I'm a huge Carpenter fan, what influenced me most writing this one is the faceless masses in his movies- like Ghosts of Mars but also Assault on Precinct 13 and arguably The Fog too
@danielwilliamswriter that is a feature of his movie : Prince of Darkness, when the possessed homeless people are gathering around that old church. That is an awesome movie.
Bruh I hate stupid characters. Everyone at the wedding was torn apart. Maid of honor was torn in half. How would anyone see the bride survivor in her dress and think "Yea this chick definitely killed all these people in the most brutal of ways."
31:00 I knew it! I soon as the mc kept repeating the words- orders are all that matters. Like a song I heard long ago say- soldier is just another word for slave 🎵
Ok, so the narration isn't bad, the background sound effects are cool and help with immersion. But, none of that makes a poorly written story good. For one thing, if you don't understand military lingo, command structure, how they operate, don't write military based stories. You tell a team member to "take point", singular. As in one person takes the point position for the formation, to scout ahead of the main force and prevent the entire element from getting ambushed. You don't tell an entire team to "take point" as you stay stationary, I mean come on! Team lead would give the command to set a defensive perimeter, set security, etc. Aside from that, there was NO description giving the realization that the people they were there ostensibly there to rescue, had turned hostile. You're jumping straight into "so anyways, we started blasting", with no thematic reason why, other than they're apparently hostile without it being shown why. Sorry, but this is really, really bad writing, I couldn't make it 10 minutes without giving up. Do better next time.
Hey my Friend's at Team Cosmos. Please bring back the Theodore voice AI. He well it done a awesome job. Its not gonna be the same without him. Im sure other listeners feel the same way
This better be good....cause if it's not....I'm gonna cry.....!!!!! Weird background music...I'm not sure if it's AI....too many ads.... Ok so it's a cool story!!!!!! Big deal!!!!!
Story 1: Slightly jumbled military terminology, and really glosses over some important stuff (like how big their unit is, and some amount of suprise at suddenly fighting the people they are there to help might have been good). Predictable ending but well enough executed. Story 2: No world building at all. Monster attacks on this planet are frequent but its a tourist destination, but it also doesnt get regular traffic? They thought a bride had physically ripped an entire wedding party apart? How would they even suspect her? Is this a setting with super humans or cybernetics that would allow a normal seeming woman to do such an inhuman act? The military are completely unable to fight off recognised and known creatures from a nearby planet. But dont forsee the twist? And the creatures are completely unstoppable by heavy ordinance and fortified bunkers? Can't help but feel the ending was a rush job to close out a story that was intended to be mich longer.
I’m curious, how does this channel work exactly? Is it a collaboration of multiple creators with their own channels, or perhaps a team or something like that?
I've served with a couple of RL Women Marines who could cut it in combat and maybe even in command. They are virtual unicorns, but they do exist. And in Fictional Tales, I always prefer a mix of men & women; if for no other sake, then for eye candy.
The narrator speaks so slowly that I want to increase playback speed, but all of the characters speak at a normal pace which becomes too fast if sped up. Sorry y'all, I can't listen to this one.
It's very much like the movie John Carpenter's Ghosts of Mars
I'm a huge Carpenter fan, what influenced me most writing this one is the faceless masses in his movies- like Ghosts of Mars but also Assault on Precinct 13 and arguably The Fog too
@danielwilliamswriter that is a feature of his movie : Prince of Darkness, when the possessed homeless people are gathering around that old church. That is an awesome movie.
@@colonelkurtz4452 I agree, amazing movie
Bruh I hate stupid characters. Everyone at the wedding was torn apart. Maid of honor was torn in half. How would anyone see the bride survivor in her dress and think "Yea this chick definitely killed all these people in the most brutal of ways."
She must have went full brodezilla.
The first story is a merger of ghosts of mars and event horizon.
31:00 I knew it! I soon as the mc kept repeating the words- orders are all that matters. Like a song I heard long ago say- soldier is just another word for slave 🎵
Space marines are on route but we may be a bit delayed due to a xeno outbreak on lv426....sorry for inconvenience
I ♥️ these horror sci-fi story thanks ✌️✌️
More to come!
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I am new at listening to your stories now I can't stop I aways l Iked
SCI-Fi I am 75 now and still do keep them coming. 🎉
Thanks mate, you're AWESOME.!! 👍 👍 👍
I LOVE KELLIE !!!!🎉 ❤️❤️❤️❤️
Cosmos!
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Ok, so the narration isn't bad, the background sound effects are cool and help with immersion.
But, none of that makes a poorly written story good. For one thing, if you don't understand military lingo, command structure, how they operate, don't write military based stories. You tell a team member to "take point", singular. As in one person takes the point position for the formation, to scout ahead of the main force and prevent the entire element from getting ambushed. You don't tell an entire team to "take point" as you stay stationary, I mean come on! Team lead would give the command to set a defensive perimeter, set security, etc.
