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maybe i'm of the few who think the film wasn't THAT bad, i mean, i didn't felt bored nor repelled watching it, also, i think Asha's doubts about magnifico's sistem had some basis: Magnifico's sistem didn't inpsired respect to the magic in the people since they were of the idea it was something that could be gained by pure luck instead of something that should be earned. Also, i remember Asha's interview and a complain i've seen is that she wanted to score a bruce almighty, when i saw it she KNEW that there wishes that cannot be granted. I think that if i had to rerwitte the film, the things i would rewrite would be these: -it would be more or less the same, however, the changes would be: 1-Star, who i will call hesperia, cannot comunicate with Asha as in the film, however valentino, now sapinet, would be able of translate, and he would explain to asha that hesperia is in the eath looking for her brothers who are missing. 2-ash'as friends would contribute with her to search for the other stars, and there will be clues that they're on rosas, where exactly we don't know yet. 3-however, Asha's teacher sabino, who here will be a sorcerer but not as famous as magnifico, will point to the fact that the magicians, by general rule, cannot grant wishes. how is that magnifico does it, they don't know. 4-and there is the big reveal: both magnifico and amaya were kidnaping hesperia's siblings and using their power to grant wishes, and the struggle now is to find in which part of the castle they are. 5-during the struggle, Asha manages to take from magnifico the key of the cage where the star people were being held prisoner, but in the process, Amaya stabs her with a blade hidden in her scepter, killing her(remember marcy's death at andrias hands in amphibia). and recapturing the stars 6-when everything seems lost, there is something else happening, when the stars almost scape, they emitted a scream that was heard by something else in the distant space.... 7-ust when magnifico was giving his discurse of victory, Amelia tell everyone that there are 2 moons...but it isn't, the other thing in the sky is an entity known as Belobog, the king of the light, a light-made dragon, who heard the scream of help of the stars, and came to rosas to release them, causing a massive rampage. during the havoc, Belobog captures amaya and Magnifico, using it's magic to turn amaya into the harp from mickey's story of jack and the beanstalk, and magnifico into the mirror of krimilde in snow white. 8-when belobog is about to lightblast rosas into a molten wasteland, hesperia talks to him calming him enough to explain it that Asha and her friends were helping them to spcae, and sadly Asha lost her life for that, Belobog decides to bring her back to life, but now she's not human, but a fairy to foster respect between humans and magic in the future...
Easiest fix for "Wish": Have the reveal near the end that almost all the bubbles are Magnifico's. The King has to give up all his own wishes as a sacrifice to protect the kingdom(after his previous home was destroyed thanks to errant magic), but he has to remember everything he has to give up. Every wish he wants, every desire, every hope for the future. He takes the wishes of others and actually grants them over time because granting every wish is just madcap chaos(think of the lottery win in "Bruce Almighty"), and because of the power, he can never grant his OWN wishes. He wants to do well for his kingdom, but he can only do so through his magnanimous acts(no taxes, etc;) and granting SOME of the wishes, even though he believes his people should have more. So he is embittered by the fact that he gave so much and sacrificed so much and Asha tells him what other people deserve("This Is The Thanks I Get?" could reveal more on that). Have him and Asha grab at a bubble(maybe her grandfathers instead of her moms)during a fight at one point, making the wish burst and corrupt Magnifico, making Asha responsible for the magical twisting he goes through. Reveal later that he can't actually give back the wishes, even if he wants to, to the people because of the magic. He becomes corrupted over time by taking wishes into himself and his wife takes advantage of that, making him look like more of a villain so she can take over and look like the hero. Go more into why Magnifico believes Star is dangerous. It should not be about keeping his power. It could even be his previous home was destroyed because of another Wishing Star who granted every wish willy nilly and because of it, things went bad. People grew apathetic because they didn't need to work or do...anything and because of it, his home was destroyed. I apologize for the long post, but I think it could have been saved if they weren't so set on making the movie suck. They should have made the Queen the villain(100 years, the first Disney villainess was Grimhilde/the Evil Queen from Snow White. Just feels like a missed opportunity.)
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keep the story mostly the same because the human star doesn't feel right but how star is in film feels right maybe his wish can backfire as friendly pranks if selfish/evil or even just to help so one selfish like cure someone if truly worthy or how to cure them as a riddle or shown what they need on a piece of paper. but stars unlike shooting stars need to be pure of heart or true to their heart.
Magnifico destroying the grandfather’s wish makes so more sense to the story than destroying the mom’s. Asha put more emphasis on granting his wish and we never even learn what the mom’s wish was. Disney played it WAY too safe for this movie
If they had any teeth they'd have done that and had it kill the grandfather. Have Magnifico do something actually evil, give Asha an existential crisis over her actions leading to the outcome.
@@Crazyashley42 Yes, I think it would've greatly improved the "mustache-twirling villain" aspect of Magnifico's character if crushing the wishes kills people instead of making them sad, like maybe the wishes are really the life force or soul of a person rather than just "I want a new car", so the people who turn 18 and give him their wishes are literally placing their lives in the palm of his hand. That raises the stakes since Magnifico would be parasitically draining the lives of his own people in order to make himself more powerful, emphasizes what Asha says about people forgetting "the most beautiful part of themselves" and now we have a real reason to root for her to defeat him.
Was "Wish" Supposed to be an origin story for the Fairy Godmother? If so, I would've loved it if Asha started out as an ACTUAL Godmother to a child, who would one day grow to be the Fairy Godmother in "Cinderella" and her journey to becoming the first Fairy Godmother.
Much as that would be neat, Pretty sure they just threw in the cloak for reference purposes as the movie is full of spot the Disney classic references. Still that's a better idea then the actual purpose!
I wanted them to incorporate The Star in the story more, why not have a stargazing kingdom where magic came from the stars and anyone could learn to use this magic but maybe Asha discovered another type of magic? Like the magic from dreams, not in the sleep sense but the deepest wish of your heart sense, cause this way it would tie into the song from Cinderella with lyrics like "A dream is a wish your heart makes~". Like have Asha just be one of the people Magnifico is teaching magic to, have the other seven dwarf references also be magnifico's students, or if that bloats the cast too much have Asha just have two other classmates who are young versions of Merlin and Yen Sid (the wizard from Fantasia), and Magnifico's road to villany is just so lame, he needs a motivation and objective like Jack Horner from Puss in Boots the Last Wish, either that or cut him out and have a villain who's a reference to other magic wielding disney villains take his place, someone who's a reference to Maleficent or Jafar maybe. If the kigdom also made magic acessories like staffs you have your Jafar or Maleficent reference, you could make all sorts of magical objects who served as references, like a magic mirror, maybe the people don't use the magic of the stars directly maybe they need to direct this magic into these objects and Asha becomes the first person to be able to use magic directly.
@vampybyte7812 The same goes for the face of the Magic Mirror popping up while King Magnifico was being pulled into his staff, it's just another Easter Egg.
I would've preferred a "Rumpelstiltskin" adaptation where a mother makes a wish to save her child, only for Rumpelstiltskin to save them but take them away from her as payment.
One of my biggest gripes about this is how Amaya isnt heartwrecked by Magnifico turning to evil. That is the person she loved, she married, she has shared her life with, and the emotional impact of him turning evil before her eyes is practically non-existent. She even mocks him after he gets trapped. That was the true love of her life and losing him was, to quote Pitch Meeting, "barely an inconvenience".
and she also just comes in her quinn attire to aisha... Not only does she look out of place in the scene, but wouldn't she be recognized or at least noticed on the streets? a really strange moment
the original concept had them be an evil couple. but having a woman be seen as in the wrong and/or caring about a man in modern times? couldnt have that kind of messaging, as we all know woman can never do anything wrong and also will never ever need a man for any reason.
I just realized why the animation bugs me so much. Their clothes look painted on. They don't wrinkle. They warp and bend with the body of the character rather than moving like cloth like other 3D movies do. FROZONE WE FOUND YOUR SUPERSUIT!
Me personally I'd go with the with a "just because you can do something it doesn't always mean that you should" lesson. Asha would get what she wants early in the story and the fall out of it would be the fact that she got exactly what she wanted. To the detriment of everyone.
Sounds like a good plot. It is similar to Megamind, where he "killed" Metroman and got control of the city....only to find out that owning the city requires work that he is unable to do
Wish is so disappointing because it doesn’t feel like Disney’s centennial movie at all. They played it way too safe and the results show. It’s also crazy how a main studio Disney movie hasn’t had a romance be a major part of a film since Tangled over ten years ago. (Not counting Anna and Kristoff). This movie could have been a cross between the Sorcerer’s Apprentice with Asha and Peter Pan with the Star not to mention the scrapped ideas of Magnifico and Amaya being an evil couple. Asha isn’t even a princess and that just adds salt to the wound. Disney as a creative studio has to change because this predictable formula for its storytelling has definitely run its course.
Sadly, they listen people who think Disney movies are some Planned Parenthood infomercials, and Disney Romances a kind of patriarchal slavery of young women. We can notice Pixar is allowed to romance with _Elemental_ , but in the subtext of anti racial message.
I kind of like her not being a princess. At first, i wanted her to have been adopted by them at a young age after her family dying, but i think i like what they were going for. It's like mulan and tiana, relatively normal women who go on journeys that end in them becoming royal/politically important. they wanted to show that ordinary people can make a change too, and that's fine by me. However, i agree with everything else 💀 so much wasted potential, but im glad it's making everyone come together to create all these rewrites (just like in the miraculous fandom 🤣). Sometimes if you want something done right, you gotta do it yourself!
Three easy changes to make (story-wise): 1. Make Asha's personality more in line with Ariel, Jasmine, or Pocahontas--fun, intelligent, and curious. And give us more info on her dad if he's fonna have this profound impact on her. 2. Focus on the grey message; the people of Rosas are selfish and codependent, fueling Manifico's trauma and making him micromanage the wishes (which are still optional). And maybe make him ACTUALLY magical, since learning magic makes a huge plot hole in the film. 3. Make Asha's family involved and fleshed out, though maybe reduce the number of friends since that's a huge cast. And side note: was it really THAT hard to adapt "The Fisherman and His Wife" or expand on "The Sorceror's Apprentice"?
I’ve been working on a rewrite myself as a writing exercise, and one idea I had was to take the vagueness of Asha’s desires and goals and make that part of her character. She doesn’t know what to wish for and feels tremendous pressure to get a wish of her own, but her father’s influence means her views on wishes differ from the kingdom’s. I am also including the Starboy as a character, but he’s got a connection with Asha already. See, Asha promised to give him her wish as a child, before he showed up, and he heard that and took an interest. Asha ended up talking to that star every night, unaware he was listening, to have someone to vent her frustrations and concerns about the kingdom to. The star also develops a wish of his own after coming to Earth… guess what it is.
I love this idea! It reminds me of a gender swapped The Little Mermaid, and there could be a reference to Part of That World in a song lyric or something.(Sorry if that’s not what you had in mind lol)
@@august6760 Well, one of the concepts they didn’t put in was that Asha and Star Boy were going to be in a romantic relationship (which would’ve been SO beautiful), so technically yes!
The concept art looked so good like Star had a human form and was Asha’s love interest and both Magnifico and Amaya were evil. This is my personal rewrite Asha would be Magnifico and Amaya’s actual daughter and so she grew up thinking that keeping the wishes was the right thing. I would also make her personality more similar to Elsa and Mulan rather than Rapunzel and Anna. She’s smart and serious but also stubborn. (Little nitpick but I would also change her design to look more like her concept art. She would have her natural hair out and her color palette more orange and red. When I think purple I think Rapunzel and Isabella.) Magnifico I would go the sympathetic route since it honestly works better for him. I would make that due to a traumatic experience he’s now a very paranoid man who truly just wants to keep everyone safe and he picks wishes that he deems best for everyone. Amaya would also be traumatized but instead of focusing on wishes she focuses on appearance. Like she wants her family to look good to the kingdom so that they don’t question them and believe that they’re all safe. The seven friends could be people who work around the castle and Asha then helps them throughout the story. I also like the betrayal but I like to imagine that Simon has a crush on Asha so he wants to be the greatest knight in order to hopefully impress her.
I personally ship Asha and Dahlia.12:15 I love that Asha’s friends are based on the 7 dwarfs. Nice tribute. Dare I say my Favorite Variants of the 7 dwarves. YES!!😆
This is getting good, I hope you could continue it, like how she finds out that her parents are evil, she finds Star, her future love interest and her parents attempting to capture him. Btw, if she is their actual daughter, does that mean that either Amaya or Magnifico (Or both) would be black? I always thought the story would take place in North Africa or South Asia due to Asha's appearance (And the goat being those country's animal), so the story should definitely should have taken place in either.
I honestly enjoyed Asha being unrelated to the royal family since most recent Disney princesses were born into royalty (Tiana being the last one who wasn't), plus I LOVED the "Sorcerer's Apprentice" concept (imagine if Asha had Mickey's blue, silver, and red color palette), though I'd be fine with Star being Magnifico and Amaya's son, being born with world-changing magic like Elsa. And I feel like 7 friends is too much for a main story, tbh. Dahlia, Gabo, and Dario were the only standouts to me, though you could always conflate Dahlia with Hal, Safi with Dario, and Gabo with Simon.
@@missplayer30It's supposed to take place in Andalusian Spain. Also, Asha being the princess would make a lot of sense for why everyone respects her and trusts her so much and would give her a great arc overcoming the expectations to be a perfect princess and grow into the leader Rosas needs. It would also provide a great conflict where in order to do what's right, she had to betray her own parents.
My idea of the story: Asha is able to fulfill all wishes immediately, but has to learn that this leads to chaos and destruction. Magnifico has to help her to solve the mess she created and together they can settle everything back to normal. Asha came to learn that not all wishes can be granted, at least not immediately, ar the same time, Magnifico learned that keeping unfulfilled wishes is not okay and is returning them to their owners. Also, from now on, he and Asha together fulfill the wishes of the people, but more than one every month, maybe five-ish or so.
