I think my favorite part of this song is how much emotion she puts into singing, like she sounds like she's in the "feMC's" situation, like she's in pain in the last part. Really good song btw!
"Yaoi is too into me." Me: *"That's the opposite-"* Anyways, the song is very nice. The names are unique and the singers voice is beautiful°Thank you for making this
i tried doing this with my own version a long time ago here's my names lol: Natsuki=Natsuka Yuri=Yuno (yuno gasai lmao not really just a coincidence) Monika=Moniko(same as yours) Sayori=(wait for it) Sayor. It was f*cking Sayor
forget about the literature club, im pretty sure I'm lesbian now. The protagonist's art is SOOOO good. [EDIT] Thank you all for 240 likes! Its the most likes I've ever gotten.
But she balanced it out with the line: "Guess I just can't let him go." In both the game, and real life, people have a hard time leaving toxic partners. haha sorry if im a nerd, I just love analyzing lyrics.
Orangutan Juice that line sticks out for me, she had to change it since she’s singing this as a girl, when I compared this to the original one the last part was for males
Honestly this is an amazing cover and I love how sometimes while singing you sound a bit scared and even concerned. It's amazing and I think this is my favorite version of the song!
My sister's girlfriend when she heard Yaoi: "YES! BABE, I DRAGGED DOWN YOUR SISTER!" My sister: "No, that's her DDLC thing." My sister's girlfriend: "Oh. Heh." *awkwardly rubs her neck*
I am sorry. I am glad they are your ex now though and you're not still together. Everyone deserves happiness. No one should be treated like trash for no reason
Oh My Gosh. This is so good! You put emotion into your voice, which I love! The editing is absolutely fantastic and just- AAAAAHHH! So good!! Keep it up!
Alright so I now I am quite late to the party this is very very nice! I like the spin you did on this cover though! Honestly it is rather dark in my opnion and I love that fact! Especially the way your voice cracks at the end followed by the "God help me"
I absolutely LOVE genderbent content, I feel like it's a great way to explore character growth. This was hauntingly beautiful, and you got a subscriber for it.
When I heard Yaoi I SWEAR I COULDN'T STOP LAUGHING! But, aside from the jokes, your vocals are beautiful and just amazing! I honestly wish I could sing like you.
I was hoping it said “Like an omnipotent god that’s concocting demonic sonnets” to clear up the extra syllable in the original song’s “omnipotent goddess”
I love this cover, and think that the vocals are great! It's really good, so i'm in no way sending hate. I just think that the character sprites look very...off? Especially the ones in 0:23. Now, the art in itself isn't bad, but i'd like to give some critique, from one artist to another. Looking at their faces, the thing that seems the most off are the general proportions, so it's not a coloring, expression, etc issue. So, i'll give my personal advice for each of the characters, to make them look less odd. Satori: His eyes are too high up, and putting that together with the eyebrows, the forehead looks very small. Which isn't very realistic, since we have very big foreheads, for our brains, of course. Looking at the original Sayori design, you can see that her face is quite big too, so it's not a artstyle thing. Oh and, I know that a tiny part of Sayori's fringe is covered by the her eyes too, in the og design, but here it's significantly bigger, which I think makes it look a little weird too. Moniko: Again, the eyes seem to be the problem, since they come off as too small to me, especially if you compare them to the other's eyes. If you look at Monika's (og) eyes, they're very big and round. I understand that they're slimmer here, due to him being a guy, but assuming that he has the same personality as Monika, they're kinda off character. Naruki: This time, the face proportions aren't a problem at all, since they're the best out all of them. Here, the hair is more of a problem. Firstly, the shift in volume starting from the fringe and ending at the back of the head is very extreme. It makes it almost look like he has no frontal lobe, due to all of the hair being at the back. Okay, I won't criticize the flow of the hair too much, since it doesn't /need/ to be realistic, but i'd recommend to change it a little, since it's kind of hard to figure out what hairstyle you were going for. A manbun? A ponytail laying on his shoulder? A mullet? Not sure. Yaoi (what a name): This one was actually pretty hard to figure out, since it gives me very big uncanny valley vibes, but I couldn't pinpoint a exact problem. His eyes were the first thing that popped up, but the size aren't really a problem. Then I noticed how slim and long his face is, and boom. His face is too long. I get what you were going for, but the distance between his eyes and his nose is way too big. The length from his chin to his eyebrows is already a lot, and adding the forehead makes things unnatural. I'd recommend shortening the face a tiny bit. Also, his ear is too high up too. It should be on the same height as his eyes and nose. Sorry if this is long, but I wanted to give advice, not just point out the problem. I hope that this helps a little bit, and if anyone thinks that I forgot something, or didn't point out the right thing, please share! Bye✌🏻
Hi! I didn’t draw the art for this so I cannot take your critique. I appreciate you writing this comment though! The artist is in the description if you’re interested. 💙
Me: *'sees KC'*
Brain: *Kentucky Fried Chicken*
Me: what? No! It says K.C.
