I see a lot of critical comments, too bad they could not get beyond some of the minor stuff and just enjoy, the movie was free, thank you for the download.
I know this comment is four years old. But I have to put my 2 cents in anyway. Criticism is how we learn and grow in all ways. Especially in making stuff like this. Minor stuff can break a production. I know that from experience. That said, this was a pretty fun ride of a proof of concept. I hope these guys and gals keep going
@@Directorraul Just got back here ... I did like it, by the way. I felt badly for that cop at the end; you know that wasn't going to end well... and he DID warn them.
@ 3:28 "Let's get the team together". I swear all I can see is Scooby & Shaggy getting the rest of the gang and hopping into the Mystery Machine! LMAO!
I understand the acting isn’t gonna be top notch with these short films but that doesn’t stop me from enjoying the film , I honestly love the cheesiness of some of these films , I actually enjoy it more than most new horror films that come out . Great job keep it up and you will all only get better in time
@@justkeepswimming8335 I have too forsure, I’m not gonna rewatch to remember why I commented this but I’m assuming this one had some sort of charm even without amazing acting though
Old post, I know. But man, I was thinking the same thing. I felt bad for that guy who was working hard. Most professors don't fail students unless they do nothing at all. But he did try.
Everyone involved in this movie did a great job. We all learn something new everyday. The scenic parts of the movie were fantastic. Hopefully you'll be putting out a new short movie soon
yeah - I’m sure the cop wouldn’t have left them if it were close to 12 when they got there - not realistic to believe they worked on the lock for hours
Out of all the comments I read no one addresses the "boy" comment. Why in almost every horror movie when someone stops at the gas station the attendant always has to be racist or use racist comments? Why does that even have to be included in this short and every other movie over and over again? We need to get past this.... But I digress 🤐
@@Directorraul Theres a lot for you to be very proud of, and Im sure the actors have improved with experience . Its a wonderful first film in every way for you. Iv subbed so il be watching. 💚☘
Sure was now that u mentioned it. Plus i really didn't like the way the attendant kept calling the young man "Boy"...he just kept calling him that like with a capital 'B'...yeah i noticed it. The movie wasn't all that bad...acting coulda been better but I've seen worse.
Even though it was kind of low-budget it was really scary and the characters were really good when you get warnings to stay away from a certain place it's best to do what I was scared watching this
I thoght it was very original, and creepy. Hope you continue making films. Don't pay any kind to all the haters, they sure as hell aren't making movies. Good luck!!
Linda Oglesby@Raul Colon, I noticed that some remarks were from a year ago. Guess what, it's a year later and I'm watching you today, right NOW!!! Thank YOU for THIS MOVIE and I REALLY LIKE IT!👍🤩⭐🤗
Should call this movie “Don’t Split Up” - rule 1 of horror movies man, don’t go off alone! Some really nice cinematography, lighting and sound. The editing was really nice towards the end. You got all the technical skills down, you need to get a better script thats on par with your tech skills. The plot was just too cliche and predictable. The acting was so-so but did seem to get much better as the film progressed - maybe everyone settled down and got more comfortable in front of the camera. Maybe next time try shooting some of the action stuff first because there’s less talking and trying to act natural. Use their adrenaline for the high adrenaline scenes. Then once the actors get comfortable, do the ‘boring’ talking scenes, they may be more relaxed and natural at this point. I do appreciate this wasn’t a ‘found footage’ film too so thanks for that - nice job. Thanks for posting.
@@Directorraul Raul--- When people take the time, especially w4shep to review in a generous and tactful way about areas she/he thought need work, you should really reply with a comment that shows appreciation other than the "form letter" consisting of 7 words you use for everyone! Please take this as just constructive criticism. BTW you really are a talented person, the actors and story line just need work.
Barton and the actress who plays Judy are so natural with their acting. The other ones, it seems more forced. But I'm sure or at least I have hope that because this is almost 2 years old that they're acting has improved a lot more. Great short film though, really helpful for someone like myself studying film and acting.
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Good production values. BUT:- They looked too old to be students. He wanted to film a documentary, so why did they conduct a seance instead? It’s always “after midnight”, at any time of day. They didn’t need to unlock the chain to enter the room, they could just have stepped over it. A hotel bedroom with a glass panelled door - really? Why did they go there at night anyway?
