With no video it makes editing the videos quicker , we are in the middle of immigrating and are focusing on that as much as we can. I will be back after
@@AgroSquerril cool. I was worried there was a health problem. Which country you moving to? If its Oz I hope to see ya one day. First rounds on me mate.
Honestly, the story was held back by the presence of the mind reader. It felt like a mix of expo dump and annoying monologue. It felt artificial because it was trying too hard to build up the predator’s presence. “Their fear is different” just doesn’t have any substance to it. That character should have been well fed and having the time of its life watching those around it panic. Also not explained how it became a slave if it was so powerful… That character was used to explain the backstory of the predator. Its a bit harder, but showing that backstory could have been done through environmental storytelling, or even just the questioning of various slaves as more and more pirates failed to report in. Once this character was removed the quality increased so I think you have some potential as an author, hope you don’t take the critic too hard. Thanks for the story, and thanks for the narration.
Great story; Excellent narration! Never, ever mess with Humanity's children! You will find out what true horror is like!!!
Where is the man himself? Are you OK? I enjoyed the expressions and gestures of the space captain
With no video it makes editing the videos quicker , we are in the middle of immigrating and are focusing on that as much as we can. I will be back after
@@AgroSquerril cool. I was worried there was a health problem. Which country you moving to? If its Oz I hope to see ya one day. First rounds on me mate.
@@AgroSquerril Yes, please let us know in general, no need for specifics, where you are going. Wishing you the best.
Monstrous is the human with nothing left to lose
This is what happens when a good man is pushed to the braking point. Good story. WITH ENERGY!!
Another great story read byThe Great Squirrel.
Another great story told masterfully!
11 outa 10 marks all the boxes
Best narration! excellent story. Thank you.
Bravo Sir Encore!
I came for satisfaction and I received it very much. Thank you
For DA SKWERL and his Nest
Honestly, the story was held back by the presence of the mind reader. It felt like a mix of expo dump and annoying monologue.
It felt artificial because it was trying too hard to build up the predator’s presence. “Their fear is different” just doesn’t have any substance to it. That character should have been well fed and having the time of its life watching those around it panic. Also not explained how it became a slave if it was so powerful…
That character was used to explain the backstory of the predator. Its a bit harder, but showing that backstory could have been done through environmental storytelling, or even just the questioning of various slaves as more and more pirates failed to report in.
Once this character was removed the quality increased so I think you have some potential as an author, hope you don’t take the critic too hard.
Thanks for the story, and thanks for the narration.
For the Algorithm, for the Author(s), for the Disembodied Voice!
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wow! make a movie ...
Greetings, Mentlgent!
For the Rhyhtm that is Algo
They have awakened the sleeping giant
The 21st day of September
Enslaving and eating human children? Not a great plan.
Everything else is becoming AI narrated
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10th, 5 October 2024