PARAGRAPH (A) 1- Neutral background sentence 2- Reword the question 3- Tell the reader main ideas of body 1 and 2 PARAGRAPH (B) 1- Topic sentence 2- Main point 3- Reason/examples/evidence PARAGRAPH (C) 1- Topic sentence 2- Main point 3- Reason/examples/evidence PARAGRAPH (D) 1- Broad statement about topic 2- Summary You’re welcome 😉
Thanks a lot to the whole e2 ielts team. I got a band 8 with L 9, R 9, S 7.5, W 7. This by only watching e2 ielts videos and practicing with them. I strongly recommend the channel for preperation especially writing practices.
Hey Alex, I can’t express my feelings through text but I am deeply gratified because today was my test and in the morning I had seen this video and I had got the same topic. Thanks you and Jay for your wonderful work and effort. Love from India 🇮🇳 ❤️
I just got.p my IELTS academic results Reading 5.5 Writing 5.5 Listening 6.0 Speaking 8.5 Overall 6.5 I wanna thank e2 especially sir jay for guiding me. You have become my mentor for English classes. I honor my respect to u.God bless enough to get me into a university..I’m satisfied..but not happy..should’ve done better..my university is in Melbourne. See ya there. Thank u to the entire team , a belated happy Valentine’s Day much love and god bless to you all, Yours in confidence, Areeb. A chef in the making.
Alex!! I am so happy I got my result today and my writing moved from 6.5 to 8 after seeing your videos .. they are amazing and I followed exactly what u and jay told in your videos. I got an overall 8 too. I'm so happy!!! The way u explain about extending and supporting and linking a paragraph is amazing. It's helped me so muchhh.. thank you thank you thank youuu🥺
I have adopted few things from your strategy which are simple and sensible. I have scored a band 7 in writing on 14th Feb 2019 IELTS exam but could not acheived overall score so I am going to appear again. Thanks alot for strategic writing.
Thank you so much Alex 🤗. You played a significant role in making me pass IELTS with an overall of 8.0......L 8.5, R 7.5, W 7.0 and S 8.0.... I sincerely give God all the glory 🙌. If I can do it, you can do it too. Trust me....study hard and pray harder 🙏. God will do it for you too. Amen 🙏
Thank you Alex. Your "Super Strategy" helped me tremendously during my IELTS exam. I got band 7.0 in Writing. Overall score 8.0 (L-8.0, R-9.0, W-7.0, S-8.0)
Thank you so so much!!!!! I gave IELTS GT 2 months back and got 998 and 6.5 in writing. I re-wrote it coz I needed 7 in writing. Literally, one night before the exam I chanced upon this link and I read this essay. Coincidentally something very similar came up in my writing section. I have scored 7 in writing now. My overall band is 8.5 :). I can't thank you enough
Hey I wanted to thank you for the great study resources available at e2 language. I purchased a course of yours and studied for a week. I scored an 8 band! Totally worth it
2. disposal => disposable 3. throw in the bin => thrown 4. involve => involves 5. launched one such => launched one 6. expand => expanding 7. educate they => them 8. goverments => governments My essay: In different parts of the world, food is still considered valuable. In recent years, there has been a phenomenon of wasting food. This essay is to explain the causes of this trend and provide suggestions to keep it under control. Two factors are behind food wasting. The first is due to the rising level of household incomes which has allowed people to buy more food than what they actually need. The monthly median household income, for instance, is now 1000 dollars compared to $100 per month 30 years back. Higher incomes mean that spending a small chunk of salary on food every month seems less and less significant. Another cause of the change in having luxurious lifestyles possessed by a growing population. As people become wealthier, they tend to open more large parties to show off such valuable possessions, and to determine the sufficient amount of food for such parties is incredibly challenging. Hence, the trend of buying more food than needed to avoid invited guests staying hungry. The evidence of left-over food at the end of parties has become gradually common. One possible way to tackle the issue of discarding food unnecessarily is to raise public awareness. This can be done through various campaigns or television advertisements. XXX, an on-screen 10-second TH-cam commercial showing images of starving children in poverty of under-developed countries, has contributed greatly to help the public of the negative effects of irresponsible consumption and waste on a societal level. From looking at these images, people can realize the impact that food-wasting can have on the world and change their habits. Overall, each individual should be more responsible and play their part in combating the problem of wasted food. On a larger scale, governments, through media platforms, should implement initiatives to educate the public on the danger of consuming and wasting food. (305)
Alex and Jay, you are the best teachers in the world! You're so young but have a good expertise. You're vocationa,l and most importantly, you're very motivating educators!
