Ah, yes, one of the only slow-ish sections of the piece, it's actually a negative harmony of the previous section, mirrored on f-sharp, I thought was an interesting and cool way to variate the theme. Thanks for the feedback!
I'm shocked at how surprised I was by this song, Each part is creative, Instead of getting stuck in one part the music was transforming, I kept thinking "this was really different than what I expected it to be" congratulations this was really amazing, At least for me, you can clearly see your effort and talent here,
Thank you so much! Yeah, I really tried hard to keep the piece moving, I didn't want it to be too repetitive, but at the same time, I didn't want there to be so many ideas/themes that wouldn't really flow. but in the end, I think I found the middle ground between the two. I'm glad you liked it!
Those are some threatening triplets Edit: alright, this rocks. I'd love to look over a full score. This is just downright masterful. The phrasing, the variety of themes and textures, the time signature and key changes. Amazing.
Thank you, I'm glad you like it! I can agree, the triplets are brutal, my hands become a little sore after playing that part, though it may be because I go at a little bit faster tempo than notated on that part! I tried to share the sheet music in the description of this video, but for some reason I have to be "verified" in order to put links in descriptions, I have no idea why. once I figure that out, I'll put a link there for sure.
Thank you very much! Well, I don't really want to publicly post a pdf of the sheet music, but if I had some way of directly contacting you, I think I'd be willing to get you the sheet music to practice.
It's ok if you don't like it, if there's any certain part that just doesn't feel complete or satisfactory enough to you, I'd like to know why, so I can improve on those issues in the future.
@@TrevorSmithComposer When I said "It sounds okay..." I meant it in a good way, like it felt solid and well-written. There were some good moments in the melody that I enjoyed, and I appreciate the effort you put into creating it. Please perceive my comment as an encouragement rather than criticism. You're talented, Trevor! :D
Probably too long honestly, many times I thought it was good enough to be done, but then I would find small things that I didn't like enough to keep, over and over this happened, even now, I'm not quite fully satisfied with it. The first parts were composed in mid October 2023, it grew bit by bit until mid October of this year, a full year later, and I've finally called it complete because I've just spent too long on it, it's time to work on other projects.
Long stretches with little harmonic movement or melodic development are tedious. I feel like you could have said what you wanted in a quarter of the length.
I personally really like long, drawn out sections of music, but if you're not a fan of it, it's ok, I guess they aren't for everyone. Thanks for the feedback!
It seems AI music, sorry for being so drastic and rude. You will improve only starting making little compositions. Work on the sound and musical ideas, before on the form itself will make your music better.
I wonder, what part makes it sound like AI? Is it because the audio is computer generated? Because if that's part of it, I totally agree, it sounds awful, it doesn't have any of the emotions or dynamics that I, or any other pianist playing it would have.
You've done a very well, I'd say. You did a great job of putting the melodies inside of larger structures. The rhythms and time signatures work amazingly. I love from measure 31-57. The high register shines especially bright. And even in the lower registers, there is a melody. The polyrhythms make it sound even nicer, which is a pleasant surprise. I love that section very much. Measures 163-177 are a bit dull for me. The chord progression is nice, but I get a little tired of the structure of it. The piece is also generally structured a bit weirdly. The repetition of the first part I do not like. It is such a big section, and it is great, but it doesn't hit quite as well the second time around, because it feels like more of the same thing, which leads to my second point, that the piece is all intense throughout. There are very few calm sections throughout the piece, and it seems there is constantly something very big going on, which is fine, but it gets rid of a lot of contrast. There are calmer parts, by all means, but they aren't particularly memorable, and more feel like they're just leading us to the bigger parts. This leads us to the ending, which, to me, feels a little underwhelming. It is intense, yes, but just as much so as most of the piece. And as a result, it doesn't stand out very much. There are parts more intense than it, yet it concludes the piece. In my opinion, the easy solution to this would be to make a calm ending that fades out. This puts it at odds to the rest of the piece, and we can better acknowledge that this is the end. I apologize if I am sounding mean here. It goes without saying, it is a great piece, but that is what I would've done.
Don't worry, you're not being mean. you're just giving me some constructive criticism, which is what I want, because then I know how to improve! Thank you for your complements on the 31-57 section, that happens to be the section that I composed first, with everything else kind of coming together around it. As for the ending, when I finished this, I really wasn't satisfied with how it ended. I came to the conclusion, same as you, that it should end with a very peaceful, sweet, and overall comforting section that fades out to finish it off, and, I'm actually working on it currently. Now that I know that it's not just me who thinks that would be good idea, I'll upload an updated version when I'm finished with it! Thank you for the advice!
Actually one of the best original compositions I found on TH-cam.
Wow, thanks, that means a lot!
Loved the chord progression at 3:33, sounds very mysterious! Great work
Ah, yes, one of the only slow-ish sections of the piece, it's actually a negative harmony of the previous section, mirrored on f-sharp, I thought was an interesting and cool way to variate the theme. Thanks for the feedback!
Beautiful
Thank you!
