I’m watching this curled on my bed because I’m sick, and let me tell you that I’m loving every second. The prologue was very interesting and intriguing, and I do want to know more of what happened
As an amateur author, this is fantastic!! It’s very inspiring to me to hear/read other people’s unpublished work, it motivates me to continue❤ I love the characters and how you introduced them, I was already hooked from the first few minutes! I really hope you publish this one day, I would love to read it❤
Oh, that's great, George!!! I don't know if you took my idea to make a video, but in any case, it's really cool that you made such a video, I love it when someone reads, I just like human speech, especially in a whisper, I fall asleep very quickly to it, and you have a great whisper, voice in general, therefore, falling asleep is doubly pleasant!!! And yes, I congratulate you on what you're doing, I'm very interested in what it's like to write your book, for some reason it seems to me that writers are people with a particularly well-read speech, they are very vulnerable and at the same time incredibly interesting personalities, I don't know why, but I have a feeling.! I love you, hug you and wish you a good start to the year!!! And I wish all other viewers a good night's sleep!!! ❤
Awesome to see you’re writing. If I may, you may want to limit how much of this you release online if you’re thinking about traditional publishing in the future. Publishers want something called ‘right of first publication’ so if you’ve done something that could be construed as publication (such as recording and releasing your own audiobook version) that can limit your ability to get published. UK publishers are especially - and annoyingly - strict on this. Obviously not an issue if you want to self-publish. And if I may further deign to give some light critique: Something confuses me early in the prologue that you might want to clarify. The narrator starts describing his own house, but then the narrative switches to third person, apparently describing someone else’s house (someone who writes for the Times) before switching back to first person. I might have missed something, not having the written prose in front of me, but I couldn’t work out who this ‘he’ was. As an overall comment on the prologue, I think it might need to be better justified. It’s a framing device, but quite a long one. You create dramatic irony by explaining that there was ‘a tragedy’ and gesturing at some thematic ideas, but you’re delaying getting into the actual story which could lead to some readers picking it up, giving it a few pages, and putting it back down again before they get into chapter 1. The ‘looking back on life as an interview’ is also such a well trodden framing device that it’s nearing a cliché. If we’re going to get such a framing device, I’d like to get more into the character, giving some indication of their character traits beyond their interests. Having said that, you’ve nailed the conversational style first person allows, which can help carry a reader through sections they’d otherwise find tedious. And I think your dialogue is solid. Your description is also good, but I might change its focus. A lot of time is spent on the interviewer, when all she is narratively is a prompt for the questions. I might focus description of elements with more narrative weight. A lot of description for the camera, for example, might be interesting as part of the exploration of technology and theatre (maybe reminding our character of the first time a play of his was recorded, and how cameras since then have changed while elements of the theatre have remained static or some such). Anyway, this is a very long comment on just the prologue, so I’ll stop now and let the ASMR wash over me. Keep it up!
@@vathek5958 Thanks for the feedback, and yes, I am going to self publish, i think that for now at least that is a good way to start, and the rest of my book will be published for members only in a few months time😊
i love this! i watch so many of your videos. i especially like them because i watch a lot of downton abbey and daydream a lot with stories in my head of being a maid there and thinking of stories with the characters. I just love the aesthetics and such and you capture it so well with your channel! p.s. I wondered about the prologue (this could be totally wrong and i’m so sorry if it is i am autistic and can tend to see things too black and white hence i thought i would ask for clarification!) but you talk of a play involving themes of transgender people and i picked up on like a negative tone with that? I think i get the picture you are painting like the modern of theatre vs your character’s wish for the olden vibes of theatre. But it felt a little mean to trans people and them retelling stories maybe? im super nervous to post this and will probably delete soon but i thought i should ask because i value your work and channel so much 🥺🩷
Wow your writing is so eloquent! I hope you are able to publish it someday
I’m watching this curled on my bed because I’m sick, and let me tell you that I’m loving every second. The prologue was very interesting and intriguing, and I do want to know more of what happened
@@sinimeg Aww thank you 🙏🏻 and also get well soon!!!
