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Great channel. here is my essay: The reading passage and the lecture are about the paradox of choice. While the author of the article believes having multiple options available could be positive, at the same time he provides and provides several reasons, the lecturer casts doubts on the statements in the article. He claims that this paradox is very well documented, and challenges each of the writer’s points. First, the article remarks that, nowadays, the vast number of options available contributes to make our life easier. Also, it is outlined that the more choices we have, the more likely it is to find exactly what we are looking for and, thus, the less likely to regret our decision. The lecturer, however, disagrees with this viewpoint. He points out that the abundance of choices could be exhausting and make us waste a lot of time in the process of choosing the right option. This decision-making process could lead to what is called ‘desicion fatigue’. After this, our productivity levels drops and the choices we make tend to be poorer. Secondly, the author notes innovation and progress is boost by the possibility of having many choices. Having said so, he says that companies and individuals are encouraged to look for new ideas in order to stand out from the competition. The lecturer believes there are flaws in the writer’s argument and holds he feels in a different way. He argues that, currently, companies tend to fill the market with different products and services. Conversely, they do not focus on quality, but quantity. As a result, there are numerous mediocre products and services in our society. Finally, another reason why the writer feels it is positive to have a wide range of possibilities is because it increases our personal growth and development. This is based on the fact that, while thinking deeply about our likings and priorities, we learn more about ourselves. The professor in the listening remarks the true outcome is quite the opposite. He says that, having multiple choices make us lazy and lead us to prefer always the same, without even looking or thinking about a change. When we extrapolate this behavior to our jobs and personal life, this results in failure. thank you for your support
This is solid. Really solid. I think it would score about 28 points. Some of your word choices are slightly unidiomatic and awkward but I don't think that will hurt you very much. Good work.
Thanks for your channel and website they are really helpful and complete! Here is my essay: The reading and the lecture are both about a concept called “paradox of choice”, this means having too many options to choose from. The author feels that this can have good consequences regarding finding the best fit for our needs and preferences, fostering innovation and progress within the offerents and promoting personal growth and development. On the other hand, the lecturer doesn’t believe that having too many options have positive consequences. First of all, the author states that having a vast array of products and services available to choose from can help us to find the best fit for our needs and preferences. According to the article, with a lot of options we are less likely to regret our decision. The lecturer challenges this argument. He claims that this complicates the decision-making process, making it exhausting as it requires more time and effort. Additionally, he points out that it can lead to a phenomenon called decision fatigue, that involves taking bad decisions and can even affect productivity. Secondly, the author suggests that having many different choices fosters innovation and progress. The article notes that it forces companies to differentiate themselves offering new and better alternatives. The lecturer, however, asserts that in this way companies focus on having a variety options, rather on the quality of them. He goes on to say that this hinder progress as it results in mediocre and poor quality products and services. Finally, the author puts forth the idea that having many options available contributes to our personal growth and development. The author contends that it makes us learn from ourselves by being aware of our values and priorities in the decision-making process. In contrast, the lecturer stance is that many options may increase our complacency and laziness. He says that eventually people get tired of finding new and better alternatives, affecting our job’s and personal life’s decisions.
Excellent video! Here it is mine eassy: In this set of material, the author says that to have a lot of choices in our lives is advantageous and it is a good thing. However, the lecturer says that to have a lot of choices in our lives is not an advantageous, it is actually a bad thing that can cause anxiety and indecision because we need to do a lot of research to make a decision. First, the author says having a large number of options helps people to find goods and services that best fit their needs and preferences. However, the lecturer says that having a large number of options can be exhausting and fatigues, because people take a lot of time to evaluate, compare and it is toxic to do that. It also affects our capacity of to be sure and decrease our productivity. Second, the author says that the availability of many different choices can promote innovation and progress. However, the lecturer says that companies create many products and services, but the quality is poor, and company’s profit is high. Finally, the author says that having many choices increases our personal growth and development. However, the lecturer says that having many choices increases our laziness, we can be stuck when we do have many options. It also can decrease our personal growth and development, to achieve success can be harder.
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Love this channel. Thank you so much for your videos. here is my essay. The article introduces the topic of Paradox of choice which means when there are too many options to choose from it can lead to indecision and anxiety. The writer says, it's good to have an increased number of choices as you can find the perfect match you want whether it’s a car, house, phone etc. The lecturer however disagrees with the idea and counter attacks with each claim in the reading passage. First of all the author describes that when we have more choices it is more likely to find things that suits your style most and meets your needs. Whereas professor mentions this could lead to metal exhaustion as one has to spend more time researching about available options to best suit his/her needs. This can lead to decreased capacity to make ideal decisions and productivity. According to the writer, when there are more options available there is more chance of innovation and progress as different companies will try to make more products to attract more customers. Professor believes flows in this thinking as it can lead to poor quality of products over time in order to increase production and make benefit for companies. This can lead to break markets as customers would stop buying such products over time. Also reading paragraph notes Paradox of choice can increase personal growth and development as it makes one think deeper about their values and priorities. On the other hand the lecturer argues that this can lead to laziness over time due to increased options. One tends to stick with the product they like more and fewer changes may lead to increased chance of growth. As we can clearly see, the lecturer and author hold very different views on this phenomenon called Paradox of choice.
I think this one would score about 20 points. Try to avoid sentence fragments like "Whereas professor mentions this could lead to metal exhaustion as one has to spend more time researching about available options to best suit his/her needs."
Hi Michael! Thank you very much for your dedication with all these videos!! Here goes mine :) In the reading excerpt, the author introduces the topic of Paradox of Choice, which is a concept to imply that the idea of having several options in between to choose has benefits. The lecturer disagrees. He says that having too many options may cause mental conflicts in people.
Firstly, the author states that when people have many options to choose, they might end up finding goods and services that fit better according to their necessities. The lecturer believes there are flaws in the author's opinion. He says that having several options in between to choose, instead of helping people, it might make them feel mentally exhausted, leading them to experience what is known as "decision fatigue".
Secondly, the author says that the higher the availability of options is, the better the level of both innovation and progress becomes, because people feel challenged to create original things. However, the lecturer states that this point is not certainly true. He says that this huge amount of options might imply mediocre and low quality products, which are not convenient to consumers.
Thirdly, the author mentions another advantage of having to choose between a lot of options. He says that it will lead people to increase their personal growth and development, because of all the time they will spend on thinking about what is really good for them, according to their values and priorities, increasing people's self aware and confident. On the contrary, the professor says that as people are aware of the availability of a huge diversity of options, they may not seek for better options and will conform with the available products. This behavior, he says, will not make people feel attracted to change in any aspect of their life, because of this feeling of comfomity.
To sum up, the author and the lecturer hold very different views about the concept of Paradox of choice.
I think this one would score about 21 points. Your details are good, but there are a lot of grammar and language use errors in the body paragraphs. You need to reduce your error rate!
Hello Michael. Thank you for your help. Here is my essay. The author of the reading and the lecturer both discuss about paradox of choice. This term briefly means that having many options could be destructive for people. The author and lecturer argues whether paradox of choice in other words, having variety of alternatives is beneficial or not. To start with, the author thinks that having too many options is helpful for people for discovering their needs. Moreover, by doing so people could find the best fit for themselves. The lecturer on the other hand, notes that paradox of choice is insufficient because searching for the perfect choice and pressure of making the best choice is exhausting menthally. Additionally, it is time consuming process and it could reduce productivity. Secondly, the author suggests having many options increase the quality of products or even motivate people create new ones. Also, having that much alternatives will be a motivation for individuals for looking for the latest goods and better alternatives. On the contrary, the professor says that focusing other alternatives could only decrease the quality and innovations. Finally, the reading mentions that having variety of choices is a way of personal improvement. The the reason for that is while trying to find what they need, people can start to think deeply about their moral values and it can improve their self knowledge and self awareness. In contrast, the professor mentions that it can create laziness in people. Having too many alternatives anytime could make people so still that they could not even change their jobs.
Thanks for the video, here's my response: The article introduces the topic of the paradox of choice. More specifically, the author argues that it's, in fact, really beneficial and provides three advantages about it. The lecturer, on the other hand, disagrees and attacks each of the claims made in the reading. To begin with, the writer notes that paradox of choice aids in finding our specific needs due to the many options available. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He is of the opinion that having many choices is time-consuming and takes a lot of effort from us to evaluate each choice, and as a result, a phenomenon called decision fatigue is experienced which is when a person loses their ability to make good decisions and accordingly becomes less productive. Secondly, the reading passage puts forth the idea that paradox of choice is a way to increase innovation. He goes on to discuss that this encourages companies to come up with new products in order to compete against others. The professor casts doubt on this statement and believes that when companies focus on creating many choices other than the actual quality of their products, this will lead to low-quality choices for customers. Finally, the author posits that another benefit of paradox of choice is its role in evolution and personal development owing to the fact that it allows us to question what we value and think about whether what we're choosing is suitable or not for us. The speaker believes there are flaws in the author's argument and thinks that this, in fact, will make us lazy because having many options will lead to us not wanting what is better and new. Moreover, he states that this is also going to result in us not wanting to change our opinion.
This is a fairly strong essay which I think would score about 26 points. There are some minor grammar and language use issues like "so are multiple options" and "the author suggests that multiple choices boost innovation".
In that case it sounded unnatural and awkward. Don't get too obsessed with avoiding repetition. You can use the same word more than once, especially in the integrated task.
Hi, thanks a lot for the video. Here is my essay Both the reading passage and lecture, talk about a phenomena called paradox of choice which basically says that, too many options to choose from can lead to anxious decisions. The reading passage provides the positive side of paraox of choice and supports it with three reasons. On the other hand, the lecturer disagrees with the reasons given in the passage. Firstly, the text states that, by having more options means having more goods and services to choose from and it provides an opportunity to make a choice that one would not regret. However, the lecturer feels that, choosing from multiple options is menatlly exhausting. It requires a lot of time and effort and can eventually lead to decision fatigue - which is the decrease in ability to make good decisions, and reduction in productivity. Secondly, the reading asserts that paradox of choice can promote innovation, progress and promotes competition between companies. On the contrary, the professor feels that, it leads to the market being filled with mediocre and low quality products which in turn hinders progress. Lastly, the passage mentions that paradox of choice fosters personal growth and development and enhances decision making ability. In contrast, the speaker feels that, it promotes laziness. He thinks that having more options will make it less likely for people to seek out better alternatives. People would not bring changes in their life and thus reduce their level of success. Please let me know where can I improve. Thanks again
Don't ever use a comma after "says that." Consider that a general rule for this task. "anxious decisions" is a bit awkward. I would just say "anxiety when making decisions." Don't use a comma after "the text states that." Consider using my template to avoid mistakes like this one (and the one above): www.toeflresources.com/writing-section/toefl-writing-templates/ Write two full sentences about the lecture in every body paragraph. I think this essay would score about 22 points, but I know you can do better.
