just watched this video. It's been years since i wrote and decided to start again. Here is the the first line from the novel i am working on now. I feel like its profound, sets the tone for the main character aswell as an interesting location. its sci-fi. obviously “What they don’t tell you is how quiet it is on the moon, it is quiet enough to drive an ordinary man insane. Guess i'm no ordinary man”.
Fuuuck, love it. You could make the MC a little more likeable if the second sentence is more like "No one ever called me ordinary." But if he's a hotshot, got ego etc. then it's perfect as is.
@@sethrakes1991 "She lay in the field with her velvety black hair fanned out around her. The scene would almost be pretty, were she not laying in a field of shit and bugs. "
The first line for one of my books (that I’ve put off to the IFE for now to focus on another one) is this- “Thirty-seven oranges. How did you even manage to *do* that Naomi?” Idk if that’s really good, my mom and sister said it was but they’re family so they kind of have to lol
I am very very amateur in this, but let me ask the stupid questions here: When it comes to action, would it be stupid if I use that but execute it all in a dream sequence? Would it be bad if I start my character's story with her nightmare?
A risk here is that this is overdone. A bigger risk is that people read this awesome action sequence, get curious about the character etc. and then you say PSYCHE it was all a dream hahaha! So if you use the dream, be sure it hints at or plays a bigger role in the narrative/plot/theme/world.
I'm writing a novel. Title-Two bodies One soul I've planned a series,four parts each. Here is the chapter two starting, 'I took Sunil to where I had blown up the wall. I told him, “look there was an old lady here and a wall above here (there was nothing now) That wall had to fall on the old lady that I did so my hands up like this…(I showed him how) and the wall flew away!” Sunil was listening. Then said quietly, “And?(What? He wanted more to listen? That’s it bro) That’s it? What happened to that old lady then?”'
The current opening of my novel so far: "Across the street from Prospects Nightclub on Old Pine Road, Eoin stood under the brightest street light he could find; a revolver in the front waist of his jeans under his shirt and a hunting knife in its sheath tucked in the back."
My debut novella that I just started writing has the Insightful opening, even though I never knew that it was its own type of beginning. Do you think I could share it with you for feedback and tips? Anyways, great video and thanks.
"Even a voice that's really interesting can be a hook, in my opinion". You and basically everyone who celebrates _Catcher in the Rye_ as a great novel. So yeah, basically everyone. Which is really just to say that it's clearly established that a really interesting voice can serve as a great hook for a novel's beginning.
Thanks Shaelin! (These videos are still paying off years later!) As I've edited my book, I keep trying to make the INCITING INCIDENT earlier and earlier because of advice like ~8:30. However, I'm writing an epic fantasy that will be 3-4 books, and not only do I want to ground the reader in the world, I want to cement a sense of the class hierarchy and inequality that is a huge theme throughout my story. So here's what the beginning of the first book looks like high level right now: Prologue - Very short, setting the tone of when the status quo came about hundreds of years prior. (The POV character will return in the second book.) Chapter 1 - MC intro from waking up in his ordinary world to traveling into the "capital" (where the Magi live) to work Chapter 2 - MC2 intro from waking up in her "ordinary" world (though she lives in the capital), showing how we all take for granted our lives but also contrasting how much more the Magi have Chapter 3 - Ends with inciting incident for MC getting pulled into a magical artifact Chapter 4 - Ends with inciting incident for MC2 diving into the same artifact (chasing after MC) Does this sound ridiculous? I REALLY don't think it's too long for the inciting incident. Maybe this is because I like to read epic fantasy--I'm willing to put in a few chapters before any serious action or plot development as long as the world and characters are interesting and I see that there's tension and conflict coming. Any feedback welcome!
-"Once upon a time" is banal. -"...it was a dark and stormy night" is cliche. -"Suddenly" has the exact opposite effect than intended here. It's also Tells, rather than Shows. Better to omit it and simply say, "A shot rang out." See how sudden that comes across without "suddenly" muddying it up?
I’m starting to rewrite a novel of mine and I decided to start it off with a few sentences of nature description and then my main character waking up to the smell of fire and burning buildings and bodies. She then goes on to realise that she is in the woods huddled somewhere and can’t remember what happened. She gets up and has flashes of what happened and runs back to her village and sees the damage (she has minor retrograde amnesia) and I then go into detail of what happened. Is that ok?
