The Sniper | Film Wire Short Film (2015)
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- เผยแพร่เมื่อ 30 ธ.ค. 2015
- Directed by Gabriel Fowler
Finalist Best Short Drama Hollywood Screenings Film Festival
Semi-Finalist Los Angeles CineFest December 2016
Official Selection Guerilla MovieMaking Awards Festival 2017
Official Selection The Greater New Milford Film Festival 2016
Official Selection Fanboy Film Festival 2016
Official Selection Santa Monica International Teen Film Festival 2016
Official Selection West Chester Film Festival 2016 - Youth Produced Film Category
Official Selection The Alhambra Theatre Film Festival 2016
Cast:
The Sniper - Steven Manzino
Informer/Rose - Maya Jennings Daley
Opposing Sniper - Charles Roth
Officer - Martin Rosato
Crew:
Directed/Written/Edited/Produced: Gabriel Fowler
Cinematography: Gabriel Fowler and Alex Desjardin
Assistant Director/Script Editor: Alex Desjardin
Production Assistant: Sabrina Zaprson
Make Up: Caleb Cicero and Faith Willett
Composer: Moreshawar Briscoe
Visual Effects Artist: Noah D. Shriver and Gabriel J. Fowler
Sound: Alex Desjardin
Special Thanks:
Adam Engel
Kieran Valla
Valerie Mulverhill
Timothy Mulverhill
Winston De Jesus (Musical Thanks)
Inspired by the short story, The Sniper, written by Liam O'Flaherty
Rate/Review on IMDb: www.imdb.com/title/tt4877518/?...
Official Facebook: / thesnipersho. .
©MrYankeeg Studios 2015 - ภาพยนตร์และแอนิเมชัน
Attention, no firearms were used in the production of this film, lmao.
Just airguns....
Yes, after five years of comments letting us know that you know that they’re not real, we’ve decided to publicly admit it: we used fucking air guns and then returned them to Wal-Mart after the shoot cause we’re bloody frugal. Thanks for watching lmao
Wow he just casually extracted the bullet from his own wound ..
He built different
Absolutely fantastic. I loved everything about it. I can only imagine the quality of your production 5 years from now.
+Michael Uraih Wow! Comments like yours are really amazing! Thank you so much for the positive feedback. Please be sure to share!
The one thing that was not right were the rifles, they were pellet rifles!
Spotted the springer air rifle straight away but, think about it, a sniper is still a shooter and a gun is a gun. Its just that that one won't do a massive amount of damage over any great distance but can still be lethal at short distances and often has been. The air rifles look like Hatsan Snipers. Ironic eh! However, the film is about acting and the plot not technicalities....its a bloody film.
This was honestly a phenomenal short film. Granted passing felt a tad off and spoken lines felt rough, the unlikely protagonists of the story really brought it all together. An entire story told through blood and tears of their actions rather than words. The effects seemed genuine and the certain key shots were mind blowing. I'm not sure why, but the fly in the pool of blood stroke me as the most stunning visual. I'm hoping to achieve such level of quality in my early goings (whenever that comes) so I have to ask about the camera used for this project. All in all terrific short film, terrific job!
Time2Spare Thank you for all of the feedback and for taking the time to write a comment. Audio was a huge problem on set. Glad you noticed the fly. The actor who plays the officer actually noticed it whilst lying on the pavement. I'm honored the film had such an impact.
The Sniper was shot using a Nikon D5100, a kit lens (18-54mm) and a 50mm prime lens! Be sure to check out our new web series, Art Less!
This is awesome to watch. I live in Norway and would love to move to America to make movies, but don't know how to start. Especially write. I already have some ideas. Both original and not-original. But i have to say, if you gave us some more character building and really flulshed out what started this civil war, you could make a whole movie out of this, and make it a really good character built drama. Where a family gets torn apart by civil war and how familiy members are forced to attack each other.
Film Wire It was my pleasure to watch and I'll definitely check Art less out. Thanks for answering my question and I can hardly wait to see what's next
+Filip Orvik The best way to start is, in my experience, to just start. I'd love to help you out with an ideas you may have. The idea of making this short a full length project is a good one, but I think The Sniper is a closed deal. Thanks again for watching and commenting. Be sure to check out the series I directed, Art Less.
+Filip Orvik The best way to start is, in my experience, to just start. I'd love to help you out with an ideas you may have. The idea of making this short a full length project is a good one, but I think The Sniper is a closed deal. Thanks again for watching and commenting. Be sure to check out the series I directed, Art Less.
Sniper with a air rifle, smoking!
9023710a The shots could have been done with an air rifle. 20-30 yards.
He is carrying a air rifle and it’s made out to be a rifle, yes you can shoot someone with a air rifle and there is a “chance “to kill, but this is silly,
Just so I have this straight. An NCO and a lieutenant meet in a place where there is at least one known sniper. They arrive in full military garb driving a civilian vehicle. The one sniper is firing from an elevated position with no cover and the other sniper leaves his elevated position just to go another in order to retrieve a satchel? After taking a hit already? Wow.