I would slightly change the lesson to be one of "you have to make sacrifices and work hard for your wish to come true" Every classic Disney movie required the protagonist to do this. I do like your idea that uncontrolled wish granting causes chaos. Sorta like in the Socerer's Apprentice, Mickey gets magic power, but overuses it causing things to get out of hand
That actually sounds more like what I thought the movie was going for but Lord forbid a female lead be wrong and has to change her worldviews rather than changing the world
Yeah Asha sees the kingdom's citizens are lacking some spark and she concludes that with their wishes gone and not granted, people are mentally suffering. She frees all the wishes and gets them granted at the same time but that causes chaos. Maybe many people feel worse off cuz now that their wishes were instantly granted, they feel even more empty. Magnifico has to help her set things right and clean up her mess and emphasizes that's why he did what he did. Asha isn't happy with his way of doing things but isn't happy with her solution either. Somehow she noticed her grandpa wasn't affected by the chaos and is in even more hugh spirits than other people in the kingdom and questions how that happened. It's revealed that his wish was organically granted so when Asha freed all the wishes, he just realized that he inspired the next generation by being wise and caring, or something. Then Asha realizes that simply having someone grant wishes isn't gonna make people fulfilled with their lives. The fulfillment comes from putting in hard work and effort to make your dreams come true. Or maybe just the journey makes people happy, alternatively her grandpa could realize his wish long ago wasn't exactly granted, but he still was a good person and though trying to live a good life, he realized that he didnt need his wish to be granted to feel fulfilled. Asha brings this up to the king, who isn't evil, and with the help of his wife who would be a voice of reason, he agrees to try this new plan. The movie can end here if it's too long or if there's still time, the last part of the movie could be them working together to help a sample of people or one person fulfill their wish and upon success, this will become the new norm. Or people could realize that some of them are happy with their wishes not being granted cuz they found meaning in life without their wishes and granting their wishes now won't really enhance their life anymore. I fell like a message saying "work to make your wish come true" is very needed right now with children (and even adults) having short attention spans cuz they are used to getting stuff instantly, whether that be food from buying fast food so they don't need to take the time to cook or by swiping on horrible social media apps like tiktok. Patience is a virtue and we weren't created to be lazy. Our bodies don't like being sedentary. A movie showing how rewarding it is to work for your goals is really needed rn.
FINALLY there's a video critisizing Wish that doesn't start with "Well, my kid loved it" or "Disney is going downhill" but instead comes from a person who acknowledges Disney/Pixar movies as examples of great, serious storytelling
With Asha’s clothing, I could see it being blue at first instead of purple. A sign of her dedication to the kingdom as their colors look to be blue, white, and shades of grey (as depicted by Magnifico’s clothing). And at the end her clothes are transformed into purple and gold as to represent a new era for the kingdom, the clothes she wears in this film, and her connection to the stars. That way there’s the magical transformation Disney has been known for and have been wanting to see for a long time.
King Magnifico's story could've played more into the story to tell why he won't grant wishes when he can. My idea is that he started out as a good and benevolent traveling sorcerer who loved granting wishes wherever he went until one day he made a seemingly harmless wish to someone who proceeded to use that magic for evil and destroyed the town he and his wife were staying in. Magnifico and his wife survived and founded Rosas, but he was traumatized by the event and disillusioned by wishes in general seeing only the potential danger and selfishness in them. Over the years he grew more fearful of anything happening to his perfect kingdom so when news gets out that someone else is granting wishes willy-nilly, he fears losing everything including his power which is why he finally opens the Dark Fairies' Book of Forbidden Arts that he found while traveling and uses it to destroy the wishes being granted and eventually the kingdom, becoming the same as the person who destroyed his home.
Oooh, and what's great about that is that as a 100th anniversary film, it combines both a classic Disney villain (The Evil Queen from Snow White. The fear about someone taking his spot) and a more recent one (Alma from Encanto. The trauma and control issues).
One change I'd make from your changes is that the king doesn't tell someone he's met for the first time his true intentions, especially since he has no intention of hiring her! She'd have to get hired to find that out, one would logically assume
Personally, I would love to just separate Magnifico into two villains: one redeemable with the whole backstory and pragmatic wish granting, and the other (Queen) pure evil with green magic book and megalomaniac wish to absorb Star. As for why she was with him (the other way around is pretty understandable, true love), maybe it's the just a wish to absord those unused and powerful yet "dangerous" wishes, but pure magic of wishes can not be controlled by heinous green magic, or something like that.
Honestly, if they had just fleshed out the magic system to have it so that possessing vast amounts of wishes granted the king his powers to grant a few would have made his motives make way more sense. Like the King draws power from the ungranted wishes to grant the few he thinks would have benefits the kingdom the most without losing his powers
Ooooo I have an idea! What if magnifico was the wishing star of Asha’s great grandfather? He couldn’t grant the wish or the wish led to unintentional consequences that destroyed the kingdom. Magnifico is banished from the stars for his failure and is desperately trying to make up for his mistake by keeping the wishes.
@@OpticalSorcerer The king’s attempt at rebuilding what he destroyed. Only now he doesn’t believe in wishing and does his best to limit the amount of magic.
@@OpticalSorcerer Correction, he doesn’t believe that wishing solves problems. He believes in the power of wishes and fears the consequences of wishing but he doesn’t believe in the “Disney magic”.
@@OpticalSorcerer He can’t completely get away from wishing magic because it is a part of his history. The power exists and he fears it will blow up in his face and destroy what he has rebuilt from the ashes of his mistake. So he does what he can to limit what people can wish for. Having him be a former wishing star that was exiled explains why he is such a powerful sorcerer, why he wants to control the wishes/how he knows how to get them in the first place, and it gives a lot more weight to his decision to use the wishes as a power source when he goes dark. It would also explain why he freaks out as soon as another wishing star comes down.
Nice ideas, especially bringing about Grandpa's death and how it affected Asha. I will give Wish one thing, just about everyone gives their take on what type of story it should've been, and it's fascinating to see everyone's version of it.
I actually cried with your version of the story, plus the ending is validating, unlike eerything in wish. Thank for sharing your vision! For me, this is the actual story and not Disney's version ;'D
If Magnifico basically kills Asha's Grandfather, he NEEDS to get sucked into that mirror or at least face a suitable punishment for his evil. otherwise, yeah, what happens to him based on how the movie ACTUALLY goes is pretty harsh. There should have been more with the evil book, rather than "I said I'd never use this because I KNOW it's evil" meaning he was trying to be good the WHOLE TIME, and caved that once, leading him to get possessed by evil, that's like if Sorcerer Mickey, after messing with the hat and causing all that chaos, got punished by getting sucked into the hat for all eternity. Magnifico getting sucked into the mirror and becoming the Slave in the Magic Mirror should have been a more clear side effect for the evil power he was using, like the short-sightedness of the Evil Queen's Hag transformation playing into more of her feelings of jealousy and insecurity with Snow White rather than an actual desire for beauty. (if she's 2nd, she might as well be last) She doesn't care about the actual concept of beauty, she just doesn't want anyone to be better than her. Magnifico wanted to be in CONTROL of everyoen's desires and wishes, seen and beloved by all as someone with the power to influence the world around them. Since he was defeated, the cost of using that evil magic (Magic always comes with a PRICE) is he is now a SLAVE with NO CONTROL, and must answer honestly to anyone who summons him the reality and nothing else, either aggrandizing their ego, or reality checking their WISH. Holding up a mirror to their Wish/desire, and deaming it false. He can't do anything about it, just call it as it is, to the observer's dismay. That's an AWESOME explanation for the spirit in the Magic Mirror being a Cursed Egomaniacal Wish Granter who was brought low because he lost sight of what he really wanted and fell into power-grabbing.
Ok, but Magnifico was right. It IS bad to grant everyone's wishes. Some wishes counter each other, while some are straight out negative for everyone else, or everyone except the wisher. They posed it as him looking too much into simple wishes, but with little evidence that would support that claim. If he didn't really analyze the wishes and just granted them, he would be wildly irresponsible.
I want Asha’s quirky personality to actually be a farce for work and when she gets home after work she’s just tired of everything and anxious about her future since she’s the only one who can provide for her family and it’s up to her to keep going
So lemme get this straight... Asha is an unapologetic Mary Sue, whose flaws are protrayed as her biggest strengths, hereby cancelling out the fact that her flaws are her bad traits, thus making her a flawless character solely because she's the protagonist and the good guy in the film, and cartoon logic states that the good guys never do anything wrong and never have any flaws. Disney most definitely used AI to make this story, and you cannot convince me otherwise.
It would be cool to see a redesign of Asha that includes a more dark/blue color pallet with maybe a purple ombre to represent the night sky, THEN when Star ads sparkles to her dress they look like stars in the night sky
It's not perfect (because no story is perfect), but is significantly better than the original story. I actually felt things for & even kinda cared for your version of the characters. Awesome video!
That was so good! The concept of wishing upon a star- and us all being stars so we can grant our own wishes is actually a really good concept! I really like your take on the story!- it had a lot of heart!
your video editing and quality are absolutely amazing. you are so underrated!! when i clicked on this video i thought i’d see sm more subs, but its shocking how underrated u areee!! keep it up tho, ur super cool :))
10:29 What if queen amaya had been the one owning the evil book? "I can't use Your book, or I would be corrupted" "My King, the people will never respect you like they did. You will lose face/power w/e. Try it. Just one spell"
An interesting route to take Magnifico with the Pure Evil interpretation would have been how wishes inspire people to work on themselves. When he takes wishes, it would essentially removes a person's drive. They're loyal to him and have no reason to not be. A dystopian Rosas would have been really interesting because the concept of taking wishes already fits with a dystopia. He keeps the population complacent, thus keeping them under his thumb. They have no drive to do anything other than what he tells them, because they have no wish to do so. To challenge the status quo. That's why Asha's grandfather's harmless wish would not have been granted. Inspiring others would lead to rebellion.
Wow u just made an entire plot by urself. and as far as i understood the movie ur interpretation is much better. yet you are so gentle about ur critic, and actually reminded us that it is most likely not the writers fault, which is i think is true. also ur rewhite really already gave me some emotions (well maybe because im lost in life and do need my own wish too) and i think its great, it means ur rewhite already has the meaning to be good. ur voice is soft, i liked ur simplistic style and ur thoughts, keep it up! ur doing great
@@1risMoonlight basically writers and actors stopped working until their demands were met to protest and prevent the use of procedural generation (ai isn't really an accurate name) to replace their careers
I have been waiting to long to find this kind of video I thought I was going to have to re write it myself after I watched it (when it came out on Disney +)
My idea when i heard This is the thanks i get, was, why not make the king a second main character? Asha's story could be about overcoming her childish view of wishes, while her apprenticeship under the king helps him rediscover his love for his people. A classic Master and Apprentice learn from eachother and become better people core plot. Maybe she is the one who finds the evil book, and accidentally unleashes a pure evil force that is the driving antagonist of the plot... by being a lore accurate Genie granting wishes in the worst way possible?
It felt like Magnifico just kind of tripped and fell backwards into being evil. They introduced the traumatic backstory, they introduced his arrogance, they introduced his feelings of being unappreciated, all ideas with interesting potential, and then none of it really mattered, because he just opened the forbidden book and turned evil.
I plan to rewrite Wish aswell where King Magnifico has an Evil Brother from his backstory and he plans to take revenge from magnifico and idk how to continue to write story blablabla
You can have Asha grant the evil Brother's wish because she doesn't recognize the inherent with granting every wish until she inadvertently puts the evil brother on the throne. You can even have a friend be upset at Asha go for granting their wish because their wish was their goal and something they wanted to work towards. Asha granting the wish made the goal lose its meaning. And the villain is toppled not through a wish but through the people standing up to him because he got his wish to be king yes but he didn't have the backing of the people like Magnifico did.
i want Magnifico to be the main character. i felt so bad for him being framed as 'the plain evil villain' even though he has a traumatic past and good intentions
That was actually the best rewrite I've ever seen. In particular, that part with Magnifico crushing Sabino's wish and saying "Happy Birthday" to Asha afterwards was genuinely heartbreaking but so good at the same time.
Solution? make the queen the twist villain and him the prime suspect. He can even have the ideology of Not every wish should be granted, and she can hold the ideology that not everyone deserves to have their wish granted. Both coming to such a conclusions due to what happened to Magnifico’s backstory (expanded to include her) think something similar to Madara and Hashirama from Naruto.
asha should have her wish originally granted by King Magnifico,and as she slowly finds out abt the true nature of the wishes granted by the king,she tries to rebel back but her wish somehow bites her back and sabotages all of the progress she has made to save the kingdom of rosa (this way the quote "be careful of what you wish for" actually makes sense) and star's relevance could increase as asha could have wished on a shooting star as a last resort to fixing whatever crisis shes facing
See I feel like the re-write missed the message they slapped on the cover: "Be careful what you wish for." From what I have observed Magnifico granted a few wishes, mainly those that were clear and benefitted the kingdom. So in my rewrite Magnifico sticks to that premise. In this tale he is the antagonist, but not a true villain. Asha in this case is a more naive girl, she goes along in a happy-go- lucky sort of way, but eventually starts to wonder why the King doesn't grant more wishes, and why he still keeps the ones he doesn't grant. In this version she makes the wish to grant her fathers wish, but the king doesn't grant it. She had written this down thus unlike the others she knows what the wish was and becomes the kings assistant after. Once inside (after a quick montage to indicate some time has passed) she asks why the king keeps the ungranted wishes, he explains that his magic doesn't allow for the wish to be returned without granting it. (In this case showing that the magic will automatically grant the wish unless he interferes). She then asks why not just grant them then? This is done during a Magnifico song where he pulls a wish down from the roof containment area and shows a wish where a man wished for all the women to love him (with the king explaining that this is mind control, and thus he refused), but during the song Asha sees her old man's wish and reaches out for it, firing off questions to keep the king distracted. In the process she frees all the wishes. Magnifico panics and tries to grab them all but fails, and the wishes escapes into the kingdom. Now the Queen would also be a villain in this story, but one made by her own wish. She had wished for power to protect her people, the king refused because it was too vague (and in a future flashback we can see him desperately trying to reshape her wish so he can grant it but fails) and she becomes a malificent styled mage. The wishes see everything fall to chaos, and the king throws Asha out, turning to the evil book in desperation as he tries to take back the wishes. Asha would then have her own wish granted, with a part of herself splitting off to become star. The story then continues with Asha trying to help people by granting the spirit of their wish in a way the king couldn't, as the king could only grant the one wish unlike Asha, so she regrants them. In the end Asha has seen the danger of granting every wish without thinking, but its a bittersweet ending with Magnifico unable to break from the evil book, and the queen's power being warped by her time fighting to keep the people safe (via imprisonment ala turning folks to indestructible stone) whilst also battling her husband who she deemed the enemy, the last act of Magnifico is to banish them both, warning Asha that he will never return to who he was, and to beware the evil he will become.
Oh my god. Your version is so, SO much better!!! Even if it was just a short outline, it moved me a hundred times more than the movie and it WORKED! Loved how you managed to really bring out the message! Dare I say … stellar work? 😉😘
I kinda like the idea of a wizard that picks and chooses what wishes to grant. I mean, some people have ACTUAL BAD WISHES. He literally could just go "Yes of course I pick and choose what wishes to grant. Here's the top three worst wishes in the city. This guy wants all the power. This guy wants all the money. This woman wants only to be admired. Tell me how that will help the people." It's not like that would be hard. He has a literal platform to stand on that is VERY DEFENDABLE. When he goes too far, that's when the problem starts.
