The Three Elements of Poetry: how to write better poetry

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  • @chrysalis72
    @chrysalis72 3 ปีที่แล้ว +123

    I thought of him last night
    Underneath the starlight
    The moon lit up the darkness and whispered of distance
    The wind heard my heart and the silence was a song
    I wondered for a time,
    as i stood alone

    • @shad0w7x56
      @shad0w7x56 3 ปีที่แล้ว +5

      👏👏👏

    • @chrysalis72
      @chrysalis72 3 ปีที่แล้ว +4

      Thanks, I felt this as I wrote it.

    • @shad0w7x56
      @shad0w7x56 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      @@chrysalis72 no problem, I enjoyed reading it👍🏾

    • @ryanpendley1826
      @ryanpendley1826 3 ปีที่แล้ว +4

      Here's something I came up about my lady..
      PROMISE
      ---------------
      I promise to love you, it's my favorite duty of life
      to cherish you,
      I love your silliness,
      Your googly eye pictures makes me laugh,
      You know we're some dorks
      Please dont get me on your smile it's my
      Kryptonite that warms the soul
      The duty of me being your man is to make us
      happy,
      I may not be good at spilling my guts
      But this is who I am letting you know that there
      is nobody else in this world that compares to
      you,
      It's crazy you're the only person that's 24/7 on
      my mind, and that's a sincere thought no lie,
      You consume me,
      I love your nakedness
      That's my everything and
      Being naked is pretty funny,
      And funny is what I want to be!!
      So to my better half
      Let's laugh!!
      Take this rib, ouch;
      It's okay if I'm in pain
      I love you
      Maybe I try to hard
      I just want to be myself with you.
      Maybe I don't think you accept me?
      Butchya do!
      I hear the rhythm of our heart beating as one
      Take my hand let go and let God!
      Speaking in tongues of the Angels
      Hallelujah!
      Love has won!
      Writer
      Ryan K Pendley

    • @chrysalis72
      @chrysalis72 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      @@ryanpendley1826 it's beautiful xx very very lucky ladyx💞💞💞💞💞

  • @rex376
    @rex376 4 ปีที่แล้ว +152

    Wow. I am trying to write poetry and this is SO GOOD. though he [probably] won’t see this

    • @ReadWhiteBlues
      @ReadWhiteBlues 4 ปีที่แล้ว +5

      Well he's definitely helping me

    • @ethanmoyo4890
      @ethanmoyo4890 4 ปีที่แล้ว +5

      nice try but he ain't gonna see your coment

    • @nicewater894
      @nicewater894 4 ปีที่แล้ว +8

      @@ethanmoyo4890 NOTICE ME SENPAAIIIII!!!!!!

    • @saraicg_9319
      @saraicg_9319 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      He didn't

  • @roshmillares4470
    @roshmillares4470 3 ปีที่แล้ว +48

    I hope someday I could be trained to improve my writing more. I'm 19 and I wish to become a known poet someday.
    ....
    Drove together under the amber skies
    Rode forever in the heavy anchor of ceaseless cries
    Two gray Octobers passed, I'm still sobbing
    In the lonely room where you've left your underbone king
    My mind still recalls, a lucid image of unrivaled agony
    I was just seventeen since every autumn
    became a great misery
    Woke up at five, Kuya tellin' me that you're gone
    Wishing I was still asleep at that cruel dawn
    I ran downstairs, then I spotted
    Their cheeks are wet, their eyes are puffy and red
    Screaming and begging them to tell me "it's just a dream"
    as I fell to the ground and threw everything I held
    Unfortunate fate,
    You never witnessed me graduate
    Heaven took you so early
    before I could let you meet Valentino Rossi
    Decades of seasons will still feel like yesterday
    A great father like you has a special place in my heart to stay
    The world might had only given you 46 years to exist
    But your unconditional love and care will be eternally missed
    (it's a poem that I've wrote as a tribute to my dad who passed away 2yrs ago)

