Criticism is the most important element to improving as an artist. This film was our first ever short film and was created for a year 11 end of year assessment by a group of 16-17 years old's in high school. We were very proud to achieve this end result with the limited time and resources at our disposal. We appreciate your feedback but we ask that it is kept constructive and that we all remain civil to one another. Our only goal is to entertain and we hoped this was our first step into doing just that. We hope you all can see the film for what it was and know we tried our hardest, we will continue to learn from our mistakes and hope you stick around for more content to come! - Titan Knockout
It was unnecessary to show you flicking the bubbles out of the syringe. It just gave the audience a chance to notice that there wasn't a needle in it. Or maybe next time do the shot from further away so that it is harder to tell whether or not there is a needle and then cut to the scene of you injecting her and no one is the wiser. You're doing well to set the mood with the music and the filters. just little things you need to look for because those little things can ruin it for the audience. Maybe have more friends or family look over it with fresh eyes before publishing.
Very impressive for high school kids.The fake accent from the doctor? Professor? Whatever. That was a bad choice. It almost ruined it. No accent is better than an obvious fake one.
I agree with your comment. People find it easy to leave comments that fall well past being rude and undignified largely due to the fact they are relatively anonymous and therefore experience no consequence to any negative and hurtful statements made here on the internet. I think overall your efforts are worthy of a watch and with some genuine constructive criticism, you will only become better. LOL remember, there are enough people on this planet who will always find fault and problems no matter how exceptional you become. Don't waste your time on such people, surround yourself with people who are constructive, supportive and ambitious in a positive way.
I'm surprised to see this was done by 16-17 year olds! I honestly would not have guessed that. It takes enormous amounts of time and work to make something like this, especially by kids that age in school!! There are so many factors that people don't realize with a project this large with students that age: there are extremely limited resources. The students are working with probably a less than $50 budget; much less time than they would have liked (usually after school hours only - that only leaves so much time per day); varied skill levels and experience of actors that are available to work; limited equipment that probably isn't the best in the world; nerves and pressure from this being a first time and important undertaking; and also - having to balance many ideas and suggestions from several people, some of which would have to be let down when sharing the writing. I would be incredibly proud if I was the teacher/overseer of this project. It was done professionally and easily stands up to many other shorts on TH-cam, despite any flaws or issues people have pointed out. There are shorts I've watched (I've watched hundreds and hundreds on TH-cam) that are significantly below the level of this one, done by so-called "experienced" filmmakers. I hope the students involved didn't take the rudeness and unnecessary harshness some have posted as comments, and instead are able to focus on the good work they did in producing a completed, professional film. These kids absolutely have a bright future and I personally would encourage them to continue on and keep making art through film. It's very easy to be rude and inappropriate when making comments about someone else's work. However, if you take a minute to think about it - to truly and honestly think about it - any person on here would be hard pressed to match the level of this film on their first time attempt while working under the same parameters these kids did. No, it isn't perfect, but it is outstanding work, all things considered. Congratulations to the students that worked so hard to make this film! I wish you all the best of luck! And to the teacher that was overseeing the project - I hope you are proud of these kids, and you are obviously an excellent teacher to them. Well done!!
Is it just me?... or... What's with the Sean Connery "Shaken not shturr'd" vocals on that one kid? Sorry, but that just threw the entire thing off the rails for me.
the "needle" was not a needle, its the same thing i give my cat his flea medicine with. the little chemical set looked like the ph tester kit for a fish tank. the girl looked like she was using a leash to strangle the wrong way. Did you guys have family that owns a chain of pet stores or something. this thing was all over the place. the voice, dear god. he sounded like a second string bond villain that they kept around to make coffee runs. there is such a thing as over acting. man, im not trying to hate but looking at the comments, im as lost as everyone else. i know this is like 4 years late but i had to voice a comment. still, i applaud the effort.
Geez, i was just at 1.39, when i read your comment, and was thinking that what's gonna happen, and boom, 1.52 came along.. Sadly, because I read your comment just before it actually happened, i didn't have the chance to get startled :-)
What was the husband's name? The Dr's name? Why did they go after Miles? Why hadn't the husband and wife aged in 10 years? Who controlled and spoke through the tv/radio? The acting, gestures and vocal tone was affected. Tell the performers to speak normally. Like they're talking to their friend/s. Also, the lighting was too dark in spots. I couldn't see anything at times.
