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Reading a book I wrote when I was 13
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- เผยแพร่เมื่อ 31 ต.ค. 2019
- When I was 13 years old I wrote a book called THE SKY WEEPS WITH US under the pen name of Jane Winshield. I made a video of the book's "unpublication" and have received requests to read it, so here it is!
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For 13 this is AMAZING, I was writing rubbish fan fiction at that age.
Hahah don’t worry I’ve written tons of cringe fan fic too!
I AM 13 AND WRITING FANFICTION RIGHT NOW-
@@angelangel1610 we are all writers in our own way
i am 12 and i am writing a book and also a fan fic at the same time 😅
Urhmm..What type☺️😃
Your taking about how bad it is but DAMN, you wrote that at 13!!!!! That’s damn good for 13.
I guess I need to get off my ASS and write something.
This is damned inspiring.
Sh wrote it at 10 but edited it at 23
You mean 13
@@gracebooks7451 yeah
Exactly what I was thinking. Impressive stuff.
The youngest person to write a book was 4 sooo...
You can be any age to write a book. Im right now writing a book on wattpad call finding the lost crystal at 9. still impressive
You should try rewriting it, even if it's just for fun.
Maybe someday!
I'm writing a book
Get in touch with me with my email address
dtegan218@gmail.com
@@MelTorrefranca Hi! I was wondering if you got your book copyrighted. I'm thinking of publishing my book and don't know if I should pay $55
Bianca Hamel it’s worth it so no one can steal u novel. you’d loose a lot more money if u didn’t and someone stole it
@@mysticwolf895 please don't self advertise it doesn't work
To be honest, the lack of amplification actually makes the scene more heartbreaking. The kids were 9 and 7 then, what did they know about death? They were confused, their thoughts blurred their innocent, youthful minds.
I agree, it sort of feels like a stylistic choice to make everything feel 'rough.'
don't be too hard on yourself!! from what you read it seems really good 😉
Thanks Abbie!!
It really was!
I was actually into the story! But my judgment is flawed because I'm 11.
This is actually really good for the age you were when you wrote it
judging by the title, you are being VERY hard on yourself. What you wrote is incredible for a thirteen-year-old. You have all the right plot devices, ideas, and use of literary devices. Obviously due to your young age, your execution wasn't necessarily the best. However, despite this, I think you should be very proud of yourself. Writing a novel is not easy and very few people can say with pride that they have published work- ESPEACIALLY from a young age. I think that if you were to publish a book today, you would do a much better job. We are humans; we learn as we grow.
Aw thank you! I actually published two books after unpublishing this one (Leaving Wishville and Capsule), and I'm so proud of them :)
The title is SO cool though!
FreckledFaceCarrotTop Hahha thank you 😂
1. It is definitely not as bad as you think, honestly I’d probably read it and enjoy it!!
2. Your channel is so underrated!!!
Thank you so much!
I just checked your book page on Amazon and found out that this book is 314 pages long! You wrote 314 pages at 13 and was brave enough to publish it. Whether you consider this book a "bad book" or not, you have to give yourself some credit where credit is due. You accomplished a big feat while balancing schoolwork, I'm assuming, and honestly should be proud of yourself. Now that you've done it, you know what it's like to have it completed and be a published author. I could only dream of getting to do such a thing at 13. I managed to publish my first children's book at 22, the year you did and just a couple of months after. It wasn't perfect, and I ended up taking it down, but I learned a lot from that experience and it was a good feeling when I first published the book. So, now that you did it, learned from the experience, and know what to do, you can say you have some experience on what it really takes.
Thank you so much!! I’m sure that was a great learning experience for you as it was for me :) best of luck on your writing journey moving forward!
@@MelTorrefranca I searched it up, thought it was 290?
I watched this video YEARS AGO and let me just say it's been in the deepest nooks of my brain. My goodness. This was amazing because it was THAT MEMORABLE
Wow that’s crazy hahah, I’m happy to say I’m rewriting it as “Belladonna”
I actually thought it was pretty darn well written. Pretty astounding it was written at 13 years old
I'M almost 17 and I can't write like this, I wanna cry
I’m going to try writing a book or maybe just a story just try it out I’m also 17 I have always loved reading and dreamed about writing but never toke the step to try it I really want to challenge myself to write a book in English since it not my first language I would just like to say just try it you don’t have anything to loose and even it if sucks it was fun to try something new
same 😭😭😭
This is a good story. I did feel that the children felt a deep loss at their parent's death. It does not need to be amplified for us. Your readers have good imaginations. This is a book that I would keep reading to see what eventually happened. I felt anger at how the military took the parents away from children who needed them. A good story will evoke emotion from its readers, and this your story did.