Minor retrograde amnesia tends to be overused and can be a cliche unless you have the expertise to distract the reader with your talent. Would it be okay if she was away from the village picking firewood then returned through beautiful prose descriptions of the forest? ...reassuring the reader that you can be trusted to provide them with an immersive escapist experience with consistent imagery based on confident world building as you have gone to the trouble of drawing a map of the paths and rivers and rocky outcrops within the forest along with the location of its clearings and where crows are nesting, etc. all so it can be routinely revisited as a place, but not so you then put the map of the forest inside the front cover of your book like J.R.R.Tolkein did with his novel _The Hobbit_ as it is only important you do this world building so that you know and the scenes you have happen are all geographically located and you know how long it takes characters to travel from place to place within the forest, and you can do this again at a lower resolution for the simpler "open ground" that would lay outside of the forest paths if the story takes you out of the forest across the country to a town, but then you would need to have a high resolution map for that town if your character was to spend substantial time in it... This would require a change where your character wasn't a witness to the attack on her village. She wouldn't need to have amnesia as she has no memory of the attack as she was out collecting firewood when it took place and too far away to see, hear, or smell it. You probably would want to do this in Summer so that there are leaves on the trees as the canopy of foliage would block out her seeing the smoke rising from her village when she initially turned back in that direction to return home. If you wanted a stronger first sentence hook you might set it in Winter so that: _She dropped the bundle of wood she had collected from the stark snow-laden forest when she saw a thick plume of black smoke rising from the direction of her village._ That, however, is a LOT of information to hit the reader with, which is why I think your set up better suits an opening paragraph, or two, of excellent prose description, making the reader feel comfortable with spending a lot of time in this forest due to its inherent natural beauty, and establishing a baseline where the protagonist is having what is a normal day for them and is happy with how things are, until the inciting incident comes late in the second paragraph and turns their whole world upside-down. There is no need to mention their relationships to those who may be dead in the village, in these two paragraphs as that would just risk tipping off experienced readers to your surprise twist. If I read that X loves Y it immediately makes me think that something bad is going to then happen to Y as it did in _Romeo and Juliet._ Not that it has to, but I am not surprised if it does. So, talking about the village elders only makes sense if she has been sent into the forest to kill a monster that has been eating all of their goats. This scenario would start her in the Jungian Unknown. Whereas you need to initially hide this from the reader and have it so that she thinks she is in the Jungian Known, collecting firewood. Everything is normal, for her, until she turns back in the direction of the village, and if you want her to be on her return journey at the outset just set it in Summer so the canopy of leaves blocks any obvious rising smoke. She now doesn't know who attacked her village. That is okay. This is called a mystery. She will find clues and investigate and take revenge. I recommend you go see _The Batman._
That’s so good! One of mine starts with my MC torturing killing then burning someone alive all the while introducing herself and then riding off on her Ducati lol. Some reason this reminded me of that.
I agree with the other comment be very careful with amnesia. Can be done right but overused. As far as the intro, yes that can work. If your book opens with a beautiful nature scene, does that somehow reflect a theme in your book? Does the MC just want to get away from it all and live in the woods? But violence follows her? Think of how you're setting the scene for the whole book.
What is this? Where am I? He questioned himself examining everything around him with an expression of complete shock. It felt unreal like a dream heavy as if he was sinking underwater. But all those questions where silenced when he saw the old lady . Starting of my horror novela
Here's my opening so far "Some people don’t believe in miracles but they happen everyday in your lives, you just have to notice them. Nature itself is a miracle. All people are part of nature, but some are very unique and although they are still part of nature, they are able to control it, and rule it, isn’t that a miracle? Some parents are lucky enough to give birth to miracles. Only a few of those miracles grow up to be rulers, and be part of: Nature's government. Nature’s guardians, helpers and protectors. Up to this day their kind still remains, and new gifted children are born. And if you know it or not you may be one of them."
Try to have enough inner monologue that we understand the stakes, why MC is fighting, and what his motivations are. Action for the sake of action is boring. Need conflict and stakes.
Here's my opening for my drama novel: "After a tiring day at school, the only thing the students were waiting for was for the bells to ring to go home."
@Ayame Takahashi You know i was just feeling that as well yesterday after re reading and reading it again, Thanks for taking your time to leave your opinion!!! Ayame have a nice day!!!
@Ayame Takahashi Does it help you by telling it is a story of a boy who gets the visit of a crow and that crow tells him he has only 7 days to live. it is a story about logic vs faith/Belief
I have become a huge fan! I just published my first novel a little before discovering this channel. I’m not proud of my book and I’m sure you got a reading list that probably looks baffling; but would you ever consider giving insight and critique of a fans book?
