The Best Personal Statements Begin with These 2 Sentences (Oxbridge Examples)

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  • @aliyajulia5104
    @aliyajulia5104 4 ปีที่แล้ว +99

    This video and your content in general has helped me so much during this stressful time of writing my own personal statement! Thank you so much, keep it up Doctor Shaene

  • @olusolaogunrinde3235
    @olusolaogunrinde3235 4 ปีที่แล้ว +53

    I am presently drafting my personal statement for a postgraduate degree course, very helpful information throughout!!!
    Thank you very much.

  • @vidyarthtiwari1367
    @vidyarthtiwari1367 2 ปีที่แล้ว +5

    I've been writing my ps now and ur videos are a blessing in disguise

  • @martas3144
    @martas3144 2 ปีที่แล้ว +11

    Introduction
    1 motivation
    2 engagement

  • @yusuf.5680
    @yusuf.5680 4 ปีที่แล้ว +75

    rewatched this at minimum 10 times and i'm not even writing a medicine personal statement (yet included a medical work experience in my statement loool)

  • @meharabchoudhury38
    @meharabchoudhury38 4 ปีที่แล้ว +22

    Editing on point with this one!

  • @edwardperez7124
    @edwardperez7124 3 ปีที่แล้ว +201

    Is it cool if I use the joke about starting with “ever since I’ve been a child”

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  3 ปีที่แล้ว +53

      BOLD but tbh I'd try to keep it a bit more pro than a bit too jokey if ygm

    • @mistermandem5530
      @mistermandem5530 ปีที่แล้ว +23

      Maybe if your applying for clown school

    • @zariaf-b7423
      @zariaf-b7423 11 หลายเดือนก่อน

      @@mistermandem5530HELP

    • @AL-jt6hv
      @AL-jt6hv 10 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

      I think your beggining is more natural and has more appealing to someone reading it.Ghis guy academic and boring statement will not get a pass.Be yourself and be natural.Copying some academics models is a no no for me.start with your sentence.

    • @Boom.boom_sauce
      @Boom.boom_sauce 20 วันที่ผ่านมา

      Everything should be good if you are yourself and can articulate your motivation through words. Just be sure to use proper grammar.

  • @theprofessor103
    @theprofessor103 3 ปีที่แล้ว +217

    For applicants in 2022, we do not have the abundance and variety of work experiences that previous medical students may have possessed. Virtual work experiences, online courses are at least what we have, so how do we incorporate it in a way that still gives the message that we have learnt something valuable from it (like a real experience)?

    • @WriteYourAcceptance
      @WriteYourAcceptance 3 ปีที่แล้ว +21

      This is definitely an issue for this cycle’s applicants and you’ll have a COVID box to explain your challenges probably like last year. The DO app has it alt least for sure this cycle. For the ps I would definitely still
      Showcase foundational/ formative moments that offered you varied lessons along the way so not quantity there as much as quality. Good luck!

    • @romeoalaric4946
      @romeoalaric4946 3 ปีที่แล้ว +5

      You all probably dont care but does anyone know of a way to log back into an instagram account..?
      I somehow lost my login password. I would appreciate any assistance you can give me

    • @avagrace747
      @avagrace747 2 ปีที่แล้ว +4

      @@romeoalaric4946
      You can log in through your fb account.
      Hope this helps.

  • @angiesplash20
    @angiesplash20 2 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    currently watching and writing my personal statement. Helpful infomations

  • @AbosedeTowoju
    @AbosedeTowoju 3 ปีที่แล้ว +10

    Waoh!!! Waoh!!! Writing a personal statement for Human Resources Management and this guidelines really are helpful. Thank you ❤️

  • @megabuzz3621
    @megabuzz3621 4 ปีที่แล้ว +10

    What would you say the personal statement should be structured? So a paragraph for intro, motivation, engagement and suitability aswell as showing passion throughout?

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  4 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      Checkout the previous video!

  • @rahmahmohamed1598
    @rahmahmohamed1598 4 ปีที่แล้ว +19

    The quality just keeps getting better!!! Great tips and editing👌🏽

  • @ayahere5105
    @ayahere5105 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    very helpful and clear thank you very much

  • @abigailtrejo7255
    @abigailtrejo7255 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Brilliant !

  • @stardreamix786
    @stardreamix786 ปีที่แล้ว

    Thank you very very much!

