Connor the worst mass shooting in American history was the Las Vegas shooting that killed 59, and as mentioned above the worst in the world happened in Norway
A kid rollerskating into a school shooting and taking off the rollerskates because there's blood on the floor sounds like a really funny 4chan comic strip
>be James >be epic sk8r boi >Roller skates onto the bus >Is the coolest dude but everyone hates me >be angery >Realize school is being shot up >gottagofast.gif >Mfw my epic skates can't go through the blood >Sk8r boi life ruined
Just a friendly reminder that the "barging in the significant other's classroom to make out in front of everyone" scene had already been done in another story: My immortal
@@ichor2127 The name "My Immortal" is fitting because it will be alive forevermore. That's because it's not a work of pure art. It exceeds that. It's so brilliant that it is the Übermensch of literature. Calling incredible books like To Kill a Mockingbird Üntermensch when compared to My Immortal is beyond generous.
"A loser in high school who never got over being a loser in high school". That describes Onion all over. To the point he's still trying to "date" high school girls.
He never got over not living out his hero and romantic fantasies during high school, and failed to realize afterward that that's all they could of been. He knows that he peaked in high school, and also knows that his peak wasn't very high. And since that was the peak of his existence, he refuses to mature beyond that point. He is stuck in the mindset of a sophomore in high school, and he is allowed to maintain that mentality through the existence of the internet and the people on it. He lives out his high school romantic fantasies by doing what he does rating, looking at, and talking with his fans. They are mostly teenagers who are just like him: social outcasts at school, who live vicariously through his success online, and dedicate themselves to him because they see themselves in him. Edit: Now that I reread this, it sounds REALLY pretentious, but I spent like 5 minutes on the comment, so I'm leaving it here.
You shouldn't base your self-worth or the quality of your work/craft on belittling someone elses or the person who made it. But this is Onision and what he wrote should be a sin. So I'll allow it... 😂🤣
More pertinent advice would be "Find out what it is that you don't write about well... and then don't write about that thing." Specifying rape in this sentiment is gratuitous; nobody HAS to write a book about ANYTHING, so the option of not writing about rape is always there, so the logical conclusion of this injunction may as well be "NEVER write about rape." I see no reason why any subject matter, however grim, should be precluded as a literary theme. Any thoughts?
i'm sorry but i haven't thought of something funnier than "man roller skates into school to stop a mass shooting, but the floors are too sticky, so he takes them off and continues" in a VERY long time
"He took his rollerskates off because the floors are sticky with blood." You could have made the entire review about that one line, and we would have gotten the whole picture.
i paused for a second, letting the surrounding smells enter my receptors. my senses were heightened, pristine, cutting the air like a blade. i begun to remove the heely from my left foot; my whole being... whimpering, shaking, letting my toesies kiss the atmosphere, almost like an awakening, or a nightmare. i was already fighting back a violent orgasm as i moved onto the right foot heely, wrapped around my member, choking me like an erotic death serpent. the sin milk spilled from my third eye as i slowly slipped out of the shoe that was now blinking it's neon led lights passionately, as if to say, "thank you gre... jim... James. for our time together." i shed a single tear as i left the sweet lullabies of my rolling shoesy-shoes further and further behind. now wasnt the time to cry. now was the time to run up and watch a big buff man punch someone in the face and get jacked off by Obama
Who brags about that? I don't read very much, in fact I wish I read more. Is it supposed to be impressive that he wrote a book? A book I assume he thought was "great", that he didn't read for fourteen years? That's... That's sad
@@AutumnSage98 I used to consider book reading a sign of intelligence, but not anymore. There's all sorts of intelligence that don't relate to that. Onision displays none of them and it shows.
the mental picture of James _rollerskating_ into the school and then having to STOP and TAKE THEM OFF because there's too much blood on the floor is the funniest thing ever
We need way more Slutshaming, tbh. I mean, nowadas, we legit have masses of people being convinced that theres absolutely nothing wrong and nothing 'telling' about sleeping around; which is of course utter nonsense and objectively wrong, but ok... Many people say it, so it must be right... or whatever... ...
@@loturzelrestaurant dude any statistics you pull about it ruining relationships or whatever or complicated by birth control, and there's a theorem that since women prefer men by scent and birth control can mess with a women's sense of smell, there's a thrum that birth control, rather than promiscuity, can cause poor relationships. I mean it's unproven, but it's something to look into.
@@nootnewt9323 Omg..... _Handbook for Mortals_ is so embarrassingly bad, and this coming from someone who hunts down Grade B movies, loved _The Room_ and _Reefer Madness_ and can never read enough bad science fiction! I'm gonna have to give _Empress Theresa_ a try lol.
@@whatteamwildcats4033 Ok...just googled that, re: Jeff the killer, and it looks like it might be on par with Handbook for Mortals and what's a few imploding brain cells, right? I think I'll give that one a try as well. Thnx for the suggestion.
He tried to legally change his name to James Jackson. To recap, he tried to legally rename himself after his self insert And he named his daughter after said self insert’s love interest
Same. The fact that he deserves it makes it much more satisfying. He also loves to act like he's above it all, and everyone that talks about him is obsessed with him. He doesn't take any criticism and just rants about it so its even better.
Please tell me where the book was better than the series? It literally hits all the same points and gave twelve year old me some awful ideas about suicide.
@@misery8264 I'm just saying that the series on Netflix is a shit show. Can't I just express that I'd rather read the terrible book than watch the even worse show about a teen who was abused by the people she called her peers but then discovered everyone was just trying to use her?
He says that the main character of his second book is the “darker” (note the use of darker instead of worse) version of himself and I’m entirely convinced that it’s because that character eats meat.
Yay for Greg- I mean James! And then all the girls in the school walked up to Greg- I mean James, and then they all asked him if he could rate their appearances out of 10. And then all the 10s had sex with Greg- I mean James
The protagonist never refers to anyone as a person because Greg is a narcissistic sociopath. He doesn't view other people as actual people. Every other character in the book is either an obstacle, tool, or object of sexual desire.
If you look at his response to Strange ÆONs review of Stones to Abigail with this mindset, it makes a lot more sense. It actually really explains his attempts to demonize her with the whole “dead friend” thing, when really, he was just getting pissy over the fact that someone dared to mock his writing.
I flew through the nondescript halls on my Heelys through a sticky sea of blood. There was no time to put on my knee and elbow pads as Abbi's life was maybe, possibly on the line. I arrived at the cafeteria to see carnage. There were body parts everywhere and I could hear the sounds of the crazed monkeys that escaped from the Zoo getting ever closer; there was no time to waste. So I wasted time, and decided to watch my teacher almost get shot, the raging, sociopathic, hate-boner growing in my Jeggings. Mrs. Stanley screamed at him again, "You are an embarrassment! A disgrace! How dare you, you scum!?" Upon hearing her verbal condemnation without hesitation, I watched her increased perspiration and agitation turn to desperation, as she saw his perturbation; she couldn't see the differentiation of her irrationalization within this provocation that would lead to her life's discontinuation, or at least result in hospitalization. I stood by to watch this altercation on a distant table, the elevation giving a better acclimatization for the coming domination that filled me with jubilation. Seth whipped his MP5-N toward her like a sword being unsheathed, time again felt like it had drastically slowed as his weakened arm struggled to steady his aim. Anyway, Jason at this point runs in and beats Seth into a coma and stares intimidatingly at the aforementioned, unrelated monkeys and they decide to leave calmly, giving a polite, synchronized bow before exiting. All in all, I can definitely say that it was a pretty eventful Tuesday.
Idea: r/anythingbetterthanonision where everyone posts their writing with confidence, because the only requirement is that it must be better than these books.
That... would be a pretty low bar to clear. That said, I have actually read at least one actual book that was even less coherent than this one, and coincidentally it was also self-published. At least the author of that one had the excuse of being seventeen.
I feel like a book called “Stones to Abigail” could be a mystery novel about the protagonist being close with a girl named Abigail, and then she suddenly goes missing. The protagonist then receives some weird notes attached to rocks, and the notes give the protagonist hints on where Abigail is and how to find her(aka Stones leading to Abigail).
I really like that idea. Sounds like it could be a vibrant story with the potential for some really dark twists, like The Lovely Bones or Bridge to Terabithia.
@@KrimsonRogue Also, that weird puzzle thing to get abbigales phone number in the original can be used to show that they have an affinity for puzzles in this idea, so it sets up that they both like puzzles and maybe even lay the groundwork for any future puzzles
In my head I just came up with a possible mini arc for this hypothetical rewrite: James goes to Abbi’s father when the notes reveal to him about his abusive nature, and his wife who apparently abandoned him and his daughter. James decides to interrogate her father, who is still like this hateful drunkard, but we soon learn that Abbi’s mom never left. She was an alcoholic like her father, only she had unfortunately died thanks to her addiction. He did his best to have the funeral pass under the noses of anyone else involved in her life, and twisted a lie that she ran way, because he was aware they were addicts, and didn’t want the last memory her friends and family to have be that she was an alcoholic. And it has a sorta chilling line like, “Ya see James, Abbi couldn’t have left to find her mom...because she really didn’t go that far,” implying she’s buried in the local cemetery
when i heard about this title it first reminds me of a rock grave Abigail is already dead but her death is violent and mysterious ( probaly cause by a serial killer that on the loose and the police fail to catch). MC is someone close to Abigail and try to solve her death and revenge the killers. Each piece he able to solve is like a stone set to build her grave and let her soul and himself really rest in piece.
At first, I was tempted to disagree, but I think I get it. The main character, like an average incel, simultaneously loathes himself and blames society for all his shortcomings.
@@Alex-gw5et it was, I believe reddit had to take it down because it was promoting hate speech (like actual hate speech, not Tumblr hate speech interpretation)
Greg is in his 30s, his target /main audience are girls 14 and under and he's writing teenage sex scenes. I'm not saying anything but draw from that what you will taking into consideration his "alleged" past.
reconsider this including the underage sex scenes he writes between his 11/12 year old self insert with his 16 year old sister in the third book... greg is a little fucked up to say the least
Suck Me Greg is a gross and weird dude. However, a lot of YA authors are in their 30s and are writing some sex scenes for kids with kids.... (kids meaning teenagers)
Onionsan has done the world a great dead with his books. He's given countless writers the confidence to publish their own work by setting the bar infinitely low.