In Greenland, this song is known by the name of Kipisarnarlunga Asasannut, which means To My Dear Missed Ones. It is about somebody, who had to leave his hometown for education. Greenland is a very big place, and back then, only a few folks left their safe environment for a higher education. In the 1950s, almost ALL folks went to Denmark to study. We are the former colony of Denmark.
sheryl BUTLER THANK YOU!! Someone else noticed, other than me! I thought, ok maybe it’s a first for them. But acting, has to come natural, and you act as natural as you can, to play a character. But the whole time I was watching this, 1. All I could focus on, were that dudes tribal tattoos, thinking 🤔 are they the real thing, or just for the camera... either one, they’re shocking! Just like his poor acting 🤦🏻♀️ 2. They start off with him, having a major sook, about having to pass his grades, and I’m thinking 🤔 again... Bro! You need to man up, and act like a man! Even the dude, who’s playing a homosexual guy, is acting more manly than this dude! Whimpering, like a sick puppy. Honestly made me want to puke 🤢 🤮 But. On a serious note. I wanted to stop, no sooner had I started. But, you know when the acting is that forced, and false, you begin to watch. I’m only in 5 minutes. I reckon I’ll be out, looking for another good short, in about, another three minutes. Shorts, just like any major film, has to grab your full attention. Mines very limited. So. It’s got to be a good one, from the get go, or, I’m outski! I’m just glad someone else noticed 💯🤞🏻🙏🏼
I liked it!! As long as you have a good story, and you tell it well that is really all that counts! I liked this video, you kids did good! Where is part 2??
23:29: We have this song too, in Greenland! During the 1950s, we had a lot of American soldiers, who made military bases, and the y both brought country music and Hawaiian music with them! We Greenlanders heard it, and kept the melodies, and added Greenlandic verses to them! :-D
That's one of the many things I love about music. You can change it up a little an make your own, make it unique. Along with numbers I think music can be a universal language. Perhaps one day even a intergalactic language. LoL Perhaps...
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Sooo many scenes of the van pulling into the gas station lol also I like how at 7:10 you see the van pass both gas tanks and then at 7:12 see it pull up to the first one
I'm only 5 minutes in, and just had to pause to comment that your actresses are winning Hair. Everyone else in the world can just go home, the race is over and those two ladies won. Just gorgeous. (Observed and commented from a place of "I want to ask one of them to do mine!" sisterhood, and not of "hur hur hur hur, pretty lady" creeping.)
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OMG! Terrifying! They were warned but wouldn't listen. Shocking and mysterious ending! Great job, guys. Kudos to everybody. Shows what you can do when you have a vision and A GREAT IDEA! This could easily be made into a full length movie. Awesome! 👍👍👹
Overall a great job, but there were some details that had me cackling - like the lock just being stuck through a random link in the middle of a single chain! That's not doing a damn thing
The opening scenes were simply amazing! I've only watched the beginning so far but it impressed me so much I had to comment before finishing the film lol. Well done!
I called BS from the gate first of all you would have got his teeth knocked out for calling him a boy twice and second of all you ain't got to tell black people twice not to go somewhere we ain't that damn thirsty so I give this movie a d minus
I saw every scary movie combined here. 1. Creepy gas station guy. 2. Warning sheriff. 3. "I feel evil" girl. 4. Typical zombie ghost? 5. Children singing? Why? 6. Room 13! Oooh!*Yawn* Okay, doing a documentary. Give plain detail. Simple, 1943 Girl dies at Chesterfield Hotel body never found. 1942. Lily Mason, Singer traveling with troupe. no criminal behavior just a nice girl in show circuit. Go to town and talk about the story. A waitress says Lily's sister lives in town. Part of same trope. 97yr old Judy Mason. She tells you she never looked for her sister. Didn't care after she stole her fiance. Both actually vanished! Good riddance. Investigation leads to cottage after info found at hotel from friend with psychic abilities finds a letter behind a painting. Go to with old music: "Don't sit under the apple tree" (*related to that era.) Kids find Lily and Jonathan at the cottage... mummified. Fragile Judy meets them there. She tells her story. Then tells grand son to take them to the pond. Get rid of them. But, the ghost of Lily and Johnathan kills Judy.
Just watched again and this short video is one of the best I've ever seen !! Thanks again Raul . Plz plz do a full length film . I know it will be awesome also ! I'm waiting 😀👏🙌
I thought this was shot and done professionally. Yes the acting could be better but you did I great job . The effects and mood were great . Keep on making movies and improving your craft .
Cinematography at the start with credits was awesome only good thing about this movie, actors seemed like they were acting in a porn movie(some even looked like them too) but not in a good way.
Hey Janani thanks for your feedback we shots this short film almost 4 years now I was still learning on outing together a cast and crew myself. We shot this in a day with zero money for noting.