Shooting air Rifle
Christ boys I made this short film as a sophomore in high school. I wasn’t a military tactician at the time and the short film follows the short story beat beat. While I certainly can’t defend the majority of the blatant errors in the film, I will say that the sniper overheard the conversation regarding the medical supplies. Once he was shot in the upper arm/shoulder he chooses to make the run to attempt to collect the satchel as it is most likely his only shot at survival. Thanks for the comment bro
Jan Vander Elst considering the police were called on us over a dozen times while filming this short because they saw people on rooftops with guns (we had all of the proper permits and had notified local departments) I’d say it was a good thing it was only an air rifle
@@GabrielFowler Then you should put that disclaimer in the title instead of wasting people's time on watching your sophomore highschool work
MNTrader2012 that would be a stupid business move. Wouldn’t have made 4K in Adsense then would I have lmao?
I am so proud that you as a 15 year old created this. You have so much potential ahead of you. This film was well-done. I know you did not have a stabilizer because some of the shaky shots that there were but you really know how to use the resources that you have and use and use them to your best of your abilities. Also, becareful when crossing the 180 degree axis (look up the 180 degree rule) because sometimes it can confuse the audience like in this part 1:27. Anyways, great job dude! Keep at it because you are only going to get better and better, can't wait to see more of your films.
Thanks for watching and giving your critiques of the film. I'm sixteen now, but was in fact fifteen when I made it. The majority of the shaky shots (on top of the roof) were handheld due to being hard to have lots of equipment and people up there, while keeping the people and equipment safe.
I've learned all about the 180 degree rule since I released The Sniper and have been more careful with this in my latest project.
Again, thanks for the positive feedback and advice! Cheers(:
Great location and wardrobe. I also really dug the bullet wound effect, very creative. Long shot coming out of the barn worked well too. Nicely done man.
For critique (only because you asked me to give it) - on the technical side, the roughest thing was the audio. Had some peaking/muffled moments there. Last thing I'd say is that the pacing felt slow, I'd try to trim it down closer to 5 minutes. Cut the fat and anything unneeded to really drive the experience and connection for the viewer.
Congrats on the short. Great job to the cast and crew.
First off, thank you for taking the time to view the film, as well as give your feedback. I agree that the audio is the biggest technical flaw of the film. It was incredibly windy while filming which caused a lot of problems on set. In post production, I put a highpass filter on the audio, which though it got rid of the wind to some degree, it also made the audio very muffled.
The short could also be cut down for sure and it definitely drags in the second half. Live and learn, I guess.
Thanks again for watching the film! Glad you enjoyed it!
Film Riot wow this is pretty good
Film Riot cg
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Next time use more realistic gun's , not pellet guns that ruins the hole thing.
Good tension, acting, music and production. AND anti war! Looking forward to more.
+Karen Fowler Thanks Nana, xoxo
In any wars, there are always winners, THE ARMS DEALERS, AND SOME POLITICIANS.
Wow, really amazing film. Pacing was spot-on throughout and action scenes felt as thrilling as any high-end Hollywood action movie. Great characters and plot. Some cuts, coloring, and audio did feel a bit rough, but overall it flowed smoothly and all the acting, props, and fx felt completely genuine. Congrats on the film festival, you definitely deserved it. Keep up the good work!
Thank you for taking the time to watch and critique the short. I have to agree with you when it comes to the sound and editing. Glad you enjoyed the film(:
Wow! I especially enjoy the way the shots look in this film.~ 😁 Steven Manzino does very well. I also love the message of this film and the conciseness of this film.
Thank you, Corey! We're glad you enjoyed the short. Please consider rating/reviewing The Sniper on IMDb and/or Amazon Video, as well as checking out my sophomore effort: Art Less, available on TH-cam and Amazon Video! Steve also thanks you(;
Nice film dude! Haven't seen stuff like this in a while. So much action, yet a sad story it's a thing you think you won't like but you will it's true filming,story,action it's perfect for a short film. You guys have a large future ahead with that talent.
Thank you very much for the positive feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Would love to hear your thoughts on our series, Art Less, available here and on Amazon Video!
Very nice. Sounds, effects, etc.
Thanks for your feedback! Would love to hear your opinion on our new series, Art Less
Good job man. The angles, sounds effects and sound mixing were good. You used visual storytelling a lot and I appreciate that. Real good man hope you'll do more cause I'd like to see more
Acquainted Soldier Thanks for the feedback. The short story that it was loosely based on was all from the point of view of the main Sniper, so no dialogue. Hence, I was forced in a way to tell the story all through visuals, but I think the show not tell style worked for this short, as did you apparently. If you want to check out more you can watch the five episode series I directed, Art Less on this channel, or on Amazon Video on October 19th!
Hey really good stuff here, you're getting a lot of things right. From a story perspective, it's hard to follow. I got the exposition but knowing why the girl was important to the man early on would have helped an emotional connection, and having her on the screen more would help too. Visually you always want to tell the most with the least. For example, the long running shot is very impressive, but what is it doing for the story? And lastly, always keep composition in mind. There were times the subject would leave the frame or be at a far corner. Using a longer focal length and finding angles that don't put the actor right onto a flat wall will add a lot of visual quality. And always be sure you are following the inverse shutter rule to make sure any motion the camera captures is smooth and consistent. Again, really impressive short film, keep at it!
