8:25 “If the eyes are the windows to the soul, what happens when they change?” -from my character who got his eyes genetically altered though he didn’t want to.
8:26 TW: Suicide, read at your own risk! (Not a line, just the last page of the book I’m working on.) He didn’t understand why, why she would jump and fall and leave him to sob and scream at the edge of the cliff, a hand reaching down as if he could grab onto hers and pull her back up, soaked from the rain and staring down at her blurred, broken body, laying in a pool of her own blood. But in the back of his mind, in the pit of his stomach, he knew exactly why. He had drove her to this, he had driven her to destroy herself and he didn’t even notice. At least not until she left him that book, that fucking book. He remembered the worry and the realisation and the sickness he felt in his stomach as he flipped through the pages of multiple explanation pages. He remembered the horror he felt as his hands shook when he came across the last page, the note to him. “I love you, brother.” Signed at the bottom of it. And in his fit of screaming incoherently on the ground, he came to understand the fact that he was the one who had lead her to do this to herself. And now, just as he learnt of his sister’s suffering, no matter how much he thought about all the ways he should’ve noticed, all the ways he could’ve helped her, it could never be true, it could never be undone-she wasn’t coming back. Through his crying, he could still hear the words ringing through his ears, playing on an aching replay piercing through his screaming mind. “I love you, brother.”
it doesn't matter whether your character lives or dies there has to be an obstacle that gets overcome so that your reader has a sense of satisfaction not everything needs to be resolved but if your character never has an obstacle to overcome then creating tension and motives is close to impossible for example: Mia's mother dies in a car crash because of a drunk driver this leads Mia's father to abandon her which makes her spiral she also starts feeling sick and visits a doctor who tells her she has 3 months left to live the combination of all 3 of those things leads to her becoming crazy and deciding to murder her father but through out the book Mia realizes that she had murdered her father before her mother's death and that she was crazy all along it looks like there was no obstacle but the obstacle that Mia overcomes is that she finally accepts the fact that she killed her father
"They always say to be the hero of your own story, but no one ever seems to remember that it's sometimes the villian of another's" -said by character of an unwritten book of idk when or where or why but it fits the character well
i literally just came up with this TW for miscarriage, abusive relationships, trauma "she'd spent so long running. it had never occurred to her that she would never escape that piety, that the obedience forced on her by her religion was /everywhere,/ swirling her around. she had spent so long, so so long burying those final words. burying the phrase that broke her. but one word from a conversation she was not privy to, one scolding from a mother not her own, brought his final words back to her: "/where is that obedient princess i require? where has she gone? has she given herself to sin, murdered the fruit of her womb and lied to her master? has she brought herself to the gates of Ether, blood of a babe on her hands?/"
8:27 "Real heroes do not get a happy ending. Heroes are the ones that die while the world forgets. But their world? They will always remember." Or at least, I hope so.
8:29 "As I stared at her dead body, i realized that i felt.. nothing. no sadness, no anger, nothing, my girlfriend was dead and i felt nothing... i fell into mountains for her, i almost died for her, and now that shes dead? i feel nothing. Then pixie enters the room and takes the dead body to bury it.. i just watch. no disgust, no fear, whats wrong with me..?" a paragraph from the 4th ending of a book im writing.
"He was so beautiful, but he knew he would never have the courage to say so, his feelings would stay hidden in the lockbox that is his heart for all of eternity." A line from the book im writing that im rlly proud of
8:29 "In her eyes he could see his betrayal. All those bodies buried under the earth, under the flowers where he proposed. His betrayal of her and the hundreds who were to be unearthed." "I lied about many things, and I have hurt many people. I never lied about how much I loved you, and never did I intend to hurt you."
8:29 I was forced to watch my own world through the eyes of others and now I’m forced to fix their mistakes. Because then if I don’t inthe end when I am nothing more than a story to be told, they will be told as mine. -quote from my MC
8:29 TW: mention of cutting, but not in a sh context “How could you be divine? How could run amongst the winds as your only friends, be promised eternity only to be met with silence? How could you cut your arms next to the dying people and hope that they would give you something you would never have? How, how could you be divine when all you’d been given was a match.” “And she could tell him it was a mistake. She could tell him she loved him, she loved him and always had. She could say that the knife had never been meant for his heart, for his final breath in that beautiful boys sleep. But she’d be lying. A wish and her dream. She’d throw it all away just to poison the ones who dared touch her lips.”
