This rewrite is a lot more interesting than the original comic especially the relationship with Starfire and Mandy. I wish Mandy wasn’t an unlikeable character in the comic.
Same, as well as how the book seems to just reward her, in spite of things she does like how she would gaslight Claire, or her attitude to Kory without even just talking to her.
This was a lot better than the original comic! This had the mother daughter relationship wrapped up good and actually made the main character an actual human rather than a loser. You did a wonderful job!
I will freely admit that I did not read the comic and only know about the things that happen in it by reputation. However, I think you did a really good job of creating better conflict and build up within the story. The idea of Blackfire not just suddenly appearing to force the fight between herself and Mandy, but rather slowly gaining Mandy's trust and more information before springing a trap to force Starfire to fight as a way to force down dissidents within Blackfire's empire makes a lot more sense to me. You also did a much better job forming the strained familial relationship between Starfire and Mandy, where in the original Mandy seemed to barely have any love for her mother, based on the snappish comments and scowls Mandy seemed to constantly throw at her mom. I also liked the art you made for this rewrite. It was really cute and still gave Mandy a more stout appearance while still looking appealing.
Honestly, this looks much better then the original comic! I which they could have done something better with the story including the relationship between Mandy and her mother. That would been an interesting comic, but to bad that this comic got alot of hate from fans. You did a fantastic job on this!
This is like.. a thousand times better than the comic itself, and your art style is just pleasing to look at! Nothing out of the ordinary, but executed well with very well drawn out scenes that fit the dialogue being told! 9/10!
Oh there's need to be a part 2 for this. I wanna see how her new status affect her last year of high school now. This is what the story should had been
That's an interesting idea. 🤔 I'll have to sit on that. This is one of my better performing videos. Thanks for bring this to my attention, I'll give it some serious thought 😉
It looks like Mariko Tamaki, the author of I am not Starfire, inserted herself as Mandy Korland'r into the comics to vent about something from her real life. Another SJW with an pc attitude. When are these comic book companies going to learn that this type of thing is costing them a lot of money and that's not going to stop. Comics and related media is not the place for there SJW agendas.Wasn't Raven considered Goth or at least Goth like, why do they need another goth girl?No wonder why DC turned off the comments right off the bat
I agree with some comments your rewrite is interesting, however the girl on girl romance could get some tweaking. I personally berfer a action pack gunslinger so that derpament is in the air.
I agree. That is probably my biggest regret of this rewrite, is that I didn't really give any attention to the romance within the rewrite. If i was to go back to this story, I'd definitely put more effort in that department.
So when it take Mindy join the army she did very well she passed all the tests with flying colors because don't forget if she's a warrior a daughter from a warrior race she would join the army what she do she did so well and she like I'm not Starfire you seen medals and honors of sniper School her her marksmanships and even the high marks and marksmanship and as a law enforcement officer and she's one of the toughest like cops they color super cop or Supergirl or something like that she has a nickname she's like the criminals are afraid of her pretty much and of course she is Starfire's Starfire's daughter so you can imagine the treatment she's like royalty and she's really really think like Achilles but I think Ellen Page playing her will be so cool she can play this character that's confident but a little unsure of herself as well I sure she's a good actor and playing a police officer who's the edge more stronger than the average human but not as powerful as her mother she's trying to put herself in more dangerous situations so she can activate her powers so her powers could be initiated so and the thing is doing an unintentionally she put her former non power police officer comrades in risk that can make him interesting character and she's so she said she call herself very self-focused but somebody say you know you're really selfish for doing that I can make a very interesting very complex character
If Mandy could actually is really good with firearms I mean she's actually really good with directive energy weapons hand demonstrate this show her blasting a whole bunch of targets when she's frustrated let's just say she could take a 9 mm pistol emptied at home magazine and get all perfect groupings and she can take a plasma pistol and do the same thing and a being weapon and do the same thing because she's never strong so she's proficient with handhold weapons like sores or anything directed weapons and firearms she's really good at that what's the Mandy could take a 9 mm Glock apart and repair it and fix it in fact she actually helped Jim Gordon or police officer with his firearm and she fixed it it was a trainees just that she's just so good with them she's almost a really she's like a treaty for being a firearm a firearm Smith she's really good at that but the reason why she's so good because her adopted Uncle who's the Red Hood right is a master user of firearms so she became very good user of firearms blasters and all sorts of other weapons but she do not have powers Uncle Bruce didn't have powers so I traded all sorts of martial arts she just kind of things when she's sort of frustrated but she don't take her frustration on anybody else but you know pretty interesting because a couple of characters I still don't want to mess with you
