I'm sorry for being a hater, but you really need to work on your songwriting and singing 😭. The lyrics seem really cliche and cringy (do NOT bark in songs until you're an established artist and people can handle the cringe. And all the lyrics are shallow and too common), and the singing is off-tune in multiple places. I can see the potential though, especially through the catchy tune and beat! Keep improving and you could be a great artist 👍. Edit: I just watched another one of your videos, and its the same thing: the main thing holding you back and pushing curious viewers like myself away is how your songs are just too cliche. They have catchy (if commonly used) beats, yes, but thats it. Even the structure of the song is so common. That means you would have to stand out in either amazing singing or amazing lyrics. However, you use all of the cliches of songwriting: you use 'baby' too much, use overused metaphors, and the commonly used theme of the dog thing (honestly, I know you worked hard to make this good, but it kinda just seems like you subconciously did a bad copy of Cat & Dog by TxT but with a generic tune). Pick your uniqueness: amazing lyrics, forward/unique/amazing background beats and tune, or amazing singing. Currently, you're just average, and speaking as a listener, I just can't become a fan and support you when the music industry is so big. I'll come back to see your next song, as will some others. However, if you don't figure out how to make your music stand out soon, I don't think you'll ever be successful. (And please don't get offended!!! If this upsets you, ignore me! I'm just some stranger on the internet! I'm just really rooting for you and have to tell you what I perceive as the truth! I just think you should know the honest truth of how a lot of your viewers see you, good or bad)
In addition, even the first lyrics are boring: you keep saying "yeah" as filler, and not creating any meaningful lyrics besides very simply describing a scenario. The first lyrics need to be MEANINGFUL, and you can't force the words to fit the rhyme scheme or syllable pattern. They need to sound natural. I'm not a songwriter, but if I were to rewrite the beginning, I would make it slightly more upbeat, and start more with the general idea: you feel like a puppy adoringly chasing after your favorite person. So instead of: "I got you, on my mind, right here in the moment, looking at you from behind, yeah." I would probably write something more upbeat and catchy and more along the lines of "I got you on my mind, looking at you from behind, with these big old puppy eyes, hoping I will see your smile." This gets away from the ABA (???) rhyme scheme and very simple beat, and instead changes the beat slightly (not one line per measure, but a bit faster and less rests and unnecessarily long notes and filler words). This strays away from the typical music you would see a child write, even though it's also extremely simple and obviously not the best writing either. It's mostly just to get rid of "right here in the moment" (agh sounds like crazy filler) and the "yeah" to replace the last line that would typically happen. Obviously, the meaningfulness still needs to be worked on in my example. Take my comments or not, I don't care. I'm just saying that as a listener, I simply cannot listen to this song. And I know others can't. This is my genuine reaction, and I hope you don't get too offended and either decide to ignore this or use it to improve. And, as I'm not a professional, I recommend you talk to some people who know more about music to help you more in the future. Also, if you're open to more suggestions (I understand you might hate me now instead), I'd be completely willing to describe my view on your lyrics and song in detail and how I'd change them so that you can understand the perspective of your viewers better.
