculous ..
You drop Humans into a gravity well where an active genocide is occurring, and Mercy *WILL NOT* be on those haulers with them...
Would you intercept me? I'd intercept me
There is repetition in some phrases.
I genuinely kinda hate the "where every star tells a story"; I feel like you guys don't need a slogan.
Continuity is questionable. Marines dropped to the ground when the void was herding civilians into enclosures, then the marines get bogged down with two enemy soldiers and so what happened to the civilians being held?
Stories you have done in the past were better. You are slipping. Proofread before you post.
AI story with the usual WOKE buzz words.