Hi Michael, thank you so much for your videos! The reading and the lecture are both discussing the paradox of choice and debating whether it’s a positive or a negative thing. Whilst the author thinks it’s a very useful thing to have many choices to choose from for three specific reasons, the lecturer disputes the claims mentioned in the article. In his opinion, these reasons do not hold water. To begin with, the author claims that having a numerous options to choose from eases people to get the right decision whether they’re choosing a life decision or something un-necessary. In contrast, the lecturer argues that this very exhausting to the mental health as people gets a very long time to decide their preferred option which will result in something known as “decision fatigue”. Moreover, this is going to affect the physical activity of a human being which is called para activity. Secondly, the article notes that having many various choices can encourage progress and innovation. For instance, this will make a very competitive market which is always trying to reach the customer satisfaction. The professor, however asserts that it’s all about quality not quantity. In his point of view, having too many choices will automatically lower the quality of the products which will then affect the innovation and worsen the services anyone seeks for. Finally, the reading puts forth the idea that this improves the human personal skills by being very open minded to be able to see the differences between all the products and creates his own image about a certain product to choose it. Moreover, it’ going to build a very decisive well strong personality. On the other hand, the instructor posits that this will negatively affect people’s attitude by being lazy to think about any new ideas as they have almost all the choices. Furthermore, they won’t search for any alternatives so, they won’t change or develop and this will hinder their success and won’t create any competitive environment as no one is going to be special or having a different mindset.
Use the simple present tense for actions done by the author and lecturer. That means you should use "both discuss" instead of "are both discussing." Meanwhile, I can see grammar and language use mistakes in most of your sentences. Try something like "Grammarly" to get feedback on the mistakes you make most frequently. I think this essay would score 22 or 23 points, but I bet you can do better.
Hello, here is my essay. Thank you for your videos. The lecturer is for paradox of choice, the idea that having too many options to choose is disadvantageous, while the reading passage insisted that having too many options is actually a good thing. The lecturer makes his argument from the following three points: negative effect to our mental, to the marketplace, and the promotion to our laziness. First of all, the lecturer mentioned that having too many options to choose can be mentally exhausting for people, requiring enormous time to decide and even lead to a decision-fatigue, which can result in reduced productivity, while the reading passage insisted that having many options to choose enables them to meet better needs or preference and that they can make a decision without any regrets. Second, the lecturer also implied that there would be a lot more poor-quality product if there is many options since companies just try to make benefits rather than increasing the quality, although the reading passage stated that having various kinds of products promote people to seek out new better alternatives, which can help improve innovation and progress. Finally, the lecturer warned that having too many options to choose would make people lazier. He believes that if there is already enough options to choose, people are less likely to seek new or better alternative while the reading passage insisted that the act of choosing from many options can result in the people’s personal growth and development as an individual, because they need to review their value and priorities when choosing. In conclusion, the lecturer is mainly believes that having too many options to choose is rather harmful mainly because of its effect on people’s life, while the reading passage listed advantages of it including the societal reason.
I think this one would score about 19 points. You really ought to start each body paragraph by summarizing the reading. Then summarize the lecture. Meanwhile, don't waste your time writing a conclusion.
i love this channel it is really beneficial for us this is my writing the article and the lecture are both about the paradox of taking a choice. When we are in a situation where we have to make a choice between things, we may face an obstacle of choosing the right decision. While The author of the article argues that having too many choices is more beneficial for us because it can make our lives easier and better and it can advertise to people for more progress and more innovation leading to personal growth. In contrast, the lecturer disputes these claims by mentioning that having too many choices could be mentally exhausting. First of all, according to the reading, the fact that we have nowadays more choices to choose from is actually good for us because it makes our lives easier and simpler; moreover, we are less likely to regret what we chose. This argument is challenged by the lecturer, he claims that too many choices can lead to mental exhaustion and decision fatigue, which will eventually lead to a low level of productivity and creativity. Secondly, the author of the article suggests that many choices can be a sign of innovation and progress because people always want to search for alternatives and better choices. In contrast, the lecturer asserts that a lot of choices in the market isn’t always a sign for innovation and progress, but a sign for market mediocrity. Finally, the author puts forth the idea that many choices can elevate our personal growth through assessing a wide range of options. To be more specific, the author contends that we can learn more about us and our taste of things. On the contrary, the lecturer’s stance is that laziness is the only result for having many choices because it can lead to less change in our personal and professional lives.
There are a lot of capitalization errors here. Be careful. They aren't a BIG deal, but they will hurt you a bit. Overall, I think this one would score about 24 points.
Hi Michael. Thank you for your videos. Here is my essay: The reading passage and the lecture are both about the paradox of choice, which is about how we react when there are many options, and we have to make a decision. The text argues that it has a positive impact on society while the professor casts doubt that. First, the reading passage proposes that the existence of a diversity of different products allows us to choose the option that fits us better according to our needs, so this may not generate a sense of regret. However, the speaker contradicts this idea arguing that this ample variety could be mentally exhausting, because people spend a lot of time evaluating the options, resulting in fatigue that can reduce productivity. Second, the text says that diversity can improve innovation, progress, and competition, due to companies will want to create better products. Nevertheless, the professor expresses that this panorama could produce a market of products of bad quality because the companies will be only worried about having different products and not making better the available. Finally, the reading passage affirms that the diversity of products helps people in their personal growth and development since it facilitates learning about us and defines our values and priorities. In contrast, the speaker states that this scenario could lead to conformism, given that people will not look for better alternatives, instead they going to decide not to change, which can influence their success.
This is a good essay, but somewhat too short. Try to write TWO sentences about the lecture in every body paragraph. I think this one would score about 24 points, but I bet you can do much better.
hello , thanks for the video . this is my essay : The passage and the lecture are about a concept called Paradox of Choice . While the author of the reading advocates for the idea that having a lot of options at our disposal to choose from is beneficial for us , the lecturer thinks that its downsides outweigh the upsides . Firstly , the passage argues that having a lot of options to choose from can lead people to make better decisions and find what they are looking for . On the other hand , the lecturer asserts that the process of searching for the best option among a plethora of choices can be extremely exhausting and lead to the occurrence of a phenomenon called decision fatigue . Secondly , the author notes that the tendency toward creating multiple options for consumers by companies , results in emergence of innovation and also creates competition between businesses which is beneficial for society in general .The lecturer , however , disputes this idea by highlighting the fact that this approach will encourage companies to create a wide variety of products with mediocre or low qualities . In contrast , If they focus on improving the quality of their existing products and do not try to make new ones , it would be a significantly better approach . Lastly , the author thinks that having to choose between several options can function as an exercise in decision making , resulting in strengthening mental capabilities of people but the lecturer challenges this idea as well . He states that people who have a lot of options to choose from are less likely to embrace change and tend to be more resilient against the transformation of the way they conduct their life . In other words , they are reluctant to search for better options and tend to be lazy and stagnant in their lives .
Your grammar is great, but I fear that your essay is a bit short on details. Can you include more content from the reading and lecture? Your first body paragraph is especially skimpy.
The reading and the lecture are both about the phenomenon of a lot of choices in our lives. The author of the reading believes that having better options is a big advantage. The lecturer challenges the statements made by the author. He is of the opinion that in fact having many options is disadvantage and the points made by the author of the reading are incorrect. First of all, the author suggests that vast diversity of products helps people to find the best that matches their preferences. It is mentioned that you are less likely to regret your choice if there is big range of choices. This argument is challenged by the lecturer. He says that having many options takes your mental resources and as a result you are exhausted. Furthermore, he argues that many options may cause decision fatigue. Secondly, the writer contends that availability to have different choices provokes innovation and progress in people. The article notes that if people have many options to choose from, they are more tend to look for new alternatives. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by asserting that nowadays there are poor quality products out there, hence diversity of choices means that you have better chance of getting product that doesn’t have good quality. Finally, it is stated in the article that more choices helps us grow personally and develop ourselves. The author claims that diversity provokes thinking in us, therefore we may start thinking deeply about values and priorities in our life. The lecturer, on the other hand posits that this phenomenon causes laziness in the people. He puts forth the idea that people are unlikely to seek for new opportunities when they have to choose from tremendous number of options.
Hi, Michael! Trying to improve from your feedbacks :) Here is my essay. The lecture and the reading both discuss a phenomenon known as the paradox of choice, which is having too many options to choose from. The article explores the benefits of living in a world with a large range of possibilities. However, the lecturer provides reasons why this situation could become a bad thing. According to the reading, if we have a lot of choices, it is more likely that we will find the product that will fit our needs the best. The article mentions that a wide range of options could result in a better well-being. The lecturer, on the other hand, explores the bad consequences of having hundreds of options. He goes on to explain that this wide variety of goods and services can be mentally exhausting for humans, because we have to spend a big effort figuring out the best product. As a result, people end up having decision fatigue, which can lower our productivity in the long run. Secondly, the article points out the benefits of this wide range of possibilities on the innovation process. This is because when people have many options, firms tend to seek the best alternative to fit their consumer needs and preferences. The lecturer disputes the claims made in the text. He explains that boosting the number of different products available can be a bad thing. Actually, firms are more likely to invest their time trying new goods and services, but without increasing their quality. In consequence, society can end up having poor quality products. Finally, the article explores the fact that people could think more about their own priorities, since they have many options available. As a result, people would end up learning more about themselves and their needs. In contrast, the lecturer argues that the big variety of choices could lead to complacency and laziness, since people could become comfortable with what they already have. As a result, they would be less likely to see better options for themselves. The lecturer points out that in the long run it could end up in a situation where people are unable to make changes.
The decision paradox is the ideia that having too many options to choose from can be a negative thing. Both the author and the lecturer discuss this indagation. The reading passage presents three motives that support the theory that having many options is beneficial. Oppositely, the lecture challenges that idea and introduces the flaws and limitations for each one of those motives. First of all, the writer states that having a plenty of options helps people find the best match while shopping. Next, he increments that idea by explaining that if a person has a bunch of products to compare to each other, he will be able to choose the best option for himself. Conversely, the speaker argues that having this can be tiresome. In addition to that, he says that the process of trying to find the best choice can lead to decision fatigue, a situation where the one would not be able to identify the best option since he will be too tired. Secondly, the text claims that the decision paradox can estimulate progress, since the consumer would be able to choose the best product among the given options, the remaining products would be forced to improve themselves to be selected on the future. On the other hand, the listening rebuts this claims with the argument that this would not happen and that the market would be full of bad products. Lastly, the reading remarks that the decision paradox can help people's personal growth and development. Next, he clarifies that chain of tought by explaning that having to choose among a plenty of options would force a person to reflect about what is important to him and thus he would know more about himself. In contrast, the professor disagrees with that because he believes that in real life people are lazy and the situation of having more options to choose from would not cause a pressure on them. Thererfore, people would not reflect about themselves while trying to find the best product and they will be less likely to change.