Since you didn't get angry at my previous really rude comments and I had to analyze and rewrite song lyrics as an optional assignment anyways, here's how I would change it if I had the chance, with an explanation at the end of how the beat and tune is SLIGHTLY changed (yes I know rewriting entire songs is extremely offensive. But I liked and subscribed as an apology and I genuinely think you can make it really far in the music industry with just a few simple changes): (Intro/verse 1: basically same tune and similar rhythm. Easy enough to figure out on your own) I got you, on my mind, Looking at you from behind, With these big old puppy eyes, Hoping I can see you smile, You turn around, Catch my eye, I know I cannot deny, I was staring; I won't lie, And I do it all the time, (Verse 1? Pre-prechorus??: idk how to explain it, but emphasis on the 1st and 3rd lines. Like imagine the 2nd and 4th lines are in parenthesis??? About that much emphasis) It's Christmas soon, And I just wanna give ya, A puppy to, Love you as much as I love ya, (Verse 1/pre-prechorus continued: first and second lines like the others, but the last line directly goes into the prechorus) I give it to you, And your smile’s so lovely, It makes my heart swell and I think I got caught up in this (Prechorus: completely the same as original tune but slightly different lyrics) Puppy love, Cause I just wanna see you, Being happy (being happy) Can't you see, I just want you to be here with me right now? (Chorus: similar to original but with slight lyrics changes. Extremely strong chorus! Maybe sing a bit better though so people enjoy listening to it? No offense) Yeah I just want a girlfriend girlfriend baby, I wanna be your boyfriend won't you take me? You got me going, ruff ruff ohohoh, Ruff ruff, ohohoh, Ruff ruff ohoh stuck in this puppy love, Girlfriend, going crazy, I'll listen to anything you say to me, You got me going, ruff ruff ohohoh, ruff ruff ohohoh, ruff ruff ohoh Stuck in this puppy love. (Raps are too personal: I can't rewrite the rap because i would change i too much, but I'd just say please stay away from cliches and cringe and the word “baby” 😭. Insert rap or second verse or whatever here) (Same chorus as earlier, but slowed and final, like notes go down at the end to signal the end of the song) Yeah I just want a girlfriend girlfriend baby, I wanna be your boyfriend won't you take me? You got me going, ruff ruff ohohoh, Ruff ruff, ohohoh, Ruff ruff ohoh stuck in this puppy love, Girlfriend, going crazy, I'll listen to anything you say to me, You got me going, ruff ruff ohohoh, ruff ruff ohohoh, ruff ruff ohoh Stuck in this puppy love. Just strengthen the vocals a bit more, use the background music a bit more for emphasis (more stuff going on in the chorus especially so it's like a party kinda), and literally this would be an amazing amazing song. Like would easily be able to be played at parties and stuff. And the chorus is easy to dance to, so if you make some sort of dance trend and post a bunch of videos of you dancing the puppy love dance, that could drastically improve the chances of it going viral. But lyrics and song quality first! Great job advertising too, and good job on the song overall! Sorry for being such a rude commenter❤.
@@kdramasfromamy If you don't like it you don't have to read it, I wrote that multiple times 😂. I just wrote it in case someone wanted to read it. Who knows, maybe there are aspiring musicians out there who would be helped by this advice? I know it's silly advice, but it doesn't do any bad besides taking up space in the comments section. And the comments section is small enough that people can just ignore these comments lol. If you can tell me a legitimate reason why it's necessary for these comments to not exist, I'll gladly delete all of them. I just can't think of any. I just thought that this song was the perfect song to analyze to improve my understanding of songs and songwriting.
@@juanleyva8796 you do realize that almost anyone in the arts wears makeup. Anyone that has to be in front of a camera. This includes actors, singers and mainstream rappers, anyone on talkshows ECT Stage makeup is used Also some rock and metal artists wear makeup
This song is so goofy to the point where i cant hate 😭😭 and the barking is sending 😂
this is so cute😭it reminds me of random songs i would find in like early-mid 2010s and i totally wanna draw smth to this song
well this is most definitely a start..!
I finally decided to click on this video after seeing it like five times and I don’t regret it love the music don’t give up ❤
I regret finally clicking on this after seeing it being sponsored for monthe
I gave a chance to an ad and it turned out to be hot spit omg .
Fr
How much did y’all spend on ads I keep seeing it
This was only 4 weeks ago?! That’s crazy cause this is so cute!
I kinda like this song, but it’s missing something I don’t know what tho
This was sooo good !! i cant wait to edit it 😭
Bro this shit is ass
Really??!!
@@TheVesselofHope i already did it just havent posted it .
Woof Woof
The quality is next level for real holy crap
Glad I accidentally found ya. Love it
I'm glad you love it! Thank you so much! 🧡
This is cute but funny at the same time 😂
I’m being suffocated
Um r u ok?
I feel suffocated too lol this song ain’t it
@thatfunnygrlmicah3896 then don't watch it😭
@thatfunnygrlmicah3896 you posted 3 comments, stop being obsessed lmao
Same here
Yo I kinda fw this ngl
Naaaaaaa u must be high Fr
parabéns meu amigo Deus abençoe você
PERIODDDDDD I KNOW YOULL GET SO FAR!! remember me when you're famous!! ❤
I wonder what it said.... 😂lol, the sticky note 😮❤😊!!!!!🐶✨️😂😅
ii cant tell the homies that i listen to this song 24/7
And the crowd is…. Silent? (Good)
this is so adorable 😍😍😍😍
I love this! Puppy love sooo cute!
