Another good one! A thought went through my mind on this one: Be a Sharlett in a world of Karens. If we could, maybe there would be less zombies (metaphorically speaking of course) . And Noah and Sharlett need to get married. 🙂
I would like a zombie story about defending a lake, like the people living around it keep the zombies out of their water and people out of their area around the lake. The kind of lake that's kinda near a small to medium sized city in a town of like 40,000 and on one side of the lake there's a small group of houses, maybe 20, and those people create a base around and even on the lake with like a floating town. The story going from when it starts to how they build up the lake fortress. I just really want a story like that, also in Massachusetts. That'd be really cool.
Respectfully wanted to give some feedback. Overall narration really great overall. Some constructive criticism with no offense meant is pause a second when announcing chapters to really set in the next scene. Also I do have to rhetorically ask is if you proofread these stories due to some redundant details and references like the Walmart being described several times in the same or similar manner as well as missing details. The random cop being a part of the group or chapter 4 in regards to the plan of using cars but we never thrown out of the equation it just skipped over it entirely. These are just some small examples I just wanted to bring to your attention because it doesn't ruin your narration but effectively damages the story telling due to not being easily followed or just being repetitive. Again you're doing great on your narration overall but story details need a bit of work.
Love the stories but a couple of questions that I couldn't get past... Why didn't he bring the metal shutters down in the Hampton. He'd referenced them in chapter one? Where are all of the other staff? Surely a Hotel that specialised in conferencing and banquets and had an event on had a large food supply in the kitchen? How many survivors were there to move from a multilevel hotel to another multilevel hotel? If you need to be quiet then why have someone with a pistol drawn and turn your group into a beacon unless you absolutely had to? Love these stories at night but these plot holes bugged me to the point that I couldn't sleep. (And the Hampton Inn is huge) it sounds like a one level motel in the story.
Actually inns are actually two story and very open but in the East Coast places like New York or Florida they can be closed off if it's very fancy only problem you have with inns are the fact that you have onsite staff that live there so there is risk of the management being turned unless they had guns for protection from drug addicts
@@lorddemonoss3945 thanks for the feed back, hard to keep content going in the zombie genre, I feel the same way when listening to big authors on audible.
It does sound like someone reading a zombie story written by Stephen King I was yelling In my head at this guy to shut the fuck up when he talks about the extra shit while trying to explain one of the characters is trying to give a speech it's like I don't give a fuck about what their thinking I just care about what their about to say
You really are great storyteller..your narration is really well done..🌟
Wonderful. Love it
Thank you!
Excellent storytelling and narration, thank you for the time you put into these.
@@sgt0187 Thank you
Another good one! A thought went through my mind on this one: Be a Sharlett in a world of Karens. If we could, maybe there would be less zombies (metaphorically speaking of course) . And Noah and Sharlett need to get married. 🙂
This is awesome
Massachusetts native here. This was awesome!
Great creativity on your story and even better storytelling this is really good
Thank you so much!
These zombie-based tales are fantastic, and are relayed so well; Only a shame they are not in book-form, too...;) Ade (London)
SOOOOO MUCH HELLZ YEEEEAAAHHH!!!!
The previous respondant before me, said all i wanted to: i do like thesse and, look forward to them.
I would like a zombie story about defending a lake, like the people living around it keep the zombies out of their water and people out of their area around the lake. The kind of lake that's kinda near a small to medium sized city in a town of like 40,000 and on one side of the lake there's a small group of houses, maybe 20, and those people create a base around and even on the lake with like a floating town. The story going from when it starts to how they build up the lake fortress. I just really want a story like that, also in Massachusetts. That'd be really cool.
That sounds awesome you should write it I would love to see what you come up with cause that sounds pretty awesome
Respectfully wanted to give some feedback. Overall narration really great overall. Some constructive criticism with no offense meant is pause a second when announcing chapters to really set in the next scene. Also I do have to rhetorically ask is if you proofread these stories due to some redundant details and references like the Walmart being described several times in the same or similar manner as well as missing details. The random cop being a part of the group or chapter 4 in regards to the plan of using cars but we never thrown out of the equation it just skipped over it entirely. These are just some small examples I just wanted to bring to your attention because it doesn't ruin your narration but effectively damages the story telling due to not being easily followed or just being repetitive. Again you're doing great on your narration overall but story details need a bit of work.
I always think why dont they make lower leg, and hand forarms guards,then nake soears and shields, and fight Roman style ,shields to shields
Love the stories but a couple of questions that I couldn't get past...
Why didn't he bring the metal shutters down in the Hampton. He'd referenced them in chapter one?
Where are all of the other staff?
Surely a Hotel that specialised in conferencing and banquets and had an event on had a large food supply in the kitchen?
How many survivors were there to move from a multilevel hotel to another multilevel hotel?
If you need to be quiet then why have someone with a pistol drawn and turn your group into a beacon unless you absolutely had to?
Love these stories at night but these plot holes bugged me to the point that I couldn't sleep.
(And the Hampton Inn is huge) it sounds like a one level motel in the story.
Actually inns are actually two story and very open but in the East Coast places like New York or Florida they can be closed off if it's very fancy only problem you have with inns are the fact that you have onsite staff that live there so there is risk of the management being turned unless they had guns for protection from drug addicts
Super cliche and repeats a lot of things. I get it. She works retail
Nice narration. AI ruins storytelling. Thanks
Yea true AI does take away from the emotion of the people in the story
Unless its a crappy narrator voice id rather have AI or i dont i move on.
When it comes to rationing supplies- keep an eye on the fatsos, but on a positive note- the fatsos are slow and would make a long meal for the ghouls.
True! The fatsos might be slow, but hey, at least they provide a gourmet meal that keeps the ghouls entertained for a while!
Btw the fatties can actually last longer without food than those who don't eat
30:00 I'm quitting here. I'm losing interest. It is lacking something.
@@lorddemonoss3945 thanks for the feed back, hard to keep content going in the zombie genre, I feel the same way when listening to big authors on audible.
It does sound like someone reading a zombie story written by Stephen King I was yelling In my head at this guy to shut the fuck up when he talks about the extra shit while trying to explain one of the characters is trying to give a speech it's like I don't give a fuck about what their thinking I just care about what their about to say