I think this one would score about 22 points. Your details are great, but there are some grammar mistakes. You also show a tendency to use fancy words that make it hard to follow your idas (like "he increments that idea"). Try to be clear and concise!
This channel is so valuable, thank you. It would be great if you can review and score my integrated essay.Thank you. The article and the lecture are both about the paradox of choice. While the author of the article argues that having many options to choose from is good, the lecturer disputes the claims presented in the article. His position is that the paradox of choice is not beneficial. According to the reading the existence of a large variety of options helps people to find products and services that fit their needs best. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He claims that choosing between many options is mentally exhausting. Additionally, he points out that people have to spend time and effort to evaluate all the options and this leads to decision fatigue and a decreasing productivity. Secondly, the author suggests many options increase innovation. In the article, it is said that if there are already many options available, the people are used to products that fit their needs very well and therefore they always seek for better alternatives. The lecturer, however, asserts that many companies only focus on the creation of new products instead of increasing the quality of products. Therefore there is only a large variety of mediocre products in the end. Finally, the author puts forth the idea that many options lead to personal growth. The author contends that people learn about themselves because in order to make a decision between many products, people to think about their values. In contrast, the lecturer’s stance is that if there are already enough good options available, there is no motivation to develop new things and therefore it leads to complacency and laziness.
The reading and the lecture talk about the paradox of choice. While the author claim that paradox of choice is a very beneficial for the people, the lecturer refutes this, saying its has a lot of negative impact on people mental and social well being. First of all, the author mentions that choosing from large array of good and service helps to meet our need in a perfect manner, leaving us with no regrets. However, the lecturer argues this by saying it will be a mentally exhausting task to choose from a large options, and it will leads us to decision fatigue. Moreover, he says that deteriorates our time and effort. In addition, the author points out that in order to prove these variety of options to the public, companies have to focus on developing new products, which ultimately promote innovation and progress. But, the lecturer refutes this idea. He says the companies will eventually focus of creating a lot of products of fine quality, which then covers the market with full of mediocre products. So, there not be any innovations. Finally, the author mentions that choosing from multiple choices will help to develop our personal growth. In addition, he says it will make us realize our own values and priority and make us self-aware and creative in decision making. Nonetheless, the lecturers state that it will make us lazy as we have many choices so, we are less likely to go for better alternatives. According to the lecturer, if we became like this and don’t change our attitude towards choosing products, we will lose our priority in our life. There will be no reason for success.
I think this one would score about 21 points. There are a lot of little errors here, like: "beneficial for the people" (should be "beneficial for people") "good and service" (should be "goods and services") "a large options" (should be "a large number of options") There are more, but I think you get the point. Focus on grammar and language use as you continue to prepare for the test.
The article and the lecture both were about paradox of choice. The writer mentions that having many choice can be beneficial for many reasons, whilst the lecturer disagreed and give three reasons to support his point of view. Firstly, the writer claims that having more choices help us to find better services according to our prefereces. However, the lecturer oppose this view by saying that having too many options to chooce can be mentally exhuasting. We have to spend too much time and energy to just chose one thing. If this happens too often then this can lead to mental futigue and decrease our overall productivity. Secondly, the writre points out that having many choices can lead to innovation and progress. Additionally, people will try new things if they have many things to choose, which can force the companies and individuals to create new things. However, the lecture mentioned that having many options open to choose can might decrease quality of products because companies will fouce on making new things rather than focusing on quality of goods and services. Lastly, The writer says that having many choice can increase personal growth; individuals can learn about themselves by thinking about choices and their priorities. The lecturer question this point by stating that it can make people more lazy and complaining. Individuals might not try new thing just because they have many options to choose. For example, no change in job if there are many jobs to do.
This one would probably score about 19 points. There are a lot of basic grammar errors like "the lecturer oppose this view" and "which can force the companies and individuals." Focus on reducing your error rate as much as possible!
Hi. Here is my essay: Both the reading and the lecture are about the paradox of choices, a theory that states that the availability of many choices can lead to anxiety and indecision. While the reading disagrees with the paradox of choice, the lecturer casts doubt on the reading by providing reasons. Firstly, according to the reading, having many choices helps people pick the products that best fulfill their needs. However, the lecturer disputes this point and says that having too many choices can be mentally exhausting, and people might experience decision fatigue. This reduces the decision-making capability of individuals and also reduces productivity. Secondly, the reading claims that having many options for the same product can promote innovation and progress. This further encourages companies to come up with new and better products that cater to the needs of people in the best way. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument. He says that in such a case companies will stop monitoring the quality of their products. Instead of improving the quality of existing products, companies will start focusing on creating new low-quality products. It will deter innovation and progress. Finally, the reading states that having many choices helps people think deeply about their needs and helps them understand their requirements better. It will help them in their personal growth and development. On the other hand, the lecturer says that too many choices will cause laziness in people. Instead of seeking out better products/opportunities, they will settle with what they currently have. It will deter growth in their personal life and jobs. In conclusion, the lecturer casts doubt on all the points made in the reading. Please provide your comments on it.
This is a solid essay. I think it would score about 26 points. There are just a few minor grammar and language use errors that might hurt you. Don't use the "/" like you did. Use real words. Note that you don't need to write a conclusion.
Hi. Here is my essay. Could I get some feedback (score range)? There has been a debate about some consequences related to a phenomenon called the paradox of choice which is the idea of feeling anxiety and indecision because we have too many options to choose. More specifically, the writer believed, however, that it is good having a lot of options to select. In contrast, the speaker challenged this asseveration for several reasons which I will detail in the following paragraphs. First of all, the author states that it is better to have a big number of options because we would have the opportunity to find goods and services that fit our preferences. Moreover, the author claims that we could not have any regret in our choices thanks to these options. In that regard, the lecturer totally disagrees with that idea because it is relevant to consider that we could suffer a concept called mental exhausting. Actually, he explains that we can feel mental decision fatigue and, as a result, produce less productivity. Second, according to the article, this tremendous number of options would promote innovation and progress. Therefore, the writer suggests that we would try to seek out new and better alternatives. On the other hand, the lecturer’s stance is against that idea due to the fact the companies have this strategy just in order to increase their profits. For instance, the professor says that is the reason we have mediocre or poor products in the market. In third place, the writer divulges that this phenomenon could develop our personal growth. We would become more self-aware, in words of the writer. Nonetheless, the recording emphatically disagrees with this idea because the consequences are completely different. We would tend to be lazy. In that point, the professors demurs this idea because we will not want to look for better alternatives because now we have a vast of options. To sum up, both hold different ideas and perspectives about the consequences of the phenomenon called the paradox of choice.
Hi can you please check this answer and let me know where should i improve myself and score also . And please tell me the scoring pattern of the toefl writing pattern. In last exam i got 18 in the writting section but i want to score more than 26. My next exam is on next week. The article introduce the topic of paradox of choice. The paradox of choice meaning is having more than one options and writer says that this is good thing to have multiple options for their growth and environment. The lecturer totally disagree with this, he says that this is bad idea because it will impact on the human directly , it will make confusing character than a stable one due to the multiple options. First, the author says that, It is for people to having lots of options because , it will be beneficial to them to find new opportunies like job, car or other thing which they want in life , it will easy to opt out for that and there will be no regret to humans .The professor believes there are flaws in the author position. He contends that it will reduce the productibility. He goes on to say That this thing will make man very poor in desicion making, it will also not only harmful for society but also for future genertion. According to the writer, This can be made different type of sources where man can do progress and innnovative things .this will help to make new ideas and innovatives or new challenges to the companies to make multiple options for their multiple chioces . The speaker on other hand , point out that this will reduce the quality of product due to increasing number of choices , and they will make poor quality of products. In addition to that the reading passage notes that, this will boost the chances of growth and development , due to deep thinking about the their values and priorities. however by exploring number of choice will get to know what is reallly important for us , this will fruitful for our personal growth and also for self aware and better decisions which will promote our thoughts, the lecturer rebutes this argument. He says that, People will become very lazy and comfortable due to having multiple choices , it will be very hard to find better objectives in their life , this wont be able to play important role in their life. You can see the author and lecture hold very different views n the topic.
Yeah, I think this one would also score about 18 points. Your details are good but there are multiple grammar and language use errors in just about every sentence.
The author of the reading passage and the lecturer are both took about the paradox of choice. Paradox of choice means having too much options to choose from. The author believes positively about the topic .on the other hand the lecturer says that it is bad for people. To began with, the author of the reading passage believes that having so many choices is great for people, and it has benefits. For example, it helps people find the best choice that fits their needs. Also, it promotes innovation and progress. Moreover, it raises personal growth and evolution. Secondly , the lecturer in contrast thinks that having many choices can lead to many problems. Paradox of choice can lead to mental exhaustion such as depression and decision fatigue. Also ,it causes laziness and inability to make right decisions . To sum up, the author and the lecturer have different opinions about the paradox of choice. is this structure ok ? I try as much as I can to write this essay 🙂. Approximately how much do you rate me?
Heyy!! I’m from India and I’ll be taking my toefl test next week. Im really worried about the writing section 🥺. Can I please know the average score for Indians in toefl.This is my sample response: The reading and the lecture discusses whether or not having a lot of choices is a blessing or a curse. The author claims that having enormous choices is good while the lecturer casts doubts on the author’s claim. First, the author argues that having too many options can help people find goods and services that best fits their needs. He also points out that since there are a lot of options to choose from, the people will no longer have to content with what is available. The lecturer had a different point of view and he argues that having too many choices can be mentally exhausting and that it can consume a plenty of their time comparing and evaluating the products. Moreover, he feels that this can lead to decision fatigue which has the potential to reduce productivity. Second, the author asserts that the availability of different choices can promote innovation and progress. He also pointed out that people are more likely to seek out new and better alternatives when there are too many options to choose from. This contradicts the lecture which states that since people seek for too many choices, the companies will invent large quantities of products, compromising their quality. Third, the author states that large number of options can improve personal growth and development as it make us self aware of our needs. He points out that by evaluating a wide range of options, we can understand what finds best for us. In contrast, the lecturer argues that availability of too many options can create laziness in people.
