3 Keys to Immersive Dialogue (with examples!)

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  • Do you want to write better dialogue? If so, this new podcast is for you. When dialogue is written well, it can take your WIP to new heights, making your story feel vivid and realistic... but when written weakly, dialogue can feel difficult to believe and connect with, and actually distract from the message you are trying to communicate to your reader. In this podcast, we're diving deep into dialogue and showing you side-by-side comparisons of sloppy vs strong writing. So whether you're working on a novel, a series, a screenplay, a comic, or anything in between, these vital dialogue basics we're sharing today are for everyone-all writers looking to tighten their stories, and sharpen their characters.
    CHAPTERS:
    00:19 Intro
    07:08 Find The Focus
    18:47 Using Tags
    28:35 Character Voice
    44:30 Final Pro Tip for Character Voice
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  • @KAEmmons
    @KAEmmons  ปีที่แล้ว +33

    CHAPTERS:
    00:19 Intro
    07:08 Find The Focus
    18:47 Using Tags
    28:35 Character Voice
    44:30 Final Pro Tip for Character Voice

  • @johnsmith4602
    @johnsmith4602 ปีที่แล้ว +57

    This is your best episode yet. I really like this format showing us examples of good, bad, and mediocre writing.

    • @KAEmmons
      @KAEmmons  ปีที่แล้ว +16

      SOOO thrilled you like this format and that it could serve! We want to do more episodes like this. Thank you for being here!

  • @dilitidarn
    @dilitidarn ปีที่แล้ว +9

    When I write dialog for a scene, I start with the dialog and leave out everything else. It really helps me focus on Just The Dialog without all the distracting actions and settings that would go along with the conversation.

    • @eugenetswong
      @eugenetswong ปีที่แล้ว +1

      That's a great idea! I just realized that if we can't keep track of the speaker, after we finish the draft, then we know where the tags are needed.

  • @milomazli
    @milomazli ปีที่แล้ว +33

    This is a MASTERCLASS! Thank you so much!!! Could we get a "romance" edition? ("how to build romantic tension in dialogue?" as I think thats the most exciting part (at least for me)) I would paaaaay for thiiiiis!!!! :)))

    • @Chanelle208
      @Chanelle208 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      Yessss agreed

    • @iamluyu
      @iamluyu ปีที่แล้ว +3

      YES, omg that's such a good idea!!!😭😭

  • @zenebornman7917
    @zenebornman7917 ปีที่แล้ว +22

    It's only when I struggle with something that Abbie and Kate are my heros dropping in right on time. 😍💕

  • @Amy_Mi6
    @Amy_Mi6 ปีที่แล้ว +22

    Example of wrong character voice:
    Kate: Extensive, detailed outlines are SO key! Like, if you don’t have at least a 50,000 word outline, you might as well just chuck your story idea in the bin right now. I am VERY big on keeping rules and that’s a big one for me. It’s, honestly, my favorite part of the process though, so it’s an easy one to keep.
    Abbie: I don’t know… do outlines really matter though? I mean, I feel like outlines should be super minimal. Like, only be as long as your elevator pitch - that’s really all you need. Me, personally, I hate writing them so sometimes, I don’t even write one at all. I just surf that creative wave and see where it takes me.
    😄

    • @KAEmmons
      @KAEmmons  ปีที่แล้ว +14

      HAHAHA! This is the best! 🤣 you've got our voices nailed, Amy

    • @Amy_Mi6
      @Amy_Mi6 ปีที่แล้ว +6

      @@KAEmmons 😄💜 Thanks, Kate!! ✨️

    • @georginakosi5411
      @georginakosi5411 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      You just have to make everything a lie, they both say, and boom! Wrong cahracter voice 2.0: Abbie: Write what comes to mind, make characters, the plot does the rest for you🤣
      Abbie's horribly wrong character voice in ONE SENTENCE: Story is about what happening, and NOT about why what's happening matters to the characters.

  • @racyrowdyrocket
    @racyrowdyrocket ปีที่แล้ว +5

    Approx 22:40; seems like you guys don't fully comprehend what "dialogue tags" are. You seem to mix them up somewhat with "dialogue beats", that are actually a way of showing. And not a bad thing at all, when you don't overdo them. You're welcome.

  • @gaganjotsingh4967
    @gaganjotsingh4967 ปีที่แล้ว +15

    ❤thanks for having such a great content for free ❤

  • @avtpro
    @avtpro ปีที่แล้ว +6

    Being an visual artist, I really like how Kate used the painting analogy. The realizing the similarities between writing and visual art is what finally got me into writing. I also like Kate cutting dialog down to "Barebones" because it also help prioritize the focus. Excess dialog may be a result of not knowing the focus.