I think the ambiance was good. The hotel looked authentic. The acting was way better than some shorts i have seen trust me. It doesnt always come naturally thats why actors take classes to work on their craft. I did notice a few mess ups in the dialogue but meh. The ghost i wouldnt have gone for the typical nightgown messy blonde. I would have had her in clothes from the time period she died but yes disheveled ,more dark eyes and smudged lipstick,bloody etc like she put up a fight before she was killed. The lighting was decent in the hotel. But watch transitioning from scene to scene it was abit too choppy. But hey i liked it i think there should be a part two.
😍.... With all my compliments👏!! The level of this movie is very very hight and this movie is wonderful as much as the greatest horror films which were famous in the history of the cinema. Great actors, great the cameraman and his ideas, and great the choose of the song on the end of the movie! I wish I watched another ones!
Why all those negative comments? Is it just to say something negative 😂 ? I like the light and the sound, and how the tension is building. Actors performance is convincing and the whole project is promising, with strong grasp of horror fundamentals. I enjoyed Babysitter and this is the second movie that I watched. And yes, I would like it to be full length too
The shorter white guy reminds me of Supreme Patty without the acne scars! He and the guy with the dark hair need some acting lessons. Badly. But otherwise, not so bad.
Not bad for only a day of filming and a very low budget. You didn’t waste time establishing your plot and motive. You did a nice job with the diversity of your settings. It has more potential. Best of luck in the future, keep hustling and congrats on actually materializing your dream. You can read on if you’re looking for more feedback or just take the encouragement and keep trucking. Of course, almost every film has its shortcomings and areas in which it can improve. One of the most distracting issues with this film is the choice of dialogue which had the characters say things there were sometimes unnecessary and sometimes downright awkward. For example, after the officer finished informing the students of three possible murders, one of the young students mentioned that, “something bad happened there”. Well, yes, the officer literally just talked about one homicide and two disappearances that were never solved-it’s obvious something bad happened. The next issue involved two problems: lack of tension and lack of scenes through which your audience comes to care about your characters. Without these two things, a film can read like a news report instead of a piece of entertainment. Sometimes filmmakers broadcast what is going to happen to the character before it happens and it diminishes any tension that they have attempted to build. Making the characters go off one by one is an obvious red flag that they’re going to die and at that point, many people stop caring. Even zooming too close on a character’s face when they are simply looking through a hotel can kill tension because unless you have them react to something horrible or they unexpectedly get a knife through the face, the audience knows that nothing is going to happen until that face shot is over. They aren’t constantly checking the background setting for possible sightings of killers or ghost because you’ve taken that away with a face zoom. As far as caring about these characters, if we don’t care that they die because we know next to nothing about them, the film suffers from our indifference. Lastly, the asshole character trope usually serves a purpose: he’s rich and people are his friends to benefit from his money; he’s famous and people are drawn to the fame; he’s a childhood friend and he has redeeming qualities. Point being, Ed had nothing that identified why a group of decent people would continuously put up with him and he felt extremely out of place, as if he was just there for the head count.
so many issues: why was the electricity still on? why was it so damn dark you could hardly see anything even in the hallway with the overhead light? how did the cop get there so quickly? why did the guy who called the cop say they were in the woods/he didn’t know where they were? why did the cop say they wanted fresh eyes to get clues but to stay out of room 13 (presumably where the clues would be)? I could go on and on... the premise could potentially be promising, especially since it was based on a true story (I doubt anything to do with the Scooby Doo crew was true), but it needs a lot of work
Raul Colon you are welcome - I didn’t expect you to read that or i would have been less of an ass about it. you are definitely talented and most of what i listed was just nit-picking; I do think this is a good basis for a movie. I, too, believe you will keep getting better - and your positive response to a critique is a big reason why. I’m looking forward to seeing even bigger and better things from you! ❤️
OK acting, but waaay too dark, even for mood. Plus, the gas station scene was not good. It was immediately recognizable as an historic prop (with the push button for history next to the door and the scenic attraction sign above it). Otherwise, ok
Well I’m gonna be honest I did not find their acting awful I Personally thought they were really good.. it’s not a Hollywood movie at the end of the day, Maybe one day they will be or producers etc! Fabulous effect for novices, it’s a Yes off me 😁
i have seen a lot of TH-cam shorts and do not agree with most of the comments... For a short film oi found the acting very refreshing.... im not a pro. but i m 6 min in and although is a slow start it is entertaining to me.... thank you
Everyone complaining about actors' play?! Come on, dudes, you expected Bollywood or what? These guys play exactly the way real life relations and conversations go. With the cockiness of the locals and small talks, goofiness of some students. They do not need to walk around with a camera like brainless vloggers. The story is about them investigating first and then making a documentary. The only thing I missed were scarier effects for example, they were bit predictable.