Be proud of your book! Your ability to already criticize it probably shows your growth as a writer. You published a book yo! Not many people do that. Just keep at it =)
My post-apocalyptic novel starts off as follows in a single chapter: - Introduction of a cult based in human sacrifice and attempt to murder an innocent woman. - Before the woman is murdered, a single man in full-body tactical armor comes in guns blazing and singlehandedly dispatches the cult with relative ease. - Woman, although thankful, demands to see the face of the man who saved her life. Man complies and the woman is immediately shocked because she happens to know him. Man demands her to leave after complying with her demand and woman does so. - The man asks his friend to come meet up with him and said friend rolls up in a white cargo van. Said vehicle is shown to be some kind of surveillance van and is a mini armory of sorts. This part also introduces his sidekick to be a teenage boy who is talented with computers and other technologies. - Man and boy take a couple of canisters filled with flammable liquid, douse the bodies with said liquid, and set the bodies on fire. The man and the boy eventually leave the scene in their vehicle.
Sounds like you should focus on the fact that the woman knows the man. Is he some handsome guy she sees smiling at the coffee shop, but it turns out he's a government agent, cold blooded... or why is it important that she see his face? AND that she knows him? That sounds like your hook, not all of the violence--though that's sweet too =)
This is helpful and confusing. Too many directions to go. I sometimes get feedback on the people that I submit my manuscript to and they want to know the Point of View. But mainly they say, "It's not for me." I need to rewrite my first page. My manuscript has been edited but I get turned down constantly for many many years. I have action going on right on the first page. No one gets hooked. If a character is kidnapped off of the front steps of her job and people run out to see that she has disappeared wouldn't that hook you?
Thanks for the lovely info and videos. Just recently found out your channel as well just sub you! Keep it up! Thank you, I was looking for helpful video on writing tips.
I find that it's hard for me to get drawn into a novel that begins with background. Although it's my favorite novel, I feel that Fitzgerald made a mistake in "The Great Gatsby" by opening with pages of background information. It's a boring opening. I feel that you have to begin with action to really draw someone in. It grounds the beginning. Puts a stake in the ground.
I'm sure it depends. My epic fantasy is largely around the theme of inequality and other human tendencies. My beginning needs to show this disparity for the narrative to hit home. Action can definitely grab attention, but if you don't know the characters at all, it can easily fall flat imo.
@@PhoenixCrown What you do is pace the introduction of the character by alternating action and background, in short spurts. Or, integrating the requisite background description into the description of action, again, in small doses.
@@PhoenixCrown You must JUDGE how much background to integrate as the action unfolds, and how to pace it and phase it, how to create a rhythm so that it provides sufficient context while still moving things forward.
Here's my opening:
"Grandpa tossed me a rusty shovel from his peddler wagon and told me to dig. We was burying Mama. Well, I was."
I like that. Makes me wonder what happened and what's wrong with the old man.
Where are you posting the book? Drop a link here.
Tf
I love it!!
lose "well i was" too cocky for that situation.
This lady is soo underrated.
Wow. This is great. Where can we find stories you've written?
just watched this video. It's been years since i wrote and decided to start again. Here is the the first line from the novel i am working on now. I feel like its profound, sets the tone for the main character aswell as an interesting location. its sci-fi. obviously
“What they don’t tell you is how quiet it is on the moon, it is quiet enough to drive an ordinary man insane. Guess i'm no ordinary man”.
Fuuuck, love it. You could make the MC a little more likeable if the second sentence is more like "No one ever called me ordinary." But if he's a hotshot, got ego etc. then it's perfect as is.
@@PhoenixCrown great suggestion, that was the one part i was wondering if i could re word. Thanks
My story opens with my mc laying in a field of horseshit after getting thrown from a new horse she was trying to ride and getting knocked unconscious.
I want to read the first line to this lol
@@sethrakes1991 "She lay in the field with her velvety black hair fanned out around her. The scene would almost be pretty, were she not laying in a field of shit and bugs. "
Not that old trope 😴
the first two sentences of my novel:
"My name is Lynn Lotus and this is about the time I found out I had dyslexia.
I'm just kidding."
x tonib x HAH
Hahaha
The first line for one of my books (that I’ve put off to the IFE for now to focus on another one) is this-
“Thirty-seven oranges. How did you even manage to *do* that Naomi?”
