It would help if you developed a theme. There are a lot of good moments but they don't feel very connected at times. For example, in measure 71, you use a dotted quarter note, an eighth note and a quarter note. For that passage, you stayed in G Minor. Then, in measures 72-73, you go to F Major. Here is an example of a place where I think repeating the melody from measures 70-71 would come in handy. This is just my suggestion, of course, but I think it would allow for much more movement.
It would help if you developed a theme. There are a lot of good moments but they don't feel very connected at times. For example, in measure 71, you use a dotted quarter note, an eighth note and a quarter note. For that passage, you stayed in G Minor. Then, in measures 72-73, you go to F Major. Here is an example of a place where I think repeating the melody from measures 70-71 would come in handy. This is just my suggestion, of course, but I think it would allow for much more movement.
Sounds a bit like “Angela undress” from the score for American beauty by Thomas Newman
Nice
Much better, consider some melody tying across bar lines to add tension. Everything is only on beats
Please do a piece that is happy 🙏
Not my favourite among your pieces, but it's still a fabulous work with the inner voices! Love 1:41. Keep composing, you have potential!
Just lost my fish Raphael, this helped.
Hope you are doing fine