I'm not saying that the writing's spectacular, but people should really pause and read the letter at 2:44. It provides the necessary exposition about the main character and the institute.
Great job! Keep making the scary stories. Try to lighten up the darkness. Too many movies use it for effect. All it does for me is not want to watch the movie I can’t see.
the technical skill was top notch. ALL OF IT! Corinne wooden was excellent. but, I say this all time, the writing was lacking coherency and exposition. even the opening radio narration, a good technique, didn't help with the rest of the story. it probably looked great on paper, made perfect sense to the writer and filmmakers, but the viewer was left bewildered and perplexed. I didn't even know the first guy was a reporter until I read the comments. I just thought he was burglar. and then when the ghost (?), was she a ghost?, said - "he's gone" it only confused me even more. I liked the little segment after the credits but it didn't clarify anything for me. overall a good job for a first effort from high schoolers. I would've given the film an A-, the (-) being for the writing.
This is so well done.! Where did u get the music score and fill? Gr8 editing too...seamless...agin well done. Kudos to u all for ur achievement keep at it..
I can't tell if it was good or bad so I guess that means it's ok! The acting needs some improving just a bit! Cinematography was good, sound good, lighting mostly good. Storyline?????There was none as far as I could tell. Caught bits and peices of a plot but then it was gone. Not bad not good but...ok is how I leave it. Great try though. I certainly couldnt have done better.
The acting great it just story line all over the place, camera work great just it's all over the place with story not much sence. Great job for students thought and I think if story line had been put better would have been better but still very good. Potential
The first five minutes were pretty boring, especially, when you didn't know, why that man was snooping around. After that, the movie got better. So, if you stuck around after five minutes, then you probably enjoyed the rest of it.
Ryan: look personally I don't either, this film was made to a deadline for my year 11 media final. A lot of scenes were just not filmed so I just put together what I had. We never got to shoot the remainder scenes as we are all busy with school. I was pretty proud of the result seeing as this was the first short film I had ever made. So yes the story makes no sense but I still believe it's an entertaining watch personally.
I've tried watching this a couple of times now. Just can't get into it..the acting's shocking (especially the guy with that fake asf accent) and it drags on. Sorry but it's crap IMHO🤷🏻♀️
Wow... spectacularly horrible acting, and the story did not make sense at all. I knew I should have stopped watching halfway... I kept watching it, hoping it would all make sense in the end but NOPE. All it did was waste my time. I'll give you this though... at the beginning? When that scary voice said, "Look behind you!"... that sent chills up my spine. Unfortunately, it all went downhill from there... FAST, and kept spiraling.
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Well done to the high schoolers well acted..some actors really have potential to go a long way
Truly amazed with how this has been compiled and put together..wow well done to all those involved
Criticism is the most important element to improving as an artist. This film was our first ever short film and was created for a year 11 end of year assessment by a group of 16-17 years old's in high school. We were very proud to achieve this end result with the limited time and resources at our disposal. We appreciate your feedback but we ask that it is kept constructive and that we all remain civil to one another. Our only goal is to entertain and we hoped this was our first step into doing just that.
We hope you all can see the film for what it was and know we tried our hardest, we will continue to learn from our mistakes and hope you stick around for more content to come!
- Titan Knockout
It was unnecessary to show you flicking the bubbles out of the syringe. It just gave the audience a chance to notice that there wasn't a needle in it. Or maybe next time do the shot from further away so that it is harder to tell whether or not there is a needle and then cut to the scene of you injecting her and no one is the wiser. You're doing well to set the mood with the music and the filters. just little things you need to look for because those little things can ruin it for the audience. Maybe have more friends or family look over it with fresh eyes before publishing.
Very impressive for high school kids.The fake accent from the doctor? Professor? Whatever. That was a bad choice. It almost ruined it. No accent is better than an obvious fake one.
