with the silver eyes problem, have the silver-eyed warriors be a holy tale or fairy tail, with the silver eyes begin a gift from the gods themselves, no real powers just some status. which could be why ruby's mom would be a very favorable and remembered member of the church, which would bleed into why ruby would get more praise and recognition from her father and the church, begin a diving point with the conflict with yang.
I agree. I'd say something along the lines of "Silver Eyes were a trait seen only in the god(s) and their greatest champions but disappeared after the fall of the empire. However, there is a rumor that one of the founders of the Beacon Monastery had silver eyes, potentially prophesizing a mass expansion outwards to the west, a massive war with the Grimm, or even the heralding the return of the god(s)." The trait of Silver Eyes would be more ceremonial than anything, as only the gods and their champions had them. This meant that in the old days if you had Silver Eyes, you were more than likely one of the most skilled warriors before you were gifted them. But in modern times, the legend of the Silver Eyed Warriors is known to very few outside Baradin-Assan or the most ancient of Hunter Orders.
stands with fist What if the legend started because of a renowned warrior with silver eyes? Possibly while the state of humanity was still unstable this warrior (or group of warriors?) could have come to light, seeking to help those in need, but ultimately being adopted by those in power as a hero of the state. The legend would be created to legitimize their status and to turn them into a beacon of hope that others would rally behind. This could also be inspiration for the church of beacon and explain why summer rose played such an integral part in its founding.
going off the holy side, the 3 different religions could have different views and beliefs of the silver-eyed warriors/ people. Gaetri, and becon beliefs might be that the aura is the soul protecting the body, with possible eye color representing the aura incarnate. with legends of the silver-eyed warriors becoming holy warriors in the religion, silver could a powerful and holy color and those with the eye color could be close to the gods. Avanism could be a similar situation, with the silver-eyed warriors begin sent from the gods themselves to help fight off the Grimm, possibly making people of silver eyes as seeing as children of those holy angels like warriors, demigods and alike. Anicism could differ as they fear the silver eyes. The silver eyes can be seen as forces of pure destruction, fighters who can bring down gods own Grimm and disrupt the natural order.
Charles Gremory On that point, maybe the aura system could have some connection to eye color, as their auras would be the same color as their eyes. That would be interesting as there are quite a few interesting eye colors throughout the show and it would give some reason for their assumptions about the silver eyes. That could have some implications for Neo, as she has heterochromidia. Would she be considered to have two souls or would she be heresy? I don’t think she should get too complex a backstory, but the theorist in me got curious.
Ruby idolizing Yang only for her to ultimately hospitolize her in a match will need some serious framework put in place so the audience doesnt instantly villify one of its main cast members. It is interesting however that after Yang finally lets her pent up feelings out and regrets them immensely their dynamic has suddenly reversed. Now Yang is the one attempting to get forgiveness from a distant Ruby. Tai's reaction is also important, does he understand his part in this tragic event?
Honestly I keep imagining Bakugo vs Deku Part 2? I don't know if you watch My Hero Academia. But Bakugo is completely fed up with "the universe being in Deku's side" so they pretty much fight. It's a very well animated fight btw Anyway,Bakugo starts kinda breaking as the fight progresses. Finally he confesses what is making him so damn angry,he thinks All Might,the hero he admires,ended up retiring and with no powers because of him and only him. Everything is just going wrong around him. *so let's use that with Yang* Yang and Ruby have to fight,maybe it's training or the "Tournament Arc" still happens I dunno. Ruby is excited,says it will be a friendly fight and promises to not hurt her. This angers Yang even more cause she feels Ruby is just underestimating her,and fights with all her might,hurting Ruby,of course Ruby realizes Yang is serious and in fear asks why is she doing this. Why is she hurting her. Yang proceeds to answer,still angry,with every thing she confesses her anger gets worse and therefore fights with even more aggressiveness. As an audience we would know Yang is doing the wrong thing but she shows another side of herself that makes us feel bad for her. She screams about how Tai always loved Ruby more. She yells about how she gets praised when she's just a child playing pretend,Yang confesses she needs to be better so maybe her mom sees she's not a failure. Ruby just... Apologizes and says she didn't know that. Before Yang gives the final blow... Qrow stops her. Or anyone really,part of me just really likes Qrow and he would still be the girls's uncle,he won't let this continue. Keeping Qrow and Raven the same while having this new version of Yang and Ruby makes me feel there could be cool connections.
And yes I know this comment is a year old and I haven't watched all the videos yet but... I dunno I wanted to give my opinion anyway cause I really like that fight and felt it fits...
I can actually see it if Yang has been shown to be cold and distant to Ruby. Maybe during a mission, Ruby gets ambushed by Grimm or villains and as Yang runs ahead to other Grimm or villains while Weiss and/or Blake help Ruby.
There's a RWBY Manga being made by a Mangaka named Bunta Kinami. I recommend it highly if you want what is effectively a better RWBY with the same setting.
Raving Rando In my opinion, they should be highly discouraged everywhere, in the context of both stories. The world literally suffered a global Cataclysm that drastically cut humanity's numbers to near-extinction. Wouldn't everyone want more Hunters to fight against Grimm, and to just basically survive?
@@Raving_Rando ...Noooot quite. Grim don't just kill people, they also make land unsafe. Humans need a whole lot of land for farming. The more population growth is encouraged, the more land you have to defend to support it. As such, I don't think Grim would create so much pressure to grow the population. Further, it seems like hunters and huntresses are actually in the minority in this world, with most people taking up trades, or as I said, farming. Because they're protected, the death rates wouldn't be as high as you'd think, and they also don't have as huge of an issue with sickness and injury, thanks to aura, which seems to have drastically reduced the need for medical infrastructure. Because people's kids tend to live to reproducing age, Remnant seems to have adopted the first world culture, of having relatively few children, and devoting resources to them to ensure their best chance. As far as we've seen in the series, Grim are most likely to cause fatalities in new settlements, as we saw in the backstory of Ren and Nora. (This might actually create a stigma against population growth, as they'd have to settle new land, which could get them killed.) It's pretty evident that none of our religions are a thing in Remnant. No abrahamic religions means no real homophobia as a natural consequence. Instead, the series addresses prejudice with the Fauna. As far as politics messing with the story... not really? General Ironwood seems like a pretty good guy, and while he and Ozpin butt heads sometimes, he's got the nation's best interests at heart.
@@joshuafogg6600 in all honesty, you're probably right. with this particular scenario, where humanity's collective back is against a wall the best i can see is a kind of disapproving frown from society with the possible exception of the free isles. keep in mind that this is a world where people are terrified of and murdered by shadows. I just can't see this being something there is widespread support of in such a setting.
I personally really didn't like how Rooster Teeth decided the best way to show LGBT representation was in a world where no hand any issue with it. It is extremely unrealistic and doesn't represent what the LGBT is.
@@ryokiuzumasa8068 Unfortunately there seems to be this loud minority among the LGBT community, where if you don't flat out declare at every able opportunity that discrimination is bad, you are one of the people discriminating people.
@@ryokiuzumasa8068 id just like to say when making a fantsay world we dont need to repersent our real world problems. A world where its accepeted can be just made
Well, I kind of want conflict in these worlds being made. If Rooster Teeth want to represent it, then, in my opinion, they need to have conflict to get an actual understanding of the characters and have development. Sure, it is really nice to see a world where no one discriminates against LGBT, but in that same world, you have a terrorist organization that wants equal rights as humans, it isn't immersing.
I'm not sure how to articulate this properly. But it felt honestly a bit odd that they never show the character Qrow in any commited relationships. It's hinted that he is a sexually active man, i.e. the mini skirt joke in vol 3 and the fandom at large had thought a pairing of him and Winter was possible due to it being one of the few scenes in the show proper to have some interesting character drama/history/tension. What I'm getting at is maybe Qrow could have a son or daughter in this rewrite. And to subvert the whole dead mom thing that is already a part of ruby's character, we get ourselves a new aunt character to see. I just feel having a trio of kids in the rose/yang/brawnwen family would be an interesting way to start up some character dynamics and scenarios. This kid could maybe play a non combative role and be some kind of medic or weapon's smith. Maybe play a role like winry from fmab where this kid allows the story to show off different aspects of the surrounding world from a non hunter's perspective. Another option could be that qrow never got married, but did have a bastard child with a woman years ago and this kid converts to beacon under thier mother's maiden name to show that they can get there as a hunter without a strong family name. This character could allow yang to be able to connect to a family member who also had troubles with their father. A bit cliche, but I think the whole part where Qrow's reaction to such news while drinking booze would be worth it alone. I'm sorry if this is poorly written. These thoughts came to mind while watching your video and I could see how much more fun this rewrite could be with how free it is. Thanks to anyone who reads this post and please let me know what you think of my ideas.
Shadow Thiy I like this idea a lot, it's pretty cool for this new setting, both versions of Qrow's child in fact For the family trio idea, I could see this child being a sort of weapon smith just as you compared it to Winry in a sense, but have them be the type of character to focus on bettering the gang's armaments, because support roles always work, and depending on the rest of the characters, a medic might already be an underlying thing for some of the others (that is if Jaune is still going to be a healer of some sort in this remake but Semblance might not be a thing here so we'll just leave that out for now) As for if this child was a bastard, that would be pretty awesome as well, I would like to see how he/she would interact with Qrow, that is if Qrow either raised or abandoned this child, but considering he/she's taking the mother's name, it's most likely the former. Have like some sort of an intense Edward/Hoenheim like moment or something ahahaha But yeah that's just my 2c ehehehe, it's a pretty neat idea
@@kelixbro3456 You just reminded me of another thing RoosterTeeth didn't do anything with. Yang and Ruby went to Signal Academy. Qrow taught there. The school specializes in custom weapons and weapon wielding (hence how Yang can compress her gauntlets, how Crescent Rose is a sniper rifle -scythe weapon and how Qrow has a sword-scythe-rife weapon.) For six years, none of their weapons have been upgraded. Heck, Weiss and Blake could use an upgrade. Jaune kinda got a new sword but it's not doing much for him.
Kevin C. True true, but sometimes cliches can be executed well despite its over saturation deepening on its presentation, but I get what you mean, it may lighten the situation. Though abandonment could be a nice addition to Qrow being a drunkard cuz that could become one of his regrets along with other past experiences I suppose
Fheroah yeah huh, weapon upgrades or some sort of modification would've been nice, the fights would become more interesting in RWBY former if said weapons had some from of augmentations or upgrade, maybe they should implement more dust elements to spice things up rather than having them be one time things Either way, modifications to weapons, not too much deviation from their designs, would make things more interesting
I feel Salem would fit nicely as the Satan to this Remnants God. Keeping the boogeyman status of hers that you spoke of while also being a fine justifying factor for Avanism. With it instead of being simply Ani vs Grimm, it could be Ani vs Salem, with the empire caught in the middle of the war between two gods and ultimately destroyed by the battles.
@@xavierpittman1533 Also we could make the Salem in the story be just some shady woman with world domination plans who uses the name "Salem" to seem cooler.
@@nonsansdroit3800 Well, Avanism in this setting is the idea that the old empire was shattered from a battle with grimm vs their idea of God. But with replacing the wide term of grimm with Salem, it could add to the religions legitimacy, with Avanism being by far the widest spread religion, it could give country's an easy way to make people hunters, Basically that hunters are a holy warrior for Avanism striking out in gods name against the wicked servants of Salem, of course with religion comes things like zealousness, most likely in the form of missionary like quests to go into the far reaches of the frontier to either protect gods creations that are trying to prosper in the dangerous region, or simply to destroy what they see as unholy.
@@Runesmither You're missing the point. Having Salem and God actively fighting one another destroys the image you're trying to mirror. Satan and God cannot fight on equal footing, Satan cannot be a representative of an order or any order at all. Avanism would be Manichean/Zoroastrian rather than a real monotheistic religion.
What if being a Faunus is actually a Semblance? But while Semblances that do not physically change a person are accepted, ones that made people Faunus were met with fear and hatred, but it really is all just the same thing. You can take it further where Semblances are considered Holy Powers granted by God and Faunus are considered to be people corrupted by Grimm and the "Devil". Countries that are more inclined to Science have actually made the connection that it's really all the same thing, but this point of view isn't widespread, particularly with the more religious countries.
@@Lockehart1289 should be a bit more rapid. Like one day she started hearing a Distand Ringing and dizzyness. The feeling is on and off but grows in intensity each time. Then a few days or weeks later it hits like a truck. Pounding her head, crumple under the pain of a rapid shift of bone and skin with the ears basically falling off with a new pair of kitty ears showing on top. Would help with the image of faunus being a spawn of evil if witnessed. Its the demon "taking control" and forcing its hold on whatever human it effected. Of course what trait shows up changes what sort of pain the exhibit. Like tails causing pain to the spine and skin traits like illia(i kind forgot her name, the chameleon girl) basically feeling and visually look like her skin is melting before reforming
@@TerraRose21 I love that idea, semblances would seem more spiritual while Faunas traits are more physical, it would line up perfectly with the fact that being a Faunas it's necessary genetic and can happen in adolescence like a semblance itself. He could easily get rid of Blake's Semblance with this theory because she already has one, a physical semblance so to speak. HELL MAKE SILVERS A SEMBLANCE OR SOME SHIT.
I feel like I would have preferred it if the Locust were their own species, a native race of Sera that evolved in the Hollow since humans didn't live there. They occasionally preyed on people, giving rise to the warnings of creatures beneath the surface, but it wouldn't be until the Lambent attacked that they decided to wipe out humanity to escape to the surface. And Myrrah would look like she does in the ending of Gears of War 1. Making them lambent changed human, when we already see what those look like in the miners, is kinda boring. Hell, they could still be of the homo genus, just with more reptilian atavisms like the Brumak. Which would still allow Myrrah to have a half human daughter that could fit in with the rest of humanity.
My question is how much research did you do to create this story because a believe you significantly did more researcher the writers and creators of Rwby? I just want to know because this story is better than Rwby but the point made seem like you have been doing this for years or at least a few months. Also, the reason why they let go of Vic was due to bad press and the negative connection associated with Vic which would be directly tied to RT. I am not saying it was right or wrong but it was justified due to the company saving it bottom line in a capitalist system.
@@mangamandrew It took something like a week to write the script, but its based off ideas that've been swimming around in my head for a while. My "research" is just general knowledge of politics, history, culture and so forth that I've accumulated throughout my life.
I've been very confused by the recent changes to almost all the lore of rwby and I've partially dropped the show but I'm slowly watching season 6 and cringe throughout it all. Though I'd love to see your version of the story written or an actual show. I mean no offense by this but your version sounds like you've spent maybe six months or so maybe more while they spend a couple of year and theirs ended up one of the most cringey shows while yours sounds like something truly genuinely interesting and if needed itd actually pay to see your version come to life.