I'm shocked at how surprised I was by this song, Each part is creative, Instead of getting stuck in one part the music was transforming, I kept thinking "this was really different than what I expected it to be" congratulations this was really amazing, At least for me, you can clearly see your effort and talent here,
Thank you so much! Yeah, I really tried hard to keep the piece moving, I didn't want it to be too repetitive, but at the same time, I didn't want there to be so many ideas/themes that wouldn't really flow. but in the end, I think I found the middle ground between the two.
I'm glad you liked it!
very dramatic! I LIked it, congrats!
Yes, it is probably my most epic piece to date, I'm glad you liked it!
This goes harddd
Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it!
Those are some threatening triplets
Edit: alright, this rocks. I'd love to look over a full score.
This is just downright masterful. The phrasing, the variety of themes and textures, the time signature and key changes. Amazing.
Thank you, I'm glad you like it!
I can agree, the triplets are brutal, my hands become a little sore after playing that part, though it may be because I go at a little bit faster tempo than notated on that part!
I tried to share the sheet music in the description of this video, but for some reason I have to be "verified" in order to put links in descriptions, I have no idea why. once I figure that out, I'll put a link there for sure.
@@TrevorSmithComposer Awesome.
Incredible that you can actually play that.
@@sketchdoesmusic Yeah, I don't compose any piano music that I can't play.
Id love to see this on Spotify, I'd be the first thousand listens!
Haha, well, if I was to put it on Spotify, I would record a live version, it would sound a lot better.
Thanks for the comment, I'm glad you liked it!
This is absolutely magnificent, bravooooo, can I have the score please? I want to practice it
Thank you very much! Well, I don't really want to publicly post a pdf of the sheet music, but if I had some way of directly contacting you, I think I'd be willing to get you the sheet music to practice.
@TrevorSmithComposer thanks a lot
It sounds okay...
It's ok if you don't like it, if there's any certain part that just doesn't feel complete or satisfactory enough to you, I'd like to know why, so I can improve on those issues in the future.
@@TrevorSmithComposer When I said "It sounds okay..." I meant it in a good way, like it felt solid and well-written. There were some good moments in the melody that I enjoyed, and I appreciate the effort you put into creating it. Please perceive my comment as an encouragement rather than criticism. You're talented, Trevor! :D
@@TheAbsoluteProduction I suppose your original comment could be perceived either way, and I just assumed the worst, thank you for the clarification!
Im curious, how long did it take you to write this composition?
Probably too long honestly, many times I thought it was good enough to be done, but then I would find small things that I didn't like enough to keep, over and over this happened, even now, I'm not quite fully satisfied with it. The first parts were composed in mid October 2023, it grew bit by bit until mid October of this year, a full year later, and I've finally called it complete because I've just spent too long on it, it's time to work on other projects.
Long stretches with little harmonic movement or melodic development are tedious. I feel like you could have said what you wanted in a quarter of the length.
I personally really like long, drawn out sections of music, but if you're not a fan of it, it's ok, I guess they aren't for everyone. Thanks for the feedback!
It seems AI music, sorry for being so drastic and rude. You will improve only starting making little compositions. Work on the sound and musical ideas, before on the form itself will make your music better.
I wonder, what part makes it sound like AI? Is it because the audio is computer generated? Because if that's part of it, I totally agree, it sounds awful, it doesn't have any of the emotions or dynamics that I, or any other pianist playing it would have.
You've done a very well, I'd say. You did a great job of putting the melodies inside of larger structures. The rhythms and time signatures work amazingly. I love from measure 31-57. The high register shines especially bright. And even in the lower registers, there is a melody. The polyrhythms make it sound even nicer, which is a pleasant surprise. I love that section very much. Measures 163-177 are a bit dull for me. The chord progression is nice, but I get a little tired of the structure of it. The piece is also generally structured a bit weirdly. The repetition of the first part I do not like. It is such a big section, and it is great, but it doesn't hit quite as well the second time around, because it feels like more of the same thing, which leads to my second point, that the piece is all intense throughout. There are very few calm sections throughout the piece, and it seems there is constantly something very big going on, which is fine, but it gets rid of a lot of contrast. There are calmer parts, by all means, but they aren't particularly memorable, and more feel like they're just leading us to the bigger parts. This leads us to the ending, which, to me, feels a little underwhelming. It is intense, yes, but just as much so as most of the piece. And as a result, it doesn't stand out very much. There are parts more intense than it, yet it concludes the piece. In my opinion, the easy solution to this would be to make a calm ending that fades out. This puts it at odds to the rest of the piece, and we can better acknowledge that this is the end. I apologize if I am sounding mean here. It goes without saying, it is a great piece, but that is what I would've done.
Don't worry, you're not being mean. you're just giving me some constructive criticism, which is what I want, because then I know how to improve! Thank you for your complements on the 31-57 section, that happens to be the section that I composed first, with everything else kind of coming together around it.
As for the ending, when I finished this, I really wasn't satisfied with how it ended. I came to the conclusion, same as you, that it should end with a very peaceful, sweet, and overall comforting section that fades out to finish it off, and, I'm actually working on it currently. Now that I know that it's not just me who thinks that would be good idea, I'll upload an updated version when I'm finished with it!
Thank you for the advice!