Another great rewriting of the story… worrying for Disney how many youtubers can so easily fix this story. For Asha, I keep reimagining her in the context of Star being the boy from the concept art, and her character foil in the movie. Asha already being the King’s apprentice would have fixed the dopey interview oversight. As they were determined to make references all over, this could have allowed a throwback to Mickey Mouse as the Sorcerers Apprentice in Fantasia - the literal mascot of the company. I could also see her as reserved, perhaps a pure nerd type, studious and hard working. As the apprentice she experiences and practises magic through a scientific, logical lens… magic has no magic for her. Her father is a softer influence from her childhood but in her hard working, “living for others” life she’s lost a lot of that. When Star arrives and is an actual person, he could have the fun-loving but naiive personality to balance out Asha’s. A romance subplot could be there or not- it doesn’t matter because they wouldn’t stay together in the end, Star would return to the sky.
I feel like the movie should've been animated in 2D animation because disney started in 2D and could be a nice callback to all of their previous animated films
I think it would be more effective if Magnifico’s wish to become a sorcerer was what destroyed his home. Like if he had a magical accident or something. That would make him believe that even seemingly harmless wishes can be dangerous, so that’s why he confiscates all the wishes.
Your video made me realize the irony of all this - Magnifico himself is corporate. He parallels keeping things safe and mediocre without factoring in the input of the people because he's so out of touch. This movie is unintentionally meta AF.
Lmao not even a minute in and the Isabela Madrigal thing came up. The first thing I thought when looking at an image of Asha in this film was "Oh this is cool fanart of Isabela with braids"
Magnifico is an amalgamation of Luke then Anakin Skywalker: First the burned out lose of home and then the addiction to the dark side. The vitriol is lost on me for the "We are all Stars". Scientifically, it is just the fact we are all both created and connected by the same building blocks of all things like stardust. I am new here and like your delivery. I wish you many years of successful vids, I'll be watching for sure.
06:00 In the song “you’re a star” the animals actually talk about that everything is made of stardust. (I mean the water on earth is already older than our sun.) But I think for someone who isn’t interested in Astronomy that could be hard to catch. Like you shouldn’t need prior knowledge in order to understand the story.
My own thoughts as to what Wish could have been: We open with a storybook read by Chris Pine, where the audience see the book describe a story about Rosas, a great kingdom ruled by a noble family, each page rewritten (green magic alters words). This rewrite presents Magnifico as a great sorcerer who married into the kingdom, and now grants one persons wish once a month. Now, in present day, we meet Asha, Magnifico's assistant for the last four/five years (she is forced bubbly and fun in public, but becomes more jaded outside). She still pushes for Magnifico to grant her Grandfather's wish, which Magnifico lightly turns down. She goes to get the wish, but stumbles onto Magnifico's true scheme. The Queen has been locked in the dungeon for years, a magical illusion allowing Magnifico to remain in power. Magnifico explains that he was once a travelling wizard, who saw Rosas an opportunity to gain power. Magnifico is presented as a scheming con-man determined to maintain his power. He grants peoples deepest desires (cons them), taking their desires to hold them over the people of Rosas, whilst manipulating memories in the process. When Asha finds the star, which grants peoples needs, rather than the selfish wants that Magnifico grants, Magnifico sees that as a threat. He manipulates the traitor friend through promising to grant his wish (we actually see that), and uses humorous chaos the star causes (it grants everyones wishes, causing magical hi-jinx) to turn the city against Asha. We can show this through three songs: the opening song trying to establish Asha but is hijacked by people (Think "Belle", but "Gaston" keeps trying to interrupt it) gushing over Magnifico, in a song like ""; the wishing ceremony presenting him as a rock star type (a big song called something like "Your King", or "Your star" which could be him portraying himself to the public as a big rock star); the villain song where Magnifico describes needing to keep his power by destroying the star, maybe with him laughing about how stupid wishing on a star actually is (maybe to the imprisoned queen)- something like "all you need is me". Magnifico uses the people and his flashy (yet mostly useless) magic to try and get the star (a good commentary about CEO's pandering to the masses giving people superficial, appealing things rather than what they need, trying to stamp out any competition). He is evil at the start, and evil and the end. Asha needs to learn that while Magnifico is evil, the star isn't entirely good, as sometimes, people need to fight for their wishes, rather than hope someone else does it for them (again, a very nice lesson about self-reliance vs massive corporations). The way we show that is when the friends discover the star, they immediately try to get their wishes granted, and ALL of the wishes the characters make can and are granted by themselves, plus the star granting random people's wishes in the city, leading to really entertaining chaos. Asha, through breaking into Magnifico's dungeon or something, discovers that she needs to cast a spell to return the star to the sky, even as Magnifico tries to destroy it. This leads to a final battle on top of the highest point in the city, where the citizens finally see Magnifico's true colours as he tries to kill Asha. Asha returns the star to the sky. As the friends try to distract Magnifico's guards, Asha and Magnifico "fight" (she runs, whilst he chases her and the star, trying to kill her). As the star starts to fly, Magnifico (who knows that the people are against him, but is determined to keep his power, as he is full on insane) still thinks he can destroy the star and stay king. He leaps for the star, grabbing it, the star dragging him into space. As the star reaches the sky, it explodes in magic to return, Magnifico burning with it. Everyone learns a lesson, one more big song, the end.
You know what I think would be a cool magic system? I think it would work rlly well if magnifico was keeping the wishes and USING THE WISHES to gain magic ability, and then, at the end, you can have that big community take down of the people realising that because they are connected to the stars, that they could grant their own wishes. This also gives magnifico motive to not grant wishes, because he *needs* them to use his powers, and gives him more reason to feel threatened by star/want to defeat him, because he wants stars magic
0:42 I really wanted to give this film a chance as well. I remember going to the theater seeing another film, THE DAY Wish dropped and saw another theater room playing it and went “Oh. It’s out… why did no one tell me?” it was really sad…
So far all these Wish reviews seem more intriguing than the movie itself. I haven't seen the movie but all these rewrites seem like such a better movie. One video I saw said the main character is the villain of the story cuz the king doesn't do anything evil until the very end. The king didn't force the people to give up their wishes, they did so willingly at the cost of maybe having their wishes granted. But all the people deep down know it's very unlikely to happen. A wish is granted once a month, so only 12 wishes are granted in a year and then there are thousands of people. The king would die before even half of the wishes were granted. With their wishes removed, they don't have a feeling that they are somehow missing something. Apparently the grandpa lived a whole life and wasn't depressed his wish wasn't granted. So when the main character learns about this, she seeks to break into the king's castle to steal back her family's wishes and thinks he's a bad dude for doing this to the people. She's literally being selfish and causing conflict when this doesn't need to happen. Plus, from one video in particular, the reason she didn't get the job was because she made a fuss about him keeping the wishes. If she'd had played it smarter, she could have hidden her true feelings, got the job, and then stole the wishes she wanted once she gained access to parts of the castle. Would the king notice 1 or 2 wishes being gone? I might watch this movie just to better understand how horrible it is 🏴☠️ Anyway, good video. Much better characters than the ones we got.
I loved Luca and Turning Red! Encanto was . . . okay. But Luca is may favorite. Wish was just plain lazy. "Let's hide here. It's a secret place and I'm the only one who knows how to find it." "Hi, I'm the queen and I wanted to find you so I came straight to your secret hiding place." I might have had castle staff wandering through their hiding place throughout the whole song. 6:10 "I'm singing my song in a gale stiff enough to blow my braids around like a flag, but it doesn't seem to bother me." I don't mind if they defeated Magnifico with the power of their friendship, but there should be more ponies. I think your version does a better job of developing the characters. The motives are clearer and more justified. I would bring the father in from the beginning and make frequent references to his relationship with Asha, who initially wants to be the king's apprentice because she dreams of making peoples' wishes come true with her own magic. Then I would show her refusing the wand, since it's better for people to make their own wishes come true. In this way she would pass the test and show her true worth, leading to a greater reward from the star. Although I'm not sure what that would be. I've seen other videos explaining how they could improve the movie. I'm not sure which is more depressing; the idea that total amateurs think they could write a better story than the trained professionals, or the idea that most of them are right. Maybe they should show their stories to the YT people to see where the weaknesses are, or at least run them by Pixar and say, "Does this stink?" "No, it's not even that."
After watching Wish and rewatching the latest Disney movies I remembered the old Disney movies and princesses, and how their personalities were so different from each other, then I rewatched the old Disney princess movies, and I miss those personalities, Ariel, Mulan, Merida. When I watched the trailer I kinda expected Asha to have a more serious personality that was the vibe I got from her.
Even after I saw the movie, I already had an idea for how Magnifico's story could've been altered to fit more his apprenhension against granting certain wishes. Maybe when he was younger, he was the student of a great wizard. He learned much of his magical powers from him, and soon, he could use that power to grant wishes. Most of the wishes started out small, but his teacher warned him about granting wishes in such a reckless manner. But he ignored his warnings. It wouldn't be until a stranger learned about his power and traveled to his town. Using lies and clever words, he tricked the young Magnifico into granting his wish to become a king in order to help his homeland. The boy would grant it, but the new king would prove to be cruel and tyrannical, soon conquering neighboring lands for himself. The king would return to the town and pillage it, sending his men to kill Magnifico, to prevent someone from else from using the boy's power. Magnifico would flee from the ruins of his home. Blaming himself, he would use his power to create the kingdom of Rosas. He would continue to grant wishes for the citizens, but was hesitant about those whose wishes were vague. As he was tricked in the past, he will not allow the same mistake to happen. So he keeps these wishes up in his tower, he won't publicly refuse to grant a wish, but unless he can discern it will be used for the benefit of the kingdom, it shall remain behind lock and key.
Anyone who has the core, fundamental belief that "animation is for children" should not run an animation studio. And THAT is the big problem with WISH (which I will admit I enjoyed enough to go see it twice... once on my own and a second time with my mom). There was a lot of thought and effort put into WISH, only for the executives to gut the entire thing because "animation is for children and not adults".
really wish someone would hire a production team and make your movie the official wish XD it sounds really good! also you ending music is super relaxing
Honestly, I wish they'd leaned into the lack of informed consent with people giving up their wishes. Like, it doesn't seem like people _know_ that vagueness or potential for harm might disqualify their wishes from fulfillment? Like, if Asha had proposed the equivalent of employment offices helping people with their resumés, but for the wishes, so they didn't go ungranted for specious reasons; or filtering out 'you can totally achieve this yourself' wishes that don't need magical intervention.
Imo, i think magnifico should not have been the villain, but asha's mentor against an unapolligetically evil villain that wants to destroy/consume the wishes maleficent style, however, it was attracted to the king's hoarding of the wishes instead of granting them as quickly as they should, and have her unite people on their wishes to be better, something like that, but magnifico doesn't fit as a villain to me
They could had made Asha related to the royals unknowingly. I mean her father and the king could had been brothers or distant cousins. Like her branch of family (or the very least grandpa) either got kicked out or walked out with the royal family and her quest is her finding out and having to fight against her newfound evil relatives.
I have an idea to completely revamp this cartoon. The setting will be in a steampunk style, and the actions will take place in a kingdom ruled by King Raymond and his wife Alice. Raymond presents himself to the people as a benevolent and generous monarch willing to fulfill any wish of his subjects, but in reality, Raymond has no intention of granting people's wishes because he wants to fill the sphere of desires with them, capable of fulfilling any of his desires, namely to become a god. When people give up their desires, they begin to lose themselves, becoming lifeless and submissive, which benefits Raymond twofold. To force people to give up their wishes, he uses various machinations like self-promotion campaigns, raising scenes, and lowering salaries. The main character is a 16-year-old teenager named Greg, who is cool-headed and sarcastic, skeptical of wishes because he believes one should achieve everything themselves with family. He has a kind and wise grandfather named Julius, who in his youth was a guitarist who brought laughter and joy to everyone, but one terrible day he received a hand injury and could no longer play. Julius gets tired of living like this and gives up his wish to play the guitar again. After some time, Greg notices Julius' strange behavior; he becomes lifeless, although he used to be very sociable. He tells his parents, who dismiss it as just aging, but Greg doesn't believe it. He recalls how his friend Kelly spoke of a similar case with her father, but Greg ignored it then, considering Kelly's quirky character. Now he realizes Kelly was right, and together they visit the royal palace to ask Raymond why their relatives started behaving strangely. Raymond brushes them off, claiming it's just a side effect that will pass once he fulfills their wishes. But Greg and Kelly don't believe him and decide to spy on him. They reach Raymond's laboratory, where he fulfills wishes. They hide and see Raymond pressing a button, revealing a secret room. They enter and see a sphere containing people's wishes. They overhear Raymond talking about his plans, and they decide to leave to tell everyone the truth. But Raymond notices them and accuses them of treason. Luckily, Greg and Kelly escape, but now they are on the run. Along the way in the forest, they encounter a fallen star who takes the form of a teenage boy named Lyric. He is positive and kind, introducing himself to Greg and Kelly, saying he is a star come to fulfill people's wishes. Greg and Kelly explain the situation, and Lyric believes them but doesn't see Raymond as evil, as Lyric embodies goodness and sees everyone as friends, which slightly annoys Greg given his cold demeanor. Together, they must save the kingdom from Raymond and prove their innocence. When Raymond learns of Lyric's existence, he decides to capture him to extract all his magic to fill the sphere of desires. Towards the end, Greg and Kelly gather evidence against Raymond and give it to Raymond's wife, Alice. But instead of exposing her husband's wrongdoing, she decides to destroy the evidence because she truly loves him and doesn't want anyone to come between them, thus becoming the second villain in this cartoon. (Yes, I know this may seem like graphomania, but at least I tried, unlike the creators of the cartoon. Please tell me what else to add to my version of the cartoon.)
I just stumbled on this video while gobbling up every bit of Easter egg info from the movie I could find and I'm honestly appalled there are people rewriting the story or actually seeing any flaws in it at all lmao. Wish is the best Disney film I've seen in years and there's pretty much nothing I would change personally. You can argue some aspects aren't totally fleshed out but I don't think it was really necessary to know all the back story to feel Asha's deep connection to her friends and family, or the king turning to the dark arts. Asha has a caring personality and the King wasn't actually interested in keeping people safe, he just wanted to keep them under his control. He began showing his true colors when he snapped at Asha for questioning him and once he turned to the one evil spellbook he even labeled as off limits, it bound to his soul. I don't think he was ever meant to be redeemable and honestly I like that. Some people are just straight evil on the inside, they just hide it well until suddenly they show you who they truly are... think Hans from Frozen.
