"She's old? She doesn't even look old." Yeah, there are races that age faster than humans, and that's why their passionate. "Ma'am, any one of these cadet can take you into the backrooms, and they will make you squeal." At least he was forth coming on that front. Thank you for the read. It was a joyous narration
Always interesting how many humans in those stories seem to come from US culture, often all of them. It's almost as if (many of) the authors never met anyone from elsewhere, not even watched someone on TH-cam. As for erogenous zones, pretty sure this kind of contact isn't exactly rare as a more bodily flirting technique among humans, so ...
WHO has most of the high tech and development, why do startups from ALL off the world run there? They may eventually fail, but for now it's US all the way. Satellites that work for 40 years, robots and HELICOPTER on MARS, etc, etc. ???? Russia can't even land on the moon, but NASA dutifully sent them the picture of crater that they made. Mult culti works ONLY in fiction. WHITE MEN built this civilization in the last 500 years. Hit the history books and find out for yourself.
Isn't it interesting when traveling abroad, in this day and age, how much of the non-American populations around the world wear blue-jeans and sneakers and tees with American culture advertised on them. KFC, McDonalds and Starbucks seem to not be limited to only within the US borders. American films, TV shows, Games and music are quite prevalent in most places not America too. As if there ever was a standard global culture, it would be more American than Portuguese, Russian, Chinese, Nigerian or Peruvian.
Write what you know. Perhaps it's just that most of these HFY stories are written by authors with US culture? Though, I wonder what it is about *this* story that gives an impression of US culture? Is it how the soldiers who greeted the alien queen greeted her with respect, but did not curtsy, bow or kneel or anything? AFAIK, it's not that common to bow or kneel before royalty of a *foreign* country (unless directed to, such as part of a ceremony). After all, he or she is not *_our_* king or queen. Also, I'd think military regulation would prevent that.
Hey man, question. Do you have your own wiki, personal website, or tv tropes page? I would really like to see that. It would be very helpful and informative about your work.
@@sin-text857 I do think this is a good story. That said, some advice: The way you narrate does not appeal to me due to how it sounds like ad-libbing. For example, it occasionally sounds like you correct yourself or elaborate on a detail that was almost skipped. I would not be surprised if you narrate these from memory. It even makes me wonder if you write on the fly or make it up as you go instead of the recommended method (e.g., draft, revise draft, revise draft again, finish story, narrate from written story). BTW: "It was amazing!" is not needed & used too much.
Most HFY stories/vids I've seen have have vertical scrolling text that allows viewers to read the story as they listen. The fact that your channel does not do this could be seen as evidence for reading from memory or ad libbing. Just saying... Another suggestion: It is possible to inject too much emotion into lines; i.e., overacting. (That "I double-dare you mther fkr!" heard in the background transmission and the "We got rid of that sh!% a long time ago!" said to the queen was too much. That's aside from how TH-cam's algorithm and policies *hate* swear words.)
@@sin-text857One option is to replace the fans with whisper quiet fans. Another is to get better ventilation in your room so that the room itself remains cooler. Meaning your computer can cool off faster. Another option still is to have the computer in another room and run the cable through the wall so that all of the p c sounds are in the separate room while you just have the monitor keyboard and mouse and microphone in the room that you're recording. Personally I just use my closet for recording. The chords just going underneath the door. The clothing in the closet makes a good sound baffle. Then again, I have a very large closet. So it might not be an option for you.😊
Why are they called troq? It's close to a teen titans episode by the same name. Just thought I'd point it out if it is close to that spelling, at least that's how it sounds.
I needed a new species name and remembered the titan's episode when I used to visit a friend. His kid was watching the tv while we were playing cards. Guess the name stuck in my head. I do like to throw in references for people to catch. Congratulations! You are the first one to pick this one up.
good idea and pretty food until half way and gets silly from negotians on. Generals and Diplomats do not talk that way. Honor Guards are professional enough to keep their mouth's shut, and the leader of a planet would not be eatting in the mess hall with people who just finished PT. Yep, the second half is a bit silly and needs to be rewritten by an adult.
I had to cringe at parts, particularly where the queen's associates ended up in a food and drink frenzy due to the caffeine, sugar and/or honey. This makes it sound like these humans have rarely, if ever, interacted with aliens species because, otherwise, they'd be very mindful of the many possible adverse reactions to human food. Even without diplomats, I'm sure it would be part of their officer training and I'm sure their media and entertainment would be filled with stories about it. Caffeine, especially. But too much sugar in the diet of many animals can be lethal.
