Amazing for a first piece! Though: "music is the space between the notes" - Debussy Some chords or accent, but almost a constant flow of 16ths. Calmer moment where it's suddenly dotted quarter notes but a bit on the nose that you are trying to do a calm section to contrast. If to be as intense as possible, many pieces don't do that and are, like hammered chords in the end of Mozart operas or that chords call for a resolution or that accents are used. If applying harmony, it's not everything. To put it simply: if everything is intense, nothing is. Seemingly constant rhythms like Beethoven fifth symphony actually has that pause after and fur elise ends sentences to continue them from the bass if you look at the sheet. But it's just my take, It's just that since it's your first piece I suppose you'd probably want feedback.
This has a very chopin-like feeling, and as much as i dislike chopin this is quite intresting. 7/10 I think it would be intresting if you had a randomness-type feel with the pedal. But I do wish you would make something more contemporary like ravel. Looking forward to your advancement in skill! Like @Burstz-qp3dh said. I think this would be more fit as a coda to a longer piece instead of an etude. 1:20 WTF????
I think you have some very cool ideas, and the way you use harmony is really interesting. However, I would personally prefer it if you made your pieces playable. I feel like you as a composer might also benefit by writing a piece that does not rely on virtuosity for musical effect. That way, it will feel like your music has more intention. This comes from a place of goodwill, I really want to see you grow, and I support your music. Keep it up!
@pentyne0 I think a big theme is your placement of double stops. It's quite obvious that the point of this etude is dexterity in both hands with a lot of contraction and expansion in motion. However, looking at the first three measures, that run down in 6ths in msr2 is extremely hard at the given tempo. I'm sure that some super proficient pianists could play that but it just feels a bit out of place. The next measure (msr 3) has a double stop jump in the left hand, once again, probably not impossible but it feels unnecessarily hard. The right hand in measure 3 flows nicely, it fits the hand but still asks you to play it with a certain level of technique. I would try to maybe stay away from double stops in the left hand as much as possible in these fast kind of runs. The octaves mostly work I think but I haven't played through the whole piece yet. Another thing I would maybe consider reflecting on is your dynamic contrast. The piece is really loud and that loudness kind of loses its impact when the whole A section is fff.
Hello Pentyne. I want your permission to use your midi files from musescore to create a trello board for virtual piano sheet and for my own use. I will credit you and list you as the composer for them. If you dont know what they are, it is like sheets that you play with a computer keyboard by itself. Thanks for your reply if you do.
one of the rare times where a random composition recommended to me is actually rlly rlly well made.. I wanna play this in the future when I'll become good enough TwT
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The start sounds more like an ending to a piece but still sounds really great, as most people in here do i hope you have a bright future as a composer
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Like rachmaninoff piano concerto
This is absolutely amazing! And it's your first piece! Hope you make it far as a composer.
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우연히 알고리즘을 통해 들었는데 한국인이신 거에 놀랐고 수준급 이상의 작곡을 하셔서 두 번째로 놀랐습니다 앞으로 좋은 곡들 많이 작곡해주세요 귀호강하고 갑니당
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This is really incredible!! The development of the piece is amazing and it sounds great and flows nicely
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Wow, this is amazing for your very first piece! I'm sure you're going to go far as a composer ♥
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I love the Schumann influences
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very nice, especially for a first composition. keep it up
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God this is so cool 😭
You did an excellent job with this! Super dramatic and intense, and a great use of pedal. Looking forward to hearing more 😁
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This is surprisingly good. Thankyou for improving my day :)
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Very creative and suprising piece!
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This is very amazing for a first composition, keep up the good work.
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kinda hard but really cool!!!! would love to see someone play it! keep up!
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Bellissimo! Congratulazioni!
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Someday, I will play it because your etude is cool
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🎉🎉🎉🎉bravo arkadaş
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Do you like Schumann? Much resemblance. Bravo you have bright future ahead of you
Thank you! I like romantic composers very much.