The movie does such a terrible job selling magnifico as ACTUALLY irredeemable that imo hes a tragic hero, not a villain. He does bad things, but the bad things he does are pretty easily fixed or pretty minor. People get their crushed wishes back. He never killed anyone. The punishment he assigns for outright TREASON is "no more playing wish lotto for you", a mere slap on the wrist. And iirc his eyes change back to blue after hes trapped in the mirror. You're telling me im supposed to believe he's irredeemable just because the evil suspicious book SAYS hes irredeemable? I would conclude the book is LYING. Now, there's 13 minutes of scrapped content that change EVERYTHUNG, turning him into actually a villain. There he's ACTUALLY stealing wishes. There he's ACTUALLY lying. He isn't corrupted by a book that's been trying to corrupt him for who knows how long, hes just evil and doing bad things entirely of his own volition.😂
That was an awsome rewrite! Watching the movie I honestly thought it was heading to this version's grandfather arc, realizing he already inspired the next generation by inspiring Asha, also they repeated so much he was 100 that I thought that was foreshadowing that he was going to die 😅. Also also I thought that it was going to be revealed that the reason the King was hoarding wishes and only granting a few was because the wishes were the source of his power, so the more wishes he had the more powerful he was, so if he gave back the ungranted wishes he would have been left powerless. And given his backstory (what little there was) he would have done anything he could to never feel powerless again.
I’ve recently gotten into the habit of analyzing good examples of writing in stories and understanding why they work, while also analyzing examples of bad writing, understanding why they don’t work, and trying to find ways to rewrite and fix it. It’s a good writing exercise, in my opinion and also just fun to do. I also enjoy seeing what ideas other people come up with. It’s interesting to think about what could have been.
for a true villain route, Magnifico's background could have been that he came from poverty and he and his family were mistreated. Due to that mistreatment (bullying and maybe even burning down whatever they had left), Magnifico wishes to become powerful; and he makes that wish to a star. This makes more of a stars connection and also to the vague wishes deal - Magnificos wish was vague, and the star gave him magical powers so that he could reach that dream for himself. either for good or bad. Now, Magnifico got attention from mages and the likes, who promoted his family's status and took Magnifico in as an apprentice. He became the most powerful mage and was even married to the kings daughter. boom. Explanation for Magnificos source for power, his villainy without much tragedy and how he became royalty; as well as for why he's so so wary of vague wishes. Magnifico understood the power of wishes; so he sets out to control the wishes of others in order for him to keep his power. This brings up the stars against however; they're forgotten more and more until Asha makes her wish. Other than that, I think that Asha should see the whole extent of "look of what a wish can get you into" and such. Also the death of granddad when his wish is crushed. Magnificos defeat could result in him becoming the magic mirror. he's powerful still, but he's also trapped. as for his wife; she could show signs that she does hate that Magnifico is more powerful than her, the royal born, as well as fear of other people getting powerful with wishes too. she would run away with the magic mirror at the end, never to be seen again.
@lightofthedeep what if the king's farm was burn down as the unintended consequence of a neighboring families wish to have the best farm, so he ventures out to find out how to un due a wish, because the wish made his land barren. Stopping here is a good set up for the good story. He discovers the power of wishes and sets out to protect people from the negative sides of wishes. A set up for the evil could be that he find the evil book as the only means to un due a wish. So he used the book many years ago to undue the wish and turn his farm into the castle, and his whole nice guy side is actually an act because he is already controlled by the evil book but it isn't reveal until Asha pushed him too far.
I enjoyed the rewrite you did for wish It’s such a shame that the actual movie wasn’t like that why does Disney waste so much good potential on movies nowadays
I love the human version concept art for the Star, so I think I would like a version of the film where they and Asha worked together to save the kingdom from Magnifico. In my rewrite I would have Asha be more pessimistic, shy, and intelligent, and the Star could contrast that by being naive, outgoing, and optimistic. They would have to learn to work together to save the day. It doesn’t have to be romantic but it could’ve been a great friendship at the very least. Now I haven’t seen the movie so I don’t know what exactly they did, but I would have Asha wish on the star out of desperation and once the Star actually appears to her she would want to take it all back and claim that she never meant to actually wish on the Star and they should just go away! The Star of course is determined to grant her wish, though, because he’s young and hopeful and wants to prove to the older stars that humans still have faith in them. Star also wants to prove to everyone that they can be taken seriously as a member of the stars. So they refuse to leave until they can grant Asha’s wish, but Asha doesn’t really have a specific wish, so there’s nothing specific the Star can do. They try to help Asha come up with something they can grant, but Asha is being extremely unhelpful in that regard. But then they come to an agreement that the Star will help Asha return everyone’s wishes to them and that will “grant her wish.” So shenanigans ensue as they try to go about this mission, their personalities clashing along the way. As they spend more time together and learn more about each other though, they grow fond of each other and become true friends, leading to a heartwarming goodbye where the Star promises to always be in the sky looking down over Asha and her friends, and she promises to never forget them, and spread the message of wishing upon a Star to all the people. I wouldn’t call it the most unique plot but I think it would’ve been cute. It’s honestly mostly the same as the movie except the Star is an actual character with their own drives and motivations.
it's nice to see these fan rewrites being cooler and interesting then the actual movie and now I'm motivated to my own some ideas I've had are like star people hail from a legendary magical land where star people reside and is like a mythical kingdom and the star people help grant wishes to those who needed it Magnifico is a star person which is basically like he originally originated from the kingdom where all the star people reside and I might take ques from Paradise Lost (yes by the way I'm gonna go pull a George Lucas and derive several stuff like classic literature and myths etc as inspiration.... and some tropes from TvTropes for some off reason) where his driving motivation and factor in that backstory being here due to him being the most proudest yet to him the most perfect out of them his fatal flaw is his own ego and pridefulness believing everything should be around him til which slowly started to weakened his relationship with the King and Queen of the Star Kingdom as well burned bridges then the straw breaking the camel's back in the form the star people turning their attention to the original ruler of Rosas, a king and philosopher under the name of Matias and something like he wished for stuff like him and his wife needing a child or something then things go awry as Magnifico then decides to well rebel against his leaders and leading an a coup where it resulted in the death of both the King and Queen of the Star Kingdom but... resulted in the baby prince being kept safe as well ultimately Magnifico's exile nerfing him and stripping him of his star powers and turning him seemingly human and then he married Amaya who was just as evil as he is and they decided to take over Rosas via the death of Matias and the disappearance and exiling of Queen Sakina (as for Sabino idk what to do with him probably in hiding somewhere), as for the both Matias and Sakina's daughter they raised her as her own Asha being a bit more on the serious side being a bit of an inept mage as she's dealing with her parents Magnifico and Amaya gaslighting her and taking the same parent techniques as Gothel and Frollo as well trying to learn to be a sorcerer like them and there's the fact her friends mainly Dahlia work as a scullery maid in the castle and the rest of the seven also work in the castle Star Boy whom I would nickname Sirius as in the constellation of the name meets Asha and he does bring some joy into her life and others lives and secretly does give everyone in Rosas's actual wishes and desires to come true, he's usually a bit cheerful and somewhat chill and he also encounters the seven Magnifico and Amaya's motivations are... get everyone's wishes and so Magnifico can become full star man hp and make Amaya a star person as well by the way why the people of Rosas in my one don't bat an eye that their ruler got suddenly went bye bye without a trace and being replaced by Magnifico and Amaya is because maybe just maybe him and Amaya placed some laser guided amnesia spell to forget kinda like what King Candy did to the inhabitants of Sugar Rush he basically had magical spell to force them to forget about King Matias and Queen Sakina oh yeah for Valentino make him the cute animal who shouldn't talk Amaya might have a Lady Macbeth like character about her probably and a stupider idea I've had which is her being the Starscream to Magnifico's Megatron though more subtle around to her husband Sirius also has mini star serving the role as the tagalong cute sidekick who also doesn't talk and some honorable mentions Asha discovering the truth about her real birth parents and Magnifico's past and what Sirius's comment to her about her parents I'm A Star is adapted out the third act gets interesting as Magnifico turns into a demon star monster form while Amaya joins in the fight where it turns into a fight between Asha and Sirius against Magnifico and Amaya then where it provides a challenge to both Asha and Sirius where Sirius almost dies and Magnifico attempts to siphon off Sirius but then maybe Sirius gets revived with Asha becoming a good mage now reviving him then Sirius goes basically full super saiyan to Magnifico and Amaya defeating them both
Sigh, there were so close to having Magnifico be a redeemable villain and then went NOPE. I personally would still have him be the morally grey antagonist but we get a hint of a tragic backstory in the beginning then later find that the one time he gave a wish back, it went horribly wrong which is why he doesn't give them back now (maybe even play with the idea that those whose wishes aren't returned to literally forget who they are but he's not aware of it. Asha and Star discover this). Have the book of dark magic be a constant presence, heck have it be the evil for evil sake villain that is trying to tempt him into opening it. This is the thanks I get can be a duet between them until the King is driven to open the book and get possessed by it. The climax can be an epic magic duel. Asha with the help of Stars wand battles against the possessed Magnifico, meanwhile the people of Rosas come together to destroy the book
His eyes turned blue after being trapped in the mirror, or did i misremember that? Aside from crushing the wishes, what even was the worst thing he did? Fight asha? Restrain the townsfolk? Where is the threat of death? Book is an evil book, why does an evil book need to tell the truth? What im saying is that despite all their efforts to declare him irredeemable they messed it up so bad they accidentally made him redeemable.
I really liked how you tried fixing minor problems that would amount to a significantly better movie rather than changing the plot completely or relying on old concepts. While I love Starboy and a villain power couple, the general plot of Wish is still really good and it just needs some tweaking than a full restructure.
Dang, this was well made. I've never watched Wish but heard a bit about it and you got me interested in checking out the movie just to see these almost comical storytelling elements of the movie haha. Your version of the movie was well thought out and really explores the gaps and jumps in character development (or lack of I guess...) and y'know, I never really did notice until now mostly every Disney princess protag has been the same on the surface lately for no real reason. The last movie I saw was the Princess and the Frog where Tiana absolutely killed it for me. (in a good way, she slayed) Gotta love a good struggle to success type story. I was able to follow along well because of how you laid it all out, so I'm glad your efforts were rewarded with a well deserved video blow up. It was a really relaxing watch. If you ever do this kind of video format again, can't wait to see :) mad enjoyable, great work
If I could start this movie from scratch I would have King Magnifico as a "Wizard of Oz" like figure (The Wizard of Rosas if you will) who’s not actually capable of doing magic but uses his handsome looks, charisma and showmanship to fool people into believing that he was. Maybe he starts out small but works his way up the highest rungs of power, eventually becoming the king himself through his clever silver tongue and/or murderous conspiracy that could then be covered up or have someone framed for the crime of killing the previous king. Having acquired the crown, and all the wealth and resources that come with it, he invests in state-of-the-art technology to cloak himself in a mystical aura of magic, convincing everyone that he will make all of their dreams come true like a televangelist preacher. He's not actually doing anything to help the people mind you, he's just fleecing them for gold or whatever currency Rosas works with and most people have a religious faith that someday their wish will come true like God/Jesus answering people's prayers (and of course he charges everyone rent). This is when Asha comes in and wants to work for him (or perhaps she’s already been working for him before the events of the film start), but then at some point figures out he’s a fraud and wants to warn everyone she knows about his lies but nobody believes her. Soon enough, she makes her wish and summons the star (could still be the Star Boy also). The king finds out about the star, along with its wish granting abilities, and having come to the conclusion that the citizens of Rosas will eventually realize his trickery is determined to seize it by force so that he can hold on to power and dispel all notions that he isn’t a mighty sorcerer once and for all. I think that would at least give his character a stronger motivation and then there's no question that he'd be an irredeemable villain you love to hate just like Jafar, Scar, Frollo, Maleficent, Cruella, Ursula, etc. Maybe it’s not the most original story but I think it would be more entertaining to watch than what we got.
The fact that so many people are making their versions of this movie and all of the versions are so much better than the movie is honestly saying a lot about Disney.
Thank you everyone for tuning into this video! ;0; this is the first time a solo video of mine got pushed out over 10k views so I’m very honored everyone was able to listen to me ramble about storytelling !!
maybe i'm of the few who think the film wasn't THAT bad, i mean, i didn't felt bored nor repelled watching it, also, i think Asha's doubts about magnifico's sistem had some basis: Magnifico's sistem didn't inpsired respect to the magic in the people since they were of the idea it was something that could be gained by pure luck instead of something that should be earned. Also, i remember Asha's interview and a complain i've seen is that she wanted to score a bruce almighty, when i saw it she KNEW that there wishes that cannot be granted. I think that if i had to rerwitte the film, the things i would rewrite would be these:
-it would be more or less the same, however, the changes would be:
1-Star, who i will call hesperia, cannot comunicate with Asha as in the film, however valentino, now sapinet, would be able of translate, and he would explain to asha that hesperia is in the eath looking for her brothers who are missing.
2-ash'as friends would contribute with her to search for the other stars, and there will be clues that they're on rosas, where exactly we don't know yet.
3-however, Asha's teacher sabino, who here will be a sorcerer but not as famous as magnifico, will point to the fact that the magicians, by general rule, cannot grant wishes. how is that magnifico does it, they don't know.
4-and there is the big reveal: both magnifico and amaya were kidnaping hesperia's siblings and using their power to grant wishes, and the struggle now is to find in which part of the castle they are.
5-during the struggle, Asha manages to take from magnifico the key of the cage where the star people were being held prisoner, but in the process, Amaya stabs her with a blade hidden in her scepter, killing her(remember marcy's death at andrias hands in amphibia). and recapturing the stars
6-when everything seems lost, there is something else happening, when the stars almost scape, they emitted a scream that was heard by something else in the distant space....
7-ust when magnifico was giving his discurse of victory, Amelia tell everyone that there are 2 moons...but it isn't, the other thing in the sky is an entity known as Belobog, the king of the light, a light-made dragon, who heard the scream of help of the stars, and came to rosas to release them, causing a massive rampage. during the havoc, Belobog captures amaya and Magnifico, using it's magic to turn amaya into the harp from mickey's story of jack and the beanstalk, and magnifico into the mirror of krimilde in snow white.
8-when belobog is about to lightblast rosas into a molten wasteland, hesperia talks to him calming him enough to explain it that Asha and her friends were helping them to spcae, and sadly Asha lost her life for that, Belobog decides to bring her back to life, but now she's not human, but a fairy to foster respect between humans and magic in the future...