As someone who was actually accused of and interrogated as a "possible threat to the school" for liking a song- saying "I wish everyone would disappear" is 100% something a teacher would report you for. (The song was The Balled Of Sarah Berry from 35mm, my teacher reported me for talking about the plot of it and not only was I interrogated, so we're the kids who sat near me)
I love that song SO much. It’s brutal, but the fact that it could happen irl is even more terrifying. The fact that so many people died over a dumb little school contest basically, that don’t even do anything in a long run, is actually very interesting. I’m pretty sure it’s about just how much the person can be pushed to literal murder, purely in attempt to be this “perfect” person. THE prom queen. Anyway, I could talk about this song for a while, it’s so good
I was threatened with potential expulsion in high school because someone I knew anonymously said people jamming up the hallways while everyone else is trying to get to class makes them murderous. Like, typical and definitely not actually threatening high schooler talk. So I got in trouble because the comment was on a website I helped run that was critical of the school administration and I potentially knew who posted it (I did in fact know, but the administration wasn’t aware that I knew). Really, I’m pretty sure it was just an excuse to shut down dissent because the website made the admin’s shady actions publicly available
True, on my last year of high school I was accused of being a shooter threat and had my locker checked for... doing a presentation condemning gun violence in schools... High school teachers are just so so dumb sometimes
It didn't hit me, until you reached the 'poopy poo poop' line from Davis, that you - and others - actually had to go into this book blind and read things like that with your own two eyes. Thank you, and I am _so sorry_
@@KaiKrimson56 the run on sentence was a run on sentence which is what happens when someone doesn't put any punctuation between clauses phrases or ideas when they should which makes you read it like you're about to pass out **INHALE**
the abbi character portrays every teenage girlfriend onision ever had (and all his gf's were underage when he met them). broken emo girls who desperately look for a lead in their life and then find him to controll every aspect of it and belittle their broken soul and feed them to be even more sad, not fixing them
And that's why James is our hero. He's still kind of abusive, but he's obviously the good guy because he isn't "beat your pregnant girlfriend then shoot up her school when she dumps you" abusive.
@@TwoBs The feels when: you dump your boyfriend and he DOESN'T shoot up a school. It's like: did you even love me?! (sarcasm btw). Greg completely understands the nuances of adult relationships, he is a well rounded completely stable individual, with monk like discipline..... NOT.
The letter James sent to Abbi reminds me of the anti cyber bullying PSA my school forced my class to watch where a guy gives a love letter to a girl and she sends it to her friend, who then posts it online, but the letter was so creepily detailed and stalkerish (I don’t remember the whole thing but apart of it was like “I’ve sat behind you for years, when you walk through the halls I feel faint”) that when the PSA was done my entire class was like “he deserved it”
Ok...but like....is NO ONE going to talk about why the hell he had rollerblades....at all...??? Wasn't he planning on going to school...??? Didn't he ride the bus...???? How did he even have room....????? I have a pretty decently sized backpack...all I can fit in there is books...maybe a waterbottle...(if I'm feeling determined) So how did he fit rollerblades in his backpack...??? Did he just not have any books in there...??? Did he have a part time job at Sonic....??? Why even write in a rollerblading scene.....????
There’s nothing wrong with having an protagonist with a superiority complex and more than a chip on his shoulder. Flawed characters are interesting characters. However, if their flaws aren’t treated as such or they down change then you have a shitty self insert at best. All of Gregs protagonists are like if Peter Parker was bitten by the spider but never lost uncle ben and never learned that important lesson of responsibility, just abusing his power to take what he wants.
Ah yes, the shower. Because when I talk about past trauma, I want to be literally naked and vulnerable, because that makes it easier, right? Seriously, the one time I told someone about my trauma, it was in a car, windows rolled up, doors locked, in a safe and secure area. When you expose something like that to someone, you want everything else around you to be safe, because your mind will be going to a place that wasn't safe for you, and if you do that in the wrong circumstances, it could actually traumatize you further.
This is Onion we're talking about here... You make excellent, sound, rational, and logical points, all of which are anathema to the Onion's way of thinking.
Same I’ve told mine in safe spaces, I don’t think there is ever a time where I would do it in the most vulnerable position I could be in tbh. I’m sure some do but it’s not my first thought when I think maybe I should open up about my trauma
I feel like he wrote that bit in just to make the scene more sexual and thinking it would arouse the reader. It's terrible. When I told my most truthworty friends about my past with self harm, we were sitting in a room, behind a closed door, safe in the house. This scene in the book is just disgusting.
I’ve told people about trauma in: -online PMs -Therapists Offices -Safe bedroom NEVER NAKED SO I CAN FLING OPEN THE CURTAIN AND SCREAM ‘Look at my body!’
West Nickel and Virginia Tech come to mind. I didn't say one girl in particular. And hoo boy, if we drop the "school" part and talk about mass shootings in general in the US, the list goes on and on.
@@TrackpadProductions You said it like all of these people died because some guy couldn't smash. Good examples, fair enough, but still saying that "list goes and goes" isn't convincing anyone.
matthew garcia I was going to make a joke about getting an abortion 417+ months after conception, but I couldn’t think of anything funny. To make up for it, here’s a comment saying I was going to make a joke about getting an abortion 417+ months after conception but couldn’t think of anything funny.
To be fair, I’d say the school guidance counselor character is actually pretty realistic - one time I had to miss school for a week because I had to go to a mental hospital bc I tried to kill myself and when I came back to school I learned that my school counselor had told a bunch of kids’ parents where I was and by the time I came back other kids were making fun of me for having to be hospitalized 😭
It still isn't really realistic. Not denying your experience, but how many councilors are being gossiping assholes or beating up school kids for being raped? Not a whole lot, I'd imagine. It's one of those things where it could happen, but it's still contrived and it's practically cartoon villain behavior.
My high school guidance counselor was one of the most uncaring and unsympathetic faculty I'd ever dealt with in school. Probably second only to some of my gym teachers. I'd refuse to see her-the mark of a good counselor, of course. Pretty much everybody assigned to her felt the same way. It's baffling how these people get these jobs. While your experience is far, _far_ worse than anything I went through, it's depressingly unsurprising to me.
I hate it when writers like onion use really formal language to sound smarter or edgier. "Inspire some acknowledgement of my existence" ???? who says that? like just say "I wanted her to notice me" or something geez
Hi this comment is two months old but I'm just now watching these reviews But anyways that phrase sounds like something I'd use for a psychopathic character or for an angry character in the middle of an argument.
I love how Onision got all heated about Aeons criticizing the annoying best friend character he wrote because he's supposedly an homage to his real-life dead friend, and yet in the book he's just killed on a freeway. Some homage, huh?
Right?! And the reason he got angry was the dumbest thing I've ever heard--she was criticizing a badly-written character, and he tried to make it sound like she was criticizing an actual person! I felt SO MUCH SECONDHAND EMBARRASSMENT for him watching that video, just like "omg he so doesn't get it, but he thinks he's owning her with, I dunno, facts and logic? And lots of really weird name-calling???" It was a train wreck 😆
44:48 I performed music for the FLOTUS when she made a campaign appearance at my university back in 2016. Secret Service was there 48 hours in advance and locked down the sports arena. We couldn't bring our instruments with us on the same day but instead had to check them in and leave them with the Secret Service 24 hours before the event started. The ONLY things students (including us) were allowed to bring to the event were our wallets and our cellphones (both of which were checked again upon entry). And of course, there was the general rule of thumb that for every Secret Service Agent and canine we could see, there were three that we couldn't. TL;DR The President and the First Lady don't just "go" places.
@@zhangjao6328 I think he did get past basic, but had to drop out of SERE training because he refused to kill a rabbit. I think Angry Cops made a video about it. Onion did complain about carrying 70 pounds of gear too.
@@zhangjao6328 no, he graduated Basic. As I understand it he served at least 3 years. He washed outta SERE school, which is a very intense training course. At any rate, he absolutely should have a reasonable grasp on weaponry and the use of. Furthermore, this mass shooting had 50 deaths and 4 injuries? That is so ridiculous. Generally speaking you'll have 4-5 wounded per dead. I haven't read this book nor do I know anything as about Onision but this particular comment thread caught my eye... I guess I'm just bored and lonely and trying to convince myself that I'm perfectly normal and know how to socialize. I'm totally normal, mom! I participated in a TH-cam discussion about deranged lunatic who wrote a really awful book! Yup. Totally normal person.
Just from the first fifteen minutes, this sounds like Onision tried to cast himself as the protagonist of a high school harem anime. Except that even the most awful high school harem anime protagonists are infinitely less vile than Onion-senpai. Their worst crime is usually utter blandness, not sexualizing preteen girls.
Rohan D I watched Strange Aeons’ review, and as soon as I saw the first paragraphs I knew the book was written by a textbook sociopath, without a doubt.
so basically Onion created Masters of Ragnarok crossed with School days (without the ending where Makoto/Greg dies and subtracting the isekai of Ragnarok)
Opinion/prediction: Onision isn’t going to react as strongly to your critique as he did to Strange Aeon’s because you’re a man. Not that he enjoys criticism from anyone, but he seems to get more upset by women’s critiques than men’s. Except Shane Dawson. Great video, btw.
Him having a tantrum when Abby confessed what she said is one of the few things in the book that seemed real. The actual Onision is a complete sociopath who lacks any form of empathy, sympathy, and remorse, so he probably would react like that. Especially considering how abusive he is to those in a relationship with him.
Uuugh... You're probably going to mention this, but Onision thinks people shouldn't criticize his book because it's "based off of real people." Which is pure idiocy in my opinion because HE wrote those characters, no matter how "real" they are.
Exactly! If someone criticises the characters, that doesn't' mean they are criticising the real-life people those characters are based on. It's a criticism of Greg's writing abilities, since he failed to properly represent that person in the book.
@Brandon Roberts "Real Fantasies" is a bit of an oxymoron my dude, not to mention, he didn't exactly accept criticism?? I remember specifically with Strange Aeons he got mad at her for criticizing his book. Said that she had no right to criticize his book because it was based off of real people. And that's no excuse, because again, the writer's abilities is what brings out the best of their book. You can have an absolutely garbage plot but your characters are amazing enough to save your book.
that moment when he said to someone that they were basically attacking the real people his characters are based on, when they were poking fun at said poorly written characters... soooo cringey
@@katatonikbliss basically the practice of making fun of people for being cringe. The term is a pejorative used to specifically describe calling something cringe when it doesn’t effect you (like when people used to call Minecraft and Roblox cringe) but Greg is so bad that he made people return to it
@@DonVigaDeFierro No, he got booted after filing for conscientious objector status because he knew it'd would get him kicked out, and he was a weak-willed little bitch boy who didn't like that being in the AF was actual work, and this was his way of getting himself kicked out without committing a crime. Also worth noting that he faked suicidal tendencies as his first try at getting booted. When it didn't work he immediately went for the previously mentioned idea, as well as making YT videos *in uniform* speaking ill of the government and military, because that's a violation of the UCMJ and he thought he'd get booted for that too. Dude was the definition of a scumbag airman. Makes me sick that he thinks he deserves respect for his shit "service".