I wrote a book when I was 12 that wasn’t really a book. It had no plot line and no character development and was literally just two teens in a relationship and they just had a bunch of fights. I’m 22 now and I have written so many stories I’m proud of, some short and some novel length and with every story I’ve seen how much I’ve improved. Some sucked, don’t get me wrong but I actually like to go back and read what I’ve written because it’s almost like a time capsule of my work and it’s nice to see how far I’ve come. It’s my dream to have something published one day and I know it will happen. I just have to have faith in the process.
Thank you for sharing your story. I hope it’s as much an inspiration for others as it was for me!
I’m “writing a book” at the moment and like most writers, i cringe at my old writing lol. I have trouble keeping with one story. Any advice? Also, it wasn’t terrible, especially at the age you were writing at. I’m 12 and I definitely need to improve lol
My biggest advice is to write the first draft as quickly as possible. Maybe try NaNoWriMo ;)
me tooooooo.. i started writing my book when I was twelve. when i was thirteen, i looked back at the 50 000 odd words i'd written and it was horrendous. am now rewriting it with MANY major changes and it is infinitely better. glad i started rewriting :)
Im 13, I have been in the process of writing for 2 years because it just needs so much help, the topic is incredibly hard to write about and I have no idea how to describe characters.
I am 10 and am writing a book 📚 “A dragons great adventure” :p
Me too I'm 12 and writing my first book!
Hearing this read aloud, knowing that you wrote it from age 10, is genuinely really impressive. You definitely had a better grasp on narrative structure than I did at 10. It's also really cool that you had the tenacity to actually finish it within 3 years ... again, something I was never able to accomplish when I was younger. (For some context, I'm 26 [I've been writing since age 5] - and am I about 5k words shy of finishing my first book ... this doesn't account for the whole terrifying process of contacting the remainder of my beta readers, polishing it accordingly, hiring a pro. editor, pitching it to some lit. agents, getting rejected by those agents, etc., etc.) My point is, even though your book became a lesson in what NOT to do, I really admire you for having the courage and the confidence to actually put something out there - because, again - that's something I DON'T have. You should feel very proud of yourself regardless of the outcome.
I'm sure you have it in you! When I first sent out my new book to beta readers I got really nauseous and literally couldn't get out of bed haha...sometimes you just need a little push.
For 13, this is really good. I didn’t find it bad at all
This was great, I definitely relate to the pain of re-reading old stories. In my opinion the key to avoiding that kind of thing is beta readers and an editor who will outwright tell you what does and doesn't work.
I'm looking forward to reading your latest novel when it comes out!
That definitely helps! And thanks, excited for you to read it :)
I’m writing a book right now. I’m only nine. It’s probably going to be bad but I’m not afraid of that! I think that in the future no matter what it will be better and people will see my improvement
aww wait this is so cute, wishing you the best xxxx
Good luck ❤
I’m only a preteen and I started writing a romance novel! I really like it so far and sometimes I judge myself cause I’m so young and people say that kids can’t like write books but this gave me so much inspiration to keep going! Thank you
Hi! How did it go? I’ve been writing my romance novel for 7 months and I’m editing now
Hope y’all publish it and get New York times
I’m writing a book right at school the title is war of legends and and your book is amazing so don’t be afraid be confident
Your book sounds AMAZING!!!!! Can’t wait to see it on the shelves! 😊
Not to be mean, but the title is very generic and not eye-catching. You might want to reconsider. Right now all it makes me think of is League of Legends.
This makes me reflect to when I wrote: Cancer Isn’t A Disease It’s A Gift I’m embarrassed just remembering it!
@I am potato bishh • 7 Years Ago That’s why I said I’m dying remembering it. Because it was so stupid and bad.
@@johnadams7145 what was the context in which you said that? I'm so confused lol
@@brianfosterkinsale4403I assume you mean me dying remember it. I should just change that to being really embarrassed remembering it. If your asking about the book it was about a girl getting bullied for having cancer and from what I remember she rises up against the bullies. The title I only made because it sounded unique.
@@johnadams7145 Oh thanks, I was talking about the cancer phrase, lol. That must have been very strange to look back on now
@@brianfosterkinsale4403 I’m pretty sure I threw it out. There was another book that I made that was bashing certain people and that also got thrown out.