Brain: *K E N T U C K Y. C H I C K E N.*
YASS love it your amazing!!
King crimson
I thought brain was Brian and I was so confused
𐊢һⅈｃ𝚔𝖊𝖓
Kc undercover
*_"I wonder where Satori is?"_*
That right there actually gave me chills
Same "I wOnDeR wHeRe *SaToRsI* is" it sent shivers down my spine
*I WoNdEr wHeRe SaToRi iS?*
2:14
NOOOOOOOO! 😢😢😢😢😢😭😭😭😭😭💔💔💔💔💔
She's so good at sounding desperate and scared its freaky
I WoDer wHEre sAToRi iS?
Moniko: we need more members
* *Moniko deleting every member* *
Lmao
I think that’s why!
Well I’m supremely sleep deprived.
That is so true!!!
SO TRUE THO-
I NEVER THOUGHT OF THAT-
WHY IS NO ONE TALKING ABOUT HOW MONIKO SAID "no" AT 3:09?? IT SOUNDS SO GOOD I LOVE IT
N O
*N O U U W*
FRR
NoO
Would like but 111
Teacher: What are you laughing about?
Me: Nothing
My brain: *MANIKA*
pfffttTTTTTTT
pFfFfFt sAmE
Cecilia And Stuff
Stolen
manika is a filipino word (Doll)
LMAO
I just imagine natsuki and natruki fighting about who is more tsundere
OML 😂😂😂
Then it's like: It's not like I like you or anything.
I'd watch that slice of life anime.
who is natruki?
@@horseconfused genderbent natsuki
is it just me or does Yaoi's hair NOT fit his face.
I think a ponytail fits better
@@cheframos1971 it definitely does
@@cheframos1971 I agree
I feel this but with Natsuki
@@boyfloppie I feel it for both
I think my favorite part of this song is how much emotion she puts into singing, like she sounds like she's in the "feMC's" situation, like she's in pain in the last part. Really good song btw!
sis said “it’s time for a glowup”
it was time
@@nearsgarden heHe
*i made the likes 666 :)*
@@gachabloxgirl3958 no!!!
@@gachabloxgirl3958 nice
Male monika? More like
*MANIKA*
I'm concerned about how this don't have already 1000 likes
EDIT: I'm proud of this community
Underrated
You are a *GOD*
XD
Yes this comment is pure liquified beauty
Yaoi: **exists**
Comments: Allow us to introduce ourselves
Rombus yet nobody says anything about Yuri’s name
@@teateakira5971 you must be blind or something Rombus clearly says yaoi
@@sontan_z7752 true..