Pieces are too hard, but this is in the right direction! Man I wish I knew music theory so I could compose such textures as well
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very interesting
Amazing for a first piece!
Though: "music is the space between the notes" - Debussy
Some chords or accent, but almost a constant flow of 16ths. Calmer moment where it's suddenly dotted quarter notes but a bit on the nose that you are trying to do a calm section to contrast. If to be as intense as possible, many pieces don't do that and are, like hammered chords in the end of Mozart operas or that chords call for a resolution or that accents are used. If applying harmony, it's not everything. To put it simply: if everything is intense, nothing is. Seemingly constant rhythms like Beethoven fifth symphony actually has that pause after and fur elise ends sentences to continue them from the bass if you look at the sheet.
But it's just my take, It's just that since it's your first piece I suppose you'd probably want feedback.
Thank you for the advice!
A etude in the bast minor key
Cool
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This has a very chopin-like feeling, and as much as i dislike chopin this is quite intresting. 7/10
I think it would be intresting if you had a randomness-type feel with the pedal. But I do wish you would make something more contemporary like ravel. Looking forward to your advancement in skill!
Like @Burstz-qp3dh said. I think this would be more fit as a coda to a longer piece instead of an etude.
1:20 WTF????
Thank you! Since this is my first work, there are some crazy parts to it.
I think you have some very cool ideas, and the way you use harmony is really interesting. However, I would personally prefer it if you made your pieces playable. I feel like you as a composer might also benefit by writing a piece that does not rely on virtuosity for musical effect. That way, it will feel like your music has more intention.
This comes from a place of goodwill, I really want to see you grow, and I support your music. Keep it up!
Thanks for the advice! I have plans to revise my works later. As you said, my early pieces are so difficult to play...
@pentyne0 Constructive criticism is how we grow :D
If you want advice on how playable or accessible some parts are, I'm willing to help!
@@muffinrl If you give me some advice, I'll reflect it when revising later!
@pentyne0 I think a big theme is your placement of double stops. It's quite obvious that the point of this etude is dexterity in both hands with a lot of contraction and expansion in motion. However, looking at the first three measures, that run down in 6ths in msr2 is extremely hard at the given tempo. I'm sure that some super proficient pianists could play that but it just feels a bit out of place. The next measure (msr 3) has a double stop jump in the left hand, once again, probably not impossible but it feels unnecessarily hard. The right hand in measure 3 flows nicely, it fits the hand but still asks you to play it with a certain level of technique.
I would try to maybe stay away from double stops in the left hand as much as possible in these fast kind of runs. The octaves mostly work I think but I haven't played through the whole piece yet.
Another thing I would maybe consider reflecting on is your dynamic contrast. The piece is really loud and that loudness kind of loses its impact when the whole A section is fff.
@@muffinrl I got it. Thank you again for your advice!
Who was/were the inspiration(s)?
At the time, I listened to Rachmaninoff's Tarantella from Suite No. 2 a lot, so I think I was quite inspired by it.
how often do you try playing your pieces?
These days, I barely have time to play the piano because of my studies, so I can't play it much.
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“We will watch your career with great interest”
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Good piece, i also made some Etudes if yall want to check
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Hello Pentyne. I want your permission to use your midi files from musescore to create a trello board for virtual piano sheet and for my own use. I will credit you and list you as the composer for them. If you dont know what they are, it is like sheets that you play with a computer keyboard by itself. Thanks for your reply if you do.
You can use it! If you have any problems using it, please let me know.
Really good but seems impossible to play
I agree. I think nobody could play it perfectly at its original tempo.
@@pentyne0Would you accept slower?
@@happypiano4810 Yes, most of my works need revising due to their difficulty. When revising this piece, I will think a lot about the tempo.
@@pentyne0naw, I think the monsters out there would destroy this.
one of the rare times where a random composition recommended to me is actually rlly rlly well made..
I wanna play this in the future when I'll become good enough TwT
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Si me dices que es de liszt o cerny me la creiria 😅
¡gracias!