This story is excellent. A perfect portrait of our species, from "...she reached out to touch it..." to not being able to pass up a potentially humongous moneymaker that might kill us all but -- MONEY!!
I approve the use of giant mecha in this story. LOL 😮 I hope there's more stories to come from this one. I want to know more about this mech, the mysterious organization, and where this mysterious machine came from. So many questions, and so many classified files to decode to get any answers... Thanks for this fun story. Can't wait to hear what tale you'll gift us next.❤
You can tell that this is bad fiction when the human characters are described as “president of a company being not a political and not motivated by power”. Suspensions of disbelief falls off faster than watching anything modern disney.
Most of yall either new to his channel or just haters because I liked that story. Not every story is gonna be super clear..it’s also not gonna be 2 hours long. Use your own imagination and move on. Not every story on his channel is my favorite but that’s ok he does stories for all types of listeners….
I really like the premise here, but it feels like it is missing pieces. The blue planet next to an asteroid belt for example, it can't be Earth as we are not next to a belt, so assuming it was portraying our system, it had to be a blue Mars. Then there is the point where the MC goes into the mech and just starts pounding on it, like why would you do that?! The mental compulsion and later link reminds me of how the Reapers of Mass Effect can influence, indoctrinate, and puppeteer individuals, which is neat, but is never explained in this story. I want to like this story as it has interesting ideas woven into it, but the story itself isn't very well written.
Not the best story here, to be honest. It felt like a rough first draft that wasn’t finished. I was left a bit puzzled at the end, like, "Wait, that’s it?"
@@hellenhampton1495 Is it really so hard to write the word "and"? Seriously, if your device doesn’t give you the option for "and" for you with its predictive text when you type an "a," then it’s time to upgrade from your 1990s tech. And no, it’s not science fiction to the average Joe when the science is wrong. It’s only science fiction to imbeciles under those circumstances.
Wow! What an incredibly stupid thing to say. FICTION. Meaning you can write whatever the hell you want. As long as basic science is followed nobody cares. Yeah we can see things that aren't scientific but again, it's fiction. Every science fiction movie has ridiculous and impossible crap in it. It's called entertainment not a friggin science documentary.
The 2050 no fossil fuels thing is hilarious. I'm all for clean energy but we aren't there yet. We WOULD BE there if the powers that be hadn't shut Nikola Tesla down on free energy.
Where throughout the video does the audio need worked on and/or rebalanced? Only time I've noticed a change is when he switches voices or increases pitch, speed, or volume accordingly with the tension of the story.
Please let a COMMENT and SUBSCRIBE if you enjoyed the video! Hope you liked this one, everybody!
It’s just cheaper to have the children mine the cobalt
Damn it, I'm so ashamed that I laughed at that
We done found a megazord in Antarctica
Ok. Wait. No giant penguins and star headed indestructible Elder things to fight this transformer?? Dammitt!😂😂
This story is excellent. A perfect portrait of our species, from "...she reached out to touch it..." to not being able to pass up a potentially humongous moneymaker that might kill us all but -- MONEY!!
Loved the big robot. Thankyou Jordan and to the writer too. 😊
Amazing!
Stupid Power Hungry Humans, as usual!
An unlikely GeoPhysicist Hero, Wilgan!
Needs a continuation!
"Always leave em wanting more," lol!! Same!
Different kinda story, good job.
Excellent read, as always!
Thanks for both!!
That is a very strange story even for selfish horror. I hope there are more like it.
I approve the use of giant mecha in this story. LOL 😮
I hope there's more stories to come from this one. I want to know more about this mech, the mysterious organization, and where this mysterious machine came from. So many questions, and so many classified files to decode to get any answers...
Thanks for this fun story. Can't wait to hear what tale you'll gift us next.❤
FOOL! Should have used the robot to escape.
AND RULE THE WORLD, MWAHAHA!!
👍👍marvelously unequaled, i love adventure and discovery, it was an awesome story. I loved and enjoyed this story. Thanks Jordan. 😇💖
Thanks for a great story
We need spookier countdown music
Enjoyed this story. Thanks for narrating ir.
I wish there was a part 2 to this was a good story
TY JG
You can tell that this is bad fiction when the human characters are described as “president of a company being not a political and not motivated by power”. Suspensions of disbelief falls off faster than watching anything modern disney.
Too short 😢 great story though! ❤
Someone get Sam witwcky on the phone ASAP
Thanks Jordan. 👍🏻😃
Woot woot
I'm back
Most of yall either new to his channel or just haters because I liked that story. Not every story is gonna be super clear..it’s also not gonna be 2 hours long. Use your own imagination and move on. Not every story on his channel is my favorite but that’s ok he does stories for all types of listeners….
I really like the premise here, but it feels like it is missing pieces. The blue planet next to an asteroid belt for example, it can't be Earth as we are not next to a belt, so assuming it was portraying our system, it had to be a blue Mars. Then there is the point where the MC goes into the mech and just starts pounding on it, like why would you do that?! The mental compulsion and later link reminds me of how the Reapers of Mass Effect can influence, indoctrinate, and puppeteer individuals, which is neat, but is never explained in this story.
I want to like this story as it has interesting ideas woven into it, but the story itself isn't very well written.
good stuff
Damn missed 1st again....that's ok...just eager to hear what happens....need more stories Jordan...😂😂😂
Not the best story here, to be honest. It felt like a rough first draft that wasn’t finished. I was left a bit puzzled at the end, like, "Wait, that’s it?"
Nice
Love the story but i also just stare at your channel somethimes just waiting for there to be a new hallows end story
New one today!
@@JordanGrupe thank you so much for telling me
Another story to make you wonder! Thanks for sharing 🫶🏽
Let’s go
ANOTHER GREAT STORY 😊
Church of the Broken God would like to know your location.
❤ 👻
Note to anyone who wants to write science fiction - PLEASE learn science FIRST: otherwise it's not science fiction, it's just bad fiction
But for the average Joe it is science fiction n we do enjoy new writers
Thanku
@@hellenhampton1495 Is it really so hard to write the word "and"? Seriously, if your device doesn’t give you the option for "and" for you with its predictive text when you type an "a," then it’s time to upgrade from your 1990s tech. And no, it’s not science fiction to the average Joe when the science is wrong. It’s only science fiction to imbeciles under those circumstances.
Does that mean I need to understand science if I read & enjoy science fiction?
Where is your story?
Wow! What an incredibly stupid thing to say. FICTION. Meaning you can write whatever the hell you want. As long as basic science is followed nobody cares. Yeah we can see things that aren't scientific but again, it's fiction. Every science fiction movie has ridiculous and impossible crap in it. It's called entertainment not a friggin science documentary.
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The 2050 no fossil fuels thing is hilarious. I'm all for clean energy but we aren't there yet. We WOULD BE there if the powers that be hadn't shut Nikola Tesla down on free energy.
Tesla free energy idea wouldn't have worked. You wanna send electrical currents through the air with pacemakers and laptops everywhere?
Fix your audio levels please, it's unpleasant for some of us neurodivergent
What part of the audio levels need to be fixed? Seemed fine to me, but might help Jordan if you specified.
It was just fine for this neurodivergent. What part of it bothered you?
Where throughout the video does the audio need worked on and/or rebalanced? Only time I've noticed a change is when he switches voices or increases pitch, speed, or volume accordingly with the tension of the story.
You’ll be ok