SayaKuro12 that’s so awful. One way to establish someone as an abusive jerk I guess, but it’s not like James is any better than Seth so it doesn’t really help anyway. Oops Greg!
i thought that part was really unnecessary and frankly just too much. i don’t understand why abbi has to have every possible abusive thing happen to her so greg can ‘save’ her. and it’s really insensitive to anyone that has been unfortunate enough to have that happen to them. especially since that then leads the guidance councillor to believe abbi got an abortion and hate her for it, which is extremely unprofessional and unrealistic. much like anyone being unfortunate enough to have all of this happen to them before they’ve even graduated high school. using all of that trauma as a plot point to fulfil your own saviour fantasy is frankly sick
@@chaoticcake390 I don't like the shite story but everyone should write whatever they want since its fiction. If you read the warnings and still complain then I'm sorry for you. Stop policing fiction.
@@razan8308 that person isn't "policing fiction," they're just stating THEIR OPINION about how gross it is that a 30-year-old with a fetish for teen girls wrote a miscarriage subplot into a savior fantasy story. You realize that you're actually policing another person's opinion, right?
When a character overuses the word "human(s)" it can make it seem like the character is NOT human which is a problem if the character is supposed to be human. Though it can come in handy if you're writing a character and want to hint that they're not human.
To everyone out there: if you didn’t write Stone’s to Abbigail, you have no right to think you are the worst writer in the world. That title goes to Onion Boy.
I don't think he's the very worst, but to be worse than him would require some actual conscious effort put into it... Greg just happens to do it naturally.
Onion boi: like it’s your fault for being abused. If it were me I wouldn’t let it get to me. Also Onion boi: WAAHH!!! Someone online criticized my book!!!😭😭😭😭
And let's not forget he alleges that Sarah raped his wife/husband. Didn't go to the police, didn't get her to go to the police, didn't even make a phone call.
I just watched an interview with Onision's classmate from high school and in that interview he mentioned how Onision was trash talking a group of metal heads and he ended up getting jumped. The fact that he wrote that he beat up a group of jocks in the book makes it more hilarious. Link here: th-cam.com/video/l8fYv9Yht1I/w-d-xo.html
I also like how Onion boy put an M16 in the book, with no concept of the size and weight of the thing, having a teenager aim it with one hand. Guy claims to have been in the military himself, I think he washed out of basic training.
@@spooky6703 No, he made it through basic training and served for a little in South Korea. He tried to become special forces (I believe that what it is called) and then got kicked out for refusing to kill a rabbit, though some believe it was because he spoke against the military while in uniform (which is illegal).
@@createdbychanel8960 He flunked out of the special forces training, but that's not why he was kicked out of the military. He was kicked out for acting out on purpose up to and including stripping naked inside his CO's office to "Prove he's human."
“Based on personal experience” So... the personal experience of an super adult manchild who dates, abuses, and rapes possible vulnerable women. ... Who WOULDN’T want to read that? /CRINGE
Oh look, the story is about some loner dude that “no one understands” who latches unto a vulnerable girl, who’s surprised? ..... The cringe is real, folks. The cringe is real.
Onision roller skating into school but having to take them off because there's too much blood is incredibly grotesque, horrifying, but mainly hilarious.
this is their biz. Ytbers have a complex network of people they keep tabs on, for eventual collabs and such if their work lends in that direction. It's a pretty cool market to observe
"[T]he speed at which she attaches [etc...] suggest prior sexual abuse"-- good for you for knowing that BPD etc. are trauma disorders. It's amazing how few people see any connection between early trauma and lasting behaviors / personality traits / etc.
Yes and victims are often shamed (you "wh0re") or left alone and the cycle of abuse goes on. It is easy for a group to mock vulnerable people- especially when they are isolated and don't speak up due to severe trauma, guilt and shame.
Partly blame the people that lie about having those sorts of disorders, or at least use those disorders as sympathy romps and for exploiting other people. It really is a vicious cycle because both sides suffer because of people like them. The latter lose their empathy (and likely other things like cash) to con artists who prey upon them, and the people who actually have disorders and aren't entitled end up being pushed away because of it. Then we try to spread awareness, but we can't get enough of it right and hurt the cause. And then when we finally gain back empathy for those sorts of people, the con artists come right back to start the death spiral all over again, but worse each and every time. The only way this bullshit will end is it people like Onision are put in their proper place and aren't allowed to keep milking the public while driving the people they're impersonating to suicidal depression or homicidal rage.
he refers to people as "humans" or "creatures" to detach himself from everyone else and to seem "woke" by looking at everything from a broad "philosophical" (if that makes sense) perspective instead of a focused social or cultural one. he wants to relate everything he observes back to the way he thinks the world works and the way the FoOLiSH people around him act. it makes him seem DiFFeReNT.
I don’t know why Onision calls others humans, though I imagine he’s looking down on them, but I can personally say why I call people humans in my head or to other people. It’s because I’m on the spectrum and as such I feel so out of place with those around me. I don’t understand neurotypical people and categorise them as something that’s not me. The people I *do* understand are people, those I don’t are humans. It’s hard to define but basically… I don’t see myself as similar enough socially to consider myself “human”, at least from a social standpoint. Now don’t get me wrong, I’m nothing like those otherkin folk, but I recognise myself as exceptionally abnormal. And there are times when it *is* a derogatory term, but only insofar as that I’m frustrated that *I* don’t get why other people do the things they do. It’s a jab at me in an indirect way. Anyway, I just felt the need to defend my strange way of talking, despite knowing my reason for saying humans has nothing to do with why James/Greg/Onision says humans.
@@animeluchia5405 i like picking up on a lot of our (mostly social) behaviours and relating them back to animal instincts in my head as a way of relieving myself of social pressure, 'cause sometimes we take those standards WAY too seriously, but the way greg is doing it is just so condescending, like we're still more than that. we're still more than just those "human creatures." its interesting how you see the word "human" as a social thing instead of a scientific thing. i always saw it as the other way around.
He’s that one kid that was DiFFeRenT frOm oThEr KiDs and he never grew out of that edgy megacringe stage of life, then infused the Essence of that into an incomprehensible fever dream of garbage topped with a sprinkle of atrocious grammar and spelling.
The part when James is beating the shit out of a bunch of jocks is hilarious because at one point, someone claiming to be one of Onion’s classmates recalled a story of how he decided to piss off a group of emo kids who then beat the fuck out of him. I imagine that was a pretty common occurrence, knowing Onision’s personality.
His dialogue isn’t split up into separate lines when a new character talks??? Bro we learned to do that in 7th grade. That’s just common sense. Has onision never read a book?
This is probably one of the best books ever, I mean my mother was able to use it so effectively in her English class as an example of how not to write a book that her students writing improved dramatically after seeing an example of what NOT to do, Thanks Onion boy for teaching the next generation how NOT to write a good book
Yea because he sees women with mental illnesses as prey to stalk: if you go through his relationship history, he makes a point out of specifically selecting for women with mental issues.
@@zawrator4457y’know it’s extremely crazy how many times people say “don’t judge a book by it’s cover”, and yet here we are, a dude who looked and talked like a creep, is a creep
Because James is a narcissistic fäggöt. He wanted his girlfriend be afraid little bit more so he could comfort, embrace and pet her little longer like a little dog.
I have a degree in psychology and forensics and I don't want to read this because I love my mental health and don't want to hate literature. Sorry for the grammar.
I've contemplated forcing my fellow psych friends to read this book with me. We can all suffer through the psychology of the MC, and I can suffer through every other aspect of the writing.
I'm working towards one (still very on, taking dual credit to transfer credits, but I have a deep love for psychology) , but I would not touch that shit with a ten foot pole it giddamn spikes on the end. I value not having to bleach my eyeballs.
I love writing my own stories, so i love watching book review like this because: a, it gives me an idea of what not to do b, it gives me authors to avoid c, it makes me feel better about ny writing.
Onion boy seems like someone to use the word "sheeple" unironically Edit: Also... "nearly saved the day" 😂😂 what about the guy that *actually* saved the day
I want to know how sitting there and pissing your pants is nearly saving the day? Not saying I would react any better in a school shooting. I honestly don't know how I'd react, but I wouldn't expect to be called a hero for standing there
one of the greatest lines in literature "how can I turn that frown upside poopy poo poop" really thought out and is greatly symbolic for the entire story.
One terrifying thing about this book, or rather about Greg in general, is his desire for control. He states that he wishes to give Abbi every happiness, wipe every tear, and well blahblahablahblahblahjsjh Every aspect of Abbi's life is downright horrible, and the author places her in a position where she can't contribute to her own happiness. Greg essentially, CONTROLS her happiness. He enjoys the fact that he is the sole contributor towards her well-being and emotional security. That's just something I want to put out there for anyone who's interested in reading this book. There are several scenes that support this. In short, several lines in this book hint towards the fact that he is a manipulative pervert who thinks that his influence over vulnerable people is romantic.
I think you are absolutely right! Abusers have that pattern even in their own fantasies, they are always in control and ideally the sole emotional connection that their emotionally dependant partner has. It's esentially what they seek out in real life. The point you made about not letting Abby do something for her own happines sumarises incredibly this type of relationships and tropes!
We need way more Slutshaming, tbh. I mean, nowadas, we legit have masses of people being convinced that theres absolutely nothing wrong and nothing 'telling' about sleeping around; which is of course utter nonsense and objectively wrong, but ok... ...
"He doesn't do anything significant for the rest of the book. I mean he dies at one point" is arguably the greatest quote i have ever heard.
Thats me in life lmao
kiyoushu fuck I just found my yearbook quote honestly lmao
Basically me.
kiyoushu if I was a book character that would be on my Wikipedia page
I want that qoute on a shirt
*Seth is shooting up the school, killing 52 students, making it the second worst mass shooting in American history*
James: ROLLERSKATE TIME
not to nit pick but it would actualy be the WORST mass shooting in THE HISTORY OF THE ENTIRE FUCKING WORLD
IMAGINE IF SETH WAS WEARING ROLLERSKATES WHEN HE SHOT UP THE SCHOOL SJDBDD
Connor Actually it wouldn’t. That record belongs to the Norwegian Breivik if we are talking about a single shooter. In which he killed 77.
Connor the worst mass shooting in American history was the Las Vegas shooting that killed 59, and as mentioned above the worst in the world happened in Norway
Gotta blade man.
A kid rollerskating into a school shooting and taking off the rollerskates because there's blood on the floor sounds like a really funny 4chan comic strip
Did he also wear his rollerskates while on the Bus?
That must have been looking interesting, seeing him getting off the Bus with rollerskates on.
It sounds like something out of a green text story.