The only character from the Rwby antagonists that I feel needs more time is Mercury. I really don't have many ideas to what he could do but anyway I'd like to see him as a bigger bad guy and not only a henchman. (You can even tell he's gonna betray Salem already
@@tyrinonlunsford311 not really he's more of a survivor. mercury is an assassin raised by his father who probably taught him to always go with the stronger side.
Not really. This is less an opportunity for inserting OCs into RWBY and more an exercise in reconstructing what's already there. If push comes to shove, sure. For now, I just want to get the world down.
Jerry Freeman if someone were to actually make a fanfic based on the changes youve made would you give permission for them to make that world. I dont mean to write it myself, i just think that someone could make a really good story out of this and i would love to read it.
We need Roman and neo togather Crow can form a guild or something the guild just hunts grim who appear in places where the army doesn't want to bother with like far villages or unknown disturbances and rwby yang and Blake join it it's more like a place to call home. Later in the story you can make it so the bad guys burn it down which will give revenge story motives, The guild itself can also be a training place and can be the stage where rwby and yang have their fight and crow can be the one to step in or BETTER YET MAKE IT BLAKE WHO STEPS IN AND STOP THEM it will show how much she grew to care about them. Roman can have a Reallyyyy tragic backatory lets say that Weiss's father used to do some shady stuff and killed Romans parents to silence them, or even make it deeper Roman tries to destroy the academy because he wants to destroy everything Weiss's father holds dear, Or he was a slave or something like that, Still I like the idea of having a guild or an organization where some of those characters can gather Neo would be a great bartender just saying.... Maybe he kills weisses father and that makes weiss go evil and thirsty for revenge sasuke style but along the way she finds out about the dark past of her family and slowly stops feeling the need to get revenge and instead she begins to..... (You decide) Going back to the guild topic once again the guild can be like an adult fairy tail in a sense Not everyone get along and people fight but in the end of the day they all care about eachother but not cringy like MY BROTHERRRRR and now we win because of friendship but more like if you are in trouble we have your back if we agree with you let's say you killed someone they won't necessarily back you up heck they might even arrested you but more like if someone targeted you they will fight with you or protect you That's that part covered now I'm going to sleep goodnight
Ehhhhh look I think it's better narratively if her parents know, have kept it secret, and are very scared to send her out to beacon because they know this. I dunno, I just think it creates a stronger family bond if Blake is united in the scheme with her parents and they can develop her hiding methods alongside her, and can back her up.
Reminds me of the works of Coeur Al'Aran who uses the RWBY characters to make his own stories. You've gone even further to develop a completely original world and I like the idea. Well done!
Why not make Blake scape with Adam from Atlas and make Adam spiteful towards the Schnee's so instead of making Yang, Blake's bff instead make her bff be Weiss who doesn't know she is a Faunus, that makes Adam feel a bit protective over Blake... Maybe also make Adam more of a good politician instead of a good fighter, maybe he shows of his scar as a simbol of what happens to Faunus' in Atlas and he idk talks about his experiences so people understand Faunus oppression.(?)
perhaps adams scarring is from the surgical removal of clearly observable faunus traits. that way he can infiltrate political systems as a human and serve as an insider for the underground railroad.
@@shanduulrinook2970 Nah dude, people have theorized that Adam was a mine worker who got branded between the ages of 8-10. That shit's dark and it gives him so much reason to hate humans and want others out of Atlas, also I think he would be rather proud of his traits and show them off more.
Flesh out the story, please. Appropriate RWBY. I mean, you've transformed the original content. You've established a thought provoking scenario, and I'd like to see where this goes.
Sorry, what's the scenario? He's come up with a world, but I haven't heard anything resembling a story here, and the characters have had most of their personality stripped and replaced with common fantasy cliches.
@@billlupin8345 Ok, did you watch the first video, like he asked in the first 10 seconds? Also, the idea that "cliches are bad" is a falsehood. Traditional story structure and convention has stood the test of time. What he has presented is a far more focused, and succinct story, that while utilizing standard fantasy cliches, is much more appealing than the jumbled mess that Rooster Teeth has produced. His story has, with only a world building exercise, been given more life and seems far more interesting than Rooster Teeth's poorly written schlock. TLDR: his story has focus, cock dentures does not.
@@ECOKAI Yup, I saw that video first. Left comments on it too. Cliches ARE bad. You're thinking of tropes. He hasn't presented a story. He presented us with a big, complex world, and some tremendously cliche characters. He hasn't actually come up with any story at all, succinct or otherwise. As far as his worldbuilding goes, I think he got lost in the intricacies. It's overcomplicated, and his characters are underdeveloped. As a result, I think most of the people watching this version would get bored, and move on to something better. Yeah, RWBY's schlock, but it's entertaining. This isn't even that. TLDR, his story isn't a thing, and therefore cannot have focus, and it's cock *bite* not cock dentures.
@@billlupin8345 Cliches and tropes are tools for a writer to use. They are not bad, they are not good, they simply are; it's all in how they are used. I, in my first comment, asked for him to flesh the story out. You are partially correct in that he doesn't have a story here, it's merely a premise, but it's a better premise than cock-dentures jumbled mess. It's a potential fresh start, where he can tell a better story with themes and plot lines that cohesively wind together, and build off one another. Rooster Teeth, by contrast, has a mess of a story. Poor and some times contradictory world building elements, plot lines that go nowhere, flat and one dimensional characters. My argument, is that his world building exercise is proof of concept that he knows more about basic story telling than the hacks at RT. I'm interested to see what he can make with this premise. His main point across both videos is that RWBY lacks meaningful conflict. In its current state the conflict is stale, shallow, and leads to nothing, just like the rest of the story. While RWBY started strong, is fumbled and fallen from its potential and is now a vehicle to propel cosplayers into the world of voice acting. It's a political nightmare and its negative effects on the story have been more and more apparent since Monty died.
If you do make this as an original work, which I greatly think you should, It would fit best for young adults- adults. The world you created has dark undertones and complex dynamics between factions and characters. It stands right in that perfect balance between realistic themes and fantasy, which is fantastic. its much more then I can say for Rwby former and it’s lack of world building. Also, If your not going to use Salem in the story, which is completely understandable, are you planing on using the people she had on her side? If not that’s also fine, I’m just curious.
Eh you can have Salem and Ozpin kinda like opposing forces. They are Each trying for Control but with different Ideology. Salem is playing the game For Domination and Control. Ozpin is playing the game for Individuality and Freedom But both are too far to the Extremes. Both are rather dangerous for different reasons. Kinda like Sheogorath and Jyggalag.
Honestly Salem (In the RT show and not this) is kind of the weak version of Myrrah from Gears of war, who wanted to overcome a enemy threat for her people by committing genocide to the human race because of MARCUS'S DAD! (Sorry force of habit).
@@MediaGhost_ Actually not a bad comparison. I totally forgot about her. been years since i played GeOW3(the last good GeOW) Or maybe more like Kerrigan If my memories of who and what she is is correct(damn you fanfiction)
@@MediaGhost_ eh, I treat GOW 4 like i treat Halo Reach. Compared to the previous titles they are solid But i don't hold them above it. Solid, fun, and worth it But was the Beginning of the End @Tech Issus. Also good. But just a few switched titles. Salem is the Bringer of Darkness and Control. To make the world in her image. Mother of Grim and Order While Ozpin Is the Bringer of Light and Chaos. To make a World Unrestrained. Father of Man and Free Will Another note While Salem would have had a Direct hand in creating the Grim. Ozpin did not create Man. They grew from the Disorder and Chaos of the world. Beings of Free Will Incarnate.
You could see an opportunity for Adam here. If having the White Fang as an extremist group being bad for the Faunus cause, have you considered to change the purpose or form of the White Fang? While it was originally a group for Faunus rights shifting to a genocidal movement, it could be fun to rebrand it to fit this world. They could be a mercenary group of Faunus and sympathizers, desperately seeking to accrue enough wealth and arms to cut out a land for them and their fellow Faunus to exist somewhere out in the frontier. Working as hired blades to fight in the frontier or do contracts in the territories for the occasional grimm attacks. Gathering money, more faunus and the vast treasure trove of material and tech that they'll get a cut from for discovering them in old Imperial ruins. The White Fangs can be like the Faunus' attempt at going through the baby steps to developing a country and the needed bases to have strong hunters needed to take on Grimm. By this method, the WF can be seen as elite warriors and hunters, while looked down upon by some nations by virtue of being Faunus, they are looked upon in exploring and securing more land from the frontier, having extensive knowledge of the land due to being based in close proximity to it Adam, could be one of many up and coming hunters of the latest generation. Powerful, charismatic, cunning, he could probably have his own traveling company for the WF. Born and raised within WF, he could see the human nations and their actions to dominate one another, weakening each other in a world full of monster that want their deaths, as pitiable and wants/cares little of the world of man. His people will one day have a land away from it all, his elders say so, and he does his part to hasten that long sought goal a little bit more. Faunus being imparted with animalistic traits, means that some among them are capable of sniffing out their kin, often found at the fringe of settlements or simply hiding from cruel locals, when possible, WF seeks to gather them, persuading them to travel to WF or join their wandering companies until they eventually return. As such, if one were to gather the total number of WF and its wandering companies, the fearful notion that they'd equate to a sizable army or small nation, would be alarming to any human country. Which is exactly the truth, as some nations have taken note to the number and size of these companies going through their territories. Their has even been whispers of rumors, that the more anti-faunus nations are plotting to deal with the WF. Whether Blake is ever to be a part or interact with the Fang, is something for you to fit in there. The WF, while mainly Faunus, does have humans among their ranks, often the homeless, orphans or ethnically shunned, and sought a home and family with WF. Blake could've met Adam, was charmed to see what they're all about and traveled a little till she was offered to join WF with her parents welcome as well. Though of course the frontier is a harsh and unforgiving place, her parents safety there was just too much to risk than living within the safer nations of Man. The season 6 path between Adam and Blake could've been different here. With Beacon being anti-Faunus, it would be the most horrifying of ironies that, Blake would never, even till then reveal her Faunus nature, and with Beacon as it is in your version, would've secretly set up a mission to annihilate a WF company, that happens to be Adam's. Immediately understanding the political checkmate that would entail if a WF company is pinned for wiping out several teams of Beacon students, Adam would've likely stayed behind with the knowledge of being disavowed by WF and be seen as a violent rogue Faunus. Some maybe most would be killed off by him, it'll eventually wind up with him facing off with Blake and Yang. The impact of Blake's character in choosing to help a weakened Adam or join Yang in his murder, would be big. But meh, this is just an idea
I actually have a story for Qrow and Raven, specifically involving their father and the terrible person he was to make them the fuck-ups they are today. It’s a bit grimdark, but that’s actually quite fitting considering how convoluted your au is. I’d like to say mine is better, but... In all honesty, my au’s purely about characters. Grimm are monsters themselves, but they reflect the cast’s inner demons and are often harder than anything in RWBY-Former. Every character’s overhauled to give them some depth other than a cliche archetype, with the biggest one being the villains from RWBY-Former. I’d love to discuss this more openly with you in private so I can get a critical ear to help me iron out the issues born of my bias, (how’s that for irony) so I’ll just leave this here as a means to get that ball rolling since this community’s *way* too fucking toxic to discuss any aus without getting pulverized with jackhammers covered in barbed wire and acid
I wanna keep Semblances because let's be real, super powers are just cool, let's not pretend they aren't. But to fit better with this setting, I wanna make a few changes. Number 1, Semblances stay, Aura goes. And I when I mean Aura, I exclusively mean the fucking force-field that everybody has until damage. It's the one thing about RWBY that I've grown to hate more and more as the series went on, as it completely kills all tension into a fight until's broken (or just decides it doesn't wanna work-oh hey Adam, what's up?) Number 2, they aren't free anymore. Yes I know that technically, Ruby doesn't get to spam super speed all she wants without getting tired. But that's not what I mean. Even in the OG show, it's basically confirmed that using them requires tapping into your, like, 'Soul Power' basically. Your soul. The thing that makes you ALIVE. Using that shit should be a last resort, clutch out a win, "either use it now or literally die" kind of ability. Even short bursts of her speed should make Ruby nearly pass out. Maybe that's a little extreme, but what I'm saying is there should be clearly defined consequences for using this things, make them more special. Anybody else got any ideas for Semblance changes?
KingCrowBro if Semblances will have cost, and like a of cost to one's soul Maybe have Semblances include various special moves or whatever to the Semblances, kinda like spells And depending on the intensity of using the Semblance, for example if Yang still had her explosive ass angry Semblance, maybe have it operate pretty much like One For All from MHA, but instead has heavy stamina costs and with a massive superpowered punch or whatever, would probably render her unresponsive... So for some utility Semblances like Weiss', it'll allow her to still use glyphs in her fight style but to a more minimum and to also be that support in battle type character, whereas summons from her will cause her, herself to be useless in a fight and the longer the summons from a glyph or bigger it is from said glyph, the closer it brings her to draining out her soul. And well these are just examples, I don't know if it sounds good or whack :/ But yeah, either way your Semblance idea is cool and Aura should definitely go because it just...it's shit :^)
I honestly want to keep auras, just have them be the life force of people in RWBY that only gifted or trained individuals can activate or use (a select few that is required or Huntsman maybe) EMPHASIS ON THE ACTIVATE Instead of people using it naturally it has to be taught how to use and interact with. For instance of Sierra Khan... she was either never trained to use her aura or didn't activate hers in time. I mean just imagine if Hazel had used HULK like strength and Aura Shields during the Haven fight instead of just... being a bother.
Aura in that sense would then actually be more interesting than what it is now Having it only particular people can learn and harness their inner life force with the right training and practices As for what to call Semblances, calling them Powers for simplicity is fine, keeping Semblance is more of keeping remnants of RWBY for the Alt RWBY (ehe, *Remnants*)
Yes! Also someone mentioned that silver eyes could be associated with divinity and that could be another point of tension between Rwby and Yang. Rwby is not only treated like the perfect daughter by their dad, but also everyone around them and it really screws over her self esteem.