  • @brilliantwriter4856
    @brilliantwriter4856 5 ปีที่แล้ว +152

    I needed this, I'm creative I just need structure

    • @fsb-micro9897
      @fsb-micro9897 5 ปีที่แล้ว +24

      adhd people be like: im creative/smart i just need structure lol i felt that

    • @brilliantwriter4856
      @brilliantwriter4856 5 ปีที่แล้ว +6

      @@fsb-micro9897 I have adhd. Weird

    • @fsb-micro9897
      @fsb-micro9897 5 ปีที่แล้ว +4

      Me too lol ths how i know

    • @brilliantwriter4856
      @brilliantwriter4856 5 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      @@fsb-micro9897 cool

    • @ibeanzz
      @ibeanzz 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      I don't have adhd but Ive never related more

  • @leahgodson2319
    @leahgodson2319 5 ปีที่แล้ว +15

    • Sound - alliteration, consonance, assonance, rhyme, onomatopoeia
    • Meaning - denotation, connotation, imagery, irony, ambiguity
    • Structure - stanzas, line length, enjambment, rhythm/meter, typography
    Great lesson; thank you.

  • @tsyasemakun6123
    @tsyasemakun6123 7 ปีที่แล้ว +169

    SOUND
    MEANING
    STRUCTURE

  • @sushreenandini7057
    @sushreenandini7057 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Writing it as on 24 JAN 24'
    Im a 15 y/o 9th grader and i started Writing poems few months back and this is the first poem that I've written in the form of sonnet:)
    I was looking at the ceiling
    Pondering if i was healing
    Many storms came out of the blue
    And i was left having no clue
    Life is like hills and valleys for sure
    Its never going to smooth and pure
    In the road of life,much bends are there
    But we must mend our garden with love, sympathy and care
    In the tapestry of life
    There's a lot ups and downs
    But we should always have a smile on face just like a clown
    In the tapestry of life,there's much to endure
    There's alot ups and downs but
    It will take sometime to cure

  • @tinkernel2534
    @tinkernel2534 8 ปีที่แล้ว +194

    a good poet follow their hearts not the rules..
    in order to have a good poem, break the rules in poetry..

    • @chimpinaneckbrace
      @chimpinaneckbrace 8 ปีที่แล้ว +161

      In order to break the rules you have to know what they are. People who just want to "follow their hearts" are usually just too lazy to learn the rules in the first place.

    • @sk8kingz904
      @sk8kingz904 7 ปีที่แล้ว +12

      Yuri there are no rules since when was there a rule book?

    • @UbiquitousCthulhu
      @UbiquitousCthulhu 7 ปีที่แล้ว +14

      since human beings began observing, describing, recording, and reflecting on patterns in nature. none of the innumerable texts (verily obtainable on amazon) should represent infallible guidance to perfect poetry, but varying perspectives from people who concern themselves enough with the subject to get the idea to turn that concern into a book or something (not to say anything about the range of value different perspectives can have)

    • @acoolcat8160
      @acoolcat8160 7 ปีที่แล้ว +17

      Tinker Nel you have to know the rules to break them.

    • @AHSears
      @AHSears 6 ปีที่แล้ว +34

      Tinker Nel, .....
      A good poet follows his heart, but a better poet uses everything at his disposal, including and especially his head.

  • @geoffreytester3815
    @geoffreytester3815 5 ปีที่แล้ว +63

    A quote from the book thief “if your eyes could talk what would they say”
    Don’t write what thing is but what it represents to you
    I was always inspired more by the metaphysical style of writing as it’s adds grace intelligence and is very thought provoking.
    It opens limitless ideas as anything can be a metaphor for something else.
    Also has different meaning to each person making it more relatable to there own life’s with out making it a pity party
    That’s not to say that standard literal worded songs (or in this context poems ) don’t have there place depending on how there written.
    The flaw is there very limiting.
    Also I have heard songs that actually rhyme very little.
    The soul destroying thing as a lyricist is that people focus more on the melody but couldn’t careless about the words

  • @zero_bf
    @zero_bf 5 ปีที่แล้ว +98

    his shirt says "Just ate"

    • @aaronpoems7755
      @aaronpoems7755 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      In what language?

    • @zero_bf
      @zero_bf 4 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      @@aaronpoems7755 Indonesian

    • @aaronpoems7755
      @aaronpoems7755 4 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      @@zero_bf Thanks.

