David L. Williams & Mitchell Bendersky Try to Spot Pro Screenwriting | Spot the Pro #6

Screenwriter David L. Williams and manager Mitchell Bendersky try to tell pro from amateur screenwriting in only one page!
2:35 - Dave and Mitchell give thoughts on first pages
4:55 - Nate reveals a twist
7:03 - Page A1
8:24 - Page A2
18:15 - Reveal for Group "A"
22:00 - Page B1
23:38 - Page B2
38:11 - Reveal for Group "B"
40:59 - Page C1
42:23 - Page C2
52:35 - Reveal for Group "C"
54:10 - Page D1
55:40 - Page D2
1:13:00 - Reveal for Group "D"
Thank you to the writers who submitted pages and thank you to Mike Morin for the graphic design!
Want to get involved in a future episode of Spot the Pro? If you're a pro or amateur writer who'd like to submit a page, or if you're a professional writer / industry professional who'd like to be on an episode, get in touch here: www.nathangrahamdavis.com/spotthepro

[@NGDwrites]

Want to get involved in a future episode of Spot the Pro? If you're a pro or amateur writer who'd like to submit a page, or if you're a professional writer / industry professional who'd like to be on an episode, get in touch here: www.nathangrahamdavis.com/spotthepro

[@annawestall1]

Thank you for featuring my page Nathan! This was such a great episode (I might be biased), though I watched the beginning with heart palpitations :)

[@FrancisNorton-z9r]

Is your script online somewhere?

[@NGDwrites]

Thank you so much for being part of it! Apologies for the palpitations, but hopefully they were worth it, lol.

[@annawestall1]

Hey, not yet but soon I hope :)

[@tochiRTA]

I'm in your slush pile! Holla at cha boy! 💪🏿 D1 was my favorite page.

[@PaulJonWhite]

Wow, I only got C2, think I'm getting worse at this! Another great episode, loved seeing Mitchell's perspective - looking at budget & marketability.

[@NGDwrites]

Totally!

[@TheeMaxB]

Another fun, insightful episode! Stoked to have called the Kobayashi Maru and hope that twist appears in future episodes.

[@NGDwrites]

Thanks, Max! Decent chance it'll make an appearance again.

[@bovinejoni4243]

I’m only through the second pair, but I got a kick out of the B1 longline being the most indie premise imaginable after the rationale behind picking it largely centered around how *commercial* the first page seemed to be.

[@BJAZADI]

Brilliant, love the twist!

[@NGDwrites]

We might be bringing that one back more often, haha. It was fun.

[@XxSEETH3RxX]

About time, David's gonna be on there

[@NGDwrites]

It was always gonna happen!

[@cavelice]

Damn. 😂 These were hard.

[@ScottHawthorne3]

Kirk beat the Kobayashi Maru test by cheating the computer. I feel Joe did the same thing here by guessing correctly without reading the pages. Way to go, Captain.

[@NGDwrites]

Ha!

[@KTock.Writes]

One thing that makes it harder to guess which script is which is that it seems like many of the professionals send the first page of an early script that helped launch their careers. I think that's why Mitchell's commerciality metric was thwarted.

[@NGDwrites]

Oh, that definitely adds to the challenge. It's still a testament to the amateur writers, though... it's not easy to write a page that will even stack up to one that broke someone in and we put a fair amount of effort into finding them.

[@KTock.Writes]

@@NGDwrites And it's super-useful (as an emerging writer) to see where the bar is at!

[@rollierollout]

I chose A2 as the pro for the first pair solely because there is no way a woman with such extreme OCD would have pubic hair long enough to shed. 😂

[@NGDwrites]

Lol!

[@petecomrie1787]

I found that C1 could have used diffrient words to describe the settings. Example using “behind” to end a view and “behind” to start the next.
I did notice using each others names on the phone when already know each other.
But I chose C2 to be the pro. Now I will turn it back on to get the answer. Love these episodes. 😊😊

[@DDumbrille]

I knew the Stolz script was the pro, because she did a AMA on Reddit, but I agree w/all...love the 1st script -- far more original and CLEVER. Got round two right as well, mainly because of some awkward but subtle typos. Edit to add: C is #2...I hope. Edit (as Mitchell is speaking about D2)...I think it's D1. I hope.

For me the 'chlorine overwhelming the senses' (not film-able) and the 'turning off alarm clock' first thing in the morning made me guess it was the two pre-pros. 😃

[@davidlaurie4963]

if Anna is reading this, I would love to read this script.

[@millennialthehippie2866]

If you’re going to do groups, then do the deliberation phase in separate groups so they don’t all share opinions.