Sci-Fi Creepypasta "Logs of A Stranded Astronaut" | Post-Apocalyptic Story

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  • Stranded on a reborn Earth, Michael Newtown's solitary existence is shattered when he encounters the evolved descendants of humanity. In a world where nature has reclaimed its dominion, every day is a battle for survival. But when Michael forms an unlikely bond with Eve, an evolved human, they uncover secrets that challenge the very essence of what it means to be human. Amidst the ruins of civilization, a tale of survival, adaptation, and the enduring spirit of humanity unfolds, leaving us to wonder: can two species divided by time and evolution share one future?
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  • @StarBrained
    @StarBrained 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +39

    Really great story, was going to try to sleep but it was too interesting

  • @ashokrayvenn
    @ashokrayvenn 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +28

    Loved it--now for part II: “How I raised a hybrid alien baby”

    • @bullboo1
      @bullboo1 5 หลายเดือนก่อน

      a hybrid evolved human/ old world human baby.

  • @timothydavis1734
    @timothydavis1734 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +48

    This was a good one…

    • @TheKristianEros
      @TheKristianEros 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +5

      Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

    • @cpt.barker4767
      @cpt.barker4767 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

      Agreed, I'd love to hear a part 2

  • @DanielKay06
    @DanielKay06 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +11

    I haven't fully listened to the story yet and will keep it for later but here is a small suggestion.
    For any "recordings" story I know there is a temptation to use the "playback" filter to make it actually sound like you listen to one but it can get a bit grating to listen to. My suggestions is something a few others do, only let the filter play for a bit in the beginning but then fade it out into a normal narration. We then already know it is a recording and are in the mindset. You can even bookend it by letting the filter fade back in towards the end.

  • @sorcesscores5366
    @sorcesscores5366 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +4

    Welp, this ain’t a bedtime story. It’s an edge of your seat story. Good story and narration.

  • @ChrisGreenland
    @ChrisGreenland 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +6

    This voice actor is one of the best I've heard during the 5 yrs+ of space/sci-fi creepasta listening

    • @TheKristianEros
      @TheKristianEros 5 หลายเดือนก่อน +3

      Wow! Thank you! That's so kind of you to say! 😁😁😁😁

    • @floydbaker2240
      @floydbaker2240 หลายเดือนก่อน

      ​@@TheKristianErosyeah man, you sound like Kyle Reese hardcore. Could DEFINITELY imagine you telling me "it cannot stop, it WILL not stop..until you are dead"

  • @shannonjohns2308
    @shannonjohns2308 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +22

    Great story! I would love to hear the adventures he and Eve had during the 10 years they were together. Nature is amazing, no matter how stupid we get, it always seems to find a way 😊

    • @BrennaAckerson
      @BrennaAckerson 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

      I agree. This story was excellent and I too would like stories from those 10 years. 😊

    • @Allantitan
      @Allantitan 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

      Life uh….finds a way

  • @urimorales3364
    @urimorales3364 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +21

    Yoooo we need more of this what happened in those 10 years

  • @harrygrimley4352
    @harrygrimley4352 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +21

    Yep. I like it. Maybe movie worthy. Thanks for sharing this with us.

  • @TheDuckface999
    @TheDuckface999 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +8

    Oh wow, such a great story and beautiful narration! 40 mins passed like 10 and I was definitely fully engaged. Amazingly done!

    • @TheDarkCosmos1
      @TheDarkCosmos1  6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

      Wow, thank you!

    • @TheKristianEros
      @TheKristianEros 5 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

      Thank you for the kind words! 😁

  • @PhilieBlunt666
    @PhilieBlunt666 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +28

    Tantrum? He was headed to get rid of his blue balls 🤣🤣

    • @TheDarkCosmos1
      @TheDarkCosmos1  6 หลายเดือนก่อน +11

      Michael was being professional about it :D

    • @PhilieBlunt666
      @PhilieBlunt666 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +4

      @@TheDarkCosmos1 lmfao, whoops 😆😏

    • @floydbaker2240
      @floydbaker2240 หลายเดือนก่อน

      ​@@TheDarkCosmos1"spasmodic, reciprocal hand gestures" :o

  • @sweatt4237
    @sweatt4237 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +12

    Best narrator yet, fine job. Fantastic story.

    • @TheKristianEros
      @TheKristianEros 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Thank you! That really means alot 😁

  • @Shadow.Dragon
    @Shadow.Dragon 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +5

    Great story! It would be interesting if a sequel exploring the reclamation of Earth. Would Homo Sapiens be able to live in peace with the evolved humans? Or would we fight each other till one side is wiped out?

