I think this is a great and cute concept. Just a bit of advice (not from an expert, believe me) maybe try pacing the story and lines better. Try to make it not move to fast or slow. Showing the characters internal thoughts and feelings and personal strife helps make it a more satisfying thing to watch. But keep trying! You'll just keep getting better!
@@popcornproductions2 Also, this is kinda my own preference, feel free to not do it-but try to show and not tell. It definitely helps with the pacing and won't make things feel “rushed” Grian is about to passed out at the start at the video, instead of just monologue you can add that Grian slowly collapsed to the ground. It could be that his head look down and then his face become weak, his wings lowering, him holding his head because it hurts, etc etc. (Don't make the character tell the viewer, instead the character made the viewer _think_ about it.) (Another example, instead of saying “my head hurts” we can do things like the character holding their head, wincing and gritting their teeth to show immense pain.) Show don't tell helps a lot in creating an immerse and engaging story, if you want to make the audience interested by it, you need to make that story felt alive and not monotone. The monologues can still be added of course, but we can also make it got cut off because he lost consciousness. Example: Everything felt so... Dizzy... // I just need to wake- Try doing things deliberately like this, find the perfect balance, and you won't have any issue with pacing. It also gives the character more life to them. Showing character talks and showing their internal thought is good, like the first commenter said, however it is also a good idea to break that by giving them some action to not make it flat I do understand how hard making things in Gacha Life 2 are though, so I can understand the more simple approach Your idea have potential, and I can't wait to see what you'll come up with in the future:)!
Well, in Gacha Life 2, you can either use the wing ears in the 'ear' section or the wings from the 'other' section. It's not a thing in Gacha Life 1 and I don't use Gacha Club so I don't know about that one
I think this is a great and cute concept. Just a bit of advice (not from an expert, believe me) maybe try pacing the story and lines better. Try to make it not move to fast or slow. Showing the characters internal thoughts and feelings and personal strife helps make it a more satisfying thing to watch. But keep trying! You'll just keep getting better!
Thanks for the advice. I'm a fast reader, so I struggle knowing what pase works for viewers
@@popcornproductions2 Also, this is kinda my own preference, feel free to not do it-but try to show and not tell. It definitely helps with the pacing and won't make things feel “rushed”
Grian is about to passed out at the start at the video, instead of just monologue you can add that Grian slowly collapsed to the ground. It could be that his head look down and then his face become weak, his wings lowering, him holding his head because it hurts, etc etc. (Don't make the character tell the viewer, instead the character made the viewer _think_ about it.)
(Another example, instead of saying “my head hurts” we can do things like the character holding their head, wincing and gritting their teeth to show immense pain.)
Show don't tell helps a lot in creating an immerse and engaging story, if you want to make the audience interested by it, you need to make that story felt alive and not monotone.
The monologues can still be added of course, but we can also make it got cut off because he lost consciousness. Example: Everything felt so... Dizzy... // I just need to wake-
Try doing things deliberately like this, find the perfect balance, and you won't have any issue with pacing. It also gives the character more life to them.
Showing character talks and showing their internal thought is good, like the first commenter said, however it is also a good idea to break that by giving them some action to not make it flat
I do understand how hard making things in Gacha Life 2 are though, so I can understand the more simple approach
Your idea have potential, and I can't wait to see what you'll come up with in the future:)!
Ah my eyes they are burning!!! It's so cute and loving!!!!🤍🤍🤍
Yeah, Xisumavoid is so nice
I can't wait to see the rest!!! I hope that you are feeling better!!!!🤍🥰
@@_Sawapaw_ the rest is coming soon! And I'm doing fine today
Awee this is sweet! ❤️ Can’t wait for a part 2!
Working on it now! 👍
Yay
Aww this is awesome!
Thanks! Part two coming later today
@@popcornproductions2 Oo I can’t wait!
Omg i love these character designs!
PS. What wings do you use for the head/ear wings? I see everyone using them but I cant find them lol!
Well, in Gacha Life 2, you can either use the wing ears in the 'ear' section or the wings from the 'other' section. It's not a thing in Gacha Life 1 and I don't use Gacha Club so I don't know about that one
I use the wing ears in the ear section of the body page in gacha life two
Dadsuma!
More dadzuma coming soon :)
@@popcornproductions2 Yessss