During the date scene with the girl, I think the camera angles could have been changed. Steven (the main character) isn't interested in what the girl is talking about,yet the camera still shows frequent close up shots of her talking. The camera is a good way to express how a character is feeling in a situation. I would've recommended showing a close up shot of Stevens hands,perhaps he could've been jotting down notes for some software he was working on. By making the camera focus on Stevens desires and shutting out the things irrelevant to him,it allows the audience to get a better understanding of how Steven feels. Other than this I found the film to be interesting, it's a unique idea that I haven't seen many directors create before.
Unique concept but has its flaws. Certain things happen that might take the audience out of the story. I.e. the fake typing. Have the actor actually typing something, little things like this get noticed. Also when he is running away from the date there are too many quick cuts. Take a few more seconds before each of those cuts. There was a nice shot while he was running shown through the bushes/ trees. That was nice, it should’ve been held on that shot for a bit longer before cutting around. You have to learn which scenes need cut arounds and which ones don’t. As for the performances, they are good but can be a little hammy at times. In the date scene it starts with them already sitting, like they’ve been there, though they start a conversation like they just sat down. Should’ve had it start mid conversation, with the girl talking and the boy already distracted. Then proceed the scene as shown. For this scene they did the opposite of what I was saying before. This scene has very little cut arounds. When the girls voice fades out and the boy is basically daydreaming, we just see the boy looking around. Show what he’s looking at, random objects, while hearing low audio of the girls voice. This shows his distraction. Maybe something like having his hand on his knee, pretending to click a mouse and type. The only thing we get is one apple logo appear showing where his mindset is. Everytime the camera is shown toward the window the exposure is insane. And everytime it’s not showing the window it is fine. This is something you should’ve noticed and this whole scene would look much better. Another thing that felt cheesy was when the boy said “I have to go” then got out of his chair and proceeded to slowly walk toward the door of the restaurant. But once outside he was in a full sprint. If his intention was to get out of that restaurant quickly he should’ve sprinted out the door. After that date scene everything else is okay. And a funny ending. The overall meaning and point to this film is still unknown to me. Other than the rather forced life lesson at the end with letting go of the ones you love. Now I just want to add this though I think it was purposefully intended. The end where the boy is crying, I think this is meant to be corny and funny? Just making sure. And by far the most unique thing about this film is the credits! Well done. Overall good job guys. This was nothing more than intended just to help you guys. You learn only from your mistakes and actually making films! So great job.
I came when this has 88,888 views. I am really impressed by this structure and comedy. Steven as a character is very goofy and hilarious on screen. Well done!
This was really funny! Piece of advice, if a character is going to be doing something that doesn't need to be faked then have them do it. Like have him actually type words out on the keys and not just fake it or press random stuff. Also the actor quality could have been better but for a beginner film this was really good!
i dont understand y everybody commenting about the FAKE TYPING - that adds to the stylistic bizarre tone of the whole short - I mean he falls in love with his computer - it is supposed to be OVER THE TOP - therefore I would even say that if he was typing for real it would have DIMINISHED from the stylistic tone - if u r goin for sarcasm then fake typin is perfect - if he was rele typin fo real then it wod come off as like dry n out of tone
Very creative and cool, however, two key parts stick out to me in particular. That copyright free “intense music” instantly brought me out of the story because I’ve heard it way too many times. Also, the crying didn’t sync up with the video. Otherwise really good cinematography and the credits were super creative. Especially a good job for 72 hours 👍
There are 2 ebook that are launched on Amazon.com 1.How to achieve full of success and happiness in life? 2.How to become a perfect chef? They are written by John Singh.
Fantastic. Clear, interesting, funny, maybe couldve been a tiny bit shorter Im not sure. All these losers saying dumb shit like 'have him actually type', Im pretty sure it was an intentional joke, but it doesnt even matter in the first place, its just about communicating information, and with the context of the shots around it did that. I thought it was really excellent, communicated good ideas with simple and effective execution. If thats not storytelling I dont know what is.
low key, a young dwight
High key
In addition to the film, I love the clever way that shows the end credits.
Me too!
During the date scene with the girl, I think the camera angles could have been changed. Steven (the main character) isn't interested in what the girl is talking about,yet the camera still shows frequent close up shots of her talking. The camera is a good way to express how a character is feeling in a situation. I would've recommended showing a close up shot of Stevens hands,perhaps he could've been jotting down notes for some software he was working on. By making the camera focus on Stevens desires and shutting out the things irrelevant to him,it allows the audience to get a better understanding of how Steven feels. Other than this I found the film to be interesting, it's a unique idea that I haven't seen many directors create before.
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What doesn't she understand, the man likes his Macintosh.
THIS INTRO IS PERFECT!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I'm watching this on a Mac.
Ava is my name. Fame is my game.
The first friend I ever had’s name is Ava, too. I met her the first day of preschool.
Such a good actor. He didn’t even need to type correctly in order to be convincing.
