You are quite good at this. Much better, I suspect, than you realize. I look forward to the rest of this one, and I've been hoping for and looking forward to the completion of the Kenobi series. 👍
Wow, actually engaging. It's crazy for there to be character moments and emotion from characters and character motives be revealed from dialog and small moments. The moment of Baylin realizing who Huyang is and deciding not to destroy him is so good. It shows that he is different from a Sith and respects the existence of knowledge. He may be a dark side user but he does not seek destruction of everything around him to keep power.
I'm pretty sure the intention was to also have baylin briefly remember huyang, considering it was highly likely that huyang once taught baylin to build a lightsaber long ago
This is so much better so far. Please keep going. The moment you had Shin cut off Sabine's hand I thought Sabine needs to build herself a besksr cyborg hand that has a kyber crystal in it for some sort of ranged weapon (like Ezra's "staple gun" or a laser dagger. That's what I would do!
PLEASE KEEP IT GOING!!! Lol. I'm a long time follower of your channels and story time with your fan fictions is my favorite. Not to say I don't enjoy your poll videos or news from Naboo discussions with your wife as well. It's just been a while since you've done something like this and it's good to have it back.
I really like how you handle exposition in this rewrite. The show needed a lot of exposition to stand on it's own, but you make it work by having it between characters who don't know this stuff or don't have the full picture. Answers a lot of questions we had too. Also like how you keep Baylan consistent with his writing in the show, but having a greater focus on his sense of honor is cool.
I’m very invested in this! Loved the exchange between Ahsoka and Sabine about the promise to Ezra and background they have-that conversation alone did so much to set up the rest of the story and understand the stakes so much more than the show did. Would love to see where your version goes next!
21:00 so Sabine is working on the mural from the Rebels epilogue. This means that in your story, Sabine would have a robot hand with fake flesh in the epilogue scenelike Luke had at the end of ESB. While this is a better alternative than the controversial stab, I think the severed hand thing is a little overdone. In my version of the Ahsoka series that is still in the thought process, Shin cuts off Sabine's leg to have the same effect but not be too similar.
Robotic leg is more unique, but we got to a point where robotic hands have become rare, they weren't in the sequels and also haven't been used since, so it's been quite a while since they did that, nowadays what happens is people constantly surviving stabs
Biggest fun part in this rewrite is that for a show titled ahsoka, surprisingly ahsoka is a focal character. Being trapped in a force trance and learning within it is a great way to keep an op character occupied yet still engaging to watch while our secondary characters struggle to win/survive. I automatically like this sabine far more. Obviously it feels more connected to the frustrated teenage sabine we knew who is older and wiser now but still carries that fiery spirit. Also shin has actual emotion and drive. We got hints of it in the actual show on peridea how she does enjoy strength and power in a typical bad guy way, but nothing that grounded that idea to her character. Making her an impetuous padawan who never had the order to “indoctrinate” her into more control and peaceful/just centered individual-would seem very on brand for a padawan trained as a “dark jedi”
Awesome! Please keep this up! I would love to see how you handle Thrawn! Also, I like how you tied in that staff which for no reason was retconned in the show! Great job!
Keep em coming. Unlike a lot of other Star Wars TH-camrs that do this sort of thing, your stories are more compelling. Not saying the others aren't good but yours are just made better. Still waiting on that Obi Wan one from a year or two ago.
Very enjoyable story time, Thor! The setup is already much more interesting than what we got in the show and it actually makes sense regarding worldbuilding and characters. You get it.
This continuation was even more entertaining and captivating than the rewirte of first ep. I enjoyed it immensely. Your storytelling is perfect for me. I hope you are enjoying writing and reading us your stories as much as I love listening to them. Thank you for continuing this series and I would love of you continue it all the way. I loved how in the beginning it was all a continuous one long scene which had great pacing and interesting dialog. Interactions between characters and their important dialogs are present (unlike in live actions shows where long pauses are the main thing) and well shaped, and are naturally presented and continued from previous moments in past into the continuations of dialogs which follow. Also your acting out the voices is super enjoyable for me to listen. For my tastes, you are doing great job of sounding the dialog lines from each of the characters. You are going for just the right amount of "role-playing" the voices, so it's very nice addition to the storytelling process and not overdone, not artificial, not overacted, but pleasant and fun. I cannot overstate how great your story videos lile this are making me feel and how entertained they keep me. I love stories in general, star wars stories, and yours are the right format for me. Keep up the great work! Do as many stories as you want and as fast as you can keep them coming. Cause I don't think I will ever be bored of your stories nor have gotten enough of them, no matter what story plot you decide to write about. But don't hurry your imagination and writing process you already have going, so you don't compromise the quality for quantity. Thank you!
