Awful vocal rhythm, stilted and jumpy, no discernable pauses, it might be a great piece of writing but if nobody can listen to it because of the bad audio you might as well have left it unwritten. You need to find better AI audio. There's some strange swapping of tenses, it's not obvious if the story is present or past tense. It's personal preference but I, and I think most people are more comfortable being told a story, as if it's already taken place. If you tell it in the present tense you have to be very good with thought, imagery and interaction. This isn't. Honestly, I gave up listening quite quickly because of the AI story telling style. Fan fiction is a nice idea but the original sets a very high standard you need to emulate.
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Awful vocal rhythm, stilted and jumpy, no discernable pauses, it might be a great piece of writing but if nobody can listen to it because of the bad audio you might as well have left it unwritten. You need to find better AI audio.
There's some strange swapping of tenses, it's not obvious if the story is present or past tense. It's personal preference but I, and I think most people are more comfortable being told a story, as if it's already taken place. If you tell it in the present tense you have to be very good with thought, imagery and interaction. This isn't.
Honestly, I gave up listening quite quickly because of the AI story telling style. Fan fiction is a nice idea but the original sets a very high standard you need to emulate.