Easiest fix for "Wish": Have the reveal near the end that almost all the bubbles are Magnifico's. The King has to give up all his own wishes as a sacrifice to protect the kingdom(after his previous home was destroyed thanks to errant magic), but he has to remember everything he has to give up. Every wish he wants, every desire, every hope for the future. He takes the wishes of others and actually grants them over time because granting every wish is just madcap chaos(think of the lottery win in "Bruce Almighty"), and because of the power, he can never grant his OWN wishes. He wants to do well for his kingdom, but he can only do so through his magnanimous acts(no taxes, etc;) and granting SOME of the wishes, even though he believes his people should have more. So he is embittered by the fact that he gave so much and sacrificed so much and Asha tells him what other people deserve("This Is The Thanks I Get?" could reveal more on that).
Have him and Asha grab at a bubble(maybe her grandfathers instead of her moms)during a fight at one point, making the wish burst and corrupt Magnifico, making Asha responsible for the magical twisting he goes through.
Reveal later that he can't actually give back the wishes, even if he wants to, to the people because of the magic. He becomes corrupted over time by taking wishes into himself and his wife takes advantage of that, making him look like more of a villain so she can take over and look like the hero.
Go more into why Magnifico believes Star is dangerous. It should not be about keeping his power. It could even be his previous home was destroyed because of another Wishing Star who granted every wish willy nilly and because of it, things went bad. People grew apathetic because they didn't need to work or do...anything and because of it, his home was destroyed.
I apologize for the long post, but I think it could have been saved if they weren't so set on making the movie suck. They should have made the Queen the villain(100 years, the first Disney villainess was Grimhilde/the Evil Queen from Snow White. Just feels like a missed opportunity.)
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My fix for her: make her the villain she was designed to be! And make king magnifico the hero the story wanted
keep the story mostly the same because the human star doesn't feel right but how star is in film feels right maybe his wish can backfire as friendly pranks if selfish/evil or even just to help so one selfish like cure someone if truly worthy or how to cure them as a riddle or shown what they need on a piece of paper. but stars unlike shooting stars need to be pure of heart or true to their heart.
Magnifico destroying the grandfather’s wish makes so more sense to the story than destroying the mom’s.
Asha put more emphasis on granting his wish and we never even learn what the mom’s wish was.
Disney played it WAY too safe for this movie
If they had any teeth they'd have done that and had it kill the grandfather. Have Magnifico do something actually evil, give Asha an existential crisis over her actions leading to the outcome.
@@Crazyashley42 Yes, I think it would've greatly improved the "mustache-twirling villain" aspect of Magnifico's character if crushing the wishes kills people instead of making them sad, like maybe the wishes are really the life force or soul of a person rather than just "I want a new car", so the people who turn 18 and give him their wishes are literally placing their lives in the palm of his hand. That raises the stakes since Magnifico would be parasitically draining the lives of his own people in order to make himself more powerful, emphasizes what Asha says about people forgetting "the most beautiful part of themselves" and now we have a real reason to root for her to defeat him.
@@colbystearns5238It would also help if the wishes actively made Magnifico stronger so it feels even more selfish.
right? even this retelling almost made me cry and in the movie I felt nothing because we don’t learn anything about asha’s mom
I’m really on my way to watch all the Wish character analysis videos and not the actual movie LMAO
Same 😭✋🏾
Same here
hahaha 😂 Still haven’t seen the movie, but feel like I have
That's the best use of our time
Same
Was "Wish" Supposed to be an origin story for the Fairy Godmother? If so, I would've loved it if Asha started out as an ACTUAL Godmother to a child, who would one day grow to be the Fairy Godmother in "Cinderella" and her journey to becoming the first Fairy Godmother.
Much as that would be neat, Pretty sure they just threw in the cloak for reference purposes as the movie is full of spot the Disney classic references.
Still that's a better idea then the actual purpose!
Maybe she can Change her appearance and time travel. It’s a stretch but…🫤
I wanted them to incorporate The Star in the story more, why not have a stargazing kingdom where magic came from the stars and anyone could learn to use this magic but maybe Asha discovered another type of magic? Like the magic from dreams, not in the sleep sense but the deepest wish of your heart sense, cause this way it would tie into the song from Cinderella with lyrics like "A dream is a wish your heart makes~". Like have Asha just be one of the people Magnifico is teaching magic to, have the other seven dwarf references also be magnifico's students, or if that bloats the cast too much have Asha just have two other classmates who are young versions of Merlin and Yen Sid (the wizard from Fantasia), and Magnifico's road to villany is just so lame, he needs a motivation and objective like Jack Horner from Puss in Boots the Last Wish, either that or cut him out and have a villain who's a reference to other magic wielding disney villains take his place, someone who's a reference to Maleficent or Jafar maybe. If the kigdom also made magic acessories like staffs you have your Jafar or Maleficent reference, you could make all sorts of magical objects who served as references, like a magic mirror, maybe the people don't use the magic of the stars directly maybe they need to direct this magic into these objects and Asha becomes the first person to be able to use magic directly.
@vampybyte7812 The same goes for the face of the Magic Mirror popping up while King Magnifico was being pulled into his staff, it's just another Easter Egg.
I would've preferred a "Rumpelstiltskin" adaptation where a mother makes a wish to save her child, only for Rumpelstiltskin to save them but take them away from her as payment.
One of my biggest gripes about this is how Amaya isnt heartwrecked by Magnifico turning to evil.
That is the person she loved, she married, she has shared her life with, and the emotional impact of him turning evil before her eyes is practically non-existent.
She even mocks him after he gets trapped.
That was the true love of her life and losing him was, to quote Pitch Meeting, "barely an inconvenience".
Funny thing, Pitch Meeting actually did a video on Wish.
and she also just comes in her quinn attire to aisha... Not only does she look out of place in the scene, but wouldn't she be recognized or at least noticed on the streets? a really strange moment
the original concept had them be an evil couple.
but having a woman be seen as in the wrong and/or caring about a man in modern times? couldnt have that kind of messaging, as we all know woman can never do anything wrong and also will never ever need a man for any reason.
Can't have women be evil now. It's only men, men MEN.
And if women were gonna be evil they have to be REDEEMABLE.
I just realized why the animation bugs me so much. Their clothes look painted on. They don't wrinkle. They warp and bend with the body of the character rather than moving like cloth like other 3D movies do. FROZONE WE FOUND YOUR SUPERSUIT!
If you've seen Disney's kid 3d shows the animation of this looks a lot like that that is why I didn't feel it would be good and didn't watch it.
I actually didn't catch that until now, I think that's one of the other things that bothered me when I saw some clips for this movie.
We indeed found Frozone’s supersuit
Oh so that’s why, it felt so.. paper dolly
Exactly! And it’s such a shame too because Encanto’s clothing animation was phenomenal
Me personally I'd go with the with a "just because you can do something it doesn't always mean that you should" lesson. Asha would get what she wants early in the story and the fall out of it would be the fact that she got exactly what she wanted. To the detriment of everyone.
Like the monkey's paw, right?
@imperialofficerremusblackw8452 Yup I think that Monkey's paw stories are the best way to handle narratives like Wish.
Sounds like a good plot. It is similar to Megamind, where he "killed" Metroman and got control of the city....only to find out that owning the city requires work that he is unable to do
Wish is so disappointing because it doesn’t feel like Disney’s centennial movie at all. They played it way too safe and the results show. It’s also crazy how a main studio Disney movie hasn’t had a romance be a major part of a film since Tangled over ten years ago. (Not counting Anna and Kristoff).
This movie could have been a cross between the Sorcerer’s Apprentice with Asha and Peter Pan with the Star not to mention the scrapped ideas of Magnifico and Amaya being an evil couple. Asha isn’t even a princess and that just adds salt to the wound. Disney as a creative studio has to change because this predictable formula for its storytelling has definitely run its course.
Sadly, they listen people who think Disney movies are some Planned Parenthood infomercials, and Disney Romances a kind of patriarchal slavery of young women.
We can notice Pixar is allowed to romance with _Elemental_ , but in the subtext of anti racial message.
I kind of like her not being a princess. At first, i wanted her to have been adopted by them at a young age after her family dying, but i think i like what they were going for. It's like mulan and tiana, relatively normal women who go on journeys that end in them becoming royal/politically important. they wanted to show that ordinary people can make a change too, and that's fine by me.
However, i agree with everything else 💀 so much wasted potential, but im glad it's making everyone come together to create all these rewrites (just like in the miraculous fandom 🤣). Sometimes if you want something done right, you gotta do it yourself!
Both your comments are gold, couldn't agree more 👍🏻
Enchanted would have been a better centennial movie. It's more reflective of Disney's past and plays around with the tropes.
@@ringinn7880 ooo you make a good point. that movie truly was golden, and the songs were bops too.
Three easy changes to make (story-wise):
1. Make Asha's personality more in line with Ariel, Jasmine, or Pocahontas--fun, intelligent, and curious. And give us more info on her dad if he's fonna have this profound impact on her.
2. Focus on the grey message; the people of Rosas are selfish and codependent, fueling Manifico's trauma and making him micromanage the wishes (which are still optional). And maybe make him ACTUALLY magical, since learning magic makes a huge plot hole in the film.
3. Make Asha's family involved and fleshed out, though maybe reduce the number of friends since that's a huge cast.
And side note: was it really THAT hard to adapt "The Fisherman and His Wife" or expand on "The Sorceror's Apprentice"?
I’ve been working on a rewrite myself as a writing exercise, and one idea I had was to take the vagueness of Asha’s desires and goals and make that part of her character. She doesn’t know what to wish for and feels tremendous pressure to get a wish of her own, but her father’s influence means her views on wishes differ from the kingdom’s.
I am also including the Starboy as a character, but he’s got a connection with Asha already. See, Asha promised to give him her wish as a child, before he showed up, and he heard that and took an interest. Asha ended up talking to that star every night, unaware he was listening, to have someone to vent her frustrations and concerns about the kingdom to. The star also develops a wish of his own after coming to Earth… guess what it is.
To be with Asha? :D
@@SweetOrangeGirl Yup. It just kind of developed as an idea and I found it fitting.
I love this idea! It reminds me of a gender swapped The Little Mermaid, and there could be a reference to Part of That World in a song lyric or something.(Sorry if that’s not what you had in mind lol)
@@august6760 Well, one of the concepts they didn’t put in was that Asha and Star Boy were going to be in a romantic relationship (which would’ve been SO beautiful), so technically yes!
@@august6760 Thanks. I'm planning to go for more thematic and trope references rather than something that overt, but I might slip something in.
The superior Disney movie with a prominent wishing star motif and themes is Princess and the Frog.
No I think that was Dreamworks last year with Puss in Boots and the Last Wish.
They were comparing Disney movies PIB2 wasn't a Disney movie.
Absolutely.
The concept art looked so good like Star had a human form and was Asha’s love interest and both Magnifico and Amaya were evil.
This is my personal rewrite
Asha would be Magnifico and Amaya’s actual daughter and so she grew up thinking that keeping the wishes was the right thing. I would also make her personality more similar to Elsa and Mulan rather than Rapunzel and Anna. She’s smart and serious but also stubborn.
(Little nitpick but I would also change her design to look more like her concept art. She would have her natural hair out and her color palette more orange and red. When I think purple I think Rapunzel and Isabella.)
Magnifico I would go the sympathetic route since it honestly works better for him. I would make that due to a traumatic experience he’s now a very paranoid man who truly just wants to keep everyone safe and he picks wishes that he deems best for everyone.
Amaya would also be traumatized but instead of focusing on wishes she focuses on appearance. Like she wants her family to look good to the kingdom so that they don’t question them and believe that they’re all safe.
The seven friends could be people who work around the castle and Asha then helps them throughout the story. I also like the betrayal but I like to imagine that Simon has a crush on Asha so he wants to be the greatest knight in order to hopefully impress her.
I always really loved the concept of Asha being their daughter! This is a great rewrite!
I personally ship Asha and Dahlia.12:15 I love that Asha’s friends are based on the 7 dwarfs. Nice tribute. Dare I say my Favorite Variants of the 7 dwarves. YES!!😆
This is getting good, I hope you could continue it, like how she finds out that her parents are evil, she finds Star, her future love interest and her parents attempting to capture him. Btw, if she is their actual daughter, does that mean that either Amaya or Magnifico (Or both) would be black? I always thought the story would take place in North Africa or South Asia due to Asha's appearance (And the goat being those country's animal), so the story should definitely should have taken place in either.
I honestly enjoyed Asha being unrelated to the royal family since most recent Disney princesses were born into royalty (Tiana being the last one who wasn't), plus I LOVED the "Sorcerer's Apprentice" concept (imagine if Asha had Mickey's blue, silver, and red color palette), though I'd be fine with Star being Magnifico and Amaya's son, being born with world-changing magic like Elsa.
And I feel like 7 friends is too much for a main story, tbh. Dahlia, Gabo, and Dario were the only standouts to me, though you could always conflate Dahlia with Hal, Safi with Dario, and Gabo with Simon.
@@missplayer30It's supposed to take place in Andalusian Spain. Also, Asha being the princess would make a lot of sense for why everyone respects her and trusts her so much and would give her a great arc overcoming the expectations to be a perfect princess and grow into the leader Rosas needs. It would also provide a great conflict where in order to do what's right, she had to betray her own parents.
My idea of the story:
Asha is able to fulfill all wishes immediately, but has to learn that this leads to chaos and destruction. Magnifico has to help her to solve the mess she created and together they can settle everything back to normal. Asha came to learn that not all wishes can be granted, at least not immediately, ar the same time, Magnifico learned that keeping unfulfilled wishes is not okay and is returning them to their owners. Also, from now on, he and Asha together fulfill the wishes of the people, but more than one every month, maybe five-ish or so.
Honestly this is how I kind of thought the movie would happen.
I would slightly change the lesson to be one of "you have to make sacrifices and work hard for your wish to come true"
Every classic Disney movie required the protagonist to do this.