I have an idea for Salem to be seen as a figure of pure mystery that interacts with all the nations Salem is a parasitic grade four Grim that has developed a both intelligence and enlightenment from over hundreds of years of her existence and purposely decides to take the host of young adult women and preserves the bodies to last her at most 200 years before it starts decaying. Although the creature known as Salem is a twisted being as for a Grim it does not particularly have any true malice or instinctual hatred towards humanity. When it had became enlightened, it instead has developed a fondness of human nature and wishes to meddle in the development of humanity and wants see whether the humans and fanus will survive and grow or suffer and parish. Salem has no control or rule over the Grim and is merely just another Grim at the end of the day, but even so Salem self-proclaims herself as the representative of the Grim to provide communications and knowledge of the demons to give humans a better understanding of the world they walk through, but Salem isn't so charitably to go visit humanity to give advise to them and instead has them travel to her home in order to seek her consul. Salem lives at the top of the mountains in a forgotten palace that boarders off most of the Grim from entering Terria all at once, but the journey to reach her home is very treacherous indeed with many Grim from grades 2 to 3 roaming around the Mountain Palace 24/7 will spell certain death if one is not prepare for the journey. Anyone who is brave or completely desperate for knowledge will only travel to where the Witch's Mountain Palace to gain truths beyond their of understandings. But there is a major issue with the knowledge that Salem provides, since she has no alliterative motive beyond curiosity, no one can truly get a read on her decisions to help aid humanity and many question why is her information can be consider a creditable. On a few occasion of the doubt towards the Witch led to her "death" by very many skilled Huntsmen and Huntress who only saw her as a monster at the top of the palace, but in most cases people would distort the knowledge they received from Salem to gain benefits for themselves and their group, assumed that the witch meant the opposite of what she had claimed, to trick a nation to fall for the supposed trap provided by the witch, or even hide information that could be seen as harmful to their own group. This distortion of information has led may nations to have a different perspective of Salem making her a vague being that could seem like a messenger of God or a disruptive force of chaos. How Salem acquired such knowledge is due to her intelligence and enlightenment, Salem is able to use a forgotten art known as 'magic' to gather her information across Terria for centuries at this point. Magic is this story of RWBY is nothing like the former, 'magic' in this story is a complete and utter chaotic force that it could whip out humanity if not utilized properly, especially if it is one of the four core elements ( Fire, Water, Air, and Earth), but the magic that Salem uses has no clear combative capabilities, instead Salem focuses on Clairvoyance, Physical and Mental Illusions, Soul mending, and Dowsing arts. Salem's Clairvoyance is by far her most impressive art she possess, being able to see the current state of every single thing that occurs in Terria giving her all the information that her audience my want to know or see. Even though she can not directly kill her opponents she can often times than not, break the will of those that decide to attack her whether it is Man or Grim. Salem is only on Salem side and she has no interest in aiding her kinsmen or physically aiding humanity for a better future. She will forever be a force that rest upon at the top of mountain and fulfill the role she set for herself to do for the rest of her life.
I'm almost an adult and I would love to see this as a series, it works for a young adult fantasy story, I remember The Mortal Instrauments and Lunar Chronicles can be pretty dark and can have some really intersting things. I would totally read this as a story and I would love to see it.
I like the idea that Blake thinks her parents don't know but in reality they knew for years from the signs. First was the growing pains inside of Blake's ears which didn't have a medical explanation, then there was Blake changing her hairstyle very quickly to cover her ears (perhaps she was really into earrings or having her hair up in a ponytail before her ears transformed) and then there were the new hair accessories. The bow wasn't too much of a clue to them but it was the insistence on things like earmuffs and headphones they were more concerned about. Just a thought.
Why does Blake even wear that "bowtie" on her head? In this world are bowties even real disguises? If people have real cat ears, and people with real cat ears and other animal parts are discriminated against in a given country would that country allow for the making of bowties for normal people to wear, and would there even be a market for that? If there was a niche market wouldn't the rest of society discriminate towards those customers? It wouldn't be seen as hipster, it'd be seen as "fauna supporter" by normal people and as...like a weird form of black face by fauna. I doubt schools any would allow much less a school in a discriminatory country
Cinder could be an instructor that Ruby’s mom trained and she blames Ruby for her death. Mercury and Emerald could be Cinder’s favourites that she uses to bully Ruby and her team. Helps give many sources of conflict with Yangs inferiority complex, Weiss not wanting to get her family involved and Blake’s secret being found.
On semblances, you could have them just make them more categorical instead of everybody having an unique super power. You could rip One Piece’s devil fruit power system (maybe not the powers themselves but rather the way they’re differentiated).
Or you can make them more difficult to obtain it takes Decades of practice and study to unlock a semblance instead of was having all the characters already have a semblance they can unlock it over the course of seasons. This would make semblances appear more special and not something you just expect everyone to be able to do.
What about some ideology that just the existence of the Grimm inspire: for example, there are some settlement at the very edge of the Frontier that would kill or exile people because of their dark emotions (which is either still a thing or just part of this ideology)
I know this is late, but I need to get this off my chest. Whew boy, this...is is certainly something. This really isn't a fix it fic. This is just different world building and trope swapping, most of which isn't even any good. Some of them are downright terrible. On the other hand, some of them are basically what's in the show already! Weiss does have abusive parents! Or at least one abusive parent. The other is a bit of an absentee/neglectful parent. We saw in Volume 4 that her father does abuse/manipulate her. That's nothing new. Others feel like the person has a wee bit of an agenda. Some of it seems to be making the world a little darker and edgier, like Faunas being mutated by Grimm, which kinda cheapens the whole discrimination thing IMO if they're literally part monster...like, where's the subtlety in that? The Faunas subplot is probably the weakest part of RWBY to me, but this somehow makes it worse. It seems like they're trying to justify why humans hate Faunus, rather then going with the reason the show does, which is that humans are just inherently shitty sometimes and hate that which is different, just like in real life. They don't need to be part-monster and adding that just makes it seem really hamfisted. I know RWBY isn't exactly known for subtlety, but c'mon...this is way more in your face. It also seems they're going for a more morally grey-world by having a bigger focus on governments/religions and other challenging topics...but then Adam is just 100%, genuinely heroic. Which is kinda weird, and a little dumb to me, since Adam was morally grey, as Blake says. He started out good with good intentions, but as time went on he slipped further and further down the rabbit hole of madness and spite, and became the broken man we see in Volume 6. Why not have Adam in this story start out as good as of his first appearance, and then we see his descent throughout the story? People still like Adam even though he was pretty damn monstrous in most of his appearances, so even more would probably like him if we actually start with Adam as a good character from the get-go. Moving on to the whole Ruby/Yang thing...why change that? I find it rather refreshing that these are siblings with no ill will, no rivalry, no dumb drama between the two of them. They get along rather well and are basically best friends. That's nice, wholesome, and really seems a hell of a lot less cliche then competing siblings, which is the majority of sibling relations in fiction. The outfit changes...that seems like the person has a little bit of a chip on their shoulder about...something. They want RWB to be more modest (for no specified reason) but Yang to be skimpier? That seems more then a little weird to me. The random age/species/name changes...they don't really matter, nor do they make it better, unless there's solid reasoning behind them. There is none. How does any of that make the story better? Why the hell would Ren and Nora be spies? Spies for whom, and why? Beacon Academy is now the Church of Beacon...but is it still a Huntsman academy? What actually happens there, or is it still basically the same Beacon, just renamed. Name changes don't really matter that much. How does its function change? What difference does that make to the story? These are the things are rewrite should focus on. Not just changing the name and appearance of everything. All the stuff about governments and religions...doesn't really sound all too great. Why would a religion debate whether or not killing the soulless monsters who want to kill all of humanity is moral? The dumb rename for Grimm implies they're still exactly the same as they are in canon, so nothings really changed there. It just sounds like the writer is trying to put in moral greyness everywhere they can, but not actually putting forward why its grey. He's just saying "People disagree about this" or "This is controversial" in a roundabout way, but not actually getting into what the opposing views are. Like Pyrrha being infamous for her fathers political views. What political views, and why are they unpopular? More importantly, she can still be a star athlete and have a controversial father. One does not exclude the other. There's a bunch of other character changes that seem pointless and doesn't improve anything, like Sun and Penny. What does changing them do to anything? How does it make the plot better? Blake being a straight up Ninja...good gods how horribly cliched that would be if Blake is just a copy-paste ninja, wearing entirely Japanese clothes, using entirely Japanese weapons. Literally the easiest and most generic anime/fanfiction character possible. Pass. All that nonsense about lost technology...nah. It works perfectly in canon to have Kingdoms with a technological disparity, because countries in real life, especially going through the industrial and early modern ages, had huge technological disparities between them. Also, calling this bygone age "The Imperial Era", having it end in "The Fall" and the end result being rare, ancient and ill-understood technology that anachronistic states fought over all seems a little too similar to Warhammer 40,000 for me. Probably wasn't intentional, but seems that way to me. But the biggest and most important thing about this whole mess is that it doesn't even "fix" RWBY, its not even really RWBY at this point. Its a story that just copies and pastes some elements of RWBY then throws the rest out for some other stuff. There's no real suggestions about rewriting scenes or story lines, no reworked characters arcs, except for some light stuff with Ruby/Yang and Adam. There's no ideas about how the series grand conflict would be changed, or even what it is. Is this RWBY if it followed them through Beacon for 4 years? RWBY if they spent more time doing actual monster hunting? RWBY if the kingdoms were at war, or a combination of the above? Is this RWBY with literally the exact same plot, but a different world? Tl;dr: This isn't RWBY, but better, this is a totally different story and world using RWBY names.
Silver eye is like a tide. When it shows up it pushes the fronter border back/ liberates old citys or is heavily prosecuted and pushed in to the fronter thus pushing a small part of the frontier back or silver eyes is a desirable trait in Ruby's religion (THOUGH OUT IDEAS AAAHHHHHHHH)
Maybe in the case of Blake's parents not knowing she's a faunus, maybe she went to some sort of boarding school before Beacon or she didn't see her parents much around the time her traits started emerging, so her suddenly wearing her hair long and a bow will just seem like a new phase to them.
This is only for everyone here and probably wish everyone could discuss this story more. Would a discord be a good idea? If not then keep this unliked.
Hey Jerry, I am in the middle of making my own Adam Taurus story set after his death in the show (yes I'm working on a way around just some half-baked revival method). When I get a good chunk of it done, would you be interested in me linking it to you for you to look over? I really respect your world building and writing, plus the time it must have taken to come up with alternate take. It is for that reason that I would appreciate the scrutiny and advice of a fellow writer and fan of RWBY.
I have a Adam Background story as to his motivations and im using moments that didn't happen (he never really meeting the other members of team RWBY) as to why he is the way he is (outside the Miles and Kerry decimation of his character). Would you be cool with looking at it when I get a large part done?
Let's hope to Adams semblance being properly explained, because his makes no sense lore wise, his weapon isn't a part of him so it shouldn't be applied to his ability. Maybe have it applied to his aura instead, his aura absorbs the damage and he feeds it back or making him able to spread his aura around objects he touches maybe restricting him have to only focus more on the aura of the object instead of his own body? How about making his a feedback instead of Yangs buildup, every hit he takes he has to dish back or release out, makes him not use it carelessly like in the show. Just some ideas I've had if you're think of writing about Adam after he got double penetrated by some lesbians and "died".
@@tihontihon7161 And Sunnis and Shiites sound way more different than Anicists and Avinisists. It's going to be even harder for the ear to catch the difference. Oh, and the difference Between Sunni and Shiite is mostly political - that is Iran is Shiite and Saudi Arabia is Sunni.
After watching the first video I got an idea about the possible inclusion of Penny in this version. In this version she could be a prototype android that was created before The Fall and was found by the RWBY gang during a mission or something. The conflict that comes from her character could be that the people who created her treated her as another human (The purpose in doing so was to make her interactions with humans more natural once she was released to the public), but now she's in a completely different age where people aren't all exactly trusting of the ancient technologies. So she now has to deal with people who treat her either as an abomination or a tool to be reverse engineered. Of course this would mean that she doesn't look nearly as human-like as she did in RWBY former. Also, if it fits into you're idea of The Fall, I think Penny could have been put into stasis or something intentionally before it occured, indicating that the people of that time had some knowledge of what was about to happen to them.
Yeah let's make sure no real life politics is in RWBY because it's forced, unnecessary, bad writing, and nobody likes it. Plus there may be a hidden agenda behind it.
Edward Armstrong People don’t like homosexuality in fiction typically because it’s an inorganic appeal to vapid narcissists demanding ‘representation’ rather than a realistic consequence of character development and interaction. Having straight characters suddenly turn gay because a twitter mob threatened to lynch the writers doesn’t make for a convincing romance arc. Especially when the romance subverts the plot by monopolising screen time which ought to be used to drive the narrative. Game of Thrones and Lord of the Rings are Feudal and high fantasy settings (not imperialist) and Star Wars demonises imperialism, the agents of the empire are the villains after all.
@@kana22693 Edward Armstrong not really the same thing though. I might even say it's a false equivalence. He's talking more about political hot topics that people get pissy about, not well thought out and well integrated politics that make the world more interesting. Also, white imperialism? Please explain.
@@hersirivarr1236 Thank you! They should at least build it or establish those relationships normally, like they do for straight couples, instead of shoving LGBT down people's throats.
Can we make this go big in the community? When I saw a lot of RWBY Community went nuts and mad about the last season, it only encourages that the series is full of problem and it’s getting worse (so far) instead of getting better, seeing this video (and the previous one) open up a whole new world and potential, it’ll be great to actually have it as an actual story written (and maybe drawn)! Btw You deserve more subs and View You rocks!!
For the part about who the target audience was in RWBY former. I think that RWBY was supposed to be a beat em show with amazing fight choreography and over the top weapons, that was the appeal of the show ( at least the 1st 2 vol.) hence why the over all story and layout was generic. There's a TH-camr called Gigguk that had a discussion on RWBY when it was going through it's " is it really anime though?" phase, and he comments on how rediculous the weapons are, to where he says " the final boss is gonna have a rocket launcher that turns into an apache attack chopper" ( something along those lines) and I found that hilarious ( I recommend watching that video). In the later half of Vol. 3 rooster teeth decided they want to go for a more world building story rout and well we all know how that turned out.
I really enjoy ur format of this fixing up broken worlds and it's amazing seeing ur thought process behind these. Please do more, though that's wishful thinking cause these probably take forever to do but if you're going to make one again just know u'll get at least 1 view from me. Also, the next one doesn't have to be on RWBY I enjoy the show but it's pretty much dead now, I don't like what ur doing cause it's on RWBY but it's just how creative u are with these worlds rebuilding and how much better u can make these worlds again. Don't know any worlds for u to rewrite but any one u'll do I believe will be good on what i've seen so far. Please make more
You have to remember. Monty was an animator not a director so when he passed rwby was being made by people who could animate what monty wanted or even script what he wanted and because rooster teeth are dumb it’s inconsistent on what we get in the coming seasons
I feel like somewhere in this conceptualized world, there is an individual that was remembered in history by the name of Oumi Mont, and what he wrote and had published initially by proxy was the equivalent to Sun Tzu's "The Art of War". Mind you, he wasn't a novelist, poet, or any other artisan for that matter, but he was damn good in how engagement of fights/battles/campaigns went, (read that in any way you will). And he had a clear philosophy on why people fought to protect. And this would go as far back as to how old the "Art of War" would be in conjunction with the "time setting" this world is set in.
