He rewrites other movies too, he is honestly awesome! Prewrites too. It is just him saying what the movies would be if he was told to write them. My favorite of all his videos is him pre-writing the MCU Spider-Man Collage Trilogy.
Agreed. It all seems to work really well...maybe finding palpatines light Sabre felt a bit contrived but beside that it was excellent. There is an extended version that deals with Rose and the droids so you cant really critique that and if it was real it could be fixed in rewrites but the core story is there and its solid
Here's a minor nitpick: The Tantive IV should not be in this movie. It's a canon fact that it was destroyed by the Empire as soon as it was seized. EDIT: Also, the "No, that's your sister!" moment was brilliant.
@@joelmole3157 The class of ship is Corellian Corvette. It was a rather common ship type that was sold because it was very modular. It is basically everywhere across the galaxy, which was why the Rebellion had so many of them. They literally had fleets of them, some equipped for anti-fighter and some equipped with turbolasers to harass capital ships.
I really love the change to the C-3PO scene, him getting his memory back after all that time just feels nice. I think it would be funny if he blurted out “NO THATS NOT TRUE, THATS IMPOSSIBLE!” as a little joke to the fact that Darth Vader is also C-3PO technical dad.
I think that Rey and Kylo represent change. Rey, rushing to the future because she had no past. Kylo, unsure of the future because he was conflicted by his past.
Writing an actual difference between the stormtroopers and sith troopers. Excellent. Imagine if Temuera Morrison played them but he had some sort of Lobot style implants all over his head and eyes
“You’re not FN-2198 anymore, you need a name.” “Call me Clark.” In all seriousness this is fucking amazing, this is canon. Turning Hux into a facist starscream, giving Finn an arc, giving a good damn reason for Luke to try kill Ben, LETTING FINN AND POE BE HAPPY GAY BOYS. Like how did you do this, HOW THE FUCK?!
Put it to the morons who don't care for Star Wars. Hell someone on TH-cam made a fanfic that Finn is true protagonist in the sequel trilogy and Ray is the twin sister of Kylo Ren. That would've been a different trilogy in another universe
The way you made Rey Skywalker work and called back to Luke's one in a million shot was amazing. Fucking. Fantastic. You needed to write this. ......also, #letfinnandpoekiss
I love that Darth Sidious is only a dark side essence, it keeps Anikans sacrifice intact while also allowing Rey to complete the story once and for all. Anikan killed Darth Sidious physically, Rey kills him spiritually. A double punch which feels purposeful. Great video dude, I wish they made this version!
If Star Wars is going to kill of Luke Skywalker in the remake of the last Jedi then can ankin Skywalker at least return to destroy palpateen as a force ghost using some old Star Wars footage at least have ankin destroy the lord of the sith again so that emperor palpateen is at least destroyed by a main true Skywalker that we knew was capable of profiling the Jedi chosen one propercy onece before Rey destroying palpateen makes no sence because she is not a Skywalker she’s more of a. Kenobi. More than she is a Skywalker there for ankin should be the one to destroy palpateen onece in for all
The Modern Trilogy is much like the current Sonic Games, to me anyways: An entertaining experience at all times, never dull or boring, but it has some deep flaws for when your looking for something more that just break the whole thing
When you say recent I'm assuming you mean like 2010 onwards, those games aren't even glitchy anymore they've just got so shallow and lacking in personality that they're boring, looking at you Sonic Forces.
*Darth Sidious:* _"Your journey ends here, Jedi!"_ *Rey:* _"I am no Jedi. I am..._ *_a Skywalker."_* (Also, I like how you used HISHE's "Jedi Force Ghost Cavalry" idea here)
I agree with most of these decisions, I think this is a really good rewrite. I always liked the idea of if Ben was going to be redeemed he exiled himself to Tattoine and stayed at Luke's old home (basically the end scene of TROS but with Ben instead of Rey)
Great rewrite man! I still think my main issue with the movie that you somewhat addressed in this video is the mistreatment of Anakin who is arguably the "main" character of the franchise or at least the saga movies. I'm always confused on if Kylo/Ben knew that Anakin actually turned back to the light in the end. Why would he be worshipping someone who ended up going against the dark side? Does nobody ever tell him? Is it not common knowledge in the galaxy? While the Han scene in this movie is by far the best part I would much rather have it be Anakin talking to Ben. The man he has literally worshipped his entire life finally tells him that he is not on the right path and to learn from his mistakes. This could be explained by saying, like you said, Palpatine had "control" over Kylo cutting off Anakin from ever reaching out to Ben. Leia's "sacrifice" could then be her cutting off Palps from Ben's head and finally allowing Anakin to see his grandson. In a perfect world this entire movie would be different but if I had to fix one thing it would be that. I feel as if it ties the Saga together nicely.