This is ADORABLE 😭
I see where you're going with thiss
This is cute omg
Keep cooking 😂❤
Wow we're fans❤😍 wow can we all be friends 🙊
I had the same reaction to this as I had when I first heard TXT’s Cat and Dog 🤭
I love this but what is it being sponsored by
It's really catchy❤
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He looks like my old friend in 2021 who is half Indonesian ❤
i accidentally found this but this is so cute😭
Subscribed and Liked
Idk what yall are on.. i lowkey fw this. A few more listens, and i know I'll like this song
We on REALITY IDK WHAT YOU ON FR. Y’all STAY ENCOURAGING TRASH.
This is the first time watching A- Das 12/10/24
the story begins 🧡
Good job bro!😻
Nice ❤ i like it
Nice
Cute
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Maybe if he trained his voice and practiced singing more it would sound better? 😊
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I'm sorry for being a hater, but you really need to work on your songwriting and singing 😭. The lyrics seem really cliche and cringy (do NOT bark in songs until you're an established artist and people can handle the cringe. And all the lyrics are shallow and too common), and the singing is off-tune in multiple places.
I can see the potential though, especially through the catchy tune and beat! Keep improving and you could be a great artist 👍.
Edit: I just watched another one of your videos, and its the same thing: the main thing holding you back and pushing curious viewers like myself away is how your songs are just too cliche. They have catchy (if commonly used) beats, yes, but thats it. Even the structure of the song is so common. That means you would have to stand out in either amazing singing or amazing lyrics. However, you use all of the cliches of songwriting: you use 'baby' too much, use overused metaphors, and the commonly used theme of the dog thing (honestly, I know you worked hard to make this good, but it kinda just seems like you subconciously did a bad copy of Cat & Dog by TxT but with a generic tune). Pick your uniqueness: amazing lyrics, forward/unique/amazing background beats and tune, or amazing singing. Currently, you're just average, and speaking as a listener, I just can't become a fan and support you when the music industry is so big. I'll come back to see your next song, as will some others. However, if you don't figure out how to make your music stand out soon, I don't think you'll ever be successful.
(And please don't get offended!!! If this upsets you, ignore me! I'm just some stranger on the internet! I'm just really rooting for you and have to tell you what I perceive as the truth! I just think you should know the honest truth of how a lot of your viewers see you, good or bad)
In addition, even the first lyrics are boring: you keep saying "yeah" as filler, and not creating any meaningful lyrics besides very simply describing a scenario.
The first lyrics need to be MEANINGFUL, and you can't force the words to fit the rhyme scheme or syllable pattern. They need to sound natural.
I'm not a songwriter, but if I were to rewrite the beginning, I would make it slightly more upbeat, and start more with the general idea: you feel like a puppy adoringly chasing after your favorite person.
So instead of: "I got you, on my mind, right here in the moment, looking at you from behind, yeah." I would probably write something more upbeat and catchy and more along the lines of "I got you on my mind, looking at you from behind, with these big old puppy eyes, hoping I will see your smile." This gets away from the ABA (???) rhyme scheme and very simple beat, and instead changes the beat slightly (not one line per measure, but a bit faster and less rests and unnecessarily long notes and filler words). This strays away from the typical music you would see a child write, even though it's also extremely simple and obviously not the best writing either. It's mostly just to get rid of "right here in the moment" (agh sounds like crazy filler) and the "yeah" to replace the last line that would typically happen. Obviously, the meaningfulness still needs to be worked on in my example.
Take my comments or not, I don't care. I'm just saying that as a listener, I simply cannot listen to this song. And I know others can't. This is my genuine reaction, and I hope you don't get too offended and either decide to ignore this or use it to improve. And, as I'm not a professional, I recommend you talk to some people who know more about music to help you more in the future.
Also, if you're open to more suggestions (I understand you might hate me now instead), I'd be completely willing to describe my view on your lyrics and song in detail and how I'd change them so that you can understand the perspective of your viewers better.