Your introduction is a bit weak. Consider using my template for this task. Actually, the template might help a bit with your body paragraphs as well. Here's a link: www.toeflresources.com/writing-section/toefl-writing-templates/
Both reading passage and lecture focus on paradox of choice. It means when people too many options, they can feel anxiety and indecision. This can effect mental health badly. According to author having multiple choices is not a bad thing. However lecturer opposes the ideas mentioned in the passage. Professor thinks that paradox of choice is not good for people. He illustrates why paradox of choice is not good in 3 reasons. Firstly, according to reading passage having number of choices helps people to find goods and services that best fit them. On the other hand, lecturer disagree with that idea. Lecturer explains that when people have a lot of choices this cause mental exhaustion. Because if they have multiple choices then they will need more time to compare and evaluate. This leads people to decision fatique and this can really decrease productivity among people. Secondly, while author suggests different choices make tendency on companies to be more innovative, lecturer opposes that idea. According to him, it is completely opposite because when companies have huge amount of choices they are not improving their products or services because they selling poor quality services because they know they will sel it anyway. Lastly, passage makes point about a lot of choices allows people to be more personally grow and develop themselves. However, in the lecture, lecturer makes good point that if people have too many choices they will be lazy. Because people less likely to seek better choices when they stick to one. They never change it. In this way they will be unsuccesful every field of their life. Because the main thing what brings success is the change. In conclusion, author and the lecturer have different ideas about paradox of choice. Professor discuss why paradox of choice it is not good for people because it is mentally exhausting, companies not improving their services and many choice brings laziness.
I think this one would score about 19 points. There are multiple grammar and language use errors in just about every sentence. Consider submitting your work to something like Grammarly to learn about the sorts of mistakes you make most frequently.
The passage and the lecture compare and contrast the advantages and disadvantages of the paradox of choice,the idea of having multiple options to choose from. Firstly the lecture disagrees with the lecture that suggests that the idea helps individuals find goods and services that best fit their preferences.He argues that the idea could actually lead to mental exhaustion as people will end up spending so much time comparing and contrasting goods and services before they finally make a decision. In addition the reading suggests that having multiple options promotes development and innovation since companies will be working to beat their competitors.This might not necessarily be the case in reality because we see that companies will instead focus on quantity of goods and services hence hindering advancement in quality with time. Furthermore the lecture points out to us that the paradox of choice leads to complacency.People will less likely seek out better services and goods which counters the thought that abundance of choice would lead to increased personal growth and development . Paradox of choice will not lead to self awareness and better decision making. Therefore in conclusion,the lecture and passage have strong contradicting points about the paradox of choice that companies should examine before implementing the phenomenon.
@@Toeflresources The reading and the lecture are about the paradox of choice.This is the idea that having too many options to choose from is a bad thing for us.The writer of the article is in support of the idea while on the other hand the lecturer analyzes and provides reasons for his thoughts. First of all, according to the essay, when people are presented with many goods and services they will have a better chance of finding what fits their needs and preferences thus they are less likely to regret their decisions.The professor disputes this thought when he says that people tend to get mentally exhausted when they take too much time comparing and evaluating products and services.This leads to decision fatigue hence consumers end up less capable to make good choices and less productive as the day goes by. Secondly, the writer of the reading believes that paradox of choice leads to innovation and progress since companies will continuously create new products and services to compete in the market.However, the lecturer challenges this point too when he states that with paradox of choice companies end up concentrating on quantity rather than quality.As a result we the market is flooded with mediocre products and services . Lastly, but not least, the author believes that variety of services and goods will lead to personal growth and development.When faced with making choice,people will become self aware of their values and priorities hence they make better decisions.In contrast, the lecture believes that people become lazy and complacent when presented with many options.They are less likely to seek out better products and services and therefore they will not succeed in their personal lives and careers.
The article and the lecture are both about the paradox of choice. While the author of the article argues that it is a beneficial idea to have a lot of options to choose from, the lecturer disputes the claims presented in the article. According to the reading by having lots of choices a person can easily choose products that fulfill their need. The article mentions that by having a variety of choices a person has the chance to not be disappointed with the decision. this specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. he claims that having a range of life options can bring many problems such as decision fatigue and reduced productivity. additionally, he points out through the time the person facing and experiencing mental exhaustion. Secondly, the author suggests that having the freedom to choose from lots of options causes nobility and progress. In the article, it is said that one of this situation's advantages can bring the motivation to create and substitute ideas. the lecturer, however, asserts that the abundance of goods and options can lead to having full of poor quality. As a result, the only thing that would matter is to increase profit rather than the quality. Finally, the author puts forth the idea that considering the value of having lots of options involves raising self-awareness and development.in contrast, the lecturer Stans that laziness is the effect of these choices. he notes that it leads to losing new opportunities .thus, the chances of being successful in life and work will decrease. thank you so much for all of your efforts and kindness.
I think this one would score about 22 or 23 points. You need a little more detail in the last body paragraph. Also, you need to start every sentence with a capital letter!
The article and the lecture both deal with advantages and disadvantages of having an enormous scope of options to choose. Whilst the author of the article thinks that there are several credible factors which can demonstrate its usefulness for three specific reasons, the lecturer opposes the author’s claims. In his opinion, its adverse side is dominant. First, the author claims that in the contemporary world people are able to meet their needs in the way that is the most suitable for them. Furthermore, it is stated in the article that they are prone to make reasonable decisions and aware of what they really need and what they do not. In contrast, the lecturer argues that making choices may require a lot of time and energy, as a result, people commence to be exhausted and more aggressive. Additionally, he maintains that people’s desire to make any decisions goes down, since they associate it with feeling anxiety. Second, the author mentions that the tremendous varieties of options successfully lead to the improvement of society. On top of that he adds that people are prone to take advantage of diverse things and think up new ones. However, the lecturer calls this argument into question by saying that it contributes to the inflating of quantity instead of quality. Further, he remarks that people would probably think that making a vast range of something is better than refining it. Finally, the author asserts that having diverse options to choose lead to the personal improvement. In fact, people realize their desires and follow toward them , and it is all due to the evaluating all available options. As opposed to the author, the lecturer holds that most of them commence to be unconscious, since they are surrounded by enormous range of options and they are just not able to make reasonable decisions. He highlights that people avoid alterations and personal development is in stuck.
I think this one would score about 23 or 24 points. It has a strong start, but your grammar and language use are weak in the second half, especially the third body paragraph.
Hello Michael. Here's my take on the essay. Please rate it and provide suggestions. Thank you. The article and the lecture both discuss about the paradox of choice. The author feels that having many options can have positive impacts; the author provides three reasons to support his claims. However, the lecturer challenges the claims made by the author. His position is that the reasons provided by the author in the article are faulty and apply to only a few individuals. First, the author states that with an array of options available, people can select what is best for them. Furthermore, he mentions that with such availability people won’t regret with their choices. In contrast, the author argues that instead of helping people make the best choices, such availability can cause mental exhaustion. On top of that, comparing and evaluating products can take a long time and can be arduous for the body, causing a tendency named decision fatigue. Thus, this mental toll can decrease the productivity of people. Second, the lecturer posits that innovation and progress are promoted by the availability of a myriad of choices. Moreover, people living in a world where choices are limited, are satisfied with what they have and don’t seek newer and better alternatives. Nevertheless, the lecturer calls the argument of the author into question by stating that the providence of a plethora of choices is actually a market strategy; instead of providing quality products, the market settles the people with different choices. Additionally, thus, the mediocracy and poor quality of goods and products tend to lower innovation and creativity. Finally, the author asserts that many choices help in the promotion of growth and development. Moreover, the choices challenge an individual to think critically about his values and priorities. But, the lecturer opposes this assertion made by the author by mentioning that the variety of choices creates a sense of complacency and laziness in individuals. On top of that, because of the choices, we may never change; if we can’t change then we can’t obtain success whether it’s in personal life or in professional life.
Please can you correct my essay Both the reading and the lecture deal with the idea of paradox of choice, which is basically having more than one choice. While the author believes that too many options is great, the lecturer disagrees and he is quick to point out that there are someserious flawsin the writer's claims. first and foremost, the reading claims that having variety of choices can help people to find a perfect fit. This means that they will always have the opportunity to match with their need. However, the professor challenges this point. He believes that this phenomena can render ones mind really tired and fatigued since, he will have to deal with various options which means alot of time to be spent on each. So in another words, a person will be less capable of improving. Next, the writer argues that people will improve and progress due to the fact that there is a bunch of options. Inthe other hand companies will try to provide and seek better alternatives inorder to be with the flow. In contrary, the professor is in a firm opposition to this belief, he asserts that due to the sake of flooding the market with options, the businesses will forget about the quality. Moreover, he thinks that they will reach a point where markets will befull of bad quality product , so tapering down the innovation progress. Last but not least,while the reading claims that the phenomena provide the person a deep understanding for his slelf and gives him the opportunity to grow. The listening contracts this idea, he assumes that due to the presence of many options, a person might settle down and is less likely to try to change. He continues to say that this will make people unwilling to change and might increase the probability of failure.
I think this one would score about 23 points. I want a little more detail from the reading. You also need to reduce your grammar error rate somewhat. Consider using something like "Grammarly" to learn about your most common errors.
The reading and the lecture debate the pros and the cons of the idea of having too many options to choose from. The author of the reading passage supports this idea whereas the lecturer points out that this phenomenon could results in anxiety and he also states several reasons why this is a bad idea. To begin with, the author believes that having several options helps people to find things that meet their needs and preferences so that they do not have to regret their choice. The lecturer oppose this by claiming that, people spending an enormous time and effort to choose what they want can lead to mental exhaustion. In addition to that he states that it can cause a condition called decision fatigue where one is less capable of making good decision. Secondly, the writer believes that having many alternatives can result in increased innovation and progress, as companies try to create new products and services to cope with the competition. To oppose this claim the lecturer contends that, by giving so many alternatives, the quality of the product can be compromised. He goes on to say that this can be a hindrance to innovation and progression. Finally, the author brings his claims to a close by saying that this phenomenon can increase growth and development as it challenges people to think deeply about their values and priorities. However, the lecturer rebuts this claim, by stating that this could make people lazy, as some of the people who are unable to change do not seek other alternatives. He also states that this can be an obstacle to personnel success.
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Great channel. here is my essay:
The reading passage and the lecture are about the paradox of choice. While the author of the article believes having multiple options available could be positive, at the same time he provides and provides several reasons, the lecturer casts doubts on the statements in the article. He claims that this paradox is very well documented, and challenges each of the writer’s points.
First, the article remarks that, nowadays, the vast number of options available contributes to make our life easier. Also, it is outlined that the more choices we have, the more likely it is to find exactly what we are looking for and, thus, the less likely to regret our decision. The lecturer, however, disagrees with this viewpoint. He points out that the abundance of choices could be exhausting and make us waste a lot of time in the process of choosing the right option. This decision-making process could lead to what is called ‘desicion fatigue’. After this, our productivity levels drops and the choices we make tend to be poorer.