Thank you for all of the feedback. There are certainly a lot of visual and story errors and missteps that I would change should I have the chance to redo the film. But, since I can't, I will do my best to improve in the future!
Excellent film Mr. Fowler. Kudos to all the actors. I was completely shocked by the ending. Never expected him to turn the gun on himself. Keep up the hard work.
+keith fowler Thank you so much Uncle Keith!
damn it. spoiled
Sorry to hear that :( Next time watch the whole video before reading the comments... haha
+Film Wire yeah i still watched the whole thing lmao
Amazing job
Tnx for the video
Love, love, love. So impressed.
+Lockey Coughlin Thank you so much! I'm really glad that you enjoyed it
Great job on this man! I came from Tyrone Magnus! I'm excited to see where you take your career in the future!
A sniper with airgun😭😢
No sniper this is air gun
I feel that is airsoft, VSR10
Yes at first i though i was wrong ... then paused to see the rear sights
You're a poor ass clip
Film Wire great comeback
Intense and powerful!
+Joe Rood I'm glad you enjoyed it! Please be sure to subscribe, share and like!
Wow ! At the end I got chills! Well done :)
Wow right back at you! That is quite the compliment and I'm glad that you were impacted by the film. Please consider leaving the film a rating or review on IMDb and Amazon Video and perhaps checking out our new series Art Less, available to watch on this channel and Amazon Video(:
Film Wire no problem, I'll do this with pleasure :)
amazing🎬 I just feel so sad inside.
That was fabulous. I love the color grading as well as the angles and movement of the camera. The only two things that kinda threw me off were the spoken dialog lines and the use of pellet guns. If you don't have access to the right props then obviously you used what you had. Overall, I loved it!! Keep it up!
Thanks for watching and taking the time to give your feedback! I'm really glad to see that you enjoyed the short film. Due to me being fifteen at the time of The Sniper being made and this entire project being payed for out of pocket, I didn't have the resources to have blank guns or model guns in the film Audio was also a huge problem on set, especially during the dialogue scene because the wing was insane the day we filmed it.
Thanks again for watching. I'd love to hear your thoughts and opinions on the five episode series I directed, Art Less which is available on this channel now and on Amazon Video starting October 19th.
Very impressed! The story was great, same with the music, angles and FX! Constructively, I must say: A few of the shots were a bit shaky, and the camera operator's shadow can be seen in a few shots. Still a great short film and I'm glad you made it! Maybe we can work on something together in the future ;) Keep up the great work! -S.B.
+Demons Within Thanks for the constrictive criticism! PM and we discuss collaborating(:
Great video love the camera angles colors and wardrobe
It means a lot to get such positive feedback, so thank you! Be sure to check out the series I directed, Art Less, which available now here on TH-cam!
Hey man; just saw your tweet. Yeah; great job! Doubly impressive that you made this at 15! I don't think I even knew how to turn a camera on at that age, haha :)
The only constructive criticism I have is the shaky shots. But I'm thinking this is probably because you lacked the necessary equipment. A decent stabilizer can be pretty pricey.
+The Unusual Suspect Thanks man! The reason for the shakiness is, you guessed it, the lack of a budget. More than half of my gear for that shoot was DIY. Thanks again for the feedback.
My current project is a six episode web series that I created, directed and did a lot of everything for, haha. If you want, check out the trailer. A share would be greatly appreciated! Thanks
th-cam.com/video/ngM_RBdTz5M/w-d-xo.html
+Film Wire hol up you're 15
I'm sixteen now but was fifteen when it was made/released!
+Film Wire oml congratulations
+Film Wire im fifteen rn and like moresh i make music so hmu if you ever need any. You can check out all my previous works on my music channel @ Nathan Zonnevylle | Orchestral and Hip - Hop Composer
Watch continuity. After you show the wound and torn field jacket on the protagonist, the field jacket is pristine for the remainder of the film.
Thanks for the tip~
The ending surprised me, so well Done :)
I came from Johns channel, subbed!
Sweet! Awesome that you didn't see it coming! Be sure to check out our new series, Art Less
This was really good hoping to see more from you
Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it. If you'd like you can check out the series I directed, Art Less, on Amazon Video and on this channel. I'd love to know what you think
This is good I can tell you put hard work into it keep doing what you're doing
We did, so it's nice to see that so many people have noticed and appreciate our efforts! Please consider checking out our new web series, Art Less, on Amazon Video!
This was... amazing. I saw your comment on a Kimmel video and you deserve so many more subscribers! Great film!
StanleyCornfield Thank you haha! Would love to hear your opinion on our series Art Less, which available on Amazon and here on TH-cam!
1:29 I laughed my head off at the "there's a sniper in the" **Boom bullet goes through the girls head**
Am i a psychopath?
Bowser Overlordz Maybe..
Yep ..!
2019
Probably.
It was too hard to tell the snipers apart, especially at the beginning. There wasn't much indication of who was where.
