I’m one of the picky readers who read the first line and go, “Nope, not for me” and shut the book. Now that I’m a writer. Oh, god, it’s so hard to write a good first line, so now I understand the pain of all you good writers out there.
Off topic but absolutely love that bubblegum pink lipstick Rebecca has on! Looks so good on you!! ❤️❤️ thank you both for taking the time to make these they’re very informative
Rebecca is amazing! I was watching a similar video doing the same kind of sentence breakdown, fustrated the hosts weren't. They were reading first 250 words but i was getting caught within first few lines haha. No where near as masterfully as her.
Great video, very helpful. At 16:00 when talking about tenses with verbs....isn't the second verb a particle phrase and can thus be in the present tense as it is describing an action that occurred during the previous verb.? Ie. He sprawled on a bus stop bench, balancing a bed pan on his lap. That's actually correct. Or am I wrong?
17:20 about m dashes. the thing she said to do to make them only worked in scrivener for me. I tired word and google docs too, is there a setting I need to change? I mostly write in scrivener so no big deal but it would be nice if it worked elsewhere.
I get the joke about AI,,,, just btw, I lost my job to AI last month - I worked in a white-collar sweatshop work -at-home job, reading essays for college entrance exams...
I thought that there was an event brite done for these. They not using that anymore? Didn’t get to sub a line 😢 (Iheard him say he sent out email tho, seems I don’t have it)
Hi I follow Rebecca on Instagram and she put out a story to advertise it. If you’re not a social media user that won’t help of course. But hope it does
Wait a minute, if the sky was colors that had never existed before, how would we be able to see them? Maybe, "... colors I had never seen before." Or, "... he had never seen before. "
I’m one of the picky readers who read the first line and go, “Nope, not for me” and shut the book.
Now that I’m a writer. Oh, god, it’s so hard to write a good first line, so now I understand the pain of all you good writers out there.
Thank you Rebecca and Martin, these videos are great!
Off topic but absolutely love that bubblegum pink lipstick Rebecca has on! Looks so good on you!! ❤️❤️ thank you both for taking the time to make these they’re very informative
Thank you!! 🖤
Hi Everyone! Delighted I haven't misses this!
Very insightful high-level advice. I'm learning a lot. Thank you!
Rebecca is amazing! I was watching a similar video doing the same kind of sentence breakdown, fustrated the hosts weren't. They were reading first 250 words but i was getting caught within first few lines haha. No where near as masterfully as her.
Woah! Exact thought about the metal bars just before she said it. Yes absolutely it should just have been about someone tied up.
Great presentation! I'm rewriting my first line. ---Helen from Fort Walton Beach. FL
This is so helpful. Thank you!
Thank you from Thailand - nice stuff!
I would've liked this sentence: "That night he followed her as far as the abandoned Olive Garden."
How can I submit for first line critique please?
Great video, very helpful.
At 16:00 when talking about tenses with verbs....isn't the second verb a particle phrase and can thus be in the present tense as it is describing an action that occurred during the previous verb.?
Ie.
He sprawled on a bus stop bench, balancing a bed pan on his lap.
That's actually correct. Or am I wrong?
17:20 about m dashes. the thing she said to do to make them only worked in scrivener for me. I tired word and google docs too, is there a setting I need to change? I mostly write in scrivener so no big deal but it would be nice if it worked elsewhere.
Oh this was fun!
I get the joke about AI,,,, just btw, I lost my job to AI last month - I worked in a white-collar sweatshop work -at-home job, reading essays for college entrance exams...
Once upon a time Ely James against motive, brains and expectations gets the Pulitzer! ;(_+_); = my first line of 70
Wish you expanded on when it’s not fine to start a sentence with a gerund.
I thought that there was an event brite done for these. They not using that anymore? Didn’t get to sub a line 😢 (Iheard him say he sent out email tho, seems I don’t have it)
Hi
I follow Rebecca on Instagram and she put out a story to advertise it. If you’re not a social media user that won’t help of course. But hope it does
@@achatwithalex474 cheers for the suggestion :)
Nella, Toronto, hello!
Wait a minute, if the sky was colors that had never existed before, how would we be able to see them? Maybe, "... colors I had never seen before." Or, "... he had never seen before. "