Thank you Josie, you chose a show that I just loved and was raised on from the very first episode. And you used the words in a way that made it understandable. The way you changed the words, the way you put the lines together, thank you so much.
I liked your pantoum. It entertained me and I smiled at the wit within it. And your explanation of the form was very good too, especially the benefits of using enjambement and slightly tweaking the lines to allow more wiggle room within the confines of the form. 👍 👍
Thank you so much for this tutorial! I am currently working on writing a pantoum in one of my college writing courses and I needed just a little more understanding of it. I personally dug your Star Trek poem. Live Long and Prosper! 🖖
Sometimes maintaining a TH-cam channel about such a niche topic like poetry is kinda hard. This comment makes it all worth it. Glad I could help - good luck on your course!
This is a very difficult....thank you for explaining! This is attempt 1 for my high school class :) Edit: oh i messed up at the end....oh well Pantoum for Growing Up Always thinking, Just one more year. Never actually getting there, To that place where I’d finally feel That I had grown. Never actually getting there Because no one ever thinks that I have changed. That I had grown, Oddly content…but wanting more. Because no one ever thinks that I have changed, I skirt the responsibilities of age, Oddly content but wanting more Time to experience without consequence. I skirt the responsibilities of age, Longing for that simpler Time to experience without consequence. The things I took for granted, longing to grow, Longing for simpler: That place where I could finally feel That my age no longer handicapped. Always thinking, Just one more year.
Well, I do like your poem, I now feel inclined to learn more about 'pantoum' and may well sign up for a one session online course where I first heard the word 'pantoum'
I'm a Javanese Malay from Singapore. We called it Pantun. An example of a classic Malay Pantun : Buah Cempedak di luar pagar, Ambil galah tolong jolokkan, Saya budak baharu belajar, Kalau salah tolong tunjukkan. Translation Where jackfruit grow without the fence, Go prod them gently with a stake, A youthful learner I, so hence, Be please to point out each mistake.
Terrific tutorial. This form is above my pay grade as a novice poet. Not sure I like the confining format, in any case. But thanks for the clear explanation.
Thanks so much Josie, I've watched a lot of your video's recently and they've been really helpful. I'm just starting my journey with this medium and you've really helped. I use the site "The Poetry Cove" to get help and share my poetry. If you haven't already please give it a look. You would be invaluable on there. I am going to try a Pantoum, thanks to your help - wish me luck!
The taller the bamboo tree, the closer to the earth it leans. The further my native land, the stronger my longing. Plus grand est le bambou plus bas il s’incline. Plus lointain mon pays plus profondes mes racines. semakin tinggi pokok buluh semakin rendah ia merunduk semakin jauh tanah airku semakin terasa akar dan rindu
The Next Generation for me... but, honestly, it's what I grew up on, so that crew is like my fam. Also, watching Captain Jean Luc Picard act is like watching a Shakespearean play (which I love) so how can I not say TNG lol
See I never grew up watching them (I think I was slightly too young to get into it) so approaching it as an adult I just enjoy DS9 better - I think it has a stronger overall cast
LOVE the Star Trek poem
This video really helped me finish my poetry assignment for college. Thank you!
Thank you Josie, you chose a show that I just loved and was raised on from the very first episode. And you used the words in a way that made it understandable. The way you changed the words, the way you put the lines together, thank you so much.
Thanks Linda - I think you have to play with the words and meanings with pantoums because they can be a bit full on otherwise!
I liked your pantoum. It entertained me and I smiled at the wit within it. And your explanation of the form was very good too, especially the benefits of using enjambement and slightly tweaking the lines to allow more wiggle room within the confines of the form. 👍 👍
Thanks! I'm glad you found it useful
Thank you so much for this tutorial! I am currently working on writing a pantoum in one of my college writing courses and I needed just a little more understanding of it. I personally dug your Star Trek poem. Live Long and Prosper! 🖖
Sometimes maintaining a TH-cam channel about such a niche topic like poetry is kinda hard. This comment makes it all worth it. Glad I could help - good luck on your course!
This is a very difficult....thank you for explaining! This is attempt 1 for my high school class :)
Edit: oh i messed up at the end....oh well
Pantoum for Growing Up
Always thinking, Just one more year.
Never actually getting there,
To that place where I’d finally feel
That I had grown.
Never actually getting there
Because no one ever thinks that I have changed.
That I had grown,
Oddly content…but wanting more.
Because no one ever thinks that I have changed,
I skirt the responsibilities of age,
Oddly content but wanting more
Time to experience without consequence.
I skirt the responsibilities of age,
Longing for that simpler
Time to experience without consequence.
The things I took for granted, longing to grow,
Longing for simpler:
That place where I could finally feel
That my age no longer handicapped.
Always thinking, Just one more year.
Well, I do like your poem, I now feel inclined to learn more about 'pantoum' and may well sign up for a one session online course where I first heard the word 'pantoum'
thank you for this video, this is the only one I actually understood completely 😹
Instructions are unclear my cat is in the microwave
You're so good! Thanks! Watching from the Philippines!
Wow! Welcome! Glad you liked it
I'm a Javanese Malay from Singapore. We called it Pantun. An example of a classic Malay Pantun :
Buah Cempedak di luar pagar,
Ambil galah tolong jolokkan,
Saya budak baharu belajar,
Kalau salah tolong tunjukkan.
Translation
Where jackfruit grow without the fence,
Go prod them gently with a stake,
A youthful learner I, so hence,
Be please to point out each mistake.
Thank you so much for sharing 😊
@JosieAlfordPoet You're most welcome :) Pantun is also used as lyrics for traditional Malay songs.
Clear and helpful, thank you. Original Series (Of course) :)
Glad you found it useful. Deep Space 9 for life x
Terrific tutorial. This form is above my pay grade as a novice poet. Not sure I like the confining format, in any case.
But thanks for the clear explanation.
Thanks so much Josie, I've watched a lot of your video's recently and they've been really helpful. I'm just starting my journey with this medium and you've really helped. I use the site "The Poetry Cove" to get help and share my poetry. If you haven't already please give it a look. You would be invaluable on there. I am going to try a Pantoum, thanks to your help - wish me luck!
I'm so glad you've found my content useful. I'll check out the site. Good luck for the Pantoum!
Voyager!
A strong choice
TNG or DS9? Hmmmm .....I'm torn. Interesting video - really enjoyed it.
Thanks Gill. It's definitely DS9 for me
The taller the bamboo tree,
the closer to the earth it leans.
The further my native land,
the stronger my longing.
Plus grand est le bambou
plus bas il s’incline.
Plus lointain mon pays
plus profondes mes racines.
semakin tinggi pokok buluh
semakin rendah ia merunduk
semakin jauh tanah airku
semakin terasa akar dan rindu
Thank you for sharing
The Next Generation for me... but, honestly, it's what I grew up on, so that crew is like my fam. Also, watching Captain Jean Luc Picard act is like watching a Shakespearean play (which I love) so how can I not say TNG lol
See I never grew up watching them (I think I was slightly too young to get into it) so approaching it as an adult I just enjoy DS9 better - I think it has a stronger overall cast
Voyager. #sorrynotsorry
I will allow it as voyager is a close second for me. Captain Janeway is everything.