I agree with your comment. People find it easy to leave comments that fall well past being rude and undignified largely due to the fact they are relatively anonymous and therefore experience no consequence to any negative and hurtful statements made here on the internet. I think overall your efforts are worthy of a watch and with some genuine constructive criticism, you will only become better. LOL remember, there are enough people on this planet who will always find fault and problems no matter how exceptional you become. Don't waste your time on such people, surround yourself with people who are constructive, supportive and ambitious in a positive way.
Taking criticism makes you stronger, in your desire to act then yes. Take the good and bad.
I'm surprised to see this was done by 16-17 year olds! I honestly would not have guessed that. It takes enormous amounts of time and work to make something like this, especially by kids that age in school!! There are so many factors that people don't realize with a project this large with students that age: there are extremely limited resources. The students are working with probably a less than $50 budget; much less time than they would have liked (usually after school hours only - that only leaves so much time per day); varied skill levels and experience of actors that are available to work; limited equipment that probably isn't the best in the world; nerves and pressure from this being a first time and important undertaking; and also - having to balance many ideas and suggestions from several people, some of which would have to be let down when sharing the writing. I would be incredibly proud if I was the teacher/overseer of this project. It was done professionally and easily stands up to many other shorts on TH-cam, despite any flaws or issues people have pointed out. There are shorts I've watched (I've watched hundreds and hundreds on TH-cam) that are significantly below the level of this one, done by so-called "experienced" filmmakers. I hope the students involved didn't take the rudeness and unnecessary harshness some have posted as comments, and instead are able to focus on the good work they did in producing a completed, professional film. These kids absolutely have a bright future and I personally would encourage them to continue on and keep making art through film.
It's very easy to be rude and inappropriate when making comments about someone else's work. However, if you take a minute to think about it - to truly and honestly think about it - any person on here would be hard pressed to match the level of this film on their first time attempt while working under the same parameters these kids did. No, it isn't perfect, but it is outstanding work, all things considered.
Congratulations to the students that worked so hard to make this film! I wish you all the best of luck! And to the teacher that was overseeing the project - I hope you are proud of these kids, and you are obviously an excellent teacher to them. Well done!!
Great!
ok kids, u did it and I enjoyed it thank u...look 4ward 2 your next films
Is it just me?... or... What's with the Sean Connery "Shaken not shturr'd" vocals on that one kid? Sorry, but that just threw the entire thing off the rails for me.
the "needle" was not a needle, its the same thing i give my cat his flea medicine with. the little chemical set looked like the ph tester kit for a fish tank. the girl looked like she was using a leash to strangle the wrong way. Did you guys have family that owns a chain of pet stores or something. this thing was all over the place. the voice, dear god. he sounded like a second string bond villain that they kept around to make coffee runs. there is such a thing as over acting. man, im not trying to hate but looking at the comments, im as lost as everyone else. i know this is like 4 years late but i had to voice a comment. still, i applaud the effort.
boy, this things all over the place.
1:52
Did anyone else sit perfectly still and refuse to turn around to look?
Geez, i was just at 1.39, when i read your comment, and was thinking that what's gonna happen, and boom, 1.52 came along.. Sadly, because I read your comment just before it actually happened, i didn't have the chance to get startled :-)
@Lee Courtney I'm so tired of stupid people so byebye
Back ground music is good. It keeps us watching movie.
Great Video!
A great effort on your part. It looks like you have a lot of potential! Keep at it!
What was the husband's name? The Dr's name? Why did they go after Miles? Why hadn't the husband and wife aged in 10 years? Who controlled and spoke through the tv/radio? The acting, gestures and vocal tone was affected. Tell the performers to speak normally. Like they're talking to their friend/s. Also, the lighting was too dark in spots. I couldn't see anything at times.
Whats with all the questions
there is just no way that that guy talks like that!
lol
ANNA DARLING, THAT THE NOT THAT THAT LEARN HOW TO SPELL
Loved it! xx
A great short!
I'm not saying that the writing's spectacular, but people should really pause and read the letter at 2:44. It provides the necessary exposition about the main character and the institute.
Great job! Keep making the scary stories. Try to lighten up the darkness. Too many movies use it for effect. All it does for me is not want to watch the movie I can’t see.
I jumped so many times
Great
gr8 m8 i r8 8/8
Nice profile pic m8.