This is in part due to not having the equipment or forethought to having establishing shots. Thanks for the feedback
DUDE I LOVE THIS!!
+Dangerous Daedric Thanks for the positive feedback! Glad you enjoyed it(:
Film Wire better than what I used to put out... I wanna try it again
+Dangerous Daedric Glad I helped encourage you(:
Nice work!
Dane Bryant Frazier Thanks for watching! Be sure to check out our series Art Less, available on this channel and on Amazon Video
I am very impressed by this! And you're 15 years old? Wowza. Good work! I look forward to more from you. Sincerely, Don
Glad you enjoyed it! I'm sixteen now but was fifteen when it was made/released! Thanks for the feedback
Loved it!
The air rifles worked nice as props. I couldn’t quite tell though, were they using the same rifle or were they separate guns?
The acting was great in terms of the actual action. Then line delivery wasn’t the best but it also wasn’t awful.
Amazing setting.
All in all, great job!
Truly Amazing. You have really beautiful cinematography and I don't know if you graded this or not but it looked stunning. One of the things I really look out for in a film is editing because I feel that people don't pay attention to how much of the film is created in the editing room and I thought almost every single shot was edited very well especially how each shot had a smooth transition and did not distract the audience. You are truly a great filmmaker. Of course, you already know that there are audio issues so I'm not going to go into detail on that. I would say if you have the adobe creative cloud take the time to learn Adobe Audition which is a sound editing program. There are really great things you can do in there to improve the quality of your sound. It's amazing that you are producing a film like this at the age of 15 or 16 I believe and I hope to be as good as you by the time it at your age. I do have a couple of questions. First of all, do you live in L.A and if so are you in a high school program that you really enjoy? I'm looking into high schools and I am trying to find a good program. What camera and lens are you using I am looking to upgrade and thought since you are such a great cinematographer you might have a suggestion?Lastly what's your strategy for location scouting? I'd appreciate if you could go over the other two films on my page and give me some feedback on those if you have time. :) Great job you are an amazing filmmaker!!
Thanks for the kind words man! The film was in fact graded. I live in New England and am currently homeschooled.
As for the camera/lens, for this film I used a Nikon D5100 with a Nikon 18-54mm zoom and Nikon 55mm prime lens. I have upgraded to a Panasonic LUMIX G7, which is an amazing camera for the price. For location scouting, I thought of my idol location and looked for what most closely matched my ideas and asked for permission.
I'll be sure to check out your work, and get back to you soon(:
+Film Wire great job!!! I'll be upgrading to the gh4
Be sure to check out the second episode tomorrow, September 13th, at 6:00pm right here on TH-cam!
Will do! Just got my gh4. A short film using it should be coming out around October 10th on my channel.
Be happy for watching a very selective movie
Great film! I was just wondering what camera you used to shoot this?
For your first work it is very advanced, better than most beginner shorts I've seen, but there are also quite a lot of things to improve. I'm sure you already know about the audio, length and shakiness issues. To improve your short, never stay with one scene for too long, a lot of scenes like in the beginning and when he goes inside treating his wounds are too long, same goes for shots, some where way too long or could have been improved with a short cut to another angle.
The one-er where he runs outside is good but since it is only one shot the entire time it feels long and tedious, try to put in a bit of change like cutting to front or side view.
Cinematography was alright but needs improvement, some shots didn't look that good. A good way to check is when you pause the film, no matter where, it should look as if it could be a photograph.
-Press stop.
-Does it look like it could be a wallpaper?
-No? Consider reshooting that shot or try a different angle.
-Yes? You got the perfect shot.
If you have a tripod you can try to use it as a stabilizer by holding it at the end of the legs (only do this if your tripod is strong enough, or it might bend), you can also mount the tripod on your shoulder, just avoid holding the camera directly as much as possible.
In terms of sound there isn't much you can do. You already did the best choice by trying to denoise it.The leveling could use some retouching as some sounds are quite loud. Consider investing in a boom mic or small wireless mics like they have on tv shows.
Acting of the snipers was very good, casting and location were ideal as well. Story may be a bit confusing but can be improved by shortening. The feel of the short towards the end was conveyed very good.
Sorry if this post feels like only negative criticism, while there is a lot to improve this short is definitely very good and for your first time it is at a high standard.
Thanks for all of the helpful feedback and advice and I agree that the short could've been cut down a lot. I'd love to hear your opinion on the series I directed after this, Art Less! You can check it out on this channel or on Amazon Video! Thanks again for watching and taking the time to give your thoughts(:
that was incredible I really enjoyed it I hope to see more 👍🏾
+Zentrell White Thank you so much! If you enjoyed the project, please consider subscribing, sharing and liking the video.
I saw your comment on Film Riot's channel and I gotta say, this is really good! I'm 20 and I've just started to take an interest in short films, so you're way ahead of the curve. Every video you release, take criticism from every source and use it to better your movies. The shots looked great here, I really enjoyed it. The major thing that takes away from the immersion here, is that I feel you shot in 30fps. Try filming in 24fps, it comes across so much more cinematic! And a few of the shots were a bit overexposed, but that's really not that big of a deal, easy fix. What kind of camera do you use? You can make homemade stabilizers that work great!