😂😂😂
Finally an original comment that says nothing about yaoi meaning gay
song: *is very well sang, animated etc.*
everyone: hehe funny gay word
Y a o i
Naskio
And then theres me laughing thinking I keep hearing "breh"
@@woahwoahwoah7530 yaoi*** sorry 😅
Sam_ Siren22 oops it’s okay TwT it was my fault. Lemme fix it
I like the "Moniko Sees right through me" he glitched out and turned into Monika for a second
Har har har! 😂😂😂😂😂😅😅😅😅😅😆😆😆😆😆
And it terrifies me to this day
It's actually when she Monikos brains and beudey ps I can't spell good
@@i_love_piplup3791 beauty*
Just helping you out there, not trying to be rude or anything
MONIKA HACKED INTO THIS DIMENSION! 😂😂😂😂😂😅😅😅😅😅😆😆😆😆😆😏😏😏😏😏😩😩😩😩😩🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦😳😳😳😳😳😱😱😱😱😱😵😵😵😵😵
We’re all discussing “yaois” name but can we just talk how fire these vocals are?
YES
YASS somebody gets it these vocals are so AWESOME
They are amazing!
Yep, totally fucking agree.
SHUT UP YAOI HATER! I'LL GIVE YOU THE POWER OF YAOI!
Hentaihaven.org
yuri is a guy's name too but ok.
his parents like:
leT'S nAme Our soN 'bOy lOve"
JAJAJA YES XD
@@maripetals
Xd
@@maripetals I heard that Yuri was adopted by two girls (Idrk if it’s true or not) so that could explain it
@@foxcrow4815 ill bite,
The fuck you hear this shit
Oh so that’s the funny gay word that everyone’s talking about
Me when I first saw Naruki’s hair: WHAT IS THAT?
Also me: but he’s so cuuuute
I may be lesbian, but naruki's hair is amazing
@@that-queer-fnaf-theorist It doesn’t fit with his face 💀
"Yaoi is too into me."
Me: *"That's the opposite-"*
Anyways, the song is very nice. The names are unique and the singers voice is beautiful°Thank you for making this
fujo
Lets call yaoi ioay
yes same lmao
delete this
"Im not an ugly gal
But i cant understand how?"
OMG waw that was awasome👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
"Yaois to into me"
Uno reverse card
Reverse = em otni ot sioaY
@@elyhotninja6706
Ok smartass 😂😂😂😂
Bruuuhhh meee
@@elyhotninja6706 oof
XD
THE HEAD IS SHAPED LIKE A RHOMBUS
WHICH HEAD MXGA WHICH H E A D
@@nearsgarden YAOI'S HEAD LMFAOOAOAO
WHY SPECIFICALLY A RHOMBUS
@@nearsgarden IDK IT LOOKS LIKE IT
IM THINKING OF THE WRONG YAOI OOP-
I feel like the remake cover is way more emotional and passionate because at the end when it was just Moniko she sang like she was crying!!!!!
“Yaoi is deep and brooding”
Me:* dying of laughter in the corner of the room * YAOI *dies again *
I feel you
oh inappropropriate anime thing lol xb
I mean, she wasn’t wrong was she?
Because of Yuri's name lol
Kawaii Desune it’s not really inappropriate, Yaoi just means gay stuff.
**Genderbent DDLC**
Me:
VIRGIL LOGAN ROMAN AND PATTON!
O_o
SANDERS SIDES!!!
OMG!!
YASSS!
@@Opiacrow YEE-
OH MY S T A R S y e s
Noice
This song gives off such a different vibe when it’s boys
It does.....it's honestly more creepy and crazy, especially the ending/outro bit
I've listened to the song so many times....
*Ima sing dis to my ex*
This song was weird but I'm not complaining on how Natsuki still looks feminine/gay
Yeah, sure.
yeah... a really non advertiser friendly vibe
i tried doing this with my own version a long time ago here's my names lol:
Natsuki=Natsuka
Yuri=Yuno (yuno gasai lmao not really just a coincidence)
Monika=Moniko(same as yours)
Sayori=(wait for it)
Sayor. It was f*cking Sayor
Sayori = Satori
Sayor.
This version works best though, because in the original Monika's difference is highlighted even all their names
SayorI
YurI
NatsukI
MonikA
Oh i also trying that our same names are natsuki's and monika's :0
No yuri was good as yaoi because yuri is anime wlw and yoai is anime mlm
Why is no one talking about her beautiful vocals 🥰.
1:42
2:22.
2:48.
3:46.