Are the author of these stories? Or just reading them? There’s a rather unsettling unnatural sort of repetition and extension of everything you read as if someone is working to increase word count to meet a deadline requirement.
I am the one that creates everything on this channel, with a single exception. I try to make the stories hit certain points, which does seem like the story is being extended, but it is important to not leave any loose ends. That is, unless it is part of a series. FYI, your critique is noted as I am always looking for ways to improve. I thank you for the input while not being a jerk.
In spoken story telling I feel it actually adds a bit. I might get irritated at it in text, but spoken I, at least, find it soothing. So I guess it also matters the intended medium. And since I don't see a link for the text I have to judge based on the recitation which it's great for.
@@sin-text857oh I’m so thankful I tried to word as gently as possible. I love your stories overall however some I have had to stop due to the repetition. You have fantastic imagination to come with so many story ideas so frequently. Thank for all your hard work.
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Well i think we know where that story is going, human alien hyrbids probably
Like the last upload
Halfway thru and I'm thinking the punchline will be a human female diplomat.
15:15 "But that's POISON?"
"Nah, that's the best thing in the universe"
"She's old? She doesn't even look old."
Yeah, there are races that age faster than humans, and that's why their passionate.
"Ma'am, any one of these cadet can take you into the backrooms, and they will make you squeal."
At least he was forth coming on that front.
Thank you for the read. It was a joyous narration
Excellent generating an accurate image of the queen.
I didn't make the image. Infact, it was the image that guided the description of the queen.
I may be able to write, but I can't draw to save my ass.
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Art inspiring Art.
Brilliant.
Another well executed presentation. The story was very good as well.
Wow. I’ve never enjoyed a trade negotiation before. 😊
For the Author, for The Bard and for The Almighty Algorithm.
Excellent story.
Your improving in your nerration skills, keep it up.
I like it. You are getting better by the day.
LMAO. Usually it's the humans chasing the aliens not the other way around.
Always interesting how many humans in those stories seem to come from US culture, often all of them. It's almost as if (many of) the authors never met anyone from elsewhere, not even watched someone on TH-cam.
As for erogenous zones, pretty sure this kind of contact isn't exactly rare as a more bodily flirting technique among humans, so ...
one author for all of them, yes, a bit of world experience would be good for their stories, as is said, write what you know.
WHO has most of the high tech and development, why do startups from ALL off the world run there? They may eventually fail, but for now it's US all the way.
Satellites that work for 40 years, robots and HELICOPTER on MARS, etc, etc. ????
Russia can't even land on the moon, but NASA dutifully sent them the picture of crater that they made.
Mult culti works ONLY in fiction. WHITE MEN built this civilization in the last 500 years. Hit the history books and find out for yourself.
Isn't it interesting when traveling abroad, in this day and age, how much of the non-American populations around the world wear blue-jeans and sneakers and tees with American culture advertised on them. KFC, McDonalds and Starbucks seem to not be limited to only within the US borders. American films, TV shows, Games and music are quite prevalent in most places not America too. As if there ever was a standard global culture, it would be more American than Portuguese, Russian, Chinese, Nigerian or Peruvian.
Write what you know. Perhaps it's just that most of these HFY stories are written by authors with US culture? Though, I wonder what it is about *this* story that gives an impression of US culture? Is it how the soldiers who greeted the alien queen greeted her with respect, but did not curtsy, bow or kneel or anything? AFAIK, it's not that common to bow or kneel before royalty of a *foreign* country (unless directed to, such as part of a ceremony). After all, he or she is not *_our_* king or queen. Also, I'd think military regulation would prevent that.
Its good. I enjoy this but one thing. Pls put some stuff in your recordingroom. A bit to much echo.
I've enjoyed all your narration
Hey man, question. Do you have your own wiki, personal website, or tv tropes page? I would really like to see that. It would be very helpful and informative about your work.
Unfortunately, no. I do this as a side gig since I am learning computers as I go. Hell, I'm still setting up a twitter/X page.
First comment, keep up the good work, you're getting smoother with practice 👍👌
I need a sequel so bad
It just broke the 2500 view threshold, so stay tuned.