Ah man you have such talent. That over-the-shoulder long take following the sniper down the stairs and outside was awesome!
Thank you so much for your positive response. Reactions to my works like these make it all worth it(: Thank you also for the critiques and feedback. I actually used a DIY shoulder rig that was based on one of Film Riot's designs. I used a Nikon D5100 with mostly a 18-54mm and 50mm prime lens. I've now upgraded to a Panasonic LUMIX G7.
The long shot out of the barn was by far one of the hardest parts of the shoot. We filmed over twenty takes before we got it right. The largest issue was the stairwell was very short and sloped down. Our cinematographer kept hitting the back of the rig against the low ceiling as he came down. We even tried having our assistant director, who was almost a foot shorter than both my cinematographer and I, do the shot. In the end we went with the first take which was actually just a test run (done by me).
Once again thanks for the critiques! If you'd like you can check out the trailers for my next project (a six episode television series that will be available on Amazon Video) on my channel!
Awesome and interesting!
Thank you! Check out my second project: Art Less here on this channel
It has been shown throughout history that freedom requires a regular feeding of flesh and blood.
Really good mate =)
Thanks for watching and taking the time to comment. We're glad that you enjoyed it. Please consider rating/reviewing The Sniper on IMDb and/or Amazon Video, as well as checking out my sophomore effort: Art Less, available on TH-cam and Amazon Video!
Film Riot is right in everything he said, but when you'rs dealing with wind... what Can you do! :-)
Other than that, great little short you have here! Subbed!
Thank you for taking the time to watch, comment, and subscribe! Please consider rating/reviewing The Sniper on IMDb and/or Amazon Video, as well as checking out my sophomore effort: Art Less, available on TH-cam and Amazon Video!
Oh I will! ...when I can! Lots of issues with me and my health lately...
Doctors gave me a year left a while back... trying to prove them wrong!!!
More bad days than good lately!!! I keep smiling, though!!! :-)
I'm pretty busy with my own stuff... when I can!
Lots of music on my YT Channels, feel free to use if something catches your ear,
just don't forget to give me/us the credit! Don't care too much about compensation!
Perplexia X Thank you for sharing that with me, I feel honored. Should you ever need help with anything let me know by emailing me at fowlergabe@gmail.com
Yeah, I don't know if there is anything we have made that you would like, but if there is (or you just want to talk privately), let me know... perplexia.x@gmail.com ...and like I said, I'm not really concerned about making money anymore... kind of pointless ...and thank you for your thoughts! ...means a lot! :-)
i agree with many gabriel, great job, keep up the great work you will achieve great success!
Just a good idea for future similar projects if and when you need info about weapons and tactics , and wardrobe for example here being military snipers, you can contact your local Legion or search out a service personnel they can certainly guide with proper info to make the visuals more authentic... again great work ! i look forward to seeing more
+Julien Deon Thank you for the information on getting more realistic props. I appreciate it a ton! It would be a huge help if you'd share the project on social media and give it a like(:
already done
Not retreating after being seriously wounded is your fifth mistake
Amazing rifle, amazing sniper hide.
Those were pellet guns....
I'm from remote area but i'll Say that's not a sniper rifle at all. Bravo "Air-gun"
I liked it a lot. Honestly I feel like a longer full sized movie would have worked better but that's just me. It was supposed to be a short film and it was. If you made it into a full length one day I would watch it for sure.
That's quite the compliment. We were attempting to stick to the source material to some degree, and being that I self-funded the film there was no way that I, being fifteen at the time with no job, could've funded a feature(:
whoa...Gabriel man are you looking to become the next JJ Abrams???..for real nice job...
+Rad -Z Haha, wow! That means a ton man, being that he's one of my idols!
you got it....rock on homes...
Thanks bro!
Snipers don't smoke. The cloud of smoke would give him away visually, as well as others could smell him.
Amazing film, came from your comment on the updated rules film riot video.
Eddy L yeah same, great short movie
Thanks guys! Would be a huge help if you all shared and also checked out the series I directed, Art Less.
Film Wire ok will do, hay man send me a DM on a Twitter as I'm interested in your short movie.
+Film Wire it was a nice short film but I felt that there were too many unnecessary cuts to the face and to other places like when the one sniper was opening the envelope. Also when you are doing a cut off scene like the girl getting shot make sure it is more abrupt because it seemed more of her waiting to be shot for a split second before it actually happened. It was hard to tell the snipers apart at the beginning, and on top of that if you are doing a short film that doesn't have to much talking make sure the audience can understand what is going on without having to cut to every part of the same scene or frame(not a terminology wiz) it was also missing a direction like a place the film has to climax. I'm not trying to bash I'm just giving my opinion on what could be better. Sorry this is so long.
Thanks for watching and taking the time to comment! Looking back I agree that I could have held on shots for far longer. At the time I was attempting to build tension with the quick cuts, when in fact, a lack of cutting may have worked better. Thank you again for all of your fantastic feedback! Please consider rating/reviewing The Sniper on IMDb and/or Amazon Video, as well as checking out my sophomore effort: Art Less, available on TH-cam and Amazon Video! I'll be sure to take a look at your work later today or tomorrow(:
The actual story had the scenes at night time. One of the sniper lights up cigarette and get shot.
