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  • @rachelwritesbooks
    @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +13

    TIMESTAMPS:
    0:34 - What is default lexicon?
    0:53 - Things to consider before revising your verbs
    1:26 - The problem with expected verbs
    2:15 - Be in control of your word choice
    2:34 - Why are strong verbs important?
    2:56 - Verbs as image
    4:40 - Verbs as tighteners
    5:44 - Verbs as tone & voice
    6:25 - What is a language environment?
    7:34 - Examples of how to subvert stronger verbs

  • @ShaelinWrites
    @ShaelinWrites 3 ปีที่แล้ว +55

    fav verbs that I would die for include: sear, flicker, rust (idk why i am overusing this in every sentence rn), cable, scallop, scalpel, sift, cinch, gum, noose, runnel, etc etc idk i love them all !!!

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +8

      Ugh these are GREAT

    • @whatareyousayinggirl
      @whatareyousayinggirl 3 ปีที่แล้ว +11

      when shaelin wrote "I scratched at the pasta until it gummed under my nails" i was absolutely shooketh

    • @ShaelinWrites
      @ShaelinWrites 3 ปีที่แล้ว +7

      @@whatareyousayinggirl omg I don't remember this line what was that from?

    • @whatareyousayinggirl
      @whatareyousayinggirl 3 ปีที่แล้ว +9

      @ShaelinWrites I Will Never Tell You This!! That line has always stuck with me, it was so simple yet visceral!

    • @whatareyousayinggirl
      @whatareyousayinggirl 3 ปีที่แล้ว +7

      "I picked at burnt pasta until it gummed under my fingernails" is the full line, I believe!

  • @augusthawley5504
    @augusthawley5504 3 ปีที่แล้ว +26

    no one:
    Rachel: *invents a verb*

  • @margauxb3591
    @margauxb3591 3 ปีที่แล้ว +11

    The "leaves season" double meaning is killing me it's so good oml

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      i was v proud of that one when i thought of it!!

  • @bobbobington2268
    @bobbobington2268 3 ปีที่แล้ว +15

    'The leaves season the grass' is awesome.

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      Thank you!!

    • @rakoon6198
      @rakoon6198 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      I literally fist pumped when i heard it dk why..lol

  • @billyalarie929
    @billyalarie929 3 ปีที่แล้ว +19

    you and shaelin should full-on do a collab video.
    OR A ZOOM CHAT

  • @avasghost
    @avasghost 3 ปีที่แล้ว +24

    I didn’t know how much I needed this until now

    • @majinYaiba
      @majinYaiba 3 ปีที่แล้ว

      Same here! Awesome video!

  • @daltonpatterson480
    @daltonpatterson480 3 ปีที่แล้ว +14

    "Verbs as tighteners" spoke to me the most. I definitely could stand to use better verb choice to cut down the adverb use

  • @kxrimgh
    @kxrimgh 3 ปีที่แล้ว +12

    ok i have 2 things to say.
    1- THE INFO IN THIS VIDEO IS HELPFUL AND AMAZING (thanks lol)
    2- THE BLOOPERS AT THE END ARE SO GOOD I'M ACTUALLY WHEEZING

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +4

      Truly what me filming a video looks like :)

  • @yo.johnson
    @yo.johnson 2 หลายเดือนก่อน

    I love how you mentioned that this becomes easier the more you try. Thank you. So encouraging.

  • @tia2108
    @tia2108 3 ปีที่แล้ว +4

    the way you’re succinctly incorporating sound, atmosphere and movement w ‘the stream trilled between the rocks’ is mindblowing to me. this is a really quality video and i love how you write.

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Aww I’m so happy to hear and thank you so much!

  • @maya-gur695
    @maya-gur695 3 ปีที่แล้ว +8

    I once heard an advice (I don't even remember where I heard it) that said using verbs with ing at the end is not a good thing, because it ruins the flow of the prose and makes your writing chunky or something like that. I feel like ever since I've heard it, I've been trying to avoid the ing verbs, even just subconsciously, despite the fact that I love using them. I think it gives my prose a good flow and doesn't make it chunky at all.

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +9

      I love me a good -ING verb too! I def think this is truly dependant on how a writer uses them, just like with any other rule in writing! ❤️

    • @Gcherry64
      @Gcherry64 3 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      I hate it when I follow advice that doesn't work for me for long periods of time! It's great to try things, but when you know it doesn't work for you no one should force you to keep doing it. -ING verbs are great! I use them so much.

    • @maya-gur695
      @maya-gur695 3 ปีที่แล้ว +4

      @@Gcherry64 Totally! I should have realized that advice wasn't for me long ago. But some things just stick.