It would be nice if someone could come up with an original idea to get the 'crew' to film the location and the story without resorting to a very cliché and worn out 'film students going to film something they should not'; the movie set up is so common as to be predictable.
They didn't get out of the van at the Hotel with any camera, or sound equipment?? Up until now, all I've seen is one computer and no other filming gear - pretty weird for filmmakers.
Same old storyline -- someone looking to prove something or make a grade that gets their friends to agree to it -- that normally ends up dead. the female that went to look for the stupid guy was right in the hallway. She could have run back out towards the room she came from but ran into a closet with the dead person/ ghost. The guy on the phone claimed he didn't know where they were when he knew the name of the hotel and the area because he did part of the investigations on it. How can a change across a door stop anyone from getting in? Step over it -- duh. Why would they go directly to the room the man told them not to go in? If the scary guy didn't want to encounter ghost why would he go into the room with them and why would he be part of contacting the ghost? If he was supposed to set up cameras why did he just put one on the floor???? No other cameras were set up. This was extremely poor writing and overall -- just bad.
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I see a lot of critical comments, too bad they could not get beyond some of the minor stuff and just enjoy, the movie was free, thank you for the download.
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I know this comment is four years old. But I have to put my 2 cents in anyway. Criticism is how we learn and grow in all ways. Especially in making stuff like this. Minor stuff can break a production. I know that from experience.
That said, this was a pretty fun ride of a proof of concept. I hope these guys and gals keep going
I'll be honest. I came here for Barton. I'll never knock anyone's craft so keep it up. We all have to start somewhere!❣️
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i agree.... honestly im only 6 min in and i find the acting not as bad as everyone is saying.... shame on the haters
You are so right! The dialogue is only part of what acting is all about anyways. Their movements and expressions say a lot too and they did well.
"She checked into this hotel ... but she never checked out."
It wouldn't have been the Hotel California, would it ... ? :D
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@@Directorraul Just got back here ... I did like it, by the way. I felt badly for that cop at the end; you know that wasn't going to end well... and he DID warn them.
@ 3:28 "Let's get the team together". I swear all I can see is Scooby & Shaggy getting the rest of the gang and hopping into the Mystery Machine! LMAO!
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OMG I THOUGHT SAME THING! But didn’t take time to write it 😂
@@EmsLionheart Geeat minds think alike, yes know! 😷✌
@Delta Lima Bravo 😷👍🏻
Don't talk about people .. So much.. gee wiz.. All were Pop in.. With The . Doo Wops.👅
I understand the acting isn’t gonna be top notch with these short films but that doesn’t stop me from enjoying the film , I honestly love the cheesiness of some of these films , I actually enjoy it more than most new horror films that come out . Great job keep it up and you will all only get better in time
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I have seen some amazing acting in other short films.
@@justkeepswimming8335 I have too forsure, I’m not gonna rewatch to remember why I commented this but I’m assuming this one had some sort of charm even without amazing acting though
All that to pass a class?? Man, fk school.
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Old post, I know. But man, I was thinking the same thing. I felt bad for that guy who was working hard. Most professors don't fail students unless they do nothing at all. But he did try.
The beginning looks professionally filmed!!
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Just a quick thought: Film students who didn't have a camera? Or do interviews?
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longtall2010 That was my exact criticism.
Damn, you beat me to it!
This is a low budget movie, bruh. Use your damn imagination!
Everyones a gangster until "BASED ON A TRUE STORY" enters the chat :))
Everyone involved in this movie did a great job. We all learn something new everyday. The scenic parts of the movie were fantastic. Hopefully you'll be putting out a new short movie soon
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so they go in and come to this door they were trying to open and...oh....now its 12am.....
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yeah - I’m sure the cop wouldn’t have left them if it were close to 12 when they got there - not realistic to believe they worked on the lock for hours
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Psychic lockpickers are usually so good. Lol.
"You hear me boy" lol
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Out of all the comments I read no one addresses the "boy" comment. Why in almost every horror movie when someone stops at the gas station the attendant always has to be racist or use racist comments? Why does that even have to be included in this short and every other movie over and over again? We need to get past this.... But I digress 🤐
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Then this movie the scenery is so beautiful that's why I would like to be anywhere a place like this will be better than cities
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Brilliant short movie, I cannot understand the negative feedback, love the documentary style movies, keep up the good work, thanks for sharing.💚
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The introduction looked really professionally and beautifully shot...and then we get a load of unprofessional over acting, shame.