I think the White Fang should stay and become an arc for Blake returning to the White Fang after being sent to Beacon as a spy and the rest of team RWBY and JNPR try to get her back on their side. I have an idea with Adam being a sorta mentor to Blake, Ilia, and 3 or thereabouts characters (Neon[I think that’s her name], Velvet[pobably rename], and a sorta combination of Sun and Neptune as a Shark Faunus who’s semblance is to control salt water but it takes a lot of effort.
Silver Eye : well...maybe something bout ancient bloodline of people who have something to do with grim. Unlike power to destroy them like in OG , but power to control grim of some source. Adam : I agree , he start at railroad member but after sometime(in story not past) some event happened and change his world view. And he begin to go down a dark path, but as morally grey villain. He's first as "only self defend" , but after that event and gather some follower . He begin his guerilla war against those who try to attack his people . At least him and his crew still chill enough to not attack civilian unless they become a threat , but that doesn't mean he is kind enough to let any of aggressor go after messing with him and his group. Salem : ...Just pack her with the Grim . No need for lackey like Cinder group . Just her and advance grim/humanoid grim who act has her general and she is their queen. Oh and if possible , change her eye to become silver too . I would love to see Ruby find out what "silver eye" meant....and it's not a good one for people who know what it is. For short , Salem is ancestor of Ruby or something . But down the line one of her children (maybe Summer herself) want to live a different life and try to escape . Salem sent her general to pursuit and capture them but in the end have to kill them all but that's what she think . Last survivor came into contact with human and escape to human world without Salem knowing. And if you think why they didn't use their power to help escape , they already did...BUT!!!! Even if those who flee share the same power as Salem , the ability to control grim . They won't have the same authority as Salem so it won't work when Salem directly order their capture or kill. So basically it can stay the same as you write until event Fall of Beacon . Salem know about the existence of Ruby and try to capture her at all cost , She just want her great great grand daughter back(or at least kill her if necessary). And here is the different between OG and my version , My version of Salem love her family(those who shared her bloodline) so dearly but because their betrayal(try to escape)....even if it pain her to kill them she won't hesitate. She can't risk any possibility for someone who had her power to be on opposite side until her final goal was realized. To destroy god. Ozpin : Still kinda the same as his OG counterpart. But not as immortal ancient as in OG , he is the only few people who know about "silver eye" and it connection to Salem . He also the one who help Summer escape to human world(which at that time he won't know what special about her). He just one of many Huntsman who was sent to the east territory and by chance..meet Summer. And that is why Salem want his head.
I imagine Torchwik being a mafia boss who stands at the top of organized crime which is easy enough to fit in to this setting, and Cinder I think would be best as another sort of protagonist who is maybe a close friend of rwby taking the spot Yang once had in rwby former
For the silver eyes it could be that those were descendants from some of the experiments that the empire had made. It could give more reason to go out into the more wilderness part of the world and could be used for a cool backdrop. Heck maybe even have someone like ozpin. An ancient immortal trapped and have him act as a narrative piece as to the background of the grim.
Silver eyes could originate as legend or folktale from 'Ren's country'. It could be brought up late into the first arc or midway into the second arc as throw in with Ren and/or Nora chatting about random topics. Then later in another arc where Ruby explores the rest of the continent, someone from the Ren's country comes across an injured/ travel weary Ruby. He helps or tries to rob her and comments on her eyes. After the encounter she thinks back and realizes she had heard the story about silvers eyes before but didn't know it was a old folktale known almost exclusively known to local tribe within 'Ren's country'. Ruby later pieces together that Ren originates from that country and decides how to confront him about it the next time they meet
My first thought for what silver eyes would be is a phenotype displaying a rare genetic trait, believed to be relatively common among devout religious warriors and heroes in the last age by the church at Beacon and other places, that improves ones ability to fight in a number of ways, such as: allowing one to handle extreme physical and mental strains; having a large boost to the effectiveness of adrenaline rushes, hysterical strength, and second winds; improvements to overall physical endurance and mental agility and precision (so as to help them keep up with their better physical capabilities and with formulating battle strategies). These aspects of it would not be very well known and would mostly be rumored about by religious folk and those who have seen silver eyed people perform great feats rather than scientifically tested due to the nature of when the benefits are apparent and the rarity of the trait itself. It is not a fully fleshed out idea, but the idea behind it is to both give credence to the beliefs of those who we would see regularly holding the trait in high esteem and to set Ruby as special from the rest of the capable fighters in the cast. It could be the only reason she is able to survive that deadly battle with Yang which is where the effects of the trait start to become apparent to the audience. I also had the idea for Ozpin to have silver eyes too, though it is a fact that he goes to some lengths to hide in order to keep as low of a profile as possible. Switching gears to Ozpin, I imagined him being a "chaotic good" character that is the counterpart to Salem. He would be highly manipulative and cunning, working towards uniting the human, and eventually faunus as well, to work together and destroy the Grimm totally. He would cause a lot of problems on the way to doing this, and would not be fully trusted by the main cast by the end of the second season. At this point he would switch to being a scheming background character (like Salem) that causes issues the gang has to deal with in the name of creating a lasting peace across all of Remnant. I don't know how well a character like this would fit into what you are thinking of for this version of things, but I personally always wanted to see Ozpin be a good-but-not-entirely-good good guy that has a great affect on the political happenings of the world. Other things I want to give an opinion on: Blake's parents would 100% know she is a faunus. There is no good reason for this to not be the case, and the simple fact of them knowing and not rejecting her makes for a decent baseline for their characters. Sun (or whatever takes Sun's place, since having a Sun-like character is a good idea even if you don't want him specifically) should totally be a human who cares about the faunus and is one of the first to figure out what Blake really is. Having him be blatantly faunus while Blake tries her hardest to hide her faunus nature doesn't make much sense, and keeping the faunus trait a rarer thing would have the discrimination be more understandable. If they are everywhere some people would start to see it as normal and that would work against the role they fill and the conflict they are supposed to generate in the story. Also, the rarer it is, the more reasonable it is for people to assume that it is a detestable mutation instead of a normal genetic trait. Adam Taurus could be a introduced of as a villain but later turn out to be a benefactor of the faunus. He should also keep his negative traits like getting overly angry at the injustices he sees and how he can be obsessive about things - and people - he cares about. Having him be upset with all the evils he sees yet constantly reining himself in to try to fix things through peaceful means like the Underground Railroad type idea you had would help him have meaningful and understandable short arcs that don't need a ton of time to set up and explain. I don't quite know how he should be in character interactions though. He could be a love interest for Blake that contends with Sun at a few points, or those characteristics could be limited by having his zeal be at the forefront of his design instead. Wow, this is much longer than I planned. Hope someone enjoys my thoughts on things or is able to use them to add to this whole idea. And I do think it is a great idea too, by the way. You should try to make this a thing yourself if you are able.
Going off that logic, we may as well not have any straight relationships either. Why do we have to know who's sleeping with who? That's all relationships are, after all, right? It doesn't have to be a significant plot point with a disproportionate amount of focus. It should just....be there. Like straight people are just there. They're just people. Write the characters as people, have their sexuality as a random anecdote like it is with straight characters and move on. If y'all are so distracted by a character being LGBT, that's a you problem. I do think that RT doesn't have any business writing anything LGBT-related though. They just aren't good at it. Even Saffron and Terra seemed vaguely "Eyyyy we got lesbians y'all! Lookit! Lesbians!" when Terra came home. But some people writing LGBT characters poorly doesnt mean they should never be written into creative works ever.
@@Shmurph exactly, the problem Is when they try so hard to show they are inclusive, everyone notices it just how forced and badly written it is, personally I think that dependong on the type of story it may be, it could be better to not even put romance at all, others may require it as a plot device
@@vxgpakoable Because shipping and how RWBY baits ships at every fucking opportunity and shipping sells. That's basically it. *edit* Well, okay, no. LGBT rep is important because the current state of affairs is *not fucking good enough*. But If i had to take a cynical guess, I would assume the person asking asked because of shipping
@@Shmurph yet it's more on cancer of the toxic community of people supporting LGBT and are a dumpsterfire of double standard hypocrisy. They created the problem to dictate over others creation and can't win with having it or not as they always have something to cry about. They would rather not have it as it weighs less on something to complain over and over. Typical people crying over fake sensitivity.
@@QosmicVoid Japan can do a better job of it and even tease to bait people as a gag joke just for the fans and then continue on. It's funny how Japan does a better job even though majority involves straight relationships and gay relationships is behind as second as Japan needs to have a reason due to low birth rates.
You could say that semblances are considered a gift from the church’s god. You could also say it was another mutation but everyone got it so they couldn’t discriminate it. Edit: also this would be an epic video game if this was made as one I would buy it in a second.
It's not RWBY when you change everything about the Series. Changing what made a character who they are changes what the Series is. Your ideas are great, but changing the RWBY world makes it not RWBY anymore. A great original take on RWBY. But the world and characters are completely alternate universe in comparison. Some lacked depth, others became nothing more than one-shots. Their is a RWBY anthology manga that adds depth to the team RWBY that the show lacks. It shows why Ruby is how she is. I don't have any negative remarks about your work. It's your take on the show. But if the RWBY series has hundreds of followers it's not for lack of story-board or character abandonment. It's because certain things just don't really matter at the time. Overall your "Revision of RWBY" is quite good. I doubt I could do that in just a 35 minute video.
The amount of changes put into RWBY Former by your "But Better" version are drastic enough to where it could potentially become its own IP if you just swapped around a bunch of names. After all, terms like Grimm aren't exactly copyrighted by Rooster Teeth.
Just a suggestion for the silver eyes power Silver eye is a dominant trait that pass down through the generations that allowed the user to wield ancient empire technology weapon/ vechicle. Like it grants the user a signature aura that the technology could recognize And add half breeds of the silver eye that only temporarily active it via only one eye turning silver when agitated or something
The maiden powers should be introduced as a special ability found in 30 percent of the population caused from an apocalyptic event prior to the universe.
14:46 I saw an OLD Fallout 3/NV vid about this very concept "You can tell how much depth and effort and logic there is to a world if they answer where does the food come from?"
I think making aura a extension of the soul used to protect, heals, and strengthens the individual whilst semblances are more like signatures of the soul an unique ability that is more like an expression of that persons soul, and I also think that these concepts should be shrouded in some mystery with people not knowing everything about them or how they work since the source is the soul rather than anything immediately quantifiable.
this would allow for the super human feats we see in rwby former, and would add more weight to religion and the presence of gods in the setting seeing as aura and semblances are not quantifiable similar to how god isn't quantifiable
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with the silver eyes problem, have the silver-eyed warriors be a holy tale or fairy tail, with the silver eyes begin a gift from the gods themselves, no real powers just some status.
which could be why ruby's mom would be a very favorable and remembered member of the church, which would bleed into why ruby would get more praise and recognition from her father and the church, begin a diving point with the conflict with yang.
I agree.
I'd say something along the lines of "Silver Eyes were a trait seen only in the god(s) and their greatest champions but disappeared after the fall of the empire. However, there is a rumor that one of the founders of the Beacon Monastery had silver eyes, potentially prophesizing a mass expansion outwards to the west, a massive war with the Grimm, or even the heralding the return of the god(s)."
The trait of Silver Eyes would be more ceremonial than anything, as only the gods and their champions had them. This meant that in the old days if you had Silver Eyes, you were more than likely one of the most skilled warriors before you were gifted them. But in modern times, the legend of the Silver Eyed Warriors is known to very few outside Baradin-Assan or the most ancient of Hunter Orders.
stands with fist What if the legend started because of a renowned warrior with silver eyes? Possibly while the state of humanity was still unstable this warrior (or group of warriors?) could have come to light, seeking to help those in need, but ultimately being adopted by those in power as a hero of the state. The legend would be created to legitimize their status and to turn them into a beacon of hope that others would rally behind. This could also be inspiration for the church of beacon and explain why summer rose played such an integral part in its founding.
going off the holy side, the 3 different religions could have different views and beliefs of the silver-eyed warriors/ people.
Gaetri, and becon beliefs might be that the aura is the soul protecting the body, with possible eye color representing the aura incarnate. with legends of the silver-eyed warriors becoming holy warriors in the religion, silver could a powerful and holy color and those with the eye color could be close to the gods.
Avanism could be a similar situation, with the silver-eyed warriors begin sent from the gods themselves to help fight off the Grimm, possibly making people of silver eyes as seeing as children of those holy angels like warriors, demigods and alike.
Anicism could differ as they fear the silver eyes. The silver eyes can be seen as forces of pure destruction, fighters who can bring down gods own Grimm and disrupt the natural order.
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On that point, maybe the aura system could have some connection to eye color, as their auras would be the same color as their eyes.
That would be interesting as there are quite a few interesting eye colors throughout the show and it would give some reason for their assumptions about the silver eyes.
That could have some implications for Neo, as she has heterochromidia. Would she be considered to have two souls or would she be heresy? I don’t think she should get too complex a backstory, but the theorist in me got curious.
I love going into a comment section with an idea and it's the first thing I see really proves it's worth
Turning Blake into Komi-san is cheating, stop manipulating me.
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@@ryokiuzumasa8068 well the person ain't wrong
@@kingtorrhenstarkstark5311 no truer words have ever been or will ever be spoken
Ruby idolizing Yang only for her to ultimately hospitolize her in a match will need some serious framework put in place so the audience doesnt instantly villify one of its main cast members. It is interesting however that after Yang finally lets her pent up feelings out and regrets them immensely their dynamic has suddenly reversed. Now Yang is the one attempting to get forgiveness from a distant Ruby. Tai's reaction is also important, does he understand his part in this tragic event?
Honestly I keep imagining Bakugo vs Deku Part 2?
I don't know if you watch My Hero Academia. But Bakugo is completely fed up with "the universe being in Deku's side" so they pretty much fight. It's a very well animated fight btw
Anyway,Bakugo starts kinda breaking as the fight progresses. Finally he confesses what is making him so damn angry,he thinks All Might,the hero he admires,ended up retiring and with no powers because of him and only him. Everything is just going wrong around him.
*so let's use that with Yang*
Yang and Ruby have to fight,maybe it's training or the "Tournament Arc" still happens I dunno. Ruby is excited,says it will be a friendly fight and promises to not hurt her. This angers Yang even more cause she feels Ruby is just underestimating her,and fights with all her might,hurting Ruby,of course Ruby realizes Yang is serious and in fear asks why is she doing this. Why is she hurting her.