Thanks for this!
so good!!
the technical skill was top notch. ALL OF IT! Corinne wooden was excellent. but, I say this all time, the writing was lacking coherency and exposition. even the opening radio narration, a good technique, didn't help with the rest of the story. it probably looked great on paper, made perfect sense to the writer and filmmakers, but the viewer was left bewildered and perplexed. I didn't even know the first guy was a reporter until I read the comments. I just thought he was burglar. and then when the ghost (?), was she a ghost?, said - "he's gone" it only confused me even more. I liked the little segment after the credits but it didn't clarify anything for me. overall a good job for a first effort from high schoolers. I would've given the film an A-, the (-) being for the writing.
I wish they did the outlast short film
this rocks!
This is so well done.! Where did u get the music score and fill? Gr8 editing too...seamless...agin well done. Kudos to u all for ur achievement keep at it..
P.T influence? good looking also :D
What the hell did I just watch?? I'm lost...
Credits are the best part of the film. Oh and the girl with the cuts on her face who somehow looks fresh out the shower.
What the hell was this?! It was all over the place and no real story to even follow
The first 5 minutes is just some guy hunting Pokémon. 🤳 🔎
;)
The journalist with the camera reminds me of Outlast.
You are literally the first person to notice the Easter egg 👌his name is miles upsure
+Titan Knockout nah m8 I knew this months ago.
+ADAM21153 where's the mlg parody?
+Christian's Music soon bruv...
8:17 ... sliding glass doors by Audi?
What was the direction on this?
Nice job, was she a ghost? Zombie?
That was so dumb I didn't even finish it
What in the world is the plot of this movie?!
So, is she a vengeful ghost?
I can't tell if it was good or bad so I guess that means it's ok! The acting needs some improving just a bit! Cinematography was good, sound good, lighting mostly good. Storyline?????There was none as far as I could tell. Caught bits and peices of a plot but then it was gone. Not bad not good but...ok is how I leave it. Great try though. I certainly couldnt have done better.
Damn adrenaline rush! How long did it take yall to film
When I was at 17:53, my sister grabbed my shoulders. T-T
Good..it's too good for 16 yr olds
The acting great it just story line all over the place, camera work great just it's all over the place with story not much sence. Great job for students thought and I think if story line had been put better would have been better but still very good. Potential
Keep making movies!
WTF with all the ads!? No wonder you got so many dislikes.
Er.... I don't know if it was a part of the story but that syringe has no needle on it....
NO! RUNNN! PLZZ! NOW!!!! NEIN! NEIN! NEIN!
If you love non-sensical videos with no writing or any real directing, then this is for you.
The first five minutes were pretty boring, especially, when you didn't know, why that man was snooping around. After that, the movie got better. So, if you stuck around after five minutes, then you probably enjoyed the rest of it.
Is this real or fake
I can barely hear anyone talk and than loud ass screaming wtf
15:30 edgy memes reaction 2k15
What on earth, I can't act.
Miles Upshur was better off with the Walrider.
I'm sorry the one guys acting was horrible!
Sorry but it's a no for me.
What the hell did I just watch?
I usually love your stuff, but this...didn't get it at all!
Ryan: look personally I don't either, this film was made to a deadline for my year 11 media final. A lot of scenes were just not filmed so I just put together what I had. We never got to shoot the remainder scenes as we are all busy with school. I was pretty proud of the result seeing as this was the first short film I had ever made.
So yes the story makes no sense but I still believe it's an entertaining watch personally.
Awful acting!
I've tried watching this a couple of times now. Just can't get into it..the acting's shocking (especially the guy with that fake asf accent) and it drags on. Sorry but it's crap IMHO🤷🏻♀️
Meh.
The acting and fake accent was horrific
All that screaming was extremely annoying
Acting was horrible, it was like he was holding the script in his hand just reading it.
Thanks for the upload
👎👎👎👎
Get a better writer/ editor.
Wow... spectacularly horrible acting, and the story did not make sense at all. I knew I should have stopped watching halfway... I kept watching it, hoping it would all make sense in the end but NOPE. All it did was waste my time. I'll give you this though... at the beginning? When that scary voice said, "Look behind you!"... that sent chills up my spine. Unfortunately, it all went downhill from there... FAST, and kept spiraling.
BAD ACTING!!!!!!
worst acting ever