Aside from that, there was NO description giving the realization that the people they were there ostensibly there to rescue, had turned hostile. You're jumping straight into "so anyways, we started blasting", with no thematic reason why, other than they're apparently hostile without it being shown why.
Sorry, but this is really, really bad writing, I couldn't make it 10 minutes without giving up. Do better next time.
Thank you for all the feedback! We strive to put out better content by paying attention to our listeners' feedback!
First story gives me 40k vibes, the spread of chaos and heresy will infect the many hive planets
Hey all, thank you for listening! Remember to subscribe to keep up with all the spooky, creepy stories! Stay Cosmic!
Thanks so much to everyone who helped me out with bringing Kellie's rendition to life!
Everyone did an awesome job!
Who dis shawty kelli?!
@@thug4lyfe 😂😂😂😂 Lil bro was Wilding
Thanks for listening!! I loved narrating Damjan's version! The villain character was really fun. :)
U need to level the audio between the narrator and the other effects! Its about 50 percent higher.
Thanks for the feedback! Do you remember which story you are referring to? 1,2, or 3? :)
Hmmmm UK here first listen not bad at all
Thanks for tuning in from the UK!
I listen to these at work. Prefer them over music but think I like the longer ones best.
41:00 weak willed human.
May chaos take the world
2nd story reminded me of bugs from starship troopers or tyranids from warhammer 40k. Expecting power armor troops to show up and fight the creatures.
don't like the music,plus there's a strange vibration i can feel in my belly,,very odd
In version 3 I don't care for the main character (too arrogant and flippant) but the narrator does a great job.
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The first story is either 40k or scp universe (a reminent of yaldobath)
Woohoo! 🥳🥰
50:00 I quit here. No point listening to a crappie ending story.
Kudos for your work!
Thank you! Cheers!
Hey my Friend's at Team Cosmos.
Please bring back the Theodore voice AI. He well it done a awesome job.
Its not gonna be the same without him. Im sure other listeners feel the same way
Definitely not
There’s a weird vibration coming from the audio of this video
Like it sounds off, or like weird vibes? :)
I can see that the author likes gallows humor.🙂
This better be good....cause if it's not....I'm gonna cry.....!!!!! Weird background music...I'm not sure if it's AI....too many ads.... Ok so it's a cool story!!!!!! Big deal!!!!!
All I could think is Space Cthulhu
Story 1: Slightly jumbled military terminology, and really glosses over some important stuff (like how big their unit is, and some amount of suprise at suddenly fighting the people they are there to help might have been good). Predictable ending but well enough executed.
Story 2: No world building at all. Monster attacks on this planet are frequent but its a tourist destination, but it also doesnt get regular traffic?
They thought a bride had physically ripped an entire wedding party apart? How would they even suspect her? Is this a setting with super humans or cybernetics that would allow a normal seeming woman to do such an inhuman act?
The military are completely unable to fight off recognised and known creatures from a nearby planet. But dont forsee the twist?
And the creatures are completely unstoppable by heavy ordinance and fortified bunkers?
Can't help but feel the ending was a rush job to close out a story that was intended to be mich longer.
Thanks for the in-depth feedback!
Is there a part 2 to this
I just found this channel. The voice acting in this video is amazing.
There are others as well with phenomenal voice acting especially coming from the girls!
so glad you found us - and thanks!!
@@95freakout oh yeah, that's right! ;)
I’m curious, how does this channel work exactly? Is it a collaboration of multiple creators with their own channels, or perhaps a team or something like that?
@@95freakout yeah, I just watched another video: tomorrow may never come, if I remember correctly, and that one was done very well as well.
Neat. ❤
One voice is to monologues, need a few more voices. Like your mom n dad n best friend.
I love creepypastas but god some of the writing is bad
Wow what a narration very very good or as a marine might say outstanding
Its yes sir not yes ma'am unless its a women.....
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Space zombies
A combat WM isn’t realistic, and irritating. I wish writers would stop doing it.
Same.
I've served with a couple of RL Women Marines who could cut it in combat and maybe even in command. They are virtual unicorns, but they do exist.
And in Fictional Tales, I always prefer a mix of men & women; if for no other sake, then for eye candy.
WM?
@@mattwalters6834 WM= woman Marine.
I am an automaton. Brr brr brr
All of these stories are written by humans and voiced by humans! Credits below and in the video if you haven't noticed at all
Lol the last one is not doing women authors any favours in our quest to be taken seriously
Ngl that first one would be a story, like a pt2
Nice if they used metric system, far future and all.
A woman in charge? I'm out.
The narrator speaks so slowly that I want to increase playback speed, but all of the characters speak at a normal pace which becomes too fast if sped up. Sorry y'all, I can't listen to this one.
Thanks for giving it a shot!
Girl boss. Lost mr
25:42 looking at his scanner he said what!?? He said "eehheee" 🤣🤣🤣