0:31 1. A purple flash appears and follows them around, they fight over weather they should follow it , till other coloured flashes follow them aswell, and it turns out they're "faimers" from the other world, and they get taken the other world. 2. When they find out the snowqueen is gonna try to turn them to ice slaves and that're they gotta stop her from turning people into ice slaves 3.They get seperated from each other (mind you they're quite young). One is stuck in an endless cold void in the middle of nowhere where all her insecurities start to show and overwhelm her, the other is worried where her sister went , when she's all alone (doesn't know where all the side characters are) and has to think of a way to save everyone and escape the snow queen's castle 4. they starts to hear eachother even though they're worlds apart. It's hard to explain but they help each other gain self confidence.
8:29 TW - blood Alisha coughed wetly, scarlet blood spattering against her enemy's dark armor as it ran down her chin. "Forgive me, Lloyd," she choked, tears mixing with the blood on her face. "Forgive me, my brother."
I'm not a fan of the fearmongering in the first one... and as for the last question, there's plenty of successful books where everything falls apart for the protagonist and... that's it. No redemption, no victory. Just failure. The Picture of Dorian Grey springs to mind
Umm.. the first one.. what if my character didn’t live comfortable in her world but comfortable in her other world….and also I almost didn’t understand a single word in the last one bc I’m not American 😂😂or English
The uncomfortable in her world but comfortable in another world is a good storyline. Show why she likes the other one and why she pushes away her world. Make characters question her and all that. Just explain why Also I’m sorry you couldn’t understand the last one
There could still be an incident that works like a tipping point. Remember Katniss Everdeen, she was obviously unhappy in her environment, but the story still had an incident that started, you know, the story, the reaping.
Yes they do, you are going to writte a wonderful novel/history/book and you should start to know that. If you need help with powerful frases you need to wrab a reference of internet, another book or something that someone has said to you that made you feel a lot, and grab that feelling and put your caracter in a situacion that makes them feel the same but at their own way and just writte what you think they could say
@@potterheads1220 thank you for this! However what I was saying in my comment was that I have some powerful lines, but they wouldn't be powerful without the context that my story provides for them. Thank you for your comment though. It is much appreciated!
8:32 "Stare at your wall for hours. I bet you can't, coward."
So confused about the singing cat 😂
Mistake on my end, I saved it and accidentally added it with the other videos
Don’t apologize! That was amazing!
Still isn’t really a writing tiktok but thank you
I’m glad you two loved it. I’m glad I didn’t ruin the video for you
@@ChemistRainhow could it ruin the Video, it was literally so funny, it made my dayy
The cat video was so random but I loved it too much to skip.
My fault for adding it but I’m so glad that people didn’t mind
bro dropped a full music video lmffao
Oopsie
THAT SONG WAS FFFFFFFFFFFF FIREEEEEEEEEEEE IM CRYING AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA OMGGGGGG
YAY
The different ways to say A character screamed is my mind while writing tho-
that cat song slapped so hard
fr, I'd listen on repeat!
It’s on Spotify if you have that lol
@@ChemistRain What's it called?
Sometimes I’m Alone (Lonely Cat) by The Kiffness
Thank you!!!@@ChemistRain
8:25 “If the eyes are the windows to the soul, what happens when they change?” -from my character who got his eyes genetically altered though he didn’t want to.
Ooooo
This is AMAZINGG
8:25 “My mother would die, if she knew in her last moments, my affliction would be eternal.”
8:26
TW: Suicide, read at your own risk!
(Not a line, just the last page of the book I’m working on.)
He didn’t understand why, why she would jump and fall and leave him to sob and scream at the edge of the cliff, a hand reaching down as if he could grab onto hers and pull her back up, soaked from the rain and staring down at her blurred, broken body, laying in a pool of her own blood.
But in the back of his mind, in the pit of his stomach, he knew exactly why. He had drove her to this, he had driven her to destroy herself and he didn’t even notice.
