It's either this video or "Character Problems" where I accidentally say "land shark" instead of "loan shark." I see FAR too many scripts that use a loan shark so I think you should go with a land shark instead -- much more interesting lol. Don't forget to give this a thumbs up just to make me happy that you liked it :) Love, WD
Yeah... I took a creative writing class and wrote about men manning a lighthouse and they were drinking coffee... the professor said, "a lot of new writers have people drinking coffee.." OUCH!!! HAHAHA.... But i was so grateful for that feedback (it stings but I'm curious about people who resist notes). So... no coffee and no loan sharks.. :)
I LOVE that I discovered you! And I HATE that I discovered you, because I won't get any work done for the next week while I catch up on all your videos!!!!
Bath salts, crazy dude, fire extinguisher, spraying a pour random women. LMAO!!! Yes! YES! I wish I would have though of that. It would be so damn perfect for my script or spec whatever it is . . . spec I think. Your killing these videos! #respect
your personality is really drawable. .. like it draws people to watch you. good stuff. and you get to the point alot with not too much filler. subscribed :)
I think I'm in love with you, you are so intelligent, thank you so much for sharing all this cool stuff about writing with us. I wish you a happy new year 2018, a lot of happiness and success. You deserve more and more subscribers because you are amazing.
Haha thanks for this. I am learning so much from your vids. Love the energy, the passion and just the right dose of snarkiness on things that amateur writers do. Will be watching more of your vids during the holiday break. All the best and advance merry christmas xx
Great Job! You help clarify facets of screenwriting that make it much easier to plan our stories and add depth & stakes to them. I really loved an earlier video with the 4 stages of a story. Orphan, Wanderer, Warrior and Martyr.
Paterson leads a repetitive life, he's so passive that simple life events seem like a new challenge. He never confronts his wife, her dog, or anybody else. If you see him as a person who doesn't acknowledge his potential as a poet, trapped in a working class environment, living his life like a living dead, you tend to care deeply about him. And it's a Jim Jarmousch movie.
WHAT ABOUT.....? A pregnant woman going into labor being rushed to the hospital in a site-seeing helicopter and the only other passengers are the pilot and a douchey guy who happens to be a Loan Shark and HE MUST deliver the baby IN the helicopter!? THEN, the pilot's flaw is he can't stand the sight of blood... so she gives birth to the baby and there's blood EVERYWHERE in the tiny helicopter. The PILOT SEES THE BLOOD AND.......... PASSES OUT! SO... the douchey Loan Shark must land the helicopter to save the girl, the pilot the baby and himself. He struggles, almost crashes into a mountain...but he finally makes it; He lands the helicopter. BUT WAIT... now we're reminded... he's a douchey Loan Shark! So, he selfishly feels that since he's done such a great service to everyone... being the douchey loan shark he is, he's owned $100,000 for delivering the baby and landing the helicopter... so he pulls a gun and threatens everyone's life unless they all pay up! BAM!!! High stakes mo fo! LOL!! (j/k). But seriously... I love all your videos. SO helpful!! =)
"2001" didn't seem to show any relevant stakes for much of the movie. Is this an exception that proves the rule or is it a case that such a screenplay would end up in the trash today?
It's either this video or "Character Problems" where I accidentally say "land shark" instead of "loan shark." I see FAR too many scripts that use a loan shark so I think you should go with a land shark instead -- much more interesting lol.
Don't forget to give this a thumbs up just to make me happy that you liked it :)
Love,
WD
I heard "loan shark" here throughout. ;)
Yeah... I took a creative writing class and wrote about men manning a lighthouse and they were drinking coffee... the professor said, "a lot of new writers have people drinking coffee.." OUCH!!! HAHAHA.... But i was so grateful for that feedback (it stings but I'm curious about people who resist notes). So... no coffee and no loan sharks.. :)
+VideoMenu
There's definitely a lot of coffee in scripts.
"Guess I picked the wrong week to give up coffee."
Yay, thumbs up.
I LOVE that I discovered you! And I HATE that I discovered you, because I won't get any work done for the next week while I catch up on all your videos!!!!
Welcome, Jeanie!
watch them with 1.5 speed like me!
Hi Word Dancer, I like the way you explain the way the way script should be written.
I swear you are the best!!! I just entered the PAGE & Nicholl screenplay contests. I'm hoping what I learned from you pays off!!
you're so much like teacher but at the same time not. i'm learning a lot and never bored. thank you
Bath salts, crazy dude, fire extinguisher, spraying a pour random women. LMAO!!! Yes! YES! I wish I would have though of that. It would be so damn perfect for my script or spec whatever it is . . . spec I think. Your killing these videos! #respect
Oh my goodness! This helps so much!
your personality is really drawable. .. like it draws people to watch you. good stuff. and you get to the point alot with not too much filler. subscribed :)
Thanks! Welcome aboard!