>be James
>be epic sk8r boi
>Roller skates onto the bus
>Is the coolest dude but everyone hates me
>be angery
>Realize school is being shot up
>gottagofast.gif
>Mfw my epic skates can't go through the blood
>Sk8r boi life ruined
@Ryan Pitts why only into a Coma, punch him until there's just Marmelade left
@@MadeOfConfusion u forgot everyone clapped
Just a friendly reminder that the "barging in the significant other's classroom to make out in front of everyone" scene had already been done in another story: My immortal
My Immortal is a work of pure art in comparison to Stones to Abbigale
@@ichor2127 The name "My Immortal" is fitting because it will be alive forevermore. That's because it's not a work of pure art. It exceeds that. It's so brilliant that it is the Übermensch of literature. Calling incredible books like To Kill a Mockingbird Üntermensch when compared to My Immortal is beyond generous.
@@None-Trick_Pony this is the only correct opinion about My Immortal and I will stand by it.
My Immortal is actually pretty great if you realize that it is an amazing documentation of pre-TH-cam (and pre-socialmedia) internet culture
Also recreated in sonic school
"A loser in high school who never got over being a loser in high school".
That describes Onion all over. To the point he's still trying to "date" high school girls.
Ah, how cuttingly accurate...
Donna C
Onion boy: if she breaths she’s good enough to breed.
Ew, isn't he like 30?
He never got over not living out his hero and romantic fantasies during high school, and failed to realize afterward that that's all they could of been. He knows that he peaked in high school, and also knows that his peak wasn't very high.
And since that was the peak of his existence, he refuses to mature beyond that point. He is stuck in the mindset of a sophomore in high school, and he is allowed to maintain that mentality through the existence of the internet and the people on it. He lives out his high school romantic fantasies by doing what he does rating, looking at, and talking with his fans. They are mostly teenagers who are just like him: social outcasts at school, who live vicariously through his success online, and dedicate themselves to him because they see themselves in him.
Edit: Now that I reread this, it sounds REALLY pretentious, but I spent like 5 minutes on the comment, so I'm leaving it here.
@Lonely Pluto It's True.
di-did he just burn down a school for an unironic punchline
Uncreative Name Yes, yes he did.
Raine yes. Yes he am . ~Onision
I- oh my gosh he really did
Fucking Nero, here
and that's how it ends!
I guarantee, if it was a film (perish the thought) he would've stared into the camera saying that as the credits rolled
Me: *insecure about my writing*
Stones to Abbigale: *exsists*
Me: I am the God of literature and you shall bow to me.
Amen *bows*
"All hail our new writing god!"
What kind of artists doesn't feel insecure about their art being bad
I’m insecure about my drawings but damn I know this is a book and all but it was so bad it assured me I was at least good at what I do
You shouldn't base your self-worth or the quality of your work/craft on belittling someone elses or the person who made it.
But this is Onision and what he wrote should be a sin. So I'll allow it... 😂🤣
"If you can use anything apart from rape, don't use rape" is advice a lot of authors need to hear
Onision once said women can't rape
@@Michael97Moore that's in British law funny enough.
@@Texasp12 seriously.
@@Texasp12 british law doesn't believe anyone except white males can rape so that's no surprise
More pertinent advice would be "Find out what it is that you don't write about well... and then don't write about that thing." Specifying rape in this sentiment is gratuitous; nobody HAS to write a book about ANYTHING, so the option of not writing about rape is always there, so the logical conclusion of this injunction may as well be "NEVER write about rape." I see no reason why any subject matter, however grim, should be precluded as a literary theme. Any thoughts?
i'm sorry but i haven't thought of something funnier than "man roller skates into school to stop a mass shooting, but the floors are too sticky, so he takes them off and continues" in a VERY long time
*Heelies through door*
“I’ll save you, Milady!”
I looked at the comments just to see if someone noticed this. I'm not disappointed
@@mojoforthewin3069 oh god the image of a trench coat wearing fat man with an MLP shirt riding heelies is way too much!
@@Nerobyrne 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣💀
@@grungecrunge dont forget the fedora
"He took his rollerskates off because the floors are sticky with blood." You could have made the entire review about that one line, and we would have gotten the whole picture.
i paused for a second, letting the surrounding smells enter my receptors. my senses were heightened, pristine, cutting the air like a blade. i begun to remove the heely from my left foot; my whole being... whimpering, shaking, letting my toesies kiss the atmosphere, almost like an awakening, or a nightmare. i was already fighting back a violent orgasm as i moved onto the right foot heely, wrapped around my member, choking me like an erotic death serpent. the sin milk spilled from my third eye as i slowly slipped out of the shoe that was now blinking it's neon led lights passionately, as if to say, "thank you gre... jim... James. for our time together." i shed a single tear as i left the sweet lullabies of my rolling shoesy-shoes further and further behind. now wasnt the time to cry. now was the time to run up and watch a big buff man punch someone in the face and get jacked off by Obama
im so sorry everyone
@@sambibambi5409 what have you done :'(
@@sambibambi5409 what the hell, it’s like a copypasta but it isn’t copied from anywhere…
Wastebin direct paste from my heart...
Onision bragged-yes, bragged-that he hadn't read a book in fourteen years when he wrote Stones to Abbigale.
Who brags about that? I don't read very much, in fact I wish I read more. Is it supposed to be impressive that he wrote a book? A book I assume he thought was "great", that he didn't read for fourteen years?
That's... That's sad
@@AutumnSage98 I used to consider book reading a sign of intelligence, but not anymore. There's all sorts of intelligence that don't relate to that. Onision displays none of them and it shows.
My English Lit major heart shattered when I heard that...and the fact that his fans still adored him for that fact.
It really shines in his work.
That...actually makes sense. Studies have shown that reading makes you a more empathetic person. My god, this explains so much!
the mental picture of James _rollerskating_ into the school and then having to STOP and TAKE THEM OFF because there's too much blood on the floor is the funniest thing ever
We need way more Slutshaming, tbh.
I mean, nowadas, we legit have masses of people
being convinced that theres absolutely nothing
wrong and nothing 'telling' about sleeping around;
which is of course utter nonsense and objectively wrong, but ok...
Many people say it, so it must be right... or whatever...
...
@@loturzelrestaurant nigga wut
@@loturzelrestaurant the fuck are you going on about lmao
@@loturzelrestaurant dude any statistics you pull about it ruining relationships or whatever or complicated by birth control, and there's a theorem that since women prefer men by scent and birth control can mess with a women's sense of smell, there's a thrum that birth control, rather than promiscuity, can cause poor relationships. I mean it's unproven, but it's something to look into.
@@kylenielsen5083 Uhm... if you say so...
As a writer, this was really helpful because it's a guide on how not to write on basically every level. I feel illuminated.
I submitted myself to reading that abuse of English literature just so I could see what not to write.
thank god my writing wasn't that bad ^^;;
If you ever need to feel better here’s two more terrible titles: “Empress Theresa” and “Handbook for Mortals” both are godawful. Enjoy :)
@@nootnewt9323 Omg..... _Handbook for Mortals_ is so embarrassingly bad, and this coming from someone who hunts down Grade B movies, loved _The Room_ and _Reefer Madness_ and can never read enough bad science fiction! I'm gonna have to give _Empress Theresa_ a try lol.
Also one that's partially charming and really bad go for Insanity: a Jeff the killer fanfiction
@@whatteamwildcats4033 Ok...just googled that, re: Jeff the killer, and it looks like it might be on par with Handbook for Mortals and what's a few imploding brain cells, right? I think I'll give that one a try as well. Thnx for the suggestion.
Those colour coded tabs took you from "I'll bring your daughter home by 8" to " I'm your daddy now"
Think you had enough internet for a few decades
@@jongreenleaf1000 I've had enough internet for a life time but I'm not complaining (:
I'm half way through the video and i really hope this is hyperbole
🙄
@@bh7969
No
He was being completely and utterly serious
There was not one bit of hyperbolic humor in that line.
😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑😑
He tried to legally change his name to James Jackson.
To recap, he tried to legally rename himself after his self insert
And he named his daughter after said self insert’s love interest
The... W H A T ?
He did WHAT?
WTF?!
Onision has a daughter?!
Ew Ew ew
Nihilistic Cringe would be a good name for a band
Nihilistic Cringe is the folk punk band your ex made after you got in a fight because of his dislike your hobby (knitting)
As an early/pre-nihilist, Kierkegaard had pretty good writing.
Sounds better as a sub reddit
@@jamesrolfe9747
That's amazing and I agree fully
@@tintinismybelgian He wasn't really a nihilist
Is it bad that I love how the internet gangbang hates Onision? Mainly because he deserves it
Ur just jEAlouS ThAt hE HAs aLL thE FaCts!
I love watching Onision fail.
Same. The fact that he deserves it makes it much more satisfying. He also loves to act like he's above it all, and everyone that talks about him is obsessed with him. He doesn't take any criticism and just rants about it so its even better.
Completely off topic but you’re so pretty! 😋
Not at all.
because he deserves it.
When your book handles mental issues, abuse, and bullying worse than 13 reasons why, You screwed up.
:0 XD
We get a third season.....
The 13 reasons why book is way better. Screw the Netflix version.
Please tell me where the book was better than the series? It literally hits all the same points and gave twelve year old me some awful ideas about suicide.
@@misery8264
I'm just saying that the series on Netflix is a shit show. Can't I just express that I'd rather read the terrible book than watch the even worse show about a teen who was abused by the people she called her peers but then discovered everyone was just trying to use her?
“James is a better version of myself”
I’m sorry, a BETTER VERSION????
A rare moment of self-reflection from Onion Man
Well better times zero is still zero.
Considering who he is as a man I can say that yes James would be a better man than onion boy
Could hardly be worse, to be fair.
He says that the main character of his second book is the “darker” (note the use of darker instead of worse) version of himself and I’m entirely convinced that it’s because that character eats meat.
Stones to Abigail sounds like the name of a terrible emo band
*Abbigale.
Must not disrespect onisions broken wife or whatever.
Right? Lol
Almost as cringy as Hawthorne Heights
@@eugheh6172 LMFAO! That's savage. Love it.
TBH I still don't understand the title. What does he mean by "Stones?" I don't recall there being any stones at all in the book.
"But, UNLIKE the school shooting, this actually has an effect on James,"
Excuse me wHAT-
WAiT A FUcKInG MinUTe
@@sondor4375 What ThE fuCk HaVe YoU brOuGhT UpoN thIs CurSeD LaNd?