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@@Directorraul Some of the actors were better than others , and after watching it a second time I enjoyed the story more . 💚
@@FIONA21ful thank you so much it was one of my first films I did so it's was more of Practice and giving actors some time to shoulder talents
@@Directorraul Theres a lot for you to be very proud of, and Im sure the actors have improved with experience . Its a wonderful first film in every way for you. Iv subbed so il be watching. 💚☘
Right up to the gas station part was basically 50 other horror flicks in a nutshell lol
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Sure was now that u mentioned it. Plus i really didn't like the way the attendant kept calling the young man "Boy"...he just kept calling him that like with a capital 'B'...yeah i noticed it.
The movie wasn't all that bad...acting coulda been better but I've seen worse.
Even though it was kind of low-budget it was really scary and the characters were really good when you get warnings to stay away from a certain place it's best to do what I was scared watching this
The coolest black dude ever. Got called "boy" twice and no response. Yep! That seems legit.
He paid for petrol and went without it lol x
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I thoght it was very original, and creepy. Hope you continue making films. Don't pay any kind to all the haters, they sure as hell aren't making movies. Good luck!!
I really appreciate the love and support Bonnie we are just trying to have fun a film. Making opportunities for ours selfs you know who are talents.
@@Directorraul hi there, i wouldnt be so upset if i were you if you have negative commnets, thata just how people are.
@@Directorraul I agree with Bonnie 😊 great job! Good story, great scenery, and me as a new subscriber!
Agreed Bonnie, great show of encouragement 🤗🤗🤗🤗
Linda Oglesby@Raul Colon, I noticed that some remarks were from a year ago. Guess what, it's a year later and I'm watching you today, right NOW!!! Thank YOU for THIS MOVIE and I REALLY LIKE IT!👍🤩⭐🤗
Should call this movie “Don’t Split Up” - rule 1 of horror movies man, don’t go off alone! Some really nice cinematography, lighting and sound. The editing was really nice towards the end. You got all the technical skills down, you need to get a better script thats on par with your tech skills. The plot was just too cliche and predictable. The acting was so-so but did seem to get much better as the film progressed - maybe everyone settled down and got more comfortable in front of the camera. Maybe next time try shooting some of the action stuff first because there’s less talking and trying to act natural. Use their adrenaline for the high adrenaline scenes. Then once the actors get comfortable, do the ‘boring’ talking scenes, they may be more relaxed and natural at this point.
I do appreciate this wasn’t a ‘found footage’ film too so thanks for that - nice job. Thanks for posting.
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@@Directorraul Raul--- When people take the time, especially w4shep to review in a generous and tactful way about areas she/he thought need work, you should really reply with a comment that shows appreciation other than the "form letter" consisting of 7 words you use for everyone! Please take this as just constructive criticism. BTW you really are a talented person, the actors and story line just need work.
@@neverthesame7887 thank you!
Omg...”we’ve never taken a road trip AND filmed a documentary before guys” haha haha
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Barton and the actress who plays Judy are so natural with their acting. The other ones, it seems more forced. But I'm sure or at least I have hope that because this is almost 2 years old that they're acting has improved a lot more. Great short film though, really helpful for someone like myself studying film and acting.
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Good production values. BUT:-
They looked too old to be students.
He wanted to film a documentary, so why did they conduct a seance instead?
It’s always “after midnight”, at any time of day.
They didn’t need to unlock the chain to enter the room, they could just have stepped over it.
A hotel bedroom with a glass panelled door - really?
Why did they go there at night anyway?
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GradKat I mean it’s not like they’re students in high school lmao
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It's not like they will have successful acting careers either. Lol.
Billy Andrew lol
I don't think so
In Greenland, this song is known by the name of Kipisarnarlunga Asasannut, which means To My Dear Missed Ones. It is about somebody, who had to leave his hometown for education. Greenland is a very big place, and back then, only a few folks left their safe environment for a higher education. In the 1950s, almost ALL folks went to Denmark to study. We are the former colony of Denmark.
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I thought it was a pretty good movie. Watched it all the way through which usually means it's not too ridiculous, at least to me. Thanks for posting.
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The creepy Sound in the beginning of the movie background
Those actors need a lot of work on their acting skills.
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sheryl BUTLER THANK YOU!! Someone else noticed, other than me!
I thought, ok maybe it’s a first for them.
But acting, has to come natural, and you act as natural as you can, to play a character.