3:56
4:08
4:26
4:36
I like your style dude
And you're right
0:32
“ *Yaoi* is deep and broody”
Well.....depends on what type you’re asking for XD
Shes asking for hentaihaven.org
No
XxgachaoreosXx animations and other things *why Thank you*
*dies*
XxgachaoreosXx animations and other things OH MY NO NO NONO NOOOO NONONONO AAAAGGHGGHHHH
Moniko is all people need,
But remember.
I’m lonely.
MONIKO IS LONELY, TOO! 😩😩😩😩😩😭😭😭😭😭💔💔💔💔💔
Fu- OH WAIT-
I saw Sayori by the way Monika
Why hello-
Monika? Why are you here?
Naruki...
My Mind: NARUTO
Naruko
SATOSKEEE
Br só pode :000
AKATSUKI
Naruki
Dayummmmmm! I like this version better!
Jae Derosa I like the original but this one is very creative and great fill up for other lyrics that won’t work
I agree!
forget about the literature club, im pretty sure I'm lesbian now. The protagonist's art is SOOOO good.
[EDIT] Thank you all for 240 likes! Its the most likes I've ever gotten.
Dunno why, but I always get attached to the main character in visual novels like Danganronpa and others-
You mean.... now you're...
Y U R I
HAHAHAH ha....h...
Evie & Ally wow, just wow.
Im lesbian lol
No offence but I’m in a comment section with lesbians and I’m a girl
4:10 PLZ THIS PART IS ABSOLUTELY AMAZING I CANT EXPLAIN TO YOU HOW MUCH I LOVE IT.
Everyone: LMAO YAOI HAHAHAHA
Me: **trying to sing/blend my voice with Ken-Chan**
*YAOI IS DEEP AND BROODINg*
Edit: HOLY SWEET GID OF YURI HAND!! THIS IS THE MOST LIKES IVE EVER GOTTT♥️♥️❤️♥️❤️♥️❤️♥️♥️♥️❤️♥️❤️♥️YALL R THE BEST •3•
YAOI LIKES ONLY BOOYS XD
I KNOW IT IS, I should know 😎😏
*deep*
Very deep.. 😏
Soulless Dreams yeah his d-
@@Angelica111.1 -ick :D
There real names are:
Mateo
Natsuko
Satori
Yuuri
Yes in the mod. I figured I’d use fandom chosen names for this cover though! ❤️
Satori not Satory :(
@@gnartluu2071 sorry(/ω＼)
@@ariannefronda6763 Everything is ok, don't worry :D
@@gnartluu2071 thanks that made me feel better.(´ ▽｀).。ｏ♡
THIS IS SO GOOD THE VOCALS AND EVERYTHING- ITS A JUST A MASTERPIECE- and when it said "I wonder where Satori is?" gave me literal chills-
The vocals on this are amazing, you've really come a long way since the first cover of this X3
Girl: Though he treats me like a toy
Meh: THEN LEAVE HIM
But she balanced it out with the line: "Guess I just can't let him go." In both the game, and real life, people have a hard time leaving toxic partners.
haha sorry if im a nerd, I just love analyzing lyrics.
@yah yeet in the original song it doesn't say she treats him like a toy. Plus not everyone thinks that line sticks out.
Orangutan Juice that line sticks out for me, she had to change it since she’s singing this as a girl, when I compared this to the original one the last part was for males
@@tiredbutbored3295 She changed it not because she's a girl but because that line had to use the word boy.
Just the five of dislikes,
We can make it if we try
NO NEED TO CLICK ON DIS (((
17 dislikes
129 :((
200 D;
299-
I went looking for a Stupendium cover out of sheer curiousity and found this absolute fire song you really made your own! God damn, amazing work
when i heard
*"Yaoi is deep and brooding"*
i spit out my water laughing so hard-
It's like "Gay is deep and brooding" I'm dying you just made my day better
YES
こにちわ！
You guys know that Yuri = Lebian too right?
@@nolongerinuse4673 Yeah, we know.
2:13 she sounds that she is laughing.
Crying*
BAKUGOU-
Ummm BAKUGO?!?!