I watched a lot of videos related to writing part 2 and had a basic idea how to plan and write until this video. I think this is on the next level for me. I mean the writing is just wow, you cant stop reading it Great work done
Hi Alex! You shared all relevant tips to get band 7 or more in IELTS writing7 because all aspirants would certainly be benefited by your video. Thanks & regards.
Thanks so much alex I had seen your videos just before my exam and they helped me out a lot . I had prepared for my exam in just a week and I finally got the scores R-9 L-9 S-7(questions were too hard lol)W-7 Thanks so much ❤
Hi, Alex. Your extremely informative videos encouraged me to purchase the course. Classes on the e2 language platform are super fun and fully met my expectations. Thanks a lot!
Thank you so much for your time and knowledge: the concept of WRITING AN ESSAY FOR IELTS EXAM is so well- presented and explained that there is no other choice, but just doing it right! THANKS!! Take care! Love your job!
I can't thank you enough for your videos. got my IELTS Academic Results today, W=7, S=7.5, L=8.5 and R=8.5. had about 10 days to prepare and listened/watched your videos mostly. please keep up the good work
I am so pleased and stunned to see all her videos, she is just perfect with her teaching skills on writing; besides, she is so beautiful. It's so easy to understand her points, very practical! 😃
Thank you so much. I'm going to do my academic IELTS after three weeks and I'm aware of most of the information that you have given. however, when it comes to the day of the exam my mind STOP ⛔ remembering.😔
Review everything in the days before your test, have some good brain food before you start, and take lots of big deep breaths to keep the oxygen flowing to your brain - good luck Osama! 💪👍
Jay used to say that every piece of information that is given in the question prompt shall be mentioned in the introduction, namely the paraphrase part. Has anything changed? Are "shops" and "restaurants" irrelevant words concerning our essay?
Same doubt arise to me. She just use "food waste" in paraphrase sentence. Instead of this she need to mention restaurant and shops in that sentence. May be she has done it intensnally.
Question for me is "In some countries, employees are generally given 2 weeks of paid vacation time each year. In other countries, employees are given four or six weeks of paid vacation time. Considering the needs of both employees & employer, what do you think is a reasonable amount of paid vacation time for employees to have? My Introduction - Paid Vacation is one of the most important factors which needs to be considered those who are in working professionals (Background). This minimise the disruption to normal working culture & also saves money. (Specific Statement - Task). I beleive that 2 weeks of annual vacation time is a good amount for a company to offer (Thesis statement what I am going to write). Please correct if I am wrong.
Can someone please review my answer Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree? A very popular quote, "When in Rome, act as the Romans", is one such saying that has been discussed and shared when referring to how one should act in a different cultural and geographic setting. With the rise in globalization and better means of transport and communication, more and more people today are traveling to experience different cultures and many times they often discover that their habits and lifestyle does not fit into the new cultural setting and may feel the need to adapt. Although, whether one should adapt to a different culture or not when traveling, is a personal preference and this essay aims to discuss that. There are many countries that are more conservative in their approaches than others and it is often the tourist's responsibility to ensure that they do not disrespect the locals. For instance, in some countries, women dress more conservatively unlike other western countries and hence it may be not appropriate for a woman to wear inappropriate clothing as it may be interpreted as a sign of disrespect. In such situations, it is advised to study a culture and adjust in order to be respectful. Another school of thought suggests that with globalization, more and more countries are becoming alike and cultures are blending into one another. In cities like New York and London, which as referred to as a melting pot of cultures, one need not adjust and adapt to fit in as these cities welcome all kinds of people. Therefore, in such cases, a person traveling there may continue to follow his own lifestyle. Having said that, it is extremely vital for a tourist to be respectful to the place he visits and ensure that his activities or lifestyle does not disrespect the locals, as he too is responsible for preserving the local culture. To conclude, losing one's identity and culture to fit into a different culture may not be needed. However, it is extremely vital to ensure our activities as a tourist does not cause any harm or disrespect the locals and one should be flexible enough to adapt if needed.