At least not until she left him that book, that fucking book. He remembered the worry and the realisation and the sickness he felt in his stomach as he flipped through the pages of multiple explanation pages.
He remembered the horror he felt as his hands shook when he came across the last page, the note to him.
“I love you, brother.” Signed at the bottom of it.
And in his fit of screaming incoherently on the ground, he came to understand the fact that he was the one who had lead her to do this to herself. And now, just as he learnt of his sister’s suffering, no matter how much he thought about all the ways he should’ve noticed, all the ways he could’ve helped her, it could never be true, it could never be undone-she wasn’t coming back.
Through his crying, he could still hear the words ringing through his ears, playing on an aching replay piercing through his screaming mind.
“I love you, brother.”
that gave me chills. full body chills
That’s really good!
0:51 my main character never overcomes any obstacles in the story he just goes crazy than dies
it doesn't matter whether your character lives or dies there has to be an obstacle that gets overcome so that your reader has a sense of satisfaction
not everything needs to be resolved but if your character never has an obstacle to overcome then creating tension and motives is close to impossible
for example:
Mia's mother dies in a car crash because of a drunk driver this leads Mia's father to abandon her which makes her spiral she also starts feeling sick and visits a doctor who tells her she has 3 months left to live the combination of all 3 of those things leads to her becoming crazy and deciding to murder her father but through out the book Mia realizes that she had murdered her father before her mother's death and that she was crazy all along
it looks like there was no obstacle but the obstacle that Mia overcomes is that she finally accepts the fact that she killed her father
"They always say to be the hero of your own story, but no one ever seems to remember that it's sometimes the villian of another's" -said by character of an unwritten book of idk when or where or why but it fits the character well
I love that quote! That is brilliant
I’m going to get so much plotting done to that song
Fantastic
Ngl that song was fire lol😂
great video btw keep up the good work❤
Always try to
1:47 for anyone looking for the cat
i literally just came up with this
TW for miscarriage, abusive relationships, trauma
"she'd spent so long running. it had never occurred to her that she would never escape that piety, that the obedience forced on her by her religion was /everywhere,/ swirling her around. she had spent so long, so so long burying those final words. burying the phrase that broke her. but one word from a conversation she was not privy to, one scolding from a mother not her own, brought his final words back to her: "/where is that obedient princess i require? where has she gone? has she given herself to sin, murdered the fruit of her womb and lied to her master? has she brought herself to the gates of Ether, blood of a babe on her hands?/"
8:27
"Real heroes do not get a happy ending. Heroes are the ones that die while the world forgets. But their world? They will always remember."
Or at least, I hope so.
The cat is my new favorite person (and that is say8ng someth8ng lol)
8:30 "Throughout these seven months, I have learned to not be surprised when people leave me. I'm more surprised when they stay.”
"Dont be the Ivy you are in front of others, always be the Ivy you are when you`re alone." (Ivy is the MC) 8:25
That’s a good one! That inspires me
@@ChemistRain christ just came back to this! ivy is now Aspen lol
why is the first girl eyeing me like that😟
8:29
"As I stared at her dead body, i realized that i felt.. nothing. no sadness, no anger, nothing, my girlfriend was dead and i felt nothing... i fell into mountains for her, i almost died for her, and now that shes dead? i feel nothing. Then pixie enters the room and takes the dead body to bury it.. i just watch. no disgust, no fear, whats wrong with me..?" a paragraph from the 4th ending of a book im writing.
You are a freaking genius and I need the name of your book, is a necesity now even if you are going to make me suffer
"He was so beautiful, but he knew he would never have the courage to say so, his feelings would stay hidden in the lockbox that is his heart for all of eternity." A line from the book im writing that im rlly proud of
8:29
"In her eyes he could see his betrayal. All those bodies buried under the earth, under the flowers where he proposed. His betrayal of her and the hundreds who were to be unearthed."
"I lied about many things, and I have hurt many people. I never lied about how much I loved you, and never did I intend to hurt you."
8:29
I was forced to watch my own world through the eyes of others and now I’m forced to fix their mistakes. Because then if I don’t inthe end when I am nothing more than a story to be told, they will be told as mine.
