by far the one of the most useful vids you ve made, very concise. cant belive there are only 700 views. well i have my transactional tag exam tommorow and this helped quite a lot
nice 1 much needed and i edited 3 of my aqa paper 2 question 5 answers with this advice.would you like to see any of em?if not, i want you to know that this video and the one about facemasks helped me to grasp the concepts for paper 2 question 5 and all of my gratefulness goes to you regarding this.cheers
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish ‘Floods, earthquakes, hurricanes and landslides -we see more and more reports of environmental disasters affecting the world and its people every day. ‘Write the text of a speech for a debate at your school or college in which you persuade young people to take more responsibility for protecting the environment. protect our earth Natural disasters are a stroke of bad luck; downright laziness simply isn’t. Recently, a new sport has been devised by everyday civilians as to who can damage the most rivers or who can pollute the environment in the nastiest way possible. There isn’t a particular rule book so citizens are obliged to damage the environment in any way they fancy. However, this is completely unacceptable; Pollution and littering is killing the environment and wrecking earth’s natural resources, and unfortunately, you people have not realized this crucial fact. The main reason for the slow, but impending doom of god’s green earth is because of idleness, indolence and lethargy. One of the great triumphs of civilized society is the fact that people can longer distinguish between the pavement and the bin; instead citizens aimlessly flog litter at public bins, not giving a toss about where it could potentially land.40 percent of the time it lands inside the bin. Well that is good as far as I am concerned because the air will be untouched and many organisms will not have to go through the agony and pain of inadvertently swallowing a plastic bag. However the 60 percent of the litter that ends up completely ringed around towns and cities is where the most damage occurs. To bacteria, litter a fun playground in which they sink their bloodthirsty fangs into each piece of rubbish, subsequently spreading disease: to animals it is an unjust punishment. Seals, birds and aquatic organisms that are unlucky enough to become incarcerated by litter asphyxiate to death due to their digestive juices just not being strong enough to break these items down. So please just put your litter in the bin-how hard can it be? Will your legs paralyse just because you walked a few more inches? Will you break a bone in your finger by placing your hand near the bin? Obviously not. Litter is a malady to our environment and your recklessness is making it even more of one. Is your laziness still more important than the environment?
As you travel from town to town, from city to city or from village to village your eye becomes accustomed to an array of sights such as lakes, rivers and mountains as well as the intermittent waterfall. It is only when you pay that extra little bit of attention you see a sight so striking and repulsive that it makes you quiver and shake in your clothes. This is a child of human laziness and apathy. Not an earthquake. Not a landslide. Not a tsunami. Incineration. Pollution. Litter thoughtlessly dumped. The Destruction of our beautiful environment. Earthquakes and other natural disasters are merely inevitable but they can be contained, not stopped. We humans are destroying the environment. It is uncommon to see an area bereft of pollution in today’s society. Cars, landfill sites and industrial power stations release potent chemicals in the environment as well thick blankets of smoke. The smoke and chemicals are so plain and functionless that they blacken buildings and discolour mountains so much so that the government is alarmed by this sudden crisis. Simple tasks such as recycling items, rather than burning them and abandoning the car once in a while could all reduce the number of gases entering our environment. Dear listeners, we could lessen the strain on our earth by taking a little more care and consideration and swiftly eradicating our apathetic nature. On the other hand, despite numerous campaigns and various fines being put in place, pollution and littering will likely continue for a long period of time.70 pound fines are no longer ineffective and to the average, financially stable person, this would be equivalent of buying a meal at the restaurant-that person may still litter and may even rebel because of that fine. Literally everybody contributes to pollution by churning extremely vast amounts of smoke into but will banning cars seriously fix the issue? Yes, the environment may make a recovery but social unrest, mass protests and even occurrences of violence as well as having no cars makes this impractical and insufficient to the environment. Other solutions need to be introduced. Although industrialization, slag heaps and nuclear fission has a more hazardous effect on the environment, we can still do enough to give leeway to essential industries and nuclear fuels because the environment will be bereft of toxic gases, litter and filth. To conclude, the gradual destruction of our environment is something that we should take heed of. Increase fines. Ban cars. Do whatever it takes to save our environment. Do we want to be remembered as the visionaries who have drastically changed the environment or as one of those who couldn’t care less? If we do take care, in the long term we could enjoy undisturbed landscapes, we could witness our children walking in clean, pure air and we can put an immediate end to diseases caused by pollution and littering. Dear people don’t ignore this issue. Do your bit. this my best one.thanks sir.does men a tremendous lot
@@MKhan-qe9lp Great vocabulary and techniques. I'm going with a grade 7 though because it lacks control. What is the best order to put your points in to build an argument? What is the right tone? Many of your paragraphs have different tones, so it feel disjointed. It is never a good idea to attack your listeners either! Some of your sentences have too many ideas in them - go back to sequencing your points to build an argument again to cure this. I hope this helps. Also, 500-700 words is probably the most you will need in the exam.