*transportation, 2. when you have already used "many times" (should be many a time), u shouldn't use often. 3. unlike other western countries(omit other)
Such a highly written essay makes me feel like i am a kindergarden kid that tried to write. There is no way i could come up with such elaborate ideas and extreme vocabulary in just a short period of time
Oh! You don’t need to write in the same way as me - the examiner wants to know what YOU think. You have a unique perspective. Just lay it out in a clear way and be sure to answer the question/s. Don’t be disheartened. There are a million ways to score well. 💪🌟👍
Wow!! Where do I start..Thanks so much Alex. Watched this video the night before my IELTS exam here in Nigeria 2 weeks ago. I must say it was invaluable and helped me get the score i needed in my writing (7) with a band 8 overall. Thanks so much again and keep up the good work.
Can someone please correct this essay for me? Many things that used to be done in home by hands are now done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages? -Automation has drastically changed living styles in this modern era. People are getting addicted to rely on machines, which made physical work easy without human intervention. This essay will discuss both, positive and negative impacts of machine usage at homes and provide reasoning for why this development outweighs the disadvantages. -People are becoming more and more dependent on machines, which has reduced manly hours and made life simple. Firstly, when in old times people used to invest a lot of time to get things done, which had human errors. Secondly, it used to consume a lot of one’s energy and stamina. For an instance, These days Robots are timed to clean and mop the floor at their set time, which is done in no time effortlessly. -Dependency on robots is making lives easier in a way, while compromising on their financial cost and one’s fitness level. Machines are used to do simple work which could be done easily just to save some time, which involves the maintenance and electricity charges for moving them around. In addition, it is making masses, especially young children habituated to such ease and dependency. A recent survey suggests that techno-savvy houses are being held responsible for growing health issues. -Technology is a boon, as long as it is favorably utilized. However, if properly used keeping in mind the running costs & healthy lifestyle is far better off than enhancement of technology in daily life which has discharged the physical load by saving time.
Thank you for this instructive tutorial video. Is it ok that the conclusion in this piece of writing doesn't recap the main idea of body 1 , the reasons for waste food disposal?
thank you for your videos, it have added some much more value to my preparations. Question, is it okay to give random examples for reference/evidence if one is not sure of the source?
Hello team, its a very impressive and knowledgable video but can you guys use a more generalised form of answer, given that some people not actually have examples in their mind about that particular topic. Thanks
Great video! However, I don't quite understand why 7 in task response, 7 in coherence and cohesion, 7 in lexical resource, and 6 in grammar makes 6.5 and not 7 overall. I believe 6.75 is rounded up to 7, or is it different in this case?
Yes I think pencil is better than pen for that reason, but if you do use pen, you should still edit and correct any mistakes you find by adding or removing letters, crossing out etc. And of course, editing on the computer version of the test is essential too! 👍
Alex, this is the first presentation demo I viewed, I feel like I want to attend more classes as it is quite intriguing and informative. I have scored a band of 8-9 in the rest of the modules in all of my attempts. However, I have been struggling to score a band of 7 in writing alone which I feel is my weak link, this session gave me self-confidence and I hope I do pass the barrier in my fourth attempt at least.
Hello. Thanks for the video. The analysis of the mark scheme was super helpful. I´ve got 2 main queries. You've not dealt at all with the "restaurant" aspect of the question, would this not be penalised in the task response mark? Also, in the conclusion you mention governments, yet nowhere in the essay have you talked about this. Would this lose you points on task response or coherenc and cohesion.
You're absolutely great mam, your ideas and teaching with beautyful expression and creating attractive environment for concerned wow,I wish I will have a great test tomorrow 24/09/2022🙏.
Dear Alex, you and Jay have been truly magnificent in helping us. One small point - for the essay writing - does it make sense to share the personal experience/s? For example - Do we see the advertisements adding value to our life or are we against it ? Can we share a personal example - like why I bought an Apple phone or an Android phone (courtesy their brilliance in Marketing their products?).
Thanks for the great video Alex. I wanted to know if the following line in Para 1 "and suggest ways THAT PEOPLE can..." is correct. Shouldn't it be "and suggest ways IN WHICH PEOPLE can.." ? Cheers
just got my results today, L-8.5,R-7,S-7,W-6.5 overall- 7.5, thank you E2 staff and specially Alex, You guys are amazing, for the future IELTS takers take your time and watch all E2 videos throughly. you will boost your score for sure. good luck.
Very well written essay ! I've learned a lot from it. Such a writing guarantees a 7+. I am currently stuck to 6.5 in Writing section. Would passive forms of writing help me score higher instead of the monotonous active forms?