I do like your idea that uncontrolled wish granting causes chaos. Sorta like in the Socerer's Apprentice, Mickey gets magic power, but overuses it causing things to get out of hand
That actually sounds more like what I thought the movie was going for
but Lord forbid a female lead be wrong and has to change her worldviews rather than changing the world
Yeah Asha sees the kingdom's citizens are lacking some spark and she concludes that with their wishes gone and not granted, people are mentally suffering. She frees all the wishes and gets them granted at the same time but that causes chaos. Maybe many people feel worse off cuz now that their wishes were instantly granted, they feel even more empty. Magnifico has to help her set things right and clean up her mess and emphasizes that's why he did what he did. Asha isn't happy with his way of doing things but isn't happy with her solution either. Somehow she noticed her grandpa wasn't affected by the chaos and is in even more hugh spirits than other people in the kingdom and questions how that happened. It's revealed that his wish was organically granted so when Asha freed all the wishes, he just realized that he inspired the next generation by being wise and caring, or something. Then Asha realizes that simply having someone grant wishes isn't gonna make people fulfilled with their lives. The fulfillment comes from putting in hard work and effort to make your dreams come true. Or maybe just the journey makes people happy, alternatively her grandpa could realize his wish long ago wasn't exactly granted, but he still was a good person and though trying to live a good life, he realized that he didnt need his wish to be granted to feel fulfilled. Asha brings this up to the king, who isn't evil, and with the help of his wife who would be a voice of reason, he agrees to try this new plan. The movie can end here if it's too long or if there's still time, the last part of the movie could be them working together to help a sample of people or one person fulfill their wish and upon success, this will become the new norm. Or people could realize that some of them are happy with their wishes not being granted cuz they found meaning in life without their wishes and granting their wishes now won't really enhance their life anymore.
I fell like a message saying "work to make your wish come true" is very needed right now with children (and even adults) having short attention spans cuz they are used to getting stuff instantly, whether that be food from buying fast food so they don't need to take the time to cook or by swiping on horrible social media apps like tiktok. Patience is a virtue and we weren't created to be lazy. Our bodies don't like being sedentary. A movie showing how rewarding it is to work for your goals is really needed rn.
That's what should done
FINALLY there's a video critisizing Wish that doesn't start with "Well, my kid loved it" or "Disney is going downhill" but instead comes from a person who acknowledges Disney/Pixar movies as examples of great, serious storytelling
With Asha’s clothing, I could see it being blue at first instead of purple. A sign of her dedication to the kingdom as their colors look to be blue, white, and shades of grey (as depicted by Magnifico’s clothing). And at the end her clothes are transformed into purple and gold as to represent a new era for the kingdom, the clothes she wears in this film, and her connection to the stars. That way there’s the magical transformation Disney has been known for and have been wanting to see for a long time.
King Magnifico's story could've played more into the story to tell why he won't grant wishes when he can. My idea is that he started out as a good and benevolent traveling sorcerer who loved granting wishes wherever he went until one day he made a seemingly harmless wish to someone who proceeded to use that magic for evil and destroyed the town he and his wife were staying in. Magnifico and his wife survived and founded Rosas, but he was traumatized by the event and disillusioned by wishes in general seeing only the potential danger and selfishness in them.
Over the years he grew more fearful of anything happening to his perfect kingdom so when news gets out that someone else is granting wishes willy-nilly, he fears losing everything including his power which is why he finally opens the Dark Fairies' Book of Forbidden Arts that he found while traveling and uses it to destroy the wishes being granted and eventually the kingdom, becoming the same as the person who destroyed his home.
This is such a better backstory for him than the actual movie.
Oooh, and what's great about that is that as a 100th anniversary film, it combines both a classic Disney villain (The Evil Queen from Snow White. The fear about someone taking his spot) and a more recent one (Alma from Encanto. The trauma and control issues).
One change I'd make from your changes is that the king doesn't tell someone he's met for the first time his true intentions, especially since he has no intention of hiring her! She'd have to get hired to find that out, one would logically assume
Personally, I would love to just separate Magnifico into two villains: one redeemable with the whole backstory and pragmatic wish granting, and the other (Queen) pure evil with green magic book and megalomaniac wish to absorb Star. As for why she was with him (the other way around is pretty understandable, true love), maybe it's the just a wish to absord those unused and powerful yet "dangerous" wishes, but pure magic of wishes can not be controlled by heinous green magic, or something like that.
Honestly, if they had just fleshed out the magic system to have it so that possessing vast amounts of wishes granted the king his powers to grant a few would have made his motives make way more sense. Like the King draws power from the ungranted wishes to grant the few he thinks would have benefits the kingdom the most without losing his powers
Ooooo I have an idea! What if magnifico was the wishing star of Asha’s great grandfather? He couldn’t grant the wish or the wish led to unintentional consequences that destroyed the kingdom. Magnifico is banished from the stars for his failure and is desperately trying to make up for his mistake by keeping the wishes.
So what's the background for Rosas?
@@OpticalSorcerer The king’s attempt at rebuilding what he destroyed. Only now he doesn’t believe in wishing and does his best to limit the amount of magic.
@@freshoffthehook904 If he doesn't believe in wishes, why does he even tell everyone he can?
@@OpticalSorcerer Correction, he doesn’t believe that wishing solves problems. He believes in the power of wishes and fears the consequences of wishing but he doesn’t believe in the “Disney magic”.
@@OpticalSorcerer He can’t completely get away from wishing magic because it is a part of his history. The power exists and he fears it will blow up in his face and destroy what he has rebuilt from the ashes of his mistake. So he does what he can to limit what people can wish for. Having him be a former wishing star that was exiled explains why he is such a powerful sorcerer, why he wants to control the wishes/how he knows how to get them in the first place, and it gives a lot more weight to his decision to use the wishes as a power source when he goes dark. It would also explain why he freaks out as soon as another wishing star comes down.
23:20 this would be cool to have her dress change from purple to orange (like the concept art) or visa versa😊
I hate how asha says “I’m so nervous” like girl we can see your face and tell ourselves. Don’t patronize us
Nice ideas, especially bringing about Grandpa's death and how it affected Asha.
I will give Wish one thing, just about everyone gives their take on what type of story it should've been, and it's fascinating to see everyone's version of it.
I actually cried with your version of the story, plus the ending is validating, unlike eerything in wish. Thank for sharing your vision! For me, this is the actual story and not Disney's version ;'D
If Magnifico basically kills Asha's Grandfather, he NEEDS to get sucked into that mirror or at least face a suitable punishment for his evil. otherwise, yeah, what happens to him based on how the movie ACTUALLY goes is pretty harsh.
There should have been more with the evil book, rather than "I said I'd never use this because I KNOW it's evil" meaning he was trying to be good the WHOLE TIME, and caved that once, leading him to get possessed by evil, that's like if Sorcerer Mickey, after messing with the hat and causing all that chaos, got punished by getting sucked into the hat for all eternity.
Magnifico getting sucked into the mirror and becoming the Slave in the Magic Mirror should have been a more clear side effect for the evil power he was using, like the short-sightedness of the Evil Queen's Hag transformation playing into more of her feelings of jealousy and insecurity with Snow White rather than an actual desire for beauty. (if she's 2nd, she might as well be last) She doesn't care about the actual concept of beauty, she just doesn't want anyone to be better than her.
Magnifico wanted to be in CONTROL of everyoen's desires and wishes, seen and beloved by all as someone with the power to influence the world around them. Since he was defeated, the cost of using that evil magic (Magic always comes with a PRICE) is he is now a SLAVE with NO CONTROL, and must answer honestly to anyone who summons him the reality and nothing else, either aggrandizing their ego, or reality checking their WISH. Holding up a mirror to their Wish/desire, and deaming it false.
He can't do anything about it, just call it as it is, to the observer's dismay. That's an AWESOME explanation for the spirit in the Magic Mirror being a Cursed Egomaniacal Wish Granter who was brought low because he lost sight of what he really wanted and fell into power-grabbing.
Ok, but Magnifico was right. It IS bad to grant everyone's wishes. Some wishes counter each other, while some are straight out negative for everyone else, or everyone except the wisher. They posed it as him looking too much into simple wishes, but with little evidence that would support that claim. If he didn't really analyze the wishes and just granted them, he would be wildly irresponsible.
I want Asha’s quirky personality to actually be a farce for work and when she gets home after work she’s just tired of everything and anxious about her future since she’s the only one who can provide for her family and it’s up to her to keep going
So lemme get this straight...
Asha is an unapologetic Mary Sue, whose flaws are protrayed as her biggest strengths, hereby cancelling out the fact that her flaws are her bad traits, thus making her a flawless character solely because she's the protagonist and the good guy in the film, and cartoon logic states that the good guys never do anything wrong and never have any flaws.
Disney most definitely used AI to make this story, and you cannot convince me otherwise.
It would be cool to see a redesign of Asha that includes a more dark/blue color pallet with maybe a purple ombre to represent the night sky, THEN when Star ads sparkles to her dress they look like stars in the night sky
im loving all of the rewrites ive seen on youtube, all of them seem so interesting and entertaining and pretty solid from a critique perspective too
I really like how you rewrite the story, there wasn’t a dramatic change, but you make the story more meaningful. 😊😊😊
It's not perfect (because no story is perfect), but is significantly better than the original story. I actually felt things for & even kinda cared for your version of the characters. Awesome video!
That was so good! The concept of wishing upon a star- and us all being stars so we can grant our own wishes is actually a really good concept! I really like your take on the story!- it had a lot of heart!
A minor thing, but I think Asha could have had twin-buns to further pay tribute to Mickey.
your video editing and quality are absolutely amazing. you are so underrated!! when i clicked on this video i thought i’d see sm more subs, but its shocking how underrated u areee!! keep it up tho, ur super cool :))
THANK YOU SO SO MUCH!! That means a lot to hear!! :D I'll keep at it with more uploads hopefully!
10:29 What if queen amaya had been the one owning the evil book?
"I can't use Your book, or I would be corrupted"
"My King, the people will never respect you like they did. You will lose face/power w/e. Try it. Just one spell"
An interesting route to take Magnifico with the Pure Evil interpretation would have been how wishes inspire people to work on themselves. When he takes wishes, it would essentially removes a person's drive. They're loyal to him and have no reason to not be.
A dystopian Rosas would have been really interesting because the concept of taking wishes already fits with a dystopia. He keeps the population complacent, thus keeping them under his thumb.
They have no drive to do anything other than what he tells them, because they have no wish to do so. To challenge the status quo.
That's why Asha's grandfather's harmless wish would not have been granted. Inspiring others would lead to rebellion.
Wow u just made an entire plot by urself. and as far as i understood the movie ur interpretation is much better. yet you are so gentle about ur critic, and actually reminded us that it is most likely not the writers fault, which is i think is true. also ur rewhite really already gave me some emotions (well maybe because im lost in life and do need my own wish too) and i think its great, it means ur rewhite already has the meaning to be good. ur voice is soft, i liked ur simplistic style and ur thoughts, keep it up! ur doing great
It makes me sad that Disney doesn't seem to have writers who know how write engaging stories anymore.
Wasn’t there a writers’ strike in Hollywood?
@@MeimoonsOh yeah, I can't believe I forgot about it.
@@Meimoonscan you explain about the writer's strike?
@@1risMoonlight basically writers and actors stopped working until their demands were met to protest and prevent the use of procedural generation (ai isn't really an accurate name) to replace their careers
@@BookWyrmOnAString ohhhhhhh thank you btw happy new year to you❤️
Finally, someone who appreciates turning red like I do
I have been waiting to long to find this kind of video I thought I was going to have to re write it myself after I watched it (when it came out on Disney +)
My idea when i heard This is the thanks i get, was, why not make the king a second main character? Asha's story could be about overcoming her childish view of wishes, while her apprenticeship under the king helps him rediscover his love for his people. A classic Master and Apprentice learn from eachother and become better people core plot. Maybe she is the one who finds the evil book, and accidentally unleashes a pure evil force that is the driving antagonist of the plot... by being a lore accurate Genie granting wishes in the worst way possible?
It felt like Magnifico just kind of tripped and fell backwards into being evil. They introduced the traumatic backstory, they introduced his arrogance, they introduced his feelings of being unappreciated, all ideas with interesting potential, and then none of it really mattered, because he just opened the forbidden book and turned evil.
I plan to rewrite Wish aswell where King Magnifico has an Evil Brother from his backstory and he plans to take revenge from magnifico and idk how to continue to write story blablabla
You can have Asha grant the evil Brother's wish because she doesn't recognize the inherent with granting every wish until she inadvertently puts the evil brother on the throne. You can even have a friend be upset at Asha go for granting their wish because their wish was their goal and something they wanted to work towards. Asha granting the wish made the goal lose its meaning. And the villain is toppled not through a wish but through the people standing up to him because he got his wish to be king yes but he didn't have the backing of the people like Magnifico did.
Thats a pretty nice Idea
i want Magnifico to be the main character.
i felt so bad for him being framed as 'the plain evil villain' even though he has a traumatic past and good intentions
That was actually the best rewrite I've ever seen.
In particular, that part with Magnifico crushing Sabino's wish and saying "Happy Birthday" to Asha afterwards was genuinely heartbreaking but so good at the same time.
Solution?
make the queen the twist villain and him the prime suspect. He can even have the ideology of Not every wish should be granted, and she can hold the ideology that not everyone deserves to have their wish granted. Both coming to such a conclusions due to what happened to Magnifico’s backstory (expanded to include her) think something similar to Madara and Hashirama from Naruto.
asha should have her wish originally granted by King Magnifico,and as she slowly finds out abt the true nature of the wishes granted by the king,she tries to rebel back but her wish somehow bites her back and sabotages all of the progress she has made to save the kingdom of rosa (this way the quote "be careful of what you wish for" actually makes sense) and star's relevance could increase as asha could have wished on a shooting star as a last resort to fixing whatever crisis shes facing
See I feel like the re-write missed the message they slapped on the cover: "Be careful what you wish for."
From what I have observed Magnifico granted a few wishes, mainly those that were clear and benefitted the kingdom.
So in my rewrite Magnifico sticks to that premise. In this tale he is the antagonist, but not a true villain. Asha in this case is a more naive girl, she goes along in a happy-go- lucky sort of way, but eventually starts to wonder why the King doesn't grant more wishes, and why he still keeps the ones he doesn't grant. In this version she makes the wish to grant her fathers wish, but the king doesn't grant it. She had written this down thus unlike the others she knows what the wish was and becomes the kings assistant after. Once inside (after a quick montage to indicate some time has passed) she asks why the king keeps the ungranted wishes, he explains that his magic doesn't allow for the wish to be returned without granting it. (In this case showing that the magic will automatically grant the wish unless he interferes). She then asks why not just grant them then? This is done during a Magnifico song where he pulls a wish down from the roof containment area and shows a wish where a man wished for all the women to love him (with the king explaining that this is mind control, and thus he refused), but during the song Asha sees her old man's wish and reaches out for it, firing off questions to keep the king distracted. In the process she frees all the wishes. Magnifico panics and tries to grab them all but fails, and the wishes escapes into the kingdom.
Now the Queen would also be a villain in this story, but one made by her own wish. She had wished for power to protect her people, the king refused because it was too vague (and in a future flashback we can see him desperately trying to reshape her wish so he can grant it but fails) and she becomes a malificent styled mage.
The wishes see everything fall to chaos, and the king throws Asha out, turning to the evil book in desperation as he tries to take back the wishes.
