Too much AI word salad of repeating the same ideas in different ways. This could have been a 15-20 minute good story instead of 40+ minutes of boring words saying the same thing with a few moments of actual plot. 😢😮
at 4:40 "She chose an empty table in the corner hoping to go unnoticed . . . " The writer may be an A I. I would have said She chose an empty table in the corner hoping to eventually be ignored. BTW the story sould have started with doctors or similar specialists verifying that the translator implant was working and then, perhaps, sending her off to her quarters to sleep. And, of courtse, the story has echos of "The Force" from Star Wars.
Why was all that Knowledge not digitized, transferred to something more permanent than paper? What "new-found abilities"? And this ancient tome is written in English? First, she's leaving and then she is in the center of the arena? Is one of her "newfound powers" teleportation? What "victories"? It has only been stated that she won once.
There are some plot elements that could be used to construct an interesting, engaging story. Sadly, that isn’t what this is. Also, the inflection during reading is horrid.
3 minutes in and the writing, plot, (such as it is), jumbled mess of details is so bad that I'm gonna call it there. "The walls were shiny and slick like a predator's skin"? What predator is this referring to? This story starts out with idiotic statements and gets worse. To the author: Find a new hobby.
You’re an interesting character. Why do Isay this? Because you heart, even those who deride you, negativity, and in my opinion, poor stupid remarks. That makes you an interesting character, if we were in the same time and place, I would have liked you for friend.
By the power of Grey Skull, I have the power!!!
SHE - RA!!
Too much AI word salad of repeating the same ideas in different ways. This could have been a 15-20 minute good story instead of 40+ minutes of boring words saying the same thing with a few moments of actual plot. 😢😮
at 4:40 "She chose an empty table in the corner hoping to go unnoticed . . . " The writer may be an A I. I would have said
She chose an empty table in the corner hoping to eventually be ignored.
BTW the story sould have started with doctors or similar specialists verifying that the translator implant was working and then, perhaps, sending her off to her quarters to sleep.
And, of courtse, the story has echos of "The Force" from Star Wars.
WTF … she got up ducted to be send to a school ? To learn a martial arts to fuck up the captors ???
That was a tremendously exciting idea...lol
You dare question the motives of the Aliens?
@@captainobvious9233 Better not eh!
@@captainobvious9233 of course I do question sth so “not -very-intelligent”
Why was all that Knowledge not digitized, transferred to something more permanent than paper? What "new-found abilities"? And this ancient tome is written in English? First, she's leaving and then she is in the center of the arena? Is one of her "newfound powers" teleportation? What "victories"? It has only been stated that she won once.
I didn't get far. It sounds like it was written by AI.
Satterfield Light
ka- me-ha-mehaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
Haduken
so there's a book of a great martial art, on full display, that only Quinn reads
Now imagine if it was a sticker album... lol
You did listen right? The beginning? Where it said the ones who tried to learn it disappeared?
It's a hidden library
Not bad for a quick 45 minute read. The story could use a bit more development especially around the ending.
Thank you for your comment, I'm always trying to improve and improve!
There are some plot elements that could be used to construct an interesting, engaging story. Sadly, that isn’t what this is. Also, the inflection during reading is horrid.
Very boring begining (slow). To many repeats. The AI can't get the diction right half the time. Needs a lot of work.
After the 4th "newfound determination" I had to quit on this one. AI sucks at writing.
3 minutes in and the writing, plot, (such as it is), jumbled mess of details is so bad that I'm gonna call it there. "The walls were shiny and slick like a predator's skin"? What predator is this referring to? This story starts out with idiotic statements and gets worse. To the author: Find a new hobby.
You’re an interesting character. Why do Isay this? Because you heart, even those who deride you, negativity, and in my opinion, poor stupid remarks. That makes you an interesting character, if we were in the same time and place, I would have liked you for friend.
Who knows, I am that which the Shadows do not Hide? lol
You need to do something about that damn squeaking in the audio track. Didn't get past 10 minutes because of it.
I'm sorry about that, I very soon intend to use another narrator who might not cause this. But thank you for your comment!
Ah yes, entitlement
Didn't bother me one bit.🎉🎉🎉🎉
Horrible.
WoW
You're horrible