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish this has certainly helped.I will edit this accordingly.Thank you very much.And oh i will put my head over my heart regarding line lengths and technique bashing.
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish i thought showing the examiner that you can manipulate tones in your writing would be a good thing. my teacher said it wasnt good to have the same boring tone throughout the whole text.
Surely this transactional writing piece is too informal, 'they answer the phone to facetime by putting it to their ear and showing you the horrifying contents within' seems colloquial to say the least.
by far the one of the most useful vids you ve made, very concise. cant belive there are only 700 views. well i have my transactional tag exam tommorow and this helped quite a lot
Brilliant - good luck
oh yes! more edexcel language please!
Great video thanks😂 Just a question about mentioning statistics, do they have to be real or can you make them up while writing your answer
Make them up and be as realistic as possible - personally I tell my students not to use them now, unless they know they are realistic
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish Ah okay thanks for answering so quick😁
Thank you for this!
nice 1 much needed and i edited 3 of my aqa paper 2 question 5 answers with this advice.would you like to see any of em?if not, i want you to know that this video and the one about facemasks helped me to grasp the concepts for paper 2 question 5 and all of my gratefulness goes to you regarding this.cheers
Yes, I would be very interested to see your edited answers, thank you.
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish
‘Floods, earthquakes, hurricanes and landslides -we see more and more reports of environmental disasters affecting the world and its people every day. ‘Write the text of a speech for a debate at your school or college in which you persuade young people to take more responsibility for protecting the environment.
protect our earth
Natural disasters are a stroke of bad luck; downright laziness simply isn’t. Recently, a new sport has been devised by everyday civilians as to who can damage the most rivers or who can pollute the environment in the nastiest way possible. There isn’t a particular rule book so citizens are obliged to damage the environment in any way they fancy. However, this is completely unacceptable; Pollution and littering is killing the environment and wrecking earth’s natural resources, and unfortunately, you people have not realized this crucial fact.
The main reason for the slow, but impending doom of god’s green earth is because of idleness, indolence and lethargy. One of the great triumphs of civilized society is the fact that people can longer distinguish between the pavement and the bin; instead citizens aimlessly flog litter at public bins, not giving a toss about where it could potentially land.40 percent of the time it lands inside the bin. Well that is good as far as I am concerned because the air will be untouched and many organisms will not have to go through the agony and pain of inadvertently swallowing a plastic bag. However the 60 percent of the litter that ends up completely ringed around towns and cities is where the most damage occurs. To bacteria, litter a fun playground in which they sink their bloodthirsty fangs into each piece of rubbish, subsequently spreading disease: to animals it is an unjust punishment. Seals, birds and aquatic organisms that are unlucky enough to become incarcerated by litter asphyxiate to death due to their digestive juices just not being strong enough to break these items down. So please just put your litter in the bin-how hard can it be? Will your legs paralyse just because you walked a few more inches? Will you break a bone in your finger by placing your hand near the bin? Obviously not. Litter is a malady to our environment and your recklessness is making it even more of one.