Wow she does haha
Ok bakugo.. Why are you here "-_-
The girl singing gives me Ayano vibes
ThOuT i WaS tHe OnLy OnE
exactly! that's what I thought!
Monika with Moniko's face attached to her is an image that shall forever haunt me
Honestly this is an amazing cover and I love how sometimes while singing you sound a bit scared and even concerned. It's amazing and I think this is my favorite version of the song!
No one:
The background: M O N I K O
"But hey, they promise me cupcake, that a chance that i'll take"
1 Question:.
What kind of cupcake? (insert lenny face)
*(C R E A M F I L L E D)*
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Måy fįrę Studios. Jam
Måy fįrę Studios. jam
Dokis in their guy form
Sayori - Sanoro
Natsuki: Suzuki
Monika: Wonka
Yuri: Yolo
yolo~
Lol
YOLOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
@@sayori3016 I won't leave you HaNgInG!
@@renwil3682
W h y
"Yaoi's to into me?"
More like I'm to into yaoi
I'll just leave now
Edit: holy frick them likes tho
Edit 2: *w h y* why does this have so many likes?
Yaoi is into Moniko, Naruki or Satori))
Cause he's... YAOI.
Wait so mai your asuming Yaoi is gay?
@@whitehousedoggo5197 oH sH*T
@@maisama6344 we need more people like you
Het i swing leg for money
My sister's girlfriend when she heard Yaoi: "YES! BABE, I DRAGGED DOWN YOUR SISTER!"
My sister: "No, that's her DDLC thing."
My sister's girlfriend: "Oh. Heh." *awkwardly rubs her neck*
😂😂😂
your sis is lesb?
@@horseconfused Yeah.
@@horseconfused Stealing my girlfriend
@@karenkey8710 f
Girl:I wonder where Sayori is.. Me: he’s ded Sorry dude.
Yes :(
Monico! Girl MC and I (the player) will stop you! 😠😠😠😠😠✋✋✋✋✋
What do you mean I’m right here?
THE MALE ONE! 😂😂😂😂😂😅😅😅😅😅😆😆😆😆😆😏😏😏😏😏😩😩😩😩😩🤦🤦🤦🤦🤦🙁🙁🙁🙁🙁👨👨👨👨👨
When the line "Never thought i get a boy though he treats me like a toy" That sums up my relationship with my ex.
Never thought I'd get a girl, though she treats me like im tRASH-
@@SaferWafer Oof-
keys but remove the e ur a fan of a racist
😂😂😂😂😂😏😏😏😏😏😒😒😒😒😒😤😤😤😤😤👹👹👹👹👹👺👺👺👺👺
🕰2✋!
I am sorry. I am glad they are your ex now though and you're not still together. Everyone deserves happiness. No one should be treated like trash for no reason
“Yaoi”
;-;
That came out REALLY wrong....
6 9 L I K E S
Because yuri is girl x girl then if he’s a man it would be yaoi boy x boy 7-7. And I think that’s the point.
Lol I mean yaoi is the opposite of yuri
opposite of Yuri bruh
Maby she mind is a hari xD
Why do I luv this so much?!?! It’s so underrated!!!!
Girls: Yuri
Boys: Yaoi
Is this hentai time?
Edit: 2:32,why is Satori’s head is “e”?
Edit 2: im just gonna like my comment cause noone does :(
Yo it is an "e"
*E*
E
E
E
WHY AEW THEIR HEADS SHAPED LKKE THAT IM PISSING
*yaoi is deep and brooding*
me:”gay is deep and brooding”
How deep tho? 😂😂
Okay I’ll leave now;~;
@@foxiifira9987 thank you...
@@foxiifira9987 OMG,im laughing so hard I can't breathe
"yaoi's too into me"
actually i think i'll pass on that one
more like, im too into yaoi
Boy Monika: Maniac
Girl Monika: socio
HELP WHY ARE ALL OF THEIR HEADS SO LONG
Oh
My
Gosh.
This is so good! You put emotion into your voice, which I love! The editing is absolutely fantastic and just- AAAAAHHH! So good!!