This Dark Force Rising season is kinda becoming a banger! I can't wait for version 1 of StoryboardGPT to take your content and provide instant animated storyboard video and character audio to your narration.
Hey Tor,BRAVO on your storytelling here!I'm going to the link to here the 1st part that i missed! I haven't been this pleasantly surprised since that TH-camr made a better cgi Luke Skywalker that Lucasfilm ended up using in the Pamphlet of Boba Fett.Didn't they end up hiring him??They should pay you to write for them from here on out, if there is to be a season 2!
I like they way you fixed both ahsoka and Sabine's characters, the smallest things like Sabine's aggressive reactions or the sassy jokes that jedi like Ahsoka give during tense situation were really needed. We also needed more hands cut off! Yunno, actual consequences and adversity!!... its just a lot more interesting the way you wrote it so by all means continue!!
15.10 - it is funny, i just wrote a scene in my story "The First Jedi", where the hero is surrounded by the ghosts of the ancient rulers of the galaxy, only that they are glowing in blue.
Hey Thor. While I’m fairly new to your channel, this is easily my favorite couple of posts. Have you done more fan fiction like this in the past? If you have, please provide links. I’m completely hooked on this one and hope you continue. I can’t believe how quickly you put it together. And your reading is perfection.
I've done many over the years, some of them quite long. Here's a link to one of the more popular ones I've done: th-cam.com/play/PLq7tc37E025g84PSk3KjEa3EDZyu2ocUL.html
I like the story and I can visualize everything that’s going on. The sad part is that you somewhat have to dumb the story down just to keep it relatively close to what we got and that’s what’s holding it back, but please continue. Oh, and another thing… thank you for not fake killing Sabine just so that she can be fully recovered the next day.
Honestly this reminds me of the second biggest dissapointment with Sabine's "jedi" arc in Ahsoka... One no-one talks about. It has no "Art", no "personality". Rebels had the most innovative lightsaber design when Ezra made his first lightsaber, a "stun" "slingshot/blaster", with Sabine we have an artist who held the darksaber and she never tried customizing the lightsaber at all, nor did she customize her lightsaber to work with her armor? Why not for example have installed some kind of strap/ring that enables her to use her armor's targetting system to aim assist her grapnel to her lightsaber for easy retrieval as a crutch Ahsoka either disapproves of or openly lauds as a genius replacement for her inadequate force abilities(giving Sabine a complex she is an inadequate apprentice), attatch a guard, or a paint dispenser, SOMETHING to show her unique approaches to problem solving. Even R2D2 wielded the lightsaber more uniquely than she does and it really bugs me. Edit: even just paint or waiting until Ezra says it was hers would be fine, just SOMETHING, heck it would even give them MORE overpriced lightsaber merch and personally i would love if in season 2 Hu-Yang taught her Corran Horn's lighsaber bulding technique after she finds a Kyber Crystal and she makes the first L-A 2-stage lightsaber in the new canon.
This is amazing! Sorry to hear the videos aren't doing as well as your others, but if you're passionate about this video series, we will love listening to it until the end. I was debating whether I should wait until it's finished so I can binge it but this is too much fun. Also, have you considered using an AI tool to generate images that match your story? I've seen it done elsewhere and really enjoyed it
I would say, please continue and do go back, redo the first part more in this fashion, and when you’re done slap them all together into one big long video.
Pretty good Thor, your a natural narrator, you should consider applying to Audible. No seriously good version of the Ashoka storyline. I can tell you spent some serious time on this. Good job and props bro.
I think the end should’ve kept one of the best scenes of ahsoka, where Sabine doesn’t keep trying to force push her and she uses her mando gear, instead of what you did. Like that the plot armor got broken a bit but she should use her gear
Sabine can still use her mando gear to advantage in the fight with the merc jedi girl, but still gets OP due to jedi and force pushed like a rag doll away.