Secondly, the author notes innovation and progress is boost by the possibility of having many choices. Having said so, he says that companies and individuals are encouraged to look for new ideas in order to stand out from the competition. The lecturer believes there are flaws in the writer’s argument and holds he feels in a different way. He argues that, currently, companies tend to fill the market with different products and services. Conversely, they do not focus on quality, but quantity. As a result, there are numerous mediocre products and services in our society.
Finally, another reason why the writer feels it is positive to have a wide range of possibilities is because it increases our personal growth and development. This is based on the fact that, while thinking deeply about our likings and priorities, we learn more about ourselves. The professor in the listening remarks the true outcome is quite the opposite. He says that, having multiple choices make us lazy and lead us to prefer always the same, without even looking or thinking about a change. When we extrapolate this behavior to our jobs and personal life, this results in failure.
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This is solid. Really solid. I think it would score about 28 points. Some of your word choices are slightly unidiomatic and awkward but I don't think that will hurt you very much.
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Here is my essay:
The reading and the lecture are both about a concept called “paradox of choice”, this means having too many options to choose from. The author feels that this can have good consequences regarding finding the best fit for our needs and preferences, fostering innovation and progress within the offerents and promoting personal growth and development. On the other hand, the lecturer doesn’t believe that having too many options have positive consequences.
First of all, the author states that having a vast array of products and services available to choose from can help us to find the best fit for our needs and preferences. According to the article, with a lot of options we are less likely to regret our decision. The lecturer challenges this argument. He claims that this complicates the decision-making process, making it exhausting as it requires more time and effort. Additionally, he points out that it can lead to a phenomenon called decision fatigue, that involves taking bad decisions and can even affect productivity.
Secondly, the author suggests that having many different choices fosters innovation and progress. The article notes that it forces companies to differentiate themselves offering new and better alternatives. The lecturer, however, asserts that in this way companies focus on having a variety options, rather on the quality of them. He goes on to say that this hinder progress as it results in mediocre and poor quality products and services.
Finally, the author puts forth the idea that having many options available contributes to our personal growth and development. The author contends that it makes us learn from ourselves by being aware of our values and priorities in the decision-making process. In contrast, the lecturer stance is that many options may increase our complacency and laziness. He says that eventually people get tired of finding new and better alternatives, affecting our job’s and personal life’s decisions.
Excellent video! Here it is mine eassy:
In this set of material, the author says that to have a lot of choices in our lives is advantageous and it is a good thing. However, the lecturer says that to have a lot of choices in our lives is not an advantageous, it is actually a bad thing that can cause anxiety and indecision because we need to do a lot of research to make a decision.
First, the author says having a large number of options helps people to find goods and services that best fit their needs and preferences. However, the lecturer says that having a large number of options can be exhausting and fatigues, because people take a lot of time to evaluate, compare and it is toxic to do that. It also affects our capacity of to be sure and decrease our productivity.
Second, the author says that the availability of many different choices can promote innovation and progress. However, the lecturer says that companies create many products and services, but the quality is poor, and company’s profit is high.
Finally, the author says that having many choices increases our personal growth and development. However, the lecturer says that having many choices increases our laziness, we can be stuck when we do have many options. It also can decrease our personal growth and development, to achieve success can be harder.
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Love this channel. Thank you so much for your videos. here is my essay.
The article introduces the topic of Paradox of choice which means when there are too many options to choose from it can lead to indecision and anxiety. The writer says, it's good to have an increased number of choices as you can find the perfect match you want whether it’s a car, house, phone etc. The lecturer however disagrees with the idea and counter attacks with each claim in the reading passage.
First of all the author describes that when we have more choices it is more likely to find things that suits your style most and meets your needs. Whereas professor mentions this could lead to metal exhaustion as one has to spend more time researching about available options to best suit his/her needs. This can lead to decreased capacity to make ideal decisions and productivity.
According to the writer, when there are more options available there is more chance of innovation and progress as different companies will try to make more products to attract more customers. Professor believes flows in this thinking as it can lead to poor quality of products over time in order to increase production and make benefit for companies. This can lead to break markets as customers would stop buying such products over time.
Also reading paragraph notes Paradox of choice can increase personal growth and development as it makes one think deeper about their values and priorities. On the other hand the lecturer argues that this can lead to laziness over time due to increased options. One tends to stick with the product they like more and fewer changes may lead to increased chance of growth.
As we can clearly see, the lecturer and author hold very different views on this phenomenon called Paradox of choice.
I think this one would score about 20 points. Try to avoid sentence fragments like "Whereas professor mentions this could lead to metal exhaustion as one has to spend more time researching about available options to best suit his/her needs."
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In the reading excerpt, the author introduces the topic of Paradox of Choice, which is a concept to imply that the idea of having several options in between to choose has benefits. The lecturer disagrees. He says that having too many options may cause mental conflicts in people.
Firstly, the author states that when people have many options to choose, they might end up finding goods and services that fit better according to their necessities. The lecturer believes there are flaws in the author's opinion. He says that having several options in between to choose, instead of helping people, it might make them feel mentally exhausted, leading them to experience what is known as "decision fatigue".
Secondly, the author says that the higher the availability of options is, the better the level of both innovation and progress becomes, because people feel challenged to create original things. However, the lecturer states that this point is not certainly true. He says that this huge amount of options might imply mediocre and low quality products, which are not convenient to consumers.
Thirdly, the author mentions another advantage of having to choose between a lot of options. He says that it will lead people to increase their personal growth and development, because of all the time they will spend on thinking about what is really good for them, according to their values and priorities, increasing people's self aware and confident. On the contrary, the professor says that as people are aware of the availability of a huge diversity of options, they may not seek for better options and will conform with the available products. This behavior, he says, will not make people feel attracted to change in any aspect of their life, because of this feeling of comfomity.
To sum up, the author and the lecturer hold very different views about the concept of Paradox of choice.
I think this one would score about 21 points. Your details are good, but there are a lot of grammar and language use errors in the body paragraphs. You need to reduce your error rate!
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Hello Michael. Thank you for your help. Here is my essay.
The author of the reading and the lecturer both discuss about paradox of choice. This term briefly means that having many options could be destructive for people. The author and lecturer argues whether paradox of choice in other words, having variety of alternatives is beneficial or not.
To start with, the author thinks that having too many options is helpful for people for discovering their needs. Moreover, by doing so people could find the best fit for themselves. The lecturer on the other hand, notes that paradox of choice is insufficient because searching for the perfect choice and pressure of making the best choice is exhausting menthally. Additionally, it is time consuming process and it could reduce productivity.
Secondly, the author suggests having many options increase the quality of products or even motivate people create new ones. Also, having that much alternatives will be a motivation for individuals for looking for the latest goods and better alternatives. On the contrary, the professor says that focusing other alternatives could only decrease the quality and innovations.
Finally, the reading mentions that having variety of choices is a way of personal improvement. The the reason for that is while trying to find what they need, people can start to think deeply about their moral values and it can improve their self knowledge and self awareness. In contrast, the professor mentions that it can create laziness in people. Having too many alternatives anytime could make people so still that they could not even change their jobs.
I think this one would score 22 or 23 points.
Thanks for the video, here's my response:
The article introduces the topic of the paradox of choice. More specifically, the author argues that it's, in fact, really beneficial and provides three advantages about it. The lecturer, on the other hand, disagrees and attacks each of the claims made in the reading.
To begin with, the writer notes that paradox of choice aids in finding our specific needs due to the many options available. This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He is of the opinion that having many choices is time-consuming and takes a lot of effort from us to evaluate each choice, and as a result, a phenomenon called decision fatigue is experienced which is when a person loses their ability to make good decisions and accordingly becomes less productive.
Secondly, the reading passage puts forth the idea that paradox of choice is a way to increase innovation. He goes on to discuss that this encourages companies to come up with new products in order to compete against others. The professor casts doubt on this statement and believes that when companies focus on creating many choices other than the actual quality of their products, this will lead to low-quality choices for customers.
Finally, the author posits that another benefit of paradox of choice is its role in evolution and personal development owing to the fact that it allows us to question what we value and think about whether what we're choosing is suitable or not for us. The speaker believes there are flaws in the author's argument and thinks that this, in fact, will make us lazy because having many options will lead to us not wanting what is better and new. Moreover, he states that this is also going to result in us not wanting to change our opinion.
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This is a fairly strong essay which I think would score about 26 points. There are some minor grammar and language use issues like "so are multiple options" and "the author suggests that multiple choices boost innovation".
@@Toeflresources thank you! So it was not smart to use the word: multiple? I tried to find a synonym for many
In that case it sounded unnatural and awkward. Don't get too obsessed with avoiding repetition. You can use the same word more than once, especially in the integrated task.
Hi, thanks a lot for the video. Here is my essay
Both the reading passage and lecture, talk about a phenomena called paradox of choice which basically says that, too many options to choose from can lead to anxious decisions. The reading passage provides the positive side of paraox of choice and supports it with three reasons. On the other hand, the lecturer disagrees with the reasons given in the passage.
Firstly, the text states that, by having more options means having more goods and services to choose from and it provides an opportunity to make a choice that one would not regret. However, the lecturer feels that, choosing from multiple options is menatlly exhausting. It requires a lot of time and effort and can eventually lead to decision fatigue - which is the decrease in ability to make good decisions, and reduction in productivity.
Secondly, the reading asserts that paradox of choice can promote innovation, progress and promotes competition between companies. On the contrary, the professor feels that, it leads to the market being filled with mediocre and low quality products which in turn hinders progress.
Lastly, the passage mentions that paradox of choice fosters personal growth and development and enhances decision making ability. In contrast, the speaker feels that, it promotes laziness. He thinks that having more options will make it less likely for people to seek out better alternatives. People would not bring changes in their life and thus reduce their level of success.
Please let me know where can I improve.
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Don't ever use a comma after "says that." Consider that a general rule for this task.
"anxious decisions" is a bit awkward. I would just say "anxiety when making decisions."
Don't use a comma after "the text states that." Consider using my template to avoid mistakes like this one (and the one above): www.toeflresources.com/writing-section/toefl-writing-templates/
Write two full sentences about the lecture in every body paragraph.
I think this essay would score about 22 points, but I know you can do better.
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The reading and the lecture are both discussing the paradox of choice and debating whether it’s a positive or a negative thing. Whilst the author thinks it’s a very useful thing to have many choices to choose from for three specific reasons, the lecturer disputes the claims mentioned in the article. In his opinion, these reasons do not hold water.