Mel, this is not bad at all! I found your channel today, and you are soooo inspiring and pretty! I am writing a book too...😊
Aww ty ty
Goodness I'm so excited for Leaving Wishville! Can't wait to read it! 💓have an amazing day!
Aww thanks :) can’t wait for u to read it!
I thought that when u said that ur book sucked i thought it sucked. But seriously girl u write good. Give ur self some extra credit👍👏👏
When I first heard you say "They would be buried in the cemetery, the criminal cemetery where there would be no visitors."
My first thought was, "Man, imagine being such a dangerous criminal that even after death you were in solitary isolation."
My first story was a fanfiction, published in a site called Wattpad. It literally sucks and out of place and I decided to delete it back then, but soon regret it because my dad told me that It was my first step in writing and I just deleted it like it was nothing. My twin sister also said that it was a good book. The story was precisely good and now, I started realizing if I could revise it.
I am a fellow writer here. Currently writing a Filipino book mixed with English and soon, going to publish an English book in Wattpad. HI!
I’ve regretted deleting books in the past as well, it’s always nice to look back on old work. Btw your book sounds amazing! I’m half Filipino so I’d love to read it someday :)
you inspire me!
Honestly I wish I could still buy the book because I'm so interested in it.
I'm writing a book, were on the 4th book in the series
I honestly think yours is amazing! Better then I could ever do
That’s not true. I’m sure your book is great!
I’m currently writing a book.... I just really hope I don’t regret it in like 10 years. Actually nvm I probably will ;-;
I definitely will regret a few books I worked/working on
OMG you so beautiful Mel!
Thank you :)
i thought the book was really cool actually..
For you only being 13, I found it sounded really good. Thanks so much for sharing.💜
I honestly think that every work of art is special
Don’t know how I got here from watching fortnite videos, but great video 👍
Wow thanks dude 😂
You deserve way more subs and exposer than you have you're an amazing author
Aw thanks that’s so sweet :)
@@MelTorrefranca no problem
Now she has a video with over 600K views so I think this aged well.
OMG your book is still available on Amazon! I'm definitely gonna buy it
Hi, Mel! Have you ever thought about narrating audiobooks? I think you would be perfect at it. Your voice is so soothing and I love listening to you read!
You're going to be my favorite TH-camr.....thank you so much! 💖
SIS WDYM THIS IS GOODDDD
to be fair everyone deals and feels grief diffrently, so its not unrealistic
I agree, plus as a reader would you want to read a page, two pages, three pages of them being sad? Expressing how alone they felt, how hopeless the world was and falling into some endless pit of misery? I mean sure, that's realistic but the problem I see in this, and the problem I have actually turned off movies is this is the first chapter. I don't know or care about the parents, I know the characters do however. So instead of putting all the focus on the now, I would prefer to see how the character handles the grief moving forward, how they struggle to take care of a sibling while also dealing with the pain of having no parents around.
Moments like, thinking mom and dad are going to be waiting for them and them when there is no one as they remember they are dead. Them struggling to be an adult for the first time and making a connection with their parents when they finally understood the struggle they went through to provide them a house and food. I think building up how the sadness and grief affects the character over the span of the book, and how they overcome their deaths and build on it as a driving force for their development...or not, it's possible they learn that their parents were actually terrible people and the execution was fully reasonable and then it's trying to learn to deal with that!
Either way, I think all the upfront pain and emotion would detract from me wanting to care about the characters I am reading about, which would be the two siblings. The parents are already dead so soon so no emotional attachment as a reader, I am more curious what they will do going forward. So a 3 page sob scene right after would have been kind of gross to listen to.
It's almost like listening to someone you don't know cry about a break up...like...please no, help! HELP! I am not invested in you, and definitely not invested in your failed relationship! XD Let me get to know you a little bit before you deep dive into your emotional crisis otherwise I will never have an attachment.
Movies that just throw random death scenes at me with somber music and I am over there finding some popcorn because I am bored. XD
This is an amazing book and I think you have done such a great work. You were just 13 and I HAVE READ MUCH WORSE BOOKS. And I think you can edit it again or rewrite it and give it online
I promise I will certainly read the whole book.
This is amazing I love this book from the sound of it
I'm trying to write a book right now and it's really hard. One thing I'm really scared of is it not being descriptive or realistic enough. Something I think you did well in The Sky Weeps With Us was adding those small details of how things looked such as, "we traveled astray from the jungle of weeping families." That line just sounded so perfect to me. I'm trying to get your new book Leaving Wishville and I'm super excited to read it. It sounds like you have grown with your writing and you should be proud of yourself.