Oh my god Obama was literally there and then everybody clapped for Greg
“Yeah Obama totally came to my school”
“And everybody cla-“
“EVERYBODY CLAPPED”
He didn't even do anything loll just looked for the girl xD
Thanks greg
Yay for Greg- I mean James! And then all the girls in the school walked up to Greg- I mean James, and then they all asked him if he could rate their appearances out of 10. And then all the 10s had sex with Greg- I mean James
I wouldnt clap for either of them
Crazy how everyone who has reviewed Onision's books is super attractive.
Thanks for the ego boost. XD
I agree. I agree. I agree. :)
That's probably another reason why he hates them.
strange aeons for sure, and krimsonrogue is cute, but that one british guy (i think?) was meh... 6/10 at best
Is this just a reunion of bisexuals
The protagonist never refers to anyone as a person because Greg is a narcissistic sociopath. He doesn't view other people as actual people. Every other character in the book is either an obstacle, tool, or object of sexual desire.
Though, that would make an interesting antagonist worldview.
What's bizarre is that, if the book were INTENTIONALLY written from that perspective, it would've been WAY better.
@@allyportman8009 hold on you just made the character better
I love how either Greg or his self insert characters routinely do every single thing they hate other people doing.
If you look at his response to Strange ÆONs review of Stones to Abigail with this mindset, it makes a lot more sense. It actually really explains his attempts to demonize her with the whole “dead friend” thing, when really, he was just getting pissy over the fact that someone dared to mock his writing.
I flew through the nondescript halls on my Heelys through a sticky sea of blood. There was no time to put on my knee and elbow pads as Abbi's life was maybe, possibly on the line. I arrived at the cafeteria to see carnage. There were body parts everywhere and I could hear the sounds of the crazed monkeys that escaped from the Zoo getting ever closer; there
was no time to waste. So I wasted time, and decided to watch my teacher almost get shot, the raging, sociopathic, hate-boner growing in my Jeggings.
Mrs. Stanley screamed at him again, "You are an embarrassment! A disgrace! How dare you, you scum!?" Upon hearing her verbal condemnation without hesitation, I watched her increased perspiration and agitation turn to desperation, as she saw his perturbation; she couldn't see the differentiation of her irrationalization within this provocation that would lead to her life's discontinuation, or at least result in hospitalization. I stood by to watch this altercation on a distant table, the elevation giving a better acclimatization for the coming domination that filled me with jubilation. Seth whipped his MP5-N toward her like a sword being unsheathed, time again felt like it had drastically slowed as his weakened arm struggled to steady his aim. Anyway, Jason at this point runs in and beats Seth into a coma and stares intimidatingly at the aforementioned, unrelated monkeys and they decide to leave calmly, giving a polite, synchronized bow before exiting. All in all, I can definitely say that it was a pretty eventful Tuesday.
That was amazing! XD
My favorite comment ever. Hilarious!
Zack Benedict that was the most “ations” I’ve seen used in the same couple sentences.
OMG if that's actually how the book was written I would read it!
Zack Benedict this is a masterpiece 😂😂😂
Idea: r/anythingbetterthanonision where everyone posts their writing with confidence, because the only requirement is that it must be better than these books.
That would be really awesome
That... would be a pretty low bar to clear. That said, I have actually read at least one actual book that was even less coherent than this one, and coincidentally it was also self-published. At least the author of that one had the excuse of being seventeen.
9 months late but this is a great idea imo
I would make a reddit account just for that
@@proonv5513 nice to see this comment gaining traction again 😂
I feel like a book called “Stones to Abigail” could be a mystery novel about the protagonist being close with a girl named Abigail, and then she suddenly goes missing. The protagonist then receives some weird notes attached to rocks, and the notes give the protagonist hints on where Abigail is and how to find her(aka Stones leading to Abigail).
Thats way too cool of a story for onision to write. But it does sound interesting! Id actually read something like that.
I really like that idea. Sounds like it could be a vibrant story with the potential for some really dark twists, like The Lovely Bones or Bridge to Terabithia.
@@KrimsonRogue Also, that weird puzzle thing to get abbigales phone number in the original can be used to show that they have an affinity for puzzles in this idea, so it sets up that they both like puzzles and maybe even lay the groundwork for any future puzzles
In my head I just came up with a possible mini arc for this hypothetical rewrite: James goes to Abbi’s father when the notes reveal to him about his abusive nature, and his wife who apparently abandoned him and his daughter. James decides to interrogate her father, who is still like this hateful drunkard, but we soon learn that Abbi’s mom never left. She was an alcoholic like her father, only she had unfortunately died thanks to her addiction. He did his best to have the funeral pass under the noses of anyone else involved in her life, and twisted a lie that she ran way, because he was aware they were addicts, and didn’t want the last memory her friends and family to have be that she was an alcoholic. And it has a sorta chilling line like, “Ya see James, Abbi couldn’t have left to find her mom...because she really didn’t go that far,” implying she’s buried in the local cemetery
when i heard about this title it first reminds me of a rock grave
Abigail is already dead but her death is violent and mysterious ( probaly cause by a serial killer that on the loose and the police fail to catch). MC is someone close to Abigail and try to solve her death and revenge the killers. Each piece he able to solve is like a stone set to build her grave and let her soul and himself really rest in piece.
This book is a lot like a naked banana.
It lacks appeal.
TheCrimsonIdol987 take my like you punny monster lol
Okay thats actually a good one
TheCrimsonIdol987 Fuck you, take the like and go.
That was one of the greatest puns I ever heard
Well, he is... Uh...
..
A banana
This books sounds like it was written by the entirety of r/incel
At first, I was tempted to disagree, but I think I get it. The main character, like an average incel, simultaneously loathes himself and blames society for all his shortcomings.
That’s not even a real subreddit
@@seuvoro670 he is a cucc a very self righteous one
@@Alex-gw5et it was, I believe reddit had to take it down because it was promoting hate speech (like actual hate speech, not Tumblr hate speech interpretation)
spyro2060 LAJ you’re probably thinking of r/braincel
Greg is in his 30s, his target /main audience are girls 14 and under and he's writing teenage sex scenes. I'm not saying anything but draw from that what you will taking into consideration his "alleged" past.
I knew something felt off... I now understand why the thought made me uncomfortable... Yikes...
Lmao yeah. The dude basically groomed a 14 y/o named Sarah
reconsider this including the underage sex scenes he writes between his 11/12 year old self insert with his 16 year old sister in the third book... greg is a little fucked up to say the least
Suck Me Greg is a gross and weird dude. However, a lot of YA authors are in their 30s and are writing some sex scenes for kids with kids.... (kids meaning teenagers)
Remember this guy has a kid.
Onionsan has done the world a great dead with his books. He's given countless writers the confidence to publish their own work by setting the bar infinitely low.
A great dead? I suppose he does make one die inside.
I know you meant to say "deed" but "dead" is so fitting with him lmao, please never correct this comment
@@carolyns4519 Agreed.
Unfortunately his books are so bad using them as junk journal fodder would be giving them too much attention
@@badger6728 32d 39:03 èr
Don't apologise for the kitties making noise they're just running around because they're happy
Or just feeling the need to zoom around loudly.
Abigail McCarthy z O O m
I can not thumbs up.
So here you go 👍
@@abigailmccarthy9982 the cats are zoomers lol
Apologise for not giving them enough screentime. Not allowing people to see your cats enough is a serious crime.
"And Matthew doesn't do anything significant for the rest of the book
...He dies at one point"
Story of my life
@@mathewricafrente5984 Can relate. The dying part was specially terrible.
Just the fact that Greg apparently changed his name to James recently makes this so much worse...
Also changed his DAUGHTERS name to Abbigale.... i try not to think too deeply about this fact.
wakeupdonnie ehhhhh that’s a whole new level of creepy!!! Sadly, I can’t say I’m surprised it’s Onision tho
I thought it couldn’t get any worse
InternetMan InternetMan When you think he’s hit rock bottom, you’re always wrong.
Oh god I just cringed so hard I almost fell into my own asshole
As someone who was actually accused of and interrogated as a "possible threat to the school" for liking a song- saying "I wish everyone would disappear" is 100% something a teacher would report you for.
(The song was The Balled Of Sarah Berry from 35mm, my teacher reported me for talking about the plot of it and not only was I interrogated, so we're the kids who sat near me)
I love that song SO much. It’s brutal, but the fact that it could happen irl is even more terrifying. The fact that so many people died over a dumb little school contest basically, that don’t even do anything in a long run, is actually very interesting. I’m pretty sure it’s about just how much the person can be pushed to literal murder, purely in attempt to be this “perfect” person. THE prom queen. Anyway, I could talk about this song for a while, it’s so good
I was threatened with potential expulsion in high school because someone I knew anonymously said people jamming up the hallways while everyone else is trying to get to class makes them murderous. Like, typical and definitely not actually threatening high schooler talk. So I got in trouble because the comment was on a website I helped run that was critical of the school administration and I potentially knew who posted it (I did in fact know, but the administration wasn’t aware that I knew). Really, I’m pretty sure it was just an excuse to shut down dissent because the website made the admin’s shady actions publicly available
True, on my last year of high school I was accused of being a shooter threat and had my locker checked for... doing a presentation condemning gun violence in schools...
High school teachers are just so so dumb sometimes
@nathannightmare1604 what??
@corahtheskeleton8062 "gun violence in Schools is bad."
"Omg, you're a school shooter!"
It didn't hit me, until you reached the 'poopy poo poop' line from Davis, that you - and others - actually had to go into this book blind and read things like that with your own two eyes.
Thank you, and I am _so sorry_
I think everyone watching this video who hasn't done such a thing beforehand feel sorry for these people.
"As I walked into school that morning, I saw a man dressed as a security guard... I deduced that this man must've been a security guard."
its the equivalent of "ah the floor is made out of floor"
The run-on sentence is a run-on sentence.
Yes, he's so fucking into himself, he'd probably praise himself for thinking that way
@@KaiKrimson56 the run on sentence was a run on sentence which is what happens when someone doesn't put any punctuation between clauses phrases or ideas when they should which makes you read it like you're about to pass out **INHALE**
I looked at my computer and saw an open TH-cam window. With my brilliant intellect I deduced it was TH-cam.
the abbi character portrays every teenage girlfriend onision ever had (and all his gf's were underage when he met them).
broken emo girls who desperately look for a lead in their life and then find him to controll every aspect of it and belittle their broken soul and feed them to be even more sad, not fixing them
They’re not emo and they’re not goth. They’re traumatized. People whom are abused often fall right back into another abuser’s wiles and charms.
And that's why James is our hero. He's still kind of abusive, but he's obviously the good guy because he isn't "beat your pregnant girlfriend then shoot up her school when she dumps you" abusive.
@@TwoBs The feels when: you dump your boyfriend and he DOESN'T shoot up a school. It's like: did you even love me?! (sarcasm btw). Greg completely understands the nuances of adult relationships, he is a well rounded completely stable individual, with monk like discipline..... NOT.