As an amateur author, this is fantastic!! It’s very inspiring to me to hear/read other people’s unpublished work, it motivates me to continue❤ I love the characters and how you introduced them, I was already hooked from the first few minutes! I really hope you publish this one day, I would love to read it❤
Oh, that's great, George!!!
I don't know if you took my idea to make a video, but in any case, it's really cool that you made such a video, I love it when someone reads, I just like human speech, especially in a whisper, I fall asleep very quickly to it, and you have a great whisper, voice in general, therefore, falling asleep is doubly pleasant!!!
And yes, I congratulate you on what you're doing, I'm very interested in what it's like to write your book, for some reason it seems to me that writers are people with a particularly well-read speech, they are very vulnerable and at the same time incredibly interesting personalities, I don't know why, but I have a feeling.!
I love you, hug you and wish you a good start to the year!!! And I wish all other viewers a good night's sleep!!! ❤
This is so excellent in so many levels 😊❤
the way this is so good hello?? like not only the excellent writing but the tingles omg??
I am reading a book whilst listening to your video. Thank you!
Your voice was made for ASMR and reading. I love this so much. Just subscribed ❤
Oh how wonderful !! Im' going to watch your video on the 1st January 😃😛
Awesome to see you’re writing. If I may, you may want to limit how much of this you release online if you’re thinking about traditional publishing in the future. Publishers want something called ‘right of first publication’ so if you’ve done something that could be construed as publication (such as recording and releasing your own audiobook version) that can limit your ability to get published. UK publishers are especially - and annoyingly - strict on this. Obviously not an issue if you want to self-publish.
And if I may further deign to give some light critique:
Something confuses me early in the prologue that you might want to clarify. The narrator starts describing his own house, but then the narrative switches to third person, apparently describing someone else’s house (someone who writes for the Times) before switching back to first person. I might have missed something, not having the written prose in front of me, but I couldn’t work out who this ‘he’ was.
As an overall comment on the prologue, I think it might need to be better justified. It’s a framing device, but quite a long one. You create dramatic irony by explaining that there was ‘a tragedy’ and gesturing at some thematic ideas, but you’re delaying getting into the actual story which could lead to some readers picking it up, giving it a few pages, and putting it back down again before they get into chapter 1. The ‘looking back on life as an interview’ is also such a well trodden framing device that it’s nearing a cliché. If we’re going to get such a framing device, I’d like to get more into the character, giving some indication of their character traits beyond their interests.
Having said that, you’ve nailed the conversational style first person allows, which can help carry a reader through sections they’d otherwise find tedious. And I think your dialogue is solid. Your description is also good, but I might change its focus. A lot of time is spent on the interviewer, when all she is narratively is a prompt for the questions. I might focus description of elements with more narrative weight. A lot of description for the camera, for example, might be interesting as part of the exploration of technology and theatre (maybe reminding our character of the first time a play of his was recorded, and how cameras since then have changed while elements of the theatre have remained static or some such).
Anyway, this is a very long comment on just the prologue, so I’ll stop now and let the ASMR wash over me. Keep it up!
@@vathek5958 Thanks for the feedback, and yes, I am going to self publish, i think that for now at least that is a good way to start, and the rest of my book will be published for members only in a few months time😊
I am so excited for this!❤
I enjoyed this a lot! I would to hear you read more!
Happy new years!!! I loved this soo much 😇😇
i love this! i watch so many of your videos. i especially like them because i watch a lot of downton abbey and daydream a lot with stories in my head of being a maid there and thinking of stories with the characters. I just love the aesthetics and such and you capture it so well with your channel!
p.s. I wondered about the prologue (this could be totally wrong and i’m so sorry if it is i am autistic and can tend to see things too black and white hence i thought i would ask for clarification!) but you talk of a play involving themes of transgender people and i picked up on like a negative tone with that? I think i get the picture you are painting like the modern of theatre vs your character’s wish for the olden vibes of theatre. But it felt a little mean to trans people and them retelling stories maybe? im super nervous to post this and will probably delete soon but i thought i should ask because i value your work and channel so much 🥺🩷
Aaaaaa yayayayya♥️🤸