What is that I smell?? Is that the start of a… Character Arc?? No, couldn’t be. They don’t have those in Star Wars anymore. Good work man! I’m interested to see where this goes!!
Thank you Thor for providing a much better story than what was produced. Which again, makes me baffled why it felt as though Filoni didn't have someone with 'quality control' skills to refine his story. While Thor's verson would've probably been a 9 or 10, even if only a fraction of his ideas were used the overall show could've been raised to at least 'good' rather than 'mid', in my opinion.
I just don't think the exposition works of previous rebels episodes. I think it's hard to weave that in seamlessly and tbh it seems forced either way but idk it's a very interesting re write. Really like the better fleshed out reasoning behind ahsokas choices. Just my take.
Finishing up my second watch through of Ahsoka & probably enjoyed it more this time around. Big question is how does Baylan know Ezra is on Peridea ? Is that common knowledge because the series doesn’t explain this…?
I wonder how long it will be until one can just feed this script into an AI and have it spit out visuals. I think I would enjoy this more than the TV show.
How funny would it be if it turned out that Thrawn had no interest in coming back to galvanize the Empire, what if Ezra and Thrawn had to band together to survive and actually become friends as Ezra learns why Thrawn was a part of the Empire and the threat to his people that would have been a much more interesting way to take the story
Sorry Thor, but this sucks because none of the characters are black, gay or trans. You could change this in future episodes though. Just kidding great work!
The work done here to rehabilitate Sabine’s character and also make her padawan/jedi potential palatable os exactly what the series needed. She was by far my least favorite part of Ashoka, having loved her in Rebels. This fixes her.
@@thorskywalker nice. Love the story, way more engaging than what we got. I really wished they did have Lothal's jedi temple in the series. It makes alot of sense considering the puzzle to open the WBW was constellations with 3 beings doing different hand gestures and the map to perides was in a temple surrounded by 3 beings all doing different hand gestures. It would have been such a great opportunity to tell new viewers about Ezra saving Ahsoka like you have done in your story. The characters motives and reasoning behind them are defiantly clearer in your version. I'm currently doing my own Ahsoka rewrite which doesnt have Sabine use the force. The first fight between her and Shin would be like the show were Sabine only has a Saber but loses it to Shin, there fight on seatos would have Sabine fight purely as a mandalorian, jetpack and all but still lose with Shin getting away and then a 3rd on peridea where she gets the saber back and incorparates both her mandalorian and "jedi" fighting style and leads to her being able to hold her own against Shin.
Thor, you and literally everyone else whose tried this on TH-cam has improved upon this show. Showing how much of a dumpster fire of a writer Dave filloni is. He shouldn’t write/direct.
Will Ahsoka ever die? Genuine question I’ve been considering. She’s not a skywalker or a necessary for the sequels.. Shouldn’t she eventually die or will Disney never kill off main characters?
I had to laugh at your story. No, I didn't laugh because I thought it was stupid or something. I laughed because when you hear another person's story of how it could have been, it makes you realize that the show was even worse than you originally thought.
You don't need to insult Dave Filoni. I'll do it for you. He's a bad writer. 'Ahsoka' was the first time he was given free rein on a project and he failed miserably. 'The Clone Wars' was written by others. 'Rebels' was written by others. He did write the last four episodes of TCW Season Seven, which were good, but as he had a specific start point and end point in the story, Dave didn't have a lot of room to think outside of the box. 'Ahsoka' was littered with stupidity, and at this point I feel like the only audience for that show are the people that will hungrily consume any product pushed out the door at Lucasfilm. Dave loves these characters too much to write them in any way that could be considered compelling.
Here's a link to Part One if you missed it: th-cam.com/video/NFbRT0CaR8M/w-d-xo.html
you should be hired by dizney prefer your version to the original 10/10
You are quite good at this. Much better, I suspect, than you realize.
I look forward to the rest of this one, and I've been hoping for and looking forward to the completion of the Kenobi series. 👍
I can already see that your version of the Ahsoka show is way better than the snooze fest we ended up getting.