  • @Gcherry64
    @Gcherry64 3 ปีที่แล้ว +8

    I never thought of verbs like this before. Thanks Rachel for talking about them! I don't know if I have any favourite verbs. I'll have to think about verbs I like. ShaelinWrites has a good list though!
    A verb I really don't like would be "got" or "get." To me it sounds so slangy and awkward in sentences, so I try to avoid it at all costs (unless it makes sense for the character to say it).

  • @smalldewdrops
    @smalldewdrops 5 หลายเดือนก่อน

    this is a truly informative video! i am also a big fan of strong verbs, and this is my first time learning about default lexicon. i'm a hobby writer so i have been learning as i go. your video is so helpful to me and easy to digest. thank you for clarifying better use for them in my writing ♡

  • @kimwicks5540
    @kimwicks5540 3 ปีที่แล้ว +6

    This is SUCH an unique/great video!! Most of the writing vids I see on yt are plot related (how to write action scenes/romance etc) and I'm so happy whenever you make craft videos. Also I LOVE unexpected verbs it improves my life quality in 103%

  • @candidreads9952
    @candidreads9952 ปีที่แล้ว

    As a linguistic student I appreciated this video so much! It's a perfect example of how language flows and blooms in time.
    As a non native speaker I also got some tips out of it on how to improve my writing in english which is something I have always been pretty insecure about. Thank you so much!

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  ปีที่แล้ว

      This means a lot coming from a linguistic student! Thanks for watching!

  • @graycl0ud
    @graycl0ud 3 ปีที่แล้ว +8

    whats your favorite way to find good synonyms?

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +5

      I really like OneLook’s reverse dictionary and Wordbook which is a Windows app. Thesaurus.com is also great!

  • @miggseye
    @miggseye 5 หลายเดือนก่อน +1

    What a great video! Fresh content. Thank you for sharing this valuable writing info and these tips with us.

  • @amandagrubbs3855
    @amandagrubbs3855 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    I'm obsessed with this! I loved what you said about relating your verbs to help with voice. My current MC is a monster hunter, and I love the idea of subverting language expectations by using more verbs like "stalk" and "track" and "dress", etc. I'm so going to try a little exercise where I only use verbs as such. Great advice, as always. Thanks, Rachel!

  • @naeemhossaindoesthings
    @naeemhossaindoesthings 3 หลายเดือนก่อน

    I come back to this video often

  • @billyalarie929
    @billyalarie929 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    okay i've come back to this video and you talk briefly about intention in writing, and now i need a not-so-tl;dr version of this, please!

  • @tia2108
    @tia2108 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    the ‘verbs as image’ part is literally lifechanging advice??? the pirouette example really solidied this for me and i feel like i will be overusing associated images now lmaoo

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Right!!! My sister and I brainstormed this term together and when she said it first I was like omg that’s fantastic!

  • @neuroticnovelist
    @neuroticnovelist 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    I love words 😭

  • @jeremyfee
    @jeremyfee 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Great verb play. Griddles is a great verb.

  • @lechelechuza6852
    @lechelechuza6852 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    Inventing new verbs is my new hobby 😂🤧

  • @billyalarie929
    @billyalarie929 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    no one:
    no one at all:
    absolutely no one at all:
    not one person in the whole universe:
    rachel writes: HEY LET'S MAKE AN ABSOLUTELY ESSENTIAL VIDEO TO BOTH END THIS HELLSCAPE OF A YEAR ON A BEAUTIFUL NOTE AND ALSO TO BUFFER LIKE TEFLON WHATEVER THE HELL THE BEGINNING OF THE COMING YEAR HAS IN STORE FOR US

  • @growithjoy
    @growithjoy ปีที่แล้ว

    Thanks so much, just went through my manuscripts and took out as many 'like' as possible.

  • @cjpreach
    @cjpreach 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    In her novel "Vinegar Boy," Alberta Hawse used LIQUIDS as her literary theme. "The morning sun poured out of the jug . ."

  • @galaxylucia1898
    @galaxylucia1898 ปีที่แล้ว

    Hey Rachel! Love this video. It was a great reminder about word choice and specificity. I tend to be very long-winded, so one of my writing goals over next 5 years is to write with as much clarity and economy as possible. Using powerful verbs is one of the ways to get me there. Thank you!!

    • @galaxylucia1898
      @galaxylucia1898 ปีที่แล้ว

      The bowling ball pin-balled toward the pins.
      Rain sprinkled (on) my toes.
      The snow glistened in the sun.
      The stream snaked between the rocks.