  • @devyanwar7465
    @devyanwar7465 2 ปีที่แล้ว +11

    You have incredible content! It inspire me and if I successfully getting LoA, it is because of you. I will work hard for it and I will tell you once I did it 💪💪

  • @wowoking2
    @wowoking2 9 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    4:17 wouldnt the place you are applying to already know this information?? How would you saying this make you different to anybody else?

  • @RoniSingh-m8m
    @RoniSingh-m8m 7 หลายเดือนก่อน

    I'm going to apply this year ❤

  • @cloudythinker8794
    @cloudythinker8794 4 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    Can u do a sop for mba students or marketing based courses

  • @JimingotnoJAMS
    @JimingotnoJAMS 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I want to study accounting and finance but didn't had this sub in my A'levels how should I write it?

  • @chulascruz
    @chulascruz 4 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Thank you.

  • @performslive
    @performslive 3 ปีที่แล้ว +9

    Great tips but I think this approach is a little reductive. The statements you highlight do indeed show motivation and engagement, but additionally relay emotional intelligence, empathy and get-go to do something original. If you're going to be accepting students for medicine, you want them to talk about more than just what they themselves get out of it. You want them to show that they are interested in other people - what they want to contribute - and the statements you highlight show this very ably.

  • @khushiirastogi
    @khushiirastogi ปีที่แล้ว

    hey thanks a lot of this video , its quite helpful but what if I don't have any work experience or volunteering related to my field?

  • @parziva163
    @parziva163 4 ปีที่แล้ว +18

    Hi, I would like to know , if you've chosen two different courses (computer science and electronic engineering). How would you go about blending your personal statement and talking about each one?
    PS: Thank you for this video

    • @DML686
      @DML686 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      I have a similar question. I just finish my first degree in electrical engineering and I'm now planning to study computer science. Any advice on how to approach my introduction?
      Thanks for your videos!

    • @mbalingcobo5795
      @mbalingcobo5795 2 ปีที่แล้ว

      @@DML686 hii mind me asking how electrical engineering is, what does it mostly consist of? Is it nice

  • @toriesout8692
    @toriesout8692 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    Great video. 3:08 Not sure about this example as it is missing punctuation. If you run out of breath, the sentence is too long.

  • @ailsacameron6116
    @ailsacameron6116 4 ปีที่แล้ว +9

    hi, how would you get around adapting work experience/engagement paragraph for non-clinical experiences (i.e.online)? I'm struggling to phrase my engagement in such a way that allows for things you would usually learn on a work experience placement!

    • @ailsacameron6116
      @ailsacameron6116 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      also (sorry!!), how would you go about including engagement within times of covid-19, or the topic in general, as I don't want to exclude it nor waste space on mentioning something worthless either!

  • @Imhawas
    @Imhawas ปีที่แล้ว +8

    i was about to start mine with ever since i was a child
    The way you started made me feel guilty😂

  • @liveloveleh
    @liveloveleh 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    how do i write one personal statement for two courses if I chose two different courses in my application? I chose business administration as my first priority and I chose global studies as my second priority.

  • @millygibson9950
    @millygibson9950 4 ปีที่แล้ว +5

    Hi, great video thank you. Do you have any tips for including a bit about the gap year (what i plan to do as its only just started lol) :)

  • @Kc-gu5er
    @Kc-gu5er 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Thanks bro this helped a lot.

  • @Krisharma_0306
    @Krisharma_0306 ปีที่แล้ว

    VERY HELPFUL VIDEO!!! Thanks a lot :)

  • @-jaan6943
    @-jaan6943 3 ปีที่แล้ว +8

    I am using tips from your videos for my personal statement, even tho im year 11 going to sixth form, it still helps.

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  3 ปีที่แล้ว +4

      Best of luck for the future!

    • @-jaan6943
      @-jaan6943 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

      @@DoctorShaene thx

  • @anayaanjum6280
    @anayaanjum6280 2 หลายเดือนก่อน

    what about an average student? Is there any chance that an average student can be accepted into a good uni, with a good personal statement?

  • @gordonbrown1773
    @gordonbrown1773 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I have submitted my personal statement, and I just watched this video and realised I did this lol.

    • @shanna853
      @shanna853 2 ปีที่แล้ว

      Please keep us updated!

    • @gordonbrown1773
      @gordonbrown1773 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      @@shanna853 I got accepted into University of Stirling (last choice) and now waiting on Warwick, Exeter, Sheffield and RHUL. My course is PPE.