Sidious' essence survivng is so brilliant -- An equivalent of force ghosts being prevalent in the dark side is so inspired and truly hlelps the inconsistency shown in the original movie and ALSO provides a far more reasonable explanation for his survival. I also really like how Luke questions the jedi force as it shows hsi developement from his past moments of gullibility and misjudgement, into soemone who questiosn the authority of which he works under; captian america had very simialr developement and I think MARVEl did it well and coudl serve an exaple for how to achieve this sort of developjment again. good video would video again :thumbd_up:
Sith can't be immortal. Filoni wanted to put Revan in the Clone Wars but Lucas said no Sith can beat death. They can put some of their spirt in objects tho
One minor thing I would change is with C3PO knowing about Exegol, instead of him just having a direct message from Palpatine stored on him, practically confessing to something shady, have it be a little more vague at first. Like, they ask him if he knows anything about a planet called Exegol, and he goes "Well, of course, after all, as a protocol droid, I contain a database of information on all known planets in the galaxy. Exegol is-" and then he cuts off with the red eyes, and goes into a different voice; "The information you are attempting to access has been classified to level 10 clearance, by special order of Supreme Chancellor Palpatine. This incident will be reported to the nearest Republic Security Officer. Remain in your current location. Clone Troopers will arrive shortly to bring you in for questioning." This keeps the same plot beat, of C3PO having something hidden in his memory from his time in the Republic, but it isn't Palpatine having his plans just lying around in any old droid. He would've actually orchestrated things such that anyone who learns of, or starts asking about Exegol gets dealt with. The flaw he didn't account for was his own death; and the fact that eventually the Empire would collapse and anyone who tries to ask about Exegol would just get a blatant obvious warning sign that it's something Palpatine wanted hidden. Then, when his memory unlocks, suddenly he gets back a lot of his CW-era memories, but also that more restricted information. Exegol, yes, but there's also a bunch of other stuff hidden behind the same encryption. All the times Palpatine needed a translator when making some back-alley deals, and wiped their memory of it right after.
A couple things I would change: 1. Obviously the pacing 2. When Han shows up to see his son and the same dialogue happens, but Han grabs the hand Kylo is holding the lightsaber with. When Kylo says "Dad...I-" and Han says "I know" and Han switches on the lightsaber as the fiery red blade pierces Han's torso and he fades away, Kylo looks up to the sky to see two glimmering stars that remind him of his mother's eyes and his fiery red lightsaber blade gently changes to a soft white blade. This is Ben's redemption and his own attempt at reversing the bleeding of his Kyber Crystal, an obvious call back to Ahsoka. 3. The ending should drastically change in my opinion and this is how I'd do it: Although I would like to change the fight I'm not gonna, but let's change it from there. So Rey dies and Ben crawls up to hold her, he tries to resurrect her, but Ben can't so he gently touches his forehead to hers and cries. He then carries her out of the pyramid while Finn, Poe, and Chewie gather to stop him, Ben hands Rey's lifeless body to Finn and says "I tried to help her." While Finn sets her down and tries to give her CPR Ben hands Finn the Skywalker saber and says "It's okay to let the past die, but it's better to let the future thrive." And walks away to presumably go into exile. We then switch to the next scene of Rey and Leia's death ceremony as they fade away together. Finn boards the Falcon with the Skywalker saber in hand to place it on a shrine involving Rey's staff, Leia's saber, Han/Chewie's medal, and Han's dice. Finn enters the cockpit to meet Poe and Chewie ready to take off as Poe asks "So where is it Leia told you to go?" And Finn replies "...Dantooine." Next scene we see the Falcon land and Finn hops aboard a speeder bike and says "Wish me luck I'm back by night." We pan to a montage of Finn on the speeder reflecting back to the moment Rey was on hers. After that Finn stops next to a cave and enters. We switch back to Poe and Chewie yelling at each other while playing Dejarik as R2 and BB-8 snicker at C-3PO's attempt at translating Chewie's growling. Finn enters the Falcon as Poe asks "You find what you were looking for?" And Finn replies "yes." A montage of Finn working on something starts and as he finishes he picks up a hunk of metal resembling a shorter version of Rey's staff, Finn flips a switch on it igniting an Amethyst glow as we get a close up on his eyes. We pan back to see an Amethyst blade being emitted and awed by the crew as Poe asks "What now?" and Finn replies "We need to find Ben." And it cuts to the credits. I think Finn should be related to Mace Windu in someway. I know it might make the universe feel smaller than it is, but I think it would be cool! Especially when you learn Mace is John Boyega's favorite character.
I like everything except for the whole Mace Windu relation to Finn thing. I feel as if that’s a) on the nose and b) him, Finn, and Lando are like the only important poc in the series so doing that is like “seriously?”
You had me till part 3. That is waaaaaay too much to pack into a denouement of a very packed movie Also... black people don't all know each other. Cmon
I just recently rewatched all of the Star Wars films, and just saw Rise of Skywalker for the first time. I had been dreading watching ROS forever because I didn't want my view of Star Wars tainted, and I didn't want to rewatch a good series with a sour ending. Well, it happened. But this video fixed it for me, and I would like to go the rest of my life thinking that THIS is how the franchise ended. So thank you for doing this.
This is what I was wanted and hoped for, Ben Solo to live. As much I wanted Reylo to happen I didn't think Disney would go for it, but I didn't think they kill Ben. If I had to chose between Reylo or Ben Solo living, I pick Ben.
While I don't agree with everything in this video I can say it was a good attempt in fixing this dumpster fire I still like Star Wars but I'm not so excited for future Movies, the Disney+ stuff and animated things look really cool Also I'd recommend reading the Darth Plageius novel, you can learn about Mediclorians, Darth Maul's purpose, and most importantly about the Tragedy of Datth Plageius the Wise!