Is your laziness still more important than the environment?
As you travel from town to town, from city to city or from village to village your eye becomes accustomed to an array of sights such as lakes, rivers and mountains as well as the intermittent waterfall. It is only when you pay that extra little bit of attention you see a sight so striking and repulsive that it makes you quiver and shake in your clothes. This is a child of human laziness and apathy. Not an earthquake. Not a landslide. Not a tsunami. Incineration. Pollution. Litter thoughtlessly dumped. The Destruction of our beautiful environment. Earthquakes and other natural disasters are merely inevitable but they can be contained, not stopped. We humans are destroying the environment. It is uncommon to see an area bereft of pollution in today’s society. Cars, landfill sites and industrial power stations release potent chemicals in the environment as well thick blankets of smoke. The smoke and chemicals are so plain and functionless that they blacken buildings and discolour mountains so much so that the government is alarmed by this sudden crisis. Simple tasks such as recycling items, rather than burning them and abandoning the car once in a while could all reduce the number of gases entering our environment. Dear listeners, we could lessen the strain on our earth by taking a little more care and consideration and swiftly eradicating our apathetic nature.
On the other hand, despite numerous campaigns and various fines being put in place, pollution and littering will likely continue for a long period of time.70 pound fines are no longer ineffective and to the average, financially stable person, this would be equivalent of buying a meal at the restaurant-that person may still litter and may even rebel because of that fine. Literally everybody contributes to pollution by churning extremely vast amounts of smoke into but will banning cars seriously fix the issue? Yes, the environment may make a recovery but social unrest, mass protests and even occurrences of violence as well as having no cars makes this impractical and insufficient to the environment. Other solutions need to be introduced. Although industrialization, slag heaps and nuclear fission has a more hazardous effect on the environment, we can still do enough to give leeway to essential industries and nuclear fuels because the environment will be bereft of toxic gases, litter and filth.
To conclude, the gradual destruction of our environment is something that we should take heed of. Increase fines. Ban cars. Do whatever it takes to save our environment. Do we want to be remembered as the visionaries who have drastically changed the environment or as one of those who couldn’t care less? If we do take care, in the long term we could enjoy undisturbed landscapes, we could witness our children walking in clean, pure air and we can put an immediate end to diseases caused by pollution and littering. Dear people don’t ignore this issue. Do your bit.
this my best one.thanks sir.does men a tremendous lot
@@MKhan-qe9lp Great vocabulary and techniques. I'm going with a grade 7 though because it lacks control. What is the best order to put your points in to build an argument? What is the right tone? Many of your paragraphs have different tones, so it feel disjointed. It is never a good idea to attack your listeners either! Some of your sentences have too many ideas in them - go back to sequencing your points to build an argument again to cure this. I hope this helps. Also, 500-700 words is probably the most you will need in the exam.
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish this has certainly helped.I will edit this accordingly.Thank you very much.And oh i will put my head over my heart regarding line lengths and technique bashing.
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish i thought showing the examiner that you can manipulate tones in your writing would be a good thing. my teacher said it wasnt good to have the same boring tone throughout the whole text.
I love this video
Surely this transactional writing piece is too informal, 'they answer the phone to facetime by putting it to their ear and showing you the horrifying contents within' seems colloquial to say the least.
Trust me, I'm a professional!
@@MrSallesTeachesEnglish i did my exam today, i will let you know how my transactional went when i get my grade .
@@willp4901 u got that grade ?
@@willp4901 What grade did you get?
@@m1770az yh yh i got a 9
thank you
tysm !!!
Is this also for IGCSE Edexcel English language A?
i don't think so
Yea
@@jasmineclear878 After 1 year
is this advice applicable to igcse? its the same exam board, edexcel and 9-1.
i believe so
yeah
Hi, is it ok if you could give me some feedback on a little piece I have been working on?
man like satnaam b unno
imagine every one talking propaly instead of slang