Wow, well done.
Thank you! Please consider checking out our new web series, Art Less, on Amazon Video!
Wow this was filmed in a very professional way gd short film
Strange username... regardless thanks for watching and for the love! If you'd like you can check out the second project I directed, Art Less, available now on Amazon Video and for a limited time here on TH-cam! I'd love to hear your feedback - G
Cool concept! It reminded me of the film "Enemy at the Gates" I like the Color Grading, to me I feel as if it's mysterious, uncertain. But the things I don't like are the Steady Cam shots, I know a lot of people like one shots, (even myself, Revenant, Birdman etc.) but it just extends the story to far. I also dislike the camera, it maybe due to your budget constraints because in dark scenes the lack of a good camera shows, or you didn't light the place properly. Lastly, I dislike the sound, looking at the comments you are aware of this but you should consider Sound Designing the film. It wouldn't be hard to find sounds for foot prints, or breathing etc.
All in all cool short film, it's awesome to see people getting interested in film, my brother himself goes to a Film School and he and his friends make awesome projects, but I like you're attitude. You understand you're still learning/growing and you want honest feedback great job Gabriel!
First off, thank you for taking the time out of your life to watch and give such fantastic critiques and feedback for The Sniper. The poor camera quality was due to the fact that we were using a Nikon D5100 (consumer level camera) and shot the film using only natural lighting, as the location had no electricity in the barn. I would love to connect with your brother! Where does he go to film school? Again, thank you for watching. Please consider rating/reviewing The Sniper on IMDb and/or Amazon Video, as well as checking out my sophomore effort: Art Less, available on TH-cam and Amazon Video!
I can't believe I casted this to my ps4 on tv. Cheesy as fuck! That "sniper rifle" I have that same shitty ass break barrel pellet gun.
Well done!
Just wondering, because i'm just getting into the whole film making thing. What was the Cinematographer/Producer his task on this short film compared to you?
Would love to hear from you. Your work seems pretty solid!
I (Gabriel Fowler) was the sole producer of the film and was also the uncredited co-DP with Alex Desjardin. Alex had been working on the project with me since right after the first draft, so we were in many ways in sync when it came to the story, emotion, etc. He was focused more on the cinematography in terms of the story, characters, etc. while I was focused more on the actual camera movement.
I see! Thank you!
Great little short, I watched it twice. The only thing I would have added is black bars top n bottom for a more cinematic look. Great story though and though provoking too
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Heres my feedback - I really like it overall. Setting and so on is good. Colors are good. You certainly have talent. Heres some things that you could maybe look over:
You begin showing the first sniper in close up in the tense moment, which is good, but then you go for mid shots of him, which i think is not ideal. you have a pretty decent actor on your hands with good face expressions, so you could stick to close ups to show his tension and to emphasize that he is hidden in the barn for the rest of the film.
Love the camera positioning in the car. maybe steadycam to reduce the jogging?
The girl and the military guy talking could use better sound. The dialogue cut at 1:11 is not ideal because your camera switches to the other side and the viewer has a hard time following the girls attention. Same goes with the following 'now' shot from the military.
I love the special effects and the shooting. looks pretty good and not too graphic. chapeau!
I think overall the action scene is a little confusing because the second sniper was never introduced and the viewer does not know that he is even there apart from the intro. At 1:20 you see the first sniper readying his rifle and right after that you see the second sniper aiming, which causes some irritation because i kinda was expecting the first ones action, since i witnessed him getting ready.
The scene where you follow the sniper thorugh the barn is very good! i love the music and the hand camera. nice work! Also I like how you manage to transport the "cold war" tension through the rest of the film.
Thats basically it. Hope this helps a bit.
Thanks for watching and taking the time to comment! Looking back I agree that I could have held on shots for far longer. At the time I was attempting to build tension with the quick cuts, when in fact, a lack of cutting may have worked better. The lack of stabilization in the car, but also the entire short film, was due to a lack of equipment. I also recognize and admit that the audio and sound design is one of the weakest aspects of the short film. Thank you again for all of your fantastic feedback! Please consider rating/reviewing The Sniper on IMDb and/or Amazon Video, as well as checking out my sophomore effort: Art Less, available on TH-cam and Amazon Video!
No problem! I certainly will check it out, cheers!
That was great! I really liked it, it works very well overall. I would like to add a couple of comments, but please don't understand them as destructive criticism, it's just a couple of ideas I think may help improve future shorts.
- The first few shots of the sniper looked awesome (great handheld), but I thought they should be longer. There were too many cuts in my opinion.
- The music in minute 2:00 feels slightly out of place because of the percussion. The sort of music you use in 4:20 could be a better fit.
- I would avoid having shots with different framerates, if I'm not wrong there are a couple of them shot in 60 fps that don't feel right because of the rest.
- Have you considered using a narrower aspect ratio? 16:9 gives it a documentary vibe to the video, maybe it would look more filmic in 1.85:1.