Wow, actually engaging. It's crazy for there to be character moments and emotion from characters and character motives be revealed from dialog and small moments. The moment of Baylin realizing who Huyang is and deciding not to destroy him is so good. It shows that he is different from a Sith and respects the existence of knowledge. He may be a dark side user but he does not seek destruction of everything around him to keep power.
Exactly! I too am amazed at this. I too love these sorts of little details Thor pays attention to.
I'm pretty sure the intention was to also have baylin briefly remember huyang, considering it was highly likely that huyang once taught baylin to build a lightsaber long ago
Thank you for bringing back the story writing videos!! They’ve always been my favorite. Still bummed you never finished your Kenobi rewrite!
I'll probably go back and finish it after this. I was working on it until this idea pulled me in...
@@thorskywalker so glad to hear that! You had me totally hooked!!
What you have put forth is already better than what we've gotten from Disney. Keep up the good work
Definitely! Listening to Thor here is like listening to an audio book of the show we should've gotten.
This is so much better so far. Please keep going.
The moment you had Shin cut off Sabine's hand I thought Sabine needs to build herself a besksr cyborg hand that has a kyber crystal in it for some sort of ranged weapon (like Ezra's "staple gun" or a laser dagger.
That's what I would do!
PLEASE KEEP IT GOING!!! Lol. I'm a long time follower of your channels and story time with your fan fictions is my favorite. Not to say I don't enjoy your poll videos or news from Naboo discussions with your wife as well. It's just been a while since you've done something like this and it's good to have it back.
I really like how you handle exposition in this rewrite. The show needed a lot of exposition to stand on it's own, but you make it work by having it between characters who don't know this stuff or don't have the full picture. Answers a lot of questions we had too.
Also like how you keep Baylan consistent with his writing in the show, but having a greater focus on his sense of honor is cool.
DONT STOP!!!! I need to hear thus out! I yelled out when shin took ezra’s blade!!! So hyped! Great work man
I’m very invested in this! Loved the exchange between Ahsoka and Sabine about the promise to Ezra and background they have-that conversation alone did so much to set up the rest of the story and understand the stakes so much more than the show did. Would love to see where your version goes next!
21:00 so Sabine is working on the mural from the Rebels epilogue. This means that in your story, Sabine would have a robot hand with fake flesh in the epilogue scenelike Luke had at the end of ESB.
While this is a better alternative than the controversial stab, I think the severed hand thing is a little overdone. In my version of the Ahsoka series that is still in the thought process, Shin cuts off Sabine's leg to have the same effect but not be too similar.
Robotic leg is more unique, but we got to a point where robotic hands have become rare, they weren't in the sequels and also haven't been used since, so it's been quite a while since they did that, nowadays what happens is people constantly surviving stabs
Biggest fun part in this rewrite is that for a show titled ahsoka, surprisingly ahsoka is a focal character. Being trapped in a force trance and learning within it is a great way to keep an op character occupied yet still engaging to watch while our secondary characters struggle to win/survive.
I automatically like this sabine far more. Obviously it feels more connected to the frustrated teenage sabine we knew who is older and wiser now but still carries that fiery spirit.
Also shin has actual emotion and drive. We got hints of it in the actual show on peridea how she does enjoy strength and power in a typical bad guy way, but nothing that grounded that idea to her character. Making her an impetuous padawan who never had the order to “indoctrinate” her into more control and peaceful/just centered individual-would seem very on brand for a padawan trained as a “dark jedi”
Heeee's baaaack. Proud of you Thor! I hope you enjoy writing these as much as we enjoy listening.
I really like how you're fixing the ways of the Jedi and how they're supposed to act/react in situations.
I really wish Dave had tried this...
Rewriting his first draft I mean.
Awesome! Please keep this up! I would love to see how you handle Thrawn! Also, I like how you tied in that staff which for no reason was retconned in the show! Great job!
Keep em coming. Unlike a lot of other Star Wars TH-camrs that do this sort of thing, your stories are more compelling. Not saying the others aren't good but yours are just made better. Still waiting on that Obi Wan one from a year or two ago.
Very enjoyable story time, Thor! The setup is already much more interesting than what we got in the show and it actually makes sense regarding worldbuilding and characters. You get it.
This continuation was even more entertaining and captivating than the rewirte of first ep. I enjoyed it immensely.