Thank you, Alex, for your excellent advice. I wonder if the part about individuals’ responsibility is a new element in the conclusion, not mentioned previously in the body, and so should not be included?
It's not a big of a deal if you can't provide examples from your own experience. You may write about someone you know who had this experience. More important how "rich' is your vocabulary and sequence of thoughts.
I really want more videos on Writing from Alex, she is just amazing and directly to the point types. 👍👍
Hi Alex, I got a 7.5 in my writing exam thanks to this video. I based my paragraph structure on your model. Thanks a lot! 🙏
By practicing from this channel I got band 8 in my ielts exam. Thanks a lot to this channel's team. You are doing great!
Band 8 on the listening module doesn't count.
Why You put this comment on every ielts page.. so I think.. you studied in all websites??
@@vigneshrao5273 I followed few other pages too, and it seems like you had been through those pages also. It's as simple as that.
@@vgnisha haha lol.. anyway it's hard to score 8.0 band.. comgrats
@@vgnisha could please mention those other pages too ?
PARAGRAPH (A)
1- Neutral background sentence
2- Reword the question
3- Tell the reader main ideas of body 1 and 2
PARAGRAPH (B)
1- Topic sentence
2- Main point
3- Reason/examples/evidence
PARAGRAPH (C)
1- Topic sentence
2- Main point
3- Reason/examples/evidence
PARAGRAPH (D)
1- Broad statement about topic
2- Summary
You’re welcome 😉
FUCKING LEGEND.
Thnk u🙂
What if I can't think of a specific example? Can't give the names of organisations etc? Could you suggest anything?
@@katyajmukhadze4621 You don't have to tell the truth in this situation, you can change some details or even make a story up and go with it.
@@ManpreetKaur-kv3wv well said 💯
How come E2Language has such amazing teachers. First Jay and now Alex. Kudos to you guys!
Thanks a lot to the whole e2 ielts team. I got a band 8 with L 9, R 9, S 7.5, W 7. This by only watching e2 ielts videos and practicing with them. I strongly recommend the channel for preperation especially writing practices.
Thats my goal
Hey Alex, I can’t express my feelings through text but I am deeply gratified because today was my test and in the morning I had seen this video and I had got the same topic. Thanks you and Jay for your wonderful work and effort. Love from India 🇮🇳 ❤️
Howmuch score did you got bro
That's wonderful !
U r a fortunate person then 😂😂😂
@@jagdeepkaur8314 Yes ! 😄
You are lucky
I just got.p my IELTS academic results
Reading 5.5
Writing 5.5
Listening 6.0
Speaking 8.5
Overall 6.5
I wanna thank e2 especially sir jay for guiding me. You have become my mentor for English classes. I honor my respect to u.God bless enough to get me into a university..I’m satisfied..but not happy..should’ve done better..my university is in Melbourne. See ya there. Thank u to the entire team , a belated happy Valentine’s Day much love and god bless to you all,
Yours in confidence,
Areeb. A chef in the making.
8.5 omg
Congratulations! and a big Thankyou!
Congratulations! I specifically envy your speaking skill.
how can you get 8.5,amazing.😍
What university are you enrolled in?
Alex!! I am so happy I got my result today and my writing moved from 6.5 to 8 after seeing your videos .. they are amazing and I followed exactly what u and jay told in your videos. I got an overall 8 too. I'm so happy!!! The way u explain about extending and supporting and linking a paragraph is amazing. It's helped me so muchhh.. thank you thank you thank youuu🥺
I'm stuck at 6.5.. I hope I can achieve a good score like u
U totally can. Just see all their videos. And practice with time everyday!
I have adopted few things from your strategy which are simple and sensible. I have scored a band 7 in writing on 14th Feb 2019 IELTS exam but could not acheived overall score so I am going to appear again. Thanks alot for strategic writing.
I was literally amazed by how well she worded her introduction ! Jeeeeeeeeesuz !
The power of native speaking.
I had my IELTS academic test today and I believe it went well. Thanks to you guys. I’ll definitely come back to share my results. Stay blessed
Thank you so much Alex 🤗. You played a significant role in making me pass IELTS with an overall of 8.0......L 8.5, R 7.5, W 7.0 and S 8.0.... I sincerely give God all the glory 🙌. If I can do it, you can do it too. Trust me....study hard and pray harder 🙏. God will do it for you too. Amen 🙏
Amennn
Congrats dearie, I hope to have my testimony soon 🙏🙏
Amen ,my is coming up by 28th of this month,pls wish me good luck .