Keep it up!
I smell underated music and animation, that "I wonder where Satori is" gave me chills lol.
WHY!?🤣🤣
I wrote this comment three years ago WHY do you care?@@LegendsHaveIt365
Why Yuri's/Yaoi's name always gotta be...
Well y'know.
I know man i know.
Yep
ITS THE RULES
Alright so I now I am quite late to the party this is very very nice! I like the spin you did on this cover though! Honestly it is rather dark in my opnion and I love that fact! Especially the way your voice cracks at the end followed by the "God help me"
This was the cover that helped me find you and it still sounds as amazing as before. ^-^
When I asked for a female version on the search bar I wantED LESBIAN OKIE DOKI SONGS!!
I can send you a link of a lesbian female version!
Here
th-cam.com/video/WHQ2PoR1cGI/w-d-xo.html
Thank you so so much you sexy amazing god I love you
WHY IS YURIS GENDER BEND NAME YAOI
I LOVE IT
SHITTING ACTUAL TEARS.
_Someone needs to make a genderbent mod or fan game._
I WILL PAY MONEY TO PLAY THAT.
There's one in the working its in her description
I will too-
Yes blue
I would literally pay $1000 a month to play both genders version.
YES! 😁😁😁😁😁😎😎😎😎😎💪💪💪💪💪👨👨👨👨👨
3:53 is me with all my crushes-
1:00 Naruki what are you looking at you pervert.
My therapist: male natsuki isn't real, they can't hurt you!
The video:
Female: Yuri
Male: Yaoi
*me: love that*
Edit: TYSM FOR ALK THE LIKES!! 😁💖💖💖
Alk?
Yeah Yuri means lesbian and Yaoi gay.
Yeah, but yaoi is disgusting and Yuri literally means Lily.
@@mairokindasus8807 is An Impostor. Reasoning: no Crewmate would call a lily homosexual.
I absolutely LOVE genderbent content, I feel like it's a great way to explore character growth.
This was hauntingly beautiful, and you got a subscriber for it.
This is such an astonishing cover! 💞
I love how she changed some words and they still sound good, its so good i love your voice too omg ❤
At “He’d leave his club mates to die” I think “He’d leave his club mates in Hell” would’ve rhymed a bit more 3:35
Hey yeah
LOL I can totally see that
are we not going to talk about the cursed Monika-Moniko at 3:18
No we are not going to talk about the cursed Monika-Moniko at 3:18
CAN WE TALK ABOUT MONIKO'S VOICE THOUGH IT WAS AMAZING!
what he said: *no*
HELP WHY IS THE HEAD AO LONG- THEY COULDVE KEPT YURIS NAME LMFAOOO
Can we just talk about how amazing these names are?
Then we just..."Moniko". LOL
LISTEN I WOULD'VE USED MATTEO BUT I KEPT SAYING MONIKA SO MONIKO IS WHAT WE GET RFJADJOKPLA
When I heard Yaoi I SWEAR I COULDN'T STOP LAUGHING!
But, aside from the jokes, your vocals are beautiful and just amazing! I honestly wish I could sing like you.
as a straight cis female i prefer this version MUCH more
As a pansexual I dont care which version but this one is cool
3:44
"Like an omnipotent god thus
concocting demonic sonnets"
I was hoping it said “Like an omnipotent god that’s concocting demonic sonnets” to clear up the extra syllable in the original song’s “omnipotent goddess”
Wow why didn't I see this earlier this is a beautiful cover this deserves more views and likes good job👌
gl: yuri
some people's ships: yuri x Natsuki
genderbent!!
bl:yaoi
some people's ship: yaoi x Naruki
7u7
It is true yuri and Yaoi,hentai
how about I tru to you know write a book
Someone, make a Naruki x Yaoi!
UwU
It would be cool if there was a Minecraft animation of this........
*cough* ZAMination *cough* *cough*
wth, a least spell the name right if you're trying to be cool -_-
it's Zanimations
No not the male version please God no
@@horseconfused I use Zamination sometimes and my friends still understand
0:56 when she said "Just the 5 of uuuus" I kept replaying that, that sounded so good XDD
Quite a drastic pick up line?