Her lack of powers when it make her very efficient with firearms and other hand hold weapons such as directivity-based weapons and she knows firms lasers at any type of weapons available in DC universe for the index and out she knows how to work them out she understands them don't forget Mandy's Uncle art grandfather's Bruce Wayne she's around a lot of cops she want to be a police officer and she was thinking about being a cop I mean she can because she's half temporary she can know a lot about a person much more sharper than most cops would say she's a darn good one actually I mean think about it if your mother is a alien species think what kind of cop you would be even though you don't have nearly as powerful as she is she's more powerful than most of the human police officers and she can believe the police trials like she's let's make her more of a health nut but she can kick box she can like you do not really want to fight her she can kick your butt even though she's not exactly fully healthy she's maybe I'm not going to say she's really fat fat but she's how can I say chubby but she's not as good looking as her mother she don't think so herself as good looking at her mother she want to be her mother but you know she say I could be a cop this is my way of the trembling even though I don't have a lot of powers and she's in she's still in high school so she's in like their police like training program I don't think they training firearms in that operation but I don't know I don't know how that part of that kind of works so if you a cop you can in law enforcement you can help me with that I think I have some ideas but I don't know how we're right they are but it would make it very interesting storyline you have a person who don't have a lot of super super powers and born to a superpowered parent who's in law enforcement agency and the cops you know can I treat her not like they don't treat her bad or anything but she just don't want no special treatment it's kind of
This rewrite is a lot more interesting than the original comic especially the relationship with Starfire and Mandy. I wish Mandy wasn’t an unlikeable character in the comic.
Same, as well as how the book seems to just reward her, in spite of things she does like how she would gaslight Claire, or her attitude to Kory without even just talking to her.
This was a lot better than the original comic! This had the mother daughter relationship wrapped up good and actually made the main character an actual human rather than a loser. You did a wonderful job!
I will freely admit that I did not read the comic and only know about the things that happen in it by reputation. However, I think you did a really good job of creating better conflict and build up within the story. The idea of Blackfire not just suddenly appearing to force the fight between herself and Mandy, but rather slowly gaining Mandy's trust and more information before springing a trap to force Starfire to fight as a way to force down dissidents within Blackfire's empire makes a lot more sense to me. You also did a much better job forming the strained familial relationship between Starfire and Mandy, where in the original Mandy seemed to barely have any love for her mother, based on the snappish comments and scowls Mandy seemed to constantly throw at her mom. I also liked the art you made for this rewrite. It was really cute and still gave Mandy a more stout appearance while still looking appealing.
If this was what the comic was, then i definitely would have read it. Awesome work, and thank you for posting!
Honestly, this looks much better then the original comic! I which they could have done something better with the story including the relationship between Mandy and her mother. That would been an interesting comic, but to bad that this comic got alot of hate from fans. You did a fantastic job on this!
This is like.. a thousand times better than the comic itself, and your art style is just pleasing to look at! Nothing out of the ordinary, but executed well with very well drawn out scenes that fit the dialogue being told! 9/10!
This is how the comic should have gone. You did a great job. ♥️
oh my god this rewrite is so good i would buy this
this is so much better than the comic given this was actually good and thought out
This is better than the Original 💖✨
Oh there's need to be a part 2 for this. I wanna see how her new status affect her last year of high school now. This is what the story should had been
Are you saying you want a sequel to the video or the original comic?
@@KAB2991 video.
That's an interesting idea. 🤔 I'll have to sit on that. This is one of my better performing videos. Thanks for bring this to my attention, I'll give it some serious thought 😉
It looks like Mariko Tamaki, the author of I am not Starfire, inserted herself as Mandy Korland'r into the comics to vent about something from her real life. Another SJW with an pc attitude. When are these comic book companies going to learn that this type of thing is costing them a lot of money and that's not going to stop. Comics and related media is not the place for there SJW agendas.Wasn't Raven considered Goth or at least Goth like, why do they need another goth girl?No wonder why DC turned off the comments right off the bat
I just feel Mandy's design was meant to be a rebellious thing just because of "teenage drama" or some crap like that.
This is more likeable 🙏 good job
Thank you. Glad you liked it ☺
My first time watching one of your videos and you have earned my subscription
Did Blackfire seriously forget about her baby brother?