But the whole time I was watching this,
1. All I could focus on, were that dudes tribal tattoos, thinking 🤔 are they the real thing, or just for the camera... either one, they’re shocking! Just like his poor acting 🤦🏻♀️
2. They start off with him, having a major sook, about having to pass his grades, and I’m thinking 🤔 again... Bro! You need to man up, and act like a man!
Even the dude, who’s playing a homosexual guy, is acting more manly than this dude!
Whimpering, like a sick puppy. Honestly made me want to puke 🤢 🤮
But. On a serious note.
I wanted to stop, no sooner had I started. But, you know when the acting is that forced, and false, you begin to watch. I’m only in 5 minutes.
I reckon I’ll be out, looking for another good short, in about, another three minutes.
Shorts, just like any major film, has to grab your full attention.
Mines very limited. So. It’s got to be a good one, from the get go, or, I’m outski!
I’m just glad someone else noticed 💯🤞🏻🙏🏼
Look at the bright side, at least they're all really good looking 😂😂😂.
Every body gotta start somewherd
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I liked it!! As long as you have a good story, and you tell it well that is really all that counts! I liked this video, you kids did good! Where is part 2??
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When you were given rules that will save your life?
Listen!
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23:29: We have this song too, in Greenland! During the 1950s, we had a lot of American soldiers, who made military bases, and the y both brought country music and Hawaiian music with them! We Greenlanders heard it, and kept the melodies, and added Greenlandic verses to them! :-D
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That's one of the many things I love about music. You can change it up a little an make your own, make it unique.
Along with numbers I think music can be a universal language. Perhaps one day even a intergalactic language. LoL Perhaps...
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Sooo many scenes of the van pulling into the gas station lol also I like how at 7:10 you see the van pass both gas tanks and then at 7:12 see it pull up to the first one
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That's an directing style.
7:57 Sling Blade
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I'm only 5 minutes in, and just had to pause to comment that your actresses are winning Hair. Everyone else in the world can just go home, the race is over and those two ladies won. Just gorgeous.
(Observed and commented from a place of "I want to ask one of them to do mine!" sisterhood, and not of "hur hur hur hur, pretty lady" creeping.)
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@@Directorraul I think you did great! :-D
Something happened here, I can tell!! Brilliant.
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I was being facetious!
Her lockpicking skills weren't much better either. Lol.
Not only did I enjoy, I loved the rich amount of diversity. Look forward to viewing more of your work. Thank you
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That's what made it BS but I'm glad you're happy
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Ok that was pretty good!
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I don't understand why they didn't just hide behind the chain saws....🙃
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“my friends man they fucking dead”
😂😂😂💀💀💀
i am in love with the lady’s and there naturalness 😍 glad to see some diversity
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That's so sad, but they knew better.
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Just like every other horror movie where they split up & get picked off one at a time while shouting "This isn't funny!"
Ok, so I'm not the only one who thought the acting needed a lot of improvement. It was hard to watch because of that.
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I guess people in Wyoming are used to being called boy. Dude didn't even blink.
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Why was the chain lock such an issue if the door is open
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To hightlight her lack of ability as a psychic lockpocker? Lol.
Guys. Can you just at least not say mean things?, like ik its your opinion but say it to yourself because it can hurt the person's feelings.
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OMG! Terrifying! They were warned but wouldn't listen. Shocking and mysterious ending! Great job, guys. Kudos to everybody. Shows what you can do when you have a vision and A GREAT IDEA! This could easily be made into a full length movie. Awesome!
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don't understand how the loose chain would prevent them to enter the room?!
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Overall a great job, but there were some details that had me cackling - like the lock just being stuck through a random link in the middle of a single chain! That's not doing a damn thing
The opening scenes were simply amazing! I've only watched the beginning so far but it impressed me so much I had to comment before finishing the film lol. Well done!
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@@Directorraul dude, so personal responses. I feel ya brah. Just kidding, only not!
Barton Fitzpatrick! #TheChi #Reggie! :) he's certainly moving up
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I called BS from the gate first of all you would have got his teeth knocked out for calling him a boy twice and second of all you ain't got to tell black people twice not to go somewhere we ain't that damn thirsty so I give this movie a d minus
Calm down it’s just a movie, happy it got you thinking I did my job boy!!!!! Relax and enjoy it dude.
Something happened right here I can feel it..... Room 13 where we found the burned body.
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Loved the ending, especially the music.
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I saw every scary movie combined here. 1. Creepy gas station guy.
2. Warning sheriff.
3. "I feel evil" girl.