-quote from my MC
8:35
"She was broken inside. Nobody could hurt her anymore than herself."
These hit hard
8:33 mine doesn’t really make sense out of context but “It’s all I could think to do. What choice do we have?”
8:29
TW: mention of cutting, but not in a sh context
“How could you be divine? How could run amongst the winds as your only friends, be promised eternity only to be met with silence? How could you cut your arms next to the dying people and hope that they would give you something you would never have? How, how could you be divine when all you’d been given was a match.”
“And she could tell him it was a mistake. She could tell him she loved him, she loved him and always had. She could say that the knife had never been meant for his heart, for his final breath in that beautiful boys sleep. But she’d be lying. A wish and her dream. She’d throw it all away just to poison the ones who dared touch her lips.”
0:31
1. A purple flash appears and follows them around, they fight over weather they should follow it , till other coloured flashes follow them aswell, and it turns out they're "faimers" from the other world, and they get taken the other world.
2. When they find out the snowqueen is gonna try to turn them to ice slaves and that're they gotta stop her from turning people into ice slaves
3.They get seperated from each other (mind you they're quite young). One is stuck in an endless cold void in the middle of nowhere where all her insecurities start to show and overwhelm her, the other is worried where her sister went , when she's all alone (doesn't know where all the side characters are) and has to think of a way to save everyone and escape the snow queen's castle
4. they starts to hear eachother even though they're worlds apart. It's hard to explain but they help each other gain self confidence.
i’m not a planner, so i guess i’m actually a panther
Touchè
2:35 I SIED
8:29
TW - blood
Alisha coughed wetly, scarlet blood spattering against her enemy's dark armor as it ran down her chin. "Forgive me, Lloyd," she choked, tears mixing with the blood on her face. "Forgive me, my brother."
I'm not a fan of the fearmongering in the first one... and as for the last question, there's plenty of successful books where everything falls apart for the protagonist and... that's it. No redemption, no victory. Just failure. The Picture of Dorian Grey springs to mind
8:30
"She was so perfect. Which is why she didn't belong to someone such as me."
Umm.. the first one.. what if my character didn’t live comfortable in her world but comfortable in her other world….and also I almost didn’t understand a single word in the last one bc I’m not American 😂😂or English
The uncomfortable in her world but comfortable in another world is a good storyline. Show why she likes the other one and why she pushes away her world. Make characters question her and all that. Just explain why
Also I’m sorry you couldn’t understand the last one
There could still be an incident that works like a tipping point. Remember Katniss Everdeen, she was obviously unhappy in her environment, but the story still had an incident that started, you know, the story, the reaping.
Yeah
“Jasmine kissed Meria’s cold, dead lips for the first and final time.”
8:29 it is the end of the line ,olive . Wish i could see you someday . I love you
0:51 what if I wanna make my protagonist lose and make them win in the 2nd book..?
Happens to me the same!!!! Please help
@@potterheads1220 yea!! 😭😭
@@Im_Not_Dead_Loll I think we could like work like if it refers to how they reborn from that failer
@@potterheads1220 yea I think that would work :D
@@Im_Not_Dead_Loll Well very good luck, Im sure it will be one great book. When publish it and if you want tell me the name so I can buy it
For the first one most of the answer r just all throughout the book I'm writing, nothing is towards the end
8:26 i want to do this but none of my lines make any sense with out a lot of context and spoilers 🥲
Yes they do, you are going to writte a wonderful novel/history/book and you should start to know that. If you need help with powerful frases you need to wrab a reference of internet, another book or something that someone has said to you that made you feel a lot, and grab that feelling and put your caracter in a situacion that makes them feel the same but at their own way and just writte what you think they could say
@@potterheads1220 thank you for this! However what I was saying in my comment was that I have some powerful lines, but they wouldn't be powerful without the context that my story provides for them. Thank you for your comment though. It is much appreciated!
@@Prophecy-Foretold Oh Im sorry, my dislexia comes arround like that some times 😅
@@potterheads1220 you're good :) my sister has dyslexia so I know how it can be sometimes lol