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Yes absolutely verbs are a great way to tighten up writing! Thanks for watching :)

  • @nabilamiah3814
    @nabilamiah3814 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Informative video! You and ShaelinWrites have inspired me to be more experimental with my writing and not stick to standard practices. I can't thank you enough.

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Ahh I’m so happy to hear! ❤️❤️❤️

  • @-veronica3230
    @-veronica3230 3 ปีที่แล้ว +3

    Thank you for this! ♡

  • @jullia9153
    @jullia9153 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    this is SO helpful thank you so much for this! i'm a writer getting back into the swing of things and this is super helpful ;;; thanks for this!

  • @DFMoray
    @DFMoray 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    This video soaked my lobes.

  • @dukeofdenver
    @dukeofdenver 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I needed this so much. Thank you

  • @whatareyousayinggirl
    @whatareyousayinggirl 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    rachel blesses us once again 🌟

  • @yeongjoolee4838
    @yeongjoolee4838 ปีที่แล้ว

    you're so articulate ❤this is so helpful and you presented it simple and direct 💖

  • @emilyschaubeck
    @emilyschaubeck 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    I love your channel Rachel and thank you so much for posting and uploading through all of this!! You inspire me to keep writing and it makes me so happy. Thank you

  • @amberrose3091
    @amberrose3091 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    great advice!! I can tell how much you love verbs ;)

  • @joannemichaelaorpilla
    @joannemichaelaorpilla 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    This is very comprehensive 💖 thank you!!

  • @rakoon6198
    @rakoon6198 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    Wow!

  • @joisdreaming9513
    @joisdreaming9513 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    wow this video is so helpful!! thanks for making it :)

  • @lechelechuza6852
    @lechelechuza6852 3 ปีที่แล้ว +2

    In my book, there are three narrators, all of these narrators are present in the story - they're the main characters but it's not written in 1st person 😅 It's like three different people's 3rd person subjective perspective... If that makes sense 🤷🏾‍♀️ They all have totally different personalities and it upsets me that I never get to use a lot of beautiful words, because it just doesn't fit the way these characters would actually talk 🙎🏾‍♀️

  • @billyalarie929
    @billyalarie929 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    LEAVES SEASONING
    LEAVES
    FALLING
    IN A SEASON
    (called fall)

  • @Daniel.Writes
    @Daniel.Writes 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    This was so helpful!
    I just wish my native language could make up words like English does. But unfortunately we are all about nouns😂

  • @majinYaiba
    @majinYaiba 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Awesome video! I like scintillate and flare but couldn't convince myself to use them here.
    The bowling ball stalked the pins.
    Rain acupunctured my bare toes.
    The snow grins with the sun.
    The stream thronged the rocks.
    When I try stronger verbs, personification tends to kick in. Do you have advice on powerful verbs that don't go overboard with personification? Thanks Rachel!

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว +3

      The bowling ball stalked the pins is fantastic wow! If you find you reach for verbs that lean toward personification, starting with synonyms of the verb you’re trying to spice up might be your best bet !

    • @majinYaiba
      @majinYaiba 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Sounds great! Thank you for the advice! @@rachelwritesbooks

  • @rev6215
    @rev6215 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    You look so pretty in this video I wanma drop dead

  • @francescogorbechov4192
    @francescogorbechov4192 2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    But you don’t wanna use verbs most people don’t know. Most of these I don’t know

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  2 ปีที่แล้ว

      Ehhh, this is an opinion. A lot of people use language to encourage musicality and imagery as poets do - there’s a whole style of writing dedicated to this. I don’t agree that you shouldn’t use verbs people don’t know - I do think you should be cautious of choosing verbs that distract from your images but unique verbs =/= distracting. So I wouldn’t agree with this but the above explanation is an addendum to this vid!

  • @tiborkovacs5317
    @tiborkovacs5317 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Writing = Who What Where When Which Why How... Great vid thanks.

  • @rev6215
    @rev6215 3 ปีที่แล้ว +1

    Touch wood, Rachel... drop that skin care routine

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  3 ปีที่แล้ว

      okay you're too kind the skincare routine is that I had such horrible acne (and still have acne but not as bad!!) but then puberty is slowly coming to a close

  • @jasmineclark552
    @jasmineclark552 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    Would you say that reading poetry helps your writing? I feel like my prose could be more interesting

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      Definitely!! So happy I decided to study poetry because it wasn’t something I had too much knowledge of before uni and now it’s my favourite form of writing lol!