What’s even dumber is the calling of emperor palpating across the galaxy is never shown because it’s supposed to be seen by the Star Wars and Fortnite live event💀
I fucking love this. I especially like how you kind of explained how Luke decided to kill Ben bc of Palpatine. Also giving him a white lightsaber was fucking awesome. Amazing video, man!
I cannot thank you ENOUGH for cutting the Rey-Kylo kiss. Not only did it have no build up and it was purely fan service, but canonically, KYLO IS REY'S NEPHEW
I’m not usually one for using books as a substitute for new ideas for films. But I feel like Finn had a conflict the movies could’ve dealt with. In the Before the Awakening book, they establish Finn’s squad of other troopers & his relationship with them. FN-2199 was a badass, 2000 wasn’t that bright & the others just called him zero & 2003 was a coward who didn’t do well in the battlefield. In fact they say in the beginning of episode 7. The Stormtrooper that wipes his blood on Finn’s helmet is 2003. And then later on when Finn has that lightsaber fight with the trooper with a baton. That was 2199. If they were to do this right. Finn would’ve met up with 2000 & either convert him to the resistance because he’s easily persuadable. Or have him blindly stick to his fascist beliefs because that’s all he was taught. A group of brother who never really got along with each other but end up having to kill one another as a product of two warring sides is more than enough to centre Finn’s character.
Hey thanks for making this. I like your vision and that both Rey and Ben survive. I think using Palpatine's lightsaber to a greater degree to draw Rey towards darkness would be interesting. Maybe the Skywalker lightsaber actively decays and she is forced to use Palps saber at some point. I dunno, everybody could nitpick small details like crazy. That's why making movies is such a long process.
Imagine that, combined in the fight on the Death Star where potentially her anger gets ahold of her and we even see the blue Kyber Crystal bleed out. (Maybe not red, but like orange potentially). Would be such an awesome detail and could even give Kylo more reason for his redemption. Plus it could tie into Reys Dark Side vision in TLJ
i remember distinctly, when i watched RoS with my fiancee in theaters, because of our humor at the time we laughed our asses off at the bass-boosted force lightning that palpatine shot into the sky. the film really had a way of bringing people together
Instead of Nate, call him Gary and let him be played by Keegan Michael Key. The Robot Chicken joke will finally come full circle. Also I don't know if I'd have Rey say the "I'm a Skywalker!" Line, like I love it, but I think personally it should come from Ben. Because Ben wanted to be a Vader, but he finally realizes that his tru place is to be a Skywalker. Idk that's how I read the situation.
Another great video man, I really enjoy your rewrites and you’ve been a huge inspiration in me doing my own as a fun writing exercise. Keep up the great work!
When Hux kills the firing squad and announces "I'm the spy", wouldn't it have been infinitely more satisfying if the firing squad had killed Hux and become Jannah/Nate/whoever?
“You’re afraid of being ashes. You’re afraid of being forgotten. And you will be forgotten, Sidious. Because of ME. I am vengeance. I am the night. I AM REY SKYWALKER!” I cracked up at Eddie Brock being garbage
Really cool! Personally I have my ideas, but they always end up including a partial of total rewrite of the whole trilogy. The fact that TFA and TLJ are so completely disconnected from one another is always there preventing Ep IX from being truly good. Because a good final chapter can’t be so without solid and coherent foundations.
Great video, the film should have been called The Rise of the Skywalkers as the Skywalker Order is the new group of force users that replace the flawed Jedi Order.
Wouldve been cool if Palpatine wasnt alive but was using a sith technique called Dark Phantom. Essentially the ability allows the force user performing it to make an object influence people, whether it is emotionally or physically. Similar to the hocruxes in Harry Potter
Great video, the only thing I disagree with is I would skip Rey using force lightning at all, since in lore it is stated that force lightning is an ability that requires years of training in the dark side, so it really doesn’t make sense that Rey can just accidentally use it just because she had some vision.
Wow man this is amazing. I'm studying to be a film maker but I'm struggling with getting ideas and watching this brings my confidence down 😂. Honestly this is what the movie have should been
An idea for the knights of REN. Maybe, to draw parallels with fin, the nights of den are trainees of Luke like Ben that he convinced to turn to the dark
I feel like it would've been cool for Kylo to live and Rey to die because he would have to live with the pain of everything he did, he feels responsible for her death and he has to rebuild the jedi order. Mind you I'm saying this about the actual movie not this rewrite.
Since you're stuck on an opening crawl, may I suggest this (I'm also changing the title because for it to work, Rey has to call herself Skywalker which is dumb in so many ways): Episode IX - The Will of the Force The rebellion is reborn! Luke Skywalker's heroic sacrifice has sparked an uprising against the First Order and is restoring hope to the dwindling Resistance. To quell the fires of rebellion, the First Order double down on their attacks and soon, the war reaches a stalemate which no side can break. Seeking a way to destroy the Resistance, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren travels to Mustafar to find a new weapon that can turn the tides of battle once and for all...
Actually, I have an idea on how to make 'The Rise of Skywalker' work. When Rey visits the prison, it turns out the prison is now in the Jedi Temple on Coruscant where Rey is leading a new order of Force Users called 'Skywalkers', those who use a more balanced side of the Force.
Wow. Ive been doing my own rewrite of this film (and subsequently, the sequel trilogy) but, in the best and most complimentary way possible, this video really puts me off. This is so good and genuinely is a more engaging and enjoyable story than what we got. Ive been a subscriber for a long time and im so glad i found your work my dude! Fantastic job!