  • @songsfordragons
    @songsfordragons ปีที่แล้ว +13

    Kate you would be perfect to record an audiobook just like Abbie did!! I don’t know if you have a project like that, but your voice is so good with each character!

    • @KAEmmons
      @KAEmmons  ปีที่แล้ว +3

      Thank you so much for your kind words, friend!

    • @charleneantrobus6337
      @charleneantrobus6337 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      I was thinking the same thing!

    • @eugenetswong
      @eugenetswong ปีที่แล้ว

      @@KAEmmons I agree with Monica about the audiobook. When you read, I visualized a teenage version of you acting in a movie version in this story.

  • @travismiddleton8218
    @travismiddleton8218 ปีที่แล้ว +7

    Great examples. Very insightful and informative video. Will be a lot of help 👏👍

  • @worthfightingfor2299
    @worthfightingfor2299 ปีที่แล้ว +7

    One of my favorite episodes so far!!! I LOVED the examples and the tips you gave, and that pro tip is genius. *goes off to try it*

    • @KAEmmons
      @KAEmmons  ปีที่แล้ว +3

      Yayy! We are so happy you enjoyed it and that it could serve you! 🙏

    • @eugenetswong
      @eugenetswong ปีที่แล้ว

      @@KAEmmons I agree about the examples. I'm so grateful that you demonstrated 2 ways to rewrite passages. I love examples.
      I agree with you, only after demonstrating, that the characters are more consistent in the rewrites. I hate James as a person, but I love his purpose as a character. The same goes with "I", but I like I's personality.

  • @julshearts
    @julshearts 5 หลายเดือนก่อน

    i LOVE it when you show examples that you've written. It's my favorite type of episode!

  • @sallyscrive
    @sallyscrive ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Hi girls! I love writing dialogues, whenever I can I make characters interact: dialogue makes the story going forward, makes characters grows and I always prefer to give informations and providing history about the protagonist o the other character thru dialogue.

  • @dcutestluv9023
    @dcutestluv9023 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Your first focus example actually made me want to read the entire book, you are that good!

  • @odistabettor
    @odistabettor ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Great vid. One note, though--skeleton keys aren't necessarily old. If this were taking place in a future with no physical keys or only keycards, then yeah, it would obviously be old, but a skeleton key just means a key made to fit multiple locks. It doesn't necessarily imply something old as they can be found in most key shapes.

  • @TheLittlechicthings
    @TheLittlechicthings ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Thanks for thecexamples, much more interesting and helpful. ❤

  • @songsfordragons
    @songsfordragons ปีที่แล้ว +5

    i struggle so much with dialogue but this breakdown made me excited to try it and go back to old docs and see how i can tight them up! great episode!

  • @SuheinBeck
    @SuheinBeck 2 หลายเดือนก่อน

    The amount of preparation you did for this episode 😮 wow 💡 and thank you both so much!

  • @lindagutierrez5409
    @lindagutierrez5409 ปีที่แล้ว

    Could say: guided only by moonlight. Or feeling our way, through the moonlit room. Love Fixer Upper show example!

  • @relaxingmusicbyrajesh
    @relaxingmusicbyrajesh ปีที่แล้ว

    Kate and Abbie's parents are blessed to have these two little angels as their daughters.... Welcome to India....Kate and Abbie ❤

  • @chadsimmons4496
    @chadsimmons4496 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Excellent presentation, ladies. Enjoyed the direct examples laying out the contrast.
    Thanks for the video. ✌️

  • @azureascendant994
    @azureascendant994 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I write the setting in the paragraph before the dialogue. Less confusion and the reader already has an image of the setting as characters speak.

    • @unknownunknown5244
      @unknownunknown5244 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Same. Sometimes i feel like im writing a script tho 😅

    • @azureascendant994
      @azureascendant994 ปีที่แล้ว

      @@unknownunknown5244 Organization is very important when I write.

    • @eugenetswong
      @eugenetswong ปีที่แล้ว

      Ha! Another commenter here does the opposite. He starts with nothing but dialog. I gave you both an up vote.
      It seems starting with only 1 or only the other is the best way to start for most writers.