The letter James sent to Abbi reminds me of the anti cyber bullying PSA my school forced my class to watch where a guy gives a love letter to a girl and she sends it to her friend, who then posts it online, but the letter was so creepily detailed and stalkerish (I don’t remember the whole thing but apart of it was like “I’ve sat behind you for years, when you walk through the halls I feel faint”) that when the PSA was done my entire class was like “he deserved it”
@Babba Yaaga that’s not what the teacher made it seem like
Do not tell another people if a creepy guy stalks you, it's bullying? Just insane.
How did the teacher react?
HUNTER PFP SPOTTED
Why did your teacher think that was a good psa to show? There are probably better ones out there.
what's up i'm greg, im like 40, and i never learned how to write
(edit: every time someone likes this comment I lose a day off of my life)
I uNDerStoOd tHat RefeReNCE
Is that from vine? Lol XD
Lmfaoo
@@ZENGHAKTIV its the "hi im steve , im 16 and i never learned how to read" vine
@@enriquecabrera2137 It's actually "Hi I'm Jared, I'm 19 and I never learned how to read"
First video of this guy I’ve seen, and I’ve learned three things:
1. Greg wrote a book
2. Greg wrote a bad book
3. Greg wrote more bad books
That's what I have learnt after finding out about him yesterday, that and he has a You Tube channel.
4. He absolutely hates when anyone critiques it.
The more you learn about him, the more you’ll hate him.
Don't bother learning anything else, ignorance really is bliss in this case.
Jrezky agreed :(
What I learned from this video:
So Onision wrote a book and *AWWWW KITTY*
Me
I'm half-convinced that Onision was a science experiment to create the most socially radioactive human being on the planet.
Ok...but like....is NO ONE going to talk about why the hell he had rollerblades....at all...???
Wasn't he planning on going to school...???
Didn't he ride the bus...????
How did he even have room....?????
I have a pretty decently sized backpack...all I can fit in there is books...maybe a waterbottle...(if I'm feeling determined)
So how did he fit rollerblades in his backpack...???
Did he just not have any books in there...???
Did he have a part time job at Sonic....???
Why even write in a rollerblading scene.....????
*Plays Escape From The City in earrape*
How did he get off the bus without falling?
Now I have this image of the idiot faceplanting out of the bus because he was trying to look cool with his rollerblades.
Bthsr71 if that doesn’t sum up onision i don’t know what does XD
You can tie the roller blades to the exterior of the backpack.
Abbie has a bad home life?
Sounds like Mr. Struggle to me
Did you just
Oh dear God... Mr struggle... He shouldn't date her
dude that’s sugar gay
As long as she's seeking insight from a godlier woman at church then she's totally dateable!
Dude you're being sugar gay right now
Krim...honey, it's not worth it.
TheHeroOfTomorrow no it isn’t and hi are you gonna make another review soon? Love you’re work!
yeah it really isn't. He's gonna try anyways...bless em.
MCU Shue Well, I just put up a new one, so there’s that.
@@TheHeroOfTomorrow He's determined though.
Agreed, my friend. it makes first drafts look like Austen or O'Conner
There’s nothing wrong with having an protagonist with a superiority complex and more than a chip on his shoulder. Flawed characters are interesting characters. However, if their flaws aren’t treated as such or they down change then you have a shitty self insert at best.
All of Gregs protagonists are like if Peter Parker was bitten by the spider but never lost uncle ben and never learned that important lesson of responsibility, just abusing his power to take what he wants.
imagine *The Big Lebowski* from Walter's perspective and told straight faced
Ah yes, the shower. Because when I talk about past trauma, I want to be literally naked and vulnerable, because that makes it easier, right? Seriously, the one time I told someone about my trauma, it was in a car, windows rolled up, doors locked, in a safe and secure area. When you expose something like that to someone, you want everything else around you to be safe, because your mind will be going to a place that wasn't safe for you, and if you do that in the wrong circumstances, it could actually traumatize you further.
This is Onion we're talking about here...
You make excellent, sound, rational, and logical points, all of which are anathema to the Onion's way of thinking.
Same I’ve told mine in safe spaces, I don’t think there is ever a time where I would do it in the most vulnerable position I could be in tbh. I’m sure some do but it’s not my first thought when I think maybe I should open up about my trauma
Damn, explains why I never wanna tell a therapist about my trauma. I never feel safe in those places. I know you’re “supposed to” but I never did.
I feel like he wrote that bit in just to make the scene more sexual and thinking it would arouse the reader. It's terrible. When I told my most truthworty friends about my past with self harm, we were sitting in a room, behind a closed door, safe in the house. This scene in the book is just disgusting.
I’ve told people about trauma in:
-online PMs
-Therapists Offices
-Safe bedroom
NEVER NAKED SO I CAN FLING OPEN THE CURTAIN AND SCREAM
‘Look at my body!’
Seth: has fight with girlfriend
"BeTtEr ShOoT uP tHe ScHoOl!"
Well, to be fair, that's how many school shooters are motivated. They think women collectively owe them romance, and get angry when they don't get it.
@@TrackpadProductions at least there's that
@@TrackpadProductions name one schoolshooter that actually did that because of a girl
West Nickel and Virginia Tech come to mind. I didn't say one girl in particular. And hoo boy, if we drop the "school" part and talk about mass shootings in general in the US, the list goes on and on.
@@TrackpadProductions You said it like all of these people died because some guy couldn't smash. Good examples, fair enough, but still saying that "list goes and goes" isn't convincing anyone.
If Onision is your son, you're going to pay for a second house if that means you can get rid of him that way. Let's just be realistic here.
If onision is anyone's son, physical abuse is actually fine.
I agree with Joshiro. This might even be a result of what happens when you abuse your child.
Nah just kill it
matthew garcia I was going to make a joke about getting an abortion 417+ months after conception, but I couldn’t think of anything funny. To make up for it, here’s a comment saying I was going to make a joke about getting an abortion 417+ months after conception but couldn’t think of anything funny.
Maybe that's why his mother is insane. If Onision was my son, I'd admit failure as a human being.
"I was kind of a loser in highschool and *I* wanna beat this guy up"
As a girl who is currently kind of a loser in highschool, I concur.
Hope your better today.
bruh hope you're alright, school can be hell
As a fellow highschool girlfailure, Greg- Sorry, James is absolutely the kinda guy I would've kicked under my desk. Hope you're doing okay.
I was bullied in middle school and I would still kick the shit out of him
I feel like no matter how much of a loser you are or aren't, everyone has a moderate desire to beat this guy up
*onision while writing this book*- “Reality can be whatever I want”
Adv1269 *Krimson reading said book* reality is often disappointing
Funny that's the plot of his third dumpsterfire.
Me to Onision: your reality is bland and disgusting
Book 3 really makes this comment come to life
Cue the Onision version of the Phineas and Ferb opening (doesn't exist I don't think)
>rolls up on a school shooting wearing roller skates
_B A D A S S_
*railgrinds in crushing fear
*rolls around traffic cones In a serpentine manner*
After riding the bus
+2 dodge bonus to ranged attacks
Does this count as self-harm?
Yes, a thousand times so
Watching this video is 100000% considered a suicide note, use this as your goodbye to the world.
I hope so.
Absolutely.
Yes it does
To be fair, I’d say the school guidance counselor character is actually pretty realistic - one time I had to miss school for a week because I had to go to a mental hospital bc I tried to kill myself and when I came back to school I learned that my school counselor had told a bunch of kids’ parents where I was and by the time I came back other kids were making fun of me for having to be hospitalized 😭
That’s terrible, but not exactly the same
Oof, major HIPPA violation on the counselor's part. Could probably sue them for that.
It still isn't really realistic. Not denying your experience, but how many councilors are being gossiping assholes or beating up school kids for being raped? Not a whole lot, I'd imagine. It's one of those things where it could happen, but it's still contrived and it's practically cartoon villain behavior.
I’m very sorry about that, but don’t do all school counselors like that,
Mine saved my life back in sixth grade so 🤷🏾
My high school guidance counselor was one of the most uncaring and unsympathetic faculty I'd ever dealt with in school. Probably second only to some of my gym teachers. I'd refuse to see her-the mark of a good counselor, of course. Pretty much everybody assigned to her felt the same way. It's baffling how these people get these jobs. While your experience is far, _far_ worse than anything I went through, it's depressingly unsurprising to me.
I hate it when writers like onion use really formal language to sound smarter or edgier. "Inspire some acknowledgement of my existence" ???? who says that? like just say "I wanted her to notice me" or something geez
Hi this comment is two months old but I'm just now watching these reviews
But anyways that phrase sounds like something I'd use for a psychopathic character or for an angry character in the middle of an argument.
The only time I can find use for a sentence like that is when my character is for some reason a walking thesaurus. But even then, it's situational.
hi hungry I'm rat I feel like that line would be a joke in every other book
Lmao he sounds like a cheesy ass villain
Sounds like something I would say tbh
James: is the very embodiment of r/iamverysmart r/incels and r/niceguys
Readers: *critisism*
Onisions: is this like a personal attack or something
Yes. Bc your self insert is a horrible wrong person and what do it say about you, gregory
Reddit moment
r/thathappened gold
“You’re a terrible person because you criticized my book!”
Not even just a personal attack. It's also a attack on his dead friends.
I love how Onision got all heated about Aeons criticizing the annoying best friend character he wrote because he's supposedly an homage to his real-life dead friend, and yet in the book he's just killed on a freeway. Some homage, huh?
Right?! And the reason he got angry was the dumbest thing I've ever heard--she was criticizing a badly-written character, and he tried to make it sound like she was criticizing an actual person! I felt SO MUCH SECONDHAND EMBARRASSMENT for him watching that video, just like "omg he so doesn't get it, but he thinks he's owning her with, I dunno, facts and logic? And lots of really weird name-calling???" It was a train wreck 😆
44:48 I performed music for the FLOTUS when she made a campaign appearance at my university back in 2016. Secret Service was there 48 hours in advance and locked down the sports arena. We couldn't bring our instruments with us on the same day but instead had to check them in and leave them with the Secret Service 24 hours before the event started. The ONLY things students (including us) were allowed to bring to the event were our wallets and our cellphones (both of which were checked again upon entry). And of course, there was the general rule of thumb that for every Secret Service Agent and canine we could see, there were three that we couldn't.
TL;DR The President and the First Lady don't just "go" places.
What’s flotus
@@asrieldreemurr1988 First Lady of the United States
For real, does Greg think it's the 19th century
Casual reminder that Onision, a former military man, doesn’t know firearms.
I don't think getting thrown out of basic for failing to carry 70 pounds counts as being a military man.