    • @Allantitan
      @Allantitan 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Or would one of the 2 wind up like the Neanderthals?

  • @poormanintexas
    @poormanintexas 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +6

    That was a damn good story. Wish there was a part 2.

  • @matthewhummel1572
    @matthewhummel1572 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    Dang. That ending hit harder than I expected it to. Very well done!

  • @LGDV
    @LGDV 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +8

    Amazing story!!!! We need to know what happened in those 10 years :D

  • @EZurg
    @EZurg 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +6

    I like the speaker helmet voice do some more of those it's different than a lot of others and just get tired of hearing the same voice on all the same channels so thanks!!

    • @TheKristianEros
      @TheKristianEros 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

      I'm glad that you enjoyed it! The filter just made sense to me 😆

    • @EZurg
      @EZurg 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

      It was a great choice I would consider experimenting with other voice filters I'm not too sure any other channels do that

    • @floydbaker2240
      @floydbaker2240 หลายเดือนก่อน

      ​@@TheKristianErosit made it all feel like I was uncovering the story like in a video game. It really was a damn great choice.

  • @robertknell1949
    @robertknell1949 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    Great story Really hit home when he gave her proper burial

  • @LaQen25X
    @LaQen25X 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +10

    I was waiting for the part when he'd say he had a child with Eve, lol

    • @lyndellrobinson3611
      @lyndellrobinson3611 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

      😂

    • @deacondawg1416
      @deacondawg1416 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

      3 or 4 I thought

    • @nevasoba5953
      @nevasoba5953 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +4

      Me also. I thought she took him for that purpose.

    • @robertknell1949
      @robertknell1949 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +4

      I think he did. How else would he know how fast the babies grow?

    • @Dazecat11
      @Dazecat11 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

      @@robertknell1949 Would also say he would know those details from experience. After all getting closer to the other ones may be a death sentence.

  • @GeminiNight
    @GeminiNight 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +9

    This was great! Thank you.

  • @JosephKano
    @JosephKano 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +6

    Wait wait hang on, is this a real voice and not a speech to text? This sounds listenable too. There's so few actual voiced channels and most of the speech to text ones are simply not listenable. Please let this be real. It seems... Genuine. If it's fake it's a good one so far. None of the usual issues...

    • @TheDarkCosmos1
      @TheDarkCosmos1  6 หลายเดือนก่อน +4

      This is voiced by Kristian Eros, a highly talented voice actor!
      Fun fact: Theodore is our virtual narrator who tells our classic stories :)

    • @Mafyeux
      @Mafyeux 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

      @@TheDarkCosmos1 +1 for real people narrating, the subtleties can never be captured by AI.

    • @TheKristianEros
      @TheKristianEros 5 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

      ​@@MafyeuxI agree! Thank you for supporting human voices!

    • @floydbaker2240
      @floydbaker2240 หลายเดือนก่อน

      ​@@TheDarkCosmos1is Theodore the British sounding one? :o I thought that was just a normal guy...

  • @alantaylor353
    @alantaylor353 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +3

    OH... This is getting saved for bedtime tonight.!!! 👍 👍 👍

  • @Mrlegoking-uy3lv
    @Mrlegoking-uy3lv 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +3

    Love the sound effects

    • @TheKristianEros
      @TheKristianEros 5 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Thanks! I used 3 different fx libraries to find ones I liked 🤣🤣

  • @nevasoba5953
    @nevasoba5953 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +3

    Fantastic story. Great narration.

    • @TheKristianEros
      @TheKristianEros 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! 😁

  • @MsMtheory
    @MsMtheory 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    This one was FANTASTIC! Thank you so much!

  • @Beatlesfanize
    @Beatlesfanize 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +4

    WOW . I Just Found Your Channel After uploading a video. This is Fantastic!!!! very well Done! BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!!! GREAT JOB! Cheers.

    • @TheKristianEros
      @TheKristianEros 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

      Yay! Thank you for your kind words! I'm so glad you enjoyed it 😁

  • @lyndellrobinson3611
    @lyndellrobinson3611 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +3

    Excellent story and narration!

    • @TheKristianEros
      @TheKristianEros 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Yay! Thank you! 😁

  • @antarcticmoongiant2691
    @antarcticmoongiant2691 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +5

    Excellent

  • @lavuntecolquitt
    @lavuntecolquitt 4 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Excellent story and luv the progression.