Asha would then have her own wish granted, with a part of herself splitting off to become star.
The story then continues with Asha trying to help people by granting the spirit of their wish in a way the king couldn't, as the king could only grant the one wish unlike Asha, so she regrants them.
In the end Asha has seen the danger of granting every wish without thinking, but its a bittersweet ending with Magnifico unable to break from the evil book, and the queen's power being warped by her time fighting to keep the people safe (via imprisonment ala turning folks to indestructible stone) whilst also battling her husband who she deemed the enemy, the last act of Magnifico is to banish them both, warning Asha that he will never return to who he was, and to beware the evil he will become.
i loved your analysis!!
Oh my god. Your version is so, SO much better!!! Even if it was just a short outline, it moved me a hundred times more than the movie and it WORKED! Loved how you managed to really bring out the message! Dare I say … stellar work? 😉😘
I kinda like the idea of a wizard that picks and chooses what wishes to grant. I mean, some people have ACTUAL BAD WISHES. He literally could just go "Yes of course I pick and choose what wishes to grant. Here's the top three worst wishes in the city. This guy wants all the power. This guy wants all the money. This woman wants only to be admired. Tell me how that will help the people." It's not like that would be hard. He has a literal platform to stand on that is VERY DEFENDABLE. When he goes too far, that's when the problem starts.
Another great rewriting of the story… worrying for Disney how many youtubers can so easily fix this story.
For Asha, I keep reimagining her in the context of Star being the boy from the concept art, and her character foil in the movie.
Asha already being the King’s apprentice would have fixed the dopey interview oversight. As they were determined to make references all over, this could have allowed a throwback to Mickey Mouse as the Sorcerers Apprentice in Fantasia - the literal mascot of the company.
I could also see her as reserved, perhaps a pure nerd type, studious and hard working. As the apprentice she experiences and practises magic through a scientific, logical lens… magic has no magic for her. Her father is a softer influence from her childhood but in her hard working, “living for others” life she’s lost a lot of that.
When Star arrives and is an actual person, he could have the fun-loving but naiive personality to balance out Asha’s. A romance subplot could be there or not- it doesn’t matter because they wouldn’t stay together in the end, Star would return to the sky.
I feel like the movie should've been animated in 2D animation because disney started in 2D and could be a nice callback to all of their previous animated films
I think it would be more effective if Magnifico’s wish to become a sorcerer was what destroyed his home. Like if he had a magical accident or something. That would make him believe that even seemingly harmless wishes can be dangerous, so that’s why he confiscates all the wishes.
Your video made me realize the irony of all this - Magnifico himself is corporate. He parallels keeping things safe and mediocre without factoring in the input of the people because he's so out of touch. This movie is unintentionally meta AF.
WOAH WHAT, after hearing your idea on how to rewrite Wish It felt like I actually WATCHED a movie! With a plot!
Lmao not even a minute in and the Isabela Madrigal thing came up. The first thing I thought when looking at an image of Asha in this film was "Oh this is cool fanart of Isabela with braids"
Magnifico is an amalgamation of Luke then Anakin Skywalker: First the burned out lose of home and then the addiction to the dark side. The vitriol is lost on me for the "We are all Stars". Scientifically, it is just the fact we are all both created and connected by the same building blocks of all things like stardust. I am new here and like your delivery. I wish you many years of successful vids, I'll be watching for sure.
21:57 ok but why am I so invested in this, damn light 😭😭
06:00
In the song “you’re a star” the animals actually talk about that everything is made of stardust. (I mean the water on earth is already older than our sun.)
But I think for someone who isn’t interested in Astronomy that could be hard to catch.
Like you shouldn’t need prior knowledge in order to understand the story.
My own thoughts as to what Wish could have been:
We open with a storybook read by Chris Pine, where the audience see the book describe a story about Rosas, a great kingdom ruled by a noble family, each page rewritten (green magic alters words). This rewrite presents Magnifico as a great sorcerer who married into the kingdom, and now grants one persons wish once a month. Now, in present day, we meet Asha, Magnifico's assistant for the last four/five years (she is forced bubbly and fun in public, but becomes more jaded outside). She still pushes for Magnifico to grant her Grandfather's wish, which Magnifico lightly turns down. She goes to get the wish, but stumbles onto Magnifico's true scheme. The Queen has been locked in the dungeon for years, a magical illusion allowing Magnifico to remain in power. Magnifico explains that he was once a travelling wizard, who saw Rosas an opportunity to gain power. Magnifico is presented as a scheming con-man determined to maintain his power. He grants peoples deepest desires (cons them), taking their desires to hold them over the people of Rosas, whilst manipulating memories in the process. When Asha finds the star, which grants peoples needs, rather than the selfish wants that Magnifico grants, Magnifico sees that as a threat. He manipulates the traitor friend through promising to grant his wish (we actually see that), and uses humorous chaos the star causes (it grants everyones wishes, causing magical hi-jinx) to turn the city against Asha. We can show this through three songs: the opening song trying to establish Asha but is hijacked by people (Think "Belle", but "Gaston" keeps trying to interrupt it) gushing over Magnifico, in a song like ""; the wishing ceremony presenting him as a rock star type (a big song called something like "Your King", or "Your star" which could be him portraying himself to the public as a big rock star); the villain song where Magnifico describes needing to keep his power by destroying the star, maybe with him laughing about how stupid wishing on a star actually is (maybe to the imprisoned queen)- something like "all you need is me". Magnifico uses the people and his flashy (yet mostly useless) magic to try and get the star (a good commentary about CEO's pandering to the masses giving people superficial, appealing things rather than what they need, trying to stamp out any competition). He is evil at the start, and evil and the end. Asha needs to learn that while Magnifico is evil, the star isn't entirely good, as sometimes, people need to fight for their wishes, rather than hope someone else does it for them (again, a very nice lesson about self-reliance vs massive corporations). The way we show that is when the friends discover the star, they immediately try to get their wishes granted, and ALL of the wishes the characters make can and are granted by themselves, plus the star granting random people's wishes in the city, leading to really entertaining chaos. Asha, through breaking into Magnifico's dungeon or something, discovers that she needs to cast a spell to return the star to the sky, even as Magnifico tries to destroy it. This leads to a final battle on top of the highest point in the city, where the citizens finally see Magnifico's true colours as he tries to kill Asha. Asha returns the star to the sky. As the friends try to distract Magnifico's guards, Asha and Magnifico "fight" (she runs, whilst he chases her and the star, trying to kill her). As the star starts to fly, Magnifico (who knows that the people are against him, but is determined to keep his power, as he is full on insane) still thinks he can destroy the star and stay king. He leaps for the star, grabbing it, the star dragging him into space. As the star reaches the sky, it explodes in magic to return, Magnifico burning with it. Everyone learns a lesson, one more big song, the end.
You know what I think would be a cool magic system? I think it would work rlly well if magnifico was keeping the wishes and USING THE WISHES to gain magic ability, and then, at the end, you can have that big community take down of the people realising that because they are connected to the stars, that they could grant their own wishes. This also gives magnifico motive to not grant wishes, because he *needs* them to use his powers, and gives him more reason to feel threatened by star/want to defeat him, because he wants stars magic
0:42 I really wanted to give this film a chance as well. I remember going to the theater seeing another film, THE DAY Wish dropped and saw another theater room playing it and went “Oh. It’s out… why did no one tell me?” it was really sad…
15:18 maybe we have a scene where someone asks to learn magic and magnifico firmly turns them down
So far all these Wish reviews seem more intriguing than the movie itself. I haven't seen the movie but all these rewrites seem like such a better movie. One video I saw said the main character is the villain of the story cuz the king doesn't do anything evil until the very end. The king didn't force the people to give up their wishes, they did so willingly at the cost of maybe having their wishes granted. But all the people deep down know it's very unlikely to happen. A wish is granted once a month, so only 12 wishes are granted in a year and then there are thousands of people. The king would die before even half of the wishes were granted. With their wishes removed, they don't have a feeling that they are somehow missing something. Apparently the grandpa lived a whole life and wasn't depressed his wish wasn't granted. So when the main character learns about this, she seeks to break into the king's castle to steal back her family's wishes and thinks he's a bad dude for doing this to the people. She's literally being selfish and causing conflict when this doesn't need to happen. Plus, from one video in particular, the reason she didn't get the job was because she made a fuss about him keeping the wishes. If she'd had played it smarter, she could have hidden her true feelings, got the job, and then stole the wishes she wanted once she gained access to parts of the castle. Would the king notice 1 or 2 wishes being gone?
I might watch this movie just to better understand how horrible it is 🏴☠️
Anyway, good video. Much better characters than the ones we got.
I loved Luca and Turning Red! Encanto was . . . okay. But Luca is may favorite.
Wish was just plain lazy. "Let's hide here. It's a secret place and I'm the only one who knows how to find it."
"Hi, I'm the queen and I wanted to find you so I came straight to your secret hiding place."
I might have had castle staff wandering through their hiding place throughout the whole song.
6:10 "I'm singing my song in a gale stiff enough to blow my braids around like a flag, but it doesn't seem to bother me."
I don't mind if they defeated Magnifico with the power of their friendship, but there should be more ponies.
I think your version does a better job of developing the characters. The motives are clearer and more justified.
I would bring the father in from the beginning and make frequent references to his relationship with Asha, who initially wants to be the king's apprentice because she dreams of making peoples' wishes come true with her own magic. Then I would show her refusing the wand, since it's better for people to make their own wishes come true.
In this way she would pass the test and show her true worth, leading to a greater reward from the star. Although I'm not sure what that would be.
I've seen other videos explaining how they could improve the movie. I'm not sure which is more depressing; the idea that total amateurs think they could write a better story than the trained professionals, or the idea that most of them are right.
Maybe they should show their stories to the YT people to see where the weaknesses are, or at least run them by Pixar and say, "Does this stink?"
"No, it's not even that."
After watching Wish and rewatching the latest Disney movies I remembered the old Disney movies and princesses, and how their personalities were so different from each other, then I rewatched the old Disney princess movies, and I miss those personalities, Ariel, Mulan, Merida. When I watched the trailer I kinda expected Asha to have a more serious personality that was the vibe I got from her.
Even after I saw the movie, I already had an idea for how Magnifico's story could've been altered to fit more his apprenhension against granting certain wishes.
Maybe when he was younger, he was the student of a great wizard. He learned much of his magical powers from him, and soon, he could use that power to grant wishes. Most of the wishes started out small, but his teacher warned him about granting wishes in such a reckless manner. But he ignored his warnings. It wouldn't be until a stranger learned about his power and traveled to his town. Using lies and clever words, he tricked the young Magnifico into granting his wish to become a king in order to help his homeland. The boy would grant it, but the new king would prove to be cruel and tyrannical, soon conquering neighboring lands for himself. The king would return to the town and pillage it, sending his men to kill Magnifico, to prevent someone from else from using the boy's power.
Magnifico would flee from the ruins of his home. Blaming himself, he would use his power to create the kingdom of Rosas. He would continue to grant wishes for the citizens, but was hesitant about those whose wishes were vague. As he was tricked in the past, he will not allow the same mistake to happen. So he keeps these wishes up in his tower, he won't publicly refuse to grant a wish, but unless he can discern it will be used for the benefit of the kingdom, it shall remain behind lock and key.
Anyone who has the core, fundamental belief that "animation is for children" should not run an animation studio. And THAT is the big problem with WISH (which I will admit I enjoyed enough to go see it twice... once on my own and a second time with my mom). There was a lot of thought and effort put into WISH, only for the executives to gut the entire thing because "animation is for children and not adults".
I love your rewrite! 💖 thank you for the video 💖
really wish someone would hire a production team and make your movie the official wish XD it sounds really good!
also you ending music is super relaxing
Honestly, I wish they'd leaned into the lack of informed consent with people giving up their wishes. Like, it doesn't seem like people _know_ that vagueness or potential for harm might disqualify their wishes from fulfillment? Like, if Asha had proposed the equivalent of employment offices helping people with their resumés, but for the wishes, so they didn't go ungranted for specious reasons; or filtering out 'you can totally achieve this yourself' wishes that don't need magical intervention.
That would have been great!
Instead what we got is....the townsfolk being terrible at math and blaming it on magnifico.
Underrated this is so good
Imo, i think magnifico should not have been the villain, but asha's mentor against an unapolligetically evil villain that wants to destroy/consume the wishes maleficent style, however, it was attracted to the king's hoarding of the wishes instead of granting them as quickly as they should, and have her unite people on their wishes to be better, something like that, but magnifico doesn't fit as a villain to me
Thank you. I 100 percent agree.
They could had made Asha related to the royals unknowingly. I mean her father and the king could had been brothers or distant cousins. Like her branch of family (or the very least grandpa) either got kicked out or walked out with the royal family and her quest is her finding out and having to fight against her newfound evil relatives.
I have an idea to completely revamp this cartoon. The setting will be in a steampunk style, and the actions will take place in a kingdom ruled by King Raymond and his wife Alice. Raymond presents himself to the people as a benevolent and generous monarch willing to fulfill any wish of his subjects, but in reality, Raymond has no intention of granting people's wishes because he wants to fill the sphere of desires with them, capable of fulfilling any of his desires, namely to become a god. When people give up their desires, they begin to lose themselves, becoming lifeless and submissive, which benefits Raymond twofold. To force people to give up their wishes, he uses various machinations like self-promotion campaigns, raising scenes, and lowering salaries. The main character is a 16-year-old teenager named Greg, who is cool-headed and sarcastic, skeptical of wishes because he believes one should achieve everything themselves with family. He has a kind and wise grandfather named Julius, who in his youth was a guitarist who brought laughter and joy to everyone, but one terrible day he received a hand injury and could no longer play. Julius gets tired of living like this and gives up his wish to play the guitar again. After some time, Greg notices Julius' strange behavior; he becomes lifeless, although he used to be very sociable. He tells his parents, who dismiss it as just aging, but Greg doesn't believe it. He recalls how his friend Kelly spoke of a similar case with her father, but Greg ignored it then, considering Kelly's quirky character. Now he realizes Kelly was right, and together they visit the royal palace to ask Raymond why their relatives started behaving strangely. Raymond brushes them off, claiming it's just a side effect that will pass once he fulfills their wishes. But Greg and Kelly don't believe him and decide to spy on him. They reach Raymond's laboratory, where he fulfills wishes. They hide and see Raymond pressing a button, revealing a secret room. They enter and see a sphere containing people's wishes. They overhear Raymond talking about his plans, and they decide to leave to tell everyone the truth. But Raymond notices them and accuses them of treason. Luckily, Greg and Kelly escape, but now they are on the run. Along the way in the forest, they encounter a fallen star who takes the form of a teenage boy named Lyric. He is positive and kind, introducing himself to Greg and Kelly, saying he is a star come to fulfill people's wishes. Greg and Kelly explain the situation, and Lyric believes them but doesn't see Raymond as evil, as Lyric embodies goodness and sees everyone as friends, which slightly annoys Greg given his cold demeanor. Together, they must save the kingdom from Raymond and prove their innocence. When Raymond learns of Lyric's existence, he decides to capture him to extract all his magic to fill the sphere of desires. Towards the end, Greg and Kelly gather evidence against Raymond and give it to Raymond's wife, Alice. But instead of exposing her husband's wrongdoing, she decides to destroy the evidence because she truly loves him and doesn't want anyone to come between them, thus becoming the second villain in this cartoon. (Yes, I know this may seem like graphomania, but at least I tried, unlike the creators of the cartoon. Please tell me what else to add to my version of the cartoon.)