@@zhangjao6328 I think he did get past basic, but had to drop out of SERE training because he refused to kill a rabbit. I think Angry Cops made a video about it. Onion did complain about carrying 70 pounds of gear too.
@@angygremlin4423 Wait, THAT was Onision. I never even realized when I watched Cops’ video. 🤣
Airforce. Though I'd expect even the air force got some form of training with small arms.
@@zhangjao6328 no, he graduated Basic. As I understand it he served at least 3 years. He washed outta SERE school, which is a very intense training course.
At any rate, he absolutely should have a reasonable grasp on weaponry and the use of.
Furthermore, this mass shooting had 50 deaths and 4 injuries? That is so ridiculous. Generally speaking you'll have 4-5 wounded per dead.
I haven't read this book nor do I know anything as about Onision but this particular comment thread caught my eye...
I guess I'm just bored and lonely and trying to convince myself that I'm perfectly normal and know how to socialize.
I'm totally normal, mom! I participated in a TH-cam discussion about deranged lunatic who wrote a really awful book!
Yup. Totally normal person.
Just from the first fifteen minutes, this sounds like Onision tried to cast himself as the protagonist of a high school harem anime. Except that even the most awful high school harem anime protagonists are infinitely less vile than Onion-senpai. Their worst crime is usually utter blandness, not sexualizing preteen girls.
For some reason I read “utter baldness”
*sexualizing preteen suicidal abuse victims
Onision High School Host Club? xDD
Rohan D I watched Strange Aeons’ review, and as soon as I saw the first paragraphs I knew the book was written by a textbook sociopath, without a doubt.
so basically Onion created Masters of Ragnarok crossed with School days (without the ending where Makoto/Greg dies and subtracting the isekai of Ragnarok)
Opinion/prediction: Onision isn’t going to react as strongly to your critique as he did to Strange Aeon’s because you’re a man. Not that he enjoys criticism from anyone, but he seems to get more upset by women’s critiques than men’s. Except Shane Dawson. Great video, btw.
ergogrrl prediction: he’s gonna call Krim a pedophile
@@kaydwessie296 Or a murderous, pro-gun loon.
Prediction: when he mentions the typos onision is just going to say "Oh YeAh? WeLl I wAs An EngLiSh MaJor!!"
especially if he is attracted to the woman criticizing him.
and also if she represents and reaches more effectively the age group of women he wants control over more that he does.
Him having a tantrum when Abby confessed what she said is one of the few things in the book that seemed real. The actual Onision is a complete sociopath who lacks any form of empathy, sympathy, and remorse, so he probably would react like that. Especially considering how abusive he is to those in a relationship with him.
Conspericy theory: onision wrote 3 books so that he would have 3 videos to strike for anyone who reviewed his books
Interesting
Not into conspiracy theories myself, but considering how Gurgle operates, this makes a whole lot of sense....
It’s not impossible nao
💀
Uuugh... You're probably going to mention this, but Onision thinks people shouldn't criticize his book because it's "based off of real people." Which is pure idiocy in my opinion because HE wrote those characters, no matter how "real" they are.
Exactly! If someone criticises the characters, that doesn't' mean they are criticising the real-life people those characters are based on. It's a criticism of Greg's writing abilities, since he failed to properly represent that person in the book.
cg standing Exactly!
@Brandon Roberts "Real Fantasies" is a bit of an oxymoron my dude, not to mention, he didn't exactly accept criticism?? I remember specifically with Strange Aeons he got mad at her for criticizing his book. Said that she had no right to criticize his book because it was based off of real people. And that's no excuse, because again, the writer's abilities is what brings out the best of their book.
You can have an absolutely garbage plot but your characters are amazing enough to save your book.
@@shy2infinity He was talking about the writer of SAO. That show is a garbage fire for like 4 seasons and then improves suddenly.
that moment when he said to someone that they were basically attacking the real people his characters are based on, when they were poking fun at said poorly written characters... soooo cringey
Cringe culture is dead but apparently Onion Man is a necromancer
This is legitimately the best comment on this video-pure poetry
wtf is "cringe culture"
@@katatonikbliss basically the practice of making fun of people for being cringe. The term is a pejorative used to specifically describe calling something cringe when it doesn’t effect you (like when people used to call Minecraft and Roblox cringe) but Greg is so bad that he made people return to it
@@katatonikbliss cringe culture also almost exclusively targeted children/young teens, girls and nd people
@@validark "nd people"?
The worst part about the firearm misclassification is that Greg was in the military
"You had one job!"
Pretty sure he dropped out of basic training.
He was in the military as much as I was in the Red Cross by taking a first aid course in high school.
@@DonVigaDeFierroSadly no, he did three years in the USAF
@@DonVigaDeFierro No, he got booted after filing for conscientious objector status because he knew it'd would get him kicked out, and he was a weak-willed little bitch boy who didn't like that being in the AF was actual work, and this was his way of getting himself kicked out without committing a crime. Also worth noting that he faked suicidal tendencies as his first try at getting booted. When it didn't work he immediately went for the previously mentioned idea, as well as making YT videos *in uniform* speaking ill of the government and military, because that's a violation of the UCMJ and he thought he'd get booted for that too. Dude was the definition of a scumbag airman. Makes me sick that he thinks he deserves respect for his shit "service".
"Seth found out that Abbie was pregnant, which resulted in him punching her stomach several times."
Ngl I screamed at that part WTF
SayaKuro12 that’s so awful. One way to establish someone as an abusive jerk I guess, but it’s not like James is any better than Seth so it doesn’t really help anyway. Oops Greg!
i thought that part was really unnecessary and frankly just too much. i don’t understand why abbi has to have every possible abusive thing happen to her so greg can ‘save’ her. and it’s really insensitive to anyone that has been unfortunate enough to have that happen to them. especially since that then leads the guidance councillor to believe abbi got an abortion and hate her for it, which is extremely unprofessional and unrealistic. much like anyone being unfortunate enough to have all of this happen to them before they’ve even graduated high school. using all of that trauma as a plot point to fulfil your own saviour fantasy is frankly sick
@@chaoticcake390
I don't like the shite story but everyone should write whatever they want since its fiction. If you read the warnings and still complain then I'm sorry for you.
Stop policing fiction.
@@razan8308 that person isn't "policing fiction," they're just stating THEIR OPINION about how gross it is that a 30-year-old with a fetish for teen girls wrote a miscarriage subplot into a savior fantasy story.
You realize that you're actually policing another person's opinion, right?
@@TheAdrift
If you go by that; then you're policing MY opinion too. So how about you take several seats now?
When a character overuses the word "human(s)" it can make it seem like the character is NOT human which is a problem if the character is supposed to be human.
Though it can come in handy if you're writing a character and want to hint that they're not human.
Onision is an alien is not the hot take i came for, but im here for it.
@@MrsTold I mean, if you've read his third book, you're not far off
Knowing Onision, he would've claimed that it's cause of James' "world view" or something stupid.
to be fair, greg's another self insert is an all poweful entity stronger than literal god, so you're kinda right
@@SandraCuriel-mr1qn Yeah well unless onision put his script through a translator 600 times, he's had always spoken English, and there's no excuse.
To everyone out there: if you didn’t write Stone’s to Abbigail, you have no right to think you are the worst writer in the world. That title goes to Onion Boy.
STA is his best book.
....... Which isn't saying a lot.
Any book is better than this tbh, I get the joke but I just wanted to say that EVEN I could write something better than this
I don't think he's the very worst, but to be worse than him would require some actual conscious effort put into it... Greg just happens to do it naturally.
Norman Boutin wants to have a word with you
@@think_of_a_storyboard3635 You did. With your comment.
It’s a shame because “stones for Abigail” would be a pretty sick band name. Too bad it was taken by captain onion man.
Nah. It gives Falling In Reverse energy. Thats not good.
Onion boi: like it’s your fault for being abused. If it were me I wouldn’t let it get to me.
Also Onion boi: WAAHH!!! Someone online criticized my book!!!😭😭😭😭
@Dam Jackass He's a bigger train wreck than a foul-beaked abused cockatoo. At least the latter is deserving of love and a second chance.
GrainA Salt lmao the HYPOCRISY IM DYING
And let's not forget he alleges that Sarah raped his wife/husband.
Didn't go to the police, didn't get her to go to the police, didn't even make a phone call.
In the words of Strange Aeons: R.I.P. English literature we had a good run
*wails*
onision: you know I had to do it to those literature niggas
"a sweaty neckbeard guy who uses the term 'm'lady' unironically" LMAO
The worst part is that Abbigale was a real person and this is Onision writing a fantasy about her.
It's even worse that IRL they never even dated, she turned him down and they had no relationship and apparently he can't let that go
“Howdy, love the glasses”
Is my new pick up line, even for people who don’t wear glasses.
Gracious Rosebud Howdy, love the glasses
@@Dysanii Howdy, love the glasses
@@n0odles86 howdy, love the glasses
ESPECIALLY for people who don't wear glasses.
Howdy, love the glasses!
I just watched an interview with Onision's classmate from high school and in that interview he mentioned how Onision was trash talking a group of metal heads and he ended up getting jumped.
The fact that he wrote that he beat up a group of jocks in the book makes it more hilarious.
Link here: th-cam.com/video/l8fYv9Yht1I/w-d-xo.html
I also like how Onion boy put an M16 in the book, with no concept of the size and weight of the thing, having a teenager aim it with one hand. Guy claims to have been in the military himself, I think he washed out of basic training.
@@spooky6703 Seriously. What kid has arms the size of 80s Arnold Schwarzenegger and the dexterity of any level 20 Dungeons & Dragons Rogue?
@@spooky6703 No, he made it through basic training and served for a little in South Korea. He tried to become special forces (I believe that what it is called) and then got kicked out for refusing to kill a rabbit, though some believe it was because he spoke against the military while in uniform (which is illegal).
@@createdbychanel8960 He flunked out of the special forces training, but that's not why he was kicked out of the military. He was kicked out for acting out on purpose up to and including stripping naked inside his CO's office to "Prove he's human."
@@raptoid2518 I remember that, I couldn't remember if it was the exact reason though.
“Based on personal experience”
So... the personal experience of an super adult manchild who dates, abuses, and rapes possible vulnerable women.
... Who WOULDN’T want to read that?
/CRINGE
Oh look, the story is about some loner dude that “no one understands” who latches unto a vulnerable girl, who’s surprised?
.....
The cringe is real, folks. The cringe is real.
Ted Bundy's how to guide to dating
@Hurr durr da joos hurr durr found the incel
I forget incels really like speak like this unironically
Hurr durr da joos hurr durr I either found the troll or an incel
....
Is there a difference?
Onision roller skating into school but having to take them off because there's too much blood is incredibly grotesque, horrifying, but mainly hilarious.