This is brilliant and I can not fathom how amazing it is that you managed to explain LUKE SKYWALKER trying to KILL his NEPHEW. That was great. The on negative thing would be that if Rey truly is a nobody, how is she so gifted and powerful without ANY training? I know this is mainly TFA and TLJ fault but considering this is the last movie it would be nice to have it answered. Still so much better than what we got.
I honestly feel like Anakin Skywalker should’ve had a bigger role. In the Clone Wars series, it was indicated in season 3 that he was indeed the chosen one, which is carried on in episode 6 when he saves Luke from palpatine and ultimately kills him. Anakin should’ve had a bigger role in this. Maybe he motivates rey or redeems Kylo ren, but either way, not only would it be faithful to the prequels and anakin skywalker, it would just be cool in general.
God damn it makes me sad that we'll never get to see this version of the movie. I thought it was a very good way to tie it all together. Well bloody done mate.
Yes. But maybe instead of Sidious just being a wraith at the end, as he gains more power his spirit inhabits the one vessel he has been working on for years. A young new republic general who grew angry at the inefficiency of the NR. A young general who left the Republic to lead the armies of a New Order. The First Order, GENERAL HUX.
I know you're probably never going to see this comment, but I think it would've been cooler for Palpatine to be more of a representation of the Dark Side. Imagine that "I AM ALL THE SITH!" line, but it switches between the voices of the many Sith across the Saga, Bane, Maul, Dooku, Grievous, Vader, Grand Inquisitor, then going back to Palpatine.
I was already really liking the video, but it clicked into brilliance at the point where Rey and Kylo discover the Emperor has been dead all along. The dynamic of them both wanting to kill him, either to finally ascend to heroism or descend into pure villainy, and that being pulled out from under them was just genius, expanding upon the themes of the Last Jedi without being a retread.
They rewrite now? THEY REWRITE NOW?!
*THEY REWRITE NOW!*
I wish to God they would redo the sequel. It was so so so bad.
He rewrites other movies too, he is honestly awesome! Prewrites too. It is just him saying what the movies would be if he was told to write them. My favorite of all his videos is him pre-writing the MCU Spider-Man Collage Trilogy.
This guy actually fixed hux, the knights of Ren and the sith troopers and most importantly Finn! They actually did things!
Agreed. It all seems to work really well...maybe finding palpatines light Sabre felt a bit contrived but beside that it was excellent. There is an extended version that deals with Rose and the droids so you cant really critique that and if it was real it could be fixed in rewrites but the core story is there and its solid
I think I did it too without even changing the story of the movie
Star Wars Episode 9: The Rise of Skywalker is the most disappointing thing since my son. But this video wasn't!
Matt Draper wait what!?!
We're you a writer to this story. Was this script "your" baby?😯
Mike Val It’s a Plinkett reference
I hope you are not serious
Luka Donadze I wasn’t.
Here's a minor nitpick: The Tantive IV should not be in this movie. It's a canon fact that it was destroyed by the Empire as soon as it was seized.
EDIT: Also, the "No, that's your sister!" moment was brilliant.
What was the Tantive IV?
Leia’s flagship from the beginning of Episode IV. It somehow inexplicably returned (like something else in the movie) in Episode IX for some reason.
@@someguynamedelijah Maybe it wasn't the only Tantive class ship in the rebellion. There were others in Return of the Jedi
I agree. That "No, that's your sister moment" was genius.
@@joelmole3157 The class of ship is Corellian Corvette. It was a rather common ship type that was sold because it was very modular. It is basically everywhere across the galaxy, which was why the Rebellion had so many of them. They literally had fleets of them, some equipped for anti-fighter and some equipped with turbolasers to harass capital ships.
I really love the change to the C-3PO scene, him getting his memory back after all that time just feels nice. I think it would be funny if he blurted out “NO THATS NOT TRUE, THATS IMPOSSIBLE!” as a little joke to the fact that Darth Vader is also C-3PO technical dad.
Troyo: what's the point of it all?
Disney: MONEY
Also the Big D: You're hired.....only for you to do it in Video Game form.
A Fanboy: Okaaaayyyyyyyy?
Me: Lemme do it, again.
Greedy bastards
Me: Do I got the Money to pull a Flashpoint/Convergence '15, but better?
bruh the video didn’t even premiere and there’s already a dislike wtf
Probably people who think TROS was perfect
Sam Rafkin it’s not perfect and it’s not good but it’s ok
they probably did it because their impatient
People are very strange these days
It’s a bot. Hopefully
Can’t wait mate, u, hitop films and the closer look are such a big inspiration to me, thx
I think that Rey and Kylo represent change. Rey, rushing to the future because she had no past. Kylo, unsure of the future because he was conflicted by his past.
Writing an actual difference between the stormtroopers and sith troopers. Excellent. Imagine if Temuera Morrison played them but he had some sort of Lobot style implants all over his head and eyes
Like Echo from the bad batch?
Don’t you do that to me. How dare you put that image in my head.
“You’re not FN-2198 anymore, you need a name.”
“Call me Clark.”
In all seriousness this is fucking amazing, this is canon. Turning Hux into a facist starscream, giving Finn an arc, giving a good damn reason for Luke to try kill Ben, LETTING FINN AND POE BE HAPPY GAY BOYS. Like how did you do this, HOW THE FUCK?!