    • @TheDarkCosmos1
      @TheDarkCosmos1  3 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Glad you enjoyed it!

  • @tammywagner8032
    @tammywagner8032 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +5

    Really good!

  • @labased2539
    @labased2539 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    Amazing story!!

  • @zachariahbarber5794
    @zachariahbarber5794 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +5

    Awsome Story

  • @AlexanderTheGreat1000
    @AlexanderTheGreat1000 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    This was 🔥

  • @axel4196
    @axel4196 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Damn good story. Loved it!

  • @jeremycollins09
    @jeremycollins09 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    Loved it!

  • @clubkabuki3414
    @clubkabuki3414 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +3

    Wonderful story!!!

  • @robertknell1949
    @robertknell1949 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    This would make a great short video for love, death and robots

  • @Cheshire5174
    @Cheshire5174 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    Spoilers below
    Damn... Honestly didnt expect Eve to die... Hit harder than I expected...

  • @Warlady_
    @Warlady_ 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Oh this was amazing 👏 ❤

  • @omaracevedo4784
    @omaracevedo4784 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Loved it. Sad fate of humanity

  • @juliemunoz2762
    @juliemunoz2762 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    Riveting story. thank you for sharing.

  • @rishabhsingh7106
    @rishabhsingh7106 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    If possible will like to have a part two ❤ was amazing story

  • @deacondawg1416
    @deacondawg1416 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    Good story. Thought he was gonna start a new line of humanoids. Smarter but sightly weaker.

  • @JohnSagin-SimViDeLucis579
    @JohnSagin-SimViDeLucis579 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +4

    Blown out the airlock, just as i had hoped.

  • @rogerallen1767
    @rogerallen1767 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    awesome

  • @mikescholz6429
    @mikescholz6429 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    Michael should start calling himself Prometheus

  • @eenabutter
    @eenabutter 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    WOW 👏

  • @horsetarget123
    @horsetarget123 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Great story

  • @robertcypress6604
    @robertcypress6604 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    I love the name Michael Newtown! Micheal the unwavering warrior of Christian fame. Newtown to grimly remind us of the lost hope this story is deliciously flavored with LoL!!!!

  • @leroymontoya1725
    @leroymontoya1725 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    good story

  • @Kojoanna
    @Kojoanna 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    A very good story, find more 🥰

  • @franciszekkowar3962
    @franciszekkowar3962 2 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Thanks

  • @user-lv9pz4mv7b
    @user-lv9pz4mv7b 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    This was 5 star you rule

  • @Airmanmx1
    @Airmanmx1 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    So many questions, what came of him? Did he make contact with other “natives”? Did he use his technological expertise to surpass and subsequently make peace with the “natives”? He should be able to have created metal tools from forges? So many questions!?!?

  • @simpeldisaster4533
    @simpeldisaster4533 9 วันที่ผ่านมา

    Kind of want a follow up but I really don't want to know want happened with him and Eve. Guess we kinda got an end thought.

  • @OShackHennessy
    @OShackHennessy 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Awesome narration

  • @user-vz5lc3ps3s
    @user-vz5lc3ps3s 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    😮dude u got kidnapped going to get lucky or maybe not good luck

  • @robertknell1949
    @robertknell1949 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    He knocked her up

  • @williamp3591
    @williamp3591 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    No way, the story ends here, bro

  • @BedlamBoy1978
    @BedlamBoy1978 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    The breathing was slightly annoying but the story was good.

  • @michaeljoseph9881
    @michaeljoseph9881 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Since the story you are on a radio there's a transmitter could've transpitted an emergency bacon and hopefully it would get to somebody within a couple. Of years.

  • @ancient-rhinowang6641
    @ancient-rhinowang6641 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    this would be a great video game

  • @nancyM1313-Boo
    @nancyM1313-Boo 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +4

    These are awesome stories
    Tyvmuch
    👻🗯boo!

  • @Itsalljustgonebad
    @Itsalljustgonebad 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Eve, man😭

  • @davidturner4824
    @davidturner4824 5 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Very sad story.

  • @theonechillbeing9317
    @theonechillbeing9317 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Well time to make arrows and spears including stone throwing slings.

  • @walterwhitaker1395
    @walterwhitaker1395 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    SOLID COPY! OVER AND OUT!