To begin with, the author claims that having a numerous options to choose from eases people to get the right decision whether they’re choosing a life decision or something un-necessary. In contrast, the lecturer argues that this very exhausting to the mental health as people gets a very long time to decide their preferred option which will result in something known as “decision fatigue”. Moreover, this is going to affect the physical activity of a human being which is called para activity.
Secondly, the article notes that having many various choices can encourage progress and innovation. For instance, this will make a very competitive market which is always trying to reach the customer satisfaction. The professor, however asserts that it’s all about quality not quantity. In his point of view, having too many choices will automatically lower the quality of the products which will then affect the innovation and worsen the services anyone seeks for.
Finally, the reading puts forth the idea that this improves the human personal skills by being very open minded to be able to see the differences between all the products and creates his own image about a certain product to choose it. Moreover, it’ going to build a very decisive well strong personality. On the other hand, the instructor posits that this will negatively affect people’s attitude by being lazy to think about any new ideas as they have almost all the choices. Furthermore, they won’t search for any alternatives so, they won’t change or develop and this will hinder their success and won’t create any competitive environment as no one is going to be special or having a different mindset.
Use the simple present tense for actions done by the author and lecturer. That means you should use "both discuss" instead of "are both discussing."
Meanwhile, I can see grammar and language use mistakes in most of your sentences. Try something like "Grammarly" to get feedback on the mistakes you make most frequently. I think this essay would score 22 or 23 points, but I bet you can do better.
Hello, here is my essay. Thank you for your videos.
The lecturer is for paradox of choice, the idea that having too many options to choose is disadvantageous, while the reading passage insisted that having too many options is actually a good thing. The lecturer makes his argument from the following three points: negative effect to our mental, to the marketplace, and the promotion to our laziness.
First of all, the lecturer mentioned that having too many options to choose can be mentally exhausting for people, requiring enormous time to decide and even lead to a decision-fatigue, which can result in reduced productivity, while the reading passage insisted that having many options to choose enables them to meet better needs or preference and that they can make a decision without any regrets.
Second, the lecturer also implied that there would be a lot more poor-quality product if there is many options since companies just try to make benefits rather than increasing the quality, although the reading passage stated that having various kinds of products promote people to seek out new better alternatives, which can help improve innovation and progress.
Finally, the lecturer warned that having too many options to choose would make people lazier. He believes that if there is already enough options to choose, people are less likely to seek new or better alternative while the reading passage insisted that the act of choosing from many options can result in the people’s personal growth and development as an individual, because they need to review their value and priorities when choosing.
In conclusion, the lecturer is mainly believes that having too many options to choose is rather harmful mainly because of its effect on people’s life, while the reading passage listed advantages of it including the societal reason.
I think this one would score about 19 points. You really ought to start each body paragraph by summarizing the reading. Then summarize the lecture. Meanwhile, don't waste your time writing a conclusion.
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this is my writing
the article and the lecture are both about the paradox of taking a choice. When we are in a situation where we have to make a choice between things, we may face an obstacle of choosing the right decision. While The author of the article argues that having too many choices is more beneficial for us because it can make our lives easier and better and it can advertise to people for more progress and more innovation leading to personal growth. In contrast, the lecturer disputes these claims by mentioning that having too many choices could be mentally exhausting.
First of all, according to the reading, the fact that we have nowadays more choices to choose from is actually good for us because it makes our lives easier and simpler; moreover, we are less likely to regret what we chose. This argument is challenged by the lecturer, he claims that too many choices can lead to mental exhaustion and decision fatigue, which will eventually lead to a low level of productivity and creativity.
Secondly, the author of the article suggests that many choices can be a sign of innovation and progress because people always want to search for alternatives and better choices. In contrast, the lecturer asserts that a lot of choices in the market isn’t always a sign for innovation and progress, but a sign for market mediocrity.
Finally, the author puts forth the idea that many choices can elevate our personal growth through assessing a wide range of options. To be more specific, the author contends that we can learn more about us and our taste of things. On the contrary, the lecturer’s stance is that laziness is the only result for having many choices because it can lead to less change in our personal and professional lives.
There are a lot of capitalization errors here. Be careful. They aren't a BIG deal, but they will hurt you a bit. Overall, I think this one would score about 24 points.
Hi Michael. Thank you for your videos. Here is my essay:
The reading passage and the lecture are both about the paradox of choice, which is about how we react when there are many options, and we have to make a decision. The text argues that it has a positive impact on society while the professor casts doubt that.
First, the reading passage proposes that the existence of a diversity of different products allows us to choose the option that fits us better according to our needs, so this may not generate a sense of regret. However, the speaker contradicts this idea arguing that this ample variety could be mentally exhausting, because people spend a lot of time evaluating the options, resulting in fatigue that can reduce productivity.
Second, the text says that diversity can improve innovation, progress, and competition, due to companies will want to create better products. Nevertheless, the professor expresses that this panorama could produce a market of products of bad quality because the companies will be only worried about having different products and not making better the available.
Finally, the reading passage affirms that the diversity of products helps people in their personal growth and development since it facilitates learning about us and defines our values and priorities. In contrast, the speaker states that this scenario could lead to conformism, given that people will not look for better alternatives, instead they going to decide not to change, which can influence their success.
This is a good essay, but somewhat too short. Try to write TWO sentences about the lecture in every body paragraph. I think this one would score about 24 points, but I bet you can do much better.
hello , thanks for the video . this is my essay :
The passage and the lecture are about a concept called Paradox of Choice . While the author of the reading advocates for the idea that having a lot of options at our disposal to choose from is beneficial for us , the lecturer thinks that its downsides outweigh the upsides .
Firstly , the passage argues that having a lot of options to choose from can lead people to make better decisions and find what they are looking for . On the other hand , the lecturer asserts that the process of searching for the best option among a plethora of choices can be extremely exhausting and lead to the occurrence of a phenomenon called decision fatigue .
Secondly , the author notes that the tendency toward creating multiple options for consumers by companies , results in emergence of innovation and also creates competition between businesses which is beneficial for society in general .The lecturer , however , disputes this idea by highlighting the fact that this approach will encourage companies to create a wide variety of products with mediocre or low qualities . In contrast , If they focus on improving the quality of their existing products and do not try to make new ones , it would be a significantly better approach .
Lastly , the author thinks that having to choose between several options can function as an exercise in decision making , resulting in strengthening mental capabilities of people but the lecturer challenges this idea as well . He states that people who have a lot of options to choose from are less likely to embrace change and tend to be more resilient against the transformation of the way they conduct their life . In other words , they are reluctant to search for better options and tend to be lazy and stagnant in their lives .
Your grammar is great, but I fear that your essay is a bit short on details. Can you include more content from the reading and lecture? Your first body paragraph is especially skimpy.
@@Toeflresources thanks for the feedback. can you estimate the score?
Perhaps 23 points.@@UnrealART
The reading and the lecture are both about the phenomenon of a lot of choices in our lives. The author of the reading believes that having better options is a big advantage. The lecturer challenges the statements made by the author. He is of the opinion that in fact having many options is disadvantage and the points made by the author of the reading are incorrect.
First of all, the author suggests that vast diversity of products helps people to find the best that matches their preferences. It is mentioned that you are less likely to regret your choice if there is big range of choices. This argument is challenged by the lecturer. He says that having many options takes your mental resources and as a result you are exhausted. Furthermore, he argues that many options may cause decision fatigue.
Secondly, the writer contends that availability to have different choices provokes innovation and progress in people. The article notes that if people have many options to choose from, they are more tend to look for new alternatives. The lecturer, however, rebuts this by asserting that nowadays there are poor quality products out there, hence diversity of choices means that you have better chance of getting product that doesn’t have good quality.
Finally, it is stated in the article that more choices helps us grow personally and develop ourselves. The author claims that diversity provokes thinking in us, therefore we may start thinking deeply about values and priorities in our life. The lecturer, on the other hand posits that this phenomenon causes laziness in the people. He puts forth the idea that people are unlikely to seek for new opportunities when they have to choose from tremendous number of options.
I think this one would score about 23 or 24 points. Your details are good, but there are some language and grammar use errors.
Hi, Michael! Trying to improve from your feedbacks :) Here is my essay.
The lecture and the reading both discuss a phenomenon known as the paradox of choice, which is having too many options to choose from. The article explores the benefits of living in a world with a large range of possibilities. However, the lecturer provides reasons why this situation could become a bad thing.
According to the reading, if we have a lot of choices, it is more likely that we will find the product that will fit our needs the best. The article mentions that a wide range of options could result in a better well-being. The lecturer, on the other hand, explores the bad consequences of having hundreds of options. He goes on to explain that this wide variety of goods and services can be mentally exhausting for humans, because we have to spend a big effort figuring out the best product. As a result, people end up having decision fatigue, which can lower our productivity in the long run.
Secondly, the article points out the benefits of this wide range of possibilities on the innovation process. This is because when people have many options, firms tend to seek the best alternative to fit their consumer needs and preferences. The lecturer disputes the claims made in the text. He explains that boosting the number of different products available can be a bad thing. Actually, firms are more likely to invest their time trying new goods and services, but without increasing their quality. In consequence, society can end up having poor quality products.
Finally, the article explores the fact that people could think more about their own priorities, since they have many options available. As a result, people would end up learning more about themselves and their needs. In contrast, the lecturer argues that the big variety of choices could lead to complacency and laziness, since people could become comfortable with what they already have. As a result, they would be less likely to see better options for themselves. The lecturer points out that in the long run it could end up in a situation where people are unable to make changes.
This is nice work. I think it would score 25 to 27 points. Something in that range.
The decision paradox is the ideia that having too many options to choose from can be a negative thing. Both the author and the lecturer discuss this indagation. The reading passage presents three motives that support the theory that having many options is beneficial. Oppositely, the lecture challenges that idea and introduces the flaws and limitations for each one of those motives.
First of all, the writer states that having a plenty of options helps people find the best match while shopping. Next, he increments that idea by explaining that if a person has a bunch of products to compare to each other, he will be able to choose the best option for himself. Conversely, the speaker argues that having this can be tiresome. In addition to that, he says that the process of trying to find the best choice can lead to decision fatigue, a situation where the one would not be able to identify the best option since he will be too tired.
Secondly, the text claims that the decision paradox can estimulate progress, since the consumer would be able to choose the best product among the given options, the remaining products would be forced to improve themselves to be selected on the future. On the other hand, the listening rebuts this claims with the argument that this would not happen and that the market would be full of bad products.