@@ibehfavour5849 success dear
@@ibehfavour5849 All the very best 👌. You have already passed by His grace 🙌. Congratulations 🎊 👏 💐 🥳 🙌 😀 🎊 👏 💐 🥳 🙌 😀 🎊 👏
Thank you Alex.
Your "Super Strategy" helped me tremendously during my IELTS exam. I got band 7.0 in Writing.
Overall score 8.0 (L-8.0, R-9.0, W-7.0, S-8.0)
How did you prepare? I have 1 mounth
@@PredatorViDz2 Practicing and watching different teachers on TH-cam tackling every part of the exam.
@@elvisramaj1731 how did you get reading 9 bro , reading is tough.
cfare strategjie ndoqe per reading, pls a me dergon dot ndonje link? kam nje jave kohe per tu pergatitur
Thank you so so much!!!!! I gave IELTS GT 2 months back and got 998 and 6.5 in writing. I re-wrote it coz I needed 7 in writing. Literally, one night before the exam I chanced upon this link and I read this essay. Coincidentally something very similar came up in my writing section. I have scored 7 in writing now. My overall band is 8.5 :). I can't thank you enough
lucky dude
Wooo!! Love to hear this 🎉🎉🎉 Well done 💪👍
congrats
Congrats,
Can you share help us with Reading?
So did you pay twice?
In the second body paragraph’s first sentence.
Two main factors are-( s is missing )
Half of the family’s -( of is missing )
Educate them ( they)
Thug Life
Hey I wanted to thank you for the great study resources available at e2 language. I purchased a course of yours and studied for a week. I scored an 8 band! Totally worth it
I'm just here to thank you. I got my results today. L- 8.5, R- 8.0, W,S- 7.0 and Overall- 7.5
From IDP or BC and GT or AC
@@garimasharma5197 idp
You're doing excellent job,
Especially, the way you've explained subordinate conjunctions.
And how effective could be use of them.
1. factor => factors
2. disposal => disposable
3. throw in the bin => thrown
4. involve => involves
5. launched one such => launched one
6. expand => expanding
7. educate they => them
8. goverments => governments
My essay:
In different parts of the world, food is still considered valuable. In recent years, there has been a phenomenon of wasting food. This essay is to explain the causes of this trend and provide suggestions to keep it under control.
Two factors are behind food wasting. The first is due to the rising level of household incomes which has allowed people to buy more food than what they actually need. The monthly median household income, for instance, is now 1000 dollars compared to $100 per month 30 years back. Higher incomes mean that spending a small chunk of salary on food every month seems less and less significant. Another cause of the change in having luxurious lifestyles possessed by a growing population. As people become wealthier, they tend to open more large parties to show off such valuable possessions, and to determine the sufficient amount of food for such parties is incredibly challenging. Hence, the trend of buying more food than needed to avoid invited guests staying hungry. The evidence of left-over food at the end of parties has become gradually common.
One possible way to tackle the issue of discarding food unnecessarily is to raise public awareness. This can be done through various campaigns or television advertisements. XXX, an on-screen 10-second TH-cam commercial showing images of starving children in poverty of under-developed countries, has contributed greatly to help the public of the negative effects of irresponsible consumption and waste on a societal level. From looking at these images, people can realize the impact that food-wasting can have on the world and change their habits.
Overall, each individual should be more responsible and play their part in combating the problem of wasted food. On a larger scale, governments, through media platforms, should implement initiatives to educate the public on the danger of consuming and wasting food. (305)
Alex and Jay, you are the best teachers in the world! You're so young but have a good expertise. You're vocationa,l and most importantly, you're very motivating educators!
Hey Alex, i am extremely grateful for your tips on writing, i got my result today and did well for my first attempt
Helped a lot with my writing in ielts. Had no difficulty in both tasks by using E2 methods. Thanks Jay and Alex!!
I watched a lot of videos related to writing part 2 and had a basic idea how to plan and write until this video. I think this is on the next level for me. I mean the writing is just wow, you cant stop reading it
Great work done
Hi Alex! You shared all relevant tips to get band 7 or more in IELTS writing7 because all aspirants would certainly be benefited by your video.
Thanks & regards.
Hi,
This is my favorite class with you.
You nailed it.
More thanks to you especially, then Mr Jay.
Love you both.
hugs...
Thank you so much for such a thorough insight into Academic writing task 2. It worked a miracle to me!