The real question is
HOW DID YOU NOT DO THIS DISNEY, HOW THE FUCK?
@@littleredruri they’re pandering to china
Put it to the morons who don't care for Star Wars. Hell someone on TH-cam made a fanfic that Finn is true protagonist in the sequel trilogy and Ray is the twin sister of Kylo Ren. That would've been a different trilogy in another universe
The way you made Rey Skywalker work and called back to Luke's one in a million shot was amazing.
Fucking. Fantastic.
You needed to write this.
......also, #letfinnandpoekiss
Palpatine's force ghost should glow red since the Jedi force ghosts glow blue. That'd be super spoooky.
So this was the big project you were talking about, well it's definitely big and I am really excited for it
I love that Darth Sidious is only a dark side essence, it keeps Anikans sacrifice intact while also allowing Rey to complete the story once and for all.
Anikan killed Darth Sidious physically, Rey kills him spiritually. A double punch which feels purposeful.
Great video dude, I wish they made this version!
If Star Wars is going to kill of Luke Skywalker in the remake of the last Jedi then can ankin Skywalker at least return to destroy palpateen as a force ghost using some old Star Wars footage at least have ankin destroy the lord of the sith again so that emperor palpateen is at least destroyed by a main true Skywalker that we knew was capable of profiling the Jedi chosen one propercy onece before Rey destroying palpateen makes no sence because she is not a Skywalker she’s more of a. Kenobi. More than she is a Skywalker there for ankin should be the one to destroy palpateen onece in for all
The Modern Trilogy is much like the current Sonic Games, to me anyways:
An entertaining experience at all times, never dull or boring, but it has some deep flaws for when your looking for something more that just break the whole thing
When you say recent I'm assuming you mean like 2010 onwards, those games aren't even glitchy anymore they've just got so shallow and lacking in personality that they're boring, looking at you Sonic Forces.
*Darth Sidious:* _"Your journey ends here, Jedi!"_
*Rey:* _"I am no Jedi. I am..._ *_a Skywalker."_*
(Also, I like how you used HISHE's "Jedi Force Ghost Cavalry" idea here)
I personally like the idea of kylo having a white lightsaber, but maybe he could have a purple one, or both...
Idk
I agree with most of these decisions, I think this is a really good rewrite. I always liked the idea of if Ben was going to be redeemed he exiled himself to Tattoine and stayed at Luke's old home (basically the end scene of TROS but with Ben instead of Rey)
Or to Ahch-To?
My goodness. Keeping Palpatine in the movie already feels like trying to attempt this re-write on hard mode, and you made it work. Brilliantly.
Great rewrite man! I still think my main issue with the movie that you somewhat addressed in this video is the mistreatment of Anakin who is arguably the "main" character of the franchise or at least the saga movies. I'm always confused on if Kylo/Ben knew that Anakin actually turned back to the light in the end. Why would he be worshipping someone who ended up going against the dark side? Does nobody ever tell him? Is it not common knowledge in the galaxy? While the Han scene in this movie is by far the best part I would much rather have it be Anakin talking to Ben. The man he has literally worshipped his entire life finally tells him that he is not on the right path and to learn from his mistakes. This could be explained by saying, like you said, Palpatine had "control" over Kylo cutting off Anakin from ever reaching out to Ben. Leia's "sacrifice" could then be her cutting off Palps from Ben's head and finally allowing Anakin to see his grandson. In a perfect world this entire movie would be different but if I had to fix one thing it would be that. I feel as if it ties the Saga together nicely.
31:38 That’s such an amazing way to show Ben’s inner conflict!
Sidious' essence survivng is so brilliant -- An equivalent of force ghosts being prevalent in the dark side is so inspired and truly hlelps the inconsistency shown in the original movie and ALSO provides a far more reasonable explanation for his survival. I also really like how Luke questions the jedi force as it shows hsi developement from his past moments of gullibility and misjudgement, into soemone who questiosn the authority of which he works under; captian america had very simialr developement and I think MARVEl did it well and coudl serve an exaple for how to achieve this sort of developjment again. good video would video again :thumbd_up:
Huge fan of the channel, I can't wait for this. Keep working hard man
Man that white saber made me way too excited I know way too much star wars lore...
this rewrite is so good and satisfying, I want to punch JJ for not giving us this awesome finn
Sith can't be immortal. Filoni wanted to put Revan in the Clone Wars but Lucas said no Sith can beat death. They can put some of their spirt in objects tho
What about revan bitch slapping death later
Yeah they need a conduit but the heavy dark side energy probably helps
One minor thing I would change is with C3PO knowing about Exegol, instead of him just having a direct message from Palpatine stored on him, practically confessing to something shady, have it be a little more vague at first. Like, they ask him if he knows anything about a planet called Exegol, and he goes "Well, of course, after all, as a protocol droid, I contain a database of information on all known planets in the galaxy. Exegol is-" and then he cuts off with the red eyes, and goes into a different voice; "The information you are attempting to access has been classified to level 10 clearance, by special order of Supreme Chancellor Palpatine. This incident will be reported to the nearest Republic Security Officer. Remain in your current location. Clone Troopers will arrive shortly to bring you in for questioning."
