One of my favorite movies Mindwalk, involves 3 characters: A failed US presidential candidate, a poet (the two are old friends), & a particle physicist (whom they just met). The whole of the movie is just the three of them talking while wandering around Mont St. Michel in France. Another is Dinner with Andre. Are they blockbusters? no. But, if you start with an Ikea box of pieces, no matter how you put it together, you will never wind up with something individual.
how do you write action or traveling scenes? EXAMPLE: Man walks across a desert. He falls gets up and falls again. The sun is high and beats down on him as she stumbles. That is a single line but let's say you want it to take minutes on screen. EXAMPLE: Two guys fight which lasts for several minutes but you do not want to bog down the script with a lot of action lines or leave it up to the stunt team. I heard that in John Carpenters, They Live, that alley fight scene that in John Carpenters wrote they fight and left 5 pages blank.
The HARD TIMES script by Walter Hill has amazing fight scene descriptions, steal that style. If you want valuable minutes of screen time watching someone walk across a desert SOMETHING needs to happen, sun gets higher, his strides become irregular, a curious vulture circles overhead etc. new info in each shot is the tldr
Geoff's right. You need something to happen. Can't just be walking... needs to be purposeful walking. And there still needs to be conflict. Imagine how the reader should be feeling with each moment and write in such a way as to convey that. And John Carpenter can do whatever he wants... this is not a good strategy for an aspiring writer. :-)
As ever, Truth distilled to its essence. Thank you for continued guidance.
You smooth talker! It's like we no longer have any excuses to keep blundering our way into a readable story. CHEERS !!!
One of my favorite movies Mindwalk, involves 3 characters: A failed US presidential candidate, a poet (the two are old friends), & a particle physicist (whom they just met). The whole of the movie is just the three of them talking while wandering around Mont St. Michel in France. Another is Dinner with Andre. Are they blockbusters? no. But, if you start with an Ikea box of pieces, no matter how you put it together, you will never wind up with something individual.
how do you write action or traveling scenes?
EXAMPLE: Man walks across a desert. He falls gets up and falls again. The sun is high and beats down on him as she stumbles.
That is a single line but let's say you want it to take minutes on screen.
EXAMPLE: Two guys fight which lasts for several minutes but you do not want to bog down the script with a lot of action lines or leave it up to the stunt team.
I heard that in John Carpenters, They Live, that alley fight scene that in John Carpenters wrote they fight and left 5 pages blank.
The HARD TIMES script by Walter Hill has amazing fight scene descriptions, steal that style.
If you want valuable minutes of screen time watching someone walk across a desert SOMETHING needs to happen, sun gets higher, his strides become irregular, a curious vulture circles overhead etc. new info in each shot is the tldr
Geoff's right. You need something to happen. Can't just be walking... needs to be purposeful walking. And there still needs to be conflict. Imagine how the reader should be feeling with each moment and write in such a way as to convey that.
And John Carpenter can do whatever he wants... this is not a good strategy for an aspiring writer. :-)
This Episode is great for experienced but a catalyst for begin/Intermediates.
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You really need to get to the point faster. There is no information in the first two minutes. Not sure after that. Clicking away