4. Typical zombie ghost?
5. Children singing? Why?
6. Room 13! Oooh!*Yawn*
Okay, doing a documentary. Give plain detail. Simple, 1943 Girl dies at Chesterfield Hotel body never found. 1942. Lily Mason, Singer traveling with troupe. no criminal behavior just a nice girl in show circuit. Go to town and talk about the story. A waitress says Lily's sister lives in town. Part of same trope. 97yr old Judy Mason. She tells you she never looked for her sister. Didn't care after she stole her fiance. Both actually vanished! Good riddance. Investigation leads to cottage after info found at hotel from friend with psychic abilities finds a letter behind a painting. Go to with old music: "Don't sit under the apple tree" (*related to that era.) Kids find Lily and Jonathan at the cottage... mummified. Fragile Judy meets them there. She tells her story. Then tells grand son to take them to the pond. Get rid of them. But, the ghost of Lily and Johnathan kills Judy.
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Good horror
Excellent
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Wow they using old gas pumps like antiques at that station.
Bravo!! 👏🏻 I really enjoyed this!!
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Just watched again and this short video is one of the best I've ever seen !! Thanks again Raul . Plz plz do a full length film . I know it will be awesome also ! I'm waiting 😀👏🙌
Am I the only one that was glad that Ed...hmm, went first?
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Anyone else yell at the screen and get passed when they don't listen?
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THIS IS WHY I LOVE HORRORRRR!
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I thought this was shot and done professionally. Yes the acting could be better but you did I great job . The effects and mood were great . Keep on making movies and improving your craft .
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Cinematography at the start with credits was awesome only good thing about this movie, actors seemed like they were acting in a porn movie(some even looked like them too) but not in a good way.
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Cinematography and sound was 💯
The mailbox at the beginning gets my vote for best actor or actress
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So the women packed the car while the men stood around? Yeah right 😜😂
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So this is how college students look like?
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thanks for your feedback we shots this short film almost 4 years now I was still learning on outing together a cast and crew myself. We shot this in a day with zero money for noting.
I think the ambiance was good. The hotel looked authentic. The acting was way better than some shorts i have seen trust me. It doesnt always come naturally thats why actors take classes to work on their craft. I did notice a few mess ups in the dialogue but meh. The ghost i wouldnt have gone for the typical nightgown messy blonde. I would have had her in clothes from the time period she died but yes disheveled ,more dark eyes and smudged lipstick,bloody etc like she put up a fight before she was killed. The lighting was decent in the hotel. But watch transitioning from scene to scene it was abit too choppy. But hey i liked it i think there should be a part two.
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Well done. Suspenseful. Too much on front end, compared to back end.
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Yeah, I don't like that build on a woman either. Lol.
Had to give it a thumbs up because making movies is hard and they gave I a shot.
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They got the location wrong. Nothing in those early scenes look anything like Jackson.
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Enjoyed 👊🔥
😍.... With all my compliments👏!! The level of this movie is very very hight and this movie is wonderful as much as the greatest horror films which were famous in the history of the cinema. Great actors, great the cameraman and his ideas, and great the choose of the song on the end of the movie! I wish I watched another ones!
Why all those negative comments? Is it just to say something negative 😂 ?
I like the light and the sound, and how the tension is building. Actors performance is convincing and the whole project is promising, with strong grasp of horror fundamentals. I enjoyed Babysitter and this is the second movie that I watched. And yes, I would like it to be full length too
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I watched because I love Bart!!!!!!!♥️♥️♥️ anything he in I’m watching🥰
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Bart...Simpson? I didn't see him. lol jk
Who ls BART
The shorter white guy reminds me of Supreme Patty without the acne scars! He and the guy with the dark hair need some acting lessons. Badly. But otherwise, not so bad.
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It’s so well shot!
I thought it was a very good short and the time was great It was longer then most. It it keep u at the edge of ur seat
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Not bad for only a day of filming and a very low budget. You didn’t waste time establishing your plot and motive. You did a nice job with the diversity of your settings. It has more potential. Best of luck in the future, keep hustling and congrats on actually materializing your dream.
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Of course, almost every film has its shortcomings and areas in which it can improve. One of the most distracting issues with this film is the choice of dialogue which had the characters say things there were sometimes unnecessary and sometimes downright awkward. For example, after the officer finished informing the students of three possible murders, one of the young students mentioned that, “something bad happened there”. Well, yes, the officer literally just talked about one homicide and two disappearances that were never solved-it’s obvious something bad happened.