  • @GamingGridOfficial
    @GamingGridOfficial 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    This was a great story

  • @livetotell100
    @livetotell100 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    This happened 2 years ago. I guess we are all dead, or in a virtual reality. Good story otherwise.

  • @cindaschuster6725
    @cindaschuster6725 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    💙👍🏼

  • @thatrandomredengine9430
    @thatrandomredengine9430 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    How could Biden buy this a way into office twice? He’s only in his first term 😂
    Plus Biden bringing upon nuclear annihilation is funny because he would have accidentally hit the button while looking for his crack po- I mean his ice cream.

  • @potatoesorsomething
    @potatoesorsomething 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Damn thats so sad

  • @Vanilla_Neko
    @Vanilla_Neko 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Bro finally found the one way to get a puppy girl GF

  • @user-vz5lc3ps3s
    @user-vz5lc3ps3s 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    😮 were the f. .k is the captain all this time crsping his pants IAM sure

  • @josephwisniewski3673
    @josephwisniewski3673 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +2

    How was this "horror"?

  • @thebuddha4208
    @thebuddha4208 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    OK even if this story sucks this is a great title

  • @xochipili1
    @xochipili1 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Opened the hatch to go outside to releave herself?

  • @arthurchadwell9267
    @arthurchadwell9267 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Eve has herself a boyfriend!! 😂

  • @livetotell100
    @livetotell100 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    OK. This expedition to Earth had what? 5 people? And only 1 left now. He should have plenty of water, since he's only consuming. Plenty till evac gets there. Same with food. Still a good story though.

    • @mathewallen9813
      @mathewallen9813 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Bruh, did you listen to the whole thing? They aren’t evacuating him.

    • @livetotell100
      @livetotell100 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

      @@mathewallen9813 Right after the other members were killed the guy said he would be evacuated. And how he was running out of water. That was the plan. There was a designated pick up date. As long as they stayed in contact. BUT he never contacted them again. Never even tried to. So they never came. Even when he came back to the camp months later, he listened to a message that said since they had no contact, they are not coming for him and presumed dead.

  • @RevenantMain1
    @RevenantMain1 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    177013 💀
    I can’t be the only one that caught that reference

  • @patrickancona1193
    @patrickancona1193 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Relief from terminal TDS/PDS is possible, ask your doctor about Trumpitall!

  • @cal4111
    @cal4111 3 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Russia hasn't been Soviet for decades yet all of a sudden they have a Soviet moon base?

    • @floydbaker2240
      @floydbaker2240 หลายเดือนก่อน

      The Soviet Union had a sequel.

  • @syedarefinulbarkati6782
    @syedarefinulbarkati6782 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Who is the original author of this story?

    • @TheDarkCosmos1
      @TheDarkCosmos1  6 หลายเดือนก่อน

      I tried looking for it on reddit, but couldn't find it anymore

  • @Boogie_the_cat
    @Boogie_the_cat 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    OMFG. This is the first creepypasta story I've seen in my entire life that has a title that ISN'T in the first person.
    Damn. I may actually listen to this, simply because i refuse to listen to any other creepypasta because I'm so sick of the titles. Every single story has "my" or "I" in the title, an incredibly amatuer attempt to engage the reader and grab someone's attention. I'm so sick of that because all these authors of boring stories think that making them (and the titles of the stories) occur in the first person causes their crappy writing to sound compelling and interesting.
    And now, EVERYONE uses that incredibly annoying amateur trope, so there is no way to differentiate between the good stories thay simply are following a stale (but popular) formula for their titles, and the sh1tty stories that are following the same, stale, boring, same-y formula to try and hide their same-ness and sh1tty-ness.
    Its like, geez, just because creepypasta is amateur writing for "the everyman(or woman) it doesn't mean that every story has to be told i the first person in an incredibly boring and over-used attempt to engage the reader and make it "more interesting"
    I have given up on creepypasta, but i had to tap this video title, because it wasn't in the first person, like 99.7% of the rest of the "pastas"
    I may give this a listen tonight, but i wanted to come here first and thank you (and the holy lord god Yog Sothoth) for uploading a video of a story that does have a boring-ass, same-y title like: "I'm a monster hinter for the U.S. government, and then X (or Y, or Z) happened"
    So fvcking sick of those titles, i assumed nobody wrote pastas without that goddamn terrible naming convention.
    Praise your bravery, and i hope it will encourage other writers
    eaders to stop writing \ reading boring-ass titles like: "i stepped on a slug demon, here's how that went"
    Or: "i work at a ghost toilet factory, here are my worst encounters"
    Or, the always popular: "my imagination is so stale that i have to write in the first person in order to sound interesting. Here is my spooky shopping list. Isn't it spooky and boring and formulaic?"
    Or even: "I'm just a normal guy giving out really unoriginal prompts to AI algorithms, do you wanna read about spooky aliens putting probes in Whitley Striebers anus? Is that spooky? Okay, well, maybe the aliens are breeding us for FOOD! Soylent Green is people, man!"
    Or, the very original: "my ass was red and itchy, guess what fell out of it yesterday?"
    Etc, etc... until the end of days, amen.
    Goddamn, i haven't even listened to this story, yet i have hope for mankind's future now. I'm not fvcking joking. I swore off clicking on any more creepypasta after the hundredth video on my feed titled: "I'm an intern at a hospital for werewolf fetuses, here's what my Social Security 401 tax form looks like"
    I mean, haven't we all read enough about werewolf fetus pediatricians yet? No? There's still an audience for that dreck?
    BTW: i already tapped "like" to help you out fighting The One Who Will Not Be Named (YT algorithm). We need more stories like this, to prove to budding A.I. writers that not EVERYFVCKINGTHING needs to be in the first person, at least not the title of the goddamn story.
    Oh yeah, i subbed as well, sonce there is a decent chance that you may have been born in order to do battle with the antichrist (YT's algorithm).

