Hello. Thank you for uploading such a video; it is useful to hear the thought processes behind the essay. In my view, you could improve the viewer experience by dropping the background music, which I find very distracting. Is there any way to contact you directly? I am about to embark on a career copy editing and proofreading college admission documents, and I would like some advice on how to help students with their essays.
Thanks for the suggestion. We'll keep this in mind as we move forward with new videos. :) Additionally, you can reach out to help@collegeessayguy.com for more help/resources!
My paper would have been totally different the whole paper would have been about what I would build first and why culture landscape location money the benefit of what I’ll build to the people the location the economy this is all over the place
When writing a personal statement, it actually doesn't really matter which prompt you choose (especially because Common App prompt option #7 asks to write for a "prompt of your choice". Real admission readers aren't looking for how closely you answered the personal statement prompt--instead, they're trying to get a sense of who you are overall as a person/incoming student to their campus. They're trying to get an idea of the skills/qualities/values/interests that you will bring to campus with you. Real admission readers (and I) thought this essay did a wonderful job of those things.
Hi there! Thanks for writing in. We have a few options for getting 1:1 college essay support: 1.) If you're looking for 1-on-1 help with your college application and essays, please submit a request form at this link and our team will be in touch with you soon to share more details about our 1:1 support and how to schedule a call to learn more: www.collegeessayguy.com/college-essay-coaching 2.) If our packages are out of range, we are offering asynchronous reviews of college essays/applications with our Complete Application Review service, which you can learn more about and sign up for here: students.collegeessayguy.com/complete-application-review Lastly, we always have free and pay-what-you-can courses. We recommend starting with our two signature essay courses here: www.collegeessayguy.com/college-essay-courses Happy writing, CEG Team
What a beautiful essay! It avoids the immigrant story cliches while being emotional and poignant to many experiences.
Thanks for watching!
Great essay, but most importantly, great comments. Thanks for sharing Ethan!
Glad you enjoyed it!
i can't believe i am just now finding your channel! thanks!
Hello. Thank you for uploading such a video; it is useful to hear the thought processes behind the essay. In my view, you could improve the viewer experience by dropping the background music, which I find very distracting. Is there any way to contact you directly? I am about to embark on a career copy editing and proofreading college admission documents, and I would like some advice on how to help students with their essays.
Thanks for the suggestion. We'll keep this in mind as we move forward with new videos. :)
Additionally, you can reach out to help@collegeessayguy.com for more help/resources!
Perfect!
My paper would have been totally different the whole paper would have been about what I would build first and why culture landscape location money the benefit of what I’ll build to the people the location the economy this is all over the place
It would be OK to take a more literal approach like you're saying. This student chose a more figurative approach and it worked really well.
I’m tryna be a better writer so my problem is wondering why did she mention so much that has nothing to do with the question I think this is a D-
When writing a personal statement, it actually doesn't really matter which prompt you choose (especially because Common App prompt option #7 asks to write for a "prompt of your choice". Real admission readers aren't looking for how closely you answered the personal statement prompt--instead, they're trying to get a sense of who you are overall as a person/incoming student to their campus. They're trying to get an idea of the skills/qualities/values/interests that you will bring to campus with you.
Real admission readers (and I) thought this essay did a wonderful job of those things.
Can you review my essay? There is noone :)
He never responds and it’s not even him who reviews anyway
Hi there! Thanks for writing in.
We have a few options for getting 1:1 college essay support:
1.) If you're looking for 1-on-1 help with your college application and essays, please submit a request form at this link and our team will be in touch with you soon to share more details about our 1:1 support and how to schedule a call to learn more: www.collegeessayguy.com/college-essay-coaching
2.) If our packages are out of range, we are offering asynchronous reviews of college essays/applications with our Complete Application Review service, which you can learn more about and sign up for here: students.collegeessayguy.com/complete-application-review
Lastly, we always have free and pay-what-you-can courses. We recommend starting with our two signature essay courses here: www.collegeessayguy.com/college-essay-courses
Happy writing,
CEG Team