Thanks so much alex I had seen your videos just before my exam and they helped me out a lot . I had prepared for my exam in just a week and I finally got the scores R-9 L-9 S-7(questions were too hard lol)W-7 Thanks so much ❤
Hi, Alex. Your extremely informative videos encouraged me to purchase the course. Classes on the e2 language platform are super fun and fully met my expectations. Thanks a lot!
You have great tips for writing strategy which helped me so much on my test day. Definitely improved my writing score. Thanks a lot!
That awkward moment when this is the first time you hear about food wasting and $2000 is your full yearly income before taxes.
Hi, Alex thank you for taking us through all the steps of writing a meaningful and sequential essay. Cheers!
Really thankful...I tried the method u both suggested for the writing task..and I got 7...🙏
beautifully explained...
Saw two of your videos today, elucidated the topics in an interactive way and a very easy to understand language.
You are the most amazing person I have ever seen, I god band 7 in writing following your instructions
Thank you so much for your time and knowledge: the concept of WRITING AN ESSAY FOR IELTS EXAM is so well- presented and explained that there is no other choice, but just doing it right!
THANKS!!
Take care!
Love your job!
I can't thank you enough for your videos. got my IELTS Academic Results today, W=7, S=7.5, L=8.5 and R=8.5. had about 10 days to prepare and listened/watched your videos mostly. please keep up the good work
I am so pleased and stunned to see all her videos, she is just perfect with her teaching skills on writing; besides, she is so beautiful. It's so easy to understand her points, very practical! 😃
your channel is so wonderful , because you explain every parts in the exam in details .
thanks
Where did you get your values? Are we allowed to make up values on our own? It is not given in the topic question
Good question - the values were just an estimation and it’s fine to do this in the exam - you can use stats to support your argument 👍
IDP IELTS recommend using sentence like "some people feels, however, that .... Instead of however, some people feel that". All the best.
I got only 6.5 besides using this strategy. So it didn't work 😂
Thank you Alex! I had a nice go on my writing and reading because of you. More power!
Mam please give information about how to write complex and passive sentences which are increase score band
Thanks darling for provide superior support
I have started watching ur videos just from two days.i hope by following ur way definitely, I will be able to crack my exam
Primarily focus is on UNDERSTANDING and the TONE of the essay, which is good as it helps alot to write a sensible essay.
Excellent Ma'am ❤️...! Thanks...!!!! Your lessons are extremely organized. Good luck....!
Your presentation is excellent! You do not waste a single second.
Thank u so much Alex. Your tips were very useful. They were so helpful while writing my exam. Hope I would get a good score
Thank you so much. I'm going to do my academic IELTS after three weeks and I'm aware of most of the information that you have given. however, when it comes to the day of the exam my mind STOP ⛔ remembering.😔
Review everything in the days before your test, have some good brain food before you start, and take lots of big deep breaths to keep the oxygen flowing to your brain - good luck Osama! 💪👍
@@E2IELTS ❤❤❤nothing but Love!
Jay used to say that every piece of information that is given in the question prompt shall be mentioned in the introduction, namely the paraphrase part.
Has anything changed? Are "shops" and "restaurants" irrelevant words concerning our essay?
Same doubt arise to me.
She just use "food waste" in paraphrase sentence. Instead of this she need to mention restaurant and shops in that sentence.
May be she has done it intensnally.
Question for me is "In some countries, employees are generally given 2 weeks of paid vacation time each year. In other countries, employees are given four or six weeks of paid vacation time.
Considering the needs of both employees & employer, what do you think is a reasonable amount of paid vacation time for employees to have?
My Introduction -
Paid Vacation is one of the most important factors which needs to be considered those who are in working professionals (Background). This minimise the disruption to normal working culture & also saves money. (Specific Statement - Task). I beleive that 2 weeks of annual vacation time is a good amount for a company to offer (Thesis statement what I am going to write).
Please correct if I am wrong.
Can someone please review my answer
Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs.
To what extent do you agree?
A very popular quote, "When in Rome, act as the Romans", is one such saying that has been discussed and shared when referring to how one should act in a different cultural and geographic setting. With the rise in globalization and better means of transport and communication, more and more people today are traveling to experience different cultures and many times they often discover that their habits and lifestyle does not fit into the new cultural setting and may feel the need to adapt. Although, whether one should adapt to a different culture or not when traveling, is a personal preference and this essay aims to discuss that.