Yang proceeds to answer,still angry,with every thing she confesses her anger gets worse and therefore fights with even more aggressiveness. As an audience we would know Yang is doing the wrong thing but she shows another side of herself that makes us feel bad for her.
She screams about how Tai always loved Ruby more. She yells about how she gets praised when she's just a child playing pretend,Yang confesses she needs to be better so maybe her mom sees she's not a failure. Ruby just... Apologizes and says she didn't know that.
Before Yang gives the final blow... Qrow stops her. Or anyone really,part of me just really likes Qrow and he would still be the girls's uncle,he won't let this continue.
Keeping Qrow and Raven the same while having this new version of Yang and Ruby makes me feel there could be cool connections.
And yes I know this comment is a year old and I haven't watched all the videos yet but... I dunno I wanted to give my opinion anyway cause I really like that fight and felt it fits...
I can actually see it if Yang has been shown to be cold and distant to Ruby. Maybe during a mission, Ruby gets ambushed by Grimm or villains and as Yang runs ahead to other Grimm or villains while Weiss and/or Blake help Ruby.
I can imagine Tai being a stubborn retard cos he preferred ruby over Yang so at some point Ruby will snap at him
someone should make a fan comic out of this.
A light novel for Isekai..
I'm sorry
There's a RWBY Manga being made by a Mangaka named Bunta Kinami. I recommend it highly if you want what is effectively a better RWBY with the same setting.
@@arturosalascabrera7694 honesty i could see that.
www.royalroad.com/fiction/23550/rwby-rewritten/chapter/339057/chapter-1-the-island-of-patch-ruby
@@art4miel387 Im just curious how did you acknowledge this fiction?
"How are LGBT people treated?"
Of course that is one of the things RWBY fans would ask.
Raving Rando In my opinion, they should be highly discouraged everywhere, in the context of both stories. The world literally suffered a global Cataclysm that drastically cut humanity's numbers to near-extinction. Wouldn't everyone want more Hunters to fight against Grimm, and to just basically survive?
@@joshuafogg6600 Ah but you forget, politics before the survival of the species.
@@Raving_Rando ...Noooot quite. Grim don't just kill people, they also make land unsafe. Humans need a whole lot of land for farming. The more population growth is encouraged, the more land you have to defend to support it. As such, I don't think Grim would create so much pressure to grow the population. Further, it seems like hunters and huntresses are actually in the minority in this world, with most people taking up trades, or as I said, farming. Because they're protected, the death rates wouldn't be as high as you'd think, and they also don't have as huge of an issue with sickness and injury, thanks to aura, which seems to have drastically reduced the need for medical infrastructure. Because people's kids tend to live to reproducing age, Remnant seems to have adopted the first world culture, of having relatively few children, and devoting resources to them to ensure their best chance.
As far as we've seen in the series, Grim are most likely to cause fatalities in new settlements, as we saw in the backstory of Ren and Nora. (This might actually create a stigma against population growth, as they'd have to settle new land, which could get them killed.)
It's pretty evident that none of our religions are a thing in Remnant. No abrahamic religions means no real homophobia as a natural consequence. Instead, the series addresses prejudice with the Fauna. As far as politics messing with the story... not really? General Ironwood seems like a pretty good guy, and while he and Ozpin butt heads sometimes, he's got the nation's best interests at heart.
Raving Rando *_*deep sigh*_*
@@joshuafogg6600 in all honesty, you're probably right.
with this particular scenario, where humanity's collective back is against a wall the best i can see is a kind of disapproving frown from society with the possible exception of the free isles.
keep in mind that this is a world where people are terrified of and murdered by shadows. I just can't see this being something there is widespread support of in such a setting.
Screw RWBY. I want this story.
Take it. I don't want it.
I want Monty´s vision.
You addressing the LGBT question, and making it logical that some countries dislike it is very smart
I personally really didn't like how Rooster Teeth decided the best way to show LGBT representation was in a world where no hand any issue with it. It is extremely unrealistic and doesn't represent what the LGBT is.
@@ryokiuzumasa8068 Unfortunately there seems to be this loud minority among the LGBT community, where if you don't flat out declare at every able opportunity that discrimination is bad, you are one of the people discriminating people.
@@ryokiuzumasa8068 id just like to say when making a fantsay world we dont need to repersent our real world problems. A world where its accepeted can be just made
@@ryokiuzumasa8068 does every piece of media containing them have to attatch a sob story onto them too? Lol
Well, I kind of want conflict in these worlds being made. If Rooster Teeth want to represent it, then, in my opinion, they need to have conflict to get an actual understanding of the characters and have development. Sure, it is really nice to see a world where no one discriminates against LGBT, but in that same world, you have a terrorist organization that wants equal rights as humans, it isn't immersing.
I'm not sure how to articulate this properly. But it felt honestly a bit odd that they never show the character Qrow in any commited relationships. It's hinted that he is a sexually active man, i.e. the mini skirt joke in vol 3 and the fandom at large had thought a pairing of him and Winter was possible due to it being one of the few scenes in the show proper to have some interesting character drama/history/tension.
What I'm getting at is maybe Qrow could have a son or daughter in this rewrite. And to subvert the whole dead mom thing that is already a part of ruby's character, we get ourselves a new aunt character to see. I just feel having a trio of kids in the rose/yang/brawnwen family would be an interesting way to start up some character dynamics and scenarios. This kid could maybe play a non combative role and be some kind of medic or weapon's smith. Maybe play a role like winry from fmab where this kid allows the story to show off different aspects of the surrounding world from a non hunter's perspective.
Another option could be that qrow never got married, but did have a bastard child with a woman years ago and this kid converts to beacon under thier mother's maiden name to show that they can get there as a hunter without a strong family name. This character could allow yang to be able to connect to a family member who also had troubles with their father. A bit cliche, but I think the whole part where Qrow's reaction to such news while drinking booze would be worth it alone.
I'm sorry if this is poorly written. These thoughts came to mind while watching your video and I could see how much more fun this rewrite could be with how free it is.
Thanks to anyone who reads this post and please let me know what you think of my ideas.
Shadow Thiy I like this idea a lot, it's pretty cool for this new setting, both versions of Qrow's child in fact
For the family trio idea, I could see this child being a sort of weapon smith just as you compared it to Winry in a sense, but have them be the type of character to focus on bettering the gang's armaments, because support roles always work, and depending on the rest of the characters, a medic might already be an underlying thing for some of the others (that is if Jaune is still going to be a healer of some sort in this remake but Semblance might not be a thing here so we'll just leave that out for now)
As for if this child was a bastard, that would be pretty awesome as well, I would like to see how he/she would interact with Qrow, that is if Qrow either raised or abandoned this child, but considering he/she's taking the mother's name, it's most likely the former. Have like some sort of an intense Edward/Hoenheim like moment or something ahahaha
But yeah that's just my 2c ehehehe, it's a pretty neat idea
@@kelixbro3456 Or instead of abandoning the child maybe he didn't know he had a child to begin with. Although that is also cliche too.
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You just reminded me of another thing RoosterTeeth didn't do anything with. Yang and Ruby went to Signal Academy. Qrow taught there. The school specializes in custom weapons and weapon wielding (hence how Yang can compress her gauntlets, how Crescent Rose is a sniper rifle -scythe weapon and how Qrow has a sword-scythe-rife weapon.)
For six years, none of their weapons have been upgraded. Heck, Weiss and Blake could use an upgrade. Jaune kinda got a new sword but it's not doing much for him.
Kevin C. True true, but sometimes cliches can be executed well despite its over saturation deepening on its presentation, but I get what you mean, it may lighten the situation. Though abandonment could be a nice addition to Qrow being a drunkard cuz that could become one of his regrets along with other past experiences I suppose
Fheroah yeah huh, weapon upgrades or some sort of modification would've been nice, the fights would become more interesting in RWBY former if said weapons had some from of augmentations or upgrade, maybe they should implement more dust elements to spice things up rather than having them be one time things
Either way, modifications to weapons, not too much deviation from their designs, would make things more interesting
I feel Salem would fit nicely as the Satan to this Remnants God. Keeping the boogeyman status of hers that you spoke of while also being a fine justifying factor for Avanism. With it instead of being simply Ani vs Grimm, it could be Ani vs Salem, with the empire caught in the middle of the war between two gods and ultimately destroyed by the battles.
Runiic This would also kinda hype her up for when she actually becomes a force in the story and not just a shadow
@@xavierpittman1533 Also we could make the Salem in the story be just some shady woman with world domination plans who uses the name "Salem" to seem cooler.
The Satan figure only makes sense if you have God. Making Satan a part of the order misses the point of Satan's motto: Non Serviam.
@@nonsansdroit3800 Well, Avanism in this setting is the idea that the old empire was shattered from a battle with grimm vs their idea of God. But with replacing the wide term of grimm with Salem, it could add to the religions legitimacy, with Avanism being by far the widest spread religion, it could give country's an easy way to make people hunters, Basically that hunters are a holy warrior for Avanism striking out in gods name against the wicked servants of Salem, of course with religion comes things like zealousness, most likely in the form of missionary like quests to go into the far reaches of the frontier to either protect gods creations that are trying to prosper in the dangerous region, or simply to destroy what they see as unholy.
@@Runesmither
You're missing the point. Having Salem and God actively fighting one another destroys the image you're trying to mirror.
Satan and God cannot fight on equal footing, Satan cannot be a representative of an order or any order at all.
Avanism would be Manichean/Zoroastrian rather than a real monotheistic religion.
The lack of *me* is a very good feedback I believe. Pls hire me
Hope you become a bit op
Yes, Sun. We need him to keep the Sun-Chucks
@Teeth Skylark dont you mean Sun-chucks that combine into a staff?
@@crustybomb115 That's what makes them the Sun-chucks
Gun-chucks
You can still have semblances in this. The event that created the fanaus could be the reason people have powers.
What if being a Faunus is actually a Semblance? But while Semblances that do not physically change a person are accepted, ones that made people Faunus were met with fear and hatred, but it really is all just the same thing. You can take it further where Semblances are considered Holy Powers granted by God and Faunus are considered to be people corrupted by Grimm and the "Devil". Countries that are more inclined to Science have actually made the connection that it's really all the same thing, but this point of view isn't widespread, particularly with the more religious countries.
Tanice Dashney I like that
Just let Blake keep both ears , no slow ear changing bs. That's ridiculous.
@@Lockehart1289 should be a bit more rapid. Like one day she started hearing a Distand Ringing and dizzyness. The feeling is on and off but grows in intensity each time. Then a few days or weeks later it hits like a truck. Pounding her head, crumple under the pain of a rapid shift of bone and skin with the ears basically falling off with a new pair of kitty ears showing on top.
Would help with the image of faunus being a spawn of evil if witnessed. Its the demon "taking control" and forcing its hold on whatever human it effected. Of course what trait shows up changes what sort of pain the exhibit. Like tails causing pain to the spine and skin traits like illia(i kind forgot her name, the chameleon girl) basically feeling and visually look like her skin is melting before reforming
@@TerraRose21 I love that idea, semblances would seem more spiritual while Faunas traits are more physical, it would line up perfectly with the fact that being a Faunas it's necessary genetic and can happen in adolescence like a semblance itself.
He could easily get rid of Blake's Semblance with this theory because she already has one, a physical semblance so to speak.
HELL MAKE SILVERS A SEMBLANCE OR SOME SHIT.
"How did you get so good at makeup, Blake?"
"Hahaha... Yeah..."
Salem is the virgin queen compared to the Chad Queen Myrrah from Gears of war
Myrrah: we are going to blow up human city!
Marcus: NOT IF WE BLOW IT UP FIRST!!!!!!!
Gears of war by Lyle mcdouchbag
@@tomtheconqerur Too true
MYRRAH IS FUCKING *THICC* AF!!!
I feel like I would have preferred it if the Locust were their own species, a native race of Sera that evolved in the Hollow since humans didn't live there. They occasionally preyed on people, giving rise to the warnings of creatures beneath the surface, but it wouldn't be until the Lambent attacked that they decided to wipe out humanity to escape to the surface. And Myrrah would look like she does in the ending of Gears of War 1. Making them lambent changed human, when we already see what those look like in the miners, is kinda boring.
Hell, they could still be of the homo genus, just with more reptilian atavisms like the Brumak. Which would still allow Myrrah to have a half human daughter that could fit in with the rest of humanity.
Man that meme has very different connotations in this context
lmao the rendering really fucked up komi
My question is how much research did you do to create this story because a believe you significantly did more researcher the writers and creators of Rwby? I just want to know because this story is better than Rwby but the point made seem like you have been doing this for years or at least a few months. Also, the reason why they let go of Vic was due to bad press and the negative connection associated with Vic which would be directly tied to RT. I am not saying it was right or wrong but it was justified due to the company saving it bottom line in a capitalist system.
@@mangamandrew It took something like a week to write the script, but its based off ideas that've been swimming around in my head for a while. My "research" is just general knowledge of politics, history, culture and so forth that I've accumulated throughout my life.
Look how rendering massaced my girl.
would you ever consider working with somone on an original work? asking for a friend i promise ->
I've been very confused by the recent changes to almost all the lore of rwby and I've partially dropped the show but I'm slowly watching season 6 and cringe throughout it all. Though I'd love to see your version of the story written or an actual show. I mean no offense by this but your version sounds like you've spent maybe six months or so maybe more while they spend a couple of year and theirs ended up one of the most cringey shows while yours sounds like something truly genuinely interesting and if needed itd actually pay to see your version come to life.
Nukes. I like it. You could make it like a “dust bomb” a la Jak 2.
Gay bomb baby
@CrKhan 4457 so, basicly the bomb equivalent of the mecha dust beam cannon from volume 6? honestly thats not that bad of an idea...
The only character from the Rwby antagonists that I feel needs more time is Mercury. I really don't have many ideas to what he could do but anyway I'd like to see him as a bigger bad guy and not only a henchman. (You can even tell he's gonna betray Salem already
What no way! He's TOTALLY loyal to a fault
@@tyrinonlunsford311 not really he's more of a survivor. mercury is an assassin raised by his father who probably taught him to always go with the stronger side.
He deserves more attention just for his fight style. I mean, all of his fights are awesome, which is rare in current rwby.
Do you have any ideas for original characters that you would add with this world
Not really. This is less an opportunity for inserting OCs into RWBY and more an exercise in reconstructing what's already there. If push comes to shove, sure. For now, I just want to get the world down.
Jerry Freeman if someone were to actually make a fanfic based on the changes youve made would you give permission for them to make that world. I dont mean to write it myself, i just think that someone could make a really good story out of this and i would love to read it.
TitanStoriesFromBeyond Sure.