    • @zero_bf
      @zero_bf 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      @@aaronpoems7755 yeah man

    • @ussrcommunism5797
      @ussrcommunism5797 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      @Ezran Brider it's Malay but ok

  • @hippolyte5248
    @hippolyte5248 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I've been searching this for way too long. Searching writing fundamentals or what's a poetry. And this guy dud it. Thanks. A. Lot.

  • @gumbochamp
    @gumbochamp 4 ปีที่แล้ว +16

    All of this really needs visual and read examples. As a beginner it’s too abstract

  • @meenakarmeesh
    @meenakarmeesh 8 ปีที่แล้ว +17

    a true poet realizes that it is not about length of the poem it is figuring out, what is truly necessary to keep, and discard without weakening the pleasure and meaning depth. I am recluse possibly savant poet, as I been told. I grasped every lesson without trouble. I received a stipend at just 25, as a featured poet. In my private coaching my students learn the basic rules for poetry and beginning, without that what you are saying they can not grasp. there is a golden rule for dorm in poetry, there's a golden rule for subject selection....etc.

  • @JHong270
    @JHong270 6 ปีที่แล้ว +6

    You know what is the meaning of the words printed on your shirt?”Sudah makan” stands for “eaten” in Malay language...haha,btw a great explaination on how to write a poem.I write in mandarin

  • @mymusicnotebookkc2108
    @mymusicnotebookkc2108 6 ปีที่แล้ว +113

    Happiness of sausage brought me here.

    • @davilanda2979
      @davilanda2979 5 ปีที่แล้ว +5

      MyMusicNoteBook KC sausage of happiness 😂

    • @annaz2349
      @annaz2349 5 ปีที่แล้ว

      Ha

    • @beanpod2361
      @beanpod2361 5 ปีที่แล้ว

      ME TOO 🤣🤣

    • @ghalaalenazi9803
      @ghalaalenazi9803 4 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      Haha, me too. I already wrote poetry, just wondering whether I missed anything since I learnt it myself, with no internet

    • @18capricorn88
      @18capricorn88 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      lovely Nightcore -3- best way to do it 👻

  • @sarwechdahri5427
    @sarwechdahri5427 6 ปีที่แล้ว +19

    This is my first writing. plz give some suggestion in order to improve....
    Hey Chocolaty Chashmish
    The way you read, I only see
    The way you walk, I only see
    The way you stare, my heart races
    The way you blush, I have a crush.
    Hey Chocolaty Chashmish
    Your presence in CL, makes me pleasent
    Your entry in huts, alas! makes me hush
    Your glasses, oh my goodness makes me fly
    Your wrist with bracelet while holding a book, Ah! makes me complete.
    But!
    Ohh Chocoloty Chashmish
    You are princess of Punjab, I am the slave of Sindh
    You are topper of IR, I am hectered by History
    You analyze present, while I imagine past
    You are post modernest, I am still stuck with Marxism
    You read critique of George Orwell,
    I still love Stalin
    You are breeze of spring where cold wind breathes out its chill,
    I am shattered soul of autumn where leaves are falling all around.
    Thats why,
    Ohh Chocoloty Chashmish
    I Get away, I let away
    All my feelings
    All my love
    All my wishes
    All my desires
    and
    I take away, I make away
    All the pain
    All the sorrow
    All the grief
    All the regrets
    Though
    My heart aches
    My blood boils
    My soul suffers
    My body burns
    But ohh Chocoloty Chashmish
    I bear when you are near my Raqib.

    • @nimohahmed8314
      @nimohahmed8314 5 ปีที่แล้ว

      Gotta say its beautiful....wow

    • @hetalraval8248
      @hetalraval8248 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      This is beautiful ❤️😊

    • @JOB-bz6wd
      @JOB-bz6wd 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      Is she on a pedestal still

    • @SaraKhan-fb6xl
      @SaraKhan-fb6xl 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      Man! You have talent

    • @autumnserene20
      @autumnserene20 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      im a beginner poet so i don’t know if this means anything to you, but i love it! it was really fun to read :)