Most of this book sounds like it comes from r/thathappened.
I was waiting for a "and everybody clapped"
And the name of that teacher? Albert Einstein.
@@whywhy8324 I hate that I'm not surprised.
You do realize that's the entire point of fiction, right?
@@nuclearpotato4073 To name characters after famous scientists (for no reason)? It comes off as cheesy, at least in my opinion, but to each their own.
Oh you like Strange Aeons. Neat. It’s weird when TH-camrs you like like watching other TH-camrs you like.
Right??
this is their biz. Ytbers have a complex network of people they keep tabs on, for eventual collabs and such if their work lends in that direction. It's a pretty cool market to observe
There is a girl who reviewed his first two books so far.
Edit: Michelle Michaelis
And Sorrow:)
What was her response to Onision?
"[T]he speed at which she attaches [etc...] suggest prior sexual abuse"-- good for you for knowing that BPD etc. are trauma disorders. It's amazing how few people see any connection between early trauma and lasting behaviors / personality traits / etc.
Yes and victims are often shamed (you "wh0re") or left alone and the cycle of abuse goes on. It is easy for a group to mock vulnerable people- especially when they are isolated and don't speak up due to severe trauma, guilt and shame.
It’s also worrying when people interpret this as love
Partly blame the people that lie about having those sorts of disorders, or at least use those disorders as sympathy romps and for exploiting other people. It really is a vicious cycle because both sides suffer because of people like them. The latter lose their empathy (and likely other things like cash) to con artists who prey upon them, and the people who actually have disorders and aren't entitled end up being pushed away because of it. Then we try to spread awareness, but we can't get enough of it right and hurt the cause. And then when we finally gain back empathy for those sorts of people, the con artists come right back to start the death spiral all over again, but worse each and every time. The only way this bullshit will end is it people like Onision are put in their proper place and aren't allowed to keep milking the public while driving the people they're impersonating to suicidal depression or homicidal rage.
@@gracekim1998 on the flip side, it's not fair when people act like it means one can't love / their love is fake / etc (if you mean from the victim).
BPD can manifest in people without significant trauma, or with trauma unrelated to sexual abuse.
"James comes across as a sweaty neckbeard guy who uses the term 'm'lady' unironically." YELLING
HOLLERING
*BELLOWING*
WHEEZING
Nadi B SCREECHING!
Reeing
he refers to people as "humans" or "creatures" to detach himself from everyone else and to seem "woke" by looking at everything from a broad "philosophical" (if that makes sense) perspective instead of a focused social or cultural one. he wants to relate everything he observes back to the way he thinks the world works and the way the FoOLiSH people around him act. it makes him seem DiFFeReNT.
*EDGELORD*
I don’t know why Onision calls others humans, though I imagine he’s looking down on them, but I can personally say why I call people humans in my head or to other people. It’s because I’m on the spectrum and as such I feel so out of place with those around me. I don’t understand neurotypical people and categorise them as something that’s not me. The people I *do* understand are people, those I don’t are humans. It’s hard to define but basically… I don’t see myself as similar enough socially to consider myself “human”, at least from a social standpoint. Now don’t get me wrong, I’m nothing like those otherkin folk, but I recognise myself as exceptionally abnormal. And there are times when it *is* a derogatory term, but only insofar as that I’m frustrated that *I* don’t get why other people do the things they do. It’s a jab at me in an indirect way. Anyway, I just felt the need to defend my strange way of talking, despite knowing my reason for saying humans has nothing to do with why James/Greg/Onision says humans.
In other words, it sort of reveals his sociopathic tendencies.
@@animeluchia5405 i like picking up on a lot of our (mostly social) behaviours and relating them back to animal instincts in my head as a way of relieving myself of social pressure, 'cause sometimes we take those standards WAY too seriously, but the way greg is doing it is just so condescending, like we're still more than that. we're still more than just those "human creatures." its interesting how you see the word "human" as a social thing instead of a scientific thing. i always saw it as the other way around.
He’s that one kid that was DiFFeRenT frOm oThEr KiDs and he never grew out of that edgy megacringe stage of life, then infused the Essence of that into an incomprehensible fever dream of garbage topped with a sprinkle of atrocious grammar and spelling.
*TH-camr shows off his kitten*
*My goodwill: ∞*
The part when James is beating the shit out of a bunch of jocks is hilarious because at one point, someone claiming to be one of Onion’s classmates recalled a story of how he decided to piss off a group of emo kids who then beat the fuck out of him.
I imagine that was a pretty common occurrence, knowing Onision’s personality.
Yeah that unironically sounds like something that would happen
Abbigale: Slightly interesting character, too many tropes. Abuses the "damsel in distress" cliche to HELL.
James: S c o o t s c o o t
His dialogue isn’t split up into separate lines when a new character talks??? Bro we learned to do that in 7th grade. That’s just common sense. Has onision never read a book?
It's literally been a couple decades
Doodle Doodle Nope and a simple google search could hav refreshed his memory. Don’t defend the idiot. The book is bad
@@Suplexduplex I wasn't defending him wtf I was answering a question
It's literally been a couple decades since he's opened a fucking book
@@Suplexduplex you really should improve your reading comprehension
Tk Bandele not for fourteen years
This is probably one of the best books ever, I mean my mother was able to use it so effectively in her English class as an example of how not to write a book that her students writing improved dramatically after seeing an example of what NOT to do, Thanks Onion boy for teaching the next generation how NOT to write a good book
That’s amazing.
It's always more worthwhile to learn what *not* to do.
I think I am learning many good practices just by listening to the horrible practices described in this video.
It's better to know what not to do instead of what to do
I genuinely can't tell if you're joking or not and that is somewhat terrifying
It's funny, how he made fun of people who cut themselves and here he's sexualizes someone who does it.
Yea because he sees women with mental illnesses as prey to stalk: if you go through his relationship history, he makes a point out of specifically selecting for women with mental issues.
@@zawrator4457y’know it’s extremely crazy how many times people say “don’t judge a book by it’s cover”, and yet here we are, a dude who looked and talked like a creep, is a creep
So if James had secret Action Hero-esque fighting skills capable of beating up several people at once WHY. DID. HE. NOT. STOP. THE. SCHOOL. SHOOTER.
Because James is a narcissistic fäggöt. He wanted his girlfriend be afraid little bit more so he could comfort, embrace and pet her little longer like a little dog.
Because only a certain amount of people could die before abbi would be traumatized enough to fuck him
because as long as his potential fuck toy doesnt get murdered fuck other "h U m A n S"
Be 👏 cause 👏 plot 👏 con 👏 ven 👏 ience 👏 and 👏 bad 👏 writ 👏 ing 👏
Two words
Character Development
"I wanted to go a little more in depth with this one...," he says and starts a review that is as long as Ben Hur.
He clearly means it this time....
Someone with a background in psychology would have a field day with Greg's book, and I can only pray for someone to upload a video all about it
I have a degree in psychology and forensics and I don't want to read this because I love my mental health and don't want to hate literature. Sorry for the grammar.
@@jairalcaraz4413 That's fair, my dude.
I've contemplated forcing my fellow psych friends to read this book with me. We can all suffer through the psychology of the MC, and I can suffer through every other aspect of the writing.
@@melissaaalbertsberg4344 yeah, as a society we're gonna need you guys to do that
I'm working towards one (still very on, taking dual credit to transfer credits, but I have a deep love for psychology) , but I would not touch that shit with a ten foot pole it giddamn spikes on the end. I value not having to bleach my eyeballs.
The idea that he drew upon "personal experience" is the most terrifying thing about the book.
I'm gonna start a death metal band called Nihilistic Cringe and the lyrics to my songs are all gonna
be passages from his book.
So Dou but that means you have to pay Onision royalties. :(
Lady Phoenix Not if you scream the lyrics so they’re near impossible to understand & never release what the lyrics are
K. Charrette Still have to give credit though, since you are expected to release the lyrics
Honestly, that'd be a laugh riot
S Doe AND THEN HE SAID AND THEN SHE SAID AND THEN HE SAID
I love writing my own stories, so i love watching book review like this because:
a, it gives me an idea of what not to do
b, it gives me authors to avoid
c, it makes me feel better about ny writing.
FACTS
Right I throw this series on when I'm editing my writing it helps
Yeah! It’s awesome!
To be fair reading shitty Authors like Onision is something I have heard also helps people learn to write better.
You might like the TH-cam show Bad Creepypasta
Onion boy seems like someone to use the word "sheeple" unironically
Edit: Also... "nearly saved the day" 😂😂 what about the guy that *actually* saved the day
Lisa R if I recall correctly he did call Shane’s fans sheeple. It could’ve been someone else but he did call a group of people Sheeple.
I want to know how sitting there and pissing your pants is nearly saving the day? Not saying I would react any better in a school shooting. I honestly don't know how I'd react, but I wouldn't expect to be called a hero for standing there
He's like conspiracy theorists who accuse anyone who doesn't believe their crazy shit of being gullible and "not knowing how the world really works."
@@Xehanort10 so, basically part of the antivaxxer-flat-earther bunch
Yeah.
one of the greatest lines in literature "how can I turn that frown upside poopy poo poop" really thought out and is greatly symbolic for the entire story.
One terrifying thing about this book, or rather about Greg in general, is his desire for control.
He states that he wishes to give Abbi every happiness, wipe every tear, and well blahblahablahblahblahjsjh
Every aspect of Abbi's life is downright horrible, and the author places her in a position where she can't contribute to her own happiness.
Greg essentially, CONTROLS her happiness. He enjoys the fact that he is the sole contributor towards her well-being and emotional security.
That's just something I want to put out there for anyone who's interested in reading this book. There are several scenes that support this.
In short, several lines in this book hint towards the fact that he is a manipulative pervert who thinks that his influence over vulnerable people is romantic.
I think you are absolutely right! Abusers have that pattern even in their own fantasies, they are always in control and ideally the sole emotional connection that their emotionally dependant partner has. It's esentially what they seek out in real life.
The point you made about not letting Abby do something for her own happines sumarises incredibly this type of relationships and tropes!
What's worse is this sick fuck actually changed his daughter's name to Abigail.... HOLY SHIT
Abigail is basically Sarah which just makes me sick because his fantasy came true.
The sad thing is this is how a lot of normies think, too. Onion-san is just too lazy and/or socially inept to hide it.
We need way more Slutshaming, tbh.
I mean, nowadas, we legit have masses of people
being convinced that theres absolutely nothing
wrong and nothing 'telling' about sleeping around;
which is of course utter nonsense and objectively wrong, but ok...
...
You had me at, “Hello, Jaden Smith’s Twitter account.”
How do I like this more than once.
@@luciaguzman1727 just create some puppet accounts ;P