@@JerryFreeman You sound like Shammy
We need Roman and neo togather
Crow can form a guild or something
the guild just hunts grim who appear in places where the army doesn't want to bother with like far villages or unknown disturbances and rwby yang and Blake join it it's more like a place to call home.
Later in the story you can make it so the bad guys burn it down which will give revenge story motives,
The guild itself can also be a training place and can be the stage where rwby and yang have their fight and crow can be the one to step in or BETTER YET MAKE IT BLAKE WHO STEPS IN AND STOP THEM it will show how much she grew to care about them.
Roman can have a Reallyyyy tragic backatory lets say that Weiss's father used to do some shady stuff and killed Romans parents to silence them, or even make it deeper Roman tries to destroy the academy because he wants to destroy everything Weiss's father holds dear,
Or he was a slave or something like that,
Still I like the idea of having a guild or an organization where some of those characters can gather
Neo would be a great bartender just saying....
Maybe he kills weisses father and that makes weiss go evil and thirsty for revenge sasuke style but along the way she finds out about the dark past of her family and slowly stops feeling the need to get revenge and instead she begins to..... (You decide)
Going back to the guild topic once again the guild can be like an adult fairy tail in a sense
Not everyone get along and people fight but in the end of the day they all care about eachother but not cringy like MY BROTHERRRRR and now we win because of friendship but more like if you are in trouble we have your back if we agree with you let's say you killed someone they won't necessarily back you up heck they might even arrested you but more like if someone targeted you they will fight with you or protect you
That's that part covered now I'm going to sleep goodnight
Ehhhhh look I think it's better narratively if her parents know, have kept it secret, and are very scared to send her out to beacon because they know this. I dunno, I just think it creates a stronger family bond if Blake is united in the scheme with her parents and they can develop her hiding methods alongside her, and can back her up.
Reminds me of the works of Coeur Al'Aran who uses the RWBY characters to make his own stories. You've gone even further to develop a completely original world and I like the idea. Well done!
Why not make Blake scape with Adam from Atlas and make Adam spiteful towards the Schnee's so instead of making Yang, Blake's bff instead make her bff be Weiss who doesn't know she is a Faunus, that makes Adam feel a bit protective over Blake... Maybe also make Adam more of a good politician instead of a good fighter, maybe he shows of his scar as a simbol of what happens to Faunus' in Atlas and he idk talks about his experiences so people understand Faunus oppression.(?)
Noice Adam doesn’t suck in this!
At least the Adam here is a lot better than the one in RWBY former, who ultimately came off as one-dimensional. But this here is also good.
*"And Just because I wanna spite rooster teeth, adam's here*
perhaps adams scarring is from the surgical removal of clearly observable faunus traits. that way he can infiltrate political systems as a human and serve as an insider for the underground railroad.
@@shanduulrinook2970 Nah dude, people have theorized that Adam was a mine worker who got branded between the ages of 8-10. That shit's dark and it gives him so much reason to hate humans and want others out of Atlas, also I think he would be rather proud of his traits and show them off more.
Flesh out the story, please. Appropriate RWBY. I mean, you've transformed the original content. You've established a thought provoking scenario, and I'd like to see where this goes.
Sorry, what's the scenario? He's come up with a world, but I haven't heard anything resembling a story here, and the characters have had most of their personality stripped and replaced with common fantasy cliches.
@@billlupin8345 Ok, did you watch the first video, like he asked in the first 10 seconds? Also, the idea that "cliches are bad" is a falsehood. Traditional story structure and convention has stood the test of time. What he has presented is a far more focused, and succinct story, that while utilizing standard fantasy cliches, is much more appealing than the jumbled mess that Rooster Teeth has produced. His story has, with only a world building exercise, been given more life and seems far more interesting than Rooster Teeth's poorly written schlock.
TLDR: his story has focus, cock dentures does not.
@@ECOKAI Yup, I saw that video first. Left comments on it too.
Cliches ARE bad. You're thinking of tropes.
He hasn't presented a story. He presented us with a big, complex world, and some tremendously cliche characters. He hasn't actually come up with any story at all, succinct or otherwise.
As far as his worldbuilding goes, I think he got lost in the intricacies. It's overcomplicated, and his characters are underdeveloped. As a result, I think most of the people watching this version would get bored, and move on to something better. Yeah, RWBY's schlock, but it's entertaining. This isn't even that.
TLDR, his story isn't a thing, and therefore cannot have focus, and it's cock *bite* not cock dentures.
@@billlupin8345 Cliches and tropes are tools for a writer to use. They are not bad, they are not good, they simply are; it's all in how they are used. I, in my first comment, asked for him to flesh the story out. You are partially correct in that he doesn't have a story here, it's merely a premise, but it's a better premise than cock-dentures jumbled mess.
It's a potential fresh start, where he can tell a better story with themes and plot lines that cohesively wind together, and build off one another. Rooster Teeth, by contrast, has a mess of a story. Poor and some times contradictory world building elements, plot lines that go nowhere, flat and one dimensional characters.
My argument, is that his world building exercise is proof of concept that he knows more about basic story telling than the hacks at RT. I'm interested to see what he can make with this premise.
His main point across both videos is that RWBY lacks meaningful conflict. In its current state the conflict is stale, shallow, and leads to nothing, just like the rest of the story. While RWBY started strong, is fumbled and fallen from its potential and is now a vehicle to propel cosplayers into the world of voice acting. It's a political nightmare and its negative effects on the story have been more and more apparent since Monty died.
Well you don’t have worry about tropes anymore. The project’s been canned.
If you do make this as an original work, which I greatly think you should, It would fit best for young adults- adults. The world you created has dark undertones and complex dynamics between factions and characters. It stands right in that perfect balance between realistic themes and fantasy, which is fantastic. its much more then I can say for Rwby former and it’s lack of world building.
Also, If your not going to use Salem in the story, which is completely understandable, are you planing on using the people she had on her side? If not that’s also fine, I’m just curious.
Eh you can have Salem and Ozpin kinda like opposing forces. They are Each trying for Control but with different Ideology.
Salem is playing the game For Domination and Control. Ozpin is playing the game for Individuality and Freedom But both are too far to the Extremes. Both are rather dangerous for different reasons.
Kinda like Sheogorath and Jyggalag.
Honestly Salem (In the RT show and not this) is kind of the weak version of Myrrah from Gears of war, who wanted to overcome a enemy threat for her people by committing genocide to the human race because of MARCUS'S DAD! (Sorry force of habit).
@@MediaGhost_
Actually not a bad comparison. I totally forgot about her. been years since i played GeOW3(the last good GeOW)
Or maybe more like Kerrigan If my memories of who and what she is is correct(damn you fanfiction)
@@BlueBD dude...gow 4 was pretty good
Or dharkon and galeem
@@MediaGhost_ eh, I treat GOW 4 like i treat Halo Reach. Compared to the previous titles they are solid But i don't hold them above it.
Solid, fun, and worth it But was the Beginning of the End
@Tech Issus.
Also good. But just a few switched titles.
Salem is the Bringer of Darkness and Control. To make the world in her image. Mother of Grim and Order
While Ozpin Is the Bringer of Light and Chaos. To make a World Unrestrained. Father of Man and Free Will
Another note While Salem would have had a Direct hand in creating the Grim. Ozpin did not create Man. They grew from the Disorder and Chaos of the world. Beings of Free Will Incarnate.
Honestly you should take the idea of the last video and basically make that into a show
As in dump all of the RWBY stuff and make up all new stuff
If you wrote a book I would buy it in a heartbeat and sell my kidney.
"Ozpin could be super secretive and control things from behind the scenes"
So...ozpin?
You could see an opportunity for Adam here. If having the White Fang as an extremist group being bad for the Faunus cause, have you considered to change the purpose or form of the White Fang? While it was originally a group for Faunus rights shifting to a genocidal movement, it could be fun to rebrand it to fit this world. They could be a mercenary group of Faunus and sympathizers, desperately seeking to accrue enough wealth and arms to cut out a land for them and their fellow Faunus to exist somewhere out in the frontier.
Working as hired blades to fight in the frontier or do contracts in the territories for the occasional grimm attacks. Gathering money, more faunus and the vast treasure trove of material and tech that they'll get a cut from for discovering them in old Imperial ruins. The White Fangs can be like the Faunus' attempt at going through the baby steps to developing a country and the needed bases to have strong hunters needed to take on Grimm. By this method, the WF can be seen as elite warriors and hunters, while looked down upon by some nations by virtue of being Faunus, they are looked upon in exploring and securing more land from the frontier, having extensive knowledge of the land due to being based in close proximity to it
Adam, could be one of many up and coming hunters of the latest generation. Powerful, charismatic, cunning, he could probably have his own traveling company for the WF. Born and raised within WF, he could see the human nations and their actions to dominate one another, weakening each other in a world full of monster that want their deaths, as pitiable and wants/cares little of the world of man. His people will one day have a land away from it all, his elders say so, and he does his part to hasten that long sought goal a little bit more.
Faunus being imparted with animalistic traits, means that some among them are capable of sniffing out their kin, often found at the fringe of settlements or simply hiding from cruel locals, when possible, WF seeks to gather them, persuading them to travel to WF or join their wandering companies until they eventually return. As such, if one were to gather the total number of WF and its wandering companies, the fearful notion that they'd equate to a sizable army or small nation, would be alarming to any human country. Which is exactly the truth, as some nations have taken note to the number and size of these companies going through their territories. Their has even been whispers of rumors, that the more anti-faunus nations are plotting to deal with the WF.
Whether Blake is ever to be a part or interact with the Fang, is something for you to fit in there. The WF, while mainly Faunus, does have humans among their ranks, often the homeless, orphans or ethnically shunned, and sought a home and family with WF. Blake could've met Adam, was charmed to see what they're all about and traveled a little till she was offered to join WF with her parents welcome as well. Though of course the frontier is a harsh and unforgiving place, her parents safety there was just too much to risk than living within the safer nations of Man.
The season 6 path between Adam and Blake could've been different here. With Beacon being anti-Faunus, it would be the most horrifying of ironies that, Blake would never, even till then reveal her Faunus nature, and with Beacon as it is in your version, would've secretly set up a mission to annihilate a WF company, that happens to be Adam's. Immediately understanding the political checkmate that would entail if a WF company is pinned for wiping out several teams of Beacon students, Adam would've likely stayed behind with the knowledge of being disavowed by WF and be seen as a violent rogue Faunus. Some maybe most would be killed off by him, it'll eventually wind up with him facing off with Blake and Yang. The impact of Blake's character in choosing to help a weakened Adam or join Yang in his murder, would be big.
But meh, this is just an idea
I enjoy this idea and it gives much more impact to the choice presented in this
YOU CANNOT END THIS WITH MEH THIS IS JUST AN IDEA
Doesn't it make more sense for the weiss based team to be called "viper" WYPR
Ooooo, that name is lit!
Yeah viper sounds cool
Where does the P come from?
@@BumbleCrumble1072 she actually gets in a team with pyrrha
Sounds like wiper
5:11 Judeo-Bolshevism is the word you are looking for.
Could the silver eyes be a genetic trait from before the Empire so and is known as a royal power which in the worldview is the ultimate race
@Kai Galaxy thats a great idea, it also makes sense to either be genetically engineered or a genetic mutation(kinda like the faunus)
Kai Galaxy Excellent idea, with just one addition - it has absolutely no power connected to it. It's more of a symbol than anything.
*Hitler wants to know your location*
I actually have a story for Qrow and Raven, specifically involving their father and the terrible person he was to make them the fuck-ups they are today.
It’s a bit grimdark, but that’s actually quite fitting considering how convoluted your au is. I’d like to say mine is better, but...
In all honesty, my au’s purely about characters. Grimm are monsters themselves, but they reflect the cast’s inner demons and are often harder than anything in RWBY-Former.
Every character’s overhauled to give them some depth other than a cliche archetype, with the biggest one being the villains from RWBY-Former. I’d love to discuss this more openly with you in private so I can get a critical ear to help me iron out the issues born of my bias, (how’s that for irony) so I’ll just leave this here as a means to get that ball rolling since this community’s *way* too fucking toxic to discuss any aus without getting pulverized with jackhammers covered in barbed wire and acid
RWBY 2.0: You Can--not-- Rewrite
edit: by Hideaki Anno
I wanna keep Semblances because let's be real, super powers are just cool, let's not pretend they aren't. But to fit better with this setting, I wanna make a few changes.
Number 1, Semblances stay, Aura goes. And I when I mean Aura, I exclusively mean the fucking force-field that everybody has until damage. It's the one thing about RWBY that I've grown to hate more and more as the series went on, as it completely kills all tension into a fight until's broken (or just decides it doesn't wanna work-oh hey Adam, what's up?)
Number 2, they aren't free anymore. Yes I know that technically, Ruby doesn't get to spam super speed all she wants without getting tired. But that's not what I mean. Even in the OG show, it's basically confirmed that using them requires tapping into your, like, 'Soul Power' basically. Your soul. The thing that makes you ALIVE. Using that shit should be a last resort, clutch out a win, "either use it now or literally die" kind of ability. Even short bursts of her speed should make Ruby nearly pass out. Maybe that's a little extreme, but what I'm saying is there should be clearly defined consequences for using this things, make them more special.
Anybody else got any ideas for Semblance changes?
KingCrowBro if Semblances will have cost, and like a of cost to one's soul
Maybe have Semblances include various special moves or whatever to the Semblances, kinda like spells
And depending on the intensity of using the Semblance, for example if Yang still had her explosive ass angry Semblance, maybe have it operate pretty much like One For All from MHA, but instead has heavy stamina costs and with a massive superpowered punch or whatever, would probably render her unresponsive...
So for some utility Semblances like Weiss', it'll allow her to still use glyphs in her fight style but to a more minimum and to also be that support in battle type character, whereas summons from her will cause her, herself to be useless in a fight and the longer the summons from a glyph or bigger it is from said glyph, the closer it brings her to draining out her soul.
And well these are just examples, I don't know if it sounds good or whack :/
But yeah, either way your Semblance idea is cool and Aura should definitely go because it just...it's shit :^)
I honestly want to keep auras, just have them be the life force of people in RWBY that only gifted or trained individuals can activate or use (a select few that is required or Huntsman maybe)
EMPHASIS ON THE ACTIVATE
Instead of people using it naturally it has to be taught how to use and interact with. For instance of Sierra Khan... she was either never trained to use her aura or didn't activate hers in time.
I mean just imagine if Hazel had used HULK like strength and Aura Shields during the Haven fight instead of just... being a bother.