Thank you so much! I hope you enjoy LEAVING WISHVILLE, and best of luck on your book. You can do it!
This is still written really well, especially for 13 years old! The commitment and determination you had/have is really inspiring. :) I'm currently working on my second book. I see flaws in my first book, but I am still really proud of it!
Thank you! It's great that you are proud of your old work...we're always improving as writers. Good luck with your current book :)
@@MelTorrefranca Thanks! Good luck on your future writings. God bless!
Your voice is so soothing
Really you are amazing. It's really difficult to write book even in the alder age but you are not among them and which is making u extraordinary and an inspiration for other 🥰🥰
Mel don't give plan your story then write your good book everyone will love your book I love you
If you become a famous author someday, that book is going to be worth a ton of money!
This is really AWESOME for 13! Very impressive. I have tried writing books around that age but never finished I applaud you!!
Aw thank you!!
It's well written. I'm intrigued. Maybe you should do an audio version now.
Hi Mel, my name is Chelsy and I'm using my mom's account. You're an inspiration to me. I hope to see you someday later on in life. The fact that you wrote a book is remarkable. Don't always put yourself down and believe in yourself because nobody else can do it for you xx. I will not forget you.
Hi Chesly! Thank you so much, that’s so sweet :)
That book isn’t bad lol you should be proud because that book got you somewheres in life and it sharpened your spirit to write more books.
Ive been watching you recently I’ve decided to try to right my own book hopefully I can get it published
Its freaking awesome that you wrote a book!
Haha thank you! Still keeping at it ✍🏽
I'm 14, I write alot, you inspire me.
You've achieved so much! Well done 🤧👏🏾I'm 13 right now and I'm hoping to finish writing my first novel before I'm 14 because originally I wanted to be the same age as my characters which makes absolutely no sense since my characters are 14 in the end but oh well 👍🏾
How did you manage to self-publish that book at such a young age?
Such nyc way to convey a message
It is so good! I feel like if you edited it a bit more, it would be a bestseller by now!
You did Amazing writing this book as thirteen years old.
This is actually really good
This is actually really good for something you wrote that young.
Haha thank you!
Who else is just in shock that Mel could write that at 10!!
This is so good for 13!!
This is good, for being thriteen. I'm 11 and I this inspried me to do better..... This is really helpfull, and thank you for sharing!
I think that this book is pretty cool!
This inspired me to think about a book. I've loved reading for God knows how long. There was a time where I thought about becoming a author. I still have some ideas for a book, but I'm not sure if it'll turn out good.
Hey! I just discovered your channel and I find you incredibly inspiring since I’m also working on publishing my own novel someday. I also wanted to say that your videos are really awesome! 😄
Thank you so much :)
Mel Torrefranca No problem!
Honestly the way the book is written is beautiful, it's the characters and plot. It's a great idea just not played out in its best form. Your book didn't suck. Its wording didn't suck. Your characters didn't suck, they were just stuck in the beginning stages of their development. I would read it, and enjoy it.
I'm twelve and started writing my first book a few months ago. It's on page 80! I've attempted to write a book before. I got burnt out and stopped when I was 11. I reread that last month after I found it in my drafts. It was written well and I surprised myself with it. But I also had poorly written characters and a not too good plot for a murder mystery.
Anyway this really inspired me to keep going, thank you!
Glad this was inspiring. Wishing you the best with your project!
This is beautiful.
Gurl are you kidding?
I need to see what I wrote when I was thirteen.
Sucks is a huge understatement.
I remember printing a physical copy of this long book I wrote at 13. It took me a whole year to write and it’s got 40 chapters. I might try and re-write it. There’s this incredibly embarrassing typo in it (I had this character called Cole he wasn’t the protagonist but I literally misspelt his name for the first half of the book. I literally wrote “coal” as in the material which is *so* embarrassing retrospectively)
I might even try and re-write it. It’ll take time though.
Oh, and your book seems lovely!!!
I love the world’s concepts and the tribes etc.
Lol, good luck 🤞❤️
This is amazing for a 13 year old I started writing when I was 5 and your 13 year old book is better then my stories from 13 years old
That's impressive for when you wrote the book.
I'm a Arabic writer , and you inspired me alot
Don't worry, i hpe you tried your best and your best is all you can do right? So, don't get stressed by it. It's time-consuming i can understand. Everyone can't do it but you did it
That was actually better than I thought it would be. It reminds me of some of the stuff I would've written when I was a kid, though mine was comic book stories.