  • @xamo8767
    @xamo8767 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Weeks come by fast but end slow
    Am i truly who I am, the person everybody knows
    When i see her my mind stops
    I cant think but when she leaves she makes my body wanna drop
    Another disappointment of me and for my homies
    Will i ever get the courage or will I end up lonely
    I don't know how to fix a problem i aint facin face to face
    If i don't make my move somebodies gonna take my place
    Ain't nothin stoppin me, just my cowardness
    I don't feel like a man i feel powerless
    Excuses made, games played in my mind
    Im my worst enemy i'm running out of time
    When i eyes saw her my body Froze
    Overthinking my words trying to unload
    My spoken words
    I don't know what scares me or why I stop
    Another missed chance makes me wanna plop
    So many opportunities when will I change
    I dont know why I couldt even say her name
    I know I got what it takes, Thats why it bothers me
    Was it the absence years of my male figure my father see
    I wonder when I walk by
    Can she see in my eyes
    The strong hesitation
    Am i faking my daringness or my determination
    My homies try to help me but am i hopeless?
    Nobody laugh at my words I’ve spoken
    Frozen, Disappointed, and Lost

  • @rievans57
    @rievans57 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    Sound, meaning, and structure. That pretty much sums it up.

  • @BereanBeliever86
    @BereanBeliever86 5 ปีที่แล้ว +12

    That pen touching my skin would drive me nuts.

  • @John-iy5bf
    @John-iy5bf 9 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    Thanks for posting this video. I've been writing for years with no instruction outside of high school, which was many years ago. I did go through college, but never pursued writing. Maybe I should have. Thanks again.
    John

    • @poesho
      @poesho  9 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      The college track of writing can provide solid and tested methods for writers, but it can get really insular, academic, or just lead to a whole bunch of writers working from the same playbook. Ultimately, reading widely and thinking analytically about how the things that move you work, and what parts you can emulate or modify is the key (in my opinion). Keep up the writing :)

    • @poesho
      @poesho  9 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      The college track of writing can provide solid and tested methods for writers, but it can get really insular, academic, or just lead to a whole bunch of writers working from the same playbook. Ultimately, reading widely and thinking analytically about how the things that move you work, and what parts you can emulate or modify is the key (in my opinion). Keep up the writing :)

  • @dave45032
    @dave45032 8 ปีที่แล้ว +73

    What I'm having trouble on is that I feel like I'm going in circles and writing the same thing over and over again.
    Initially, rhyming and meter came naturally to me. The words just came easily as I tried to describe my thoughts.
    However, as I kept writing about the same themes (like sadness) but in different lenses, I found that I reverted to the same vocabulary again and again for rhyming.
    Either it is that I do not have a wide range of vocabulary or that I have exhausted the theme and need to move on to something else.
    While I now use a thesaurus to deal with the first possibility, I know that it is a short term solution to a long term problem. Hence, I resolved to learn more words. However, if it is the second possibility, I need some help.
    Should I keep trying or should I simply move on to other themes if I find that I just have a hard time getting out fresh ideas?
    I think that I may have to just move on, but here is my primal issue: should I release my works now or when the season is right?
    Basically, last winter, I've written some poems that described that dreary mood most people have during those times. However, since that has now passed a bit, I'm not sure if publishing those poems now that it is sunnier will be detrimental to their acceptance. I find myself also writing more active and bolder poems now that the sun is out more.
    What do you think?
    tldr: Should I move on to other themes if I feel like I milked all I can out of a certain one? Should I publish my poems according to the season?

    • @poesho
      @poesho  8 ปีที่แล้ว +7

      +OnlineNamesAreStrange I find experimenting with different forms helps me revisit familiar themes in new ways, maybe try that?

    • @dave45032
      @dave45032 8 ปีที่แล้ว +9

      Poetry Show
      Oh wow, went to look up the forms of poetry and there are a lot of exciting ones to try!
      I was always afraid to learn more about poetic styles because I felt like doing so would remove the authenticity of my style because I would try and emulate them, but I'm not worried about that anymore :)
      One's style always comes out in the end after all...

    • @meenakarmeesh
      @meenakarmeesh 8 ปีที่แล้ว

      if u are interested in private poetry coaching, please contact me. I can fix that. there is a major problem I can pretty much guess you are doing.