This keeps the same plot beat, of C3PO having something hidden in his memory from his time in the Republic, but it isn't Palpatine having his plans just lying around in any old droid. He would've actually orchestrated things such that anyone who learns of, or starts asking about Exegol gets dealt with. The flaw he didn't account for was his own death; and the fact that eventually the Empire would collapse and anyone who tries to ask about Exegol would just get a blatant obvious warning sign that it's something Palpatine wanted hidden.
Then, when his memory unlocks, suddenly he gets back a lot of his CW-era memories, but also that more restricted information. Exegol, yes, but there's also a bunch of other stuff hidden behind the same encryption. All the times Palpatine needed a translator when making some back-alley deals, and wiped their memory of it right after.
A couple things I would change:
1. Obviously the pacing
2. When Han shows up to see his son and the same dialogue happens, but Han grabs the hand Kylo is holding the lightsaber with. When Kylo says "Dad...I-" and Han says "I know" and Han switches on the lightsaber as the fiery red blade pierces Han's torso and he fades away, Kylo looks up to the sky to see two glimmering stars that remind him of his mother's eyes and his fiery red lightsaber blade gently changes to a soft white blade. This is Ben's redemption and his own attempt at reversing the bleeding of his Kyber Crystal, an obvious call back to Ahsoka.
3. The ending should drastically change in my opinion and this is how I'd do it: Although I would like to change the fight I'm not gonna, but let's change it from there. So Rey dies and Ben crawls up to hold her, he tries to resurrect her, but Ben can't so he gently touches his forehead to hers and cries. He then carries her out of the pyramid while Finn, Poe, and Chewie gather to stop him, Ben hands Rey's lifeless body to Finn and says "I tried to help her." While Finn sets her down and tries to give her CPR Ben hands Finn the Skywalker saber and says "It's okay to let the past die, but it's better to let the future thrive." And walks away to presumably go into exile.
We then switch to the next scene of Rey and Leia's death ceremony as they fade away together. Finn boards the Falcon with the Skywalker saber in hand to place it on a shrine involving Rey's staff, Leia's saber, Han/Chewie's medal, and Han's dice. Finn enters the cockpit to meet Poe and Chewie ready to take off as Poe asks "So where is it Leia told you to go?" And Finn replies "...Dantooine."
Next scene we see the Falcon land and Finn hops aboard a speeder bike and says "Wish me luck I'm back by night." We pan to a montage of Finn on the speeder reflecting back to the moment Rey was on hers. After that Finn stops next to a cave and enters. We switch back to Poe and Chewie yelling at each other while playing Dejarik as R2 and BB-8 snicker at C-3PO's attempt at translating Chewie's growling. Finn enters the Falcon as Poe asks "You find what you were looking for?" And Finn replies "yes." A montage of Finn working on something starts and as he finishes he picks up a hunk of metal resembling a shorter version of Rey's staff, Finn flips a switch on it igniting an Amethyst glow as we get a close up on his eyes. We pan back to see an Amethyst blade being emitted and awed by the crew as Poe asks "What now?" and Finn replies "We need to find Ben." And it cuts to the credits.
I think Finn should be related to Mace Windu in someway. I know it might make the universe feel smaller than it is, but I think it would be cool! Especially when you learn Mace is John Boyega's favorite character.
This. I like this.
I like everything except for the whole Mace Windu relation to Finn thing. I feel as if that’s a) on the nose and b) him, Finn, and Lando are like the only important poc in the series so doing that is like “seriously?”
You had me till part 3. That is waaaaaay too much to pack into a denouement of a very packed movie
Also... black people don't all know each other. Cmon
I just recently rewatched all of the Star Wars films, and just saw Rise of Skywalker for the first time. I had been dreading watching ROS forever because I didn't want my view of Star Wars tainted, and I didn't want to rewatch a good series with a sour ending. Well, it happened. But this video fixed it for me, and I would like to go the rest of my life thinking that THIS is how the franchise ended. So thank you for doing this.
This is what I was wanted and hoped for, Ben Solo to live. As much I wanted Reylo to happen I didn't think Disney would go for it, but I didn't think they kill Ben. If I had to chose between Reylo or Ben Solo living, I pick Ben.
While I don't agree with everything in this video I can say it was a good attempt in fixing this dumpster fire
I still like Star Wars but I'm not so excited for future Movies, the Disney+ stuff and animated things look really cool
Also I'd recommend reading the Darth Plageius novel, you can learn about Mediclorians, Darth Maul's purpose, and most importantly about the Tragedy of Datth Plageius the Wise!
Ben surviving also technically reopens most of Star Wars Legends because the Skywalkers don’t all die
I don’t know how you do it, but each of these rewrites improves the movie in almost every way, your writing talent is truly untapped.
What’s even dumber is the calling of emperor palpating across the galaxy is never shown because it’s supposed to be seen by the Star Wars and Fortnite live event💀
I'm so surprised actually that no one said that the "Star Wars" are over in the movie
I would've just left kylo as a villain.
Rey with no heritage.
No leia.
Fin and rose resolution.
Poe new general.
No palpatine.
I fucking love this. I especially like how you kind of explained how Luke decided to kill Ben bc of Palpatine. Also giving him a white lightsaber was fucking awesome. Amazing video, man!
"Finn and Poe are gay for each other and it would piss off all the right people"
YOU SIR, ARE MY NEW HERO!
14:50 😂😂You were really doing it Palpatine impression... Should have continued!