Idk if that’s really good, my mom and sister said it was but they’re family so they kind of have to lol
I am very very amateur in this, but let me ask the stupid questions here:
When it comes to action, would it be stupid if I use that but execute it all in a dream sequence? Would it be bad if I start my character's story with her nightmare?
According to me it will be good but I am also ameture. I am here because I am going to start a novel
Would you mind if I share something with you related to my novel
Please let me know
A risk here is that this is overdone. A bigger risk is that people read this awesome action sequence, get curious about the character etc. and then you say PSYCHE it was all a dream hahaha! So if you use the dream, be sure it hints at or plays a bigger role in the narrative/plot/theme/world.
I'm writing a novel.
Title-Two bodies One soul
I've planned a series,four parts each.
Here is the chapter two starting,
'I took Sunil to where I had blown up the wall. I told him, “look there was an old lady here and a wall above here (there was nothing now) That wall had to fall on the old lady that I did so my hands up like this…(I showed him how) and the wall flew away!”
Sunil was listening. Then said quietly, “And?(What? He wanted more to listen? That’s it bro) That’s it? What happened to that old lady then?”'
This was actually helpful and very organized. Thatnk you Shaelin.
The current opening of my novel so far:
"Across the street from Prospects Nightclub on Old Pine Road, Eoin stood under the brightest street light he could find; a revolver in the front waist of his jeans under his shirt and a hunting knife in its sheath tucked in the back."
Noises like that would have woken any ordinary person but not Mr and Mrs Draper of Appleyards Lane. - Mary Draper Dreams of Castles in the Sky
My debut novella that I just started writing has the Insightful opening, even though I never knew that it was its own type of beginning. Do you think I could share it with you for feedback and tips? Anyways, great video and thanks.
What is novella?
@@writer.Ashlesha Means a short novel.
"Even a voice that's really interesting can be a hook, in my opinion". You and basically everyone who celebrates _Catcher in the Rye_ as a great novel. So yeah, basically everyone. Which is really just to say that it's clearly established that a really interesting voice can serve as a great hook for a novel's beginning.
I also think this is just a way of saying, "Novels are good when written by good writers."
This is very well organized, thank you ❤
Loved this!super helpful💕
Thanks Shaelin! (These videos are still paying off years later!)
As I've edited my book, I keep trying to make the INCITING INCIDENT earlier and earlier because of advice like ~8:30. However, I'm writing an epic fantasy that will be 3-4 books, and not only do I want to ground the reader in the world, I want to cement a sense of the class hierarchy and inequality that is a huge theme throughout my story. So here's what the beginning of the first book looks like high level right now:
Prologue - Very short, setting the tone of when the status quo came about hundreds of years prior. (The POV character will return in the second book.)
Chapter 1 - MC intro from waking up in his ordinary world to traveling into the "capital" (where the Magi live) to work
Chapter 2 - MC2 intro from waking up in her "ordinary" world (though she lives in the capital), showing how we all take for granted our lives but also contrasting how much more the Magi have
Chapter 3 - Ends with inciting incident for MC getting pulled into a magical artifact
Chapter 4 - Ends with inciting incident for MC2 diving into the same artifact (chasing after MC)
Does this sound ridiculous? I REALLY don't think it's too long for the inciting incident. Maybe this is because I like to read epic fantasy--I'm willing to put in a few chapters before any serious action or plot development as long as the world and characters are interesting and I see that there's tension and conflict coming.
Any feedback welcome!
Wish you the best of luck
Very helpful
"Once upon a time, it was a dark and stormy night. Suddenly a shot rang out."
-"Once upon a time" is banal.
-"...it was a dark and stormy night" is cliche.
-"Suddenly" has the exact opposite effect than intended here. It's also Tells, rather than Shows. Better to omit it and simply say, "A shot rang out." See how sudden that comes across without "suddenly" muddying it up?
The End
Novel writers and readers sure write long comments
Don't mind me i am sorry
I’m starting to rewrite a novel of mine and I decided to start it off with a few sentences of nature description and then my main character waking up to the smell of fire and burning buildings and bodies. She then goes on to realise that she is in the woods huddled somewhere and can’t remember what happened. She gets up and has flashes of what happened and runs back to her village and sees the damage (she has minor retrograde amnesia) and I then go into detail of what happened. Is that ok?
Minor retrograde amnesia tends to be overused and can be a cliche unless you have the expertise to distract the reader with your talent.