How about:
*Quite a drastic pick up _*
ME: this sound like my life like I have guy friends and I can’t chose
DEPRESSION:BUT YOUR HALF A LESBIAN
ir you're half lesb then aren't you bi?
not to be mean, but you could’ve said “I never thought i’d get a guy”
“that seemed to fall from the sky”
idk i just really like it
good job btw!
“4 handsome guys await me” who lied to the poor girl
I am the only who just only like the girl that she sings and not Moniko, Saturi, Yaoi and Naruki?
*okay*
Do people ship leorl? You ain’t alone
Guys, stop the video at 3:18 or 3:17
C U R S E D
@@whittyembarazado6035 *just monika*
The start:
You caught a while male sayori
Edit:female MC looks like she be doin dat cracc shit
I love this cover, and think that the vocals are great! It's really good, so i'm in no way sending hate. I just think that the character sprites look very...off? Especially the ones in 0:23. Now, the art in itself isn't bad, but i'd like to give some critique, from one artist to another.
Looking at their faces, the thing that seems the most off are the general proportions, so it's not a coloring, expression, etc issue. So, i'll give my personal advice for each of the characters, to make them look less odd.
Satori: His eyes are too high up, and putting that together with the eyebrows, the forehead looks very small. Which isn't very realistic, since we have very big foreheads, for our brains, of course. Looking at the original Sayori design, you can see that her face is quite big too, so it's not a artstyle thing. Oh and, I know that a tiny part of Sayori's fringe is covered by the her eyes too, in the og design, but here it's significantly bigger, which I think makes it look a little weird too.
Moniko: Again, the eyes seem to be the problem, since they come off as too small to me, especially if you compare them to the other's eyes. If you look at Monika's (og) eyes, they're very big and round. I understand that they're slimmer here, due to him being a guy, but assuming that he has the same personality as Monika, they're kinda off character.
Naruki: This time, the face proportions aren't a problem at all, since they're the best out all of them. Here, the hair is more of a problem. Firstly, the shift in volume starting from the fringe and ending at the back of the head is very extreme. It makes it almost look like he has no frontal lobe, due to all of the hair being at the back. Okay, I won't criticize the flow of the hair too much, since it doesn't /need/ to be realistic, but i'd recommend to change it a little, since it's kind of hard to figure out what hairstyle you were going for. A manbun? A ponytail laying on his shoulder? A mullet? Not sure.
Yaoi (what a name): This one was actually pretty hard to figure out, since it gives me very big uncanny valley vibes, but I couldn't pinpoint a exact problem. His eyes were the first thing that popped up, but the size aren't really a problem. Then I noticed how slim and long his face is, and boom. His face is too long. I get what you were going for, but the distance between his eyes and his nose is way too big. The length from his chin to his eyebrows is already a lot, and adding the forehead makes things unnatural. I'd recommend shortening the face a tiny bit. Also, his ear is too high up too. It should be on the same height as his eyes and nose.
Sorry if this is long, but I wanted to give advice, not just point out the problem. I hope that this helps a little bit, and if anyone thinks that I forgot something, or didn't point out the right thing, please share! Bye✌🏻
Hi! I didn’t draw the art for this so I cannot take your critique. I appreciate you writing this comment though! The artist is in the description if you’re interested. 💙
Wrote a whole story
@@Star.of.the.sh0w more like
"That's allot of words. To bad I ain't reading them"
Monikos writing tip of the day!;
Monikos all that you need.
You can't just say "Yaoi" while making me look at a guy with a jaw that makes him look like SCP 096
Wdym?
Yaoi is just William Afton in disguise
*CHANGE MY MIND*
no
You can’t change a fact
@@cotton_pop_ and *thats* a fact
You cant change LOGIC
U mean fnaf? Hmmmmmm
I loved your original cover and I love this remake aswell ❤️💕
1:08 I’d sell my soul for poetry, especially if I got to hang out with these hot guys