I don’t think he existed
@@redrasegarden Of course he does. Darkfire.
@@jedyoung767 but I think this is based off of the animated teen titans and he wasn’t in that.
This is my first Fixing Video that has reached 1k views. Thank you, all of you for taking time to watching this video. I appreciate it.
I agree with some comments your rewrite is interesting, however the girl on girl romance could get some tweaking.
I personally berfer a action pack gunslinger so that derpament is in the air.
I agree. That is probably my biggest regret of this rewrite, is that I didn't really give any attention to the romance within the rewrite. If i was to go back to this story, I'd definitely put more effort in that department.
@@KAB2991 I know it would be better if Mandy didn't come off like she was gaslighting Claire out of jealousy or whatever and felt more natural.
So when it take Mindy join the army she did very well she passed all the tests with flying colors because don't forget if she's a warrior a daughter from a warrior race she would join the army what she do she did so well and she like I'm not Starfire you seen medals and honors of sniper School her her marksmanships and even the high marks and marksmanship and as a law enforcement officer and she's one of the toughest like cops they color super cop or Supergirl or something like that she has a nickname she's like the criminals are afraid of her pretty much and of course she is Starfire's Starfire's daughter so you can imagine the treatment she's like royalty and she's really really think like Achilles but I think Ellen Page playing her will be so cool she can play this character that's confident but a little unsure of herself as well I sure she's a good actor and playing a police officer who's the edge more stronger than the average human but not as powerful as her mother she's trying to put herself in more dangerous situations so she can activate her powers so her powers could be initiated so and the thing is doing an unintentionally she put her former non power police officer comrades in risk that can make him interesting character and she's so she said she call herself very self-focused but somebody say you know you're really selfish for doing that I can make a very interesting very complex character
I have a Death Note fanfiction and my Death Note OC is A LOT more likable than she is ^_^
If Mandy could actually is really good with firearms I mean she's actually really good with directive energy weapons hand demonstrate this show her blasting a whole bunch of targets when she's frustrated let's just say she could take a 9 mm pistol emptied at home magazine and get all perfect groupings and she can take a plasma pistol and do the same thing and a being weapon and do the same thing because she's never strong so she's proficient with handhold weapons like sores or anything directed weapons and firearms she's really good at that what's the Mandy could take a 9 mm Glock apart and repair it and fix it in fact she actually helped Jim Gordon or police officer with his firearm and she fixed it it was a trainees just that she's just so good with them she's almost a really she's like a treaty for being a firearm a firearm Smith she's really good at that but the reason why she's so good because her adopted Uncle who's the Red Hood right is a master user of firearms so she became very good user of firearms blasters and all sorts of other weapons but she do not have powers Uncle Bruce didn't have powers so I traded all sorts of martial arts she just kind of things when she's sort of frustrated but she don't take her frustration on anybody else but you know pretty interesting because a couple of characters I still don't want to mess with you
Her lack of powers when it make her very efficient with firearms and other hand hold weapons such as directivity-based weapons and she knows firms lasers at any type of weapons available in DC universe for the index and out she knows how to work them out she understands them don't forget Mandy's Uncle art grandfather's Bruce Wayne she's around a lot of cops she want to be a police officer and she was thinking about being a cop I mean she can because she's half temporary she can know a lot about a person much more sharper than most cops would say she's a darn good one actually I mean think about it if your mother is a alien species think what kind of cop you would be even though you don't have nearly as powerful as she is she's more powerful than most of the human police officers and she can believe the police trials like she's let's make her more of a health nut but she can kick box she can like you do not really want to fight her she can kick your butt even though she's not exactly fully healthy she's maybe I'm not going to say she's really fat fat but she's how can I say chubby but she's not as good looking as her mother she don't think so herself as good looking at her mother she want to be her mother but you know she say I could be a cop this is my way of the trembling even though I don't have a lot of powers and she's in she's still in high school so she's in like their police like training program I don't think they training firearms in that operation but I don't know I don't know how that part of that kind of works so if you a cop you can in law enforcement you can help me with that I think I have some ideas but I don't know how we're right they are but it would make it very interesting storyline you have a person who don't have a lot of super super powers and born to a superpowered parent who's in law enforcement agency and the cops you know can I treat her not like they don't treat her bad or anything but she just don't want no special treatment it's kind of
Love this rewrite