There are many countries that are more conservative in their approaches than others and it is often the tourist's responsibility to ensure that they do not disrespect the locals. For instance, in some countries, women dress more conservatively unlike other western countries and hence it may be not appropriate for a woman to wear inappropriate clothing as it may be interpreted as a sign of disrespect. In such situations, it is advised to study a culture and adjust in order to be respectful.
Another school of thought suggests that with globalization, more and more countries are becoming alike and cultures are blending into one another. In cities like New York and London, which as referred to as a melting pot of cultures, one need not adjust and adapt to fit in as these cities welcome all kinds of people. Therefore, in such cases, a person traveling there may continue to follow his own lifestyle.
Having said that, it is extremely vital for a tourist to be respectful to the place he visits and ensure that his activities or lifestyle does not disrespect the locals, as he too is responsible for preserving the local culture. To conclude, losing one's identity and culture to fit into a different culture may not be needed. However, it is extremely vital to ensure our activities as a tourist does not cause any harm or disrespect the locals and one should be flexible enough to adapt if needed.
*transportation, 2. when you have already used "many times" (should be many a time), u shouldn't use often. 3. unlike other western countries(omit other)
Such a highly written essay makes me feel like i am a kindergarden kid that tried to write. There is no way i could come up with such elaborate ideas and extreme vocabulary in just a short period of time
Ah tell me about it , makes me very nervous also !
Oh! You don’t need to write in the same way as me - the examiner wants to know what YOU think. You have a unique perspective. Just lay it out in a clear way and be sure to answer the question/s. Don’t be disheartened. There are a million ways to score well. 💪🌟👍
Thank you for this video, now the structure is much clearer! n_n
Wow!! Where do I start..Thanks so much Alex. Watched this video the night before my IELTS exam here in Nigeria 2 weeks ago. I must say it was invaluable and helped me get the score i needed in my writing (7) with a band 8 overall. Thanks so much again and keep up the good work.
Fantastic!!! Well done Eghosa 👍🤗🎉
Hehehe...My exams is tomorrow and I’m from Nigeria as well. I hope this will be my story too!
discard of. Discard must be followed by a preposition of OF.
Can someone please correct this essay for me?
Many things that used to be done in home by hands are now done by machines.
Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?
-Automation has drastically changed living styles in this modern era. People are getting addicted to rely on machines, which made physical work easy without human intervention. This essay will discuss both, positive and negative impacts of machine usage at homes and provide reasoning for why this development outweighs the disadvantages.
-People are becoming more and more dependent on machines, which has reduced manly hours and made life simple. Firstly, when in old times people used to invest a lot of time to get things done, which had human errors. Secondly, it used to consume a lot of one’s energy and stamina. For an instance, These days Robots are timed to clean and mop the floor at their set time, which is done in no time effortlessly.
-Dependency on robots is making lives easier in a way, while compromising on their financial cost and one’s fitness level. Machines are used to do simple work which could be done easily just to save some time, which involves the maintenance and electricity charges for moving them around. In addition, it is making masses, especially young children habituated to such ease and dependency. A recent survey suggests that techno-savvy houses are being held responsible for growing health issues.
-Technology is a boon, as long as it is favorably utilized. However, if properly used keeping in mind the running costs & healthy lifestyle is far better off than enhancement of technology in daily life which has discharged the physical load by saving time.
I think its awesome. Choose honest one to mark u
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Thank you for this instructive tutorial video. Is it ok that the conclusion in this piece of writing doesn't recap the main idea of body 1 , the reasons for waste food disposal?
you are amazing Alex.
Thank you!
thank you for your videos, it have added some much more value to my preparations.
Question, is it okay to give random examples for reference/evidence if one is not sure of the source?
Hello team, its a very impressive and knowledgable video but can you guys use a more generalised form of answer, given that some people not actually have examples in their mind about that particular topic. Thanks
I can watch you whole day. I mean you teach so smooth and effortlessly. Thanks, I am learning a lot :)
There is no mention of restaurants. Why?
Great video! However, I don't quite understand why 7 in task response, 7 in coherence and cohesion, 7 in lexical resource, and 6 in grammar makes 6.5 and not 7 overall. I believe 6.75 is rounded up to 7, or is it different in this case?
With one of your tips, that is to "Edit" at the end of writing. Are u advising to write with pencil rather than pen.. Kindly clarify..