"We Dont Fuck with Bitches"- Troyoboyo17 (Fanboy Rewrites "Star Wars: The Rise Of Skywalker")
I cannot thank you ENOUGH for cutting the Rey-Kylo kiss. Not only did it have no build up and it was purely fan service, but canonically, KYLO IS REY'S NEPHEW
Wait what
@@monsoon1303 due to a canon comic palpatine is confirmed to be anakins father, making Rey kylos aunt
I’m not usually one for using books as a substitute for new ideas for films. But I feel like Finn had a conflict the movies could’ve dealt with. In the Before the Awakening book, they establish Finn’s squad of other troopers & his relationship with them. FN-2199 was a badass, 2000 wasn’t that bright & the others just called him zero & 2003 was a coward who didn’t do well in the battlefield. In fact they say in the beginning of episode 7. The Stormtrooper that wipes his blood on Finn’s helmet is 2003. And then later on when Finn has that lightsaber fight with the trooper with a baton. That was 2199. If they were to do this right. Finn would’ve met up with 2000 & either convert him to the resistance because he’s easily persuadable. Or have him blindly stick to his fascist beliefs because that’s all he was taught. A group of brother who never really got along with each other but end up having to kill one another as a product of two warring sides is more than enough to centre Finn’s character.
Hey thanks for making this. I like your vision and that both Rey and Ben survive. I think using Palpatine's lightsaber to a greater degree to draw Rey towards darkness would be interesting. Maybe the Skywalker lightsaber actively decays and she is forced to use Palps saber at some point. I dunno, everybody could nitpick small details like crazy. That's why making movies is such a long process.
Imagine that, combined in the fight on the Death Star where potentially her anger gets ahold of her and we even see the blue Kyber Crystal bleed out. (Maybe not red, but like orange potentially). Would be such an awesome detail and could even give Kylo more reason for his redemption. Plus it could tie into Reys Dark Side vision in TLJ
i remember distinctly, when i watched RoS with my fiancee in theaters, because of our humor at the time we laughed our asses off at the bass-boosted force lightning that palpatine shot into the sky. the film really had a way of bringing people together
Man, this rewrite is way better than the rewrite I was attempting to do. Good job, man. Good job.
Instead of Nate, call him Gary and let him be played by Keegan Michael Key. The Robot Chicken joke will finally come full circle.
Also I don't know if I'd have Rey say the "I'm a Skywalker!" Line, like I love it, but I think personally it should come from Ben. Because Ben wanted to be a Vader, but he finally realizes that his tru place is to be a Skywalker. Idk that's how I read the situation.
Another great video man, I really enjoy your rewrites and you’ve been a huge inspiration in me doing my own as a fun writing exercise. Keep up the great work!
When Hux kills the firing squad and announces "I'm the spy", wouldn't it have been infinitely more satisfying if the firing squad had killed Hux and become Jannah/Nate/whoever?
“You’re afraid of being ashes. You’re afraid of being forgotten. And you will be forgotten, Sidious. Because of ME. I am vengeance. I am the night. I AM REY SKYWALKER!”
I cracked up at Eddie Brock being garbage
Really cool! Personally I have my ideas, but they always end up including a partial of total rewrite of the whole trilogy. The fact that TFA and TLJ are so completely disconnected from one another is always there preventing Ep IX from being truly good. Because a good final chapter can’t be so without solid and coherent foundations.
Honestly I don’t hate any Star Wars movies I just like some preferred to others
Shloomy Sloms the only really bad ones for me is Rouge One, Phantom Menace, and Attack of the Clones
The Fat Piranha Plant rouge one was bland
Wow this is very nice even the "revival" of palpatine was wonderfully done
Great video, the film should have been called The Rise of the Skywalkers as the Skywalker Order is the new group of force users that replace the flawed Jedi Order.
this rewrite is amazing and would have been a great way to continue from episode 8 and end the story. great job.
This was such a perfect finale! Incredible job, man. I was going to try this myself and got intimidated 😅
Wouldve been cool if Palpatine wasnt alive but was using a sith technique called Dark Phantom. Essentially the ability allows the force user performing it to make an object influence people, whether it is emotionally or physically. Similar to the hocruxes in Harry Potter
33:09 Dude that’s clever!!! A white crystal is a cured red crystal!!! Brilliant!!
I think Rey should go to Illum for a crystal, not just having a cave in Ach-to
Wasn’t illum plundered by the empire to remove all the crystals for the dead star
Great video, the only thing I disagree with is I would skip Rey using force lightning at all, since in lore it is stated that force lightning is an ability that requires years of training in the dark side, so it really doesn’t make sense that Rey can just accidentally use it just because she had some vision.
Any rewrite with Ben Solo living is perfect 👌🏾 Well done.
I think I just got my dad into this channel 😂
Wow man this is amazing. I'm studying to be a film maker but I'm struggling with getting ideas and watching this brings my confidence down 😂. Honestly this is what the movie have should been
An idea for the knights of REN.
Maybe, to draw parallels with fin, the nights of den are trainees of Luke like Ben that he convinced to turn to the dark
The kylo white saber lowkey gave me chills
If only time travel exists today. When I watch the Star Wars marathon I'm gonna watch your video instead of the movie.