    • @gordonbrown1773
      @gordonbrown1773 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      @@shanna853 Got accepted everywhere I applied except Warwick, still waiting on them!

    • @shanna853
      @shanna853 2 ปีที่แล้ว

      @@gordonbrown1773 Wow, good for you? Did you also have an interview? If so, how did it go?

    • @gordonbrown1773
      @gordonbrown1773 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      @@shanna853 no interview

  • @Bridgetugochi
    @Bridgetugochi 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    Just Incase the school didn't state the number of words for personal statement ,what should then be the word limit?

  • @verneylmavt
    @verneylmavt 4 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    Hey bro, I want to make a personal statement as an undergraduate student. What aspect should I insert to replace the work experience?

  • @meda04
    @meda04 3 ปีที่แล้ว +19

    I’m so scared because I didn’t have much work experience except online because of covid :/

    • @christophwaltz4793
      @christophwaltz4793 3 ปีที่แล้ว

      Uh lucky I literally have no work experience not even online

  • @dreamers...1705
    @dreamers...1705 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Will you check my personal statement..i have written it for a program??how I send u

  • @Ajandraelle
    @Ajandraelle 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I need some help with my personal statement, help somebody anybody or just a body lol.seriously help please

  • @jt4225
    @jt4225 4 ปีที่แล้ว +4

    What could i write in the engagement section if I havent done work experience?

    • @juansebastianperilla1819
      @juansebastianperilla1819 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Man, this is the ENORMOUS issue that I've come across at the moment to write this statement, and It makes me upset not having all those experiences and learnings that they all have :''''(, Do not know what to do

    • @juansebastianperilla1819
      @juansebastianperilla1819 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      @Faith Hill Yes man, I have thought about it, but I don't know how to related to those academics subjects. I mean, I don't know how "being in a group of music" "being on a band" or "playing volleyball" will help me to show how I am looking forward to entering into the pharmaceutical faculty of some university.
      HAHA any piece of advice :D?
      thanks

    • @guganesan.ilavarasan
      @guganesan.ilavarasan 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      @Faith Hill LOL same here mate, writing an SOP to Oxbridge, and still don't know what to fill up in the work experience section.

  • @falconetichd4652
    @falconetichd4652 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Do you have tips for what to change for a secondary boarding school application personal statement?

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  3 ปีที่แล้ว

      Honestly, the core components are all the same!

  • @LilKenuthia
    @LilKenuthia 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    im 14 and i have to write a personal statement for a school for some reason
    i literally have no idea where to start
    i dont know how much to include
    the instructions they gave me are so vague
    can anyone help???

    • @haneopi
      @haneopi 3 ปีที่แล้ว

      tbh 14 is a bit young to be writing a personal statement, is this for an assignment or do you need it to apply for a certain secondary level institution?

    • @LilKenuthia
      @LilKenuthia 3 ปีที่แล้ว

      @@haneopi yea, i needed it to apply for a secondary level instituation, exactly. but it's alright i've already done it 👍. thank you though

  • @gghgg1000
    @gghgg1000 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    can someone help me re-estate the first sentence but for computer since field instead of Medicine?

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  4 ปีที่แล้ว

      replace medical stuff with computer stuff!

    • @noemiolti3621
      @noemiolti3621 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      @@DoctorShaene would that be enough for it to not count as plagiarism?

  • @sandraachaia9585
    @sandraachaia9585 4 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    Hi bro, this is Sandra from Egypt. I am writing my personal statement to apply for masters program in economic development in the UK. Would really appreciate it if you could read my personal statement. Let me know if I can send it to you.
    Cheers

  • @bagelho1e205
    @bagelho1e205 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Does this apply to masters applications as well?

    • @WriteYourAcceptance
      @WriteYourAcceptance 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      If you don’t have like a why us essay for them, I would consider ending with how you see yourself fitting at that program. Be specific about their resources, a class even a research initiative you could see yourself in or something you’d focus on. Good luck!

  • @haydenforbes2966
    @haydenforbes2966 4 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Could you please make a video on making a personal statement for a levels (for medicine subjects)

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Not sure what you mean?

    • @haydenforbes2966
      @haydenforbes2966 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      Doctor Shaene Like a video for GCSE students on a good personal statement/CV for trying to get into a good sixth form to study medicine based lessons; I am trying to get into Hills Road in Cambridge.