    • @dave45032
      @dave45032 8 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      Victoria Hunter
      Thanks for the offer, but I've decided to just learn through trial and error. :)

    • @TheTrainSideGraffiti-x5n
      @TheTrainSideGraffiti-x5n 8 ปีที่แล้ว +6

      My recommendation.. read, read, read.... books, poetry, essays, critiques.

  • @joeroganconnoisseur7364
    @joeroganconnoisseur7364 8 ปีที่แล้ว +5

    I found this useful, a base for building strong core of poetry.

  • @ijeomaabbas3019
    @ijeomaabbas3019 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Thank you for the lectures, this will be helpful

  • @y_ffordd
    @y_ffordd 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    Thanks for this, it gave an outline of the process, now I can see why I struggled at times, damned structure. So I forget structure and edit like there is no tomorrow, here are some words as some kind of reward.
    The youth has gone the edge has vanished
    After 50 years your energys famished
    Walk in twilight now that your banished

  • @lalijiwo7907
    @lalijiwo7907 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    I do agree the three are basics. But, still, those are like 'grenade' in my head.

  • @seeDiersoilcrossrowds
    @seeDiersoilcrossrowds 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    A metaphorical comparison of an artist and a poet.( Unnamed & not complete)
    *
    *
    The letters in your words are like the poet's palette of colors.
    Your mind is a bank that holds the work which is your treasure.
    Use personality that you own to construct such beauty built in.
    Your vocabulary becomes your tools and supplies.
    Technique only guesses how the imagination expresses.
    Talent is really a reflection of ones own experience.
    Will and motivation balances detail and depth.
    More emotion create a far greater skill.
    With just your eyes, the crowd hushes.
    Mental hands are your brushes.
    To recite brings so much of a thrill.
    For I'm sure you know,
    nothing more you need for your show
    but a mind that's a picture of health.
    Except the whole of your life in itself.

  • @TheMAU5SoundsLikThis
    @TheMAU5SoundsLikThis 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Where are the vids on these 3 categories?

  • @zeynepalms6108
    @zeynepalms6108 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Love this video and the picture in the back!

  • @hazel-jadevasiri362
    @hazel-jadevasiri362 8 ปีที่แล้ว +18

    actually the most helpful poetry vid ive watched. and you're aussie!

  • @paulapoetry
    @paulapoetry 6 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    Great video - excellent overview. I look forward to watching more of the videos on this channel, and hope you will upload more. I love poetry. 😃👍💝

  • @doublemcoop
    @doublemcoop 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    The life that I live is already wroten, liven in hell is it already chosen
    As time will tell my life been spoken, as misery draws I feel its potent
    Cant stop this feeling from feeling broken, but moving on is what I chosen
    Im sorry mom what I say is deep, You gave me life I know not cheap
    My soul is old its rotten now, may go back home into the ground
    The Frankenstein I feel thats right the Duke is out hope I fight.

  • @ikun-ge3rr
    @ikun-ge3rr 7 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Thx Mr Bates it is a very good session today, I understand poems much better now :)

  • @aaronpoems7755
    @aaronpoems7755 4 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    A lot of good tips here. Thank you for sharing!

    • @msrainbowmoonfire1802
      @msrainbowmoonfire1802 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      Hi.I just started my spoken poetry TH-cam channel. Feel free to subscribe by clicking the link below:
      th-cam.com/channels/UI7EFtj-JDE4F06BDnGkMA.html

  • @poem_kym9406
    @poem_kym9406 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    New subscriber! ~ Not long set out on my poetry writing journey ... & so much to learn on the way, can't wait 🤓🖋

    • @AdamGaryPoetry
      @AdamGaryPoetry 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Best of luck on your journey, friend!

    • @poem_kym9406
      @poem_kym9406 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Adam Gary Poetry Thank You..... think I’m becoming addicted!!

    • @AdamGaryPoetry
      @AdamGaryPoetry 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      @@poem_kym9406 you'll be great!

    • @poem_kym9406
      @poem_kym9406 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Adam Gary Poetry Thanks for your confidence! I’m pouring my heart & soul into each poem..... 💗
      Your channel looks great, I’ll be checking it out later

    • @AdamGaryPoetry
      @AdamGaryPoetry 5 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      @@poem_kym9406 absolutely! It's important to encourage each other. Write with all your heart and you won't go wrong! Thank you so much means a lot! Just started taking it seriously so hopefully it doesn't disappoint haha!

