9:40 The writer left their personal notes in the story. Holy cow. And after listening for a little while, all the sudden I just realized this story is an amalgamation of three to four other stories which have been copied and pasted. There are gap discrepancies in events as if entire chapters are missing, Humans attacked first and the story doesn't say why, because it doesn't show any crimes committed by the Galactic Council. Plot. What was the plot? Humans reacted by destroying a Station, but the story doesn't say why? "Because the Galactic Council has said we are unpredictable we shall destroy their Station!" Well, I guess if the plot was to show how unpredictable humans are, I guess blowing up their station for no good reason would show that. We immediately are in a war footing, and the Diplomat is in charge of the warship. "Prepare Operation Papercuts and Paperclips, we're going to make them pay for calling us unpredictable." There's no plot, other than the Galactic Council calling Humans unpredictable, and in response the Humans blow up a space station. Was there a part one somewhere to this story? I'm serious. It's like you had a beginning, then the writer grew bored in the first 8 minutes and started blowing things up, because battles in space is better than some guy sitting at a desk trying to figure out what to write and couldn't create a proper plot. For the writer of this story, I am sorry you are bored to properly flush out the who and why, when it comes to creative writing, but this is one of the worst stories I've had to listen to so far. You even left your NOTES in the dialogue. That's like watching a movie as each actor on screen is holding a script and reads out load all the parts that aren't supposed to be spoken out loud. "Okay, this next scene now showcases that the planet Aldoron has been blown up by the Deathstar, so I want you to act like you're having a stomachache, to show that you felt the deaths of millions of people halfway across the galaxy." Could you imagine watching Star Wars as the director is in the movie explaining each scene WHILE IN THE MOVIE. If this was a "Draft" story, that doesn't mean you automatically print it. If this was a "Reaction Story", that still does not mean you cut and paste the beginning and end with no middle, which brings us back that this story was a Draft, and the Draft wasn't ready to be printed. And if this was a Draft, which I'm starting to suspect, write in the Transcript that the story hasn't been completely flushed out and that it is a DRAFT STORY and not fully flushed out for the readers, so you don't have to read comments like I have just posted.
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9:40 The writer left their personal notes in the story. Holy cow. And after listening for a little while, all the sudden I just realized this story is an amalgamation of three to four other stories which have been copied and pasted. There are gap discrepancies in events as if entire chapters are missing, Humans attacked first and the story doesn't say why, because it doesn't show any crimes committed by the Galactic Council. Plot. What was the plot? Humans reacted by destroying a Station, but the story doesn't say why?
"Because the Galactic Council has said we are unpredictable we shall destroy their Station!" Well, I guess if the plot was to show how unpredictable humans are, I guess blowing up their station for no good reason would show that. We immediately are in a war footing, and the Diplomat is in charge of the warship. "Prepare Operation Papercuts and Paperclips, we're going to make them pay for calling us unpredictable." There's no plot, other than the Galactic Council calling Humans unpredictable, and in response the Humans blow up a space station. Was there a part one somewhere to this story? I'm serious. It's like you had a beginning, then the writer grew bored in the first 8 minutes and started blowing things up, because battles in space is better than some guy sitting at a desk trying to figure out what to write and couldn't create a proper plot.
For the writer of this story, I am sorry you are bored to properly flush out the who and why, when it comes to creative writing, but this is one of the worst stories I've had to listen to so far. You even left your NOTES in the dialogue. That's like watching a movie as each actor on screen is holding a script and reads out load all the parts that aren't supposed to be spoken out loud. "Okay, this next scene now showcases that the planet Aldoron has been blown up by the Deathstar, so I want you to act like you're having a stomachache, to show that you felt the deaths of millions of people halfway across the galaxy." Could you imagine watching Star Wars as the director is in the movie explaining each scene WHILE IN THE MOVIE.
If this was a "Draft" story, that doesn't mean you automatically print it. If this was a "Reaction Story", that still does not mean you cut and paste the beginning and end with no middle, which brings us back that this story was a Draft, and the Draft wasn't ready to be printed. And if this was a Draft, which I'm starting to suspect, write in the Transcript that the story hasn't been completely flushed out and that it is a DRAFT STORY and not fully flushed out for the readers, so you don't have to read comments like I have just posted.
Good story tho.
Thank you
Oh look the guy on the left has five fingers plus I’m assuming a thumb. Lol
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I really liked the story tho. I sit here and listen a look for little “oops” lol