Your storytelling is perfect for me. I hope you are enjoying writing and reading us your stories as much as I love listening to them.
Thank you for continuing this series and I would love of you continue it all the way.
I loved how in the beginning it was all a continuous one long scene which had great pacing and interesting dialog.
Interactions between characters and their important dialogs are present (unlike in live actions shows where long pauses are the main thing) and well shaped, and are naturally presented and continued from previous moments in past into the continuations of dialogs which follow.
Also your acting out the voices is super enjoyable for me to listen. For my tastes, you are doing great job of sounding the dialog lines from each of the characters. You are going for just the right amount of "role-playing" the voices, so it's very nice addition to the storytelling process and not overdone, not artificial, not overacted, but pleasant and fun.
I cannot overstate how great your story videos lile this are making me feel and how entertained they keep me. I love stories in general, star wars stories, and yours are the right format for me.
Keep up the great work! Do as many stories as you want and as fast as you can keep them coming. Cause I don't think I will ever be bored of your stories nor have gotten enough of them, no matter what story plot you decide to write about.
But don't hurry your imagination and writing process you already have going, so you don't compromise the quality for quantity.
Thank you!
Incredible work Thor, I can't wait for the next part.
I really like your version so far! Definitely want to see where this goes!
So good to hear these stories once more, they were always my favourite part of your channel.
Each part is getting better and better!
Thor you still have to do the HK-47 battle of the heroes and villains.
Don't stop reminding him.
@@simonyesh I have a meme for Meme Monday to help with that.
Amazing! Keep up the great work Thor!!
I love what could’ve been
I'm liking the direction so far.
Excellent work and better than what we actually got. Please continue!
Very good Thor! You fluidly include important exposition into your version of the story. And the Shin vs. Sabine fight is very well done!
So happy you’re doing your own stories again. I always love these videos
This Dark Force Rising season is kinda becoming a banger! I can't wait for version 1 of StoryboardGPT to take your content and provide instant animated storyboard video and character audio to your narration.
This was excellent. Keep it up, Thor.
Holy doodoo Thor, this is so much better than what we got
I hope you continue I'm genuinely curious how your version plays out. It's already more engaging than what we got.
Just like your Kenobi series, this actually made me feel things and want more, amazing writing
I love your version of Ahsoka thank you. 😊 please more more 🙏
I really enjoyed the conversation between Ahsoka and Sabine, great job!
Hey Tor,BRAVO on your storytelling here!I'm going to the link to here the 1st part that i missed! I haven't been this pleasantly surprised since that TH-camr made a better cgi Luke Skywalker that Lucasfilm ended up using in the Pamphlet of Boba Fett.Didn't they end up hiring him??They should pay you to write for them from here on out, if there is to be a season 2!
Yay! Good job! I super enjoy your fanfics! 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻 hahaha! I love Huyang being all snarky!
Holy diver! Thor, you made this TEN times better than Disney! Can you do this for Mandalorian S3?
Damn. It's so much better than what we got
This was so good! Looking forward to part 3 😄
I like they way you fixed both ahsoka and Sabine's characters, the smallest things like Sabine's aggressive reactions or the sassy jokes that jedi like Ahsoka give during tense situation were really needed. We also needed more hands cut off! Yunno, actual consequences and adversity!!... its just a lot more interesting the way you wrote it so by all means continue!!
What if Ahsoka wasn't an indecisive memberberry mess that had a plan and sense of direction
When disney offers u a contract dont take it
ah dismemberment it is truly the star wars way
Brilliant. Keep up the good work
Can’t wait to see what you do next!!
I’ve been waiting for you to get back to telling stories…you definitely excel at what you enjoy.
15.10 - it is funny, i just wrote a scene in my story "The First Jedi", where the hero is surrounded by the ghosts of the ancient rulers of the galaxy, only that they are glowing in blue.
Love to see again this type of rewrites is increible to improve a good history
Hey Thor. While I’m fairly new to your channel, this is easily my favorite couple of posts. Have you done more fan fiction like this in the past? If you have, please provide links. I’m completely hooked on this one and hope you continue. I can’t believe how quickly you put it together. And your reading is perfection.