Lastly, the reading remarks that the decision paradox can help people's personal growth and development. Next, he clarifies that chain of tought by explaning that having to choose among a plenty of options would force a person to reflect about what is important to him and thus he would know more about himself. In contrast, the professor disagrees with that because he believes that in real life people are lazy and the situation of having more options to choose from would not cause a pressure on them. Thererfore, people would not reflect about themselves while trying to find the best product and they will be less likely to change.
I think this one would score about 22 points. Your details are great, but there are some grammar mistakes. You also show a tendency to use fancy words that make it hard to follow your idas (like "he increments that idea"). Try to be clear and concise!
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The article and the lecture are both about the paradox of choice. While the author of the article argues that having many options to choose from is good, the lecturer disputes the claims presented in the article. His position is that the paradox of choice is not beneficial.
According to the reading the existence of a large variety of options helps people to find products and services that fit their needs best.
This specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. He claims that choosing between many options is mentally exhausting. Additionally, he points out that people have to spend time and effort to evaluate all the options and this leads to decision fatigue and a decreasing productivity.
Secondly, the author suggests many options increase innovation. In the article, it is said that if there are already many options available, the people are used to products that fit their needs very well and therefore they always seek for better alternatives. The lecturer, however, asserts that many companies only focus on the creation of new products instead of increasing the quality of products. Therefore there is only a large variety of mediocre products in the end.
Finally, the author puts forth the idea that many options lead to personal growth. The author contends that people learn about themselves because in order to make a decision between many products, people to think about their values. In contrast, the lecturer’s stance is that if there are already enough good options available, there is no motivation to develop new things and therefore it leads to complacency and laziness.
I think this one would score about 26 points. It is great work, but try to add more details, especially from the reading.
i have written a sample answer can you check it for me plzz?
Sure. Post it here and I'll check it. Make a new comment, as I don't always see responses.
The reading and the lecture talk about the paradox of choice. While the author claim that paradox of choice is a very beneficial for the people, the lecturer refutes this, saying its has a lot of negative impact on people mental and social well being.
First of all, the author mentions that choosing from large array of good and service helps to meet our need in a perfect manner, leaving us with no regrets. However, the lecturer argues this by saying it will be a mentally exhausting task to choose from a large options, and it will leads us to decision fatigue. Moreover, he says that deteriorates our time and effort.
In addition, the author points out that in order to prove these variety of options to the public, companies have to focus on developing new products, which ultimately promote innovation and progress. But, the lecturer refutes this idea. He says the companies will eventually focus of creating a lot of products of fine quality, which then covers the market with full of mediocre products. So, there not be any innovations.
Finally, the author mentions that choosing from multiple choices will help to develop our personal growth. In addition, he says it will make us realize our own values and priority and make us self-aware and creative in decision making. Nonetheless, the lecturers state that it will make us lazy as we have many choices so, we are less likely to go for better alternatives. According to the lecturer, if we became like this and don’t change our attitude towards choosing products, we will lose our priority in our life. There will be no reason for success.
I think this one would score about 21 points. There are a lot of little errors here, like:
"beneficial for the people" (should be "beneficial for people")
"good and service" (should be "goods and services")
"a large options" (should be "a large number of options")
There are more, but I think you get the point. Focus on grammar and language use as you continue to prepare for the test.
The article and the lecture both were about paradox of choice. The writer mentions that having many choice can be beneficial for many reasons, whilst the lecturer disagreed and give three reasons to support his point of view.
Firstly, the writer claims that having more choices help us to find better services according to our prefereces. However, the lecturer oppose this view by saying that having too many options to chooce can be mentally exhuasting. We have to spend too much time and energy to just chose one thing. If this happens too often then this can lead to mental futigue and decrease our overall productivity.
Secondly, the writre points out that having many choices can lead to innovation and progress. Additionally, people will try new things if they have many things to choose, which can force the companies and individuals to create new things. However, the lecture mentioned that having many options open to choose can might decrease quality of products because companies will fouce on making new things rather than focusing on quality of goods and services.
Lastly, The writer says that having many choice can increase personal growth; individuals can learn about themselves by thinking about choices and their priorities. The lecturer question this point by stating that it can make people more lazy and complaining. Individuals might not try new thing just because they have many options to choose. For example, no change in job if there are many jobs to do.
This one would probably score about 19 points. There are a lot of basic grammar errors like "the lecturer oppose this view" and "which can force the companies and individuals." Focus on reducing your error rate as much as possible!
Hi. Here is my essay:
Both the reading and the lecture are about the paradox of choices, a theory that states that the availability of many choices can lead to anxiety and indecision. While the reading disagrees with the paradox of choice, the lecturer casts doubt on the reading by providing reasons.
Firstly, according to the reading, having many choices helps people pick the products that best fulfill their needs. However, the lecturer disputes this point and says that having too many choices can be mentally exhausting, and people might experience decision fatigue. This reduces the decision-making capability of individuals and also reduces productivity.
Secondly, the reading claims that having many options for the same product can promote innovation and progress. This further encourages companies to come up with new and better products that cater to the needs of people in the best way. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument. He says that in such a case companies will stop monitoring the quality of their products. Instead of improving the quality of existing products, companies will start focusing on creating new low-quality products. It will deter innovation and progress.
Finally, the reading states that having many choices helps people think deeply about their needs and helps them understand their requirements better. It will help them in their personal growth and development. On the other hand, the lecturer says that too many choices will cause laziness in people. Instead of seeking out better products/opportunities, they will settle with what they currently have. It will deter growth in their personal life and jobs.
In conclusion, the lecturer casts doubt on all the points made in the reading.
Please provide your comments on it.
This is a solid essay. I think it would score about 26 points. There are just a few minor grammar and language use errors that might hurt you.
Don't use the "/" like you did. Use real words.
Note that you don't need to write a conclusion.
Hi. Here is my essay. Could I get some feedback (score range)?
There has been a debate about some consequences related to a phenomenon called the paradox of choice which is the idea of feeling anxiety and indecision because we have too many options to choose. More specifically, the writer believed, however, that it is good having a lot of options to select. In contrast, the speaker challenged this asseveration for several reasons which I will detail in the following paragraphs.
First of all, the author states that it is better to have a big number of options because we would have the opportunity to find goods and services that fit our preferences. Moreover, the author claims that we could not have any regret in our choices thanks to these options. In that regard, the lecturer totally disagrees with that idea because it is relevant to consider that we could suffer a concept called mental exhausting. Actually, he explains that we can feel mental decision fatigue and, as a result, produce less productivity.
Second, according to the article, this tremendous number of options would promote innovation and progress. Therefore, the writer suggests that we would try to seek out new and better alternatives. On the other hand, the lecturer’s stance is against that idea due to the fact the companies have this strategy just in order to increase their profits. For instance, the professor says that is the reason we have mediocre or poor products in the market.
In third place, the writer divulges that this phenomenon could develop our personal growth. We would become more self-aware, in words of the writer. Nonetheless, the recording emphatically disagrees with this idea because the consequences are completely different. We would tend to be lazy. In that point, the professors demurs this idea because we will not want to look for better alternatives because now we have a vast of options.
To sum up, both hold different ideas and perspectives about the consequences of the phenomenon called the paradox of choice.
I think this one would score in the range of 22 to 24 points. You got most of the details, but there are some grammar and vocabulary errors.
Hi can you please check this answer and let me know where should i improve myself and score also .
And please tell me the scoring pattern of the toefl writing pattern. In last exam i got 18 in the writting section but i want to score more than 26. My next exam is on next week.
The article introduce the topic of paradox of choice. The paradox of choice meaning is having more than one options and writer says that this is good thing to have multiple options for their growth and environment. The lecturer totally disagree with this, he says that this is bad idea because it will impact on the human directly , it will make confusing character than a stable one due to the multiple options.
First, the author says that, It is for people to having lots of options because , it will be beneficial to them to find new opportunies like job, car or other thing which they want in life , it will easy to opt out for that and there will be no regret to humans .The professor believes there are flaws in the author position. He contends that it will reduce the productibility. He goes on to say That this thing will make man very poor in desicion making, it will also not only harmful for society but also for future genertion.
According to the writer, This can be made different type of sources where man can do progress and innnovative things .this will help to make new ideas and innovatives or new challenges to the companies to make multiple options for their multiple chioces . The speaker on other hand , point out that this will reduce the quality of product due to increasing number of choices , and they will make poor quality of products.
In addition to that the reading passage notes that, this will boost the chances of growth and development , due to deep thinking about the their values and priorities. however by exploring number of choice will get to know what is reallly important for us , this will fruitful for our personal growth and also for self aware and better decisions which will promote our thoughts, the lecturer rebutes this argument. He says that, People will become very lazy and comfortable due to having multiple choices , it will be very hard to find better objectives in their life , this wont be able to play important role in their life.
You can see the author and lecture hold very different views n the topic.
Yeah, I think this one would also score about 18 points. Your details are good but there are multiple grammar and language use errors in just about every sentence.
how i can improve my score@@Toeflresources
The author of the reading passage and the lecturer are both took about the paradox of choice. Paradox of choice means having too much options to choose from. The author believes positively about the topic .on the other hand the lecturer says that it is bad for people.
To began with, the author of the reading passage believes that having so many choices is great for people, and it has benefits. For example, it helps people find the best choice that fits their needs. Also, it promotes innovation and progress. Moreover, it raises personal growth and evolution.
Secondly , the lecturer in contrast thinks that having many choices can lead to many problems. Paradox of choice can lead to mental exhaustion such as depression and decision fatigue. Also ,it causes laziness and inability to make right decisions .
To sum up, the author and the lecturer have different opinions about the paradox of choice.
is this structure ok ?
I try as much as I can to write this essay 🙂. Approximately how much do you rate me?
You need a lot more than this. A minimum word count is something like 200 words. You aren't even close to that.
Heyy!! I’m from India and I’ll be taking my toefl test next week. Im really worried about the writing section 🥺. Can I please know the average score for Indians in toefl.This is my sample response:
The reading and the lecture discusses whether or not having a lot of choices is a blessing or a curse. The author claims that having enormous choices is good while the lecturer casts doubts on the author’s claim.
First, the author argues that having too many options can help people find goods and services that best fits their needs. He also points out that since there are a lot of options to choose from, the people will no longer have to content with what is available. The lecturer had a different point of view and he argues that having too many choices can be mentally exhausting and that it can consume a plenty of their time comparing and evaluating the products. Moreover, he feels that this can lead to decision fatigue which has the potential to reduce productivity.
Second, the author asserts that the availability of different choices can promote innovation and progress. He also pointed out that people are more likely to seek out new and better alternatives when there are too many options to choose from. This contradicts the lecture which states that since people seek for too many choices, the companies will invent large quantities of products, compromising their quality.