  • @noelhaynes9608
    @noelhaynes9608 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    N. H. II- Miracle Poems 1-5, N. H. II- Poems of Love 1-5 and N. H. II- Peaceful Poems 1-5 are on TH-cam, and here is a link to watch one of them, with an interesting character in it:
    th-cam.com/video/Sgi6vbn5Qco/w-d-xo.html

  • @imanofearnone
    @imanofearnone 7 ปีที่แล้ว +18

    Great video! I wish you use more visual such as a whiteboard or graphics.
    I like poetry bur more so listening than reading. For some reason I tend to feel the sound more than when reading it. I am taking your advice and have started reading more though. And I will keep updating my progress on here if you are still following this threads.

  • @2DebbieDoo
    @2DebbieDoo 7 ปีที่แล้ว

    Thank you for sharing your knowledge, looking forward to hearing more. Ah, skip the script, the bonus at the end was better! Take good care of you and yours.

  • @gesa7781
    @gesa7781 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    your shirt says you just ate where you got it ? Indonesia? malaysia?

  • @phoenixq89
    @phoenixq89 หลายเดือนก่อน

    very succinctly put

  • @Rootiii1
    @Rootiii1 6 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Enlightening. Wonderful.

  • @combeferredesseventies1848
    @combeferredesseventies1848 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    What about the surrealistic/rimbaldian method?

  • @gundogan11
    @gundogan11 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    How can i get that poster!!?

  • @journeytopoetry5724
    @journeytopoetry5724 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    Very well put. Reminiscent of Aristotles "Poetics".

  • @allyalexrodriguez
    @allyalexrodriguez 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    I wish this gave more concrete structure like a map. I'm a very visual person so hearing him talk is like "ya it makes sense but what do I do" gimme a map lol

  • @frogshavefeelings2850
    @frogshavefeelings2850 7 ปีที่แล้ว +45

    "with a handsome and opinionated host."
    i didn't know i had another youtube acc :0

    • @mrstokes6580
      @mrstokes6580 7 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      frogs have feelings 2 frogs really do have feelings :')

    • @xxaryaxx1678
      @xxaryaxx1678 6 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      frogs have feelings 2 good one

  • @membersofrbts1280
    @membersofrbts1280 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    it called meter not sound, and melody not whatever you had there or? isent it?

  • @hecklur
    @hecklur 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    honestly he is spitting so much fax for real 10000

  • @TheophaniaCaisse
    @TheophaniaCaisse 4 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    You would hate my poetry. Hahaha I follow zero rules, I just write whatever comes to me. It's all mostly (secretly) about my traumas, I have C-PTSD. My last video, I think it was my last, it's called "roadkill" is me speaking one of my poems. If you're interested that is.

    • @marsha577
      @marsha577 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      yeaa, and i can understand why people get mad over a ‘poetry’ i might just call it a writing from now on

    • @mrpedrobraga
      @mrpedrobraga 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      I am!
      Anyways, if it helps you it serves its purpose despite being a poem or not

  • @Epicilem
    @Epicilem 8 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    I'm an amateur at writing so I'm not very experienced with writing epic poems, or even smaller poems for that matter. I would really appreciate some feedback on my content and a few subscribers. I hope you enjoy what I have to offer - epicilem

  • @jamesforeman3096
    @jamesforeman3096 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    tension. tension is the most important element, of a good poem at least

  • @michaelsetiawan2746
    @michaelsetiawan2746 6 ปีที่แล้ว +11

    Sudah Makan means "I already ate" in Indonesian.

  • @mariumahmed4567
    @mariumahmed4567 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    I have written a poetry how can I send it to you for proofreading?

  • @inziati
    @inziati ปีที่แล้ว

    Thank you for explaining the tips and informing us that you have eaten 😄

  • @locashen4301
    @locashen4301 7 ปีที่แล้ว

    really good at explaining things!