I've done many over the years, some of them quite long. Here's a link to one of the more popular ones I've done: th-cam.com/play/PLq7tc37E025g84PSk3KjEa3EDZyu2ocUL.html
He has a series called knights of the forsaken order
OH MY GOD someone writing Star Wars who understands theme. I didn’t think that existed outside of Andor.
I like the story and I can visualize everything that’s going on. The sad part is that you somewhat have to dumb the story down just to keep it relatively close to what we got and that’s what’s holding it back, but please continue. Oh, and another thing… thank you for not fake killing Sabine just so that she can be fully recovered the next day.
Honestly this reminds me of the second biggest dissapointment with Sabine's "jedi" arc in Ahsoka... One no-one talks about.
It has no "Art", no "personality".
Rebels had the most innovative lightsaber design when Ezra made his first lightsaber, a "stun" "slingshot/blaster", with Sabine we have an artist who held the darksaber and she never tried customizing the lightsaber at all, nor did she customize her lightsaber to work with her armor?
Why not for example have installed some kind of strap/ring that enables her to use her armor's targetting system to aim assist her grapnel to her lightsaber for easy retrieval as a crutch Ahsoka either disapproves of or openly lauds as a genius replacement for her inadequate force abilities(giving Sabine a complex she is an inadequate apprentice), attatch a guard, or a paint dispenser, SOMETHING to show her unique approaches to problem solving.
Even R2D2 wielded the lightsaber more uniquely than she does and it really bugs me.
Edit: even just paint or waiting until Ezra says it was hers would be fine, just SOMETHING, heck it would even give them MORE overpriced lightsaber merch and personally i would love if in season 2 Hu-Yang taught her Corran Horn's lighsaber bulding technique after she finds a Kyber Crystal and she makes the first L-A 2-stage lightsaber in the new canon.
Yes!!!! Outstanding 👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻
This is amazing! Sorry to hear the videos aren't doing as well as your others, but if you're passionate about this video series, we will love listening to it until the end. I was debating whether I should wait until it's finished so I can binge it but this is too much fun. Also, have you considered using an AI tool to generate images that match your story? I've seen it done elsewhere and really enjoyed it
Definitely continue please
I would say, please continue and do go back, redo the first part more in this fashion, and when you’re done slap them all together into one big long video.
Pretty good Thor, your a natural narrator, you should consider applying to Audible. No seriously good version of the Ashoka storyline. I can tell you spent some serious time on this. Good job and props bro.
Can’t believe there wasn’t enough traction … I Stan
I think the end should’ve kept one of the best scenes of ahsoka, where Sabine doesn’t keep trying to force push her and she uses her mando gear, instead of what you did. Like that the plot armor got broken a bit but she should use her gear
Sabine can still use her mando gear to advantage in the fight with the merc jedi girl, but still gets OP due to jedi and force pushed like a rag doll away.
I really liked this one. Even more than the first.
Sounds way better than what filoni wrote
What is that I smell?? Is that the start of a… Character Arc?? No, couldn’t be. They don’t have those in Star Wars anymore.
Good work man! I’m interested to see where this goes!!
Thank you Thor for providing a much better story than what was produced. Which again, makes me baffled why it felt as though Filoni didn't have someone with 'quality control' skills to refine his story. While Thor's verson would've probably been a 9 or 10, even if only a fraction of his ideas were used the overall show could've been raised to at least 'good' rather than 'mid', in my opinion.
I just don't think the exposition works of previous rebels episodes. I think it's hard to weave that in seamlessly and tbh it seems forced either way but idk it's a very interesting re write. Really like the better fleshed out reasoning behind ahsokas choices. Just my take.
Can't wait for Part Three
Finishing up my second watch through of Ahsoka & probably enjoyed it more this time around.
Big question is how does Baylan know Ezra is on Peridea ? Is that common knowledge because the series doesn’t explain this…?
So did Shin keep Ezra’s light saber?
This is SO much better! Disney needs to hire you!
Story telling in the corporate world is a lost art maybe they'd should look outside the box for answers.
Once you're done with this series I recommend making it into one long video which should help with views since views tend to drop off after part 1
Ok this is epic
this what should had happen in the duel . ahhh so good limb cut and anger make a better story and better character
I wonder how long it will be until one can just feed this script into an AI and have it spit out visuals.