    • @TheDarkCosmos1
      @TheDarkCosmos1  6 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Welcome to our cosmic community!

  • @rbeckmal
    @rbeckmal 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Damn tds lol he is a Russian plant, but the Russians for some reason are gonna go to war against him 😂

  • @weddellseal8414
    @weddellseal8414 หลายเดือนก่อน

    he didnt get the alienussy ?!

  • @cadebritt8001
    @cadebritt8001 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    I think this will change.

  • @StickySyrupEverywhere
    @StickySyrupEverywhere 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    This is stupid. Carbon levels? A womanizing captain, picked from a very small remaining population of humans based on criteria which would no longer have any meaning?

  • @geneaddleman4144
    @geneaddleman4144 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    I need to know one thing....did the russkys win?

  • @demigod_inc
    @demigod_inc 6 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    Off world for 2000 yrs and going to reexplore? So evolution studies died too huh? Like damn. He sounds like Misha Collins and he hits a sign for BW😂

  • @cadebritt8001
    @cadebritt8001 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    It's not going anywhere.

  • @denm8822
    @denm8822 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Это вам мозги промыли, у нас то все в порядке

  • @thebuddha4208
    @thebuddha4208 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    OK this is weird

  • @churlish7851
    @churlish7851 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Wack

  • @errantintent
    @errantintent 3 หลายเดือนก่อน

    The manner of speech is awkward and a bit unnatural. This is why you do multiple drafts...

    • @errantintent
      @errantintent 3 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Additionally, the descriptive parts were very out of touch with how people actually talk, and there was a lot of awkward repetition of phrases and words close together that also isnt how people talk. With the normal short stories, it wouldn't be so bad, but this entire one was supposed to be all spoken aloud.

    • @i_eat_soap792
      @i_eat_soap792 3 หลายเดือนก่อน

      @@errantintent Not everyone is going for realism, especially in scifi where you’re almost expected to make characters that are completely unique.I didn’t find any of these criticisms to impede from enjoying the story and based off all the praise he got I’d say he did a good job.

    • @errantintent
      @errantintent 3 หลายเดือนก่อน

      @@i_eat_soap792 you have not understood what I'm saying. Listen again to the part where the fight gets described. It's written like narrative prose, not speech. No one talks like that. There is an expected level of realism when it comes to believable monologue/dialogue, whether you're writing sci-fi or any other genre. I'm a writer myself, and a critiquer. I'm good enough to get paid for it. I know what I'm talking about.

    • @TheDarkCosmos1
      @TheDarkCosmos1  3 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Thanks for tuning in! If the writer comes across your feedback, I'm sure they'll take it into account!

    • @errantintent
      @errantintent 3 หลายเดือนก่อน

      ​@@TheDarkCosmos1I'm not sure how much you guys directly work with the writers, but I'd love to offer my services to help improve the quality. I can even do a few for free as a test run.

  • @chaddts
    @chaddts 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    This sounds like it was written by some women guy who never worked a day I'm theor life nor paid a single bill.
    Totally self insert, and they even describe themselves as some idealized version throughout the entire beginning.😂