  • @maxinewest4096
    @maxinewest4096 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    I enjoyed writing poetry. This poem is titled. Duck and Hide the Evidence. Once upon a time, there lived a crooked government officials with eyes like a mouse and a brain like wavering sea. Sitting upon crookery,. They see painting,. So in their eyes like a mouse,. Go a wondering , and they delete a delete video footage of their crimes, while looking like up standing citizens.

  • @itsmesyafinaa
    @itsmesyafinaa 6 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    My poem is about what my hand hold...
    What do u think about my poem?

  • @tenacioustrees.8737
    @tenacioustrees.8737 6 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    Could I ask for a critique on a poem I've written?

    • @Umacademyy
      @Umacademyy 6 ปีที่แล้ว

      Yup I can help u out I think

  • @membersofrbts1280
    @membersofrbts1280 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    structure is awesome

  • @jenniferketler
    @jenniferketler 7 ปีที่แล้ว

    Thanks for sharing!

  • @ryanpendley1826
    @ryanpendley1826 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    ❓❓❓
    --------------
    You hurt me because
    I can't read your mind
    I hurt you cuz
    You think I'm untrue
    Even though
    I love you
    I'm in this world
    Schizophrenic
    Atomic clock
    God's worth
    Open heart
    Time to start
    Bugs bunny
    Road runner
    Acme Akers
    What does it all mean
    A thousand words with no meaning
    Juxtaposed thinking
    Tunnel vision
    Paranormal dimension
    All these voices won't listen
    Atoms split
    Movies don't make sense
    Fact or fiction
    Read a book
    Subtle Satan
    Coward God
    I'm your image
    No sucide
    Born to die
    Tell me why
    Not a masochist
    Don't search for pain
    I'm a vessel labored in vain
    Except the Lord build the House
    Fall from grace "Ouch"
    Perfect time
    You hold the key
    Unlocking these mysteries
    Monotheism to the Trinity
    I'm in You, You in Me
    I don't have the answers
    So help me to believe
    First Corinthians Thirteen
    Holy Bible
    Leave this World
    What's in a dream
    Perfect inspiration
    Puppet String
    Your The Potter I'm The Clay
    Still sitting here with this stain
    Writer
    Ryan K Pendley

  • @hanyuluvr
    @hanyuluvr 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    first poem pls dont bully💀
    robes as red as maple leaves
    quilted over an outline of a body
    the same man i saw that day
    holding an umbrella for a flower drenched in the sky’s tears
    - crimson rain sought flower
    (Inspired by Tian Guan Ci fu, Hua Cheng)

  • @mskarra7600
    @mskarra7600 6 ปีที่แล้ว

    very helpful indeed man

  • @dineshraja7121
    @dineshraja7121 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    thanks man!

  • @kristinawashington1773
    @kristinawashington1773 6 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Thanks for the video.

  • @nimohahmed8314
    @nimohahmed8314 5 ปีที่แล้ว +10

    I prefer writing from my heart, my experience matters mo

    • @AdamGaryPoetry
      @AdamGaryPoetry 5 ปีที่แล้ว +6

      It's important to follow your heart! The heart often does the work for you!

    • @nimohahmed8314
      @nimohahmed8314 5 ปีที่แล้ว

      Thats for sure

  • @hidayahhishamly6909
    @hidayahhishamly6909 8 ปีที่แล้ว +7

    your shirt hahaha sudah makan? Its mean have you eaten? nice one!

  • @jakestewartmusic
    @jakestewartmusic 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    way words choose to use

  • @narekotk3110
    @narekotk3110 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    hii have you ever in indonesia? the words "sudah makan" is indonesia languages that means in english Have Eaten

  • @ojslayz4346
    @ojslayz4346 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    Im here to help me with songwriting

  • @siwarbou3bena787
    @siwarbou3bena787 6 ปีที่แล้ว

    i dont have any rules to be tied with?