Wouldn't be better calling it powers instead of semblance
Aura in that sense would then actually be more interesting than what it is now
Having it only particular people can learn and harness their inner life force with the right training and practices
As for what to call Semblances, calling them Powers for simplicity is fine, keeping Semblance is more of keeping remnants of RWBY for the Alt RWBY (ehe, *Remnants*)
Get rid of aura but instead introduced force fields artifacts salvaged from the old Empire.
Oz could be the reason why the beacon church started, to keep as a prisoner or deity.
Yes! Also someone mentioned that silver eyes could be associated with divinity and that could be another point of tension between Rwby and Yang. Rwby is not only treated like the perfect daughter by their dad, but also everyone around them and it really screws over her self esteem.
@@ramble4395 oh wow the memories coming back. One forgets about the finger print they’ll always leave.
I have an idea for Salem to be seen as a figure of pure mystery that interacts with all the nations
Salem is a parasitic grade four Grim that has developed a both intelligence and enlightenment from over hundreds of years of her existence and purposely decides to take the host of young adult women and preserves the bodies to last her at most 200 years before it starts decaying. Although the creature known as Salem is a twisted being as for a Grim it does not particularly have any true malice or instinctual hatred towards humanity. When it had became enlightened, it instead has developed a fondness of human nature and wishes to meddle in the development of humanity and wants see whether the humans and fanus will survive and grow or suffer and parish.
Salem has no control or rule over the Grim and is merely just another Grim at the end of the day, but even so Salem self-proclaims herself as the representative of the Grim to provide communications and knowledge of the demons to give humans a better understanding of the world they walk through, but Salem isn't so charitably to go visit humanity to give advise to them and instead has them travel to her home in order to seek her consul.
Salem lives at the top of the mountains in a forgotten palace that boarders off most of the Grim from entering Terria all at once, but the journey to reach her home is very treacherous indeed with many Grim from grades 2 to 3 roaming around the Mountain Palace 24/7 will spell certain death if one is not prepare for the journey. Anyone who is brave or completely desperate for knowledge will only travel to where the Witch's Mountain Palace to gain truths beyond their of understandings.
But there is a major issue with the knowledge that Salem provides, since she has no alliterative motive beyond curiosity, no one can truly get a read on her decisions to help aid humanity and many question why is her information can be consider a creditable. On a few occasion of the doubt towards the Witch led to her "death" by very many skilled Huntsmen and Huntress who only saw her as a monster at the top of the palace, but in most cases people would distort the knowledge they received from Salem to gain benefits for themselves and their group, assumed that the witch meant the opposite of what she had claimed, to trick a nation to fall for the supposed trap provided by the witch, or even hide information that could be seen as harmful to their own group. This distortion of information has led may nations to have a different perspective of Salem making her a vague being that could seem like a messenger of God or a disruptive force of chaos.
How Salem acquired such knowledge is due to her intelligence and enlightenment, Salem is able to use a forgotten art known as 'magic' to gather her information across Terria for centuries at this point. Magic is this story of RWBY is nothing like the former, 'magic' in this story is a complete and utter chaotic force that it could whip out humanity if not utilized properly, especially if it is one of the four core elements ( Fire, Water, Air, and Earth), but the magic that Salem uses has no clear combative capabilities, instead Salem focuses on Clairvoyance, Physical and Mental Illusions, Soul mending, and Dowsing arts. Salem's Clairvoyance is by far her most impressive art she possess, being able to see the current state of every single thing that occurs in Terria giving her all the information that her audience my want to know or see. Even though she can not directly kill her opponents she can often times than not, break the will of those that decide to attack her whether it is Man or Grim.
Salem is only on Salem side and she has no interest in aiding her kinsmen or physically aiding humanity for a better future. She will forever be a force that rest upon at the top of mountain and fulfill the role she set for herself to do for the rest of her life.
I'm almost an adult and I would love to see this as a series, it works for a young adult fantasy story, I remember The Mortal Instrauments and Lunar Chronicles can be pretty dark and can have some really intersting things. I would totally read this as a story and I would love to see it.
I'm liking this solely for the single use of that riff from The Ecstasy
"It was made to spite RoosterTeeth."
I get that!
I like the idea that Blake thinks her parents don't know but in reality they knew for years from the signs. First was the growing pains inside of Blake's ears which didn't have a medical explanation, then there was Blake changing her hairstyle very quickly to cover her ears (perhaps she was really into earrings or having her hair up in a ponytail before her ears transformed) and then there were the new hair accessories. The bow wasn't too much of a clue to them but it was the insistence on things like earmuffs and headphones they were more concerned about. Just a thought.
Why does Blake even wear that "bowtie" on her head? In this world are bowties even real disguises? If people have real cat ears, and people with real cat ears and other animal parts are discriminated against in a given country would that country allow for the making of bowties for normal people to wear, and would there even be a market for that? If there was a niche market wouldn't the rest of society discriminate towards those customers? It wouldn't be seen as hipster, it'd be seen as "fauna supporter" by normal people and as...like a weird form of black face by fauna. I doubt schools any would allow much less a school in a discriminatory country
Cinder could be an instructor that Ruby’s mom trained and she blames Ruby for her death. Mercury and Emerald could be Cinder’s favourites that she uses to bully Ruby and her team. Helps give many sources of conflict with Yangs inferiority complex, Weiss not wanting to get her family involved and Blake’s secret being found.
Now this is hot
On semblances, you could have them just make them more categorical instead of everybody having an unique super power. You could rip One Piece’s devil fruit power system (maybe not the powers themselves but rather the way they’re differentiated).
@CrKhan 4457 so basicly the quirk system form My Hero Academia?
Or you can make them more difficult to obtain it takes Decades of practice and study to unlock a semblance instead of was having all the characters already have a semblance they can unlock it over the course of seasons. This would make semblances appear more special and not something you just expect everyone to be able to do.
Salem could be just a highly evolved Grimm.
What about some ideology that just the existence of the Grimm inspire: for example, there are some settlement at the very edge of the Frontier that would kill or exile people because of their dark emotions (which is either still a thing or just part of this ideology)
Bro I did that shit at the end in my schools computer lab
No CRDL (or that one team with the bully character) and team JNPR becomes the sorta rival to team RWBY
Would be interesting if Cinder and gang work together with RWBY against the grimm
I know this is late, but I need to get this off my chest.
Whew boy, this...is is certainly something.
This really isn't a fix it fic. This is just different world building and trope swapping, most of which isn't even any good. Some of them are downright terrible. On the other hand, some of them are basically what's in the show already!
Weiss does have abusive parents! Or at least one abusive parent. The other is a bit of an absentee/neglectful parent. We saw in Volume 4 that her father does abuse/manipulate her. That's nothing new.
Others feel like the person has a wee bit of an agenda. Some of it seems to be making the world a little darker and edgier, like Faunas being mutated by Grimm, which kinda cheapens the whole discrimination thing IMO if they're literally part monster...like, where's the subtlety in that? The Faunas subplot is probably the weakest part of RWBY to me, but this somehow makes it worse. It seems like they're trying to justify why humans hate Faunus, rather then going with the reason the show does, which is that humans are just inherently shitty sometimes and hate that which is different, just like in real life. They don't need to be part-monster and adding that just makes it seem really hamfisted. I know RWBY isn't exactly known for subtlety, but c'mon...this is way more in your face.
It also seems they're going for a more morally grey-world by having a bigger focus on governments/religions and other challenging topics...but then Adam is just 100%, genuinely heroic. Which is kinda weird, and a little dumb to me, since Adam was morally grey, as Blake says. He started out good with good intentions, but as time went on he slipped further and further down the rabbit hole of madness and spite, and became the broken man we see in Volume 6. Why not have Adam in this story start out as good as of his first appearance, and then we see his descent throughout the story? People still like Adam even though he was pretty damn monstrous in most of his appearances, so even more would probably like him if we actually start with Adam as a good character from the get-go.
Moving on to the whole Ruby/Yang thing...why change that? I find it rather refreshing that these are siblings with no ill will, no rivalry, no dumb drama between the two of them. They get along rather well and are basically best friends. That's nice, wholesome, and really seems a hell of a lot less cliche then competing siblings, which is the majority of sibling relations in fiction.
The outfit changes...that seems like the person has a little bit of a chip on their shoulder about...something. They want RWB to be more modest (for no specified reason) but Yang to be skimpier? That seems more then a little weird to me.
The random age/species/name changes...they don't really matter, nor do they make it better, unless there's solid reasoning behind them. There is none. How does any of that make the story better?
Why the hell would Ren and Nora be spies? Spies for whom, and why?
Beacon Academy is now the Church of Beacon...but is it still a Huntsman academy? What actually happens there, or is it still basically the same Beacon, just renamed. Name changes don't really matter that much. How does its function change? What difference does that make to the story? These are the things are rewrite should focus on. Not just changing the name and appearance of everything.
All the stuff about governments and religions...doesn't really sound all too great. Why would a religion debate whether or not killing the soulless monsters who want to kill all of humanity is moral? The dumb rename for Grimm implies they're still exactly the same as they are in canon, so nothings really changed there. It just sounds like the writer is trying to put in moral greyness everywhere they can, but not actually putting forward why its grey. He's just saying "People disagree about this" or "This is controversial" in a roundabout way, but not actually getting into what the opposing views are. Like Pyrrha being infamous for her fathers political views. What political views, and why are they unpopular? More importantly, she can still be a star athlete and have a controversial father. One does not exclude the other.
There's a bunch of other character changes that seem pointless and doesn't improve anything, like Sun and Penny. What does changing them do to anything? How does it make the plot better?
Blake being a straight up Ninja...good gods how horribly cliched that would be if Blake is just a copy-paste ninja, wearing entirely Japanese clothes, using entirely Japanese weapons. Literally the easiest and most generic anime/fanfiction character possible. Pass.
All that nonsense about lost technology...nah. It works perfectly in canon to have Kingdoms with a technological disparity, because countries in real life, especially going through the industrial and early modern ages, had huge technological disparities between them. Also, calling this bygone age "The Imperial Era", having it end in "The Fall" and the end result being rare, ancient and ill-understood technology that anachronistic states fought over all seems a little too similar to Warhammer 40,000 for me. Probably wasn't intentional, but seems that way to me.
But the biggest and most important thing about this whole mess is that it doesn't even "fix" RWBY, its not even really RWBY at this point. Its a story that just copies and pastes some elements of RWBY then throws the rest out for some other stuff. There's no real suggestions about rewriting scenes or story lines, no reworked characters arcs, except for some light stuff with Ruby/Yang and Adam. There's no ideas about how the series grand conflict would be changed, or even what it is. Is this RWBY if it followed them through Beacon for 4 years? RWBY if they spent more time doing actual monster hunting? RWBY if the kingdoms were at war, or a combination of the above? Is this RWBY with literally the exact same plot, but a different world?
Tl;dr: This isn't RWBY, but better, this is a totally different story and world using RWBY names.
“I just want to spite Rooster Teeth” and here’s the first sign that we’re dealing with an asshole.
Hey dude. Screw rooster teeth who just copyrighted your new video in less than an hour of release.
Silver eye is like a tide. When it shows up it pushes the fronter border back/ liberates old citys or is heavily prosecuted and pushed in to the fronter thus pushing a small part of the frontier back or silver eyes is a desirable trait in Ruby's religion (THOUGH OUT IDEAS AAAHHHHHHHH)
Maybe in the case of Blake's parents not knowing she's a faunus, maybe she went to some sort of boarding school before Beacon or she didn't see her parents much around the time her traits started emerging, so her suddenly wearing her hair long and a bow will just seem like a new phase to them.
This is only for everyone here and probably wish everyone could discuss this story more. Would a discord be a good idea? If not then keep this unliked.
man, youtube's copyright system has been working double overtime it seems ._.
Hey Jerry, I am in the middle of making my own Adam Taurus story set after his death in the show (yes I'm working on a way around just some half-baked revival method). When I get a good chunk of it done, would you be interested in me linking it to you for you to look over? I really respect your world building and writing, plus the time it must have taken to come up with alternate take. It is for that reason that I would appreciate the scrutiny and advice of a fellow writer and fan of RWBY.
Sure! You can e-mail me your story when you're done.
I have a Adam Background story as to his motivations and im using moments that didn't happen (he never really meeting the other members of team RWBY) as to why he is the way he is (outside the Miles and Kerry decimation of his character). Would you be cool with looking at it when I get a large part done?
@@darklightimages Sure thing.
@@JerryFreeman Thanks! Appreciate it man.
Let's hope to Adams semblance being properly explained, because his makes no sense lore wise, his weapon isn't a part of him so it shouldn't be applied to his ability.
Maybe have it applied to his aura instead, his aura absorbs the damage and he feeds it back or making him able to spread his aura around objects he touches maybe restricting him have to only focus more on the aura of the object instead of his own body?
How about making his a feedback instead of Yangs buildup, every hit he takes he has to dish back or release out, makes him not use it carelessly like in the show.
Just some ideas I've had if you're think of writing about Adam after he got double penetrated by some lesbians and "died".
HAHAHAHAHA THE NEW VID GOT TAKEN DOWN IMMEDIATELY
Anicism and Avanism sound way too similar. People would forget which is which.
Like sunnis and shiites? They seem pretty similar to me and I always forget what makes them different
@@tihontihon7161 And Sunnis and Shiites sound way more different than Anicists and Avinisists. It's going to be even harder for the ear to catch the difference.
Oh, and the difference Between Sunni and Shiite is mostly political - that is Iran is Shiite and Saudi Arabia is Sunni.
Oh, ok I get it now
So has any one made a fan fiction about this because this is great
After watching the first video I got an idea about the possible inclusion of Penny in this version. In this version she could be a prototype android that was created before The Fall and was found by the RWBY gang during a mission or something. The conflict that comes from her character could be that the people who created her treated her as another human (The purpose in doing so was to make her interactions with humans more natural once she was released to the public), but now she's in a completely different age where people aren't all exactly trusting of the ancient technologies. So she now has to deal with people who treat her either as an abomination or a tool to be reverse engineered. Of course this would mean that she doesn't look nearly as human-like as she did in RWBY former.
Also, if it fits into you're idea of The Fall, I think Penny could have been put into stasis or something intentionally before it occured, indicating that the people of that time had some knowledge of what was about to happen to them.
One thing i dont understand abort your new Rwby is What is the over all plot, What are the themes ?
RWBY is what western think of an anime... And make anime out of it...
*WE NEED MORE **_JOJO_** like Anime!*
Yeah let's make sure no real life politics is in RWBY because it's forced, unnecessary, bad writing, and nobody likes it.
Plus there may be a hidden agenda behind it.
Edward Armstrong People don’t like homosexuality in fiction typically because it’s an inorganic appeal to vapid narcissists demanding ‘representation’ rather than a realistic consequence of character development and interaction. Having straight characters suddenly turn gay because a twitter mob threatened to lynch the writers doesn’t make for a convincing romance arc. Especially when the romance subverts the plot by monopolising screen time which ought to be used to drive the narrative.