@@sin-text857 I do think this is a good story. That said, some advice: The way you narrate does not appeal to me due to how it sounds like ad-libbing. For example, it occasionally sounds like you correct yourself or elaborate on a detail that was almost skipped. I would not be surprised if you narrate these from memory. It even makes me wonder if you write on the fly or make it up as you go instead of the recommended method (e.g., draft, revise draft, revise draft again, finish story, narrate from written story). BTW: "It was amazing!" is not needed & used too much.
Most HFY stories/vids I've seen have have vertical scrolling text that allows viewers to read the story as they listen. The fact that your channel does not do this could be seen as evidence for reading from memory or ad libbing. Just saying... Another suggestion: It is possible to inject too much emotion into lines; i.e., overacting. (That "I double-dare you mther fkr!" heard in the background transmission and the "We got rid of that sh!% a long time ago!" said to the queen was too much. That's aside from how TH-cam's algorithm and policies *hate* swear words.)
saying "dihydrate monoxide" is incorrect. it's dihydrogen monoxide (water). several stories have this error.
Thanks for the heads up. I will make sure to adjust.
For the algorithm 👍 ❤️ ✨️
❤
So a reverse the king and i, with a side of Jack Nickelson.
Never did watch the movie. So, I will have to take your word for it.
interesting
To please the algorithm is all 😂
Secondly
Sin-Text, You've got some mic overdive and hum starting around 13:00 and escalating around 14:30 and other points.
That is the computer fan. Like pokeman, I try to catch them all. Unfortunately I sometimes miss.
@@sin-text857One option is to replace the fans with whisper quiet fans.
Another is to get better ventilation in your room so that the room itself remains cooler. Meaning your computer can cool off faster.
Another option still is to have the computer in another room and run the cable through the wall so that all of the p c sounds are in the separate room while you just have the monitor keyboard and mouse and microphone in the room that you're recording.
Personally I just use my closet for recording.
The chords just going underneath the door.
The clothing in the closet makes a good sound baffle.
Then again, I have a very large closet. So it might not be an option for you.😊
Why are they called troq? It's close to a teen titans episode by the same name. Just thought I'd point it out if it is close to that spelling, at least that's how it sounds.
I needed a new species name and remembered the titan's episode when I used to visit a friend. His kid was watching the tv while we were playing cards. Guess the name stuck in my head.
I do like to throw in references for people to catch. Congratulations! You are the first one to pick this one up.
@sin-text857 nice, when I herd it my childhood flashed before my eyes.
good idea and pretty food until half way and gets silly from negotians on. Generals and Diplomats do not talk that way. Honor Guards are professional enough to keep their mouth's shut, and the leader of a planet would not be eatting in the mess hall with people who just finished PT. Yep, the second half is a bit silly and needs to be rewritten by an adult.
I had to cringe at parts, particularly where the queen's associates ended up in a food and drink frenzy due to the caffeine, sugar and/or honey. This makes it sound like these humans have rarely, if ever, interacted with aliens species because, otherwise, they'd be very mindful of the many possible adverse reactions to human food. Even without diplomats, I'm sure it would be part of their officer training and I'm sure their media and entertainment would be filled with stories about it. Caffeine, especially. But too much sugar in the diet of many animals can be lethal.
Are the author of these stories? Or just reading them?
There’s a rather unsettling unnatural sort of repetition and extension of everything you read as if someone is working to increase word count to meet a deadline requirement.
I am the one that creates everything on this channel, with a single exception. I try to make the stories hit certain points, which does seem like the story is being extended, but it is important to not leave any loose ends. That is, unless it is part of a series.
FYI, your critique is noted as I am always looking for ways to improve. I thank you for the input while not being a jerk.
In spoken story telling I feel it actually adds a bit. I might get irritated at it in text, but spoken I, at least, find it soothing.
So I guess it also matters the intended medium. And since I don't see a link for the text I have to judge based on the recitation which it's great for.
@@sin-text857oh I’m so thankful I tried to word as gently as possible. I love your stories overall however some I have had to stop due to the repetition.
You have fantastic imagination to come with so many story ideas so frequently.
Thank for all your hard work.
written by a virgin?
Studdering and weird pauses really anoy and ruin the listening.
It was one of my earlier works. The issue has been addressed, so I do hope you will enjoy the other stories. Any other critiques are welcome.
thank you for the uploads!😊