    • @jasmineclark552
      @jasmineclark552 2 ปีที่แล้ว

      @@rachelwritesbooks oooh, okay I'll try that. How can we use poetry to improve it? Simply reading it? Do you think this'll ever be a future video of yours? Sorry for all the questions! Thank you regardless:))

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  2 ปีที่แล้ว +1

      @@jasmineclark552 hmm never thought of making a video on poetry - in general I think it’s a fabulous form for showing especially prose writers the opportunities of language. I do think you’d just simply read it and from there see what you can take from it but I’ll see what I can do about a video!

  • @ivygenesis5743
    @ivygenesis5743 2 ปีที่แล้ว

    english is not my first language but i do write in english :D it appears that you can turn nouns into verbs? is that correct?
    edit: i googled it, it's true. my life is changed

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  2 ปีที่แล้ว

      Stylistically, yes!

    • @ivygenesis5743
      @ivygenesis5743 2 ปีที่แล้ว

      @@rachelwritesbooks hi rachel, i forgot to thank you for this video. i took notes and it was very helpful for me.

  • @annbrown7202
    @annbrown7202 3 ปีที่แล้ว

    My sister wrote, the leaves are turning crayola colors

  • @daveshif2514
    @daveshif2514 4 หลายเดือนก่อน

    idk if feel like if you have issues with weak verbs, you just have weak imagery and should be using different metaphors. if your verb is mismatched with your noun, use a different noun that already implies at the verb you want. yes replace adverbs with better verbs, and use use more specific verbs, but you really dont want to force these. consider that you are trying to say one thing, but you could just say something more effective that the reader can actually read into. i dont need to know if a bag floated or glided, theyre the same thing, i dont care about a bag. tell me that the bird spiraled to the ground, and then the bag was gone. Dont insult the reader's intelligence like this, you are infantilizing your reader. If you want to say a cat flew, well cats dont fly. say a bird flew and the cat was keeping up with it. therefor the cat flew without messing up your metaphors.
    Leaves dont season anything. They CAN pepper the ground, so why not use the right verb that evokes the image you want? If you just TELL the reader "hey i know this is going to sound wild BUT the leaves, right, get this, they SEASONED the ground!!! LIKE WOW" uh that is going to immediately make me shut the book. I do not care about how you feel about the word seasoned, i dont care how you feel about leaves. I need to know what the leaves are DOING and why, and why the character is saying it and why the author is saying it. By giving it all away you have missed all 3. Saying the leaved peppered the ground, crunching underfoot as the girl drank her pumpkin late, I GET IT. I get that the leaves and the flavor and the seasoning is part of the scene. Otherwise you are just TELLING and not showing. By mixing up metaphors you are literally telling. You are telling the reader "this was my intent, there is NO mystery here". and with no intrigue, no "whats next" moment, i close the book.
    This is a huge issue i see from discovery writers where you have no idea where the story is going so you are just trying to cram in as much description as possible without adding the correct plot beats we need. If you just randomly add malaphors, you are going to raise flags for the reader, the reader is going to read into it, and be disappointed when there is nothing and they learn you were just waffling in their face. you need to know when, which, and when not to use metaphors. If this is you, you need to stop trying to be a manic pixie discovery writer, get an outline done, and actually plan your story. These arent bad IDEAS but they are bad words. they can be good words but you need to make them work FOR you instead of against you. I dont need to know what you THINK about bag, leaves, and seasonings. I NEED to know what is happening, and why. I need to know WHY the character is doing the things theyre doing, not ... whether a bag glided or fell or drifted. those are all the same thing. Without context none of that matters to the reader at all.

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  4 หลายเดือนก่อน

      Buddy, if you don’t like experimenting with prose then don’t do it. Going on a long essayistic rant where you tear down other writers isn’t going to make you a better writer. You have free will and can click off of videos. I disagree with you, you disagree with me-let’s just go our separate ways now.

    • @daveshif2514
      @daveshif2514 4 หลายเดือนก่อน

      @@rachelwritesbooks cringe

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  4 หลายเดือนก่อน

      @@daveshif2514 you’re the one who left a dissertation in my comment section that grossly misunderstands writing craft lmaooooo fail

    • @daveshif2514
      @daveshif2514 4 หลายเดือนก่อน

      @@rachelwritesbooks if you cant critique you arent an artist

    • @rachelwritesbooks
      @rachelwritesbooks  4 หลายเดือนก่อน

      @@daveshif2514 please go outside and make some friends.

  • @DreamingTruth.author
    @DreamingTruth.author หลายเดือนก่อน

    This was very helpful