When my older sister was in college she worked really hard on her first book. It was really terrible. So terrible in fact that for a while she gave up writing. Years later, she found that she was really good at writing high fantasy. She's written her first book and is now looking into publishing it.
With me, I'm still playing around with some story ideas. I mostly write fanfiction. 😅
damn this is actually really good
That’s so good I’d love that book
NGL, I love this
Beautiful writing.
i'm a year late but new subscriber here! love the couple videos i've seen!!
Yayyy welcome, so happy to have you here :)
That’s decent for a book read at 13:) I’m 12 and currently writing a book called “A crucial moment” about a 14 year old named Marshall who ran away when he was 12 and has been living outside and alone for 2 years. He’s in denial and pushing away his feelings. Later in the book he decides to find his way home to see family. But he has two problems, he’s walked every day for two years, so if he wants to get home faster, he will have to find a quicker way. But the biggest problem is his dignity and how embarrassing he imagines returning home will be. It’s a book about regret and mistakes. Let me know what you think:)
Wow, creative mind. I like it!
thank you so much!
I think it is not bad. Just like you, I'm writing at this age. I'm 12 years old this day and almost 2 weeks to go I will be 13. I know that when years passed I will read my books that I wrote at this year and at this time and maybe, I will have the same feeling as like you. But I think I will still be happy because at that age or in this age I started my journey in creating my own world. Hehe, that's all. Btw, this vid is really helpfull ;)
Omg thank youuuuu
I am still not 13 and I love writing and I am amazed with some of the words I’m just going to say it’s kinda good but it needs just a little practice but it’s good for a 13 year old ☺️
Teenager authors? My god, TH-cam has led me astray. Even being in your 20s is considered very young to be publishing a book. 'Prodigy author' is an oxymoron.
I love your channel! ! I just subbed 😁😁
welcome my dude!!
Well, what you have written is way better than what I have!
I have published two books at 14, and they were both horrible. They contained a lot of spelling and grammar errors, not enough emotions, the idea itself was already kinda cringy...
I edited the first one (correcting etc) and the second one I deleted it. But it still sucks. It's like ready some boring dairy with some random tradegy happening. Yeah, I'm not good in writing...
Thanks for sharing your experience, though. I'm happy that I can relate to someone! (Even your book is way better than mine lol)
For 13this is amazing writing! I really want to purchase your other book buts since in a bit of a book nerd lol, my mom said I can’t buy more books until I finish my unread books. Lol. I wrote a book 6 months ago and when my parents asked about it, I felt so embarrassed. If anyone read my story I would be so embarrassed it was such an immature concept so I gave up on that book and took a break and now I’m writing another book. It’s going well.
I’m a book writer myself, I actually writing a anime novel without pictures and that’s my passion. I written stories when I was a young child, never published any of my works, I got older and lost my fire of writing and recently I just started writing again. All thanks to my little cousin that just turned eighteen, I shared my ongoing work of a anime novel and he gave me the motivation to chase, work hard and believe in my dreams. I write anime scripts, anime short stories and novels.
I loved that story can you please read some more it’s interesting and inspiring
I actually love this! I am also writing a book right now! Subscribing now!
Aw thank you!
@@MelTorrefranca You're welcome!! Happy writing!!
The book could have been worse, I pictured it. Could have been better but it's not too bad. I liked the concept. Setting the age of majority to 9 kind of made sense, by that age it is possible to survive on your own. It's hard though.
Hello young one.
So, I have 30 years under my belt (my age lol). And I have only read a complete book once; it was a short story lol. And now I am writing my own book.
I got the name figured out. I even know how I want to structure my chapters so I know what to write and in which order. I have this book that plays in my head and it plays as if it's a damn movie.
I'm hoping to put that movie in my head on the the paper with words that paint the picture to the reader. Every detail, every dialogue, every monologue and even the smallest details like the colour of their clothes, hair, body type, height, right as the then scene is going on.
Is that and issue? Please advise
It sounds like something I would write when I was younger, I could still use tips though.
I am also writing a book but I kinda don’t have time for finishing it. Love the book, u described it well.
I can’t kinda write novels but I can write scary stories
I don’t really like reading books, but I would read this
If you can now see so many ways in which the novel could be better, it might be possible to revise it. That said, we do sometimes need to learn from past projects and move on. Your developing writing style here seems promising. 💖
Possibly someday, but right now I'm focused on new projects :)
@@MelTorrefranca Sounds good to me. 😃👍💝