Would it be okay if she was away from the village picking firewood then returned through beautiful prose descriptions of the forest?
...reassuring the reader that you can be trusted to provide them with an immersive escapist experience with consistent imagery based on confident world building as you have gone to the trouble of drawing a map of the paths and rivers and rocky outcrops within the forest along with the location of its clearings and where crows are nesting, etc. all so it can be routinely revisited as a place, but not so you then put the map of the forest inside the front cover of your book like J.R.R.Tolkein did with his novel _The Hobbit_ as it is only important you do this world building so that you know and the scenes you have happen are all geographically located and you know how long it takes characters to travel from place to place within the forest, and you can do this again at a lower resolution for the simpler "open ground" that would lay outside of the forest paths if the story takes you out of the forest across the country to a town, but then you would need to have a high resolution map for that town if your character was to spend substantial time in it...
This would require a change where your character wasn't a witness to the attack on her village. She wouldn't need to have amnesia as she has no memory of the attack as she was out collecting firewood when it took place and too far away to see, hear, or smell it. You probably would want to do this in Summer so that there are leaves on the trees as the canopy of foliage would block out her seeing the smoke rising from her village when she initially turned back in that direction to return home.
If you wanted a stronger first sentence hook you might set it in Winter so that:
_She dropped the bundle of wood she had collected from the stark snow-laden forest when she saw a thick plume of black smoke rising from the direction of her village._
That, however, is a LOT of information to hit the reader with, which is why I think your set up better suits an opening paragraph, or two, of excellent prose description, making the reader feel comfortable with spending a lot of time in this forest due to its inherent natural beauty, and establishing a baseline where the protagonist is having what is a normal day for them and is happy with how things are, until the inciting incident comes late in the second paragraph and turns their whole world upside-down. There is no need to mention their relationships to those who may be dead in the village, in these two paragraphs as that would just risk tipping off experienced readers to your surprise twist. If I read that X loves Y it immediately makes me think that something bad is going to then happen to Y as it did in _Romeo and Juliet._ Not that it has to, but I am not surprised if it does. So, talking about the village elders only makes sense if she has been sent into the forest to kill a monster that has been eating all of their goats. This scenario would start her in the Jungian Unknown. Whereas you need to initially hide this from the reader and have it so that she thinks she is in the Jungian Known, collecting firewood. Everything is normal, for her, until she turns back in the direction of the village, and if you want her to be on her return journey at the outset just set it in Summer so the canopy of leaves blocks any obvious rising smoke.
She now doesn't know who attacked her village. That is okay.
This is called a mystery. She will find clues and investigate and take revenge. I recommend you go see _The Batman._
That’s so good! One of mine starts with my MC torturing killing then burning someone alive all the while introducing herself and then riding off on her Ducati lol. Some reason this reminded me of that.
I agree with the other comment be very careful with amnesia. Can be done right but overused.
As far as the intro, yes that can work. If your book opens with a beautiful nature scene, does that somehow reflect a theme in your book? Does the MC just want to get away from it all and live in the woods? But violence follows her? Think of how you're setting the scene for the whole book.
I just find so funny that she used the exact intros for a book in her own video to start it out someone earned my sub!
What is this? Where am I? He questioned himself examining everything around him with an expression of complete shock. It felt unreal like a dream heavy as if he was sinking underwater. But all those questions where silenced when he saw the old lady .
Starting of my horror novela
Here's my opening so far "Some people don’t believe in miracles but they happen everyday in your lives, you just have to notice them. Nature itself is a miracle. All people are part of nature, but some are very unique and although they are still part of nature, they are able to control it, and rule it, isn’t that a miracle? Some parents are lucky enough to give birth to miracles. Only a few of those miracles grow up to be rulers, and be part of: Nature's government. Nature’s guardians, helpers and protectors. Up to this day their kind still remains, and new gifted children are born. And if you know it or not you may be one of them."
Is it okay to start a story with a fight scene? Just curious.
Of course!
Have the hero losing, doubting he may be out of his depth, then find some inner resolve, and percieve an opportunity for a lucky strike.
@VZ You're welcome!
Try to have enough inner monologue that we understand the stakes, why MC is fighting, and what his motivations are. Action for the sake of action is boring. Need conflict and stakes.
This was great, love your channel.
You are really intelligent :) Thank you for all these great tips and insights
Here's my opening for my drama novel:
"After a tiring day at school, the only thing the students were waiting for was for the bells to ring to go home."
