Too repetitive.. too much explanation of scenery rather than just addressing the story which could be interesting but jeez...dragging it out for so long loses your audience... repeating the same.lines over and over.. never using a new sentence.No explanation of how father survived financially..Also would help to keep figures used as characters.the sane and not 15 different different people...just PICK.Same wih scenery..tiny c ad bin or large with deck.. This becomes too many jumbled with no real answer to THE question... Why did dad run away🙄
Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback! I truly appreciate the time you took to share your perspective. I see how the repetition and over-description could feel overwhelming, and I’ll definitely work on making the stories more concise and exciting.
Avery interesting narrative and hope for more thank you for sharing this story with me
Thank you so much for your kind words! I’m thrilled you found the narrative interesting. There’s more to come.
JACK THOUGHT HE WAS DOING THE RIGHT THING AT THAT TIME...GOOD STORY.THX
Thank you so much! Yes, Jack truly believed he was doing the right thing. I’m glad you enjoyed the story, thank you for your support!
Too repetitive.. too much explanation of scenery rather than just addressing the story which could be interesting but jeez...dragging it out for so long loses your audience... repeating the same.lines over and over.. never using a new sentence.No explanation of how father survived financially..Also would help to keep figures used as characters.the sane and not 15 different different people...just PICK.Same wih scenery..tiny c ad bin or large with deck.. This becomes too many jumbled with no real answer to THE question... Why did dad run away🙄
Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback! I truly appreciate the time you took to share your perspective. I see how the repetition and over-description could feel overwhelming, and I’ll definitely work on making the stories more concise and exciting.