Once again, I think this is a phenomenal short film, just some ideas for you to consider in the future. I hope to see more of your work!
Thank you for taking the time to watch and comment with such well thought out feedback and constructive criticism. The editing is something I would slow down if I were to do it now. I was attempting to build the tension with fast cuts, without realizing that longer unbroken takes build the suspense more often than not. The film was actually filmed all at 24fps and 30fps, but you are right that the frame rate should have stayed the same throughout. Please consider rating/reviewing The Sniper on IMDb and/or Amazon Video, as well as checking out my sophomore effort: Art Less, available on TH-cam and Amazon Video!
Funny to see you comment on the Kuleshov video because I thought the editing here was really rough at times. There were certainly some things that could have been cut in another way or left out completely. It seemed too naturalistic at times. Did you originally shoot at 30(+)frames?
Although it worked for this one I gotta say don't get too greedy and self indulgent with your long takes, unless you want to steal Oscars like those Mexicans. And lens flary stuff... Easy does it.
The quote at the end may seem deep to you now, but I'm pretty sure you'll laugh at yourself in a few years for thinking it added anything worthwhile to the movie.
That said, I was intrigued enough to watch the whole thing so... Nice!
Thanks for watching and taking the time to comment! Looking back I agree that I could have held on shots for far longer. At the time I was attempting to build tension with the quick cuts, when in fact, a lack of cutting may have worked better.I also recognize and admit that the audio and sound design is one of the weakest aspects of the short film. The quote at the end is already something I wish I could cut out of this version of the short, as well as the gunshot at the end, haha.
Thank you again for all of your fantastic feedback! Please consider rating/reviewing The Sniper on IMDb and/or Amazon Video, as well as checking out my sophomore effort: Art Less, available on TH-cam and Amazon Video! I'll be sure to take a look at your work later today or tomorrow(:
It's a nice film but I guess the audio was a little rough at the beginning.
Also may I know , what equipment you used to film?
Thanks for the feedback! We used a lot of DIY equipment, such as a PVC shoulder mount held together by duct tape and prayers and a camera slider constructed of electrical piping. The film was also shot using all natural lighting. We used a Nikon D5100 and the kit lens that I owned and a NTG2/Zoom HN4 and a 50mm prime lens that I was lent. Thanks again for watching.
really good film!
Thank you so much! Would love to hear your opinion on Art Less - our new series available here and on Amazon Video
The sniper's got a break barrel spring air rifle...guffaw!!
Gouneo Kipgen , sourcing a real rifle and blanks must have been to difficult. I was the first thing i noticed. And the first snipers tech holding the rifle. The shot was taken without him holding the stock into his arm. A real high caliber gun would have broken has collar bone. And normally the second sniper should have killed the first one that stupidly walked out in the open. But hey the point of this was the film making . And that was well done. Hats off for the hard work you have put in.
A bit of criticism for ya, work on your sound design, lighting and framing. Never underestimate sound because that could easily drive people away quicker than anything else and if a sound doesn't sound great or something don't just cut it out, record new sound effects for it using other objects in a controlled environment. With lighting and framing I can tell you used natural light for this but it seemed like you had auto brightness on or something because the shot kept getting different levels of exposure so be careful about that. For the most part I liked how this film was framed but there was one shot in particular where the shadow of the cameraman could be seen and that type of thing can be fixed in a quick reshoot at a different angle. Overall decent little film and I can tell you show promise. This is your first work I've seen and will now check out your series. Good luck in your endeavors man!
Sound was in many ways ignored while filming and looking back that was in my opinion my biggest mistake. The film was lit using all natural light due to their being no electricity in the building. Thanks for all of the feedback and criticisms! Would love to hear your feedback on Art Less!
i would have put some kind of an establishing shot at the beginning, but everything else was awesome.
also, where did you get the music?
The farm that we filmed at was still a functioning farm, while we were filming, hence we would have gotten trucks driving and signs of modern life had we had an establishing shot. The music is an original composition for the film by Moreshwar Briscoe
Well done for a first film. Just make sure the film paces nicely, and I'd recommend a new mic, as I heard the wind and the camera is pretty shaky. But all in all, it's a good film.
Thank you for watching for giving your feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed it. We did have a lot of audio issues, not always due to the microphone. Often it was the cause of an inexperienced person operating the audio set up. Same issue for the camera work, however that due more to a lack of proper equipment. I would love to hear your thoughts on our series, Art Less, available here and on Amazon Video!
Just needs better exposure compensation, post color processing, image stabilization, and better audio, but I see the potential. Try out different angles during scenes where someone is walking instead of one long follow. Last bit of critique of to make sure the actors deliver their lines authentically, and don't let them be scared of ad-libbing in order to make dialogue more believable.
Thank you for taking the time to watch and give such fantastic feedback! I'll strive to improve on all of those fronts on future projects(:
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I had this story as homework in high school. Lol
Unknown so did I all of us haha! We figured there was a large market for kids who’d rather watch a video than do their homework and I think we might have been right.
Stopped watching after his first shot, half his weapon was sticking out the window, not too mention the cigarette smoke he blew out the window.