I think I would enjoy this more than the TV show.
Took 5 minutes in to realize this was going to be better than what we got because it has exposition, unlike the show
Yes please.
How funny would it be if it turned out that Thrawn had no interest in coming back to galvanize the Empire, what if Ezra and Thrawn had to band together to survive and actually become friends as Ezra learns why Thrawn was a part of the Empire and the threat to his people that would have been a much more interesting way to take the story
Why would Huyang know Kanan as Kanan. Would he not know Caleb Dune?
That's something that would technically get answered in the first episode...
Sorry Thor, but this sucks because none of the characters are black, gay or trans.
You could change this in future episodes though.
Just kidding great work!
The work done here to rehabilitate Sabine’s character and also make her padawan/jedi potential palatable os exactly what the series needed. She was by far my least favorite part of Ashoka, having loved her in Rebels. This fixes her.
Excited for part 3 but the title for the video probably needs some work
It does and it will get a change here as soon as I figure out the best way to 'market' this series, lol
So when are you finishing Obi Wan?
Did Shin take the saber with her?
Yes.
@@thorskywalker nice. Love the story, way more engaging than what we got. I really wished they did have Lothal's jedi temple in the series. It makes alot of sense considering the puzzle to open the WBW was constellations with 3 beings doing different hand gestures and the map to perides was in a temple surrounded by 3 beings all doing different hand gestures. It would have been such a great opportunity to tell new viewers about Ezra saving Ahsoka like you have done in your story. The characters motives and reasoning behind them are defiantly clearer in your version.
I'm currently doing my own Ahsoka rewrite which doesnt have Sabine use the force. The first fight between her and Shin would be like the show were Sabine only has a Saber but loses it to Shin, there fight on seatos would have Sabine fight purely as a mandalorian, jetpack and all but still lose with Shin getting away and then a 3rd on peridea where she gets the saber back and incorparates both her mandalorian and "jedi" fighting style and leads to her being able to hold her own against Shin.
Did the writers upstage Ahsoka with Sabine?
Hey Thor. Nice story. Much prefer to watch this. Hey why not make some with Ai generated images would be great.
Actually, the nightsister in this was an AI image. I tried for several others but wasn't happy with the results.
Would love to hear your comment on the new South Park special
❤
Why aren't Lucas Film calling you when they need a good story? This has got to be more compelling than the actual dross we got served.
Keep going! A hand loss is a much better OT PT homage than a torso stab
Thor, you and literally everyone else whose tried this on TH-cam has improved upon this show. Showing how much of a dumpster fire of a writer Dave filloni is. He shouldn’t write/direct.
Will Ahsoka ever die? Genuine question I’ve been considering. She’s not a skywalker or a necessary for the sequels.. Shouldn’t she eventually die or will Disney never kill off main characters?
I had to laugh at your story. No, I didn't laugh because I thought it was stupid or something. I laughed because when you hear another person's story of how it could have been, it makes you realize that the show was even worse than you originally thought.
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I'm definitely enjoying this! But I'm not sure the severed hand thing needs to happen again in Star Wars
Well done, maybe Thor should give up youtube and join Lucas Films.
He doesn't put enough Mary sues in to get hired
You don't need to insult Dave Filoni. I'll do it for you. He's a bad writer. 'Ahsoka' was the first time he was given free rein on a project and he failed miserably. 'The Clone Wars' was written by others. 'Rebels' was written by others. He did write the last four episodes of TCW Season Seven, which were good, but as he had a specific start point and end point in the story, Dave didn't have a lot of room to think outside of the box. 'Ahsoka' was littered with stupidity, and at this point I feel like the only audience for that show are the people that will hungrily consume any product pushed out the door at Lucasfilm. Dave loves these characters too much to write them in any way that could be considered compelling.
If he loves them so much as they already were, why so many retcons?
@@АлексейМомот-щ7о because love them or not, he's not going to let previous writing stand in the way of doing whatever he wants to do.
@@djmtott then how is that loving the characters???
@@АлексейМомот-щ7о you can still love something and find room for "improvement".
Pretender !!!!
Nobody wants to see this poor and terrible fan fic version of a great series like Ahsoka, this is totally pointless