Game of Thrones and Lord of the Rings are Feudal and high fantasy settings (not imperialist) and Star Wars demonises imperialism, the agents of the empire are the villains after all.
@@kana22693 Edward Armstrong not really the same thing though. I might even say it's a false equivalence. He's talking more about political hot topics that people get pissy about, not well thought out and well integrated politics that make the world more interesting. Also, white imperialism? Please explain.
@@hersirivarr1236 Thank you! They should at least build it or establish those relationships normally, like they do for straight couples, instead of shoving LGBT down people's throats.
Can we make this go big in the community? When I saw a lot of RWBY Community went nuts and mad about the last season, it only encourages that the series is full of problem and it’s getting worse (so far) instead of getting better, seeing this video (and the previous one) open up a whole new world and potential, it’ll be great to actually have it as an actual story written (and maybe drawn)! Btw You deserve more subs and View You rocks!!
For the part about who the target audience was in RWBY former. I think that RWBY was supposed to be a beat em show with amazing fight choreography and over the top weapons, that was the appeal of the show ( at least the 1st 2 vol.) hence why the over all story and layout was generic. There's a TH-camr called Gigguk that had a discussion on RWBY when it was going through it's " is it really anime though?" phase, and he comments on how rediculous the weapons are, to where he says " the final boss is gonna have a rocket launcher that turns into an apache attack chopper" ( something along those lines) and I found that hilarious ( I recommend watching that video). In the later half of Vol. 3 rooster teeth decided they want to go for a more world building story rout and well we all know how that turned out.
I didn't want this to stop I loved it thank you man
I really enjoy ur format of this fixing up broken worlds and it's amazing seeing ur thought process behind these. Please do more, though that's wishful thinking cause these probably take forever to do but if you're going to make one again just know u'll get at least 1 view from me. Also, the next one doesn't have to be on RWBY I enjoy the show but it's pretty much dead now, I don't like what ur doing cause it's on RWBY but it's just how creative u are with these worlds rebuilding and how much better u can make these worlds again. Don't know any worlds for u to rewrite but any one u'll do I believe will be good on what i've seen so far. Please make more
You have to remember. Monty was an animator not a director so when he passed rwby was being made by people who could animate what monty wanted or even script what he wanted and because rooster teeth are dumb it’s inconsistent on what we get in the coming seasons
I feel like somewhere in this conceptualized world, there is an individual that was remembered in history by the name of Oumi Mont, and what he wrote and had published initially by proxy was the equivalent to Sun Tzu's "The Art of War". Mind you, he wasn't a novelist, poet, or any other artisan for that matter, but he was damn good in how engagement of fights/battles/campaigns went, (read that in any way you will). And he had a clear philosophy on why people fought to protect. And this would go as far back as to how old the "Art of War" would be in conjunction with the "time setting" this world is set in.
13:43 Out of Spite
Great Reflection
This much Effort in such little Work
Amazing Vibe
Surprisingly Competent Overview
I think the White Fang should stay and become an arc for Blake returning to the White Fang after being sent to Beacon as a spy and the rest of team RWBY and JNPR try to get her back on their side. I have an idea with Adam being a sorta mentor to Blake, Ilia, and 3 or thereabouts characters (Neon[I think that’s her name], Velvet[pobably rename], and a sorta combination of Sun and Neptune as a Shark Faunus who’s semblance is to control salt water but it takes a lot of effort.
I don't think I want another Sasuke story. (As in the going after her part)
@ Kevin C.
It’s better than her story now
You've just earned my subscription with this video. RoosterTeeth needs new writers.
I like that idea about Adam helping fanaus people escape in the underground railroad
Silver Eye : well...maybe something bout ancient bloodline of people who have something to do with grim. Unlike power to destroy them like in OG , but power to control grim of some source.
Adam : I agree , he start at railroad member but after sometime(in story not past) some event happened and change his world view. And he begin to go down a dark path, but as morally grey villain. He's first as "only self defend" , but after that event and gather some follower . He begin his guerilla war against those who try to attack his people . At least him and his crew still chill enough to not attack civilian unless they become a threat , but that doesn't mean he is kind enough to let any of aggressor go after messing with him and his group.
Salem : ...Just pack her with the Grim . No need for lackey like Cinder group . Just her and advance grim/humanoid grim who act has her general and she is their queen. Oh and if possible , change her eye to become silver too . I would love to see Ruby find out what "silver eye" meant....and it's not a good one for people who know what it is. For short , Salem is ancestor of Ruby or something . But down the line one of her children (maybe Summer herself) want to live a different life and try to escape . Salem sent her general to pursuit and capture them but in the end have to kill them all but that's what she think . Last survivor came into contact with human and escape to human world without Salem knowing.
And if you think why they didn't use their power to help escape , they already did...BUT!!!! Even if those who flee share the same power as Salem , the ability to control grim . They won't have the same authority as Salem so it won't work when Salem directly order their capture or kill.
So basically it can stay the same as you write until event Fall of Beacon . Salem know about the existence of Ruby and try to capture her at all cost , She just want her great great grand daughter back(or at least kill her if necessary). And here is the different between OG and my version , My version of Salem love her family(those who shared her bloodline) so dearly but because their betrayal(try to escape)....even if it pain her to kill them she won't hesitate. She can't risk any possibility for someone who had her power to be on opposite side until her final goal was realized. To destroy god.
Ozpin : Still kinda the same as his OG counterpart. But not as immortal ancient as in OG , he is the only few people who know about "silver eye" and it connection to Salem . He also the one who help Summer escape to human world(which at that time he won't know what special about her). He just one of many Huntsman who was sent to the east territory and by chance..meet Summer. And that is why Salem want his head.
Adam should be working as the leader of the white fang just to hid the railroad from the public
I imagine Torchwik being a mafia boss who stands at the top of organized crime which is easy enough to fit in to this setting, and Cinder I think would be best as another sort of protagonist who is maybe a close friend of rwby taking the spot Yang once had in rwby former
For the silver eyes it could be that those were descendants from some of the experiments that the empire had made. It could give more reason to go out into the more wilderness part of the world and could be used for a cool backdrop. Heck maybe even have someone like ozpin. An ancient immortal trapped and have him act as a narrative piece as to the background of the grim.
Anyone have a link to the reddit he talking about?
I just want to read it is all.
Silver eyes could originate as legend or folktale from 'Ren's country'. It could be brought up late into the first arc or midway into the second arc as throw in with Ren and/or Nora chatting about random topics. Then later in another arc where Ruby explores the rest of the continent, someone from the Ren's country comes across an injured/ travel weary Ruby. He helps or tries to rob her and comments on her eyes. After the encounter she thinks back and realizes she had heard the story about silvers eyes before but didn't know it was a old folktale known almost exclusively known to local tribe within 'Ren's country'. Ruby later pieces together that Ren originates from that country and decides how to confront him about it the next time they meet
My first thought for what silver eyes would be is a phenotype displaying a rare genetic trait, believed to be relatively common among devout religious warriors and heroes in the last age by the church at Beacon and other places, that improves ones ability to fight in a number of ways, such as: allowing one to handle extreme physical and mental strains; having a large boost to the effectiveness of adrenaline rushes, hysterical strength, and second winds; improvements to overall physical endurance and mental agility and precision (so as to help them keep up with their better physical capabilities and with formulating battle strategies). These aspects of it would not be very well known and would mostly be rumored about by religious folk and those who have seen silver eyed people perform great feats rather than scientifically tested due to the nature of when the benefits are apparent and the rarity of the trait itself. It is not a fully fleshed out idea, but the idea behind it is to both give credence to the beliefs of those who we would see regularly holding the trait in high esteem and to set Ruby as special from the rest of the capable fighters in the cast. It could be the only reason she is able to survive that deadly battle with Yang which is where the effects of the trait start to become apparent to the audience. I also had the idea for Ozpin to have silver eyes too, though it is a fact that he goes to some lengths to hide in order to keep as low of a profile as possible.
Switching gears to Ozpin, I imagined him being a "chaotic good" character that is the counterpart to Salem. He would be highly manipulative and cunning, working towards uniting the human, and eventually faunus as well, to work together and destroy the Grimm totally. He would cause a lot of problems on the way to doing this, and would not be fully trusted by the main cast by the end of the second season. At this point he would switch to being a scheming background character (like Salem) that causes issues the gang has to deal with in the name of creating a lasting peace across all of Remnant. I don't know how well a character like this would fit into what you are thinking of for this version of things, but I personally always wanted to see Ozpin be a good-but-not-entirely-good good guy that has a great affect on the political happenings of the world.
Other things I want to give an opinion on:
Blake's parents would 100% know she is a faunus. There is no good reason for this to not be the case, and the simple fact of them knowing and not rejecting her makes for a decent baseline for their characters.
Sun (or whatever takes Sun's place, since having a Sun-like character is a good idea even if you don't want him specifically) should totally be a human who cares about the faunus and is one of the first to figure out what Blake really is. Having him be blatantly faunus while Blake tries her hardest to hide her faunus nature doesn't make much sense, and keeping the faunus trait a rarer thing would have the discrimination be more understandable. If they are everywhere some people would start to see it as normal and that would work against the role they fill and the conflict they are supposed to generate in the story. Also, the rarer it is, the more reasonable it is for people to assume that it is a detestable mutation instead of a normal genetic trait.
Adam Taurus could be a introduced of as a villain but later turn out to be a benefactor of the faunus. He should also keep his negative traits like getting overly angry at the injustices he sees and how he can be obsessive about things - and people - he cares about. Having him be upset with all the evils he sees yet constantly reining himself in to try to fix things through peaceful means like the Underground Railroad type idea you had would help him have meaningful and understandable short arcs that don't need a ton of time to set up and explain. I don't quite know how he should be in character interactions though. He could be a love interest for Blake that contends with Sun at a few points, or those characteristics could be limited by having his zeal be at the forefront of his design instead.
Wow, this is much longer than I planned. Hope someone enjoys my thoughts on things or is able to use them to add to this whole idea. And I do think it is a great idea too, by the way. You should try to make this a thing yourself if you are able.
Why does lgbt stuff needs to be present? I mean that shouldn't be even a plot point, who sleeps with who should be left to the imagination
Going off that logic, we may as well not have any straight relationships either. Why do we have to know who's sleeping with who? That's all relationships are, after all, right?
It doesn't have to be a significant plot point with a disproportionate amount of focus. It should just....be there. Like straight people are just there. They're just people. Write the characters as people, have their sexuality as a random anecdote like it is with straight characters and move on. If y'all are so distracted by a character being LGBT, that's a you problem.
I do think that RT doesn't have any business writing anything LGBT-related though. They just aren't good at it. Even Saffron and Terra seemed vaguely "Eyyyy we got lesbians y'all! Lookit! Lesbians!" when Terra came home.
But some people writing LGBT characters poorly doesnt mean they should never be written into creative works ever.
@@Shmurph exactly, the problem Is when they try so hard to show they are inclusive, everyone notices it just how forced and badly written it is, personally I think that dependong on the type of story it may be, it could be better to not even put romance at all, others may require it as a plot device
@@vxgpakoable Because shipping and how RWBY baits ships at every fucking opportunity and shipping sells.
That's basically it.
*edit*
Well, okay, no. LGBT rep is important because the current state of affairs is *not fucking good enough*. But If i had to take a cynical guess, I would assume the person asking asked because of shipping
@@Shmurph yet it's more on cancer of the toxic community of people supporting LGBT and are a dumpsterfire of double standard hypocrisy. They created the problem to dictate over others creation and can't win with having it or not as they always have something to cry about. They would rather not have it as it weighs less on something to complain over and over. Typical people crying over fake sensitivity.
@@QosmicVoid Japan can do a better job of it and even tease to bait people as a gag joke just for the fans and then continue on. It's funny how Japan does a better job even though majority involves straight relationships and gay relationships is behind as second as Japan needs to have a reason due to low birth rates.
You could say that semblances are considered a gift from the church’s god. You could also say it was another mutation but everyone got it so they couldn’t discriminate it.
Edit: also this would be an epic video game if this was made as one I would buy it in a second.
It's not RWBY when you change everything about the Series. Changing what made a character who they are changes what the Series is. Your ideas are great, but changing the RWBY world makes it not RWBY anymore. A great original take on RWBY. But the world and characters are completely alternate universe in comparison. Some lacked depth, others became nothing more than one-shots.
Their is a RWBY anthology manga that adds depth to the team RWBY that the show lacks. It shows why Ruby is how she is. I don't have any negative remarks about your work. It's your take on the show. But if the RWBY series has hundreds of followers it's not for lack of story-board or character abandonment. It's because certain things just don't really matter at the time.
Overall your "Revision of RWBY" is quite good. I doubt I could do that in just a 35 minute video.
the white fang is evil, i totally called it, and i'm bringing you daughter back!! (indeed it is an amazing line)
I remember when the first teaser came out. Ruby seemed really interesting and mysterious.
Rooster Teeth lied to me.
The amount of changes put into RWBY Former by your "But Better" version are drastic enough to where it could potentially become its own IP if you just swapped around a bunch of names. After all, terms like Grimm aren't exactly copyrighted by Rooster Teeth.
Just a suggestion for the silver eyes power
Silver eye is a dominant trait that pass down through the generations that allowed the user to wield ancient empire technology weapon/ vechicle.
Like it grants the user a signature aura that the technology could recognize
And add half breeds of the silver eye that only temporarily active it via only one eye turning silver when agitated or something
The maiden powers should be introduced as a special ability found in 30 percent of the population caused from an apocalyptic event prior to the universe.
14:46 I saw an OLD Fallout 3/NV vid about this very concept "You can tell how much depth and effort and logic there is to a world if they answer where does the food come from?"
Poor Blake! Also good job on Adam.
I watched old rwby for the monty fights but I am loving the setting for the story and characters
Ozpin being shady and morally grey sounds amazing. please do it.
They get their food from the desert vacuum!
I think making aura a extension of the soul used to protect, heals, and strengthens the individual whilst semblances are more like signatures of the soul an unique ability that is more like an expression of that persons soul, and I also think that these concepts should be shrouded in some mystery with people not knowing everything about them or how they work since the source is the soul rather than anything immediately quantifiable.
this would allow for the super human feats we see in rwby former, and would add more weight to religion and the presence of gods in the setting seeing as aura and semblances are not quantifiable similar to how god isn't quantifiable
This is getting better and better
Do you know what time it is?
IT'S GANDALF TIME!
I think Monty would be proud someone cared this much for his work
*looking at you RT*
Thank god I wasnt the only one who noticed that rwby is being draw out to a breaking point.