Since you didn't get angry at my previous really rude comments and I had to analyze and rewrite song lyrics as an optional assignment anyways, here's how I would change it if I had the chance, with an explanation at the end of how the beat and tune is SLIGHTLY changed (yes I know rewriting entire songs is extremely offensive. But I liked and subscribed as an apology and I genuinely think you can make it really far in the music industry with just a few simple changes):
(Intro/verse 1: basically same tune and similar rhythm. Easy enough to figure out on your own)
I got you, on my mind,
Looking at you from behind,
With these big old puppy eyes,
Hoping I can see you smile,
You turn around,
Catch my eye,
I know I cannot deny,
I was staring; I won't lie,
And I do it all the time,
(Verse 1? Pre-prechorus??: idk how to explain it, but emphasis on the 1st and 3rd lines. Like imagine the 2nd and 4th lines are in parenthesis??? About that much emphasis)
It's Christmas soon,
And I just wanna give ya,
A puppy to,
Love you as much as I love ya,
(Verse 1/pre-prechorus continued: first and second lines like the others, but the last line directly goes into the prechorus)
I give it to you,
And your smile’s so lovely,
It makes my heart swell and I think I got caught up in this
(Prechorus: completely the same as original tune but slightly different lyrics)
Puppy love,
Cause I just wanna see you,
Being happy (being happy)
Can't you see, I just want you to be here with me right now?
(Chorus: similar to original but with slight lyrics changes. Extremely strong chorus! Maybe sing a bit better though so people enjoy listening to it? No offense)
Yeah I just want a girlfriend girlfriend baby,
I wanna be your boyfriend won't you take me?
You got me going, ruff ruff ohohoh,
Ruff ruff, ohohoh,
Ruff ruff ohoh stuck in this puppy love,
Girlfriend, going crazy,
I'll listen to anything you say to me,
You got me going, ruff ruff ohohoh, ruff ruff ohohoh, ruff ruff ohoh
Stuck in this puppy love.
(Raps are too personal: I can't rewrite the rap because i would change i too much, but I'd just say please stay away from cliches and cringe and the word “baby” 😭. Insert rap or second verse or whatever here)
(Same chorus as earlier, but slowed and final, like notes go down at the end to signal the end of the song)
Yeah I just want a girlfriend girlfriend baby,
I wanna be your boyfriend won't you take me?
You got me going, ruff ruff ohohoh,
Ruff ruff, ohohoh,
Ruff ruff ohoh stuck in this puppy love,
Girlfriend, going crazy,
I'll listen to anything you say to me,
You got me going, ruff ruff ohohoh, ruff ruff ohohoh, ruff ruff ohoh
Stuck in this puppy love.
Just strengthen the vocals a bit more, use the background music a bit more for emphasis (more stuff going on in the chorus especially so it's like a party kinda), and literally this would be an amazing amazing song. Like would easily be able to be played at parties and stuff. And the chorus is easy to dance to, so if you make some sort of dance trend and post a bunch of videos of you dancing the puppy love dance, that could drastically improve the chances of it going viral. But lyrics and song quality first! Great job advertising too, and good job on the song overall! Sorry for being such a rude commenter❤.
Please stop yapping
@@kdramasfromamy If you don't like it you don't have to read it, I wrote that multiple times 😂. I just wrote it in case someone wanted to read it. Who knows, maybe there are aspiring musicians out there who would be helped by this advice? I know it's silly advice, but it doesn't do any bad besides taking up space in the comments section. And the comments section is small enough that people can just ignore these comments lol.
If you can tell me a legitimate reason why it's necessary for these comments to not exist, I'll gladly delete all of them. I just can't think of any. I just thought that this song was the perfect song to analyze to improve my understanding of songs and songwriting.
@ girl just told you to stop yapping and your replying with more yapping 😭.
Its cute
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Nice new subscriber!
It’s great
What in the actual F👿K did I watched and listened
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You is cute asf
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Eu tomo posse do meu milagre vênina
Tf is this??
Atleast it's better than your voice
Fr tho
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Um 😂
Yeah... No... 😭
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Hmmm I think I'm searching WayV?
Help I was listening to Wayv. This was on a ad 😭
yet me!
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please moveee
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Why is he wearing lipstick
Why do you care
@4SHXYYYY not Korean
@4SHXYYYY it's cool, I wasn't correcting you with any negative thoughts. 🤗
@@juanleyva8796 you do realize that almost anyone in the arts wears makeup. Anyone that has to be in front of a camera. This includes actors, singers and mainstream rappers, anyone on talkshows ECT
Stage makeup is used
Also some rock and metal artists wear makeup
Cute
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