Also something of note! I realize now after all my editing is finished (because of course) that I repeatedly referred to the various abilities the characters gain INCORRECTLY as "traits" when they are actually referred to as Talents in-game. My criticisms and praise of different talents still apply, but for some reason I just couldn't seem to get that word out of my scripting for the episode. Super weird, but hey, there you have it.
You got a big infodump right from the start, with lots of different terms and names and descriptions. But no reference points to offer context. Maybe spread those out a bit, for example on moments when they'd naturally come up, or accompanied with visuals for a better presentation. What I mean to say is that this is a video format. It could be audio only, or in this case audio with something to watch to spend the time, but then the audio part needs to be solid on its own to keep the listener hooked. On a positive note, you have a really nice intro animation, the chapters are a welcome addition, and you have a nice voice to listen to. Especially later on in the video when you seem to get more comfortable. Keep at it!
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Also something of note!
I realize now after all my editing is finished (because of course) that I repeatedly referred to the various abilities the characters gain INCORRECTLY as "traits" when they are actually referred to as Talents in-game. My criticisms and praise of different talents still apply, but for some reason I just couldn't seem to get that word out of my scripting for the episode. Super weird, but hey, there you have it.
You got a big infodump right from the start, with lots of different terms and names and descriptions. But no reference points to offer context.
Maybe spread those out a bit, for example on moments when they'd naturally come up, or accompanied with visuals for a better presentation.
What I mean to say is that this is a video format. It could be audio only, or in this case audio with something to watch to spend the time, but then the audio part needs to be solid on its own to keep the listener hooked.
On a positive note, you have a really nice intro animation, the chapters are a welcome addition, and you have a nice voice to listen to. Especially later on in the video when you seem to get more comfortable.
Keep at it!
Hello there! Thanks for your comment and notes for improvement, I’ll definitely take them under advisement for sure.