  • @Apeunion
    @Apeunion 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    @Aaron Kyro

  • @luciapriandarini8512
    @luciapriandarini8512 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    Hello I'm Indonesian. Nice t-shirt :)

  • @craigjackson5470
    @craigjackson5470 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    Anyone here to learn to write poetry so you can write lyrics

  • @yohananabel3792
    @yohananabel3792 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    I am watching potery show
    To write poem if i know
    Watching this on the bed
    Too many ideas in my head
    Too far for the pen
    Just imagine in my brain
    I am to lazy to get up
    To write things that i want

  • @harihehe
    @harihehe 8 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    sudah makan? ;) haha cool video man

  • @cristovaochaves1921
    @cristovaochaves1921 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    I didn't like the bloop, but all that you spoke I did.

  • @retsbewnoelopan
    @retsbewnoelopan 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    Hey Jerksen

  • @sicklyaura
    @sicklyaura 6 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    Honestly, I'm looking for guides to write poems because I've been watching people play Doki-Doki Literature Club, which has poems in it. And I want to start writing poems

    • @happymaskedguy1943
      @happymaskedguy1943 6 ปีที่แล้ว

      Sickly Aura ‘The Ode Less Travelled’ is a great book for learning poetry from a foundational basis.

    • @JacksonBates
      @JacksonBates 6 ปีที่แล้ว

      Agree 👍 Ode Less Travelled gives a great entry into poetry. It only really helps with forms rather than free verse or more avant-garde poetry, but it's still excellent

  • @ahhhhh7891
    @ahhhhh7891 6 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Where the black out poetry squad at

  • @Foodlov-123
    @Foodlov-123 7 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    DiD iSTANBUL-buy alas!

  • @naeemullah6741
    @naeemullah6741 5 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Hmm

  • @naya3253
    @naya3253 8 ปีที่แล้ว

    the blooper hahahah

  • @saadkhan_
    @saadkhan_ 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    Good

  • @itsyaboiabdul5339
    @itsyaboiabdul5339 7 ปีที่แล้ว

    So funny because I am called Ludan HINT: (his shirt ) 😂🤣

  • @FRDFZZ
    @FRDFZZ 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    Hey man nice shirt, i from Malaysia

  • @hayzonwastaken2062
    @hayzonwastaken2062 7 ปีที่แล้ว

    ok

  • @eaglestrike1000
    @eaglestrike1000 5 ปีที่แล้ว +8

    B.S! Just listen to Eminem and Royce!

  • @better2me
    @better2me 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    В то время как

  • @raymondphilip6232
    @raymondphilip6232 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    Why u wearing a sudah makan shirt? Thats indonesian language

  • @wheres_bears1378
    @wheres_bears1378 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    I plan to start a new genre of poetry … bogan yarn
    Oh carn mate while I spin ya a yarn
    True blue I am
    From the shed or the barn
    A dead dingo”s doona a keg of manure
    VB sips in the night
    Until the 💩 runs right

  • @ryanstephanus
    @ryanstephanus 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    sudah makan? kenyang dong hahaha

  • @zaihamluriaz3126
    @zaihamluriaz3126 8 ปีที่แล้ว +5

    i like your shirt :)

  • @Matthew-369
    @Matthew-369 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Take Off Your Mask
    To Those Wearing Masks,
    We See You, At Last,
    And We've Come to Ask,
    Want a Drink from This here Flask?
    If Your upto Task,
    Take off That One Last Mask.
    For We are the No Masked.
    We have done this Task,
    We Drank from This here Flask.
    And There is No need to Ask,
    Cause We See You, Alas,
    We See Through All Your Masks.

  • @malai7699
    @malai7699 8 ปีที่แล้ว

    sudah makan laaaaah

  • @TechnicolourStormshadow
    @TechnicolourStormshadow 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    Bladabladabla bladabladabla 😂

  • @fajrinyusuf8911
    @fajrinyusuf8911 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    SUDAH MAKAN. in Indonesian language, it means ALREADY EATEN.

  • @Svenx_13
    @Svenx_13 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    2021 anybody

  • @Zanele-hf2ip
    @Zanele-hf2ip ปีที่แล้ว

    Photo of fife electricity of poews

  • @iqbalhamdan529
    @iqbalhamdan529 5 ปีที่แล้ว

    Sudah makan? Saya belum makan

  • @janemachan3195
    @janemachan3195 6 ปีที่แล้ว

    Wait- are you an Australian?

    • @poesho
      @poesho  6 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      English by birth, Aus citizen by choice.