Fair. Thanks for the view tough (;
Great!!
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That's some fast bolt action you have
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Regardless the comments saying audio was bad I thought it was just fine for a film
Btw I subbed 😉
Thanks man! I do agree with the comments that at times the audio does peak, however I'm glad you thought it was alright! Thanks for subscribing and be sure to check out the series I directed, Art Less.
Снайпер с воздушной, курящий сигару на позиции - это эпичность, хотя для комедии пойдет)))
Funny how all these expended cartridge casing are falling into a neat pile when he's on a roof! If your going to have people think he's using a semi-automatic 7.62mm rifle then give him one not a BB gun.
Tony Ogar the cartridges landing are all within the compounds of the barn.
Awesome.
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Pretty good! I'm also an aspiring filmmaker, how did you land adult actors?
Thanks for the feedback! I had worked with all of the actors prior in local theater and they were all kind enough to volunteer their time and talents. Cheers
Hey, just wanted to give you a tip. When you render your project make sure to set the frame rate to 24 or 30. If someone wants to watch it in 720p or 1080p the 60 frame rate doesn't have a cinematic feel to it.
Thank you for the feedback. The film was shot and edited in 30fps, so not sure why it is playing that way.
Film Wire You probably rendered it in 60 fps
Possibly, honestly can't remember. I will be uploading a 30fps and color corrected version of The Sniper to Vimeo soon.
Nice selling even with the sir guns
One has to see who is really best or will always wonder.
Well, considering those were break action pellet guns, you made them look pretty real. But, just so you're better informed about war because you've obviously had no experience with it, it does have winners. Hence us not all speaking German. The sheep forget their history so fast.
Which camera did You used to film it?
Nikon D5100
Hello i came here drom smosh and Nice job man
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Nice video 📸
My Critiques:
- I think that if you would've chosen different music, it would elevate the film to much greater levels.
- I don't know what it is about some of the camera angles, some felt too generic, others felt too static, and some outright cut out faces from the shot
- I think a better actor choice for the woman who was killed and the sergeant would have added to the realism of the scene
I am not saying this to be mean, your film was very well done with only these flaws, but when making future films, using my critiques, will in my opinion elevate them. Great work!
Thank you for taking the time to watch and give such fantastic feedback! I'll strive to improve on all of those fronts on future projects. If you'd like, I'd love to know your opinions on the web series I directed, Art Less!
Where i can found more sniper video or short film?
Scenes can be stationary and long, you dont need to cut and have like 5 different shots in a span of 6 seconds
Thanks for the constructive criticism. Looking back I agree that I could have held on shots for far longer. At the time I was attempting to build tension with the quick cuts, when in fact a lack of cutting may have worked better (:
I don't really understand why he killed himself at the end?? He has the wife and girl to live for and, as far as I can see, no personal or emotional attachment to either the victims or the other sniper. I mean, I get war is hell but that ending just felt like a dark twist for sake of a twist. Also, the movie needs some room to breathe. I felt like this movie was supposed to be contemplative but the songs and quick transitions between shots made that hard to do. It's a good concept tho, and the location was beautiful
The idea was to show have the main sniper find his last shred of morality when he found the girl's photos with her family. He then struggles with what he should do, eventually deciding to pull the trigger. He then regrets said discussion. There was a cut scene that further explored this idea with the letter, however, I originally cut it as I feared that people would lose interest. In reflection, I should have kept said scene. Thanks for watching! Please consider rating/reviewing The Sniper on IMDb and/or Amazon Video, as well as checking out my sophomore effort: Art Less, available on TH-cam and Amazon Video!
When he was going back into the barn with the bag, the other sniper would not have missed at that range.
it was good man great work one more thing you need is too much changing of angles you should make it a little short too it was connecting me and then loosing but good work man congratulations on your short film
and yeah i learned some new angles here dude
Thank you so much for such well thought out feedback! I really appreciate it. I too agree that the film could have been shortened by a minute or two. Cheers, and please consider rating the short film on both Amazon Video and IMDb.
Great work man the only thing I have to say is that we get very little dialogue and character development other wise it was an amazing short film
Thanks for watching and giving your thoughts! Art Less, the series I directed, is pretty much all dialogue and character development, lol! You can check it out on this channel and on Amazon Video!
Nice job. Frame rate was non-standard; audio, frame composition and acting need a bit of help. Great effort though.
Thank you for watching and giving your feedback. I've done/I'll do my best to improve in all future projects.
This is awesome, I think it was really well made but I think the camera could be a bit les shaky and maybe turn the sound effects down a little, other than that it is amazing.
Thanks for watching and giving your feedback! As I say a lot when responding to comments, if I could go back I would've changed things, including having brought down the sound. As for the shakiness, in some ways I think I improved on this on my second project, Art Less, which available now on Amazon Video and for a limited time here on TH-cam! I'd love to hear your feedback - G
Leaving cover I’m going out into the open that’s your third mistake
Sniper taking cover over the top of a barn roof. Conspicuous much? This vid was so full of tactical mistakes, and then to even have the audacity to make a statement about war? When were any of them even close to a war?