Yes I think pencil is better than pen for that reason, but if you do use pen, you should still edit and correct any mistakes you find by adding or removing letters, crossing out etc. And of course, editing on the computer version of the test is essential too! 👍
One of the most informative videos Alex
Thanks Alex, looking forward on viewing more of your video tutorials soon. :)
Thankyou :)
Alex, this is the first presentation demo I viewed, I feel like I want to attend more classes as it is quite intriguing and informative.
I have scored a band of 8-9 in the rest of the modules in all of my attempts. However, I have been struggling to score a band of 7 in writing alone which I feel is my weak link, this session gave me self-confidence and I hope I do pass the barrier in my fourth attempt at least.
Fingers crossed for you! 💪👍
Einriði Harðhugaðr hi can u help me in making corrections of my writing task 2
@@lubnaahmad7304 I am not an instructor :) Just a student like you are. I am happy to help.
Einriði Harðhugaðr but can we help each other
Hello. Thanks for the video. The analysis of the mark scheme was super helpful. I´ve got 2 main queries. You've not dealt at all with the "restaurant" aspect of the question, would this not be penalised in the task response mark? Also, in the conclusion you mention governments, yet nowhere in the essay have you talked about this. Would this lose you points on task response or coherenc and cohesion.
It is such a perfect video I have ever watched. Thanks Alex
You're absolutely great mam, your ideas and teaching with beautyful expression and creating attractive environment for concerned wow,I wish I will have a great test tomorrow 24/09/2022🙏.
Awesome!! The very best
Have my exam in half an hour, wish me luck 😅🤞🏻
Update: passed with band 7 overall, not bad but i was hoping to get a higher one)
do update ur results, all the best!
Just finished the first three parts, waiting for my speaking. Hope to get 7,5 in general
How is went ?)))
Dear Alex, you and Jay have been truly magnificent in helping us. One small point - for the essay writing - does it make sense to share the personal experience/s? For example - Do we see the advertisements adding value to our life or are we against it ? Can we share a personal example - like why I bought an Apple phone or an Android phone (courtesy their brilliance in Marketing their products?).
This video is great! Thank you so much for this!
Thank you so much for really helpful video about writing module...keep uploading such videos :)
Is it necessary to have one point/idea for one problem??
You can approach one problem with/from different points.
Why some mentors claim that writing in the introduction “ this essay will discuss” is a bad idea?
Amazing Alex, this is very helpful.
you are definitely super ielts teacher. I'm fond of you.
Easy to understand
Outstanding explanation, you are the best.
Thanks for the great video Alex.
I wanted to know if the following line in Para 1 "and suggest ways THAT PEOPLE can..." is correct. Shouldn't it be "and suggest ways IN WHICH PEOPLE can.." ?
Cheers
just got my results today, L-8.5,R-7,S-7,W-6.5 overall- 7.5, thank you E2 staff and specially Alex, You guys are amazing, for the future IELTS takers take your time and watch all E2 videos throughly. you will boost your score for sure. good luck.
Awesome. Love your way of teaching
Thanks for this video E2!
Very well written essay ! I've learned a lot from it. Such a writing guarantees a 7+.
I am currently stuck to 6.5 in Writing section.
Would passive forms of writing help me score higher instead of the monotonous active forms?
Great video! Congratulations!
I really like the way you speak..it attract me aloooootttt..
Is there a disadvantage/pitfall to stating untrue fact in a task 2 writing?
Thanks alot mam .. for your valuable suggestions ..from India 😙
Hardeep Kaur hi can u plz help me in making corrections of my ielts writing
Thank you, Alex, for your excellent advice. I wonder if the part about individuals’ responsibility is a new element in the conclusion, not mentioned previously in the body, and so should not be included?
Great thanks to your helpful video!
Hi Alex you guys are doing great job its really help me alot.
Thanks, Alex. It's explained very well. I will look at your more videos. keep it up. You are doing awesome.
Yay! :)
Yay Thankyou!
thank you.. got my desired scores🙏🏻
In the exam, if I do not have real examples from my knowledge or experience will it affect my score ?
It's not a big of a deal if you can't provide examples from your own experience. You may write about someone you know who had this experience. More important how "rich' is your vocabulary and sequence of thoughts.
@@bewell5503 thank you
my ielts is on 7th september for LRW & speaking on 5th
jasmeet singh mine too
@@archu24695 best of luck😊
Same here
Mine too
How was Speaking?? All details please Jasmeet
I'm sure that this video will be help to bust my score in writing task2...🙏🙏