The next issue involved two problems: lack of tension and lack of scenes through which your audience comes to care about your characters. Without these two things, a film can read like a news report instead of a piece of entertainment. Sometimes filmmakers broadcast what is going to happen to the character before it happens and it diminishes any tension that they have attempted to build. Making the characters go off one by one is an obvious red flag that they’re going to die and at that point, many people stop caring. Even zooming too close on a character’s face when they are simply looking through a hotel can kill tension because unless you have them react to something horrible or they unexpectedly get a knife through the face, the audience knows that nothing is going to happen until that face shot is over. They aren’t constantly checking the background setting for possible sightings of killers or ghost because you’ve taken that away with a face zoom. As far as caring about these characters, if we don’t care that they die because we know next to nothing about them, the film suffers from our indifference.
Lastly, the asshole character trope usually serves a purpose: he’s rich and people are his friends to benefit from his money; he’s famous and people are drawn to the fame; he’s a childhood friend and he has redeeming qualities. Point being, Ed had nothing that identified why a group of decent people would continuously put up with him and he felt extremely out of place, as if he was just there for the head count.
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Is that House @5:54 located in Bloomington Illinois. It looks very familiar
I need to be blazed to watch this
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so many issues: why was the electricity still on? why was it so damn dark you could hardly see anything even in the hallway with the overhead light? how did the cop get there so quickly? why did the guy who called the cop say they were in the woods/he didn’t know where they were? why did the cop say they wanted fresh eyes to get clues but to stay out of room 13 (presumably where the clues would be)? I could go on and on... the premise could potentially be promising, especially since it was based on a true story (I doubt anything to do with the Scooby Doo crew was true), but it needs a lot of work
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Raul Colon you are welcome - I didn’t expect you to read that or i would have been less of an ass about it. you are definitely talented and most of what i listed was just nit-picking; I do think this is a good basis for a movie. I, too, believe you will keep getting better - and your positive response to a critique is a big reason why. I’m looking forward to seeing even bigger and better things from you! ❤️
You've got something here, I like your style
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OK acting, but waaay too dark, even for mood. Plus, the gas station scene was not good. It was immediately recognizable as an historic prop (with the push button for history next to the door and the scenic attraction sign above it). Otherwise, ok
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Well I’m gonna be honest I did not find their acting awful I Personally thought they were really good.. it’s not a Hollywood movie at the end of the day, Maybe one day they will be or producers etc! Fabulous effect for novices, it’s a Yes off me 😁
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It certainly has potential for a FEATURE LENGTH FILM.
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I enjoyed it..keep up the good work!
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i have seen a lot of TH-cam shorts and do not agree with most of the comments... For a short film oi found the acting very refreshing.... im not a pro. but i m 6 min in and although is a slow start it is entertaining to me.... thank you
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Everyone complaining about actors' play?! Come on, dudes, you expected Bollywood or what?
These guys play exactly the way real life relations and conversations go. With the cockiness of the locals and small talks, goofiness of some students. They do not need to walk around with a camera like brainless vloggers. The story is about them investigating first and then making a documentary.
The only thing I missed were scarier effects for example, they were bit predictable.
It would be nice if someone could come up with an original idea to get the 'crew' to film the location and the story without resorting to a very cliché and worn out 'film students going to film something they should not'; the movie set up is so common as to be predictable.
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"Based on a true story", only not.
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Yeah, about a psychic lockpicker.
You never saw the original? Lol.
Another great short vid Raul . More plz 👏💗
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Glasses was the only solid actor in the group. The lead actress fine as hell tho lol.
One of the creepiest movies I've ever watch, I prefer this type of movie than all teenage urban legends.
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Excellent movie! I love horror movies!
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Good thriller movie!
They didn't get out of the van at the Hotel with any camera, or sound equipment?? Up until now, all I've seen is one computer and no other filming gear - pretty weird for filmmakers.
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Same old storyline -- someone looking to prove something or make a grade that gets their friends to agree to it -- that normally ends up dead.
the female that went to look for the stupid guy was right in the hallway. She could have run back out towards the room she came from but ran into a closet with the dead person/ ghost. The guy on the phone claimed he didn't know where they were when he knew the name of the hotel and the area because he did part of the investigations on it.
How can a change across a door stop anyone from getting in? Step over it -- duh.
Why would they go directly to the room the man told them not to go in?
If the scary guy didn't want to encounter ghost why would he go into the room with them and why would he be part of contacting the ghost?
If he was supposed to set up cameras why did he just put one on the floor????
No other cameras were set up. This was extremely poor writing and overall -- just bad.
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