Imma do the exact same thing
This is basically where it looked like the canon material *was* setting up and I love it
The rise of skywalker, more like bore ragnarok
the rewrite side of the force is a power many would consider to be... UNATURAL
"it's easier to fix something rather than create something from scratch"
- White Raven
I feel like it would've been cool for Kylo to live and Rey to die because he would have to live with the pain of everything he did, he feels responsible for her death and he has to rebuild the jedi order. Mind you I'm saying this about the actual movie not this rewrite.
Damn this was the best rewrite for this movie I've ever heard. Only problem is Ben's redemption was a little rushed to me
Since you're stuck on an opening crawl, may I suggest this (I'm also changing the title because for it to work, Rey has to call herself Skywalker which is dumb in so many ways):
Episode IX - The Will of the Force
The rebellion is reborn! Luke Skywalker's heroic sacrifice has sparked an uprising against the First Order and is restoring hope to the dwindling Resistance.
To quell the fires of rebellion, the First Order double down on their attacks and soon, the war reaches a stalemate which no side can break.
Seeking a way to destroy the Resistance, Supreme Leader Kylo Ren travels to Mustafar to find a new weapon that can turn the tides of battle once and for all...
Actually, I have an idea on how to make 'The Rise of Skywalker' work. When Rey visits the prison, it turns out the prison is now in the Jedi Temple on Coruscant where Rey is leading a new order of Force Users called 'Skywalkers', those who use a more balanced side of the Force.
@@joelmole3157 Bit late, but I think that’s what Troyo was implying with the ‘I’m a Skywalker’ line in the fight with Sidious.
Thank you for this, it's so much better and actually made me nostalgic and it had heart to it. 🙏
I actually got chills when Ben turned on his white lightsaber
Wow. Ive been doing my own rewrite of this film (and subsequently, the sequel trilogy) but, in the best and most complimentary way possible, this video really puts me off. This is so good and genuinely is a more engaging and enjoyable story than what we got. Ive been a subscriber for a long time and im so glad i found your work my dude! Fantastic job!
This is brilliant and I can not fathom how amazing it is that you managed to explain LUKE SKYWALKER trying to KILL his NEPHEW. That was great. The on negative thing would be that if Rey truly is a nobody, how is she so gifted and powerful without ANY training? I know this is mainly TFA and TLJ fault but considering this is the last movie it would be nice to have it answered. Still so much better than what we got.
I honestly feel like Anakin Skywalker should’ve had a bigger role. In the Clone Wars series, it was indicated in season 3 that he was indeed the chosen one, which is carried on in episode 6 when he saves Luke from palpatine and ultimately kills him. Anakin should’ve had a bigger role in this. Maybe he motivates rey or redeems Kylo ren, but either way, not only would it be faithful to the prequels and anakin skywalker, it would just be cool in general.
God damn it makes me sad that we'll never get to see this version of the movie. I thought it was a very good way to tie it all together. Well bloody done mate.
also I love how you kept the redemption with how the world and this universe would treat kylo after the redemption
46:52 ok now that’s adorable
IKR
Yes. But maybe instead of Sidious just being a wraith at the end, as he gains more power his spirit inhabits the one vessel he has been working on for years. A young new republic general who grew angry at the inefficiency of the NR. A young general who left the Republic to lead the armies of a New Order. The First Order, GENERAL HUX.
You can't just do one good deed and die a hero
Anakin: am I a joke to you
I’d love to see you prewrite Kang Dynasty and Secret Wars and even Indiana Jones 5
Can’t wait to see what your opinion is you have very good points and valid story arcs in your rewrites
it would be better if they let adam driver say the fuck word
Tros is fun to watch. But damn does it have problems
It looks nice but thats about it
elven prince Honestly Last Jedi looked way better the cinematography wasn‘t that good in RoS
Why would palpatines skull still be in tact? He was incinerated
I know you're probably never going to see this comment, but I think it would've been cooler for Palpatine to be more of a representation of the Dark Side.
Imagine that "I AM ALL THE SITH!" line, but it switches between the voices of the many Sith across the Saga, Bane, Maul, Dooku, Grievous, Vader, Grand Inquisitor, then going back to Palpatine.
That’s what I call fan service right there!
@@dhaniswarasaid1451 Would've been better than ruining atleast two major character arcs lol.
Still waiting for TASM 2 🙄🤷🏼♂️
He said if this does well, he’ll start it
What is that?
@@mr.mcweasel6257 the amazing Spider-Man 2 i guess
I died when I heard the ringtone at 21:43
I like how the Final order takes inspiration from the Thrawn Trilogy with clones and a secret fleet
This should be the rise of Skywalker version of the Zack Snyder cut.
18:34 I knew I wasn't the only one seeing that chemistry.
I was already really liking the video, but it clicked into brilliance at the point where Rey and Kylo discover the Emperor has been dead all along. The dynamic of them both wanting to kill him, either to finally ascend to heroism or descend into pure villainy, and that being pulled out from under them was just genius, expanding upon the themes of the Last Jedi without being a retread.
Personally if your gonna make Poe and Fin gay I would do it from the start in The force awakens but otherwise great video 👍🏻
Did you have a problem with them making Rey and Kylo straight without doing it from the start in The Force Awakens?
@@alexbennet4195 dude stfu
@@louisbolger4239 no u
@@alexbennet4195 got me there
At 23:34 I thought he was going to say audible
I mean as much as i like The Rise Of Skywalker i still want them to re-do the movie.
I really really really liked this version and the messages you created.