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  4 ปีที่แล้ว

      Ah I see - Yh absolutely all the principles that work for uni personal Statements will work for anything, I recommend checking out the Skillshare class when it’s out 🙌

    • @haydenforbes2966
      @haydenforbes2966 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      Doctor Shaene Okay thank you will do - once I have completed it would it be okay to send it to you for just some feedback? This will probably be a while away but it would be helpful.

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  4 ปีที่แล้ว

      Sure email me doctorshaene@askcamdoc.com

  • @sharanjitkaur3206
    @sharanjitkaur3206 4 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    I have written my personal statement but I need someone who has done medicine to check it? No one in my school has gone to medicine so I don’t know what to do

  • @花_花火
    @花_花火 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I was thinking that my personal statement is great since I watched this video; now my personal statement looks like trash

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  3 ปีที่แล้ว

      Still time to make it even better!!

  • @8bulinda
    @8bulinda 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    How can I contact you through the social media.?

  • @ganeshmistry4458
    @ganeshmistry4458 4 ปีที่แล้ว +4

    How would you advise getting medical work experience in lock down. I've already done the virtual work experience but I'm looking for more hands on work experience in a hospital or care home. How would you advise I go about this in these circumstances?

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  4 ปีที่แล้ว +4

      Hmm no way currently I know off. The best options are the virtual experiences and joining these:
      1. BSMS Virtual work Experience - Brighton and Sussex medical school has put together an incredible online package giving to an insight into the NHS which walks you through different medical specialities.
      2. Observe GP - interactive video platform has been put together by the Royal College of GPs designed to give medical school applicants an insight into General Practice and primary care.
      3. The NHS Explained Online Course - a free 8 hour online course by the King’s Fund giving you an insight into the structure of the NHS and challenges of working in the NHS.
      1.Re-engage - a charity looking for volunteers to join their call companion service to provide some friendship to lonely and isolated older people
      2.Covid-19 Mutual Aid - a service connecting people in the local area to help others who are more vulnerable or self-isolating.
      3.The Sliver Line - a confidential helpline that provides advice, friendship and information to older people. They currently have an emergency appeal for volunteers.
      4.Age UK - lots of different opportunities to volunteer to become a digital buddy, a campaigner or fundraiser for the Age UK charity.

    • @ganeshmistry4458
      @ganeshmistry4458 4 ปีที่แล้ว

      Woah this is the best - I'm telling my whole school about you now!!!!

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  4 ปีที่แล้ว

      Haha legend 🙏🏽🙌 Best of luck!

  • @tfg_fareed8660
    @tfg_fareed8660 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    What type of doctor are u

  • @nawalbabar4492
    @nawalbabar4492 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Can you please review my personal statement?

  • @muhammadabdullah7556
    @muhammadabdullah7556 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    Can I use acronyms or abbreviations in my personal statement?

  • @manz007
    @manz007 ปีที่แล้ว

    Kya hal hen bhai

  • @leeHilary-fs7dd
    @leeHilary-fs7dd ปีที่แล้ว

    great

  • @ganeshmistry4458
    @ganeshmistry4458 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    are you from leicester?

  • @yasiiic7890
    @yasiiic7890 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Greatttt

  • @dancingnachos3634
    @dancingnachos3634 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    He is the guy the example every parent gives while torturing their kids😅 just kidding. Great work

  • @Miquelalalaa
    @Miquelalalaa 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Fuck I said “as a child”

  • @sutharshinithileepan1032
    @sutharshinithileepan1032 4 ปีที่แล้ว

    Do you check personal statements ?

    • @DoctorShaene
      @DoctorShaene  4 ปีที่แล้ว +7

      Send it to me doctorshaene@askcamdoc.com and I’ll have a look when I get the time 😊

  • @1981Anood
    @1981Anood 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Thank you. You need to articulate more clearly and slow the speed of talk.

  • @bvincesf
    @bvincesf 2 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    wonderful structure. no soul. robotic and antiseptic.

  • @JB-tj7er
    @JB-tj7er 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    What if I have no experience?😂

  • @m.adhiyaksaaryawisesa2491
    @m.adhiyaksaaryawisesa2491 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    nice kitchen

  • @tfg_fareed8660
    @tfg_fareed8660 4 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Yo

  • @aroobasadiq550
    @aroobasadiq550 3 หลายเดือนก่อน

    Provide me your email for my SOP review plz