  • @JulieAVL
    @JulieAVL ปีที่แล้ว

    This was exceedingly helpful! And just what I needed. Thanks❤

  • @KSTFantasy
    @KSTFantasy 7 หลายเดือนก่อน

    This is very good advice. Thanks. Like... Now I exactly know what to do. But... its hard :D and I can see these slowing descriptions after I wrote them and when I look back at what I wrote :D

  • @JorgenMadson
    @JorgenMadson 11 หลายเดือนก่อน

    awesome video thank you so much! this was incredibly helpful

  • @Marayot
    @Marayot ปีที่แล้ว

    This came out with Divine timing! It is what I'm working on in my story! Thank you, thank you!

  • @sallyscrive
    @sallyscrive ปีที่แล้ว

    I usually write the all dialogue without tags, only with "Name: " before. Than I add some tags, action and descritions of the environment (if necessary).
    Thank you for the video! 😊

    • @KAEmmons
      @KAEmmons  ปีที่แล้ว

      That is brilliant! Thank you for sharing

  • @pattydee9389
    @pattydee9389 ปีที่แล้ว

    This was so good. Thank you ladies.

  • @Mcvthree3
    @Mcvthree3 ปีที่แล้ว

    Very valuable content. Thank you.

  • @Verityrowley
    @Verityrowley ปีที่แล้ว

    This was incredibly helpful! Thanks so much! :)

  • @amandasibilia572
    @amandasibilia572 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Ladies you should create a how to write a novel course! Pleeease! 😆

  • @janellescott210
    @janellescott210 ปีที่แล้ว

    I really appreciate y’all! Thank you

    • @melindagordon7621
      @melindagordon7621 ปีที่แล้ว

      Thanks for the informative examples on Dialogue.

  • @mbarekjawhari8081
    @mbarekjawhari8081 ปีที่แล้ว

    Thank you so much for the video, very interesting

  • @leholen381
    @leholen381 2 หลายเดือนก่อน

    I started writing a story the other day and I have a section of dialogue that is a very quick and urgent exchange and I’m not a writer, this is my first attempt but adding in those dialogue tags felt clunky so I left them out. To me it’s clear who is talking but I wasn’t sure it was actually the way it should be done. I’m curious what people here think.
    The captain of the local garrison, having been alerted by a soldier on patrol, came out to meet the man as he fought to stop his mount. "Are you sure it's the Empress?", the captain asked with a hint of worry. "Yes!", gasped the man, "They're about two hours away." "Did you see how many there were?" "About fifty." "So, few? Cocky bastards."

  • @AvaCoffman-g4b
    @AvaCoffman-g4b ปีที่แล้ว

    haha mini art tutorial u guys r the best

  • @biancalawrence3178
    @biancalawrence3178 ปีที่แล้ว

    Please could you do something about whether a book needs a villain. My novel (in production) has lots of conflict but there's no villain.

  • @radicallyindepedentauthor
    @radicallyindepedentauthor 6 หลายเดือนก่อน

    I guess I need this video because I'm really struggling to agree with your central point.

  • @mbarekjawhari8081
    @mbarekjawhari8081 ปีที่แล้ว

    May have your schedule of both of you 😉🤠

  • @LV-bk4it
    @LV-bk4it ปีที่แล้ว +4

    The first example lends a lot of atmosphere. The second is a skeleton. Perhaps there is a happy medium? Not everything is sound-bites. Read fine novels instead of just some flash-fiction. The thing is, you've chosen a piece that is suspenseful - so the more slowly you write/read, the more suspense it builds. This is not something that could be considered classic literature - shouldn't we be striving for this? The pro-tips are good but the writing itself is pretty basic.

    • @KAEmmons
      @KAEmmons  ปีที่แล้ว +6

      Be sure to listen to the "in between" examples, friend! As we said, these are springboards for your OWN ideas, not set-in-stone guidelines. Find what works for you! Thanks for being here & for listening 🙏

    • @aluhvsickstay
      @aluhvsickstay ปีที่แล้ว +3

      Didn't you see that they did show the third example which was like an in-between??

  • @damladeniz
    @damladeniz ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Turkish subtitle please

  • @colibrireader
    @colibrireader ปีที่แล้ว

    It's a shame the text is not properly punctuated with indents. That is so important to clarity to the narrative and the concept of turn taking.

  • @jayashreechakravarthy4949
    @jayashreechakravarthy4949 11 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Every freedom-lover who thinks this is okay, will get to contribute in the same way every time there is a problem.

  • @thefatbat5556
    @thefatbat5556 ปีที่แล้ว

    Any Emmons women not have a voice I could fall for?

  • @Mars13153
    @Mars13153 ปีที่แล้ว

    Excellent, very helpful. Focusing on the most important part of the conversation so the story can move, sprinkling in some flavor... right on the money.