Unique concept but has its flaws. Certain things happen that might take the audience out of the story. I.e. the fake typing. Have the actor actually typing something, little things like this get noticed. Also when he is running away from the date there are too many quick cuts. Take a few more seconds before each of those cuts. There was a nice shot while he was running shown through the bushes/ trees. That was nice, it should’ve been held on that shot for a bit longer before cutting around. You have to learn which scenes need cut arounds and which ones don’t. As for the performances, they are good but can be a little hammy at times. In the date scene it starts with them already sitting, like they’ve been there, though they start a conversation like they just sat down. Should’ve had it start mid conversation, with the girl talking and the boy already distracted. Then proceed the scene as shown. For this scene they did the opposite of what I was saying before. This scene has very little cut arounds. When the girls voice fades out and the boy is basically daydreaming, we just see the boy looking around. Show what he’s looking at, random objects, while hearing low audio of the girls voice. This shows his distraction. Maybe something like having his hand on his knee, pretending to click a mouse and type. The only thing we get is one apple logo appear showing where his mindset is. Everytime the camera is shown toward the window the exposure is insane. And everytime it’s not showing the window it is fine. This is something you should’ve noticed and this whole scene would look much better. Another thing that felt cheesy was when the boy said “I have to go” then got out of his chair and proceeded to slowly walk toward the door of the restaurant. But once outside he was in a full sprint. If his intention was to get out of that restaurant quickly he should’ve sprinted out the door. After that date scene everything else is okay. And a funny ending. The overall meaning and point to this film is still unknown to me. Other than the rather forced life lesson at the end with letting go of the ones you love. Now I just want to add this though I think it was purposefully intended. The end where the boy is crying, I think this is meant to be corny and funny? Just making sure. And by far the most unique thing about this film is the credits! Well done. Overall good job guys. This was nothing more than intended just to help you guys. You learn only from your mistakes and actually making films! So great job.
"Don't even think about it" that was hilarious 😂😂😂
The end credits was the best part.
if wes anderson and spike jonze had a child and this was that child’s first short film
I came when this has 88,888 views. I am really impressed by this structure and comedy. Steven as a character is very goofy and hilarious on screen. Well done!
There is one mistake in this film and that is fake typing. But overall it was pretty good.
This was really funny! Piece of advice, if a character is going to be doing something that doesn't need to be faked then have them do it. Like have him actually type words out on the keys and not just fake it or press random stuff. Also the actor quality could have been better but for a beginner film this was really good!
Good job guys! The only advice I'd have is when someone is talking, do an over the shoulder of the person listening and not the one talking.
+Mister X That’s a good idea. Thanks!
The moral of this film is that macintoshes are better than pcs
why did it get replaced then
For some reason this reminded me of a Wes Anderson film
Yellow? Quirky?
Color palette
the colors bro
It's the colour grading 🤣
It’s the yellow
Ava was the star of the show!
Amazing short film well done loved the story and ur use of camera techniques and editing keep up the amazing work 🤟🏻🎬🎥
What awards did this film win? A Golden Turkey? Golden shower?
End credits were great
Amazing
Yo, why am I emotional
Bravo!
You can so tell he’s fake typing
Yes!!! I love this
i dont understand y everybody commenting about the FAKE TYPING - that adds to the stylistic bizarre tone of the whole short - I mean he falls in love with his computer - it is supposed to be OVER THE TOP - therefore I would even say that if he was typing for real it would have DIMINISHED from the stylistic tone - if u r goin for sarcasm then fake typin is perfect - if he was rele typin fo real then it wod come off as like dry n out of tone
Is this rex from rex orange ccounty
Very creative and cool, however, two key parts stick out to me in particular. That copyright free “intense music” instantly brought me out of the story because I’ve heard it way too many times. Also, the crying didn’t sync up with the video. Otherwise really good cinematography and the credits were super creative. Especially a good job for 72 hours 👍
my friend said this movie fucken rocks🤣
LOL so cute. Loved the credits.
my friend said he liked this a little bit😀
The only thing I could recommend is to not use stock music
Steven is actually me lol
Wall-e?
There are 2 ebook that are launched on Amazon.com
1.How to achieve full of success and happiness in life?
2.How to become a perfect chef?
They are written by John Singh.
how did this win the best
Kiyan Ahmadi i honestly don’t know?
What award did this win though?
Brandon Potter It won first in the student section in the 72 film fest
Ah nice, I loved how quirky this film was. I also really liked the way you used the floppy disk for the credits! Super creative.
audio is key
Great story, really laughed a lot, and loved the credits!
Fantastic. Clear, interesting, funny, maybe couldve been a tiny bit shorter Im not sure. All these losers saying dumb shit like 'have him actually type', Im pretty sure it was an intentional joke, but it doesnt even matter in the first place, its just about communicating information, and with the context of the shots around it did that. I thought it was really excellent, communicated good ideas with simple and effective execution. If thats not storytelling I dont know what is.
I love that so much. So creative!
Love this 😂😂
awsum
Sooo uhhh did anyone else call the number??😗 I regret
My husband is so talented❤️
This was awesome!
Well done! Love the ending!
Thank you! It means a lot!
how did he accidentally fall in love lol
my grilfeiend naem ava :)
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in what way is this award winning?
Xander Soboleski It won best student film in the 72 Hour Film Festival!
Don't ask questions lol
Award winning for being the worst 😂
hey man this was done in 3 days. I made mine in 4 and it's worse than this. it's harder than it looks
why does he look like matt damon?
The lighting is terrible
nice!
GIBON FILMS thanks!
Well done.
Dwight
0:38 who types like dat lol
this was so funny
😂
this video is funny
I just uploaded a high octane suspense driven student film on my channel. I can use all the support I can get
👌🏻😂👏🏻👏🏻
how is this award winning
It won best student film for a film festival in Maryland.
How is this award winning?
Oy vey.
Glazed In Lies is way better than this trash
Very badly filmed directed and just looks terrible
THE MIGHTY RON thanks dude! I’d love you see your work!
welp this fucking blew shit