@Ayame Takahashi You know i was just feeling that as well yesterday after re reading and reading it again, Thanks for taking your time to leave your opinion!!! Ayame have a nice day!!!
@Ayame Takahashi Does it help you by telling it is a story of a boy who gets the visit of a crow and that crow tells him he has only 7 days to live. it is a story about logic vs faith/Belief
I have become a huge fan! I just published my first novel a little before discovering this channel. I’m not proud of my book and I’m sure you got a reading list that probably looks baffling; but would you ever consider giving insight and critique of a fans book?
Be proud of your book! Your ability to already criticize it probably shows your growth as a writer. You published a book yo! Not many people do that. Just keep at it =)
@@PhoenixCrown that’s so sweet of you! Thank you!
yooooo im actually kinda curious, where can i read the book?
Thank you! I am going ro write a short story. I then sent it to you. Please give me your feedback!
All writers here? 😂
I'm going to be one soon
@@karateabdulsaleem4957 good luck with that.
Aspiring to be one. I do poetry and stuff. Writing other stuff feels overwhelming.
My post-apocalyptic novel starts off as follows in a single chapter:
- Introduction of a cult based in human sacrifice and attempt to murder an innocent woman.
- Before the woman is murdered, a single man in full-body tactical armor comes in guns blazing and singlehandedly dispatches the cult with relative ease.
- Woman, although thankful, demands to see the face of the man who saved her life. Man complies and the woman is immediately shocked because she happens to know him. Man demands her to leave after complying with her demand and woman does so.
- The man asks his friend to come meet up with him and said friend rolls up in a white cargo van. Said vehicle is shown to be some kind of surveillance van and is a mini armory of sorts. This part also introduces his sidekick to be a teenage boy who is talented with computers and other technologies.
- Man and boy take a couple of canisters filled with flammable liquid, douse the bodies with said liquid, and set the bodies on fire. The man and the boy eventually leave the scene in their vehicle.
Sounds like you should focus on the fact that the woman knows the man. Is he some handsome guy she sees smiling at the coffee shop, but it turns out he's a government agent, cold blooded... or why is it important that she see his face? AND that she knows him? That sounds like your hook, not all of the violence--though that's sweet too =)
Do you have ghostwriting services? Or possibly review manuscripts for pitching?
This is helpful and confusing. Too many directions to go. I sometimes get feedback on the people that I submit my manuscript to and they want to know the Point of View. But mainly they say, "It's not for me." I need to rewrite my first page. My manuscript has been edited but I get turned down constantly for many many years. I have action going on right on the first page. No one gets hooked. If a character is kidnapped off of the front steps of her job and people run out to see that she has disappeared wouldn't that hook you?
I command everyone to check the level of deception that would be necessary for doing my job and living my life.
Thanks for the lovely info and videos. Just recently found out your channel as well just sub you! Keep it up! Thank you, I was looking for helpful video on writing tips.
What beautiful eyes
UR VIDEO IS SO LAGGY
I thought how can a young pretty girl teach me something. Oh how I was wrong
I find that it's hard for me to get drawn into a novel that begins with background. Although it's my favorite novel, I feel that Fitzgerald made a mistake in "The Great Gatsby" by opening with pages of background information. It's a boring opening.
I feel that you have to begin with action to really draw someone in. It grounds the beginning. Puts a stake in the ground.
I'm sure it depends. My epic fantasy is largely around the theme of inequality and other human tendencies. My beginning needs to show this disparity for the narrative to hit home. Action can definitely grab attention, but if you don't know the characters at all, it can easily fall flat imo.
@@PhoenixCrown What you do is pace the introduction of the character by alternating action and background, in short spurts. Or, integrating the requisite background description into the description of action, again, in small doses.
@@PhoenixCrown You must JUDGE how much background to integrate as the action unfolds, and how to pace it and phase it, how to create a rhythm so that it provides sufficient context while still moving things forward.
U TALK TOO FAST
QUIT UR CAREER
I CANT HEAR U
9:19
SORRY
But how do I structure a novel novel opening?
I love you ahre
I usually write some low standard ending and then move on. Ideas for it will pop up later when I’m well into the story.
7:30
A scratch on my body must lead to explosions that kill thousands people. Yes, their bodies too…
Sorry but the Jazz piano is toooo loud. Very distracting.
MY CLASSMATE IS BETTER THEN EXPLAINING THEN U
U MAKE NO SENSE