Third, the author states that large number of options can improve personal growth and development as it make us self aware of our needs. He points out that by evaluating a wide range of options, we can understand what finds best for us. In contrast, the lecturer argues that availability of too many options can create laziness in people.
Your introduction is a bit weak. Consider using my template for this task.
Actually, the template might help a bit with your body paragraphs as well. Here's a link: www.toeflresources.com/writing-section/toefl-writing-templates/
Both reading passage and lecture focus on paradox of choice. It means when people too many options, they can feel anxiety and indecision. This can effect mental health badly. According to author having multiple choices is not a bad thing. However lecturer opposes the ideas mentioned in the passage. Professor thinks that paradox of choice is not good for people. He illustrates why paradox of choice is not good in 3 reasons.
Firstly, according to reading passage having number of choices helps people to find goods and services that best fit them. On the other hand, lecturer disagree with that idea. Lecturer explains that when people have a lot of choices this cause mental exhaustion. Because if they have multiple choices then they will need more time to compare and evaluate. This leads people to decision fatique and this can really decrease productivity among people.
Secondly, while author suggests different choices make tendency on companies to be more innovative, lecturer opposes that idea. According to him, it is completely opposite because when companies have huge amount of choices they are not improving their products or services because they selling poor quality services because they know they will sel it anyway.
Lastly, passage makes point about a lot of choices allows people to be more personally grow and develop themselves. However, in the lecture, lecturer makes good point that if people have too many choices they will be lazy. Because people less likely to seek better choices when they stick to one. They never change it. In this way they will be unsuccesful every field of their life. Because the main thing what brings success is the change.
In conclusion, author and the lecturer have different ideas about paradox of choice. Professor discuss why paradox of choice it is not good for people because it is mentally exhausting, companies not improving their services and many choice brings laziness.
I think this one would score about 19 points. There are multiple grammar and language use errors in just about every sentence. Consider submitting your work to something like Grammarly to learn about the sorts of mistakes you make most frequently.
The passage and the lecture compare and contrast the advantages and disadvantages of the paradox of choice,the idea of having multiple options to choose from.
Firstly the lecture disagrees with the lecture that suggests that the idea helps individuals find goods and services that best fit their preferences.He argues that the idea could actually lead to mental exhaustion as people will end up spending so much time comparing and contrasting goods and services before they finally make a decision.
In addition the reading suggests that having multiple options promotes development and innovation since companies will be working to beat their competitors.This might not necessarily be the case in reality because we see that companies will instead focus on quantity of goods and services hence hindering advancement in quality with time.
Furthermore the lecture points out to us that the paradox of choice leads to complacency.People will less likely seek out better services and goods which counters the thought that abundance of choice would lead to increased personal growth and development . Paradox of choice will not lead to self awareness and better decision making.
Therefore in conclusion,the lecture and passage have strong contradicting points about the paradox of choice that companies should examine before implementing the phenomenon.
I think this one would score about 19 points. You must make clear where each detail comes from. Don't waste time on a conclusion.
@@Toeflresources The reading and the lecture are about the paradox of choice.This is the idea that having too many options to choose from is a bad thing for us.The writer of the article is in support of the idea while on the other hand the lecturer analyzes and provides reasons for his thoughts.
First of all, according to the essay, when people are presented with many goods and services they will have a better chance of finding what fits their needs and preferences thus they are less likely to regret their decisions.The professor disputes this thought when he says that people tend to get mentally exhausted when they take too much time comparing and evaluating products and services.This leads to decision fatigue hence consumers end up less capable to make good choices and less productive as the day goes by.
Secondly, the writer of the reading believes that paradox of choice leads to innovation and progress since companies will continuously create new products and services to compete in the market.However, the lecturer challenges this point too when he states that with paradox of choice companies end up concentrating on quantity rather than quality.As a result we the market is flooded with mediocre products and services .
Lastly, but not least, the author believes that variety of services and goods will lead to personal growth and development.When faced with making choice,people will become self aware of their values and priorities hence they make better decisions.In contrast, the lecture believes that people become lazy and complacent when presented with many options.They are less likely to seek out better products and services and therefore they will not succeed in their personal lives and careers.
The article and the lecture are both about the paradox of choice. While the author of the article argues that it is a beneficial idea to have a lot of options to choose from, the lecturer disputes the claims presented in the article.
According to the reading by having lots of choices a person can easily choose products that fulfill their need. The article mentions that by having a variety of choices a person has the chance to not be disappointed with the decision. this specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. he claims that having a range of life options can bring many problems such as decision fatigue and reduced productivity. additionally, he points out through the time the person facing and experiencing mental exhaustion.
Secondly, the author suggests that having the freedom to choose from lots of options causes nobility and progress. In the article, it is said that one of this situation's advantages can bring the motivation to create and substitute ideas. the lecturer, however, asserts that the abundance of goods and options can lead to having full of poor quality. As a result, the only thing that would matter is to increase profit rather than the quality.
Finally, the author puts forth the idea that considering the value of having lots of options involves raising self-awareness and development.in contrast, the lecturer Stans that laziness is the effect of these choices. he notes that it leads to losing new opportunities .thus, the chances of being successful in life and work will decrease.
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I think this one would score about 22 or 23 points. You need a little more detail in the last body paragraph. Also, you need to start every sentence with a capital letter!
The article and the lecture both deal with advantages and disadvantages of having an enormous scope of options to choose. Whilst the author of the article thinks that there are several credible factors which can demonstrate its usefulness for three specific reasons, the lecturer opposes the author’s claims. In his opinion, its adverse side is dominant.
First, the author claims that in the contemporary world people are able to meet their needs in the way that is the most suitable for them. Furthermore, it is stated in the article that they are prone to make reasonable decisions and aware of what they really need and what they do not. In contrast, the lecturer argues that making choices may require a lot of time and energy, as a result, people commence to be exhausted and more aggressive. Additionally, he maintains that people’s desire to make any decisions goes down, since they associate it with feeling anxiety.
Second, the author mentions that the tremendous varieties of options successfully lead to the improvement of society. On top of that he adds that people are prone to take advantage of diverse things and think up new ones. However, the lecturer calls this argument into question by saying that it contributes to the inflating of quantity instead of quality. Further, he remarks that people would probably think that making a vast range of something is better than refining it.
Finally, the author asserts that having diverse options to choose lead to the personal improvement. In fact, people realize their desires and follow toward them , and it is all due to the evaluating all available options. As opposed to the author, the lecturer holds that most of them commence to be unconscious, since they are surrounded by enormous range of options and they are just not able to make reasonable decisions. He highlights that people avoid alterations and personal development is in stuck.
I think this one would score about 23 or 24 points. It has a strong start, but your grammar and language use are weak in the second half, especially the third body paragraph.
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Hello Michael. Here's my take on the essay. Please rate it and provide suggestions. Thank you.
The article and the lecture both discuss about the paradox of choice. The author feels that having many options can have positive impacts; the author provides three reasons to support his claims. However, the lecturer challenges the claims made by the author. His position is that the reasons provided by the author in the article are faulty and apply to only a few individuals.
First, the author states that with an array of options available, people can select what is best for them. Furthermore, he mentions that with such availability people won’t regret with their choices. In contrast, the author argues that instead of helping people make the best choices, such availability can cause mental exhaustion. On top of that, comparing and evaluating products can take a long time and can be arduous for the body, causing a tendency named decision fatigue. Thus, this mental toll can decrease the productivity of people.
Second, the lecturer posits that innovation and progress are promoted by the availability of a myriad of choices. Moreover, people living in a world where choices are limited, are satisfied with what they have and don’t seek newer and better alternatives. Nevertheless, the lecturer calls the argument of the author into question by stating that the providence of a plethora of choices is actually a market strategy; instead of providing quality products, the market settles the people with different choices. Additionally, thus, the mediocracy and poor quality of goods and products tend to lower innovation and creativity.
Finally, the author asserts that many choices help in the promotion of growth and development. Moreover, the choices challenge an individual to think critically about his values and priorities. But, the lecturer opposes this assertion made by the author by mentioning that the variety of choices creates a sense of complacency and laziness in individuals. On top of that, because of the choices, we may never change; if we can’t change then we can’t obtain success whether it’s in personal life or in professional life.
I think this one would score 21 or 22 points.
Please can you correct my essay
Both the reading and the lecture deal with the idea of paradox of choice, which is basically having more than one choice. While the author believes that too many options is great, the lecturer disagrees and he is quick to point out that there are someserious flawsin the writer's claims.
first and foremost, the reading claims that having variety of choices can help people to find a perfect fit. This means that they will always have the opportunity to match with their need. However, the professor challenges this point. He believes that this phenomena can render ones mind really tired and fatigued since, he will have to deal with various options which means alot of time to be spent on each. So in another words, a person will be less capable of improving.
Next, the writer argues that people will improve and progress due to the fact that there is a bunch of options. Inthe other hand companies will try to provide and seek better alternatives inorder to be with the flow. In contrary, the professor is in a firm opposition to this belief, he asserts that due to the sake of flooding the market with options, the businesses will forget about the quality. Moreover, he thinks that they will reach a point where markets will befull of bad quality product , so tapering down the innovation progress.
Last but not least,while the reading claims that the phenomena provide the person a deep understanding for his slelf and gives him the opportunity to grow. The listening contracts this idea, he assumes that due to the presence of many options, a person might settle down and is less likely to try to change. He continues to say that this will make people unwilling to change and might increase the probability of failure.
I think this one would score about 23 points. I want a little more detail from the reading. You also need to reduce your grammar error rate somewhat. Consider using something like "Grammarly" to learn about your most common errors.
The reading and the lecture debate the pros and the cons of the idea of having too many options to choose from. The author of the reading passage supports this idea whereas the lecturer points out that this phenomenon could results in anxiety and he also states several reasons why this is a bad idea.
To begin with, the author believes that having several options helps people to find things that meet their needs and preferences so that they do not have to regret their choice. The lecturer oppose this by claiming that, people spending an enormous time and effort to choose what they want can lead to mental exhaustion. In addition to that he states that it can cause a condition called decision fatigue where one is less capable of making good decision.
Secondly, the writer believes that having many alternatives can result in increased innovation and progress, as companies try to create new products and services to cope with the competition. To oppose this claim the lecturer contends that, by giving so many alternatives, the quality of the product can be compromised. He goes on to say that this can be a hindrance to innovation and progression.
Finally, the author brings his claims to a close by saying that this phenomenon can increase growth and development as it challenges people to think deeply about their values and priorities. However, the lecturer rebuts this claim, by stating that this could make people lazy, as some of the people who are unable to change do not seek other alternatives. He also states that this can be an obstacle to personnel success.
I think this is a solid 23 or 24 point essay. You just need more detail. Your reading summaries are somewhat short.
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