Man, I could listen to you for days. Such flow in the video.
Jesus on Bath Salts now that's a screenplay in the making.
Jesus on bath salts, who works for the fire department, but he really wants to be a "life coach", or a Hollywood Agent.
You are very entertaining, and truthful about a lot of scripts that have no purpose, other than that the writer thought it did.
Thanks for the comment, Kevin! :)
I think I'm in love with you, you are so intelligent, thank you so much for sharing all this cool stuff about writing with us.
I wish you a happy new year 2018, a lot of happiness and success. You deserve more and more subscribers because you are amazing.
Thank You so much for your videos. Your presentation is amazing.
Thanks!
Yes ... I just subscribed!!!
Took 2:24 to say, "Life and Death"stakes. Hope your screenplays are more economically condensed.
This a brilliant channel. I hope you get many more views, you deserve it.
Aw... thanks:)
Haha thanks for this. I am learning so much from your vids. Love the energy, the passion and just the right dose of snarkiness on things that amateur writers do. Will be watching more of your vids during the holiday break. All the best and advance merry christmas xx
Thanks, Michelle!
I'd love to see a film about a public storage unit and the fight for its ownership.
It would be amazing. Especially if it was in 3D. The door rolling down...
We could do a storage unit movie where some big time drug dealers had their money stashed there and someone bought it at a storage auction!
Or the storage unit has some evidence about some political corruption like maybe about Trump!!!!!!!!! lol
Hmm, like maybe Storage Wars? But 2 hours worth? Yikes!
Great Job! You help clarify facets of screenwriting that make it much easier to plan our stories and add depth & stakes to them. I really loved an earlier video with the 4 stages of a story. Orphan, Wanderer, Warrior and Martyr.
Thanks for letting me know, Kevin!
I have the best story of all time for a screenplay. But i have to master writing a screenplay. .
Yes:)
Watch Out!! I just saw an ROUS in your backyard!
No stakes in Paterson, and Paterson is one of the best films I've ever seen
I've never seen that movie, but there are no "rules" only things that help. The only rule is: don't be boring.
Oh, watch it's a very beautiful film. Thanks for answering.
+Fanatic Bol
Thanks for the recommendation:)
Paterson leads a repetitive life, he's so passive that simple life events seem like a new challenge. He never confronts his wife, her dog, or anybody else. If you see him as a person who doesn't acknowledge his potential as a poet, trapped in a working class environment, living his life like a living dead, you tend to care deeply about him. And it's a Jim Jarmousch movie.
Sounds almost like Breaking Bad, but instead of a poet, he cooks meth.
I wish the burger king near me was empty.
lol
Amazing Advice
Thanks!!!!
Yes........far too many loan sharks! What you need is a lone shark.
lol
I am currently writing a horror story, but have found the text too vampire laden. I've introduced some stakes........problem sorted!
Make sure they are wooden stakes if you are dealing with vampires :)
WHAT ABOUT.....? A pregnant woman going into labor being rushed to the hospital in a site-seeing helicopter and the only other passengers are the pilot and a douchey guy who happens to be a Loan Shark and HE MUST deliver the baby IN the helicopter!? THEN, the pilot's flaw is he can't stand the sight of blood... so she gives birth to the baby and there's blood EVERYWHERE in the tiny helicopter. The PILOT SEES THE BLOOD AND.......... PASSES OUT! SO... the douchey Loan Shark must land the helicopter to save the girl, the pilot the baby and himself. He struggles, almost crashes into a mountain...but he finally makes it; He lands the helicopter. BUT WAIT... now we're reminded... he's a douchey Loan Shark! So, he selfishly feels that since he's done such a great service to everyone... being the douchey loan shark he is, he's owned $100,000 for delivering the baby and landing the helicopter... so he pulls a gun and threatens everyone's life unless they all pay up!
BAM!!! High stakes mo fo! LOL!! (j/k).
But seriously... I love all your videos. SO helpful!! =)
LOL!
Not bad!
i didn’t understand this comment at first because i was at the middle of the Video lol
What is synopsis
Brief description of the plot.
"2001" didn't seem to show any relevant stakes for much of the movie. Is this an exception that proves the rule or is it a case that such a screenplay would end up in the trash today?
The best steaks are well done. ;)
2:33 cat or dog?
Do you read others screenplays?
i love you ❤️
Bashing the homeless, addicted, and mentally ill is punching down. Punch up.
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:)
Gosh.. It sounds like you are talking about my story, which I realize after watching this, is really lame. Back to the drawing board.
please don't be too excited and speak a little slow please!!!!! ..love you...
So where are you reading all these terrible scripts you mention? That's what led me to believe that you did consulting work.
Usually with companies/organizations. Sometimes directly with writers.
Worse than death!
Secret- Never have seen "Sleepless in Seattle" - and never will... Whereas, I've seen "Dodgeball" anytime.. Dodge, duck, dip..