I just stumbled on this video while gobbling up every bit of Easter egg info from the movie I could find and I'm honestly appalled there are people rewriting the story or actually seeing any flaws in it at all lmao. Wish is the best Disney film I've seen in years and there's pretty much nothing I would change personally. You can argue some aspects aren't totally fleshed out but I don't think it was really necessary to know all the back story to feel Asha's deep connection to her friends and family, or the king turning to the dark arts. Asha has a caring personality and the King wasn't actually interested in keeping people safe, he just wanted to keep them under his control. He began showing his true colors when he snapped at Asha for questioning him and once he turned to the one evil spellbook he even labeled as off limits, it bound to his soul. I don't think he was ever meant to be redeemable and honestly I like that. Some people are just straight evil on the inside, they just hide it well until suddenly they show you who they truly are... think Hans from Frozen.
The movie does such a terrible job selling magnifico as ACTUALLY irredeemable that imo hes a tragic hero, not a villain. He does bad things, but the bad things he does are pretty easily fixed or pretty minor. People get their crushed wishes back. He never killed anyone. The punishment he assigns for outright TREASON is "no more playing wish lotto for you", a mere slap on the wrist.
And iirc his eyes change back to blue after hes trapped in the mirror. You're telling me im supposed to believe he's irredeemable just because the evil suspicious book SAYS hes irredeemable?
I would conclude the book is LYING.
Now, there's 13 minutes of scrapped content that change EVERYTHUNG, turning him into actually a villain. There he's ACTUALLY stealing wishes. There he's ACTUALLY lying. He isn't corrupted by a book that's been trying to corrupt him for who knows how long, hes just evil and doing bad things entirely of his own volition.😂
That was an awsome rewrite! Watching the movie I honestly thought it was heading to this version's grandfather arc, realizing he already inspired the next generation by inspiring Asha, also they repeated so much he was 100 that I thought that was foreshadowing that he was going to die 😅. Also also I thought that it was going to be revealed that the reason the King was hoarding wishes and only granting a few was because the wishes were the source of his power, so the more wishes he had the more powerful he was, so if he gave back the ungranted wishes he would have been left powerless. And given his backstory (what little there was) he would have done anything he could to never feel powerless again.
I’ve recently gotten into the habit of analyzing good examples of writing in stories and understanding why they work, while also analyzing examples of bad writing, understanding why they don’t work, and trying to find ways to rewrite and fix it. It’s a good writing exercise, in my opinion and also just fun to do. I also enjoy seeing what ideas other people come up with. It’s interesting to think about what could have been.
for a true villain route, Magnifico's background could have been that he came from poverty and he and his family were mistreated. Due to that mistreatment (bullying and maybe even burning down whatever they had left), Magnifico wishes to become powerful; and he makes that wish to a star.
This makes more of a stars connection and also to the vague wishes deal - Magnificos wish was vague, and the star gave him magical powers so that he could reach that dream for himself. either for good or bad.
Now, Magnifico got attention from mages and the likes, who promoted his family's status and took Magnifico in as an apprentice. He became the most powerful mage and was even married to the kings daughter.
boom. Explanation for Magnificos source for power, his villainy without much tragedy and how he became royalty; as well as for why he's so so wary of vague wishes.
Magnifico understood the power of wishes; so he sets out to control the wishes of others in order for him to keep his power. This brings up the stars against however; they're forgotten more and more until Asha makes her wish.
Other than that, I think that Asha should see the whole extent of "look of what a wish can get you into" and such. Also the death of granddad when his wish is crushed.
Magnificos defeat could result in him becoming the magic mirror. he's powerful still, but he's also trapped. as for his wife; she could show signs that she does hate that Magnifico is more powerful than her, the royal born, as well as fear of other people getting powerful with wishes too. she would run away with the magic mirror at the end, never to be seen again.
I haven't seen wish nor will I but your story was so beautiful and powerful it even made me cry when the grandpa died
@lightofthedeep what if the king's farm was burn down as the unintended consequence of a neighboring families wish to have the best farm, so he ventures out to find out how to un due a wish, because the wish made his land barren. Stopping here is a good set up for the good story. He discovers the power of wishes and sets out to protect people from the negative sides of wishes. A set up for the evil could be that he find the evil book as the only means to un due a wish. So he used the book many years ago to undue the wish and turn his farm into the castle, and his whole nice guy side is actually an act because he is already controlled by the evil book but it isn't reveal until Asha pushed him too far.
I enjoyed the rewrite you did for wish It’s such a shame that the actual movie wasn’t like that why does Disney waste so much good potential on movies nowadays
Ahhh this is such a nice rewrite! Great ideas :]
The movie really feels like Disney is tryna appeal to everyone that it ends up appealing to noone
This rewrite has not been done by AI 🙌🏽 10/10
I love the human version concept art for the Star, so I think I would like a version of the film where they and Asha worked together to save the kingdom from Magnifico. In my rewrite I would have Asha be more pessimistic, shy, and intelligent, and the Star could contrast that by being naive, outgoing, and optimistic. They would have to learn to work together to save the day. It doesn’t have to be romantic but it could’ve been a great friendship at the very least. Now I haven’t seen the movie so I don’t know what exactly they did, but I would have Asha wish on the star out of desperation and once the Star actually appears to her she would want to take it all back and claim that she never meant to actually wish on the Star and they should just go away! The Star of course is determined to grant her wish, though, because he’s young and hopeful and wants to prove to the older stars that humans still have faith in them. Star also wants to prove to everyone that they can be taken seriously as a member of the stars. So they refuse to leave until they can grant Asha’s wish, but Asha doesn’t really have a specific wish, so there’s nothing specific the Star can do. They try to help Asha come up with something they can grant, but Asha is being extremely unhelpful in that regard. But then they come to an agreement that the Star will help Asha return everyone’s wishes to them and that will “grant her wish.” So shenanigans ensue as they try to go about this mission, their personalities clashing along the way. As they spend more time together and learn more about each other though, they grow fond of each other and become true friends, leading to a heartwarming goodbye where the Star promises to always be in the sky looking down over Asha and her friends, and she promises to never forget them, and spread the message of wishing upon a Star to all the people.
I wouldn’t call it the most unique plot but I think it would’ve been cute. It’s honestly mostly the same as the movie except the Star is an actual character with their own drives and motivations.
it's nice to see these fan rewrites being cooler and interesting then the actual movie and now I'm motivated to my own
some ideas I've had are like
star people hail from a legendary magical land where star people reside and is like a mythical kingdom and the star people help grant wishes to those who needed it
Magnifico is a star person which is basically like he originally originated from the kingdom where all the star people reside and I might take ques from Paradise Lost (yes by the way I'm gonna go pull a George Lucas and derive several stuff like classic literature and myths etc as inspiration.... and some tropes from TvTropes for some off reason) where his driving motivation and factor in that backstory being here due to him being the most proudest yet to him the most perfect out of them his fatal flaw is his own ego and pridefulness believing everything should be around him til which slowly started to weakened his relationship with the King and Queen of the Star Kingdom as well burned bridges then the straw breaking the camel's back in the form the star people turning their attention to the original ruler of Rosas, a king and philosopher under the name of Matias and something like he wished for stuff like him and his wife needing a child or something then things go awry as Magnifico then decides to well rebel against his leaders and leading an a coup where it resulted in the death of both the King and Queen of the Star Kingdom but... resulted in the baby prince being kept safe as well ultimately Magnifico's exile nerfing him and stripping him of his star powers and turning him seemingly human and then he married Amaya who was just as evil as he is and they decided to take over Rosas via the death of Matias and the disappearance and exiling of Queen Sakina (as for Sabino idk what to do with him probably in hiding somewhere), as for the both Matias and Sakina's daughter they raised her as her own
Asha being a bit more on the serious side being a bit of an inept mage as she's dealing with her parents Magnifico and Amaya gaslighting her and taking the same parent techniques as Gothel and Frollo as well trying to learn to be a sorcerer like them and there's the fact her friends mainly Dahlia work as a scullery maid in the castle and the rest of the seven also work in the castle
Star Boy whom I would nickname Sirius as in the constellation of the name meets Asha and he does bring some joy into her life and others lives and secretly does give everyone in Rosas's actual wishes and desires to come true, he's usually a bit cheerful and somewhat chill and he also encounters the seven
Magnifico and Amaya's motivations are... get everyone's wishes and so Magnifico can become full star man hp and make Amaya a star person as well
by the way why the people of Rosas in my one don't bat an eye that their ruler got suddenly went bye bye without a trace and being replaced by Magnifico and Amaya is because maybe just maybe him and Amaya placed some laser guided amnesia spell to forget kinda like what King Candy did to the inhabitants of Sugar Rush he basically had magical spell to force them to forget about King Matias and Queen Sakina
oh yeah for Valentino make him the cute animal who shouldn't talk
Amaya might have a Lady Macbeth like character about her probably and a stupider idea I've had which is her being the Starscream to Magnifico's Megatron though more subtle around to her husband
Sirius also has mini star serving the role as the tagalong cute sidekick who also doesn't talk
and some honorable mentions
Asha discovering the truth about her real birth parents and Magnifico's past and what Sirius's comment to her about her parents
I'm A Star is adapted out
the third act gets interesting as Magnifico turns into a demon star monster form while Amaya joins in the fight where it turns into a fight between Asha and Sirius against Magnifico and Amaya then where it provides a challenge to both Asha and Sirius where Sirius almost dies and Magnifico attempts to siphon off Sirius but then maybe Sirius gets revived with Asha becoming a good mage now reviving him then Sirius goes basically full super saiyan to Magnifico and Amaya defeating them both
Sigh, there were so close to having Magnifico be a redeemable villain and then went NOPE. I personally would still have him be the morally grey antagonist but we get a hint of a tragic backstory in the beginning then later find that the one time he gave a wish back, it went horribly wrong which is why he doesn't give them back now (maybe even play with the idea that those whose wishes aren't returned to literally forget who they are but he's not aware of it. Asha and Star discover this). Have the book of dark magic be a constant presence, heck have it be the evil for evil sake villain that is trying to tempt him into opening it. This is the thanks I get can be a duet between them until the King is driven to open the book and get possessed by it. The climax can be an epic magic duel. Asha with the help of Stars wand battles against the possessed Magnifico, meanwhile the people of Rosas come together to destroy the book
His eyes turned blue after being trapped in the mirror, or did i misremember that? Aside from crushing the wishes, what even was the worst thing he did? Fight asha? Restrain the townsfolk? Where is the threat of death?
Book is an evil book, why does an evil book need to tell the truth?
What im saying is that despite all their efforts to declare him irredeemable they messed it up so bad they accidentally made him redeemable.
I really liked how you tried fixing minor problems that would amount to a significantly better movie rather than changing the plot completely or relying on old concepts. While I love Starboy and a villain power couple, the general plot of Wish is still really good and it just needs some tweaking than a full restructure.
As an aspiring writer this just hits deep how they thrown amazing stuff of concepts for better writing
Dang, this was well made. I've never watched Wish but heard a bit about it and you got me interested in checking out the movie just to see these almost comical storytelling elements of the movie haha. Your version of the movie was well thought out and really explores the gaps and jumps in character development (or lack of I guess...) and y'know, I never really did notice until now mostly every Disney princess protag has been the same on the surface lately for no real reason. The last movie I saw was the Princess and the Frog where Tiana absolutely killed it for me. (in a good way, she slayed) Gotta love a good struggle to success type story.
I was able to follow along well because of how you laid it all out, so I'm glad your efforts were rewarded with a well deserved video blow up. It was a really relaxing watch. If you ever do this kind of video format again, can't wait to see :) mad enjoyable, great work
"I wish for a dragon to destroy the village" .... The story should have really be around the "Beware what you wish for" concept
If I could start this movie from scratch I would have King Magnifico as a "Wizard of Oz" like figure (The Wizard of Rosas if you will) who’s not actually capable of doing magic but uses his handsome looks, charisma and showmanship to fool people into believing that he was. Maybe he starts out small but works his way up the highest rungs of power, eventually becoming the king himself through his clever silver tongue and/or murderous conspiracy that could then be covered up or have someone framed for the crime of killing the previous king. Having acquired the crown, and all the wealth and resources that come with it, he invests in state-of-the-art technology to cloak himself in a mystical aura of magic, convincing everyone that he will make all of their dreams come true like a televangelist preacher. He's not actually doing anything to help the people mind you, he's just fleecing them for gold or whatever currency Rosas works with and most people have a religious faith that someday their wish will come true like God/Jesus answering people's prayers (and of course he charges everyone rent). This is when Asha comes in and wants to work for him (or perhaps she’s already been working for him before the events of the film start), but then at some point figures out he’s a fraud and wants to warn everyone she knows about his lies but nobody believes her. Soon enough, she makes her wish and summons the star (could still be the Star Boy also). The king finds out about the star, along with its wish granting abilities, and having come to the conclusion that the citizens of Rosas will eventually realize his trickery is determined to seize it by force so that he can hold on to power and dispel all notions that he isn’t a mighty sorcerer once and for all. I think that would at least give his character a stronger motivation and then there's no question that he'd be an irredeemable villain you love to hate just like Jafar, Scar, Frollo, Maleficent, Cruella, Ursula, etc. Maybe it’s not the most original story but I think it would be more entertaining to watch than what we got.
1:04 is that a pirate hat I see? 👀
The fact that so many people are making their versions of this movie and all of the versions are so much better than the movie is honestly saying a lot about Disney.
Perfect version! I love your Wish!
Maybe Star was symbolic of Ashas magic? Thats why it was so small and new?
Alternate title: A ramdom person doez better than a disney AI- Uh I mean "writer"
Good video! What did you do to anger the YT gods to make your channel so underrated?
I just don’t upload as frequently as most do! But I’m trying to! Thank you sm!